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Lesson 27
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Tasha Solved Scene Problems!
Doing this assignment, I learned: using this technique helps you to really see how the scenes work together and you gain a deeper understanding of story dynamics and character relationships.
Identify any scenes that have any of the four problems and make the prescribed improvements:
Act 1
Opening – Bethany’s Exorcism
Problem:
Cliche
Fix:
Added the element of Bethany helping to exorcise herself
Added the element of the assistant clergy trying to kill her instead of helping to exorcise her
Act 1
Church Scene – Bethany tells Deacon Anders about bad dates
Problem:
Basic: Didn’t deliver on purpose
Weak: Needed stronger scene arc
Fix: Established the old ways better by changing talking head scene to a confessional scene that depicted dates and tied dates to penance
Act 1
Int Group Home – Kids talk to Bethany about being gloomy
Int. Group Home – Bethany tells kids about date with Ben
Problem:
Basic: Didn’t deliver on purpose
Weak: Needed stronger scene arc
Fix: Combined two scenes at the youth home to deliver on challenging the wound and raising the stakes for the protag
Act 1
Church scene – Bethany and Deacon have a big argument
Problem: Didn’t challenge antag
Fix: Added the catered dinner for nucio to deliver on Deacon Anders’s wound
Act 1
Date scene – Restaurant – Brad tells Bethany he can’t date her
Problem: Weak Scene: Needed to up the stakes
Fix: Added fork stab marks on Brad
Act 3
React – Rectory – Bethany goes to the rectory
Problem: Weak Scene: Needed interest technique
Fix: Changed dead rose to dead flowers to focus around and interest technique – suspense
Act 3
Rethink – Cup O’ Mo Joe Cafe Scene – Bethany turns to Amy for help
Problem: Make the scene arc stronger
Fix: Crafted a better trap for discovering if Deacon Anders is the one behind sending the videos
Act 4
Dilemma – Bethany’s Soul – Bethany talks to Demon 23
Problem: Weak: Need to raise the stakes
Fix: Added to the dilemma that if Bethany doesn’t trust Demon 23, she herself could be sent to Hell
Act 4
Climax – Church – Deacon Anders demonstrates his powers
Problem:
Weak: needed to make the arc stronger
Weak: needed to up the stakes
Fix: Added foster kids to the seen to put them in danger
Act 4
Resolution – Prison – Deacon Anders gets his comeuppance
Problem:
Basic: Didn’t deliver on purpose
Challenge: Didn’t deliver on Wound
Fix: Changed it from the Vatican to Prison
Act 4
Resolution – Park- Brad and Bethany talk
Problem:
Basic: Didn’t deliver on goal
Cliche: just a basic closure scene
Challenge: Didn’t deliver on value and wound
Fix: Instead of talking to Brad, she talks to Demon 23 through a possessed Brad
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ASSIGNMENT 27
Subject line: Pat’s Solved Scene Problems!
What I learned doing this assignment is after writing quickly there are a lot of errors. Also I only have 60 pages so I got a lot to work on.
1. Look through your script and identify any scenes that have any of these four problems.
• A) Basic Scene Problems I’ll make changes in descriptions and dialogue.
• B) Weak Scenes I’ll use stronger verbs
• C) Situations Don’t Challenge Characters I’ll change scenery and dialogut.
• D) Cliché Scenes I’m not sure I’ve any cliché’ I’ll need to check further.
2. For any scene problems you find, make the prescribed improvements
As above described..
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