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Day 5 Assignments
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Tracy’s High Concept/Elevator Pitch
Based on a true story: a woman on her way to Valley Forge with supplies for her husband and brothers is recruited as a spy—and now the fate of the American Revolution rests in her hands.
What I learned doing this assignment: it’s very hard to boil down your entire screenplay and get to the heart of what’s most important and what will inspire the listener to “see” the whole film.
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Lisa’s High Concept/ Elevator Pitch
“A vegan activist gets turned into a vampire, and has to survive off of blood, avoiding vampire hunting rednecks and the vampires who want her dead, without losing her moral code.”
What I learned doing this assignment is that the elevator pitch doesn’t have to be that complicated. The simpler and more concise, the better.
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Sky Canyon’s High concept/Elevator Pitch
Tell us your High Concept and Elevator Pitch.
1. To find your main hook, tell us what the big picture explanation of your lead character’s journey is.
Hook: A disgraced Wall Street Guru-Wannabe ends up in a Tibetan Monastery, struggles to find inner peace, and must face his innermost demons as he teaches the monks to trade the market, confronted by a life-or-death ultimatum from the Chinese.
2. How can you tell it in the most interesting way possible?
Dilemma – When a failed Wall Street Guru-Wannabe lands in a Tibetan Monastery and tries to redeem himself by teaching the monks to trade the market, he is confronted with a life-or-death ultimatum from the Chinese.
Main Conflict – A failed Wall Street Guru-Wannabe must conquer his biggest fears and insecurities as he struggles for inner peace in a Tibetan Monastery.
What’s at stake? Can a failed Wall Street Guru-Wannabe change the world working with Tibetan Monks?
Goal/Unique Opposition – Failed Wall Street Guru-Wannabe tries to redeem himself teaching Tibetan monks to trade the market and change the world – against all odds.3. Using the 10 Components of Marketability, what is your Elevator Pitch?
A failed Wall Street Guru-Wannabe lands in a Tibetan Monastery and tries to redeem himself by teaching the monks to trade the market, only to face a life-or-death ultimatum from the Chinese.
What I learned doing this assignment is to keep it simple, yet think in different ways about getting the hook across in the best way. This exercise gave me more ways to express it – an improvement from where I was, yet worthy of continued brainstorming.
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Subject line: Ron Horton’s High Concept/Elevator Pitch for “Charley’s River.
I learned you really can say a lot in 15 seconds. The hook is the only thing that is really important in the Elevator Pitch.
Charley, successful in finance, wants his outdoorsman life back, but what does he really need to give up to get it; Life itself?
1a. What does Charley need to give up in order to have the life of his dreams? Life itself?
1b. Charley is going to face a life-or-death decision. Will he choose death to gain life?
2. Dilemma: How to get out of the rat race, return to the outdoors life he left long ago, stay out of prison, find love, and take care of his ailing Dad.
2a. Main Conflict: Staying out of prison.
2b. What’s at stake: Freedom
2c. Goal/Unique Opposition: Get the girl by saving her boyfriend’s life.
3. I’m working on an adventure script about an unhappy financial executive who is forced away from his career by a woman scorned. He’s drawn back to his old life on the rapids of the Colorado River, but in order to find happiness, he will likely have to give up everything, including life itself.
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<div>What I learned doing this assignment is creating my elevator pitch:</div>
Elevator Pitch: A pampered and spoiled socialite diva gets financially cut-off by her rich parents and is forced to start at the bottom to learn to survive on her own, but this life change causes her to become independent, humble and have a new appreciation for her parents.
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Rod’s High Concept Elevator Pitch.
Big picture of lead character’s journey: Rescued, desperately needing help, wanting to trust someone but terrified that revealing her deadly secret could cost her life.
How to tell it in a most interesting way:
Dilemma: Fear of being killed.
Main Conflict: Afraid to reveal what she saw.
What’s at stake: Her life.
Goal/unique Opposition: To survive.Elevator pitch: A terrified witness desperately needs help but if she asks for it she could be killed.
From this lesson I learned to determine the strongest hook of the story and present it in a quick, powerful way.
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Marian’s High Concept/Elevator Pitch
What I learned doing this assignment is, that this is a great process to get to the core of my pitch.
Tell us your High Concept and Elevator Pitch:
A tidal flat crossing turns into a deadly fight for survival for 25-year-old beach volleyball player Hannah and her younger sister Tessa.
A female-focused YA survival-thriller based on true events, where we can experience for the first time the struggle for survival during a tidal flat crossing at the North Sea.
1. to find your main hook, tell us what the big picture explanation of your lead character’s journey is.
To reach an important beach volleyball tournament on an island, 25-year-old Hannah and her sister Tessa have to cross the Wadden Sea at low tide. When the tide comes in, they find themselves in mortal danger and Hannah has to save herself and her sister’s life.
2 How can you tell it in the most interesting way possible?
Dilemma: After missing the ferry, the only option for 25-year-old Hannah and her younger sister Tessa to participate in an important beach volleyball tournament, is the risky crossing of the Wadden Sea to the island at low tide.
Main Conflict: The mudflat crossing on the North Sea becomes a deadly fight for survival for 25-year-old beach volleyball player Hannah and her younger sister Tessa, when they get lost and the tide comes in prematurely.
What’s at stake? A mudflat crossing at low tide in the North Sea becomes a deadly struggle for survival for 25-year-old beach volleyball player Hannah and her younger sister Tessa, when they get lost and the tide comes in abruptly.
Goal/Unique Opposition: The almost unknown but deadly dangers of the North Sea become a fight to the death for 25-year-old beach volleyball player Hannah and her sister Tessa, when they get lost in the mudflats at low tide and the tide suddenly comes in.
3. using the 10 Components of Marketability, what is your Elevator Pitch?
I am working on a female-focused YA survival thriller based on true events, where we can experience for the first time the dramatic struggle for survival during a tidal flat crossing at the North Sea.
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Lee Skore’s High Concept/Elevator Pitch
(4) What I learned doing this aassignment is: creating a simple single High Concept sentence or the simple way to deliver the Elevator Pitch is more challenging than creating the logline.
(1) To find main hook, tell us the big picture explanation of you lead character’s journey.
Can the lead character find her parents’ murderer before the killer murders her too?
(2) How can you tell it in the most interesting way possible?
Dilemma:
A woman’s parents are murdered — she survives three attempts on her life, but can she survive a fourth one?
Main Conflict:
A woman’s parents were murdered twenty-five years ago, and now she survives three attempts on her life and must solve the mystery of her past to survive the fourth.
What’s at stake?:
Staying alive depends on a woman’s ability to solve the mystery of her past and her parents’ murders before their murderer kills her too.
Goal/Unique Opposition:
A woman learns she’s the sole heir of property for which her parents’ were murdered and she must find their killer before he murders her for it.
(3) What is your Elevator Pitch?
A Nantucket woman’s parents were murdered twenty-five years ago, but their murders were never solved, and now someone is trying to kill her too.
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Brenda Noonan’s High Concept/Elevator Pitch
4. What I learned doing this assignment is how to include marketability as a component of my elevator pitch.
1. The big picture explanation: A UK detective must discover who murdered the lead instructor at an exclusive workshop for successful crime novelists.
2. Most interesting way possible to tell it: The opponent is unique. From a roomful of experienced crime writer suspects, the detective must find which novelist may have committed “the perferfect murder.”
3. Elevator pitch: I’m finishing up a story that answers the question can a police detective discover which successful crime novelist has committed the “perfect” murder during a crime writing workshop?
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