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Day 15 Assignments
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What I learned doing this assignment is … I’m rewriting every word. But also, collapsing characters (too many) and cutting scenes for next episodes, to keep a neater A/B/C delineation.
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Sharilyn Finished Wordsmithing!
What I learned doing this assignment is…wordsmithing is about more than the words on the page. It’s how they relate to other phrases. How they sound coming from me acting as the characters and as the narrator. How they feel as I pronounce, enunciate, emphasize, dictate. I learned that this is probably the hardest part of writing the script because I thought I was “done,” then the real work began. I still think it needs work, but at least now I know how to finesse it.
The most interesting edits and improvements I made to the script was when I read only the description lines. Taped myself. Then tested only these lines to “see” if I understood the story without dialogue. Also, to hear if the story flowed. I could hear the clunky phrasing. I discovered a lot of empty images. I found that “less is best.” Without the flowery language, the scenes come alive. But only if I do that Lesson12-14 stuff.
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