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THRILLER ASSIGNMENT DAY 13
Alfred’s Misdirects… When Appropriate
What I learned doing this assignment is:
1. Timing all the clues, twists, sequences, reveals, and misdirects is tricky. I will continue to modify this as I figure out new details for the story.
2. At least in this storyline, the misdirects seem to cluster toward the beginning. I doubt this is true for other stories, but I don’t know.
ASSIGNMENT
1. Check these three to see how effectively you used misdirection
A. The Red Herring character
I can do better. I’m still uncertain as to how I want to sequence the incidents and clues
B. The Villain’s plan.
I think maybe I’m still beginning to expose him too early
C. The cover-up for each mystery, is present as “Reality.”
See Map
2. Look through your Thriller Map for a few opportunities to add in misdirection.
A. Clue Misdirection.
B. Character Misdirection.
C. Dialogue Misdirection.
3. Decide on the ones that work and add them to the Thriller Map.
THRILLER MAP
MYSTERY: Who or what killed four hikers in a remote mountain wilderness?
END RESULT: Wild animals or Aliens are ruled out. The evidence points to murder.
HERO: Spencer
VILLAIN: Russell
RED HERRING : Elyne Monet
The Villain’s backstory – the part not seen:
There is an earthquake in a remote corner of a National Park. A park ranger, Russell, is sent to investigate the area around the epicenter. To his surprise, in the ruptured earth, he finds pure gold along with incredibly pure ore. He calculates: 6 mules, 2-30lb sacks per mule (good mules can carry up to 150 pounds for short distances, but this is rugged territory, and the distance is 20+ miles), that’s a total of 180 pounds of high-grade ore which, at 50% pure, is worth, at $1800/ounce, close to $30 million.
It is against the law to remove anything from a National Park, but Russell gets greedy and carries out his plan. Then, he gets even greedier, hopes to return, and repeats the process, later, tries to hide the vein, fences the area off as a protected habitat and area, then bobby-traps the site, just in case. Four nosey hikers who don’t know how to obey, much less believe in signs, enter the area. and are blasted to pieces with a device that cuts them to ribbons. Scavengers finish the mutilation.
ACT 1
STEP 1 – FADE IN/Opening/Call to Adventure: (the HERO is reluctant to go)
Status Quo
STORY: Spencer is a National Park Ranger who loves fishing for Golden trout in the high mountain lakes –. He fishes. He fries his fish on a tiny camp burner, eats, and retires under a magnificent high-altitude sky so densely packed with stars, the constellations disappear. Sounds of coyote songs waft up the mountains, and Spencer sleeps content. In the morning, at first light, a cup of coffee, some pemican, and a hasty retreat by a slightly different route. He discovers a massacre – four dead bodies, somewhat desiccated. Wary, he touches nothing and stays outside a low fence with “Endangered Species Habitat – Keep Out” signs. Just outside the National Park wilderness area is a lodge. Spencer calls his superior, Russell, and Russell tells him to stay put and say nothing. Too late. The lodge owner, Elyne Monet, originally from the French Alps, already knows. Others have already reported it, and she is full of stories of Old-World mythical creatures such as Owlbears and the Great Bahamut (a shapeshifter), and even Aliens. These stories have preceded Spencer down the mountain.
MISDIRECTION 1 – CLUE TYPE – The audience is directed toward thinking science fiction/mythology
CLUE 1 Spencer just stumbled onto this scene and knows nothing about it. But how would Russell know for sure?
TRUST: Spencer and Russell are National Park Rangers who have worked together for some time. They know each other and trust each other.
STORY: Russell joins Spencer, and the next day they rent two horses and four mules to haul the somewhat desiccated bodies out of the mountains, to Russell’s waiting truck, and are delivered to the County Coroner.
TWIST 1 Direction: Spencer goes fishing, but stumbles onto four dead bodies.
Twist: Spencer ends his happy time by getting embroiled in a murder investigation.
LIFE THREATENING 1: Mutilated dead bodies have been found in the mountains.
MYSTERY 1: Who or what did this? Why up in the mountains?
INTRIGUE 1: Some of the townspeople in the valley outside the National Park are already claiming that it’s the work of Aliens. Others claim wild animals.
SUSPENCE 1: Where does one even begin?
LIFE THREATENING 2: Spencer is not aware of what Russell has done to cause this (back story which we do not know, yet).
STORY: The lodge owner, Elyne Bonet, has a small farm, of sorts (with goats and chickens, primarily), which she keeps for fresh milk and eggs (because the trip into town his long and slow), and three huge Irish Wolfhounds to guard her farm.
MISDIRECTION 2 – CHARACTER TYPE – The audience is directed toward thinking that Elyna may have done it – maybe with the help of her dogs.
CLUE 2 Maybe the dogs had something to do with the deaths.
DISTRUST: Spencer raises questions about Elyne and her dogs. He thinks she’s “crazy as a loon.”
Story: The lodge is old and rustic and marginally comfortable, but the lodge owner, Elyne, a youngish French woman, puts on a tasty meal and entertains them, before the Great Stone Fireplace, the night they’re there, with scary tales of the mythical characters and creatures like owlbears and Bahamut – creatures that are also shape-shifters. “Watch out! That beautiful woman you meet may just be Bahamut on the prowl!” Elyne affirms that according to her information, there were four bodies.
Story: The dogs, though some distance away from the dead bodies, go wild.
TWIST 2 Direction: Russell is Spencer’s superior and thinks he knows more than he does and has more experience than he does – a little self-deception that Spencer seems to put up with. But he now seems willing to hide the story behind tales of mythical creatures and Aliens, if necessary.
Twist: Spencer immediately begins to question Russell’s judgment. Tells him of his distrust of Elyne.
CLUE 3 Why is Russell willing to do this? It’s idiotic.
DISTRUST: Spencer thinks, Russell is becoming as “batshit crazy” as Elyne.
Direction: Russell trusts that he can keep Spencer focused on the bodies and from not asking too many questions. Spins a theory that in presenting an unbelievable fiction people will like, like the stories of Big Foot.
Twist: But Spencer gets caught up in a serious challenge and that threatens Russell. So, Spencer tries to hide what he’s doing.
TWIST 3 Direction: Russell is perhaps too eager to pass the findings off as otherworldly.
Twist: Spencer continues to question Russell’s sincerity in bowing to rumor.
DISTRUST: Spencer loses faith in Russell, and this gets Spencer to questioning the evidence even more.
MYSTERY 2: The bodies are mutilated, but Spencer cannot see any specific weaponry being used (like guns, knives, etc.).
MYSTERY 3: Spencer has degrees in biology. Why is that area fenced off? It doesn’t seem appropriate to him.
TWIST 4 Direction: Russell continues to be too eager to pass the findings off as Alien.
Twist: Spencer further questions Russell’s motives for championing such nonsense – suspects Elyne.
VILLAIN’S PLAN 1: Is to try to get Spencer, and everyone else, to agree with him and pass it off as Aliens or wild animals.
MYSTERY 4: Who is this Elyne woman, anyway? Is she nuts or just strange?
INTREGUE 2: Why is Elyne telling these crazy stories? What is she hiding?
SUSPENSE 2: Is Spencer and Russell in danger?
DISTRUST: Spencer loses more faith in Russell, and this gets Spencer to questioning the evidence even more, including the evidence implicating Elyne.
DISTRUST: Elyne’s stories are a bit too much for Spencer… and those dogs?! What about those vicious dogs.
STEP 2 — Inciting Incident/ Story: (the HERO must find an answer/solution).
Story: After the bodies are hauled down the mountain and delivered to the County Coroner….
TRUST: Spencer is more-or-less forced to side with Russell. He cannot think of anything else, and there are those dogs, after all!
TWIST 5
Direction: Russell is beginning to suspect the lodge owner, Elyna (or at least he says he is).
Twist: Elyne claims iron-clad proof she could not have done it
CLUE 4 Elyna probably has nothing to do with the dead hikers.
STORY: Still, Elyna appears untrustworthy to Spencer, despite her claims. He continues to question her mental state which could nullify everything she claims
LIFE THREATENING 3: If Elyna should be the killer, Spencer and Russell could be next. Spencer decides to back off from provoking her further.
TWIST 6
Direction: The dogs are huge, growling and baring their teeth (and they went wild when the bodies were hauled out of the mountains).
Twist: Elyna, takes Spencer to the dogs, speaks to the dogs, and they become as docile as kittens.
TRUST: Spencer thinks maybe he’s being too hard on Elyna.
REVEAL
A. What is the reveal? The dogs are not good evidence for the killings.B. How did it get covered up? The dogs acted viciously when Spencer first encountered them and again when they hauled the bodies out of the mountains.C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? The mystery is, did they or didn’t they (the dogs)? The intrigue is in the possibilities: Maybe they appear innocent only in the presence of Elyna. Maybe Elyna ordered the attack. Maybe Elyna, did it?D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. Elyna is beginning to look as innocent as the dogs, and Russell is raising questions about himself. This leaves the investigation dangling.
MISDIRECTION 3 – DIALOGUE TYPE – The audience is directed toward thinking that neither Elyna nor her dogs may have done it. The focus changes to wild animals (or Aliens), again.
STORY: Spencer changes his mind about Elyna– he goes from distrust to at least partial trust. She seems to have good excuses.
TWIST 7
Direction: Russell orders Spencer to cease and desist his looking for more evidence.
Twist: Spencer can’t let the mystery alone, however, and since he’s already lost faith in Russell, he covertly continues, anyway.
STORY: The relationship between Spencer and Russell is further weakened
DISTRUST: Spencer thinks Russell is up to something. Like what?
LIFE THREATENING 4: Spencer has no idea of what he’s walking into.
TWIST 8
Direction: The idea peddled to the corner is that wild animals attacked the hikers (Spencer has at least convinced Russell to tone down his rhetoric so he doesn’t sound like a raving idiot).
Twist: Later, Spencer returns. The corner says, “it looks more like they were bombed.” This is not the sole work of wild animals.
REVEAL
A. What is the reveal? – The evidence does not fully support the idea of wild animals or Aliens. Murder?B. How did it get covered up? – Russell has been too anxious to support an unsupportable theory.C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? – the mystery remains: who or what, and the suspense is in the lack of a definite answer.D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. – the impact lies in the lack of anything definite, and this only strengthens the unknown: mythical creatures or Aliens?
MYSTERY 5: What would cause these sorts of wounds?
INTRIGUE 3: Is there any possibility that the coroner could be right? Could they have been bombed or perhaps had some other sort of mechanical device used on them? Spencer does not recall any unusual sounds, but the bodies had been there for some amount of time..
TWIST 9
Direction: The corner remains fixed in his judgment. Russell tries to get him to change hid Dx. He will not, so Russell is not happy.
Twist: Spencer considers the coroner’s words and thinks the dead hikers were murdered.
LIFE THREATENING 5: Spencer is raising questions that are putting him in danger of Russell.
TWIST 10
Direction: Spencer is biologically savvy enough to question why that area is fenced-off.
Twist: He discovers that Russell requestioned wire. Russell says he simply forgot… knows nothing else or who it was for.
DISTRUST: Is Russell going senile? Or worse?
STORY: Spencer now fully distrusts Russell. Is he simply getting old and forgetful (or worse), or his he hiding something? Spencer calls around and can find nobody who will own up to having cordoned-off the area in the mountains. No college or university is doing any study in that area, but there are too many possibilities. Maybe some private group. Still, Russell’s name is the only one that Spencer can attach to the wire requisition.
REVEAL
A. What is the reveal? Russell is either lying about something, or he is going senile.B. How did it get covered up? Russell explicitly says he knows nothing about the habitat area.C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? We have a mystery within a mystery. How does one unwind that? Who ordered that area fenced-off? And why?D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. Is Russell’s mind failing him or is he flat-out lying? If he’s lying, why? What’s he hiding?
CLUE 5 There was an earthquake about two weeks before the grizzly deaths.
TWIST 11
Direction: Everything seems random and disconnected. However —
Twist: Spencer learns that the epicenter is in the same area as the fence and the dead bodies.
STORY: Spencer is beginning to reconsider – could Russell have had anything to do with this?
REVEAL
A. What is the reveal? There appears to be some sort of connection between the earthquake, the fence, and the dead bodies.B. How did it get covered up? Russell has misled everyone with constant talk of wild animals (what wild animals, at this altitude?) and Aliens (where’s any real evidence?).C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? The mystery is still buried in all the possibilities and the unknown.D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. Russell is demanding an end to the investigating, but new clues keep popping up – the earthquake? What could that possibly have to do with anything? It only raises the stakes
STORY: Spencer’s Distrust of Elyna returns. He discovers another pack station on the other side of the mountain. Why is Elyna unaware of this?
MISDIRECTION 4 – CLUE TYPE – The audience is once again directed toward thinking that maybe Elyna and her dogs could still be guilty.
CLUE 6 There is, in fact, a pack station on the other side of the mountain with an approach to the mutilations site as close or closer than Elyne’s.
TWIST 12
Direction: Elyna states that her pack station is the only one in the area near the mutilations.
Twist: Spencer discovers another pack station, but on the other side of the mountain.
DISTRUST: Why does Elyne not know this? Is she hiding something, or does she really not know?
VILLAIN’S PLAN 2: To try and keep Spencer quiet – get Spencer to quit asking questions that might expose him
REVEAL
A. What is the reveal? There is another pack station on the other side of the mountain.B. How did it get covered up? Hilda says her pack station is the only one in the region. Why does she not know of her local competition?C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? The mystery becomes how did all that wire make its way up the mountain, by whom, when, and why?D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. Russell apparently knows more than he’s willing to acknowledge, as well as Hilda.
TURNING POINT 1 – Spencer again suspects Elyna’s dogs and a coverup, despite all
VILLAIN’S PLAN 3: To milk Spencer’s belief that it was Elyne and her dogs.
LIFE THREATENING 6: If guilty, will Elyne try to quiet Spencer if/when she suspects “he knows too much.”
DISTRUST: Elyne’s stories continue to be a bit too much for Spencer, and then, there are those dogs! He has no real evidence, but he still distrusts her.
ACT 2
STEP 3 – Elyna becomes the focus of both Russell and Spencer.
TWIST 13
Direction: Russell discovers that Spencer is still asking questions.
Twist: However, Spencer, without revealing all his evidence, tells Russell he still suspects Elyne and her huge dogs that either got loose or were taken to the area. Revenge for something, maybe? Russell likes that. A revenge killing.
The trust between Spencer and Russell is still shakey, despite Russell’s regained trust in Spencer.
MISDIRECTION 5 – WRITER TYPE – Spencer thinks up a new idea. Maybe Elyne did it, but as a revenge killing for something the hikers did. They don’t know how to obey signs, so maybe they did something to her and she simply got even? Maybe she’s been trying to misdirect everyone, all along.
VILLAIN’S PLAN 4: He just wants to get Spencer, and everyone else, to agree with him and pass it off simplistically, to let himself off as a potential suspect with ne evidence. He’s made mistakes and he knows he’s in danger of being found out.
TWIST 14
Direction: Russell is pleased with Spencer’s viewpoint shift, but pays Elyne a visit, on the quiet.
Twist: Elyne becomes angry and wary of both Spencer and Russell.
STEP 4 –Elyna becomes less and less a focus, to Spencer.
MIDPOINT TWIST: (THE EYE OPENER) – Spencer now begins to suspect Russell
LIFE THREATENING #: Russell is the Villain, but why and how? Spencer is still in the dark about the truth.
ACT 3
STEP 5 – Russell becomes the focus
STEP 6 – Russell is caught red-handed.
LIFE THREATENING #: Russell is the Villain, but why and how? Evidence mounts.
TURNING POINT 2: (The Battle Seems Lost) – (The Antagonist/Villain appears to have vanquished the)
LIFE THREATENING #: – literally takes on a new meaning as Spencer struggles to stay alive.
MYSTERY #: Will Spencer make it through this ordeal?
INTRIGUE #: Elyne is beginning to see through Russell.
SUSPENSE #: What will Elyne do with her newfound suspensions?
VILLAIN’S PLAN #– To kill Spencer and default back to putting the suspicion on Elyna.
ACT 4
CRISIS: Protagonist (HERO) and Antagonist (Villain) must meet face-to-face.
LIFE THREATENING #:– This has literally become a life-and-death battle.
MYSTERY #: – Who will survive?
VILLAIN’S PLAN #– To stay alive by vanquishing Spencer.
STEP 7 – Spencer must run for his life and stop Russell before Russell stops him.
LIFE THREATENING +: Russell must eliminate Spencer in a wild drive to protect himself.
STEP 8 — Climax: (Final Conflict — one must emerge the winner)
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Lesley Misdirects…When Appropriate!
What I learned:
– The significance and types of misdirection.
– Misdirection Rocks!
LESLEY’S THRILLER MAP
OPENING: Sam’s editor at the magazine assigns her to interview Christian Sparrow who caught “life” for killing his wife but was released after the blood expert who investigated his case goes to prison for corrupting evidence in his cases to get convictions.
Mystery 1: Why did Sam catch this assignment?
Mystery 2: Does editor have it in for Sam?
Clue: Sam was an investigative reporter before going to work for the magazine.
Mystery 3: Why has Christian agreed to be interviewed?
Mystery 4: Did Christian murder his wife?
Intrigue: Why does Christian refuse to be interviewed until he googles Sam and reads about her wealthy family?
Clue: He’s after Sam’s money.
Suspense: Is Christian guilty or innocent? He was released on a technicality
Reveal 1: Sam rejected her editor’s sexual advances and he’s making her pay.
Reveal 2: Something bad happened to Sam’s brother.
Mystery: Before his incarceration, Christian was a very successful investor. How he got the money to start with is unknown.
Misdirection: Christian’s wife Nicole was having an affair with neighbor JOHN ROSSMOOR when she died — John was the initial suspect but he was never charged.
INCITING INCIDENT: Sam meets Christian.
Direction: Sam expects Christian Sparrow to be thug.
Twist: He’s educated, insightful, sensitive, and very attractive.
Clue: Christian can be extremely charming.
Mystery 5: What is Christian’s relationship with Tracy, his attorney?
Twist 2:
Direction: Tracy is the pro-bono attorney responsible for getting Christian’s sentence overturned.
Twist: She’s sleeping with him.
Villain’s Plan 1: Christian knows that Sam comes from wealth. He needs to get her to trust him.
Reveal 3:
S: What will Christian be like? (He’s bearded, pumped up, and thuggish-looking in his prison photo’s.)
R: Christian is slim, shaven, good-looking, and educated.
M: Why doesn’t Tracy like Sam?
Misdirection: In-house investigator CLIVE WASHINGTON tells Sam that the threatening email was sent from the Ridgestone Public Library in the Valley. Tracy lives in the Valley.
M2: Who is the mysterious friend who loaned Christian the house and “owes him”?
Reveal 4:
I: Tracy is jealous; accuses Christian of flirting with Sam.
I2: Christian threatens to have Tracy disbarred if she doesn’t stay away from him.
R: Tracy and Christian are sleeping together.
Clue: Christian threatens Tracy.
Mystery 6: Is Sam going to write a positive or negative article? How will Christian react?
Twist 4: (NEW)
Direction: Sam is determined to write an objective article.
Twist: Sam is not objective – Her brother went to prison for stealing money from his mother to buy drugs and he was killed while incarcerated.
Clue: Sam has a bias against the legal system
Life Threatening 2: Christian decides to make Sam his next victim.
Twist 5:
Direction: Sam declines Christian’s invitation to dinner.
Clue: Sam has fits of rage
Twist: A few days later, she re-invites herself.
Twist 6:
Direction: Sam ‘s attraction to Christian deepens.
Clue: Sam believes Christian’s innocent.
Twist: Sam gets an anonymous email warning her to stay away from him and panics.
TURNING POINT 1: Sam falls for Christian.
Villain’s plan 2: Christian follows Sam; studies her.
Life-threatening 3: Christian sets Sam up to be seduced.
Mystery 7: Why does Sam trust Christian?
Direction: Sam stops seeing Christian after the email.
Twist: Christian ‘bumps’ into her at the cinema…
Clue: He’s stalking her.
Twist 7: Christian seduces Sam,
Reveal 6:
I: Sam, frightened by the email, stops all communication with Christian and he’s angry.
I2: Christian starts following Sam, studying her.
S: What is Christian going to do?
R: Sam is drawn back into Christian’s web when he ‘accidentally’ runs into her at the cinema.
Clue: Sam is falling for Christian
S2: Has Sam become Christian’s prey?
R2: Sam sleeps with Christian.
R3: Kelsey shows up.
MIDPOINT: Sam betrays Christian.
Life threatening 4: Christian sleeps with Sam’s daughter.
Villain’s plan 3: Christian realizes that Sam has no money but her daughter Kelsey will get her trust fund money when she turns nineteen.
Reveal 6:
M: Who is Sam’s daughter Kelsey? Why does she return home?
I: Kelsey dislikes Christian and wants to undermine his relationship with Sam.
R: Kelsey is spoiled, narcissistic, and troubled.
Clue: Kelsey wants to hurt Sam… She wants to undermine Sam’s relationship with Christian.
M2: Why did Sam refuse her inheritance?
R2: Martha, Kelsey’s grandmother is controlling and an alcoholic.
R3: When Sam’s younger brother stole money from Martha to buy drugs, Martha had him arrested and put in prison. He was killed during a prison fight.
Reveal 8:
S: What will Christian do now that he knows Sam has no money and Kelsey will be rich when she turns 21?
Clue: Christian targets Kelsey. He’s after her money.
I: Is there sexual energy between Kelsey and Christian?
R: Christian and Kelsey have sex.
R2: Christian & Kelsey elope.
Clue: No pre-nup. Is Kelsey really in love with Christian?
M: Why doesn’t Christian want children?
Clue: He resented his mother’s pregnancy and the birth of his little brother.
R3: Sam starts investigating. What will she find out?
TURNING POINT 2: Christian elopes with Kelsey; no pre-nup.
Mystery 8: Why is Kelsey so angry?
Mystery 9: Is Kelsey really in love with Christian or is she trying to punish her mother?
Direction: Kelsey, Sam’s hot-mess daughter, can’t stand Christian.
Twist: She ends up sleeping with him.
Life threatening 5: Sam is determined to find out the truth about Christian.
Life threatening 6: Sam gets another anonymous text
Twist 9:
Direction: Kelsey is about to receive all of the money her grandma Martha’s put in her trust.
Twist: Martha is going to void trust because of Kelsey’s marriage.
Twist 10
Direction: Kelsey loves her grandma
Twist: Kelsey thinks that she’d be better off if Martha was dead.
Life threatening 7: Sam discovers that Christian may have killed his fiancé who disappeared shortly after she announced that she was pregnant.
Reveal 9:
M: Who does the house that Christian had been living in belong to?
I: Sam finds out that the house is owned by a Rick Passero
R: Rick Passero is Christian’s father – he’s in hospice for stage 4 lung cancer. Christian changed his name from Passero (Sparrow in Italian)
Clues:
– Christian’s real name is Christopher Passero.
– Christian Passero filed for a marriage license to marry Donna Morales
– Olivia Morales, Donna’s mother, believes Christian killed Donna after she got pregnant.
Reveal 10:
S: Martha is going to change Kelsey’s trust – Kelsey will not receive her inheritance when she turns 21.
I: Kelsey tells Christian that she’d be better off if Martha was dead.
S2: Christian learns that death by suffocation is the hardest to prove. Now what is he going to do?
R: Christian kills Martha.
Reveal 11:
M: Was Kelsey responsible for Martha’s death?.
Clue: Kelsey believes that she’s responsible for Martha’s death.
I: Sam believes that Christian killed Martha.
R: The autopsy does not reveal foul play.
Misdirection: When Sam tells Kelsey that her grandmother is dead, Kelsey’s face is expressionless. When Sam accuses Christian of killing Martha, Kelsey is furious and throws her out.
Misdirection: Kelsey goes on a shopping spree with trust fund money.
Reveal 12:
S: Sam visits convicted blood expert Lambert in prison.
R: Lambert says that he didn’t touch the evidence in Christian’s case; he didn’t have to because Christian is guilty as hell.
Reveal 13:
S: Sam discovers that Christian’s pregnant fiance went missing and was never found.
I: Sam visits the mother of the missing girl at her home in the valley. She’s convinced that Christian murdered her daughter when she refused to get an abortion.
R: Christian, at seven, ‘accidentally’ killed his baby brother.
Clue: Christian resented his mother’s pregnancy.
R2: The dead girl’s mother was sending the emails.
Reveal 14:
I: Kelsey is pregnant.
Clue: Kelsey defies Christian’s wishes.
M: Why would Kelsey get pregnant against Christian’s wishes?
S: When Christian finds out, he’s furious. What will he do?
Clue: He’s no longer acting “nice.”
R: Christian grabs Kelsey’s arm hard enough to sprain it and leave bruises.
R2: Sam finds out what Christian did to Kelsey and buys a gun.
Twist 11
Direction: Sam believes that Tracy is sending the emails
Twist 12
Direction: Christian said that the house he was staying in belonged to a friend from college who owed him.
Twist: The ‘friend from college’ turns out to be his father who is in hospice care (Christian changed his name.) Turns out, a seven-year-old Christian ‘accidentally’ killed his younger brother in a jealous fit.
Life threatening 9: Martha dies under unexplained circumstances before she can change her will.
Misdirection: Kelsey buys a luxury home with some of her trust fund money
Life threatening 10: Sam discovers that Christian may have killed his fiancé who disappeared shortly after she announced that she was pregnant.
Life threatening 11: Kelsey is pregnant.
Clue: Christian was fighting with his wife over her getting an abortion when she “tripped and fell down the stairs.”
Mystery 10: Why did Kelsey get pregnant when she knew that Christian didn’t want children?
Misdirection:
Twist 13
Direction: Christian said that the house he was staying in belonged to a friend from college who owed him.
Twist: The ‘friend from college’ turns out to be his father. (Christian changed his name when he was 18)
Twist 14
Direction: Sam meets with Blood spatter expert Justin Lambert who admits that he doctored results on multiple cases.
Twist: Lambert swears that he never doctored evidence in Christian’s case.
Life threatening 12: When Christian finds out that Kelsey is pregnant, he’s enraged and shakes her hard enough to leave marks.
Life threatening 13: Sam realizes that Christian is going to kill Kelsey as soon as he can get away with it.
Life threatening 14: Sam buys a gun.
CLIMAX: Sam confronts Christian. Christian attacks Sam. Kelsey kills him.
Life threatening 15: Sam warns Christian to keep his hands off Kelsey, confronts him with everything she knows, says she’s going to tell the cops everything.
Life threatening 16: Sam draws her gun but Christian lunges at her and the gun is knocked out of her hand.
Twist 15
Direction: Sam & Christian are alone because Kelsey is in class
Twist: Kelsey comes home unexpectedly, picks up Sam’s gun, points it at Christian.
Direction: Christian is cornered; Kelsey has Sam’s gun trained on him. Sam starts to call 911….
Twist: Kelsey shoots Christian in cold blood.
Mystery 11: Why does Kelsey kill Christian when she has a gun trained on him and Sam’s calling 911?
RESOLUTION: Kelsey’s son’s fifth birthday…. Christian is dead, Sam is now editor of the magazine & Kelsey’s son is healthy.
TWIST 17 (NEW)
Direction: All is well that ends well.
Twist: Is the kid a psychopath like his dad?
Reveal 15:
I: Editor is fired.
M: Why is the editor fired?
R: Sam is the new editor of the mag.
Reveal 16:
R: It’s Kelsey’s son Teddy’s fifth birthday.
M: What’s wrong with Teddy?
R2: Teddy is a psychopath like his dad (and possibly his mother.)
TRUST RELATIONSHIPS:
1. Main characters.
Hero: SAM
Villain: CHRISTIAN
Villian #2: KELSEY
Red Herring Character: TRACY
2. With each character, ask these questions:
A. What is their basic state — trustable or not trustable?
SAM: Trustable
CHRISTIAN: Not trustable
KELSEY: Not trustable
TRACY: Trustable
B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable?
CHRISTIAN: Appears trustable but isn’t… In the beginning he is loving, gentle & and generous with Sam (then Kelsey) but he’s a predator.
KELSEY: Appears untrustable but isn’t…. Kelsey is a hot mess who is intentionally cruel to Sam (and may wish her grandmother was dead) but she is devastated by the loss of her grandmother & she risks her life to save Sam’s.
TRACY: Appears untrustable but isn’t ….Tracy behaved inappropriately by having a sexual relationship with Christian when she was defending him during his trial.
C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other?
SAM: Trustable… but will stop at nothing to protect her daughter.
CHRISTIAN: Not trustable… but pretends to be in order to seduce his prey.
KELSEY: Not trustable… but realizes what she’s done and saves Sam.
TRACY: She appears untrustable and intent on derailing Sam’s relationship with Christian – until she risks Christian’s anger by warning Sam that she’s in danger.
3. With each character relationship, brainstorm how trust or distrust might show up between them.
D = Distrust T = Trust
Sam/Christian: (Hero/Villain)
D: Sam believes that Christian may have murdered his wife.
T: Sam meets Christian and discovers that he’s not a thug.
T: Sam believes that Christian’s relationship with Tracy is professional.
D: Sam finds out that Christian was sleeping with Tracy.
T: Sam discovers that she & Christian share the same values, dreams, and desires.
D: Sam gets ‘warning’ email about Christian.
T: Christian charms Sam into falling for him by mirroring her.
D: Christian betrays Sam by having sex with Kelsey.
D: Christian elopes with Kelsey.
D: Sam realizes that Christian was playing her for her money then targets Kelsey when he realizes that Sam rejected her family’s wealth.
D: Christian kills Martha.
D: Sam discovers that a seven-year-old Christian killed his baby brother.
D: Sam discovers that Christian may have killed his pregnant ex-fiance.
D: Sam discovers that Christian did murder his wife.
D: Christian hurts Kelsey and Sam is convinced that he will kill both of them as soon as he can pull it off without getting caught.
Christian/Sam: (Villain/Hero)
T: Christian knows that Sam is rich.
D: Christian discovers that Sam renounced her mother’s wealth because of what Martha did to Sam’s brother.
T: Kelsey will receive her trust fund money when she turns 20.
T: Christian believes that he has control of Kelsey.
D: Kelsey gets pregnant against his wishes.
D: Sam accuses him of killing Martha.
D: Sam threatens Christian, reveals everything she’s learned and is going to the police.
D: Sam pulls a gun on Christian.
Kelsey/Christian (Villain #2/Villian
D: Kelsey thinks Christian is exploiting Sam.
T: Kelsey has sex with Christian.
T: Kelsey elopes with Christian.
T: No pre-nup.
D: Christian turns on her when she gets pregnant.
D: Did Christian kill Kelsey’s grandmother?
D: Kelsey kills him.
Kelsey/Sam: (Villian #2/Hero)
D: Kelsey blames Sam for rejecting Martha’s money.
D: Kelsey blames Sam for not having a father.
T: Kelsey believes that her mother will always be there for her no matter what she does.
D: Kelsey believes that Sam is punishing her for taking away Christian.
T: Kelsey realizes that Sam is only trying to protect her.
T: Kelsey risks her life to save Sam’s.
Sam/Kelsey: (Hero/Villian #2)
D: Sam knows that Kelsey is fucked-up.
T: Sam thinks that having Kelsey back home will be good for Kelsey.
D: Kelsey has sex with Christian.
D: Kelsey elopes with Christian.
D: Kelsey gets pregnant.
T: Kelsey comes to her senses about Christian.
T: Kelsey saves Sam’s life.
Sam/Tracy: (Hero/Red Herring):
T: Tracy got Christian’s sentence reversed.
D: Tracy is sleeping with Christian
D: Tracy is sending warning emails about Christian to Sam because she’s jealous and wants to undermine the relationship.
T: Tracy did not send the emails.
T: Tracy risks her own safety to help Sam.
THE MAIN MYSTERIES:
MAIN MYSTERY #1: Is Christian a psychopath?
Clues:
– Christian wasn’t proven innocent; his verdict was overturned because of tainted evidence.
– Before his incarceration, Christian was a very successful investor. How he got the money to start with is unknown.
– Someone sends Sam an anonymous email warning her to stay away from Christian.
– Christian follows Sam and studies her. What’s he up to?
– He can be extremely charming.
– He has fits of rage.
– He’s after Sam’s money.
– He’s after Kelsey’s money.
– His pregnant ex-fiancé went missing.
– He ‘accidentally’ killed his baby brother when he was seven.
– He was fighting with his wife over her getting an abortion when she “tripped and fell down the stairs.”
MAIN MYSTERY #2: Can Sam solve the mystery & stop Christian from killing again?
Clues:
– Sam was an investigative reporter before going to work for the magazine.
– Something bad happened to Sam’s brother.
– Sam’s convinced that Christian is innocent.
– Kelsey elopes with Christian.
– Sam tracks down Rick Passero.
– Christian’s real name is Christopher Passero.
– Christian Passero filed for a marriage license to marry Donna Morales
– Olivia Morales, Donna’s mother, believes Christian killed Donna after she got pregnant.
– Sam tracks down Jason Lambert.
– Kelsey is pregnant.
– Sam buys a gun.
MAIN MYSTERY #3: Is Kelsey trustworthy or untrustworthy?
Clues:
– Kelsey dropped out of college and was just fired from her job in boutique.
– Kelsey returns home because she has been thrown out of her apartment because of back rent.
– Kelsey tries to undermine Sam’s relationship with Christian.
– Kelsey seduces Christian.
– Kelsey elopes with Christian. No pre-nup.
– Does Kelsey want Martha dead?
– Kelsey defies Christian and gets pregnant.
– Kelsey saves Sam.
– Kelsey kills Christian in cold blood after she’s out of danger.
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</div>Budinscak Misdirects…. When Appropriate – Day 13
What I learned Doing This Assignment:
o Use misdirection sparingly.
o Keep it simple and don’t get it too complicated – do not confuse the reader/audience.
o Lots of info in my Thriller Map and it’s a little hard to navigate everything being layered in.
1. Check these three to see how effectively you used misdirection
o The Red Herring Character
o The Villain’s Plan
o The Cover-up for each mystery present as reality
2. Look through your Thriller Map for a few opportunities to add in misdirection.
o Clue Misdirection
o Character Misdirection
o Dialogue Misdirection
The misdirection was focused solely on two characters – the villain and the red herring – and clue and dialogue misdirection was used.
3. Decide on the ones that work and add them to your Thriller Map
Thriller Map
OPENING: Lure us into the story and introduces the lead character in action.
A bruised, exhausted Vicki collapses at the feet of a robotic animal.
Reveal 1
Mystery #1 – What’s the source of UFO sighting??
– Sightings have occurred the past few weeks
– Are aliens real?
– Videos on the internet
Clue 1, 2, 3
Villain’s Plan #1 – Ensure the project operates in anonymity.
Twist 1
Reveal 2, 3, 4
Misdirection – dialogue – Commander notices two different drones following his helicopter. One shoots the other out of the sky. Commander, “I hope that’s one of ours” ? – “who else could it be?”, Commander, “theirs”.
Misdirection – clue. Commander shows a hi-tech ‘collar’ that will ‘show who’s human and who ain’t. The Commander claims it’s for control.
INCITING INCIDENT: An event that propels the Hero on the Journey.
Was that a UFO? Driving home, Vicki crashes her jeep interacting with a flying object.
Mystery #2 – Flashing Lights in the sky
Twist 2
LT #1 – Vicki momentarily blinded by light/lazar from flying object.
LT #2 – Spooked deer flee into the road, Vicki crashes jeep avoiding.
Twist 3
Mystery #3 – Systems affected
– Cell phone doesn’t work
– Car computer systems malfunction
Twist 4, 5
LT #3 – Vicki chased by wolves.
Reveal 10, 11, 12
Clue 12
Mystery # 4 – Aberrant animal behavior
– Unnatural sounds
Villain’s Plan – #2 – Shut the project down and make it disappear in 24 hours.
Clue 4, 6, 7
Twist 6, 7
Villain’s Plan #3 – Dispose of all unwanted equipment.
– Moved to area of deepest shaft
– Explosive device wired.
Twist 8
TURNING POINT 1: A major twist that locks the hero into the conflict. Point of no return.
Vicki watches a drone fly into an abandoned mine shaft – and follows.
Reveal 12
Misdirection – Clue – Vicki finds her associate, Karen’s, hidden truck.
Mystery #5 – Who is piloting the drone?’
– Who/what is in the abandoned mine?
LT #4 – Vicki climbs down a rotted ladder, it breaks and she’s barely able to hang on.
Reveal 13, 14
Vicki/Red
Trust – Vicki meets Red in the tunnel, he points her in the right direction
Distrust – she ends up in the room with captives – and is caught herself
Trust – Red sticks up for Vicki
Distrust – he tells the Commander where he found her
Trust – he opens Vicki’s lock so she can escape.
Distrust – Red sends specialized drones to hunt Vicki down
Mystery #6 – Who are these men?
– Why are they chasing Vicki?
– Why are they firing at her?
Twist 9
LT #5 – Vicki evades an armed security team pursuing her.
Twist 10
Mystery #7 – The Commander – who is this pesky intruder?
– Who is she?
– Who sent her?
– Why is she here?
– Is this the one who escaped detection/security?
Villain Plan #4 – Assess all witnesses
– Captured campers
– Disgruntled employees
– Forest Ranger
Vicki/Commander
Trust – The Commander puts Vicki at ease representing himself as the new guy who’s going to clean up this mess
Distrust – The Commander sends his security team after Vicki.
Trust – Vicki is rescued from being pursued by robotic animals.
Distrust – The Commander interrogates Vicki
Trust – Vicki escapes
Distrust – Commander kills employee who let Vicki escape
Distrust – Vicki is shot and wounded by the Commander
MIDPOINT: A major revelation. The opposition is 10 times worse than thought.
Vicki finds prisoners – people and animals in cages.
Reveal 15, 16
Mystery #8 – Why are there prisoners?
– Why are these people (campers) locked up?
– Why are animals in cages?
Vicki/Camper Bob
Trust – Vicki finds Camper Bob held captive with 3 other humans
Distrust – Camper Bob says he speaks for the other campers. The other campers shake their head no.
Trust – Camper Bob saves Vicki from an attack drone
Distrust – for promised freedom, he gives up her position to the Commander
Trust – Camper Bob explains his plan to Vicki – how he’ll rescue her and the rest of the campers
Reveal 17
Clue 15
LT #6 – Shocked to find prisoners. Vicki can only free one before her pursuers. They escape.
LT #7 – The pursuers fire and the camper is killed/wounded.
Twist 11
LT #8 – Fleeing down a tunnel, Vicki can’t quite make the leap and tumbles down a hole and is hurt.
LT #9 – A bruised, exhausted Vicki collapses at the feet of a robotic animal.
Mystery #9 – Who is responsible for this operation?
– Vicki meets the man in charge, the real Commander.
Reveal 18
LT #10 – Vicki is brutally interrogated by the Commander.
LT #11 – A sympathetic techie allows Vicki to escape. The Commander shoots the techie on the spot.
Reveal 19
Misdirection – Clue – The special alien collar doesn’t work.
Villain Plan #5 – Dispose all witnesses
TURNING POINT 2: Major setback. The lowest of the low.
Vicki’s is shot and seriously wounded.
LT #12 – LT frees the rest of the campers under fire.
LT #13 – Vicki releases all the caged animals.
Mystery #10 – What is it about the exotic cat?
LT #14 – As security approaches, Vicki wraps herself around the exotic cat to protect – and Vicki’s shot.
Villain Plan #6 – Time to wrap it up and make it disappear.
Twist 12
Reveal 20, 21
Vicki/Karen
Distrust – Karen lies to Vicki about her new truck – and Vicki knows it
Trust – Karen helps Vicki with a Girl Scout troop presentation
Distrust – Karen makes judgmental comments to Vicki
Trust – Vicki finds Karen locked up with other prisoners
Distrust – Vicki does not believe Karen’s explanation
Trust – Karen creates a smokescreen allowing Vicki to escape detection
Trust – Karen shares information about how to escape
CLIMAX: The ultimate expression of the main conflict.
Aliens are real! The new iteration Vicki makes the Commander disappear.
Twist 13
Reveal 22
LT #15 – The alien restores Vicki’s life with a few modifications.
Mystery #11 – What makes Vicki different?
– Will there be differences?
– Will they be easy to decipher?
Mystery #12 – What will this iteration of Vicki do to the Commander?
– Vicki approves aliens taking the Commander and the rest of his team with them – make them disappear.
Reveal 23
RESOLUTION: The end of the journey in an emotionally satisfying way.
The escaped campers tell a story of Forest Ranger Vicki.
Reveal 24
Mystery #13 – What happened to Vicki?
– Her life was restored – her flesh as well as her spirit. She is one ‘person’, but easily exists as two separate ‘people’/entities.
– Her physical self has been altered – aged, wiser yet with a younger walk.
– Known as the animal’s friend who’s always watching.
Vicki covers for Karen at the Girl Scout event and Vicki is noticeably different.
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Mary Emmick Misdirects…When appropriate!
What I learned is that misdirection keeps the audience searching and wondering. It keeps them engaged in the mystery and keeps them on the edge of their seats.
1. Check these three to see how effectively you used misdirection.
A. The Red Herring Character. I think that Katerina the annoying and troublesome Morluvian immigrant needs to act and react as if she is hiding something, so we think she is even more devious and guilty. She could be present when Natasha and Katie are targeted by the speeding car heading toward them, walking past when she is heading into the salon and other places.
B. The Villain’s Plan. We consider Allison Hanover, the new garden club member, a delightful addition to the club, but she is working with Aaron Stench to assassinate Katie.
2. Look through your Thriller Map for a few opportunities to add in misdirection.
Character Misdirection. When the gardener whisks Katie away from the garden tour we think she is being kidnapped and this could be the end of her. In reality he is a CIA operative watching her and keeping her safe.
Olga seems to be an amazingly positive and competent new manager of the Morluvian Immigrant Assistance Center, but in actuality is working for NWOP and Igor Stepanov to get rid of Katie and Natasha.
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<div>What I learned is Misdirection is very important to the effectiveness of a Thriller. I learned that I need to spend more time on some of these categories and drill down into exactly how the audience is being misdirected. l learned that there are many different ways to misdirect the audience through clues, characters and dialogue or the combination of all three.
1. Check these three to see how effectively you used misdirection </div>
A. The Red Herring character
– Beau – We (and the people of Black Maple) think he may be the murderer.
– Laura – We think she is involved in Jack’s plan.
– Keith – We think it is him killing people at Jack’s command, with Gabe.
– The Company – We think it is The Company’s plan (it’s not).B. The Villain’s Plan.
– Jack wants to use Gabe, Keith and Heather to fulfill his plan. He does a good job of pretending to be a wonderful, generous man who is mentoring the kids and giving to the community.
– The Judge wants to use Jack to take power over the Company. The Judge does a good job of pretending to be a stern but fair, respected town judge while he is doing shady deals with The Company and enabling Jack to go on a crime spree.
– Laura wants to use Jack and The Judge to gain power over them and enact revenge for everything they’ve done to her over the years.C. The cover-up for each mystery presented as “Reality”.
The Boys in the Woods murders:
– Jack teaches a “Program” where he takes kids in the woods and teaches them life lessons. This is perceived to be especially helpful to Keith, whose father is extremely abusive. Jack is out with the boys in the woods, when the Boys in the Woods murders occurs. – No one knows who killed the Boys in the Woods (because Jack, Gabe, and Keith aren’t talking).
What is everyone hiding?
– Jack uses his family’s wealth, his position as preacher and his perceived generous nature to gain entrance into any home or business in Black Maple. This allows jack to learn everyone’s secrets and use them to create turmoil and division.
– Jack brings Keith and Gabe into The Order and gives them robes and masks.
– Jack an The Judge pledge money and service to many local charitable organizations, endearing them to the people of Black Maple.Who is the serial killer?
– It appears that some of the boys are committing murders for Jack and The Order.
– It appears that it could be Beau doing the murders.
– It could be The Company doing the murders.What are the purpose of the rituals Jack, Laura and The Judge are performing?
– The Rituals are to signify growth in the boys progress through the Program and are very secretive.What is The Company doing in Black Maple?
– The Company is ostensibly in Black Maple doing pilot training programs with various aircraft.Why does The Judge have control of the town?
– Because he is a longstanding attorney and judge within the town and has the most friends of anyone in the legal and political arenas of Black Maple.Who can Barbara trust?
– Barbara thinks she can trust her mother and the Deacon.
What will happen to Keith’s family?
– They’re being taken to witness Keith’s final Ritual.Who will win?
– Keith takes the fall for all of the murders, including the Sheriff, Beau, Laura, and his family and the Boys in the Woods.
– The Judge sends Gabe to the insane asylum where his daughter is.
– Gabe kills himself.
– Jack moves on to a bigger city with a larger church. We see the billboard of the church as he’s driving.2. Look through your Thriller Map for a few opportunities to add in misdirection.
A. Clue Misdirection:
Misinterpreted Clue:
– Keith coming home covered in blood is a misinterpreted clue by Heather.– Keith acting crazy – drinking and drugs and girls is a misinterpreted clue by Heather and – Barbara.
– Beau lurking around at night trying to catch the killer is a misinterpreted clue by The Sheriff.
– The Company being involved with the Judge is a misinterpreted clue by Keith and Gabe.Clue that sends us to another potential Red Herring.
– The things that point out Keith, Laura, Beau and The Company are behind it all. They are all Red Herrings. (I still need to go through the Thriller Map and pull out & create the clues for all of the Red Herrings)B. Character Misdirection
A character we don’t believe who turns out to be telling the truth.
– KEITH!
– BeauCharacters jumping to conclusions.
– Joe jumps to conclusions.
– Heather jumps to conclusions.
– Barbara jumps to conclusions.
– The Sheriff jumps to conclusions.
– The town of Black Maple jumps to conclusions.
– The Company jumps to conclusions.Character intentions are misunderstood:
– Jack’s intentions are misunderstood.
– The Judge’s intentions are misunderstood.
– Laura’s intentions are misunderstood.
– Beau’s intentions are misunderstood.
– The Company’s intentions are misunderstood.
– Keith’s intentions are misunderstood.Character presented as one thing, but turn out to be another.
– Jack
– The Judge
– Gabe
– Laura
– Joe
– The Company
– Beau
– The SheriffDialogue Misdirection:
A line that was misunderstood:
– Keith talking to Heather– Keith talking to Barbara
– Keith talking to The Sheriff
– Laura talking to Keith– Jack talking to the townspeople
– Beau talking to Heather
– Gabe talking to HeatherLine had one meaning now, but another later:
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Assignment 13
Subject line: Pat Galbraith’s Misdirects…When Appropriate!
“What I learned is there is always room for a few misdirects
ASSIGNMENT
1. Check these three to see how effectively you used misdirection
· A. The Red Herring character.
B. The Villain’s plan.
C. The cover-up for each
mystery presents as “Reality.”
(See Map)2. Look through your Thriller Map for a few opportunities to add in misdirection.
A. Clue Misdirection.
B. Character Misdirection.
C. Dialogue Misdirection.
(See map)3. Decide on the ones that work and apply.
My thriller map.
1. Mystery: Two young boys bicycling on a dirt road through the woods come upon three bodies in a dump area.
· They are so scared they run home to tell their parents.
· 2. INCITING INCIDENT: Terry Holder having a drink in a bar. Gets the news “His brothers are missing.”
Clue: The bodies were found in a dump.
· 3. Misdirect: The detectives interview the main suspect – John George. He is belligerent with the detective.
Clue: He has a prison history.
He was in prisoned for poaching across state lines.
· Detective/John George
· Trust: Detective assumes that John George is innocent Until.
· Distrust: He becomes belligerent.
· Why is he belligerent with police.
Does he have something to hide?
o Direction: Detective believes he guilty.
Twist 2: In reality he’s not a Teddy bear, but he’s not a killer.
· 4 Neighbors around the area give John George a bad name.
· What do the neighbors know?
Clue: He has served time in prison for poaching.
· 5. Misdirect: Mystery: Mr. Favors offers food to the searchers.to appear to be a nice guy.
Clue: Investment posters hang around town to buy property in
the area.· Detective/Harry Favors
Trust: The detective admires Favors for
working with them.
Direction: Detective believes he’s a very nice guy.
Twist 3: He’s no nice guy.
· 6Msdirect: Mystery: Detective finds blood in John George’s truck and calls Terry to tell him things aren’t good.
· Detective/ John George
· Distrust: More evidence against John George.
· Trust: The blood was actual from a deer
Direction: Appears to be blood from victims.
Twist 4: Blood is from a deer.
· TURNING POINT 1
· 7. Terry, brother, realizes that he must find his brothers’ killer.
· 8. Intrigue Terry gets angry with one of John George’s sons.
· Terry/ John George’s Son
· Distrust: Terry believes he is hiding something.
Misdirect/ Mystery: That night the son ends up dead in his car. (had nothing to do with the current crime.
Clue: Favors caught him messing around near Harry Favors shed.
· Distrust: John George/Terry
· John George believes Terry had something to do with his son’s death.
· 9 Life Threatening: John George angry about his son comes to look for Terry.
Direction: Because of the fight, he thinks Terry has knocked off his son.
Clue: It was a former friend that thought he might get into trouble too.
Twist 5: Terry had nothing to do with the killing of his son.
· 10. Misdirect clue/ Suspense: Detective finds out John George has served time in prison
· Distrust: Terry and the detective are watching John George more closely.
· 11 Life threatening:
Misdirect clue. Terry talks with John George on the street. A fight breaks out. (both men believe lies)
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