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Lesson 15
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Madeleine’s Height of the Emotion (Assignment 1)
What I learned doing this assignment is I can create profound dialogue by finding the height of an emotional moment in the story and then brainstorm lines that can deliver the deeper meaning of the scene. This was the hardest assignment for me so far. I need to keep working on it.
The Five Most Emotional Moments In My Screenplay:
1. Anna-Maude severing the head of a rattlesnake suddenly blocking her path. Fight or Flight. She chooses to fight.
The incident represents the beginning of monsoon season for Anna-Maude. The worst time of the year for Anna-Maude, it’s when Sally disappeared and Sally’s mother drowned. It’s also when she and Tony became estranged.
New line:
Anna-Maude, “I hate monsoon season.”
Anna-Maude meets Stella shortly after killing the snake. Stella notices the rattlesnake splatter on Anna-Maude’s jeans.
New line:
Anna-Maude, “Dammit! I hate monsoon season. Rattlesnakes, ants,
centipedes, every kind of horror rising up from the earth. Every year, I pray to God I live through it.”
2. Murl shows Tony the painting of Sally and Anna-Maude when they were 13 years old. It brings back memories of Sally’s disappearance.
New line:
Tony: “Feels like it happened yesterday.”
Murl leaves Tony in front of the painting a bit, during which time, Tony remembers how cruel his mother was to Anna-Maude when they were kids.
Murl returns to find Tony staring at the painting of the girls.
New line:
Murl, “Conjures up better days I hope.”
3. Anna-Maude supports Tony to the front door of his house after he was bumped into an irrigation ditch by a big dually truck. As she reaches under a pot for his house key, a couple of feral dogs show themselves, growling and barking. After the two get safely inside the house —
New line: Tony, “They’re just hungry dogs.”
New line:
Anna-Maude, “Hungry FERAL dogs. Probably the ones
stealing chickens around here. Who survives war then lets himself get
eaten by dogs? Or bumped into an irrigation ditch by a psycho?
4. Anna-Maude cleans and treats the wound on Tony’s back that is the most recent addition to his scars. One of the older scars forms a zigzag through shrapnel craters. Running her finger lightly over the zigzag scar, she remembers where she’s seen it before.
New lines:
Anna-Maude, “You’re –”
Tony “Thomas Anthony Oxley.”
Anna-Maude , “You’ve been lying to me.”
Tony, “Every word I said was true.
Anna-Maude, “Why would you come back here?”
Tony, “It’s the last place I called home.”
5. Early the morning after the fire that burned down Anna-Maude’s farmhouse, Stella arrives with a bag of clothes Anna-Maude can wear.
New lines:
ANNA-MAUDE, “You’re a lifesaver.”
STELLA, “I’ve also got a spare bedroom.”
ANNA-MAUDE, “I’ll think about it.”
STELLA, “What’s to think about? You just said, someone wants you dead.”
ANNA-MAUDE, “I can’t just pull up stakes. I still have five horses to feed.”
Tony joins them.
Taken by surprise —
STELLA (to Tony), “Who are you?”
ANNA-MAUDE, “This is Tony, one of my neighbors.”
STELLA, “Really.
Tony smiles at Stella, turns to Anna-Maude.
TONY, “I’ll feed the horses.”
ANNA-MAUDE, “You don’t like horses.”
TONY, “Do I have to like them to feed them?”
ANNA-MAUDE. “No, of course not.”
TONY, “While you’re away, I’ll have a couple of fire alarms installed.”
STELLA (firm to Anna-Maude), “See you tonight.”
(deliberately to Tony), “Thank you.”
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Penny Wingert, Getting on the spaceship to try to communicate with the aliens, “Remember their isn’t anything you can’t do Rita. Inference you can negotiate with the aliens.” Survival of the fittest
says the president. We must learn to sleep together. Meaning we must learn to live together and thrive. Let’s get together and live in peace.
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Madeleine Builds Meaning with Dialogue
What I learned doing this assignment is that I can give a line of dialogue meaning that changes over the course of the screenplay. I need more practice doing this.
The Line, The Arc, the Different Meaning I gave the line in the scenes it appeared.
1. Keep your eyes peeled. Where there’s one snattle bug, there’ll be another.
The first time this line appears, Anna-Maude utters it, and snattle bug refers to a rattlesnake.
The second time this line appears, Anna-Maude utters it, and snattle bug refers to the driver of a big white dually that bumped Tony into a irrigation ditch.
The third time this line appears, snattle bug refers to Delinda, the murderer’s daughter, when she attempts to stop Tony from shooting her father.
2. Newcomer. Been to hell and back. It’s written all over him.
The first time this line appears, it is spoken by a convenience store clerk, who has seen Tony’s cratered legs.
The second time this line appear, it is spoken by Delinda, who has seen Tony’s cratered legs.
The third time this line appears, it is spoken by Anna-Maude, who tries to stop the bleeding of a new wound on Tony’s back. His back is riddled with scars obtained over his lifetime, one which Anna-Maude remembers and causes her to figure out who he really is.
3. Careful. It’s got thorns.
The first time this line is used it refers to a rose Tony gives to Anna-Maude.
The second time this line is used it refers to Delinda when she loses it after finding out that Tony is giving the archaeological dig to Anna-Maude, not her friend Quentin.
The third time this line is used it refers to Anna-Maude at the excavation of Sally’s grave. It refers to a riled Anna-Maude accusing Owen of murder.
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Penny Wingert. Only believe all things are possible only believe. There isn’t anything you can’t do if you put your mind to it. Come unto me all yeehaw that are heavy laden and I will give you rest. I Learne you have to turn things over to you higher power in order too survive.
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Penny Wingert, Idea -change the world, stop the madness, By rapture or join the aliens abroad their spaceship. 2. form a rebellion when forced labor by the alien capture. 3. form a coalition to fight the aliens and defeat them. 4. Learn to commingle and accept the alien culture. 5. Move into a new dimension and have eternal peace.
what I learned is that you have to keep plodding along and trust in God.
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Penny Wingert, My idea is to change the world one person at a time , I believe the rapture will save some from the horrendous catastrophe cause by the climate change. but others will have to join the aliens invaders to d
survive and be transported to another planet. Some will learn to commingle but others e
will resist and fight. We will be forced to move into a new dimension.
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