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Week 3 Day 4 – Visual Reveals — BREAKING BAD
1. Please watch this scene and provide your insights into what makes this scene great from a writing perspective.
2. Read the other writers comments and make notes of how you will use reveals in your script.
3. Rethink or create a Visual Reveal scene for your script using your new insights and rewrite the scene.
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WATCH 1ST FOR: BASIC SCENE COMPONENTS — SCENE ARC, SITUATION, CONFLICT, ENTERTAINMENT VALUE, MOVING THE STORY FORWARD, AND SETUP/PAYOFFS.
– I had to look at the script to figure out what’s going on. What did the scene reveal (without that) — pants flying, an RV recklessly going on a road. Man only in underpants wearing a gas mask driving, passenger in gas mask slumped beside him (why is he only in undies??), some drunk or dead guys in back. Lots of junk rumbling around inside (not sure what it is). RV crashes, man gets out, distressed, seems sick (? from something dangerous or poisonous in the RV ??). Sirens — police are after him. Stress-thinks what to do. Puts on a shirt (slumped passenger in view). Gets a gun from dead man, a his wallet and a recorder. Gets out again and start his confession into the camcorder.
WATCH 2ND FOR:
WHAT MAKES THIS SCENE GREAT?
– very suspenseful, lots of mystery (what’s going on), police sirens amp it up. Desperate man, even though he looks like a regular middle-aged joe.
HOW 9 PIECES OF NEW INFO ARE REVEALED.
– as above. All without dialogue. Dirt road desert wilderness, reckless RV (escape), driver (regular joe), in undies (??), passenger out (drugged??), dead bodies (crime), sirens (they are after him), puts on glasses, later shirt (seems to be a decent guy), takes a gun (he’s desperate & sick — will he shoot the police, will he commit suicide?). Junk in the RV — will it explode or be evidence — seems to be dangerous?
HOW EACH REVEAL IS DEMANDED.
– rushing RV (why) — there seems to be a murder and illegal activity (bodies, junk, gas masks, police sirens)
HOW SOME REVEALS ANSWER QUESTIONS AND CREATE QUESTIONS AT THE SAME TIME.
Knowing a bit about the story, I think the RV is a drug lab, but that’s not clear to me from this scene.
WHAT MAKES THIS SCENE GREAT FROM A WRITING PERSPECTIVE:
– Lots of action and visuals, plus sirens — it’s a chase scene and there’s crime, which means good and bad guys. CONTRADICTIONS, ? fish out of water? : We wonder if the man is good (looks like a good type) or bad (situation indicates he’s in big trouble).
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