• 30 Day Screenplay 12

  Lesson 28

  Posted by cheryl croasmun on January 15, 2023 at 5:08 am

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  February 28, 2023 at 1:15 am

  Tita’s Chronological Edit…

  What I learned from all these assignments up until 28:

  I won’t get to this chronological level this week. I w<font face=”inherit”>ill do it after the first draft script has not just been revised.Maybe next month. First I want to go through the full template with a slightly different focus and maybe a different character as </font>protagonist<font face=”inherit”>.*</font>

  When ready, SU/Hal revision template that will guide me:

  1. Improve the flow.

  c Are scenes out of order? are there confusing logic jumps? or don’t move the story forward? Exclude some scenes? Add one to flow better?

  2. Improve the clarity.

  c Descriptions: will reader we see exactly what you have planned for us.

  c Story: So clear reader never has to slow down to figure out what is happening? reader is living in the moment of what is happening in the story.

  If anything is unclear, just ask, “What am I trying to accomplish here?” Many times, confusing scenes just mean you hadn’t gotten clear on your purpose in the beginning. That’s easily solve

  3. Improve the description.

  Make improvements to the description as you read. Use these three strategies:

  A) Delete anything that is unnecessary.

  B) Find shorter ways to write description.

  C) Use stronger nouns and verbs where you can.

  4. Improve the dialogue.

  c As you read, identify any dialogue that you absolutely love. Keep that!

  c Then, notice any dialogue that just feels wrong. Focus on solving that dialogue first. With each line you want to improve, ask, “What would this character say here?” Discover dialogue that will be unique to this character. You don’t want your lead characters talking just like everyone else.

  Try ending the scenes with a powerful line. The character might ask a question that takes us into another scene or they might sum up what just happened or they might make a threat. There are many ways to have the scene end with powerful dialogue. Just try on a few.

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  <font face=”inherit”>* I also learned that when I copy/paste from my </font>Word doc here, the reason some of the text doesn’t show up: If I have copied/pasted the assignment onto Word and then completed the assignment by typing under the questions or over the instructions, there are programming codes hidden that do not allow copying here… unless I copy small segments from my Word doc so they are not connected to the original format.

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