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Day 9 Assignments
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DAY 9 – ASSIGNMENT
Subject Line: Alan’s Twists and Turns
What I learned is: I learned to strengthen the expected outcome of the Current Direction, so that the Twist has much more impact. This really helped my script. (Great lesson! Thanks!)
3. Tell us the places you added twists.
1. When Holly expects to enjoy the world’s best weed
2. At the tavern where Jay saves Erin
3. When Erin wears a wire to entrap Jay
4. When Madison is abducted from the bus station
5. When the best weed guy gets killed, they lose their chance to find Holly.
6. When Jay gets fired from his job
7. When Holly isn’t at the Iowa truck brothel.
8. When the brothel thug has captured Jay and intends to kill him.
9. When Erin agrees to be bait for the FBI
10. When the traffickers outsmart the FBI with the “shielded” limo
11. When Erin smuggles her phone in her bikini bottom
12. When the traffickers bait and switch Jay with a Holly lookalike
13. When Jay & the security team bait and switch Holly from the Beijing brothel
14. When the Chinese arrest Jay for trafficking Holly
4. Include the new version of your Thriller Map.
Villain’s Plan 1 -Lure Holly Sampson by offering to smoke the ‘world’s best weed’ with her, roofie her, and abduct her.
OPENING: After having dinner with Jay, Holly Sampson sneaks away to share the world’s best weed, but instead, gets roofied and abducted.
TWIST 1:
· Direction: Holly expects to enjoy smoking weed.
· Twist: Holly gets roofied and abducted.
Mystery 1: Who abducted Holly and where did they take her?
Villain’s Plan 2: At a bar, a trafficker roofies Erin Raynor and plans to abduct her.
Life Threatening 2: A trafficker drugs Erin with a date-rape drug and tries to abduct her.
TWIST 2:
· Direction: Jay saves a roofied Erin from being raped by the Rolex Creep.
· Twist: The Rolex Creep threatens to kill Jay.
Life Threatening 3: The trafficker threatens to kill Jay for saving Erin.
Mystery 2: Who roofied Erin and why did he threaten Jay’s life?
TWIST 3:
· Direction: Jay walks Erin home, shoves her in the house to protect her.
· Twist: Erin was wearing a police wire to entrap Jay.
Life Threatening 4: The police arrest Jay for Holly’s abduction and jail him. He loses his job.
Life Threatening 5: Madison Hansen is molested by her stepfather.
Mystery 3: Where is runaway Madison going?
Villain’s Plan 3: Traffickers stake out the Denver bus stop hunting for runaways. They find 13 year-old Madison there all alone and offer to buy her lunch. After a nice lunch, they offer her a place to stay. She accepts. They abduct her and plan to sell her to a brothel.
TWIST 4:
· Direction: A good Samaritan buys Madison lunch and offers her a place to stay.
· Twist: The good Samaritan is actually a sex trafficker.
Life Threatening 6: A trafficker takes Madison to their hideout and locks her up with several other girls.
INCITING INCIDENT: Jay learns Holly’s been abducted and wants to help rescue her.
TWIST 5:
· Direction: Police are sure they can learn Holly’s whereabouts from the trafficker.
· Twist: The trafficker is found dead in a park gully.
Life Threatening 7: The trafficker Jay identified is found dead in a park gully the next morning.
TWIST 6:
· Direction: Jay needs Detective Quinn to vouch for him at work.
· Twist: There is no Detective Quinn in the Denver police dept. Jay gets fired.
Life Threatening 8: Traffickers auction Holly and Erin on the dark web.
TURNING POINT 1: Holly’s one of a recent bevy of girls that’ve been abducted by a sophisticated sex trafficking ring that plans to auction her to the highest bidder on the dark web.
Mystery 4: How can they get Holly back?
Life Threatening 9: The traffickers sell Madison and several other young girls to the trucker brothel and smuggle them to an Iowa truck stop.
TWIST 7:
· Direction: The police and Jay are sure they will rescue Holly in Iowa.
· Twist: Holly’s not there.
MIDPOINT: Holly wasn’t among the rescued girls sold to the Iowa truck brothel. Dark web auction bids for Holly sky-rocket.
Mystery 8: If not to Iowa, where did the traffickers take Holly?
Life Threatening 10: FBI agents learn Holly’s being shipped off to China.
Life Threatening 11: A truck brothel thug tries to kill Jay and abduct Erin.
TWIST 8:
· Direction: A truck brothel thug captures Jay and will kill him.
· Twist: The Denver detective kills the thug and saves Jay.
Life Threatening 12: The Denver detective shoots/kills the thug.
Villain’s Plan 4: Traffickers offer Erin Raynor a modeling job, which she accepts. They pick her up in a limo at the L.A. airport. But there is no modeling job. Instead Erin is locked in the back of the limo, which is totally insulated to prevent her from calling for help or being tracked. They smuggle her to a boat bound for China.
Life Threatening 13: Erin gets offered and unknowingly accepts a fake modeling job in Mexico.
TWIST 9:
· Direction: Erin agrees to sneak off to Mexico with Jay without telling the FBI.
· Twist: Erin changes her mind and agrees to be bait for the FBI without telling Jay.
Life Threatening 14: After learning it’s a fake, Erin agrees to be wired and tracked by the police as bait to catch the traffickers.
TWIST 10:
· Direction: Erin is being tracked by the FBI and will lead them to Holly.
· Twist: The traffickers use a “shielded” limo and the limo garage.
Life Threatening 15: The traffickers outsmart the police by putting Erin in the back of a ‘shielded’ limo. The police tracking devices don’t work.
Villain’s Plan 5: Sell Holly and Erin on the dark web the highest bidder.
TWIST 11:
· Direction: Erin is directed to leave the limo for the photo shoot without any possessions wearing only a bikini.
· Twist: Erin hides her phone in her bikini bottom.
Life Threatening 16: Police kill two traffickers at the boat holding Erin and the other abducted women, but not Holly.
Life Threatening 17: Holly is smuggled to China and sold on the dark web.
TWIST 12:
· Direction: Jay wins Holly’s auction and goes to pick her up.
· Twist: The traffickers deliver a lookalike instead of Holly.
TURNING POINT 2: Using his and Holly’s rich father’s money, Jay wins the bid to buy Holly back from the traffickers. But the traffickers bait and switch delivery of Holly with some other lookalike abducted girl.
Life Threatening 18: The traffickers double-cross the highest bidder, Jay. They bait and switch Holly for a lookalike abducted girl.
Mystery 6: Where did the traffickers take Holly now?
Life Threatening 19: The traffickers sell and smuggle Holly to a Beijing brothel.
Life Threatening 20: Jay and a security expert from Holly’s dad’s company go into the brothel to try to rescue Holly.
TWIST 13:
· Direction: Jay and the Security Guy walk out of the brothel.
· Twist: Holly is disguised as the Security Guy and escapes.
CLIMAX: Jay and Holly’s father’s security team pull a bait and switch on the Beijing Brothel to save Holly. Holly flies back to America, but Chinese police arrest Jay for sex trafficking her.
TWIST 14:
· Direction: Rescued from traffickers, Holly is going to fly home with Jay.
· Twist: Chinese police arrest Jay for trafficking Holly.
Mystery 7: How will Jay get out of Chinese prison?
RESOLUTION: With the FBI’s help, the Chinese release Jay and he flies to vacation in Hawaii.
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1. ASSIGNMENT #9 – TWISTS
2. What I learned from this assignment is that as I write, many twists are already “hiding in there,” but they have to be drawn out and elevated to be effective.
VILLAIN’S EVIL PLAN: Lindsey plans to use Sage in her “research” and to attract wealthy creatives with mental illness to her center. Lindsey learns Sage stands to get a 7-figure book and movie deal and wants to position herself to access that money.
*OPENING: Sage working on her graphic novel. Manic. Losing her grip on reality.
SAGE’S SECRET: (SET-UP) Sage is seriously mentally ill.
SAGE’S MYSTERY: Why does Sage behave as she does?
SAGE’S EVENTS:
1. Sage’s mania.
2. Sage tells Carol she is taking her medication. We believe her.
3. Shares delusional beliefs with Carol. Carol observes Sage’s obsessive mania.
4. Sage flushes something down the toilet (or hides something).
PLOT TWIST: Sage has been lying to her mother about taking her medication.
POTENTIAL DANGERS:
1. Sage’s vulnerable state of mind colors every decision she makes.
VILLAIN’S SECRET A: J.J.’s wife learns that 1: Sage’s mother has conservatorship and 2: Sage stands to get a 7-figure book and movie deal from her graphic novel.
MYSTERY A: Who is J.J.’s wife? Is J.J. involved?
EVENTS A:
1. Phone call between J.J. and his wife sets up the motive and sets the plan in motion. The conversation is ambiguous.
PLOT TWIST A: Though the conversation doesn’t reveal it, we suspect J.J. and his wife may be involved in a ploy.
POTENTIAL DANGERS A:
1. Someone out for money and power is capable of anything, even murder.
2. Sage is at risk to lose everything, even her life.
3. Sage’s mother, Carol, is in danger too.
*INCITING INCIDENT: Lindsey stalks Sage at the Boardwalk, meets her, convinces Sage she’s being followed, and lures Sage away.
VILLAIN’S SECRET B: Lindsey plans to use Sage in her “research” and to attract wealthy creatives with mental illness to her center.
MYSTERY B: Why did Lindsey befriend Sage at the Boardwalk?
EVENTS B:
1. Lindsey stalked the boardwalk ride and waited for Sage.
2. Two shadowy men follow Sage on the Boardwalk.
3. Lindsey appears seemingly out of nowhere.
4. Lindsey convinces Sage she’s being followed and helps her elude the shadowy men.
POTENTIAL DANGERS B:
1. Sage’s mental health is getting worse.
2. Sage is susceptible to Lindsey’s manipulation.
TWIST B: We believe Lindsey is helping Sage but Lindsey is manipulating her.
VILLAIN’S SECRET C: Separate Sage from her mother so she is isolated and vulnerable. Take her to the treatment facility and lock her up.
MYSTERY C: Where’s my mother? Where’s my daughter?
EVENTS C:
1. Sage is distressed that Carol may be dead, but fears the police won’t believe her.
2. With nowhere else to go, Sage goes with Lindsey.
3. Carol discovers Sage is missing and goes to the police.
4. The police dismiss Carol’s concerns while Sage is in danger.
POTENTIAL DANGERS C:
1. Distressed by Carol’s disappearance, Sage exhibits poor judgment, makes poor decisions.
2. Lindsey sets up a ruse to make Sage believe it is her idea to go with Lindsey.
2. Without Carol, Sage has no allies so relies on Lindsey.
3. Carol fears Sage has been kidnapped, but the police dismiss her concerns.
4. Carol must investigate, but a run-in with Lindsey could cost Carol her life.
TWIST C: We believe Sage is going to walk away from Lindsey after she learns her mother is missing. Instead, believing Lindsey is helping her, Sage asks to go with Lindsey.
*TURNING POINT 1 (call to action): Sage asks to go with Lindsey. They begin their journey.
VILLAIN’S SECRET D: Lindsey plans to use Sage in her research at the Center in Los Angeles. She needs to bring her there.
MYSTERY D: What is this place? Why am I here? Wait, what–you’re leaving me here?
POTENTIAL DANGERS D:
1. The inside of the Center is a simulation of Sage’s graphic novel. She doesn’t understand what is happening and why.
2. Lindsey drops Sage off and mentions Sven.
3. Sage is distressed at Lindsey’s leaving.
4. The security guard has handcuffs.
5. When Sage tries to leave, Beverly and Paul threaten her with hard restraints.
TWIST D: Lindsey takes Sage to the Center and leaves her there under Sage’s protests, revealing that she’s not Sage’s ally after all. Up to this point, we saw her as a friend.
*MIDPOINT: Sage believes she is living in her graphic novel — that she is their prophet. Sage sees/hears a popular rapper who has had a very public battle with mental illness. He’s in terrible shape, begging for help and at risk for suicide. Sage begins to suspect Lindsey is playing her. But are her suspicions just more paranoia and delusion?
VILLAIN’S SECRET E: Lindsey created a simulation of Sage’s graphic novel to plunge Sage further into her delusional state.
MYSTERY E: Is Sage really living in her graphic novel?
EVENTS E:
1. Sage faces her graphic novel villain, Sven, who tries to force her to rewrite the outcome of the battle in her novel.
2. Sven has Sage tased by his thuggish guards, brutalized.
3. Sage finds the “Portal to Hell” from her graphic novel.
4. Sage sees Sven after he’s dumped something into the portal.
TWIST E: The “Portal to Hell” is actually an incinerator. Sven may be disposing of victims.
VILLAIN’ SECRET F: Staffers fear for their safety and careers, so they play along with Lindsey’s ruse to make Sage believe she is living inside her graphic novel.
MYSTERY F: Are the staff from inside the graphic novel, or are they role-playing?
1. Sage begins asking questions that can get her killed.
2. As Sage’s therapist, Diana is a key player in this game.
TWIST F: Diana had played along with Lindsey’s drama plan, but she realizes it’s sinister and unethical and sneaks medication to Sage.
POTENTIAL DANGERS F:
1. People are at risk for being murdered to cover for Lindsey’s plans, including Sage.
*TURNING POINT 2: Sage sees Lindsey and Sven in a romantic moment. Sage finds Diana dead. Trey has hung himself. She’s terrified she’ll be next. Lindsey tells Sage her mother has been found, dead. Sage is now at the height of desperation.
VILLAIN’S SECRET G: Lindsey is the real villain, not graphic novel villain Sven. They killed Diana. We pursue the obvious, Sven’s graphic novel plan and his villain role, throughout the movie until we learn Lindsey is behind the whole thing.
MYSTERY G: Who is Lindsey? Who is Sven? Is J.J. involved?
EVENTS G:
1. Sage spies on them.
2. Sage breaks into Sven’s office.
2. Sage finds her phone, tries to contact her mother but it goes to voicemail.
3. Sage finds a gun in Sven’s desk drawer.
4. J.J. comes to the Center to investigate his suspicions that his wife, Lindsey, is having an affair with someone she works with.
5. Beverly and Paul don’t allow J.J. access, citing patient confidentiality.
6. Lindsey does a change of clothes and meets J.J. outside.
7. Sage sees them outside talking. Lindsey is in a lab coat.
TWIST G: Lindsey from the boardwalk is actually the psychiatrist who runs the Center.
POTENTIAL DANGERS G:
1. Lindsey will kill to keep her affair secret. Sage has seen them together.
2. If her affair with Sven is found out, J.J. may cut Lindsey off from her lavish lifestyle by divorcing her or putting her in prison. Lindsey’s now at her apex of desperation.
3. Sage is locked away with no one to help her.
4. Sage is desperate to get away can’t.
*CLIMAX: Sage escapes the building, but Lindsey intercepts her, knocks her out, and drags her back to the Center. J.J. sneaks into the Center. Sven battles with J.J. and almost kills him. Sage kills Lindsey.
*RESOLUTION: Carol has found out where Sage is. The L.A.P.D. arrive. Carol and Sage reunite and go home.
Sage tries to draw but is uninspired, her affect flat. She looks at herself in the bathroom mirror, takes a pill from a bottle, raises it to her lips. Smash to black as we hear the toilet flush.
We’re led to believe that after Sage is safe at her with her mother, that she’ll be compliant with her medication and control her psychiatric symptoms.
TWIST: Despite her ordeal, Sage still believes that her medication to control her psychosis blunts her affect and kills her creativity and secretly disposes of her meds.
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This reply was modified 4 years, 1 month ago by Kim Jaspers.
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K. MENON ASSIGNMENT 9
What I learned doing this assignment is that as you figure out the twists and turns, more and more details of your narrative begin to emerge—at least a “first draft outline” as it were.
PROLOGUE
Mystery/Intrigue: Who are the killers and the victims?
Wahid and Wong visit a man who has stolen almost $50 million from them and forces him to electronically return some of the stolen funds and then kills him and his family OR kidnaps his daughters to be sold in the international sex trade?
ACT ONE
1. Asha wakes up and discovers David has not been home all night.
2. David is woken up as he sleeps on a park bench in Central Park/outer boro park by two punks who demand all his money.
TWIST 1: A random mugging goes wrong because David has a “street brawler’s” ability to get out of fights…
DAVID injures/kills them with a taser or other weapon and then quietly takes an almost deserted subway into Manhattan.
3. Asha settles her daughter in front of her remote learning computer.
4. Mystery/Suspense: Why is someone surveilling DAVID at his office
When David nears his office he spots a man with a camera pointed at his building seated in a car—the only car parked on a deserted street at 9.30 am—across from his building.
2<sup>nd</sup> TWIST: David turns the table on the surveillance
DAVID pays a wino to sneak up to the car and pee thru the passenger side window, causing the driver to get out and chase him. Another wino that David has paid steals the camera and brings it to David who slides into his office building.
5. DAVID reviews the shots in the camera which includes crime scene photos (described in the PROLOGUE). [DAVID appears to recognize the victims]
Intrigue: A rabid robocall.
6. Asha settles into her work space at home.
The call is specifically directed to DAVID and giving him a couple of choices as to how to save himself like “if you want to return the money in full you stole press 1, if you want to discuss a payment plan, press 2, if you arrange for a quick exit strategy for yourself press 3; if you want to include your family in the exit strategy, press 4.”
Suspense: David evades the Feds surveilling him
7. David sees the cameraman is back across the street but is now trying to take pix with his phone! He exits the building through a back entrance but is spotted by two agents in a passing car. He leads a chase cutting through a couple of alleys between two streets
TWIST 3: The pursuers appear to outwit David
The pursuing car is able to go down the alleys as there are almost no pedestrians.
TWIST 4: But David is able to turn the tables on the pursuers by hopping into a major subway interchange.
DAVID hops into a subway entrance which accesses the E, the 6 and the R lines so the agent chasing him is from IDAHO and doesn’t know all the lines so is unable to get coverage of all stations on each line to catch up with DAVID.
INTRIGUE:
8. WAHID & WONG are at eating a big breakfast in Wahid’s hotel room. [while WONG prepares a robocall message directed at DAVid]
Mystery: Are there unseen figures providing cover to the Villains?
Wahid receives a call on his cell from “the Big Boss” giving him further instructions. The “Big Boss” is visiting Washington to secretly play golf with the Big Cheese of the U.S. to seek his help in returning the Big Boss to power in Malaysia.
ACT TWO
MYSTERY: WHY DID DAVID FLY TO O”HARE DID HE RETURN & IS HIS BUSINESS FOLDING?
9. Asha calls David’s assistant Maria, also working from home to ask if she knows where David is. MARIA tells her David got an emailed tix to O’Hare for 2 nights ago with a return the following night. Did he go or come back? Neither can reach him by phone. MARIA tell Asha she doesn’t understand what is going on with David’s business. He only appears to have two or three small clients and she is sure the business is running at a loss after a few offshore clients left him.
10. Two goons show up at WAHID’s room as per the phone call from the Big Boss. They ask for instructions. They also say the BIG BOSS has told them that WAHID will get them a room at the hotel. WAHID IS NOT PLEASED.
INTRIGUE: ASHA DISCOVERS DAVID HAS A (BUSINESS) RELATIONSHIP WITH WAHID WHO SHE INTRODUCED TO DAVID MORE THAN FIVE YEARS AGO.
11. MARIA tells Asha his electronic calender notes a 10.00 am appointment with a Tan Sri Wahid and a Mr. Wong but not where they are meeting. [MARIA who is also from Malaysia, recognizes Wahid as Malaysian?].
Asha admits she knows Wahid… and recalls she introduced David to Wahid in 2009 but
But she did not realize they were still in touch and why, as DAVID has never mentioned him subsequently. She asks Maria to call her if she hears from David or from WAHID
SUSPENSE: ARE THE FEDS MOVING IN ON DAVID?
12. Two Federal agents enter David’s office. One checks through drawers, closets, the waste baskets, while the other tries the computer.
TWIST 4: David’s side piece, with consequences.
13. David enter a large, high-end apartment. A pregnant [Asian/Hispanic/anglo?} woman comes out of a kitchen and embraces David.
INTRIGUE: DAVID HAS BACKUP PLANS
David opens a secret safe/hiding place and collects passports, guns and money. He asks the woman about money and she shows him a large backpack stuffed with hundreds.
[NOTE: At what point does WAHID come to know that DAVID’S wife is ASHA, his former lover]
SUSPENSE: Could the FEDS and Wahid’s group end up shooting each ther nd upl
14. The 2 feds searching David’s office are suddenly beset by Wahid & Wong and their two goons with drawn guns pointing at each other and shouting loudly.
TWIST 5: The Feds have a face-off with Wahid and his goons, but find they have much in common!
WAHID claims that he and his goons work for Special Branch of the Malaysian Police and are trying to recover stolen money. Both parties realize that each of their bosses are friends and golfing buddies, and that Wahid and Wong may actually have received unofficial authorization to conduct the hunt for David in the US. They agree to a limited cooperation.
15. ASHA looks in on her daughter who is working hard on some math problems. She tells her daughter she is running to the market for dinner items and the dry cleaners.
16. 2 feds knock on Maria’s door. She answers the and the feds introduce themselves and ask her if she knows where David is? She says no, and lets them into the house to talk.
INTRIGUE: Collaboration between the Feds and WAHID’s group deepens.
The FEDS share their info about Maria with Wahid.
TWIST 6: Wahid devises a back door plan to get to DAVID
17. First, his goons kill Maria so she can’t finger him in the future. He defends the action to the Feds by saying “what do you care, she is a “pondan” (a transvestite) and an illegal anyway, she just came to America to get transgender surgery! NOTE: This should include a chase scene w. Maria trying to escape her fate…
Second: Wong and 2 of his minions knock on Asha’s door which is opened by Asha’s daughter. They kidnap her.
18. Asha finds her daughter is gone. She calls the police. The take notes but they seem to feel she is probably with David, probably playing hooky from remote learning!
INTRIGUE/SUSPENSE: WAHID UPS THE ANTE.
19. Wahid calls David through WhatsApp as David is sharing some coke with his girlfriend when the phone rings. Wahid tells him that he is holding David’s daughter and he better pay back the money he has stolen from the Big Boss and do it quick because his daughter is being held in a cage next to cage where there is a sleeping Burmese python that may wake up and realize it’s hungry—and it can slip through the bars of the cage his daughter is in. [may include a flashback sequence which reveals how Wahid and David developed a relationship when Wahid took David python hunting in Malaysia…]
TWIST 7: DAVID LEAVES ASHA HOLDING THE BAG!
20. David calls Asha and tells her about their daughter. DAVID confesses to a pregnant girlfriend so that’s why he has to flee with her tho he feels bad about their daughter in Wahid’s hands.
TWIST 8:
ASHA tells DAVID that she used to be WAHID’ former lover until just before she met DAVID. So maybe it’s better if she try to resolve this with WAHID. She asks if he arrange a meeting for her Wahid or tell her how to reach Wahid.
TWIST 9:
DAVID TELS ASHA where he’s hiddens guns and money in the house. He reminds her that when they first came to the US he taught her how to drive and how to shoot. He gives her a quick brush-up lesson on how to shoot on their facetime call.
TWIST 10:
ASHA finds along with guns and ammo, the SWISS numbered accounts where presumably DAVID’S loot is stashed. .
David also tells Asha he will arrange for his lawyer, David Hollis to call WAHID and arrange a meeting for ASHA.
SUPENSE: DAVID avoids capture when trying to contact his lawyer.
21. DAVID recklessly maneuvers a golf cart through the woods surrounding the course at the highest rate of speed the cart can managed.. He is being followed by a pair of guys on another cart. They make it through the woods behind him but as they come out of the trees, they are unaware there is a pond immediately ahead, so they drive right into it. The cart comes to a sudden stop in the mud of the pond, and flips over, trapping the 2 men under water so they drown. David watches this from just beyond the trees, then proceeds on his way to where David’s lawyer David Hollis is playing golf, next to a small pond. Hollis tells him to give his number to whoever’s running his pursuers. Hollis feels confident he can arrange a deal. But he tells DAVID that his rates are higher for high risk work.
22. WAHID gets a call from Hollis and agrees to meet ASHA at the golf course pond the next night.
23. DAVID and his girlfriend are fleeing… they head South to Mexico… or Puerto Rico. [But they are killed –run off the road—somewhere in the Blue ridge Mountains?– by Wahids men]
24. Night meeting between ASHA and WAHID at the golf course [after the golf cart chase described above. WAHID explains that DAVID has been embezzling their ill-gotten gains, which are not acceptable. And he blames ASHA for intitially introducing DAVID to him just before she resigned. He demands that ASHA persuade DAVID to return as much of the money and assets as he has diverted or otherwise help him to catch David.
25. ASHA has the numbered Swiss accounts where David has been stashing the diverted fund—
26. W&W agree to give Asha 24 hours to transfer the money to accounts he controls (he gives her the information) or her daughter will permanently disappear.
27. Just as they appear to have reached agreement the FEDS stumble on the group and a wild shoot out emerges. Asha dives into the pond while the FEDS and W&W are all killed.
28. ASHA searches W&W’s bodies and discovers where the kids is being held. She goes there by herself, searches the premises and finds her daughter. All is Well.
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Sandra’s Twists and Turns
What I learned is that adding twists and turns strategically and evenly paced helps keep the plot stay unpredictable and interesting.
TWIST 1 (new consequences emerge)
Direction: A Shaman comes to the house to try to quell the evil spirit.
Twist: The attempt doesn’t work and the Shaman does damage to the home in the process.
TWIST 2(it just got more dangerous)
Direction: Max thinks he sees someone with a gun in his house.
Twist: He shoots into the darkness and narrowly misses Celine.
TWIST 3 (lost their resources)
Direction: Max wants to pull his money out of Bitcoin.
Twist: Bitcoin crashes
TWIST 4 (A lie is uncovered)
Direction: Max attempts suicide.
Twist: Lilith confesses to her involvement with the cons and setups.
Sandra’s New Thriller Map with Twists
OPENING Creepy sounds coming from a museum object.
INCITING INCIDENT
Max purchases a rare manuscript that has a history of being cursed.
Life Threatening 1
Is the manuscript really cursed?
Villain’s Plan 1
His daughter discovers he has purchased the piece and starts thinking of how to manipulate him in order to get money from him
Mystery 1 Why is music playing without anyone near the piano?
Villain’s Plan 2
She pretends to offer help by enlisting a Shaman to quell the curse.
TWIST 1 (new consequences emerge)
Direction: A Shaman comes to the house to try to quell the evil spirit.
Twist: The attempt doesn’t work and the Shaman does damage to the home in the process.
Life Threatening 3
Her friend suggests more life-threatening tactics to scare him further – now his physical life is in danger.
Mystery 2 How did the words “Satan Rules” get on the manuscript?
TWIST 2 (it just got more dangerous)
Direction: Max thinks he sees someone with a gun in his house.
Twist: He shoots into the darkness and narrowly misses Celine.
Life Threatening 4
Now Max thinks he is being taunted by Satan.
TURNING POINT
Max’s wife dies of apparently natural causes.
Life Threatening 5
Max is now more vulnerable. His daughter offers to move in with him to keep him company.
Mystery 3: Why is Maxim waking up to see the shadow of a figure claiming to be a dead poet?
Life Threatening 7
Now she has more control over the house and his mental state.
Villain’s Plan 3
She starts planting various devices around the house to scare Max.
Life Threatening 8
Max thinks he is going crazy but doesn’t know who to turn to.
Mystery 4: How did the fire start when the Shaman was trying to quell the spirit?
TWIST 3 (lost their resources)
Direction: Max wants to pull his money out of Bitcoin.
Twist: Bitcoin crashes
Life Threatening 9
Max attempts suicide.
TWIST 4 (A lie is uncovered)
Direction: Lilith feels responsible for her father’s demise and feels guilty.
Twist: Lilith confesses to her involvement with the cons and setups.
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