• Module 4

  Lesson 7

  Posted by cheryl croasmun on May 6, 2023 at 3:49 pm

  Reply to post your assignment.

  Wayne Petitto replied 2 years ago 4 Members · 3 Replies
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  David Thompson

  Member

  May 16, 2023 at 4:12 pm

  David Thompson’s Completed P/S Grid #2

  What I learned doing this assignment is that the grid really, really helps.

  I have several issues with the pilot, and how to adjust what I want to set-up, and I dug into the basics of the outline, versus the original material AND the needs of the pilot itself. I am confident that I can overcome these issues and create a pilot that is both faithful to the original material and well-received by audiences. I’ve rewritten ACT 1 and ACT 3 completely. Next will be ACTs 4 and 5. Make the ending stronger, pull a viewer into the series by the front of their shirt and not let go for 9 more episodes.

  This grid #2 is a great tool. I’m going to keep a copy on my desk (buried under other notes)!
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  David Wickenden

  Member

  May 16, 2023 at 6:41 pm

  David Wickenden Completed P/S Grid #2

  What I learned doing this assignment?

  I love these two grids and what to look for and what might be a fix. I can see myself using these grids for past scripts and all future stories.

  I have managed to increase my page count. The grids did help, by concentrating on highlighting the wounds of one of the main characters.
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  Wayne Petitto

  Member

  May 29, 2023 at 4:04 pm

  Wayne has Completed P/S Grid #2

  What I learned doing this assignment is using a checklist to examine, find, improve a script is a great tool that can’t be over used.

  Use the “Possible Solutions,” brainstorm how you might solve or improve a problem, rewrite, repeat.
  Tell us the problems you solved and/or the scenes you improved, and which solution you used.

  1. Missed the Outline in Some Places ~ No, I put the outline into Final Draft, and used it like a template.
  2. Not Enough Empathy/Distress ~ Found a few places to improve/enhance them.
  3. Character Intros not Strong ~ didn’t need much improvement
  4. Characters We Don’t Care About ~ N/A
  5. Weak Protagonist or Antagonist ~ Found a few ways to bolster these
  6. Characters Need More Depth ~ A continuing evolution in these passes and future
  7. Scenes that are Not Intriguing ~ AOK
  8. Weak Scenes ~ None, but bolstered some anyway
  9. Situations don’t Challenge Characters ~ work in constant progress
  10. Exposition Instead of Reveals ~ a few alterations helped
  11. When do I Reveal What? ~ Shifted some, may shift as desired in the future
  12. Cliché Scenes, Actions, or Dialogue ~ eh, ya, a little

  I also added one important scene showing the actual crash landing from the pilots POV.

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