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Lesson 10
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Jeffrey Glatz Fascinating Scene Outline
My Vision: To create commercial studio size films that move people. To create characters that can live forever and bring electrifying memories to those that have watched one of my films.
What I learned from doing this assignment – Starting to bring it all together. Both lesson 9 and 10 were very important to try and ensure all scenes stand on their own and enhance the over story.
The element of Wind is layered subtlety throughout the story so far, from breezes to the swishes of the shinai, to the plane flying through the clouds, to the boy moving elegantly through the air, to a rapidly spreading fire on a television in the background of the restaurant bar.
Picture more DaVinci Code meets Mission Impossible/recent Bond films look versus Marvel world.
OPEN –
Scene Sequence Arc (Amazon Jungle): Peaceful village is attacked out of nowhere. Many are killed, but a child escapes carrying a key.
1. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE VILLAGE – DAY (TWENTY YEARS AGO)
Deep in the Amazon a tribe of warriors, hidden among the trees, enjoy a peaceful day twenty (20) years ago.
Beginning: (more interesting setting) A young woman goes for a morning run, but unlike our runs, she dances among the treetops playing with the monkeys as she moves with grace.
Middle: (Intrigue/Suspense) A noise is heard in the distance, imperceptible to the human ear, but she like the monkeys stops and takes notice
End: (Major Twist) Immediately, an army of men, also moving among the trees, is upon her and cuts her down as they pass.
2. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE – DAY (TWENTY YEARS AGO)
Beginning: (Suspense) In the village among the trees, the tribe perceives the change in the air. Animals shriek and scurry.
Middle: (Mystery) The Queen motions to one of her closest guards to approach her.
End: (Intrigue) She places her baby in the guard, Diana’s, arms and sends her into the forest to protect the child with her life.
3. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE – DAY (TWENTY YEARS AGO)
Beginning: (Surprise) The army of men, dressed in exo-skeleton armor, are upon the tribe in a flash of movement.
Middle: (Reveal) A tremendous battle ensues. Some of the warriors move faster than some of the others and dance among the trees as they fight with the invaders.
End: (Suspense) Many of the tribe are killed instantly as the surprise was too great.
4. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE – DAY (TWENTY YEARS AGO)
Beginning: (Uncertainty) In the distance, Diana, stops atop a tree with the child in her arms
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) She watches as her village and family are destroyed.
Ending: (Mystery) Looks into the sweet face of the Child.
5. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE VILLAGE CENTER – DAY (TWENTY YEARS AGO)
Beginning: (Suspense) As the Queen and a few of her guards are surrounded in the center of the village, preparing for a final stand, a tall Asian man drops from the trees above, to land in front of her. He is the King of the other Wind tribe and commands respect among everyone, including the Queens guards which take a step back, but still stand at the ready.
Middle: (Intrigue) The King, Ronin, slings his machine gun over his shoulder and unsheathes his sword. He moves to speak with the Queen and demands she hand over the “key.” She refuses and claims she does not have the key and has not heard of its whereabouts for over 50 years (making the 30 something Queen actually about 75 years old).
Ronin tells her that he knows she is protecting the Key and that she must relinquish the Key to him or pay with her life. The Queen is entrusted to protect the key and to help maintain the balance among all the 4 elements, Earth, Wind, Fire and Water, so that the humans can survive and so no one group of descendants becomes too powerful and destroys the world. There must always be a balance among the 4 elements.
Ending: (Cliffhanger) Ronin realizes that she will not surrender the Key and an epic sword fight begins among the trees, two direct descendants of major gods of the highest level. They glide, jump, run and leap among the branches, swords striking all the time. He is too much for her and with a thrust to her stomach high in the trees; she falls crashing to the Amazon floor. Her guards surround her still body and are quickly struck down by Ronin. He stands above her, promising to spare her life for the Key, but she resists to the end. In his anger, he strikes her dead. He sends his soldiers out to search the village among the trees in search of the Key. Ronin enters the Queen’s hut and notices a crib woven in reeds…
6. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE VILLAGE – DAY (TWENTY YEARS AGO)
Beginning: (Internal Dilemma) High in the treetops, Diana turns with a tear.
Middle: (Uncertainty) She streaks out among the trees.
Ending: (Mystery) Away from the danger.
RUN TITLE
ACT 1
7. INT. CLASSROOM – DAY (PRESENT DAY)
Twenty years later,
A university classroom at Columbia in New York City. It is an advanced applied mathematical theory class featuring the best and the brightest.
Beginning: (Interesting Setting) A university classroom at Columbia in New York City. It is an advanced applied mathematical theory class featuring the best and the brightest.
Middle: (Mystery) Among the mostly nerdy looking students of about 20, we see a beautiful girl intently paying attention to her professor.
Ending: (Intrigue) Off to the side we notice another, “better looking” student, handsome, but not too good-looking, his attention is not as focused on the professor as it seems to be on the entire room and its surroundings.
8. INT. SWISS ESTATE – DAY
In a large richly paneled room, very much the feel of a room from Versailles, we see the villain, Ronin, a little older looking, but not much even though it has been 20 years. On one wall of the enormous room is an entire array of state of the art computer displays. A computer search is underway for a 20-year-old girl.
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting) In a large richly paneled room, very much the feel of a room from Versailles, we see the villain, Ronin, a little older looking, but not much even though it has been 20 years. He commands respect. On one wall of the enormous room is an entire array of state of the art computer displays.
Middle: (Mystery) Images are continually flashing up all over numerous displays. Different countries are seen popping up and disappearing with the images of young 20 something girls. A computer search is underway for a 20-year-old girl. In the room are a dozen or so high-tech workstations with people working intently on their keyboards.
Ending: (Suspense) Ronin sits behind a large desk at the end of the room going over images that are displayed on his desktop, that is actually one large computer display, a mirror of the large wall. A handsome boy, but with a sinister trait, walks up to Ronin, “Hello, Father,” says the boy, Ando. Off to the side, one of the computer techs shouts out that they may have found “another one.” The large wall and desktop are immediately filled with a picture of our girl from the classroom. Ronin, turns to his son, “Another possibility, leave at once and keep me informed.” Ando, “Of course Father, but at some point, we need to try something new, we’ve been searching like this for years.”
9. EXT. COLUMBIA UNIVERSITY HALL – DAY
Beginning: (Intrigue) As the class is letting out, the professor asks the girl to stop by his desk.
Middle: (Uncertainty) “Chris (short for Christina), can you work on this equation over the weekend and let me know your thoughts on Monday?”
Ending: (Mystery) The other “handsome” boy gathers his laptop and belongings and exits before her.
10. EXT. PRIVATE AIRSTRIP – SWISS ALPS – DAY
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) Private Plane waits on a runway high in the Swiss Alps. Large mountains appearing like the Alps are seen in the background, giving us a sense that their estate is located in Europe.
Middle: (Suspense) The sinister boy, Ando, arrives in a string of black Range Rovers at a private airstrip with six additional mercenary looking guys.
Ending: (Suspense) The mercenaries load the gear into the plane as Ando speaks with the Captain. The plane takes off into the Sky.
11. EXT. NEW YORK CENTRAL PARK – DAY
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting) It is late afternoon in Central Park and the crowds are out in force. Chris (Christina) walks through the park with a group of friends.
Middle: (Reveal) One boy in particular, is doing amazing feats of gymnastics mixed with what looks like martial arts, as he jumps, twists, and flips from different resting and still positions. Chris does a double take as she recognizes the boy from her class.
Ending: (Internal Dilemma) She walks over with her friends to check him out, but he does not take any special notice of her or her friends. People drop dollars bills into a hat on the ground. She waves hello, he gives her an indifferent look, and she moves on.
12. INT. PRIVATE PLANE – NIGHT
Beginning: (Intrigue) On the plane, Ando and his men are going over Chris’ bio and discussing different strategies for where they may be able to snatch her.
Middle: (Reveal) We learn a little more about Chris’ life, but not too much. We learn that she lives on Central Park West with her mother and father, no siblings; her dad is the curator for the Natural History Museum and that she is attending Columbia.
Ending: (Suspense) Her Facebook page fills the computer screen.
13. INT. NYC DOJO – LATE AFTERNOON
Beginning: (More interesting Setting, Mystery) In an old dojo, we hear the wood strikes of the shinai hitting each other in rapid succession. Two combatants square off in the dimly lit room.
Middle: (Mystery) Polished wood floors and different weapons hang on the walls. The two fight quickly, their movements seem much quicker than is normal for even the best masters. After a few minutes of intense combat, the two square off, bow to one another and remove their men helmets. Chris is one of them, along with an older Japanese gentleman, her sensei. He gives her some tips, some praise, but also some critique as they don their helmets and begin again.
Ending: (Reveal) Another woman, dressed in Japanese garb, stands with her attention solely on the match in front of her. It appears to be a little older version of the woman we saw saving the baby deep in the Amazon. After this next round of sparring is over, the woman, Diana walks up and hugs Chris and tells her that they will be late for their dinner with Chris’ parents. Chris does not really care, as she knows her parents are just trying to set her up with some rich patrons son.
14. EXT. PRIVATE AIRSTRIP – NJ – EARLY EVENING
Beginning: (Suspense) Ando’s plane arrives at another private airfield outside of New York City.
Middle: (Suspense) More mercenary types are there to greet Ando and his men.
Ending: (Suspense) They drive off with the NYC skyline in the backdrop.
15. INT. NYC RESTAURANT – NIGHT
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) Chris and Diana arrive at the hip and trendy NYC restaurant.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) They are beautiful enough to look elegant in any environment, but as we arrive at the table, we can separate Chris’ parents from the others at the table. Her parents are distinguished and handsome, but definitely more Saville Row than the other couple which have the feel of new money investment banker types. Their son, while very good-looking, appears a little too slick and more concerned with himself than others. Works out just a little too much, a little full of himself. Chris and Diana join them at the table.
Ending: (Internal Dilemma) Chris trying to be civil, but clearly annoyed at having to sit through yet another of these dinners.
16. EXT. NYC RESTAURANT – NIGHT
Beginning: (Suspense) As the dinner ends much to Chris’ relief, the Wall Street family enters their town car, the valets hailing for a cab… both Chris and Diana instinctively look to the rooftop across the street.
Middle: (Suspense) They are in motion as a hail of assault rifle fire rains down upon the group, tearing apart the cars, street, windows, people and everything immediately surrounding Chris, Diana and her parents with military precision. Chris’ father is shot in the chest, her mother in the arm. They are pinned down, there is no avenue of escape. The gunfire is deafening. From the dark street, the boy from the classroom and park leaps above car roof tops, he runs a little quicker than a normal human would, crosses right through the carnage and grabs Chris’ parents, one with each arm and carries them from harm’s way. Chris notices all this but is concentrating all her energy on the threat and saving as many as she can.
The gunfire stops abruptly, two black Suburban’s come to a screeching halt in front of the restaurant. Men exit the vehicles quickly, weapons drawn, they wear state-of–the-art body armor with full armored and tinted helmets. Chris and Diana huddle behind the destroyed town car, the family inside dead and bloodied. Ando steps from one of the vehicles and shouts for, “Christina Wentworth, come with me and no more harm will come to anyone here!” Chris is clearly contemplating this, as she is more concerned for everyone else more than herself. But Diana, grabs her arm, “There is more to this than it appears.” Diana pulls back her long coat to reveal some of the throwing weapons we first saw in the Amazon. Chris is clearly just a little confused. Diana to Chris,” You have been training all your life for this…” With that, she leaps from behind the town car at a group of the assailants, throwing daggers as she flies through the air. She is immediately engaged with the mercenaries in hand to hand combat as she has moved too close to them for their automatic weapons to be of any use. Chris has not hesitated and is in the mix instantly fighting with all her skill. She is amazing, clearly superior to any of the soldiers, but there are so many… Ando has issued orders that no one must harm Chris. Their fight continues, Diana is losing, as the numbers are just too great. A small red dot illuminates on Diana’s chest, she looks at Chris as she is shot dead by a sniper on the building rooftop.
Ending: (Cliffhanger) Chris rushes to where Diana has fallen, but a screaming motorcycle flies through the debris, it is the boy, as he reaches out and grabs Chris as she is running to Diana and they are off down the street, Chris, screaming to stop. The boy, James, does not listen and races into the darkness.
The remaining mercenaries repel from the building roof to the street below and they all pile into the Suburban’s before any survivors can identify them.
17. EXT. NYC STREET – NIGHT
Beginning: (Suspense) Chris is fighting with James to stop and finally pries herself loose from his grasp and jumps off the flying motorcycle.
Middle: (Mystery) The motorcycle is doing at least 60, but she looks graceful in the air and hits the ground rolling and jumps to her feet yards down the road toward where James has now stopped. She stands, her clothes in tatters, but she is none the worse for wear other than a few cuts and scrapes. The full impact of what just happened is fully kicking in. She stands and stares at James, looks to her body and back to James.
Ending: (Major Twist) James tells her, “The Wentworth’s will be taken care of, but there is a lot you need to know…” “You mean my parents?” James answers, “No, your mother died 20 years ago in the Amazon, your father before that. The Wentworth’s were your guardians and raised you as their own, always trying to prepare you for your destiny, no, that sounds too cliché, responsibility would be a better way to put it.” Chris, “What are you talking about?” James, “I think someone else should tell you… come we have a long journey ahead of us.” He reaches for her hand gently.
18. INT. BULLET TRAIN – JAPAN – DAY
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) The bullet train in Japan speeds through the countryside like the wind. James and Chris sit together staring out the window.
Middle: (More interesting Setting) A cab lets them off at a gate in the mountains, a path up into the trees.
Ending: (Intrigue) The ancient symbol of the Element The Wind is more discernable carved into the stone… they sling their backpacks on and begin their journey up the mountain.
19. EXT. JAPAN – MOUNTAINS – AFTERNOON
Multiple small scenes of journey to Castle.
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting) In the distance we see a large Japanese castle built on a high ridge against the backdrop of the snowcapped mountains. At this time of year, the cherry blossoms are blooming and the entryway to this shrine is truly beautiful.
Middle: (Intrigue) There are a few monks about, but otherwise it is very peaceful. As they enter the grounds, the massive doors close silently behind them. An old, but straight-backed, chiseled and distinguished Japanese man in a plain white kimono bows to his guests. They bow back. The Japanese man speaks, “Welcome Christina, it is an honor to have you here, I trust your journey was comfortable.” Chris, “Yes, Master, but why was I brought here… my family… I have so many questions… the things I was able to do…” The man, “I am sure you do, but first some rest. James, will show you to your room.”
Ending: (Mystery) Chris turns to James, “You have been here before?” James nods, “Yes, I was raised here as was your enemy, but that comes later.” The master is Aiko, a “A Martial Arts Master, but also a Protector.”
20. INT. SWISS ESTATE – NIGHT
Beginning: (Suspense) Back at Ronin’s estate, he is furious with his son and men.
Middle: (Uncertainty) “How could you fail me? My own son, we must acquire the Key!” Ando, “It was not all a failure father, we now know she is the one, after all these years, we can now begin the War.” Ronin, “It is not as easy as that, she defeated you without even being aware of who she is and what she is capable of. She should never be underestimated, or failure will happen again.
Ending: (Suspense) I believe I know where she will go, but she will be well protected, we must plan this cautiously or we could lose it all and that is unacceptable. We are so close to everything…”
21. INT. JAPANESE CASTLE – NIGHT
Beginning: (Major Twist) Chris is taken before the Master and served tea by him. He begins to tell her of her life, who she is, what she represents and what she must do for mankind. “Christina, your story began thousands of years ago… all cultures worshipped multiple Gods, these “Gods” existed throughout the world, sometimes it was the same God, but called by a different name in a different culture… these Gods on occasion mated with a human mortal, and these children lived and thrived and had children of their own, and so on… You are the descendant of one of these Gods. You are actually a direct and the last descendant of Zeus… You are human, but more of a “Super” human.” Chris is listening intently, she finds it hard to fathom, but at the same time, it answers so many questions. Master, “This is why you have so many extraordinary abilities that you are only beginning to comprehend. You have been raised your whole life so that when you learned of this, you would not only understand the limitless possibilities, but also the burden you must bear. You are a descendant of the most powerful deity and as such will be called upon to keep our world in balance.”
Middle: (Reveal) Chris, “But who is after me and is willing to kill to get me?” Master, “That is Ronin, he is of your Tribe, the Wind. I will get into this in a moment… and he is looking for a Key – even I do not know what the Key is to – it is from the ancients, it is rumored to be a Key to becoming immortal, to being all powerful, a link to the original Gods, none of us know for sure.” Chris reaches under her cloak and for the first time we see her rubbing something on a worn leather strap around her neck, it is an ancient Key. Chris, “And are you a descendant?” Master, “No, I am a Protector, I, like my father and his father before him, have been entrusted by the Descendants to watch over all of you, a Grand Librarian of sorts, there are a couple of us around, and I will send you to another soon, he may know more about the Key.” James brought you here because he is a Descendant as well. Unlike you he was trained here from an early age and assigned to be your guardian. We all serve a function, we must always remember, not one Descendant is more important than another, all the Tribes must maintain order and balance, or an elemental shift can occur, and the world could be fundamentally changed forever. Of course, having just said that some, like you, are gifted beyond others. You must have noticed these things growing up – the obvious signs like your athletic abilities, your intelligence, but also your perception, your insight, your beauty, your trust, your self-confidence, your integrity and desire to protect. These make you uniquely qualified to play a bigger role when called upon. Your enemy, and he is your enemy, Ronin, is also gifted beyond many others, as he is a Descendant from Fujin, the Japanese God of the Wind. He may not be as powerful as you, but he has had a lifetime to understand his abilities, capabilities and limitations. You have not, so this makes him most dangerous.
Ending: (Intrigue) That’s enough for now, let’s sleep and begin again tomorrow.”
22. EXT. JAPANESE CASTLE – NIGHT
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) James is waiting for her outside and they take a walk through the cherry blossoms.
Middle: (Mystery) She digs for more information and asks him about himself.
Ending: (Reveal) He speaks of his life and some of the loneliness he has felt being a guardian, but also understands the responsibility.
23. INT. JAPANESE CASTLE – NIGHT
Beginning: (Surprise) During the night, the Master wakes Chris. James is up as well. “They are here.” I underestimated that they would be so bold, they must be very desperate.”
Middle: (Suspense) Just then, explosions begin to rock the building. Outside we see many black helicopters firing rockets into the compound. A massive decisive and destructive campaign has begun. The trio burst from room to room as the building collapses around them. They pick up weapons as they move, ancient Japanese katana, ninja gear as well, to new assault weapons.
Ending: (Suspense) The monks appear in Ninja outfits. They all move into the compound to combat the assailants.
24. EXT. JAPANESE CASTLE – NIGHT
In the sky above, mercenaries of the Wind dive out of planes and free fall toward the battle below, no parachutes, just armored gear as they fall silently toward Chris and the others below.
Beginning: (Uncertainty) In the sky above, mercenaries of the Wind dive out of planes and free fall toward the battle below, no parachutes, just armored gear as they fall silently toward Chris and the others below. At the last instant, they open their arms to spread their “wings” as they sail through the air toward those they wish to kill. They streak across the rooftops and land abruptly in front of Chris, the Master, James and the monks.
Middle: (Suspense) A mighty sword battle commences. It is awe-inspiring as these Descendants move against one another. The good guys are once again clearly outnumbered and begin to retreat toward the remains of the structure. Ronin, free falls from the helicopter, toying with gravity as he glides and rolls through the night sky. He lands on a treetop. Balances on one foot and effortlessly jumps to the ground.
Ending: (Major Twist) Upon seeing him, the Master motions for Chris and James to come to the well – “It is a 50 yard drop to the water below, then you must swim north for another 50 yards, and you will surface in a cave, from there follow the path out, you will know the right path.” James, “We cannot leave you Master.” Master, “You must, it is the greater good that matters here, take Christina to Franklin, he will have some thoughts. I will slow down Ronin.” Chris and James jump into the well.
25. INT. WELL – NIGHT
1st Turning Point – Chris and James are the only to escape.
They surface in a cavernous underground cavern. It is an ancient crypt; signs of the Elements are throughout…. Symbols and hieroglyphics of the Japanese Gods…
Beginning: (Suspense) They swim through the dark waters of the underground river.
Middle: (Mystery) They surface in a cavernous underground cavern. Light streaks from a small hole high above their heads.
Ending: (more interesting setting) It is an ancient crypt; signs of the Elements are throughout…. Symbols and hieroglyphics of the Japanese Gods… They grab some old torches and enter the tunnel leading from the cavern.
26. EXT. JAPANESE CASTLE – Night
Beginning: (Suspense) Ronin burns the Castle to the ground. (the element of Fire)
Middle: (Intrigue) He will stop at nothing to find the Key and destroy anyone one or thing in his path.
Ending: (Suspense) He is pulled up aboard a helicopter and takes off into the pitch black evening.
Act 2
27. EXT – TOKYO AIRPORT – DAY
28. INT. PRIVATE AIRPLANE – DAY
New Plan–
Beginning: (Intrigue) They arrive at Tokyo airport and board a plane owned by a large solar/energy company.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) Chris is torn and worried but begins to form a closer bond with James. Introducing possible beginning of a romance.
Ending: (Mystery) Chris and James head to England to meet and learn more about herself, her role, and the Key from a “Librarian” (Franklin, a keeper of the Descendants secrets). Begin to see the wealth of the Descendants.
29. INT. SWISS ESTATE – DAY
At the estate, the maps show a bigger picture of the Descendants support around the globe.
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) At the estate, the maps show a bigger picture of the Descendants support around the globe. Various Librarians are highlighted on the map. The have a hidden underground base, beneath estate, so hidden from world. Stealth Helicopters, aircraft take off from caves. Technology to keep them hidden from radar.
Middle: (Intrigue) Ronin continues the search for where Chris may go next. They believe England is where Chris will head next and get on their way.
Ending: (Suspense) Sends Ando off again, with better support this time, more Descendants on the team, not just mercs.
30. EXT – ENGLISH COUNTRY ESTATE – MORNING
Beginning: (More interesting setting) Chris and James arrive at English Country Estate and are greeted by Franklin and his two hounds
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) Hugs with a serious tone.
Ending: (Mystery) They move toward the home.
31. INT – ENGLISH COUNTRY ESTATE – MORNING
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting) Franklin welcomes them into a hidden lair beneath the estate.
Middle: (Reveal) He teaches Chris about the other tribes.
Ending: (Suspense) He hands out new weaponry that she and James may need going forward.
32. EXT – ENGLISH COUNTRY ESTATE – AFTERNOON
Beginning: (Internal Dilemma) James and Chris spar outside to stay tuned up.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) They have fun and Chris knocks James down and reaches her hand to pick him. They look into each other’s eyes.
Ending: (Intrigue) Franklin comes out to join them and tell them that he has reached a Professor of Mythology at Oxford that he previously had tried to recruit, and they need to go and speak with him. He liked to be at a University, good guy, had found some ancient texts even Franklin was only allowed to review but not catalog.
33. EXT. OXFORD UNIVERSITY – DAY
Establishing shot of Chris, James and Franklin arriving at University.
34. INT. OXFORD UNIVERSITY – DAY
They are ushered into the Professors chambers, and they discuss the history of the Descendants and specifically references to a key that would control the world.
Professor tells them their next stop needs to be the Vatican archives.
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting) They are ushered into the Professors chambers.
Middle: (Mystery) They discuss the history of the Descendants and specifically references to a key that would control the world. Clue revealed.
Ending: (Mystery) Professor tells them their next stop needs to be the Vatican archives.
35. EXT. OXFORD UNIVERSITY – DAY
Beginning: (Surprise) High tech stealth helicopters arrive over the quad out of nowhere.
Middle: (Suspense) Descendants and mercenaries repel down, wearing black tech gear and weapons. Ando leads. The students run in fright and scream.
Ending: (Suspense) Chris runs to the window and sees the descending army and shouts for them to leave immediately.
36. INT. OXFORD UNIVERSITY – HALL – DAY
Beginning: (Suspense) The assailants have moved inside and are advancing through the building looking for Chris. Killing anyone who gets in their way.
Middle: (Suspense) As they make it into the hallway, they are ascended upon by ten assailants. The Professor is killed as Chris and James defeat all these men.
Ending: (Suspense) Chris and James move through the rooms and crash out through a window landing next to their cars. James carries Franklin on his back. (Ando is killed?)
37. EXT. OXFORD UNIVERSITY – DAY
38. EXT. BLENHEIM CASTLE – ENGLAND – DAY
39. EXT. SKYS ABOVE ENGLAND – DA
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) Chris and James jump in a wicked Aston Martin Valkyrie. Franklin jumps in his Bentley. They take off across the quad.
Middle: (Suspense) The helicopters are in the air shooting at the cars as they wander through campus. Destroying many historic buildings and civilians along the way.
They manage to shoot the trailing helicopters down.
They peel off from Franklin and the mercs follow them in their Range Rovers.
Elaborate chase scene leaving Oxford and toward Blenheim Castle. They travel through the beautiful countryside at speed, ending on the great lawn of the Castle.
James has called for a helicopter that is waiting for them on the lawn.
Ending: (Major Twist) As they rise into the sky more of Ronin’s stealth copters show up and pursue them.
A massive dog fight ensues and as they reach the English Channel they are shot down and violently crash into the water and the chopper settles beneath the surface as Ronin’s helicopters circle above.
40. EXT. ENGLISH CHANNEL – DAY
Beginning: (Major Twist) As the helicopter settles beneath the surface and starts to drift toward the sea floor, James and Ashley fight to free themselves and then save the Captain who is trapped in his seat.
Middle: (Suspense) The helicopters circle above looking for any sign of life.
Ending: (Mystery) From the depths of the sea comes a state-of-the-art private submarine. Two figures exit the sub and come to Chris’ and James’ aid. They save them and they all enter the sub and dive deep into the channel. She is save by a member (descendant) of the Water Tribe.
41. INT. SUBMARINE – DAY
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting) Inside the state-of-the-art private submarine, they meet Lexus Octavianus, a Descendant of Poseidon.
Middle: (Reveal) He has been keeping an eye on the events (war among the wind tribe) and was there to save them. The Water Tribe does not want Ronin to succeed.
Ending: (Mystery) They continue into the deep of the Channel.
42. EXT. OCEAN CONTAINER SHIP – NIGHT
43. INT. OCEAN CONTAINER SHIP – NIGHT
Beginning: (Suspense/Mystery) The submarine approaches a large container ship in the open seas owned by Poseidon Shipping. They dive beneath the surface and doors open beneath the huge ship and they enter through this secret entrance.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) Lexus welcomes them aboard one of his ships. First, he shows them to a couple staterooms so they can shower. Intimate moment between Chris and James.
Ending: (Suspense) They meet in a tech heavy command center on the ship and Lexus tells Chris more about the Water Tribe and they have been following the events of Ronin. Chris tells them she needs to get to Rome and Lexus orders the ship to sail to Marseille figuring it would be less obvious and not as patrolled as a port closer to Rome would be. Marseille is controlled by the Water Tribe.
44. EXT. MARSEILLE HARBOR – DAY
45. EXT. ROAD(S) TO ROME – DAY
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) Chris, Lexus and James enter a Range Rover (Ferrari, Aston Martin, etc.) and begin the road journey to Rome.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) A bit of a reprieve in the harrowing journey so far.
Ending: (Intrigue/Betrayal?) James is on the phone while Chris orders drinks at a beachside bar overlooking the Mediterranean.
46. EXT. ROME ESTATE – DAY
47. INT. ROME ESTATE – DAY
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) Chris, Lexus and James arrive at a Cardinal’s residence in Rome. He is a protector of the Descendants.
Middle: (Intrigue) They devise a plan to break into the Vatican archives. A young Priest is there to help.
Ending: (Twist) The Cardinal will not allow them to remove anything from the Vatican however, so the plan is to meet in the Cardinal’s office after the break-in to review the scroll.
48. EXT. SAINT PETERS SQUARE – VATICAN – NIGHT
Beginning: (Suspense) Elaborate B&E of the Vatican vault.
Middle: (Reveal) The young priest has special abilities as well.
Ending: (Mystery) They access the vault and find the scroll they are looking for.
MID-POINT
49. INT. CARDINAL’S OFFICE – VATICAN – NIGHT
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting) They find the Scroll and take to the Cardinal’s office. Overlooking St. Peter’s Square.
Middle: (Mystery) <font color=”#ae0605″>Chris</font> learns where the “Lock” may be hidden and how it could be used, and vows to defend with her life.
She learns the Key “may” be a way for one person to control all four (4) elements; Wind, Water, Earth, and Fire. This is from the ancients. Zeus, split the elements and assigned a “Tribe” to guard and protect their respective element. At the time, these were respected Gods from around the world that understood their Duty.
Ending: (Uncertainty) The Italian Cardinal tells them that over the centuries, many Descendants became power hungry and wanted to control the World. Tribes split and Wars developed, and this must be why.
50. INT. ROME ESTATE – NIGHT
Beginning: (Suspense) Arriving at their “safe house” they feel something is amiss.
Middle: (Suspense) Ronin (Ando as well?) himself attacks Chris and her team, including the Water Tribe member, Lexus. When he learned, Chris was going to Rome, he decided he would use her to get the scroll for him.
He had not grabbed the scroll earlier because he did not want his intentions out in the open for the other Tribes to see until it was too late.
Ending: (Major Twist) Ronin kills Lexus. “It didn’t have to be this way.” Ronin is now on his own against all the elemental tribes. Some of Lexus’ team show up, but too late to save him, but early enough that Ronin withdraws.
Ronin takes the copies of the Scroll.
51. EXT. LUXURY MEGA-YACHT – MEDITERREAN SEA – DAY
Beginning: (Internal Dilemma) Funeral at Sea for Lexus. All Tribes, (Water, Earth, Fire, Wind) send a representative.
Middle: (Mystery) All the Descendants discuss the situation and decide to meet again soon? Chris and James are invited to Marrakesh as a place to regroup and plan for the next stage – the journey to the Lock.
Ending: (Suspense) They take off from the yacht in a helicopter owned by the solar/energy company. This company is the front for the Wind Tribe. Chris was always destined to lead the company when the time was right.
52. EXT. MARRAKESH ESTATE – EARLY EVENING
2nd Turning Point – Chris loses the Key to Ronin. James is killed.
Beginning: (Internal Dilemma) Finally feeling safe for the moment, Chris and James stroll the beach (alt – remains of Carthage or the pyramids) after a lite beach bar candlelight dinner.
Middle: (Suspense) Ronin, by himself, steps from the shadows (maybe Ando trying to prove something to his father and is killed). NOTE!! TWIST?? Does James betray Chris and she must kill him??
A tremendous fight ensues and James falls to the ground. Ronin has the tip of his sword to James neck and demands Chris hand over the key. She does. Ronin releases James with a warning and turns to walk away.
Ending: (Cliffhanger) James feels relinquishing the key was his fault and he grabs a gun on the sand to kill Ronin. Ronin spins and decapitates James.
Chris falls to her knees defeated and crying.
ACT 3
53. INT. NYC HOSPITAL – DAY
Rethink everything.
Beginning: (Internal Dilemma) Chris visits her adopted mother (Mrs. Wentworth) in the hospital.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) Her mother tells her she must accept the ultimate responsibility and recover the Key. This is the woman who raised her, so she feels that she is her mother.
Ending: (Internal Dilemma) Feeling strong again she takes off for the Amazon.
54. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE VILLAGE – DAY
55. EXT. AMAZON VILLAGE GRAVEYARD – DAY
Beginning: (Internal Dilemma) Chris goes on the offensive. She visits the Amazon Tribe and sees her birth-mother’s grave.
Middle: (Reveal) She is treated as the queen. She looks so much like her mother.
Ending: (Character Change) An old shaman consoles her and prepares her heart for what is to come.
56. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE VILLAGE – NIGHT
Beginning: (Suspense) A member of Fire, Water and Earth arrive in the Amazon and offer their help. Old school bonfire, no technology present.
**Twist – does a Descendant try and kill Chris in her sleep?
**Twist – she captures Ronin’s spy?
Middle: (Reveal) Discuss the possible outcome of Ronin controlling all the Elements.
Ending: (Suspense) A plan has been developed.
Note – must answer question why the Tribes are not sending “armies” to go over and attack Ronin. Chris may want small so one Element does not get greedy and become the next Ronin on the battlefield. Sneak in with a smaller group?
57. EXT. AMAZON JUNGLE AIRSTRIP – NIGHT
Crisis/Dilemma (New Plan)
Beginning: (Intrigue) She recruits a small team to help her save the World. Knowing they may have to make the ultimate sacrifice. Her team is made of herself, one Descendant from each; Fire, Earth and Water, and a few from the Amazon.
Middle: (Suspense) They head off to Africa to confront Ronin as he is on his way to find the “Portal.” They board a C4 in the Amazon. Prepare their weapons. Analyze the Island (their destination)
Ending: (Superior Position) See aerials of Ronin already setting up a base camp. **Intrigue – is one the Team an ally of Ronin
58. EXT. LUSH AFRICAN ISLAND – DAY
They land on the far side of the lush island and make their way towards Ronin’s camp. They encounter a few sentries along the way, but no problem.
Beginning: (Suspense) The Team lands on the far side of the lush island and make their way towards Ronin’s camp.
Middle: (Suspense) They encounter a few sentries along the way, but no problem.
Ending: Cutting to different scene and will return to journey thru the island.
59. INT. MOUNTAIN CAVE – DAY
Ronin is making his way through the Mountain on his way to discover the Portal.
Beginning: Ronin finds the hidden entrance to the cage.
Middle: Throw in some Indiana Jones type traps.
Ending: Cutting to Chris’ journey across Island.
60. EXT. ISLAND COAST – DAY
Chris’ team make the coast and the rocky shoreline they were looking for and put on suits for the water and enter. They find an underwater cave and enter the mountain from below.
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting) Chris’ team make the coast and the rocky shoreline they were looking for and put on suits for the water and enter.
Middle: (Suspense) Swimming under the crashing waves with ease. Sharks don’t bother them.
Ending: (Suspense) They find an underwater cave and enter the mountain from below.
61. INT. GREEK/ROMAN CHAMBER – DAY
They arrive first at the vast Greek God/Roman looking chamber and wait for Ronin. The chamber is massive and has been there for thousands of years. Chris finds the Portal under a statue of her ancestor, Zeus.
They are in the middle of placing charges to destroy the temple when Ronin arrives.
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) Chris and Team arrive first at the vast Greek God/Roman looking chamber and wait for Ronin. The chamber is massive and has been there for thousands of years.
Middle: (Mystery) Chris finds the Portal under a statue of her ancestor, Zeus.
Ending: (Surprise) They are in the middle of placing charges to destroy the temple when Ronin arrives.
ACT 4
SEQUENCE OF SCENES
62. INT. GREEK/ROMAN CHAMBER – DAY
63. EXT. LUSH AFRICAN ISLAND – DAY
Climax – Battle of all battles takes place on an uninhabited island, off the coast of Africa, where all 4 Elements exist. A Volcano for Fire, the pounding Ocean for Water, the fertile lands for Earth and the winds that move the Clouds around the Volcano’s peak for Wind.
Beginning: (Suspense) Chris and her allies push Ronin back out into the open.
Middle: (Suspense) Once out in the open the size of Ronin’s force is overwhelming. Chris and her small team are being beaten back no matter her superior abilities.
Ending: (Suspense) They strike down many and lose a few of their own. As Ronin moves in for the kill, more Descendants arrive to assist Chris’ team. Water Tribe bursts from the sea. Wind Tribe falls from the sky. Earth and Fire arrive in planes(?). Weapons are geared toward their Elements (ie Fire Tribe will have something with fireballs).
Notes: More Descendants arrive to support them in their battle? They did not heed her advice? Just Water Tribe greater support because of killing of Lexus? She must claim respect of all the Tribes to begin a Peace?
If Ando (Ronin’s son) has not been killed earlier, he dies here before Ronin.
64. EXT. LUSH AFRICA ISLAND – DAY
Resolution –
Beginning: (Major Twist) Chris regains the Key and strikes down Ronin who is killed.
Middle: (Mystery) Buries the Portal without knowing where it ultimately leads. A portal to a far off world? The past? The future?
Ending: (More interesting Setting) Volcano explodes after Chris destroys the entrance to the chamber. Burying the Portal even further. The Ocean removes the remnants of the battle and pulls everything back into the sea that was close to shore. The Earth opens and swallows the camp. The Wind brings the storm which extinguishes all the flames after everything is cleaned up.
65. EXT. LUSH AFRICA ISLAND – DAY
Beginning: (Internal Dilemma) Chris is pretty beaten up but stands as the Leader after Ronin falls.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) The other Tribe Leaders vow to stand together and to never let this happen again.
Ending: (More Interesting Setting) Some kind of Star Wars moment, where they all stand side by side on the Beach and watch the Volcano erupt, burying the portal even further.
66. INT. COLUMBIA UNIVERSITY CLASSROOM – DAY
All is now as it started. Chris knows who she is, but she has lost her father, Diana, James and many others that stood with her against Ronin.
Beginning: (More interesting Setting) All is now as it started.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma) Chris knows who she is, but she has lost her father, Diana, James and many others that stood with her against Ronin.
Ending: (Mystery) Chris answers a question in class.
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This reply was modified 2 years ago by jeffrey jeff glatz glatz.
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Hi Jeff, I’ve caught up so I am looking forward to reviewing your outline tomorrow. Mine is much slimmer and less ambitious. I can’t believe you are advancing so quickly with so many projects in the works!
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Pam Ewing’s Fascinating Scene Outlines!
My Vision: Professional. Produced. Prolific. Popular.
What I learned: I like the specifics of this assignment because it forces me try to elevate not just try to communicate
Scene Arc: Demonstrating current life to poverty and need to pursue inheritance.
1. INT. DINING ROOM – NIGHT
· Beginning: Happy family meal Natalie, husband and Natalie’s mother; with creepy bright “umbrella” décor
· Middle: Everyone is frustrated with Natalie and she can’t make a simple decision; Natalie gets an “umbrella” necklace from her mom; Natalie’s husband walks away for business call that sounds more like an affair
· Ending: Husband angry; Natalie’s new necklace has scratched her and caused her to bleed but instead of treating the bleed, her mom bids them goodbye and turns to face a shadow behind her
2. INT. DINING ROOM – NIGHT
· Beginning: Mother clears table and fearlessly talks to shadow; bright “umbrella” décor darkens
· Middle: Shadow taunts that Natalie is weak/indecisive, bleeds the necklace, and will never live up to her birthright
· Ending: Mother shows fear, makes a signature gesture and dies; shadow is not revealed
3. EXT. FUNERAL – DAY
· Beginning: people leaving small funeral; Natalie crying without husband; “umbrellas”
· Middle: Husband hangs up phone and approaches Natalie while shaking handles/schmoozing
· Ending: Natalie stiffens and turns away from husband as he tries to comfort her she makes a signature gesture; shadow attends from a distance
4. INT. ATTORNEY’S OFFICE – DAY
· Beginning: Natalie and husband bickering over how much might go to husband’s failing business and how she might donate to honor her mother
· Middle: attorney says no money only potential inheritance that must be claimed in Transylvania
· Ending: Natalie says that since no money she’s divorcing husband
Scene Arc: Everyone attempts courage and hope
5. INT. AIRPLANE – DAY
· Beginning: Natalie struggles onto airplane in coach but tries to show courage when she sees husband in first class
· Middle: she goes to confront husband and is prevented by a stewardess, husband hears her complaints and comes back to resolve situation by charming stewardess; he accuses her of being too weak to work things out and argue in front of opening and closing restroom doors; Natalie’s anger causes sudden turbulence
· Ending: He offers to exchange seats but she’s really angry and accuses him of trying to go after her inheritance when and everyone needs to return to their seats
6. EXT. ROMANIAN AIRPORT – DAY — or bus to Transylvania area
· Beginning: Natalie sees husband awaiting for her but she runs to the instead her frustration and being here awakens her powers makes something unusual to happen
· Middle: Her husband is on the same bus; Meets bus driver who tells her about the ??? and shows them the scenery
· Ending: Henchman observes supernatural from Natalie as she arrives
7. INT. HOTEL LOBBY – DAY
· Beginning: Natalie gets best room
· Middle: Natalie and husband argue and the clerk assumes they are together and puts them in same suite – ???
· Ending: Natalie and husband argue all the way to their room when they discover it is the same – ???
Scene Arc: Natalie builds connections with people and the place
8. EXT. LOCAL MARKET – DAY
· Beginning: Natalie wanders the market; her necklace is seen by a vendor giving a fearful response;
· Middle: A wave of gossip fills the market; Natalie is approached by a gypsy who Natalie assumes is a tourist must do but gypsy has weird prediction/information; Natalie identifies where she needs to go for filing for inheritance
· Ending: Natalie is amused by Gypsy’s predictions; shadowed by henchman; something symbolic happen
9. INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
· Beginning: Natalie and husband end up at the same restaurant, villagers are overly attentive to Natalie
· Middle: Vlad enters and sits with Natalie
· Ending: Vlad and Natalie hit it off; Natalie has a power display but brushes it off
10. EXT. SIDEWALK – NIGHT
· Beginning: Vlad walks Natalie home with ill intent but husband follows
· Middle: Natalie makes an uncharacteristic pass at Vlad
· Ending: Vlad says she’ll dream of him; husband teases her that she came on too strong
Scene Arc: Husband keeps messing up Natalie/Vlad romance
11. INT. HOTEL ROOM – NIGHT
· Beginning: Natalie is happy; dances around room
· Middle: settles into bed and does dream of Vlad and hums
· Ending: – a vampy song and dance comparing trench coat to Vlad’s cape
12. EXT. NATALIE’S HOTEL – NIGHT
· Beginning: Outside Natalie’s balcony Vlad lurks
· Middle: As if attuned to Natalie’s dream he prepares for his entrance and is confused by her upbeat humming
· Ending: Husband also lurks and scares Vlad away along with a flurry of bats
13. INT. HOTEL ROOM – NIGHT
· Beginning: Husband wakes Natalie from her dream; tries to expose Vlad and gets blamed
· Middle: Natalie and husband have heated fight and almost kiss but husband won’t say why he wants her so
· Ending: Husband sleeps on floor
14. EXT. NATALIE’S HOTEL – NIGHT
· Beginning: Henchman laughs at Vlad’s failure
· Middle: Vlad lands by henchman and kills him
· Ending: Another henchman steps in showing appreciation/question/protection about Natalie
Scene Arc: Hunting for inheritance
15. INT. HOTEL ROOM – DAY
· Beginning: Happy Natalie steps over sleeping husband to get on with her quest
· Middle: Natalie sings song from dream and has a power event
· Ending: Natalie steps on sunny balcony and gets a sting from sunlight
16. EXT. MARKET – DAY
· Beginning: Natalie walks to town hall; gypsy tries to warn Natalie that she got the prediction wrong
· Middle: Town Hall suddenly closes; Natalie is henchman whispers something to her and hands her an invite
· Ending: Husband was racing to catch Natalie and follows her leaving with henchman; gypsy observes and frets
17. INT. TOWN HALL – DAY
· Beginning: Natalie overcome by Vlad’s castle; Natalie sees heirlooms and a power triggers and she realizes it is her power; before Vlad arrives the henchman makes a comment about Natalie’s guardian
· Middle: Vlad enters and steers her away from the heirlooms and away from windows
· Ending: Henchman informs Vlad of visitor but signals Natalie that maybe he is on her side
Scene Arc: Vlad shows his true intent
18. EXT. VLAD’S CASTLE – DAY
· Beginning: Husband lurks outside and finds way into castle where he uncovers “umbrellas” and realizes that Natalie doesn’t know what she’s gotten into
· Middle: husband decides to leave/run
· Ending: henchman captures husband and puts him in real torture dungeon
19. INT. VLAD’S CASTLE – DAY
· Beginning: Vlad wines and dines Natalie thinking he has the upper hand but she’s at least partially onto him and asks challenging questions
· Middle: In his over confidence Vlad accidently lets Natalie’s inheritance slip
· Ending: Vlad shows his power but even in an initial attempt to focus her power she is able to defend herself
20. EXT. VLAD’S CASTLE – DAY
· Beginning: Vlad and Natalie tamely spare and he offers to join forces
· Middle: Natalie rejects him with a superior show of power
· Ending: Vlad shows her that he has her husband captive
Natalie has to fight for her life and her husband’s life
21. INT. VLAD’S TORTURE ROOM – DAY
· Beginning: Natalie is angry with her husband; husband tries to tell her that he’s figured out what’s going on; Vlad gives Natalie a choice; she pretends to be interested in bondage situations
· Middle: She convinces Vlad to try out a torture device; then works on freeing husband
· Ending: Vlad escapes and stops them from leaving
22. INT. VLAD’S TORTURE ROOM – NIGHT
· Beginning: Natalie is now bound as well; she argues with husband
· Middle: husband admits why he cares about her
· Ending: Instead of responding she disappears
22. INT. VLAD’S CASTLE – NIGHT
· Beginning: Natalie seeks out Vlad as he prepares to kill her
· Middle: Natalie’s attempt to surprise and stop Vlad is thwarted; an all out battle begins; henchman frees husband and tells him why
· Ending: Vlad recites his history and why he is destined to win but something he says makes Natalie more confident that she will prevail
23. EXT. VLADS’ CASTLE – DAWN
· Beginning: Husband is back outside; he stumbles across a silver stake
· Middle: husband takes stake inside to fight Vlad
· Ending: Vlad is maneuvering Natalie into the morning sunlight assuming that she has fully transitioned and will be killed by the light
24. INT. VLADS’ CASTLE – DAWN
· Beginning: Natalie is invisible in the streaming light; dead or alive; husband runs to her with the silver stake
· Middle: Natalie is on the floor in a heap as Vlad brags over his victory; husband lunges at Vlad with silver stake and stabs him
· Ending: Vlad slumps
Scene Arc: all is resolved
25. INT/EXT. LOCATION – DAY/NIGHT
· Beginning: husband leaves hotel, Natalie follows,
· Middle: Natalie sees gypsy and goes over to talk to her; gypsy is confused but thankful; Natalie explains that she is the vampire born in the morning so can’t be killed by light;
· Ending: henchman oversees Vlad at work in the shadows of a tourist store; Natalie and husband bicker but laugh it off and kiss
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Looking forward to seeing the continued evolution 🙂
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Heather’s Fascinating Outline
Heather’s Vision: I want to see my scripts optioned this year and turned into movies that the audience will remember long after they leave the theatre.
What I learned from doing this assignment: some of the beats had no conflict and really very little drama. They were just things happening. So to go through the entire script and cut them out was a BIG DEAL. But I could add others that made more sense.
Scene 4
Beginning- Sarah comes back in the kitchen to find Becky has pulled out the paints after her Mom has told her she can’t play with them – they are coated in red, the sheets are coated in red- just like blood.
Middle – Sarah freaks out, loses her temper and banishes the kids outside. Now she has to rewash everything.
Ending- Sarah tells herself to pull up her big girl panties and deal with things like a grown up before child services takes her children away from her.
Version 2
Beginning-Character changes radically- rage Becky knows her Mom washes other people’s laundry and she’s just wrecked it.
Middle- Major twist Showdown between Sarah and Becky
Ending- Suspense Will this be the straw that breaks Sarah’s back?
5 EXT: BACKYARD – DAY
Becky wants payback. She drags Lila into the woods to see her “secret” place: a dark hollow where Becky leaves trinkets, and something leaves gifts in return.
Beginning– Becky is angry at her Mom. She decides to take that anger out on her sister. Disregarding the order to stay out of the forest, she shows her sister her ’secret place’.
Middle- Kids frolicking down the forest path toward a spooky shaded clearing, being followed by a shadowy hulking creature.
Ending- The kids play in a mushroom fairy ring. Lila picks a mushroom to offer to ‘The Shadow Man’. Lila eats the mushroom and has a seizure. Becky panics and runs away.
Version 2
Beginning- scheming. Becky sulks. Decides to get rid of her sister to get back at her mother.
Middle- plan in action. Becky drags a whining Lila along the forest trail to a spooky clearing where Becky has hidden dolls and blankets.
Ending- surprise- the girls play in a mushroom ring offering mushrooms to the ‘Shadow Man’ to take them away from their angry mother and he steps out of the shadows and takes Lila away. Becky screams and bolts, leaving Lila to her fate.
8 EXT:BACKYARD – CON’T
· Sarah freaks and runs outside screaming Lila’s name.
· The neighbors ask what’s wrong and Sarah tells them. One of the neighbors, an uptight busybody who criticizes everyone tells Sarah it’s all her fault.
· Sarah tells her to go to hell.
· Her husband tells her to go inside, then says he’ll go search the woods.
Beginning – Sarah runs into the backyard screaming Lila’s name. She can’t bring herself to enter the forest – her fear of the woods is too strong.
Middle – the neighbors (the Grubers) come running. Mrs. Grubber criticizes Sarah for leaving her daughter unattended, Sarah snaps and tells her to mind her own business.
Ending- Mr Gruber steps in to make peace and sends his wife away. He tells Sarah he’ll go look for Lila.
Version 2
Beginning – Betrayal – Sarah drags Becky to the edge of the woods and tells her to go find her sister. She was supposed to be watching her.
Middle– Mislead (?) Mrs. Gruber (Who’s never had children) sticks her nose in and scolds Sarah for yelling at Becky and making her responsible for her sister etc…
Ending- suspense Mr. Gruber interferes as the other neighbors arrive to see what all the fuss is about. He takes Becky with him so they can look for Lila and tells Sarah to call Sheriff Harper.
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