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Lesson 2
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Jan’s ACT 1
WIL: Mainly I allow myself letting the characters speak in a rough direction of what the story needs to flow forward. From characterizations earlier I remember where the intriguing sound might be, doing it not correcting it. moving forward.
forward. ACT 1: TRAVEL
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – DAY
Oliver leans over the table – some time has passed – and shoves a glass of water into his third of the table.
OLIVER
Ok, let’s look at it this way. Here s some water. what do you want to put next on the playfield? A name, a name of a village? Tell me
MAHMOUD
My name is Mahmoud Khalid ben Khalid Al Masmouri and I am warrior of Allah.
OLIVER
Yes. But even warriors have knights, servants, chieftains. Allah would accept apologies if we’d knew who ordered you to trigger.
MAHMOUD
Allah is wise. He sees it all.
OLIVER
He does. And the he will see that the kid does not know what to do with 99 virgins. Too…
A YOUNG SOLDIER enters the room, salutes and walks over to Oliver, whispers discreetly in his ear.
OLIVER
Thank you soldier. (turns) Now we’re heading from playground to death row, Mahmoud. One kid, two body counts on our end. Murder.
Oliver hangs in silently.
Patient.
MAHMOUD
(under his breath)
Allah is wise. One of our child heroes takes two of your well trained men. (looks at Oliver). We have more children and women than you soldiers.
Oliver invisible breathes to calm, (turns to soldier)
OLIVER
Thank you soldier, dismissed.
The young soldier salutes, turns…the wrong way…Mahmoud checks and jumps… oliver realizing same time but beeing on the wrong side of the body. Mahmoud grabs the long knife on the young soldiers hip and re surfaces with the deadly blade in his hand.
Oliver pushers the young soldier out of the eyeline and signals the guard by the door to not use his weapon.
MAHMOUD
Allah will show me the way. Allah is wise.
OLIVER
Now we’re talking. Stop Mahmoud. Nothing will happen here. Nothing
He signals the guard by the door
OLIVER
Allah will be questioned now, as nobody will send you to see your destined virgins. Not 99, not one, none.
Nobody is armed here but the door guard and you. Not me and not the young stupid walking in here with a knife to his hip.
What do you want to do? Want to debate with Allah?
I`ll tell …- stop don’t wove – listen. I am giving now orders to the guard: Sergeant, you are going not to shoot the suspect. Train at his tighs, calves and ankles. Shoot until he cannot get to you, off the ground nor to the door. Copy that.
GUARD BY THE DOOR
Sir, copy that, sir.
OLIVER
That’s for that, you will not die through the enemy. So, what now? My young camerade will stay back in the far corner, watch and hope to survive this. And he will. And you will.
Oliver moves slowly towards the interrogation table
OLIVER
Leaves you with me. Hmh. Me? No dying, no virgins, no honor.
Mahmoud begins visibly to react to Oliver’s negotiation.
MAHMOUD
(agitated)
These kind of fairy tales do not work with Allah. We don’t have to listen to infidels
OLIVER
Fine, Allah may stay out of it. Leaves us with just you .and this interrogation about a cowardly set ambush. And your trial in Brussels. No honor… Or death row, yes, dedpends. Honor… No. Certainly a No
Mahmoud steps back into his corner raising the knife …. And then the move to cut his own throat.
Oliver knew it, steps on the chair , grabs the bottle of water from the table… flies into Mahmouds corner …
Mahmoud irritated for a split second to turn the knife against Oliver or himself … looses time … and Oliver gushes the water into the face of Mahmoud and split seconds later against his wrist. Knife gone, Oliver lays on him
OLIVER
Guard, take him. And to his cell..
Done. No fight.
The guard rushes into their corner of the cage and fixes one hand and with oliver getting up, the other one.
OLIVER
24 hours no contact. Food and water based on human rights, nothing more, nothing less.
Mahmoud spits on the floor in front of Oliver.
OLIVER
Isn’t Allah great? How does that get any better?
Mahmoud is led away.see Aide In the opened door we see AIDE arrive.
AIDE
(formal)
Major Wind, Lieutenant Colonel Brauen request your presence.
Oliver looks at his aide, they are buddies and comrades and soldiers, knowing every tone between the lines.
AIDE
… Instantly
Oliver reacts …
EXT. MILITARY CAMP – DAY
… and they – Aide and Oliver – walk together through the German camp in the midst of the desert.
OLIVER
What is it? You know?
AIDE
Nope, nothing. But he looked like ..calm
OLIVER
Calm? That sound dangerous. Else thing? About my latest complain back home?
AIDE
I have checked mail and IT, not a word. Not what we have access to.
OLIVER
(suddenly aggitated)
I have it. I’m loosing one soul per month, only me. our people get killed protecting drug transports on behalf of the government.
AIDE
Oli, you have to do something about your nightmares first thing. it wount take long team will know. You re having them now in open daylight.
OLIVERIt’s not our job
(uninterrupted)
It s enough. Even if our pharmaceutical industy needs it
I spend my time interrogating the wrong killers. … And your right, don’t know
AIDE
I m with you, but now cool it. Let’s be army buisness
OLIVER
Right. I am the fuck of army biz.
Walk away into the HQ building, talking
INT. CAMP HQ – OFFICE – DAYFOR AN UNDETERMINED
Oliver stays in front of a desk.
His Commanding Officer, Lieutenant Colonel BRAUEN looking at a map.
LT CL BRAUEN
Sad afternoon, Major Wind, Stay at ease.
OLIVER
Yes Sir, losses. Triggered by an individual misinterpreation. Fault – lead to own death and casualtyies .If I may ( he is not interrupted) We had 15 minues packing the trucks ahead of us . We would have fall for one of their traps. It wasnt really the mistake of this unexperienced …
LT CL BRAUEN
Sorry, appreciauteda but interrupted, this meeting has a different topic…. You are flying home. You are realedsd for an undeterminedd window of time.
OLIVER
Sir. I had to send this. Too many are dying becuase of …
LT CL BRAUEN
..and it is not about your petition either. Would please sit down?
Oliver does
LT CL BRAUEN
It is my sad duty to send you home because..let me make it brief. You are fyling home to assist your mother as your father has passed away last night.
Oliver looks at his LT C.
Stone faced. Stare. Nothing.
LT CL BRAUEN
Nothing soothers this. It’s differnt. Please do not become a stranger , we are here for you
Oliver gets out his chair.
OLIVER
I appreciate Sir. With your permission?
INT. CAMP HQ – TRAVEL MANAGEMENT – DAY
TRANSPORTATION MANAGER LT.
Yes and Yes. YES you have travel status. And Yes, you have the next available seat in xy hours
AIDE
Common ther e must be a better scheduling, this is a sad thing and he
Oliver is not parte´of this , staying back
TRANSPORTATION MANAGER LT.
No, .. he has already prio 2 from Lt.Brauen. We re looking
AIDE
Prio 2? What’s Prio 1 then? Can’t you put him in there?
TRANSPORTATION MANAGER LT.
One? That’s war, fly back to report to the Chancellor and the ministers. Really.
OLIVER
(from the back)
Is there any short cut?
TRANSPORTATION MANAGER LT.
Yes sir. In two days.
EXT. CAMP – DAY
OLIVER
I want you to find something to take me out of here. Not 49 or 44. IN Six the lates. A flying carepet, elephant or something.
Aide leaves, Oliver on his bed, alone, no tears.
INT. TENT/BARRACK – OLIVER – DAY
Oliver packs his belongings and tries to reach his mother on his satellite phone.
There is no answer.
Aide enters.
AIDE
Oli, let’s get running. No flights or the one cargo that leaves in six.
OLIVER
(wakes alert)
Now? Where?
AIDE
Now-Now. I’ll tell on the run,c’mon
Oliver seizes the opportunity, closes backpack while already moving.
They run.
EXT. AIRFIELD – DAWN
Oliver and Aide running
AIDE
You have probably no seat or so. Stuff flying back for repair
OLIVER
That ok, havent sleapt sinmce days anyawy. You makle sure that Mahmoud is alive when I’m back. Thta is not an order, I want you to promise.
AIDE
Oli, c’mon? The HQ will want us to
OLIVER
Promise
AIDE
Yes, will be alive and waiting
OLIVER
I#ll do the funeral and will be back. Days may be a ….
Oliver phone rings.It’s loud
EXT. AIRFIELD – CARGO PLANE – DAWN
Aide sees a blue light flashing above Oliver’s breast pocketzs points at it. Oliver grabs his ringing satellite phone and it shows MAMMA
OLIVER
Mum? I am on..
THE SCREEN OPENS TO A SPLIT OF OLIVER AND FREDDIE
FREDDIE
Oliver, Are you coming ? I need …
The connection is noisy,
OLIVER
Yes Mum, I am just jumping on aplane and …
FREDDIE
O need to tell you something urgent. Can we speak for 5 minutes?
OLIVER
Mum, I am at the plane. I need to go on board ….
FREDDIE
But it’s urgent. Your dad. The family is going out of ….
Oliver is running into the open hatch of the cargo, the cardo officer is waving him in.
From the other side a semi truck speeds into frame. Two soldiers bringing a body bag, running towards the open hatch.
OLIVER
I can’z hear you well. We talk in the morning ok? We re flying out now.I ‘ll call you when landed
Oliver hangs up, turns, waving to aide
AIDE
(only as mouth moves)
Call me, weirdo
Making the idiot moves
Oliver smirks, nods. Closing hatch interrupts their eye line..
INT. CARGO PLANE – DARK
(Optional)
Oliver sits between damages jeeps and trucks, weaponary. Unable to take his eyes away from the body bag. He shakes like a baby – no tears though.
EXT. AIRFIELD GERMANY – NIGHT
Rain, wind, fall.
Oliver as he disembarks the opening hatch. Soldiers waiting.
Oliver checks the situation approaches the officer supervising the ürocedure
OLIVER
Hey
AIRFIELD OFFICER
(checks,salutes)
Major
OLIVER
Save it, dismiss. Do me a favor? There is a bag on the flight? One of my team returning. Please see after some of your sensitive guys go see his parents
AIRFIELD OFFICER
A comrad? Fuck. Sorry Major, we shall do, look after him on the way home.
OLIVER
Appreciate. … I need to sleep, any bunk free here.
AIRFIELD OFFICER
Sorry no Sir. We are an airfield only, no barracks no nothing other tahn tricks and gasoline.
OLIVER
Next exit?
AIRFIELD OFFICER
The 9Inn, I can get you a driver. Best option
Oliver nods
INT. THE 9 INN – NIGHT
Oliver looks at..
CONCIERGE 9INN
…not kidding. 360 €uro is it until six o’clock. Must understand we charge by the 30 minutes, you’ll do the math.
OLIVER
I really want to sleep, nothing else.
CONCIERGE 9INN
Got it but the rrom is blocked, dude.
OLIVER
Look, how does that get any better? I just return from war zone, brought back a buddy home.A Rebate for a just a shower?
CONCIERGE 9INN
your real? not from the airfield? Ok, here’s my hero rebate
He truns the sign paper,with a scribbled number on it
OLIVER
Hm, seems I AM a hero
Grabs the pen and signs.
CONCIERGE 9INN
But maybe one of the girls needs to kae a rest on the other side of your bed, jus a nap
OLIVER
Man, I am so dead, haven’t slept for mopre than 36. As long as she doesn’t shot at em.
CONCIERGE 9INN
No extra service? Right?
Oliver grabs the key card.
INT. ROOM WITH A BED – DARK
Oliver emerges from the shower, his tiredness evident.
It’s a tiny room. Oliver comes from the shower mounted in the room, steps and turnsover his heavy backpack, we see several tattos but more present are his Scars from heavy wounds on back and his arm,rememberences to his past experiences.
Exhausted, Oliver grabs his phone, now the satellite and a older smart phone. But the he glances at his watch, late. He puts his back on the nightstand
Rubs his face, and
falls asleep before he hits linen
INT. ROOM WITH A BED – DARK
Oliver is restless in his sleep, bumping into Xenia’s arm and
immediately becoming alert. He Startles high and looks, ready to fight…
XENIA, a semi-attractive pro, wakes too.
XENIA
What?
Sees his hands ready for comabt
OLIVER
I said, no services, id I?
XENIA
Right but boss told you one might need to rest here
OLIVER
Did I?
XENIA
Yes. Man, sex worker, sleep, peace.
She looks at the bedspread
XENIA
But maybe you wanna reconsider, regulate some pressure before going home seeing Mutti.
Wrong button “Mutti” rings the bell. Oliver looks at his wrist
OLIVER
Shit, it’s eight? Man.
He jumps out of bed, forgetting. He is totally naked. Xenia looks at his/him
XENIA
(sarcasm yet motivating)
You sure You don’t want to regulate a bit?
OLIVER
What are doing this mornin’? I’ll give you 50.
Conversation goes sideways.
XENIA
Changed your mind quickly. Sure
OLIVER
Surely not. Drive me to the next car rental
XENIA
Oh, ok. 70 then.
Oliver stepping naked over his back pack towards bath room, looks at her in her exotic call girl underwaear
OLIVER
Need a t shirt? Or so?
Xenia kind of likes his humor but mostly looks at his/him
XENIA
Got two… or so. In case you ever need to regulate pressure, emme know.
Xenia totally openly smiles at Oliver. Oliver first time relizes he stands in front of her with an erection
OLIVER
Can we?
END OF ACT 1
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