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Week 2 Day 1: Character Intros That Sell Actors — LOST intro of Jack.
1. Please watch this character intro scene and provide your insights into what makes them great from a writing perspective.
2. Read the other writers insights and make notes of how you will improve your character intros.
3. Rethink your Character Intro scene using your new insights and rewrite the scene. T
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Jack appears unscathed in a white shirt, disoriented. Where is he? As he literally walks into the scene we start to hear screams. Why? He passes people in distress, then the plane appears in view. We now learn that it’s a plane crash. Jack spots a man trapped underneath part of the wrecked plane. He calls for help lifting it to free the trapped man, showing us that he is a leader. He takes off his tie to stop bleeding. We learn that he is a doctor. A man gets sucked into the engine. It explodes. He tells people to stay away from the plane. He comforts a woman in labor. He has a bedside manner. He tells Garcia to move the woman in labor away from the fumes. Garcia asks his name. Without Jack telling us anything about himself we’ve learned that he takes charge, is a doctor and has a name that we will look forward to hearing again..
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Jack starts out unsure, nearly in shock at the carnage around him. He doesn’t know what to do until he sees a
man calling for help stuck underneath the wreckage with an engine about to
blow. That’s when Jack’s Super Hero kicks
in. He suddenly becomes Jack the Unsure
to Jack the Leader, directing people on what to do, where to go, how to
help. When the pregnant woman is spotted
he rushes into action, comforting her, getting more help and directing her what
to do. We all want to be in an emergency
with someone like Jack. He’s courageous,
brave, compassionate, and a real leader.
We see who he really is when he sees people in distress and suffering. -
Jack is seemingly disoriented, he is wearing a business-suit, and has bruises on his face. The intimidating howling of an airline jet is mixed with screams of people in distress. He frantically moves around and it is unclear if he is looking for something or someone in the Armageddon of a plane-crash or if he is just “looking for himself” in the chaos. Mid-scene the call of a man trapped under a big piece of the airline pulls him into action. There we get some important information about his character. Not only does he rush to help a fellow passenger but he also commands others to join his efforts. Helping actually makes him gain back his identity, his strength. When he also helps a pregnant woman, it becomes clear that he is a leader, someone, who in times of extreme challenges will rise to his full power. His selflessness and courage makes him someone, one wants to have on his team. When(after Jack warning other) the still operational engine explodes, close to which he had just saved a mans life, we know, that he will become an important character in the story. This is underlined with the music dramatically stopping after the heavy guy yells: What’s your name? and he answers: Jack. Now at the end of his heroic actions he receives a Name and this is the end of the scene: A name to remember.
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