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Lesson 11
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Jan’s Scene Requirements…
WIL: to analyze each scene again and find if in some there were the structure incomplete, work to complete and check for missing conflicts et al.
EXT. WAR ZONE – DAY
Start:
A SOLDIER drinks from his canteen as a child approaches, mimicking the drinking sign.
Challenging Situation:
OLIVER signals over the intercom for the soldier to keep the child at a safe distance.
Conflict:
The soldier ignores the warning and
Action:
is ambushed by the child, who turns out to be a suicide bomber. Oliver orders his team to apprehend the accomplices.
Finish:
Oliver rushes to the injured soldier, trying to keep him alive.
EXT. MILITARY CAMP – IN FRONT OF POLICE BUILDING – DAY
Start:
Oliver wakes up from a dream, disturbed and agitated.
Challenging Situation:
His AIDE calls him in to continue an interrogation,
Conflict:
knowing that Oliver has these recurring dreams.
Action:
They walk back in
ACT 1: TRAVEL
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – DAY
Start: Oliver interrogates MAHMOUD, a captured individual with indications of triggering the ambush.
Challenging Situation:
During the interrogation, Oliver is discreetly informed that the soldier did not survive the attack.
Conflict:
Oliver uses this information to accuse Mahmoud of murder, but Mahmoud remains unimpressed and unresponsive.
Action:
When the soldier turns to whisper in Oliver’s ear, Mahmoud seizes the opportunity to attack. Oliver restrains the guard at the door and convinces Mahmoud to back down. Mahmoud is led away
Finish:
as another soldier arrives, requesting Oliver’s presence to see his commanding officer.
EXT. MILITARY CAMP – DAY
Start:
Oliver walks with his aide,
Challenging Situation:
discussing the lack of response to his previous complaint.
Conflict:
He expresses disappointment that his squad is assigned to guard German soldiers involved in questionable activities, such as organize cocaine transports for pharmaceutical companies.
Finish:
Talking into the HQ
INT. CAMP HQ – OFFICE – DAY
Start:
The COMMANDING OFFICER informs Oliver that he is being released to travel home.
Challenging Situation:
Oliver is surprised, thinking it’s related to his complaints, but it’s personal news.
Conflict:
His father has passed away, and he is being granted leave to assist his mother with the funeral arrangements.
Action:
Oliver falls silent, processing the news.
Finish/ Start:
Oliver is being dismissed,
Challenging Situation:
with the advise to stay as long as it takes.
INT. CAMP HQ – TRAVEL MANAGEMENT – DAY
Conflict:
Oliver and his aide learn that the next available passenger flight is in two days.
EXT. CAMP – DAY
Action:
Oliver asks his aide to explore any options for an earlier departure.
Aide leaves, Oliver on his bed, alone, no tears.
INT. TENT/BARRACK – OLIVER – DAY
Start:
Oliver packs his belongings and tries to reach his mother on his satellite phone,
Challenging Situation:
but she doesn’t answer or there is no signal.
Conflict:
His aide enters and informs him of a flight departing in a few minutes, a cargo flight carrying damaged goods back to Germany.
Action:
Oliver seizes the opportunity and accepts the flight.
Finish:
They run
EXT. AIRFIELD – DAWN
Start:
Oliver asks his aide
Challenging Situation:
to ensure the assassin is kept well and alive until
Conflict:
his return in 5-6 days to continue the interrogation despite the funeral
Action:
Aide is not convinced but agrees
Finish:
Oliver phone rings
EXT. AIRFIELD – CARGO PLANE – DAWN
Start:
Aide points at Olivers pocket, his satellite phone rings, and it’s his mother, FREDDIE.
Challenging Situation:
The connection is noisy, but Oliver gathers that something is amiss. He reassures her that he will be there in a couple of hours, and they can talk about everything then.
Conflict:
Now he needs to finish this call as the cargo plane’s door closes,
Action:
Oliver rushes inside,
Finish:
ending the call.
INT. CARGO PLANE – DARK
(Optional – Not sure if needed)
EXT. AIRFIELD GERMANY – NIGHT
Start:
Unfavorable weather greets Oliver as he disembarks the plane.
Challenging Situation:
He approaches a soldier and inquires about nearby accommodations for a shower and some rest.
Conflict:
There is none The soldier recommends the 9-Inn.
Action:
Oliver leaves
INT. THE 9 INN – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver requests a room and
Challenging Situation:
is given an exorbitant price for a short stay, as the establishment charges by the 30-minute increment.
Conflict:
After explaining his situation of coming from a war zone and needing rest before seeing his mother,
Action:
Oliver is granted a “hero’s rebate” with the understanding
Finish:
that he won’t require any extra services.
INT. ROOM WITH A BED – DARK
Start:
Oliver emerges from the shower, his tiredness evident.
Challenging Situation:
He struggles with his heavy backpack, revealing a gunshot wound or a scar on his arm, a testament to his past experiences.
Conflict:
Exhausted, he glances at his phone and watch,
Action:
rubs his face, and
Finish:
falls asleep.
INT. ROOM WITH A BED – DARK
Start:
Oliver is restless in his sleep, bumping into someone’s arm and
Challenging Situation:
immediately becoming alert. XENIA, a semi-attractive pro, reassures him. Despite Oliver’s initial request for no services,
Conflict:
she explains that they needed the bed for her to rest after dealing with a difficult client. Nothing happened between them.
Action:
Oliver realizes it’s already morning and rushes to leave, offering Xenia €50 for driving him to the nearest car rental,
Finish:
which she accepts.
ACT 2: ARRIVAL
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY
Start:
Oliver drives into town,
Challenging Situation:
taking in the sights of a place
Conflict:
he hasn’t been in a long time.
Action:
His GPS guides him and announces
Finish:
200 meters to final address.
EXT. HOME STREET – OLIVER
Start:
He misses the house, and as he gets out of the car, he runs into PETRA, who is about to lock up.
Challenging Situation:
They immediately clash, and just as Oliver’s GENERAL calls, he tries to delay the conversation.
Conflict:
After Petra insists, Oliver shows her his military ID to introduce himself.
Action:
Petra informs him of his mother’s passing the previous night.
Finish:
Neighbors heard a window constantly in the wind and called police.
INT. HOME – OLIVER
Challenging Situation:
Oliver’s homecoming is marred by tension and loneliness.
Conflict:
Petra denies him access to the house and
Action:
refuses to leave him with the keys.
Finish:
Oliver is stunned.
ACT 3: DOORS SHUT
EXT. HOME STREET – DAY
Start:
Oliver sits alone on the doorsteps, contemplating his next move.
Challenging Situation:
He receives another call from his general, discussing
Conflict:
his suspicions about his parents’ deaths and his determination to uncover the truth.
Action:
The general assures him of support if needed.
Finish:
Oliver decides to clear his mind first.
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY
Oliver walks through the town, unfamiliar with the buildings and feeling disconnected from his former home.
INT. RESIDENTS’ REGISTRATION OFFICE – DAY
Start:
Oliver visits the registry office to confirm his residency,
Challenging Situation:
but they are unable to find him in their digital records as they -digitally -only go back to 2009 and the file-files are with the digitizing company.
Conflict:
The REGISTRATION LADY, whose name tag shows her family name as Wind, sympathizes with his loss but can’t provide assistance without the required documents.
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY
Start:
Oliver continues his search for answers, contacting the military police HQ in Germany
Challenging Situation:
to check his files and residency history. They promise to call him back with the information.
Conflict:
Oliver checks Google and finds contacts for his uncle, HANS WIND,
Action:
whom he decides to call.
INT. TOWN HALL OFFICE – DAY
Start:
Over finds contacts for the next close relative. Uncle Hans knows details about his father’s accidental death at the shipyard and expresses condolences.
Challenging Situation:
He offers to meet the following day to mourn together, as he is out of town, discuss the funeral, and catch up on family matters.
Conflict:
It’s clearly a lie. He is in town, and across from him sits Clarice, observing Hans as he speaks.
Action:
After ending the call, they share a glance, wondering
Finish:
what their next move should be.
INT. REGISTRY OFFICE – DAY
Start:
Oliver meets with the registry office,
Challenging Situation:
asks for a certificate of residence
Conflict:
but they can’t provide assistance without specific documents, such as an apartment confirmation signed by his parents.
Action:
They sympathize with his loss
Finish:
but can’t bend the rules.
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY
Start:
Oliver receives a call from the coroner’s office,
Challenging Situation:
returning his call, regarding his mother’s body.
Conflict:
They refuse to speak to him without a power of attorney
Action:
and abruptly end the call.
Finish:
Frustrated, Oliver realizes that the authorities won’t cooperate easily.
INT. BANK – DAY
Start
Oliver visits his mother’s bank
Challenging Situation:
and inquires what he will need to get authority about and for her accounts.
Conflict:
The BANK CLERK, whose name tag again bears the name Wind, refuses to provide any information without a valid power of attorney.
Action:
They express condolences
Finish:
but remain firm.
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY
Start:
Oliver receives a call from the military HQ,
Challenging Situation:
stating they couldn’t find any documents related to his previous residency.
Conflict:
Disheartened,
Action:
surrounded by masses of residents walking around him Oliver contemplates his next steps
Finish:
sitting there and lonesome on the market square of his home town.
EXT. STREET NEAR TOPPER CAR COMPOUND – DAY
Start:
Oliver’s attention is caught by a large car dealer compound
Challenging Situation:
with the name “Toll, Top, Topper.” He looks at it with disdain,
Conflict:
particularly at a man named JÜRGEN, who appears to be involved with the customers.
Action:
Oliver turns away,
Finish:
feeling a sense of disgust.
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY
Start:
Challenging Situation:
Conflict:
Action:
Finish:EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY
Start:
Challenging Situation:
Conflict:
Action:
Finish:Oliver unlocks his rental car and drives away.
EXT. SHIPYARD WIND – DAY
Start:
Oliver finds Siggi, Helge’s long time right-hand man at the shipyard,
Challenging Situation:
Siggi shares information with Oliver. He talks about the shipyard deal and
Conflict:
his observations in the last 4-6 weeks, hinting at something suspicious.
Action:
Oliver asks for more details
Finish:
and Siggi leads him towards the jetties
EXT. SHIPYARD – YACHT & SAILING CLUB – DAY
Start:
Siggi shows Oliver the spot
Challenging Situation:
where the accident supposedly occurred,
Conflict:
involving his father falling into the lake.
Action:
Oliver looks around , the jetty , the boats. Oliver is about to walk away,
Finish: /Start:
When Siggi recognizes a boat coming in
Challenging Situation:
CLARICE, who identifies herself as Oliver’s cousin, appears and invites him to visit her and her father, Johan Feuer-Wind.
Conflict:
Clarice is unaware of Oliver’s mother’s passing, and he realizes the family is not on the same page.
Action:
Clarice departs and Oliver checks the time and realizes the time of his mother’s scheduled appointment at the notary’s office.
Finish:
Back on land Oliver turns and checks the jetty again with a thoughtful look.
INT. OFFICE – NOTARY WAITING ROOM – DAY
Start:
Oliver requests to wait in the notary’s office for his mother,
Challenging Situation:
despite the secretary attempts to shoo him away. Oliver insists on staying,
Conflict:
and when the secretary goes to inform the notary,
Action:
she returns with the notary. Oliver has news.
Finish:
His mother passed away in the early morning.
INT. OFFICE – NOTARY STUDY – DAY
Start:
The notary, a close friend of “Freddie,”
Challenging Situation:
offers Oliver a summary of the events leading up to her passing.
Conflict:
Oliver becomes firmer to question the peacefulness of both his parents’ deaths, and the notary somehow does not disagree. And
Action:
the notary suggests Oliver should stay in town until the will is read to the family. He urges to investigate further and stay. And then he hands Oliver a power of attorney that Oliver’s mother signed, just hours before her passing,
Finish:
granting him authority to handle her affairs.
ACT 4: BRAWL & SEX
EXT. LAKE DISTRICT – HIGHWAY – DAY
Start:
Oliver drives car in nice landscape Lake Dstrict
INT. GOYATZ POLICE STATION – DAY
Challenging Situation:
Checking in, Oliver introduces himself and presents his PoA, Oliver receives intel about the accident,
Conflict:
but police does not see anything else than an accident.
Action:
Oliver files a request to see his father in the morgue and that he will file for an examination by the public prosecutor. Has asks for intel how to inform both police districts about to have knowledge about both deaths of his parent at two different places within 59 hours.
Finish:
Oliver announces to be back next day.
EXT. LAKE DISTRICT -View at SHIPYARD – SUNSET / BLUE HOUR
Start:
Oliver drives
Challenging Situation:
by the lake, stops the car.
Conflict:
his gaze fixed on the shipyard that belonged to his parents.
Action:
Oliver just stares. Other pictures in his head than what he sees.
Finish:
No tears. He gets out of the car and starts kicking and fighting trees.
EXT. POLICE HQ – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver presents the power of attorney at the police headquarters,
Challenging Situation:
requesting access to his parents’ home and to see Petra.
Conflict:
Petra is not present, and they wont tell him.
Action:
Oliver offers two solutions, he will call military police and ask for assistance and they will know where she is or they call her and ask for permission to tell ´him the location. They do and
Finish:
Petra agrees to see her on a crime scene as she still carries the keys on her.
EXT. CLOSE TO POLICE CRIME SCENE- NIGHT
Start:
Oliver arrive at crime scene, presenting his police ID requests to see Petra.
Challenging Situation:
Oliver presents his PoA again and receives keys. Petra challenges him
Conflict:
Why is he so into finding a crime about his parents passing? Is he so war traumatized that every corpse means a killing. Petra has no idea which boobytrap she just tapped in.
Action:
Oliver gives her the big picture what he’s found so far within less than one day. Father and mother died within 59 hours, in two police districts. His father fell from a ladder on a jetty where is nothing to work at from a ladder, and fell into water and drowned with two broken tight. So either you fall onto the jetty and break your bones but then you are on the jetty. Or you fall into the water and break probably nothing. His mother was fully dressed yet not on her bedside but his fathers, why would she do that, if she didn’t leave a letter? He adds 2-3 more indications and resumes, he would see enough initial suspicion to trigger an investigation. And he will.
Finish:
Oliver walks away, wishes Petra good luck with her crime scene, he would wish he would not have to go to THE crime scene he is going to.
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver finally opens the door to his parents home.
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT
Challenging Situation:
Oliver walks the rooms
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT
Conflict:
Oliver walks into the bedroom
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT
Action:
Oliver decides to leaves quickly
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT
Finish:
Oliver leaves – no results, impressions only
INT. PROSECUTOR’S OFFICE – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver presents the power of attorney and
Challenging Situation:
files for the prevention of his mother’s body release, demanding an official examination.
Conflict:
The authorities require a „different“ validation of the power of attorney,
Action:
leaving Oliver frustrated and
Finish:
uncertain about his next move.
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – BACK SALON – NIGHT
Start:
Walking with anger subsiding, Oliver ponders his options.
Challenging Situation:
Oliver sees a nightlife pub,
Conflict:
hesitating but ultimately seeking solace.
Action:
Oliver decides and walks and
Finish:
enters a nightlife pub BACK SALON.
INT. BACK SALON – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver finds himself among a few guests at the bar, attempts to calm down after this tumultuous day.
Challenging Situation:
Two groups of men arrive, seeking Oliver’s opinion and provoking a confrontation.
Conflict:
Oliver sees the conflict and tries to manage to avoid it but the guys leave no way out and it escalates into a 4 against 1 brawl.
Action:
Despite the outnumbering odds, Oliver fights without causing much damage to the bar. As the assailants flee, Oliver seizes their wallets before tending to his knife wound. MARIE, the bartender, thanks him for taking a stand and tends to his injury.
Finish:
They engage in conversation, and Oliver asks Marie for a recommendation for a simple hotel. Marie offers her own room above the bar for him to stay.
INT. APARTMENT – MARIE – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver and Marie bump through the door already kissing
Challenging Situation:
and wildly into each others undressing
Conflict:
While Marie bumps all the time into the fresh bandaged wound which makes Oliver groan.
Action:
Marie playfully orders Oliver to be not such a pussy and they engage in a passionate and wild encounter of sex,
Finish:
finding joy and temporary solace in each other’s arms.
INT. APARTMENT – MARIE – NIGHT
Start:
After their encounter,
Challenging Situation:
Oliver is restless and
Conflict:
unable to sleep.
Action:
He gets dressed, leaves the apartment, and
Finish:
embarks on a restless night.
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – BACK SALON – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver walks the streets,
Challenging Situation:
seeking solace and a quiet moment to gather his thoughts.
Conflict: Not possible
Action:
Suddenly, he begins walking briskly
Finish:
in a particular direction.
ACT 5: RESTLESS NIGHT
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver reenters the house, determined for a specific direction.
Challenging Situation:
He heads to the bedroom where his mother was found dead,
Conflict
placing himself on the bed, inhaling the room and inspecting the surroundings.
Action:
He checks the nightstand on his father’s side, contemplates how his mother’s body was moved into the bedroom, and searches through closets and sideboards. Oliver’s frustration grows as he finds no substantial leads. He rewinds the answering machine, listens to the messages, and searches other rooms of the house.
Finish:
Feeling defeated, Oliver gives up and exits the house.
EXT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver locks the house,
Challenging Situation:
preparing to walk away,
Conflict:
but something stops him in his tracks.
Action:
Oliver reenters the house.
Finish:
Door closes behind him
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT
Start:
Oliver returns to his mother’s desk, sits down
Challenging Situation:
noticing a missing drawer on the right-hand side.
Conflict:
He explores further, finding a hidden compartment inside the drawer containing a diary.
Action:
Oliver reads the final entries aloud, expressing his suspicions about his parents’ deaths.
Finish:
The weight of the situation is evident on Oliver’s face.
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LIKE THE JONESES – SCENE REQUIREMENTS
What I learned doing this assignment is how the pilot has a start, middle, finish, and every scene also has a start, middle, finish. Doing this shows where there are gaps in the story or maybe more detail needs to be added. It also helps to keep things in chronological order. It keeps the story organized because you can see exactly when information is revealed and when events take place. I can see how it is setting up the framework for the pilot, because now with the action, it just needs some tweaking and then add dialogue. We have the description so that takes care of the action.
INT. MCMENAMINS
Family and friends are gathered for the tenth anniversary celebration of Jones Farmacy, a cannabis business founded by Willie Jones and his son, Tony. As guests share stories and acknowledgements, they seem to each want more of Willie’s time. His wife Elaine is ready for him to retire so they can move to St. Maarten with her family. His son is ready for him to hand over the reins to him. The mayor wants him to commit to serving on the cannabis commission another four years. Tony is given very little acknowledgement. Heather comes forward to speak…A series of shots during Heather’s voiceover:
A dark tinted vehicle screeches to a halt and Henry jumps in just as his assailants catch up with him
The same assailants purchase tickets to Portland, Ore
The assailants await Henry at the Portland Airport
Henry arrives in Eugene, Ore
•Start: Jones Farmacy is celebrating its tenth anniversary.
•Challenging Situation: Everyone is asking something of Willie
•Conflict: Tony receives very little acknowledgement
•Action: Henry outruns the loan sharks and breaks into his grandfather’s house to hide out.
•Finish: Henry discovers documents regarding an inheritance from his mother.
INT. PAPA JONES’ HOUSE
Henry Jones arrives at Grandpa Jones’ house in Salem, Ore. He takes in the property. He walks around the side of the house reminiscing. A car zooms past. He’s startled. He rushes to the side porch, raises a heavy ceramic flower pot, and uses the key to enter the home, watching out behind him. He tiptoes through the house to ensure it is empty. He hears a car door close and rushes into a large walk in closet. breaks into GF’s house to hide out. He discovers a peculiar looking box. Inside are documents from an inheritance that should’ve been his and Heather’s.
•Start: Tony is going about just another day at the office.
•Challenging Situation: Tony is faced with a big decision. He needs to consult his father on the matter.
•Conflict: The clients pressure him to decide without his father. He delays them.
•Action: Tony questions Willie about giving him more responsibility.
•Finish: Willie shoots him down.
ACT 1
INT. JFP HEADQUARTERS
Tony goes about his normal tasks in the office. Just another day. Tony is faced with a business decision that requires Tony to discuss with Willie. The client (cannabis guys) rib him about having to check in with his father. Tony tries to delay them but is unable to reach Willie. Tony questions Willie about having more power in the decision making. Willie shoots him down, reminding him that they were still recovering from what happened six years ago.
•Start: Tony hangs out with the other cannabis guys.
•Challenging Situation: The guys encourage him to get from under Willie. Do his own thing.
•Conflict: Tony doesn’t want to leave behind what he has built. He got the license.
•Action: Tony moves forward on the deal from earlier.
•Finish: Tony decides to start making more decisions on his own.
INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE PDX
Tony is out kicking it with the other canna world guys at a private lounge in Portland. The guys heard about what happened earlier and encourage Tony to get from under Willie and do his own thing. The guys inform him that people want to do business with him, not Willie. Tony is hesitant to leave behind Jones Farmacy after all his hard work. Tony knows JFP wouldn’t have gotten a license without him. Tony closes the deal from earlier without consulting with Willie. He feels good about it and decides to do more.
INT. TONY’S HOUSE
Noelle comes to Tony’s home to bring Ty. She gives him a breathalizer. He asks if that’s necessary. Tony confides in Noelle about what’s happening at JFP. Noelle encourages him to do more on his own. Noelle introduces Brian as her boyfriend, and encourages Tony to talk to him about business. Brian hugs Ty before he and Noelle take off.
•Start: Noelle requires him to take a breathalizer before leaving their son.
•Challenging Situation: Tony confides in Noelle about his role at JFP
•Conflict: Noelle advises him to step out on his own and make a name for himself
•Action: Noelle introduces Brian, the Green Diamonds VP to Tony as her boyfriend
•Finish: Brian hugs Ty before he and Noelle take off.
INT. BALLPARK – 2017
We flashback to a severely intoxicated Tony stumbles off the baseball field into the dugout. Noelle spots him and tries to intercede. We see Tony being put in handcuffs and carted off the field as Ty watches. The kids ask Ty if that is his dad. Noelle rushes to Ty and it is too late. Brian the coach is already consoling Ty. The team is dressed in green and They are the Green Diamonds little league team. Brian walks Ty to the car where Noelle is railing Tony about his behavior. Pete ushers Noelle into the car and suggest to Tony that he get some help. We cut to the morning headlines: Cannabis Business Owner arrested for public intoxication.
•Start: Flashback to six years ago, a drunk, stumbling Tony is being escorted off a baseball field
•Challenging Situation: Ty watches (then 6yrs old) as Tony is put in handcuffs.
•Conflict: Ty’s friends whisper about Ty’s dad. The parents whisper loudly.
•Action: Noelle embraces Ty and comforts him.
•Finish: Noelle puts Ty in the car then screams at Tony. Pete encourages him to get help. “saw what it did to your grandfather. Newspaper headline: Cannabis mogul arrested for public intoxication. Jones Farmacy
INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE SALEM
At the Salem lounge, the LOCC members tease Willie about his early retirement. They ask him if Tony will be running the day to day. Willie expresses his concerns about Tony being in charge. Willie tells the guys he doesn’t feel Tony is ready. The Governor interrupts and offers Willie another four years with the LOCC. Willie asks for time to think about everything.
•Start: The guys tease Willie about his early retirement.
•Challenging Situation: They question if Tony is stepping up.
•Conflict: willie doesn’t feel Tony is ready
•Action: The Governor offers another four years on the LOCC.
•Finish: Willie asks for time to think about everything.
INT. WILLIE’S HOUSE
Willie discusses his exit plan with Elaine, who encourages him to give Tony a chance. Elaine feels Tony has made big improvements. Elaine discloses that Tony closed the Atrium deal without him. Willie becomes furious. Elaine reminds him of his promise to spend time in Trinidad with her family. Willie reflects on Tony’s actions from six years ago. Elaine reminds Willie of all the good Tony has done. Willie is hesitant but agrees to think about it.
•Start: Elaine encourages Willie to give Tony another chance.
•Challenging Situation: Willie promised Elaine they could spend some time in Trinidad with her family.
•Conflict: Willie doesn’t trust Tony since the incident six years ago.
•Action: Elaine doesn’t back down on either.
•Finish: Willie says he’ll think about it.
EXT. HEATHER’S COFFEE SHOP – DAY
Henry bumps into Pete Roberts as he is leaving Heather’s Coffee Shop. Henry corners Pete and shows him the paperwork concerning the inheritance. Pete is tightlipped at first. Pete eventually caves and gives Henry information about the inheritance and Willie’s involvement. Pete encourages Henry to talk to Willie and not to go public with the information. Pete assures Henry that he can get more money if he keeps quiet. Pete gives Henry a referral to an estate attorney.
•Start: Henry accidentally bumps into Pete Roberts on his way to the LOCC.
•Challenging Situation: Henry questions Pete about the inheritance. Pete confirms.
•Conflict: Pete encourages Henry to talk to Willie before taking any action.
•Action: Pete tells Henry he can get more money if he keeps quiet.
•Finish: Pete gives him a referral to an estate attorney.
INT. JFP – TONY’S OFFICE
A breaking news report comes across Tony’s monitor as he’s working. Live footage of a walkout at Green Diamonds. Inside Green Diamonds, Brian and Noelle are trying to reason with the staff. Pete tells them to let them go. Brian is bothered by Pete’s lack of concern. Noelle defends Pete. Brian returns to his office where he gives things a brief thought before deciding to leave as well. Tony watches as Brian exits. He calls to check on Noelle who is unaware Brian has left.
•Start: Breaking news comes across Tony’s monitor.
•Challenging Situation: Pete’s staff are exiting Green Diamonds loading boxes into their cars.
•Conflict: Brian and Noelle try to reason with them. Pete says to let them go.
•Action: Brian decides to leave with them.
•Finish: Tony calls to check on Noelle.
INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE SALEM
Back at the Salem lounge, Pete warns Willie that Henry has documentation about the inheritance. Pete informs Willie about his conversation with Henry. Willie is angry and accuses Pete of sabotage and jealousy. Pete explains that Henry could get the same info from any attorney. The Governor postpones renewing Pete’s term, so he can focus on his business. Pete advises Willie to pay Henry off and fly under the radar. He reminds Willie that the LOCC does not need any extra attention.
•Start: Pete warns Willie about Henry
•Challenging Situation: Willie accuses Pete of being disloyal.
•Conflict: The Governor informs Pete his renewal will be postponed so he can focus on his business.
•Action: TBD
•Finish: TBD
INT. JFP LOBBY
Henry is milling around at JFP when Willie arrives. Willie tries to casually acknowledge Henry. Henry wants to get right to business. He asks to speak with Willie alone. Tony insists on being a part of the meeting. Willie tells him it’s not Jones Farmacy business. Henry drums up fake tears and says the meeting is about his mother and he wanted Willie to tell him stories about it.
•Start: Willie arrives back at JFP where Henry is waiting with his evidence.
•Challenging Situation: Willie tells Tony he wants to talk to Henry alone.
•Conflict:
•Action: Tony gives push back, asks why he’s not included in business matter.
•Finish: Willie tells Tony it’s nothing that concerns him.
INT. GREEN DIAMONDS
Brian confesses his love for Noelle and Ty. He lays it on thick. We sense he is up to something. Brian tells Noelle he’s not returning to Green Diamonds, and exploring new opportunities. Brian wants Noelle to leave too. She says she’ll think about it. Noelle reaches out to Tony for comfort and guidance. Noelle invites Tony to Ty’s theater rehearsal. He accepts.
•Start: Brian confesses his love for Noelle and Ty.
•Challenging Situation: Brian tells her he’s leaving Green Diamonds
•Conflict: Brian asks Noelle to leave with him. She says she’ll think about it.
•Action: Noelle reaches out to Tony for comfort
•Finish: Noelle invites Tony to Ty’s theater rehearsal.
I/F JONES FARMACY
The news of the Green Diamonds strike spreads across social media, the local news, and the smoke shoppes. A reporter asks Tony his thoughts on the Green Diamonds walkout. Tony has kind words for the Roberts family. Tony overhears Henry mention the LOCC to Willie. Willie lies to Tony about his conversation with Henry.
•Start: The news of the Green Diamonds strike spreads.
•Challenging Situation: Tony overhears Henry mention the LOCC to Willie.
•Conflict: Tony is questioned by the media about Green Diamonds.
•Action: Henry threatens to go to the LOCC about the inheritance.
•Finish: Willie lies to Tony.
INT. LOCC OFFICE
Willie reaches out to Pete for advice. Pete tells Willie to offer Henry a stake in the company. Willie immediately rejects the idea. He says he doesn’t want any deal that will keep Henry around longer. Pete convinces Willie to follow through with his advice. Willie sets up a meeting with Henry. Henry invites Pete.
•Start: Willie reaches out to Pete for advice.
•Challenging Situation: Pete tells him to offer him a stake in the company.
•Conflict: Willie wants to pay Henry to go away.
•Action: Willie takes Pete’s advice and arranges a meeting with Henry.
•Finish: Henry says he needs to speak with his legal counsel.
INT. TY’S SCHOOL
At Ty’s rehearsal, Tony and Noelle sit side by side and watch Ty perform. Tony whispers to hear about what’s going on with Pete, Henry and Willie. Noelle snaps and refuses to talk business. Asking Tony if that’s the only reason he came. After Noelle calms down, she tells Tony to take Ty for the night so that she and Brian can talk.
•Start: Tony sits at Ty’s play rehearsal next to Noelle.
•Challenging Situation: Tony ask Noelle what’s going on with Henry, Pete and Willie.
•Conflict: Noelle refuses to talk business.
•Action: Noelle asks Tony to take Ty with him for the night.
•Finish: Noelle informs Tony that she is going to meet Brian to talk.
INT. HENRY’S CAR
Henry passes Pete an envelope. Pete pulls out the document and scans it. He is appalled and whispers to Henry. Henry is not budging. Pete speaks with Willie and explains that Henry is only willing to take the CEO position, not the shares. Pete has a talk with willie and tells him to take this deal, that it is even better than the shares. Willie signs and agrees to Henry Jones being CEO of Jones Farmacy.
•Start: Henry hands Pete an envelope.
•Challenging Situation: Pete is dismayed by the info in the document.
•Conflict: Pete advises Willie that Henry says he will only accept CEO.
•Action: Pete advises Willie to take the deal.
•Finish: Willie signs the agreement.
INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE SALEM
Willie second guesses his decision. He drinks and smokes quickly. Pete gives Willie the truth about how he got the inheritance. Pete explains to Willie that he acquired the inheritance through forgery, and that he could face jail time and a six figure fine. Willie worries about how or if to tell Elaine. Willie accuses Pete of trying to sabotage his marriage and his business.
•Start: Willie second guesses himself with Pete.
•Challenging Situation: Pete gives Willie the truth.
•Conflict: Willie doesn’t know how to tell Elaine.
•Action: Pete reminds Willie of how he got the inheritance. He tells him to be as convincing as possible.
•Finish: Willie accuses Pete of sabotage.
Willie announces Henry as the new CEO of Jones Farmacy. The staff start buzzing. The staff migrate towards Tony’s office where he has not heard the news. Tony googles the announcement and sees the photo of Willie and Henry. Tony barges into Willie’s office, which is empty. Tony storms out, then later emails his resignation and posts it on the company website. He hops in his car and observes the parking spot “Reserved for CEO”
•Start: Willie announces Henry as the CEO (via Twitter?)
•Challenging Situation: The staff start buzzing.
•Conflict: The staff look to Tony for guidance. Tony is clueless. He heads into Willie’s
•Action: Tony resigns from JFP via Twitter, effective immediately.
•Finish: Tony storms out.
INT. TONY’S CAR
Tony is furious. He can barely focus on the highway. He drives, not paying much attention to the signs. His phone rings and rings disrupting his music. He finally turns off his phone and turns on the radio. A catchy tune plays and then the DJ breaks in with announcement of his departure from Jones Farmacy. He takes the next exit to Salem. He pulls into the LOCC parking lot where he spots Willie and Henry and the LOCC members.
•Start: Tony is fuming mad.
•Challenging Situation: Tony drives with no direction.
•Conflict: Tony’s phone rings nonstop.
•Action: Tony takes the Salem exit.
•Finish: He pulls into the LOCC parking lot where he sees his father and the other LOCC leaving.
INT. SMOKERS’ LOUNGE – PORTLAND – LATER
The guys are discussing Tony’s departure and speculating over why he left. Pete listens carefully and takes notes. The guys mention that Tony and Brian have both been inquiring about LOCC activity. Pete asks more questions. The guys are open to sharing at first, then realize Pete is LOCC himself and may not be trustworthy. Pete texts Tony asking for a meeting. Tony accepts the invite.
•Start: The business crew discuss Tony’s announcement.
•Challenging Situation: Pete takes mental notes during the conversation.
•Conflict: The guys mention that Tony and Brian have both inquiring about LOCC activity.
•Action: Pete sends Tony a text asking for a meeting.
•Finish: Tony accepts the invite.
INT. SMOKERS’ LOUNGE – SALEM
The Salem lounge is mostly empty except for a few faithful. Brian is in the VIP room smoking. Tony approaches. Brian tells Tony he shouldn’t have come looking for him. Tony shares his suspicions about Willie and the LOCC. Brian listens. Brian is hesitant to share, but shares limited information. Tony ponders his next move based on what Brian shared.
•Start: Tony approaches Brian.
•Challenging Situation: Brian is reluctant to talk to him.
•Conflict: Tony shares his suspicions about Willie.
•Action: Brian shares what he knows about Pete and Henry.
•Finish: Tony ponders his next move.
INT. JONES FARMACY
Henry struggles in his new role as CEO. He cannot answer staff questions. He does not know laws, rules, etc. Henry fumbles a presentation and has to be saved by a lower staff member. The staff go to Willie with their concerns, but Willie is unavailable. Henry reaches out to Tony for advice. Tony is hesitant at first, then later offers him help in exchange for more information on Willie’s activities and contacts.
•Start: He struggles in his role.
•Challenging Situation: Henry fumbles a presentation.
•Conflict: The staff have concerns that Henry can’t resolve.
•Action: Henry reaches out to Tony for advice.
•Finish: Tony offers him a deal.
INT. GRANDPA JONES’ HOUSE
Tony meets Heather at Grandpa Jones house. He surveys the house as if he hasn’t been there for a while. They have a talk about Willie. He takes it all in and enters the front door. Heather shows him signs that someone has been in the house, although nothing is missing. Tony suggests it was Henry, then checks the key stash spot outside. The key is in its place. They search the entire house. Tony questions Heather about the box of memorabilia. Heather says it’s just some old stuff. Tony explores the contents of the box, but nothing really jumps out other than some family photos.
•Start: Tony and Heather have a talk about Willie.
•Challenging Situation: Heather suggests Tony talk to Willie.
•Conflict: Heather tells him someone has been in their grandfather’s house.
•Action: Tony and Heather go to check out the house.
•Finish: They notice a box of memorabilia (or the stash key) is missing.
INT. HEATHER’S COFFEE SHOP
Tony’s email dings continuously. He gets a string of job opportunities, one after the other. One of the emails is from Pete. Tony is leery about Pete’s email. Heather encourages him to read it. Pete wants to meet to discuss more LOCC concerns. Tony agrees to meet, but only at Heather’s after hours. Heather advises him to be careful. Heather informs him of an unsolved incident in which she believes the LOCC were involved.
•Start: Tony receives a string of emails offering him opportunities.
•Challenging Situation: Tony receives an email from Pete. He is unsure if he can trust him.
•Conflict: Pete wants to talk more about the LOCC concerns
•Action: Tony agrees to meet in Salem.
•Finish: Heather advises him to be careful.
ACT 4
INT. WILLIE’S HOUSE
Tony and Willie have a conversation about the turn of events. Willie doesn’t share much. Tony tries to press for more information. Willie shuts down. When Tony turns to leave, Willie tries to convince him to return to Jones Farmacy and run the company with Henry. Tony declines the offer. Willie warns Tony to be careful with Pete and Brian.
•Start: Tony talks to Willie about the course of events.
•Challenging Situation: Willie doesn’t give Tony much information.
•Conflict: Willie tries to convince Tony to return and work with Henry.
•Action: Tony declines Willie’s offer.
•Finish: Willie warns Tony to be careful with Pete.
INT. GREEN DIAMONDS
Tony pays Noelle a visit a work. He seeks advice from her about returning to the family business and pursuing a LOCC investigation. Noelle advises him to follow his own intuition, and to do what’s best for himself and Ty. Brian arrives to pick up Noelle. Tony accuses Brian of being a traitor. Brian reminds Tony that they are not friends, and he has no obligation to him.
•Start: Tony reaches out to Noelle for advice.
•Challenging Situation: She advises him to follow his own intuition.
•Conflict: Brian arrives to pick up Noelle.
•Action: Tony confronts Brian.
•Finish: Brian reminds Tony that they’re not friends.
INT. JONES FARMACY
Tony arrives at Jones Farmacy to clean out his office. When he enters, Henry is talking to an unknown man. This is the one of the guys from the teaser. Tony receives a text from Pete wanting to meet, just as Willie approaches him. Willie, Tony, and Henry convene. Willie asks Henry about the guy he was speaking with in the lobby. Henry lies to Willie and Tony about the identity of the guy. He says the guy is a potential client.
•Start: Tony arrives to clean out his office.
•Challenging Situation: Tony spots Henry talking to an unknown man.
•Conflict: Tony receives a text from Pete wanting to meet.
•Action: Willie questions Henry about the identity of the guy
•Finish: Henry lies to Willie and Tony.
INT. GREEN DIAMONDS
Pete gives Tony more information on the LOCC and Willie’s involvement. Pete admits to having some involvement as well. Tony is appalled by the information on Willie extorting fellow cannabis businessmen. Pete confesses to Tony that he wants to get away from that life and get Green Diamonds back in the black. Pete talks to Tony about his outlook for Green Diamonds, and suggests that Tony come on board as his Vice President. Tony is flattered and does not say no. Tony says he needs to run it past Noelle just to smooth out any kinks. Pete ups the stakes by offering to repair things between Tony and Noelle, and getting the supervised visitation agreement lifted. Tony asks for twenty four hours to think about it.
•Start: Pete gives Tony info on the LOCC activity.
•Challenging Situation: Pete offers to repair things with Tony and Noelle.
•Conflict: Pete informs Tony of willie’s involvement in LOCC activity.
•Action: Pete offers Tony the VP position.
•Finish: Tony doesn’t say no.
Act 5
INT. TONY’S HOUSE
Tony sits in his home office reminiscing. He continues to receive opportunities via email. Tony does some research on the LOCC based on the information Brian and Pete provided. Tony sees several photos of Willie with the Governor. Tony sees Willie and the Governor in Trinidad together. Tony doesn’t want to be second fiddle for Henry, but also doesn’t want to compete with the business he started. He gets a text from Noelle inviting him to the Blazers game. Ty will be there, she won’t be. Tony replies “I’ll be there.”
•Start: Tony receives numerous opportunities.
•Challenging Situation: Tony gets a text from Noelle inviting him to VIP at the Blazers game.
•Conflict: Tony wants to be a VP, but doesn’t want to cross JFP.
•Action: Tony replies “I’ll be there.”
•Finish: Noelle says she won’t be there, only Ty.
Int. MODA CENTER – LOCC SUITE
The LOCC crew are all there celebrating Willie’s retirement and hiatus to Trinidad. Henry is there as well celebrating. Willie and Henry tell him how much they miss him at JFP. Tony informs him that he is a guest of Green Diamonds tonight. Tony tells Willie to swing by to see Ty. Tony says his goodbyes and exits. A Jumbotron message announcing Tony as the new VP of Green Diamonds comes across the Jumbotron.
•Start: Tony stops by the LOCC suite where Willie is celebrating his early retirement.
•Challenging Situation: Henry is present celebrating with Willie.
•Conflict: Tony informs them he’s a guest of Green Diamonds.
•Action: Tony invites Willie to stop by and see Ty.
•Finish: Tony says his goodbyes and exits.
INT. MODA CENTER – MOMENTS LATER
Willie immediately cancels his flight to Trinidad. His phone rings nonstop from Elaine. Across the arena, the loan sharks are sitting in the stands. The announcer gives Green Diamonds a shout out. Then the LOCC. Henry is spotted on the Jumbotron. He tries to keep it subtle and quickly turns away from the camera. He pretends to get a call to turn the media away from him. His phone buzzes while he holds it to his ear.
•Start: Willie cancels his flight from his phone.
•Challenging Situation: Willie immediately gets a text from Elaine.
•Conflict: The loan sharks are at the game.
•Action: The loan sharks spot Henry on the Jumbotron.
•Finish: Henry’s phone buzzes.
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