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Lesson 7
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3.7. Jan’s Mysteries and Open Loops
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Main Mystery : Why did my parents die? <div>
Sub Mysteries:
Did Oliver’s father had really an accident ?What happened to the mother next day?
If somebody had killed them, why?
Why did the mother change the will within a few hours?
Why did the mother set a PoA for Oliver who is most far away?
Why would some one send 4 tough next to start a fight?
Why kept mother her diary in a hidden place?
What is she saying in her diary about the Winds?
What is this all about the shipyard?
Main Open Loop: Can Oliver solve the death of his parents, unveil the truth and bring it to justice?
Sub Open Loops
Why does homicide behave so stubborn to see that there is a case? </div><div>Why is Clarice showing up at the shipyard?
Why are all public offices and authorithies against Oliver?
Why is Uncle Hans lying right away ?
Why is the notary actually the only friendly person around?
3.7. Teaser: WAR
Essence: During his duty, Oliver’s patrol is ambushed by a child assassin, resulting in the death of a fellow soldier in his arms. </div><div>
TP 1 : Intriguing World: When Oliver’s patrol is ambushed by a child assassin, this results in the death of a fellow soldier in his arms and change his believe as a soldier.
(OL) Will the soldier in Oliver arms survive?
(OL) will the team catch one or all assassins?
TP 2: Startled from his daytime nightmare in the desert camp, Oliver must gather himself and continue the interrogation of the primary assassin of this fellow soldier.
O Opening : Marty is a loyal police officer in the field, but over time he started to question the work ethics in the army.
(OL) did he hear back from the military commissioner?
Act 1: TRAVEL
Essence: Interrupted during the interrogation, Oliver learns of his father’s sudden death and catches a cargo flight home with the help of his buddy. He briefly speaks to his mother on the phone, promising to listen to her full story upon their reunion.
The soldier did not survive, Oliver interrogates a murder. </div><div>TP 1: Oliver receives the news of his father’s sudden death.
(OL) Oliver asks to keep the assassin in good shape, what will happen to the assassin when he returns?
(Opening O): Oliver is released to fly home for his father’s funeral
(OL) Has Oliver to wait two days for the next plane?
TP 2: Oliver’s buddy helps him catch a cargo flight to return home immediately.
M) Oliver speaks briefly with his mother on the phone, she wants to tell him something but on the way to the plane it is too loud.
(M) What information wanted his mother give him ?
(OL) will he get this intel in time?
TP3: Stranded at a cargo airfield, Oliver can’t get hold of his mum and chooses a motel to get some sleep, assuming his mother will be resting as well.(O Dilemma:) Oliver needs rest and decides against driving that night.
Act 2: ARRIVAL
Essence: Essence: Oliver returns home and meets detective Petra, who informs him about his mother’s death but is unaware of his father’s demise. They explore the house together, and Oliver discovers his mother’s appointment with the notary. Despite his emotional state, Petra insists on proof of his identity before granting him access to his parents’ house. </div><div>
(O’s O) Oliver arrives home, meets detective Petra, who shares the news of his mother’s passing. They search the house, but Petra sees no signs of foul play. (
M) Oliver sees in a blink an appointment in his mother’s calendar that raises suspicions. However, Petra withholds the keys and denies him the opportunity to stay.
(M) What happened to Oliver’s mother?
TP1 : Oliver is not the son arriving to assist, suddenly he is all alone and on himself.
(P M) How come Oliver knew his mothers passing many hours before it happened?
(P O) Petra is ready to leave when an unknown individual approaches, questioning her presence. Although he identifies as Oliver Wind, there is no concrete proof that he is the woman’s son. With tensions rising, they walk through the house, and Oliver notices pictures of himself. Despite this, Petra refuses to let him stay, asserting her authority.
(OL) How can he get access to the house of his parents, and search it?
P TP 1: As Petra prepares to leave, Oliver asks about his father’s body, but she is clueless about it. She requests to show up at the investigation department.
(M) What happened to his father a day before his mother died?
(OL) How come homicide doesn’t know about this?TP2 /Midpoint: Oliver sees and feels something „is off““ in the house and he defies the dismissive homicide department and embarks on a journey to uncover the truth. (He announces to investigate)
Main Open LOOP: Can Oliver solve the death of his parents, unveil the truth and bring it to justice?
Act 3: DOORS SHUT
Essence: Frustrated and alone in his hometown, Oliver encounters obstacles at the residents registration office due to lack of proof of identity and other public offices. He attempts to contact relatives, including Uncle Hans, but faces difficulties reaching them. He schedules an appointment for the following day and also contacts the police at his father’s workplace. </div>
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O Dilemma: Feeling isolated in his own town, Oliver refuses to give up and takes proactive measures, visiting various public offices for assistance. While condolences are offered, he struggles to find anyone willing to provide immediate help.
(M) What happened in this town that all public offices and authorithies unwilling to listen or assist Oliver?
(OL) Why is the banker stressing that he liked his mother but coldly friendly can’t help with out representation;
(OL) Why does homicide is so stubborn to see that there is a case?
(Hans O): Uncle Hans receives a call from Oliver, expressing condolences for his father’s death but postponing their meeting until the next day due to being out of town. He then informs Clarice, about Oliver’s arrival, leading to uncertainty about their next steps?
(OL) Why is Uncle Hans lying right away ?
P3: Nobody is ready to help instantly, he must halt to regain strength.
(Notary O) Oliver arrives at the notary’s office, initially facing resistance from the secretary. However, notary Muller intervenes and invites him into his office. Meeting Oliver first time.
O TP: In a surprising turn of events, Oliver is handed a recently signed power of attorney document by his mother, dated just one day prior, raising suspicions about her intentions.
(OL) Why is the notary actually the only friendly person around?
TP 4: Oliver is handed a freshly signed power of attorney document by his mother at the notary’s office, dated just one day before her death.
(OL) Why did the mother set a PoA for Oliver who is mostly so far away?
Act 4: BRAWL/ SEX
Oliver confronts the authorities with the power of attorney, gaining access to his home where he searches in frustration for answers. </div><div>
TP1: Oliver presents his Power of Attorney to the Petra, receives the keys to his parents house and announces: truth must and will be uncovered.
(OL) Why does Petra continues to be so stubborn to see that there is a case?
(O Major Conflict) Despite limited evidence and resistance from the authorities, Oliver becomes determined to uncover the truth behind his parents’ deaths, pushing forward in his investigation. And he files for an indictment against unknown
O shows up at the Prosecutor’s office and files for an obduction.
Uncle Hans is receives phone calls, Oliver is taking the town upside down.
(OL) Will Hans go into action to stop Oliver ?
TP 2: Additionally he calls military police and files for an administrative assistance procedure.
Oliver enters his parents home sits and takes a breath. He searches the house with no success.(M) What has happened in this house ?
Oliver about to leave returns, no nothing?(OL) How can he investigate, totally alone?
O TP3 : Oliver becomes involved in a – staged -bar brawl, sustaining injuries.
(OL) Who would send 4 tough guys to start a fight?
TP4: Marie, the bartender, comes to his aid and they share a passionate night together.
(Marie opening) Marie encounters Oliver at her nighttime job and is drawn to him, offering her support and inviting him to stay the night.
Turning Point 5: After their encounter, Oliver is restless and suffering from insomnia, he takes a walk in an attempt to find solace and peace of mind.
Act 5: RESTLESS NIGHT
Essence: Oliver searches his parents’ house again and uncovers a hidden compartment containing one of his mother’s diary. </div>
TP: Lock In: As he reads aloud from his mother’s diary, he shatters the illusion of her death: a peaceful dead, really?
(M)Why kept mother her diary in a hidden place?
(M) Why is she complaining in her diary about the Winds?
(OL) Why was his mother afraid of a b brutal end?
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KZ’s Mysteries and Open Loops
What I learned from this assignment is… not to hold back on the pilot, which is the most important piece of the series. Because if readers and audiences aren’t compelled by the pilot, then they won’t look any further.
I moved the intrigue surrounding the Antagonist (whose name has been changed to Lorn) and the Russians to the pilot. This caused me to lose an episode, so now I’m down to 9.
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What I learned doing this assignment: Returning to this exercise, I found that even though I had plenty of questions about the past and future built into Lesson 6, it helped to re-state moments as mysteries and open loops.
Teaser:
Main mystery: Who killed Raymond?
Sub-mysteries: • Why does the killer sound like an animal? •Why wasn’t the killer interested in the cloaked woman?
Open loop: Will the killer be caught?
Sub-open loop: Will the killer strike again?
Act I:
Main mystery: What is Oliver’s real identity?
Sub-mysteries: • How did Indigo and Oliver wind up working together? • Who is the cloaked woman? • Why did Michelle think Oliver didn’t belong in his apartment? • How did evidence of the murder wind up in Oliver’s apartment? • What does Michelle know about the shoe and why would she want to hide evidence from Detective Uhm?
Open loop: Will we find out Oliver’s real identity?
Sub-open loop: Will we find out Oliver’s identity through Michelle?
Act II:
Main mystery: How are Oliver and Tony linked?
Sub-mysteries: • Did Oliver’s stay in the hospital cause his amnesia? • Why did Loren recognize the shoe, but Tony didn’t? • Does Loren know about Tony and Oliver’s affair? •Why does Vlad try to kill Oliver?
Open loop: Will Vlad kill Oliver?
Sub-open loop: Will we find out Tony’s connection to Raymond?
Act III:
Main mystery: Who is Vlad, and what does he have on Loren?
Sub-mysteries: Why did Tony claim not to recognize Oliver, or even know him?
Open loop: Will Vlad and Loren find out that Oliver is alive?
Sub-open loop: What will happen when Vlad and Loren find out Oliver is alive?
Act IV:
Main mystery: Who is the man who looks like Oliver in the hospital?
Open loop: What will Vlad and Loren find at the hospital?
Sub-open loops: Will we resolve the mystery of the two Olivers and the two Tonys?
Act V:
Main mystery: Did Oliver kill Raymond? and if not, who did?
Open loop: How will the murder be resolved?
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Cat Miggs Open Loops and Mysteries
What I learned doing this assignment is it took me to now, to realize mystery is associated with the past and open loop is associated with the future. I realized how I have built in both, so now going through each act and improving both.
Overall:
Main Mystery: How is Susan the Key to saving the forest?
Sub-Mysteries:
Susan connection to Wilma the Tree
Susan connection to the Shadow
Susan connection to magic
What is Susan real past
Main Open Loop: With Susan new magical abilities will it be enough?
Sub-Open Loops:
Will she be able to control her magic?
Will she use it for good or evil?
Will Susan be responsible with her magic?
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Like The Joneses Open Loops and Mysteries
What I learned doing this assignment is how keeping loops open keeps the audience watching. It makes the outline more precise and makes sure you’re asking the questions that the audience would be asking. So you know exactly what to show or not to show to keep the loops open and create more intrigue.
•Main Mystery: What’s the story behind the inheritance?
◦Sub-Mysteries:
▪How are Henry and Willie related?
▪Who is Monica Jones?
▪What happened to Monica Jones?
▪How much money does Henry owe the sharks?
•Main Open Loop: What does Willie want?
◦Sub-Open Loops:
▪Why does Elaine want him to retire?
▪Does he want Tony to have more power?
▪Does he want four more years on the LOCC?
Act 1
•Main Mystery: Why won’t Willie give Tony any authority?
◦Sub-Mysteries:
▪How much money did he cost the company?
▪If he’s a co-founder, isn’t he equal to Willie?
▪What stops him from going against Willie?
▪Why hasn’t he quit?
•Main Open Loop: What was Tony’s fuck up that got him demoted?
◦Sub-Open Loops:
▪What happened between Tony and Noelle?
▪Does Tony still want Noelle?
Act 2
•Main Mystery: What evidence does Henry have against Willie?
◦Sub-Mysteries:
▪How did Henry get the evidence?
▪Where is Henry’s father?
▪Why wasn’t Henry’s father the trustee?
▪Did Heather know about any of this?
•Main Open Loop: Why does Elaine want Willie to retire?
◦Sub-Open Loops:
▪Why does she want to leave the country?
▪What’s in St. Maarten for them? (her parents)
Act 3
•Main Mystery: Why is everyone against Pete?
◦Sub-Mysteries:
▪What did Pete do to get on the governor’s bad side?
▪What’s Pete and Willie’s history?
▪What’s Pete and Elaine’s history?
▪Why did Pete’s staff walkout on him?
•Main Open Loop: What will Tony do next?
◦Sub-Open Loops:
▪How will this affect he and Willie’s relationship?
▪Why didn’t Willie tell him about the blackmail?
▪Does Tony still own part of Jones Farmacy?
▪How will Tony’s resignation affect Jones Farmacy?
Act 4
•Main Mystery: Will Tony work for Pete?
◦Sub-Mysteries:
▪Will Pete make Tony an offer?
▪How will this affect Tony and Noelle?
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•Main Open Loop: What happens if Henry doesn’t pay the loan sharks?
◦Sub-Open Loops:
▪How much does Henry owe?
▪How long has Henry had a gambling issue?
▪Why didn’t he tell Heather or Willie?
▪Why doesn’t he ask his family for the money?
Act 5
•Main Mystery: Why did Willie cancel his retirement plans?
◦Sub-Mysteries:
▪How will this affect his marriage?
•Main Open Loop: What will Tony’s future at Green Diamonds look like?
◦Sub-Open Loops:
▪Will he and Noelle rekindle?
▪Will Tony’s family disown him?
Teaser
•Henry, Willie’s estranged nephew, a gambling addict, owes money in multiple states and the loan sharks are on his ass.
◦Intriguing World: World of Cannabis, Legal cannabis dealers
◦Intriguing World: Jones Farmacy celebrates 10 years at their gala.
◦Intrigue: Willie shouts out his whole family, including Henry who is not present, and deceased sister, Monica
◦Mystery: Henry isn’t at the gala when it starts
◦Intrigue 2: Willie explains that Henry’s flight was delayed, and he couldn’t be here (why was the flight delayed)
◦Strange Behavior: Henry already landed in Oregon two days ago (why did he lie about his flight?)
◦Deception: Family visit as a decoy to hideout from the loan sharks.
◦Hidden Layer/Mystery: Willie’s name is the trustee on the inheritance. Monica’s name is also on the document.
(M): How much money does Henry owe?
(OL): What’s the story behind the inheritance? Who is Monica Jones?
(OL) How are Henry and Willie related?
Act 1
Tony demands more responsibility and freedom in the company.
◦Intrigue: Tony does mundane, routine day to day tasks, but seems to be the most knowledgeable one.
◦Mystery: Why does Tony have to get Willie’s approval on all his deals.
◦Hidden Agenda: Tony speaks about stepping up at the gala, putting Willie on the spot.
◦Wound: Tony’s past behaviors when he was drinking, is why Willie and Noelle don’t trust him to run the company.
◦Hidden Layer: Elaine thinks if Willie hands over control to Tony, they can leave the country.
◦Accusation: Noelle accuses Tony of being a “yes” man.
◦Accusation: The other cannabis business owners question Tony’s lack of power at Jones Farmacy. “Dude, close the fucking deal”
◦Strange Behavior: Willie feels his career is peaking although he’s supposed to be prepping for retirement.
(M): Why does Tony have to get Willie’s approval on all his deals if they’re equals?
(OL): Why does Elaine want to leave the country?
(OL): What did Tony do to damage his relationships and lose their trust?
Act 2
Henry has incriminating info on Willie. Henry threatens to go to the LOCC if Willie doesn’t pay him.
◦Mystery: Heather learns that Henry never got on the plane that was supposedly delayed.
◦Intrigue: The family learns that Henry was already in Oregon at the time the plane took off.
◦ Intrigue 2: Pete’s future with the LOCC is being questioned.
◦Accusation: Pete’s business is struggling. The Governor/LOCC points out how Pete can’t keep up with Willie Jones.
◦ Pete explains that he is self-made, not an heir like Willie.
◦Elaine has finally convinced Willie to take a break and leave Tony in charge.
(M): Why did Henry lie to the family?
(OL): Why is Pete’s business struggling?
(OL): How did Pete get on the governor’s bad side?
Act 3
Tony learns more details about the LOCC activities, including his father’s involvement.
◦Willie appoints Henry as CEO of Jones Farmacy
◦Tony resigns.
◦Pete hears about Tony digging into LOCC activity.
◦Pete goes to the Governor about Tony.
◦Pete’s term at the LOCC doesn’t get renewed
◦Pete’s VP walks out with the rest of the staff
◦The cannabis community, including Pete’s former VP, support Tony
(M): How long has Willie been blackmailing business owners?
(OL): How was Willie able to get the inheritance? Who else knows about it?
(OL): Where is Henry and Heather’s father?
Act 4
Pete offers Tony a sweet deal. He wants him on his team at Green Diamonds.
◦Accusation: Noelle tells tony he needs to spread his wings, get from under his dad.
◦Hidden Agenda: The cannabis community explains to Tony how valuable he is. Tony is becoming closer with the cannabis business community.
o Deception: Willie lies to Tony to hide the blackmail.
o Hidden Agenda: Pete feels Tony would be a great addition to his company, Green Diamonds.
o Suspicion: Pete suspects that Tony is digging into LOCC activity.
o Secret: Henry hides his gambling loans from Willie and Heather.
o Conspiracy: Tony learns more about Willie’s involvement with LOCC fraud.
o Hidden Layer: Pete offers to smooth things over with Noelle.
o Hidden Agenda: Tony decides not to return to Jones Farmacy.
(M): Will Tony work for Pete? Why did Pete’s other staff walk out on him?
(OL): Why does Willie hide the blackmail from Tony?
(OL): How deeply is Willie involved in the LOCC scandal? Is Pete also involved?
Act 5
Tony accepts a position as VP of Green Diamonds, Jones Farmacy’s competition.
o Intrigue: Tony receives multiple offers from the cannabis community
o Mystery: Willie cancels his plans to leave town.
o Danger: The loan sharks track Henry down and arrive in Portland.
(M): What’s the real reason for Pete hiring Tony?
(OL): What is Pete and Willie’s history?
(OL): How much money does Henry owe?
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