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Lesson 13
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Subject: Mark Napier’s ACT 2 Reaction to the Turning Point Scene
What did I learn? I pretty much learning the formatting and layout of these ACTs. I am working on speed now.
ACT 2:
BEAT SHEET REACTION TO THE TURNING POINT SCENE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Security-Investigator’s Office), Langley, Virginia–Day
–Mark briefs Headquarters security investigator on case in question.
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Military Affairs, Branch Chief office), Langley, Virginia–Day
–Mark accepts a new mission assignment in Afghanistan.
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
–DCOS tries to pressure the OMA Office Director to have Mark fired.
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
–DCOS fabricates a ruse to have Mark charged with a felony and be prosecuted.
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (COS’ Office), Kabul, Afghanistan–Day
–Mark arrives in Afghanistan to be briefed by COS “The Spider” to be Deputy Chief of Base
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ACT 2:
REACTION TO THE TURNING POINT SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Security-Investigator’s Office), Langley, Virginia–Day
BEGINNING: Mark briefs Headquarters security investigator on case in question. He also expresses concern for the employee who is wrongfully accused and outlined the negative atmosphere toward him.
MIDDLE: He reveals his insightful discussion with Station’s Chief of Communications and the precaution he took to ensure his report was not altered.
END: Mark expresses concern and anticipation of being retaliated against in hopes Office of Security will not give credence to false allegations.
ACT 2:
REACTION TO THE TURNING POINT SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Security-Investigator’s Office), Langley, Virginia–Day
DESCRIPTION: After Mark lands at the Washington-Dulles International Airport and disembarks to report to his home office in the New Headquarters Building, he is informed that he has a message from the investigator in charge of the case and needs him to report to her office in Old Headquarters Building. Mark knocks on her office door and introduces himself.
Mark: “Hi….Mark here from OMA. I just got in from Iraq Station. ….I understand you left a message inviting me for a ‘fireside chat’ ? ….. I suppose it’s related to the Iraq Station fiasco that got the wrong guy deported?”
Investigator: “Oh hi!… Yes..Yes… Please come in and have a seat.” The investigator is dressed in a black suit and skirt with white blouse.
Investigator: “I’ve read the detailed cable report which pretty much captured the essence of what took place. …. I know you used to work for the Office of Security as a Security Protective Officer years back, so you wrote it like a police report.” She jovially laughs, as well as Mark.
Mark: “Yes…force of habit I suppose.”
“Is there anything else beyond the report that you’d like to add?”
Mark: “First and foremost, I think Gary was horribly treated in this matter and was raped of his dignity. … I know he requested to see a psychiatrist in Jordan, but I did all I could to set the record straight for him after my office confirmed his report.”
….“Second, prior to this incident I was being subjected to a hostile work environment that was compounded by three events. ….”
….”The DCI’s representative visited Station and four military command elements that the CIA has embedded 2 man cell teams with and the feedback he got was not flattering for Station. The DCOS, Reilly, blamed my teams…. “
…”Then Station’s Internment Facility Coordinator Officer…Pedro, he worked near me got pissed to find out I made more money than him and became aggressive after that…I don’t quite understand why since I only worked for the CIA 16 years before becoming an Independent Contractor versus his 3 years??? …He asked how much I made and I was honest with him is all.”…..
…”Incidentally, he apparently creates hostile work environments for women as well. …I have seen him personally go after a woman and make her cry and another analyst he called her analysis stupid… forgetting he cc:’d her on the return message to a slough of folks.”
…”That triggered nasty notes back and forth like 10 times before the DCOS finally sent out a message in big bold red letters: ‘CEASE FIRE…CEASE FIRE…CEASE FIRE.’ “
….”Before Pedro became abrasive towards me he admitted sheepishly towards me that his home office of the Crimes and Narcotics Center told him: ‘You need to get out of our face for two years.’ …So, don’t take my word, ask CNC.“
…”Bottom line is I got tired of the negative atmospherics and being isolated from important staff meetings and Pedro feeding into it …..plus covering for OMA for sending folks out with no training, let alone no CIA experience. …That’s why I was working long hours because I am having to mentor and guide them like children.”
Investigator: “Well thank you for that insight…and it was admirable that you stepped up to the plate at great risk to yourself and career here at CIA.”
Mark: “Well …. As noted in the report, I was told that the guy who downloaded the child pornography apparently had a history of this before. … I obtained that insight while talking to Station’s Chief of Communications who knew the guy for 20 years.” ……
….“I never said a word about what unfolded, but he made the astute observation that he never saw Joe behave in such a manner, since the last time he downloaded child pornography.“
…”He stopped in mid sentence and it hit him like a brick in the face, before he figured out on his own what was going on.” ….
DESCRIPTION: The investigator remained silent allowing Mark to talk uninterrupted, but was clearly absorbing it all in.
Mark:…“I suppose you’ve been tracking communications between Joe and whoever he’s talking to for your investigation?”
Investigator: “Oh yes.”
Mark: “You no doubt realize that I anticipate being retaliated against by Iraq Station? …I have had to endure a good deal of hostilities from Station as is.”
DESCRIPTION: The investigator’s posture stiffened as she motioned her head in complete concurrence without a word. She knew it was the cultural norms of CIA executives to wield their positions as a weapon of mass destruction and the Directorate of Operation was no exception.
Mark: “Anything else? ….Oh by the way! … I do not know if Station will try to alter my cable, but I placed a copy of it in my notes system and sent it to myself as an electronic backup. I do not trust Station leadership and particularly I do not trust the DCOS…..Also one other thing.” ….
…..”In addition, to being new to the IC (Independent Contractor) world I was working longer hours as I said….well I had to call together the Station’s Chief of Finance, Chief of Human Resources and the COS’ secretary who has final approval before the finance cables go out to review and approve my pay voucher, so I hope they don’t sit on it.”
Investigator: “OK…Great! … Thank you for stopping by. I know you must be exhausted from the long trip.”
DESCRIPTION: Mark departs her office and heads to the Agency cafeteria to ‘grease his belly’ before returning to the office for his follow on assignment.
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ACT 2:
SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Military Affairs, Branch Chief office), Langley, Virginia–Day
BEGINNING: Mark learns that DCOS Reilly is raising Hell with OMA, but Mark discusses with his branch chief that the whole ordeal could have been avoided, if Station had not had a knee jerk reaction to the incident.
MIDDLE: Mark also addresses the problem between COS and military commanders on the ground and how the entire affair is turning into a repeat of Operation Desert Storm, whereby the US military felt that they did not get adequate cooperation from the CIA, then.
END: Mark accepts a new mission assignment in Afghanistan to become the CIA’s Deputy Chief of Base at Bagram Airbase, Afghanistan that elevates his standing as an Intelligence Officer. His responsibility will be to support CIA counterterrorism operations countrywide.
ACT 2:
SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Military Affairs, Branch Chief office), Langley, Virginia–Day
DESCRIPTION: Mark steps into the office to see what Doug has in store for him on his next assignment.
Mark: “Hey Doug! …. What’s the word?”
Doug: “Mark…Hey bud …how are you? … I’m seeing the flack from your cable has hit a raw nerve with Station. ….Your early departure without a word did not go over well either.”
Mark: “As I expected it would. ….I lost a lot of beauty sleep dealing with that ordeal. After 40 hours of no sleep, l was looking like the poster child for birth control.” … Doug laughs.
“Besides…After the way I was treated with disdain and disrespect??? … I wanted them to symbolically see my elbows and asshole in defiance walking away.“
“…So they can blow it out of their asses, if they think I was going to give them further satisfaction by screaming at me….Absolutely no way.”
Doug: “I can understand your point of view.”
Mark: “The worst part is that this whole affair could have all been prevented had Banks took a moment to talk to both parties. … Also had Station’s Chief of Security not blown off Gary then they all would be viewed as superheroes right now.” ….
“Plus….D’Angelo, the COS, if he ever stopped with his ‘SUPERIORITY COMPLEX” mentality in dealing with the regular military….Things would go a lot smoother in relationships with the Warfighters on the ground if the chip on his shoulder fell off….”
Doug: “….Would you agree their unwillingness to deal with conventional forces is simply creating tensions and lack of cooperation….. just as it did during Desert Storm?….”
Mark: “Yes…. Anyway…that’s neither here nor there…..Bottom line, this office sending out inexperienced folks from to Station does not help the situation either.”
Doug: “I agree, but we’re so short handed …We’re just tossing warm bodies out to fill the gap. …Right now as it stands, Reilly is furious. ….He’s been raising Hell with the office director.”
Mark: “I’ve already addressed my concern with the investigator overseeing this. …I told her flat out that I expected to be retaliated against.”
Doug: “Well….On that note, I’ve arranged for you to replace our guy in Bagram, Afghanistan as the Deputy Chief of Base. He has been there a while and is ready to come home. …I originally had you scheduled for Kuwait to sit on the US commanding general’s staff, but that’s been in flux and has not come to fruition just yet.”
Mark: “OK.. Interesting…. Has the Chief of Station there approved of my coming out?” … and who is the COS there?”
Doug: “He’s called ‘The Spider’ by President Karzai himself…Greg Vogel. …He’s been there nearly two years himself at Karzai’s request after he saved Karzai’s ass from an assassination attempt.”
Mark: “Ok… So what will my mission be overall and when do you have me heading out?”
Doug: “Your primary function will be to support Agency counterterrorism operations countrywide in theater with the resources that the airbase has to bring to table.”
….“As for your departure…You are already scheduled on the flight heading out in 2 weeks. …. So go home, relax and get your affairs in order and be ready to head out then. ….See you in two weeks.”
Mark: “Okie Dokie! … See ya then, but in the meantime you can use your desk as a bunker to shield yourself from incoming rounds from Reilly. ….Mark laughs as he departs.
DESCRIPTION: Doug doesn’t find not much to smirk at, since he knows he dropped the ball in the whole matter leaving Mark holding the bag in Iraq.
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ACT 2:
SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
BEGINNING: DCOS tries to pressure the OMA Office Director to have Mark fired and blames him for mishandling the situation when new information came to light, just as he is to blame for the negative review of Station’s interaction with the military.
MIDDLE: OMA Director admits his office was partly responsible and basically takes his lumps from Station.
END: DCOS notes his intentions to hold up Mark’s pay cable voucher pending his staff’s investigation of irregularities.
ACT 2:
SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
DESCRIPTION: DCOS Reilly calls OMA Director (Redcloud) on the Green Line to express Station’s disappointment of Mark’s tour and how he handled the entire affair. Reilly tries to get the Director to fire Mark, but the Branch Chief stands defends Mark and squashes the idea.
Redcloud: Answers his phone: “OMA Director!”
Reilly: “Redcloud…Reilly here in Iraq Station. ….What the Hell is going on with you guys?… I asked for support from your office and all I get out here is a shit bag sent out here!…I’m talking about Mark. ….Since day 1 he’s been nothing, but a disaster.”
Redcloud: “Yeah I am surprised as you are by his actions to leave so soon.”
Reilly: “Not just that….He should have gotten a hold of Banks who was filling in as Acting Chief of Station to head this off, but instead he leaves us a shit show. …Just as he did with the Director’s negative feedback on Station’s relationship with the US military. …He made us look stupid. ….Once again…. he is unreliable. ….I want him fired!”
Redcloud: “Well…there is more involved before we can take such an action. ..His branch chief says we are partly to blame…. and in regards to the DCI’s representative and my Branch Chief who met with the four military command elements says Mark was busy taking care of logistics to get them in and out of Iraq in 5 days, so he was not present, but for only one meeting and that one nearly got them all killed when the aircraft engine failed.”
Reilly: “I don’t care!….He needs fired. …I don’t want him anywhere near this theater of operation. ….GOT IT???”
Redcloud: “Yeah …Yeah!”
Reilly: “Well…one more thing! …His cable he submitted noting hours worked for 3 months that needs to be filed monthly shows discrepancies and I am holding up approval of his cable pending further investigation and I’ll be responding then.”
Redcloud: “Fair enough.” Reilly hangs the phone up.
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ACT 2:
SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
BEGINNING: DCOS fabricates a ruse to have Mark charged with a felony and be prosecuted.
MIDDLE: Reilly lays out his plan and intentions to Pedro who eagerly approves.
END: Pedro takes charge of writing the cable for the DCOS and appropriate Station personnel to concur on.
ACT 2:
SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
DESCRIPTION: DCOS Reilly is dissatisfied with OMA’s lack of balls to fire Mark so he calls Pedro into his office to discuss Mark’s pay voucher. Reilly has an underlying plan to quench his thirst for revenge by having Mark investigated and prosecuted for committing a felony, if all goes right with his scheme.
Reilly: “Pedro!!! …..Come in here!.” Pedro stands up from his computer sitting in the corner of the bay and scurries off to Reilly’s office.
Pedro: “You rang???”
Reilly: “You bet I did….. Listen up…I need to review that pay voucher of Mark’s. I want you to assess when he was not here in your presence to observe that he was actually working. …I need you to tally up the hours and reflect that in a cable that you are going to write….I want a dollar figure amount.”
Pedro: “OK??”
Reilly: “My intentions are to fuck the son-of-a-bitch over and send him to prison, if we can show that he tried to overcharge the Agency for hours not worked.” Pedro smiles and nods his head in approval.
Pedro: “Got it Chief! …I’ll get right on it!”
Reilly: “Take your time… The longer the asshole has to wait for his money the better as far as I am concerned.”
DESCRIPTION: Pedro chuckles and slowly shuffles to imitate the speed of which the request is to take place as he goes back off to his desk.
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ACT 2:
SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (COS’ Office), Kabul, Afghanistan–Day
BEGINNING: Mark arrives in Afghanistan two weeks later to be briefed by COS “The Spider” to be Deputy Chief of Base and that his title is what the military will recognize as Station’s representative to Division Headquarters, not his pay grade.
MIDDLE: COS outlines Mark’s mission and expectations while serving as D/COB.
END: Mark prepares to disembark for Bagram on his new assignment, but not before he visits the CIA’s Talibar.
ACT 2:
SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (COS’ Office), Kabul, Afghanistan–Day
DESCRIPTION: “The Spider” welcomes Mark to Station and provides his expectations of Mark serving as the CIA’s Deputy Chief of Base of Bagram Air Base. Mark assures the COS that he will do his very best and outlines his history with the CIA and US Army Reserves.
The Spider: “I’ve heard a great deal of your exploits.”…in a joking manner…Mark cracks a smile,
not sure if the COS has really heard anything. …..
Mark: “Sir, the one thing that I must remind you is that I am an IC and under COTR (Contract) regulations that I am not supposed to assume a leadership role.”
The Spider: “Yes, I know but out here I make the rules and you will assume that leadership role. It’s a title the US military respects and they do not need to know the details…..Bottom line you represent the CIA under Kevin who is Chief of Base out there.”
…”Kevin has been COB for a year and has several months to go before his tour ends so
it will be a good overlap for the two of you.”
…”Your mission here is to get to learn Bagram Airbase inside and out. You will be the go
to guy for everything as you will be supporting Station and all its bases countrywide in counterterrorism operations…..
…”That means fuel, medical support, supplies, military and air operational support, and the guy who interacts with the Bagram Internment Facility that houses all the bad guys.”
…”Any more dumb questions?? …he laughs…
Mark: “No sir.”
DESCRIPTION: Mark departs the COS’ office and visits the infamous CIA “Talibar” he’s heard so much about for the first time hoping for a drink and wonders facetiously to himself, if they have a “Gift Shop” before he heads to the cafeteria, then the flight line for his last stop.. Bagram.
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ASSIGMENT #13 ACT 2 BEGINS
What I learned writing the reaction to the turning point scene is to enjoy the ride my characters take me on. They meandered me away from my outline as I had written it but closer to my actual intention which was exciting.
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Outline reaction to the turning point scene:
Beginning: Carla gets into the club and is a fish out of water.
Middle: loads of trouble at the bar getting a drink. Ppl are so rude.
End: Carla is leaving. This is not her scene. She’d love to meet Harriet for coffee instead.
INT. NIGHT CLUB ON ABBOTT KINNEY – NIGHT
Upon entry Carla immediately feels out of place. It is loud, crowded and filled with hot young people dancing with their friends. Carla self-conciously scans the room looking for Harriet, she needs a life line or she’s leaving in 5, 4, 3, 2–suddenly Harriet pops right in front of Carla.
HARRIET
You did it! You got in! Nice work girl!
CARLA
Well yeah you just said to come in, the bouncer was cool like you said.
HARRIET
Ron is the best!
CARLA
Yeah. Do you come here a lot?
Harriet walks away from Carla leading her towards the dance floor.
HARRIET
As much as possible! I love this dance floor. I swear dancing is candy for the soul–it sweetens everything in life up.
CARLA
Yeah. Yeah. It’s cool. Very loud! (then) I think I need a drink first.
HARRIET
You sure?
CARLA
Yeah.
HARRIET
The bar is over there. But hurry cuz this DJ is crushing right now!
CARLA
Ok. I’ll be right back.
Carla makes her way through the crowded dance floor towards the bar. She manages to squeeze herself up to the bar and tries to get the bartender’s attention to no avail. A cocktail waitress taps her on the shoulder.
COCKTAIL WAITRESS
You can’t stand here! This is the service bar.
CARLA
What?
COCKTAIL WAITRESS
Move!
Carla stunned moves away from where she was standing and tries to get another vantage point at the busy bar to order a drink. She starts squeezing between two guys when one of them turns quickly and accidently dumps his cocktail all over her.
DUDE
Shit. My drink.
CARLA
Sorry.
Dude calls to his buddy.
DUDE
Bro, grab me another one. This chick just bumped my drink outta my hand.
Carla turns to leave. She’s had enough of this place. It was a mistake to come here. And just then, Harriet is right there.
HARRIET
What’s taking you so long? What happened?
CARLA
This place is too much for me. I can’t even get to the bar to order a drink. This guy just dumped his drink all over me and acted like it was my fault.
HARRIET
What? That’s bullshit. He’s like 10 years old. Put him in his place. Where’s the girl who told off Scotty Macintosh for spilling his juice box on her in grade 6?
CARLA
Ha! I can’t believe you remember that?
HARRIET
Of course I do! You were always so bold back then.
CARLA
That’s because I had you by my side.
HARRIET
Well, I’m here now aren’t I?
CARLA
You are.
Carla taps DUDE on the shoulder.
CARLA (CONT’D)
Hey! Kid. You just dumped your drink on me–
DUDE
Whatever lady.
Dude and his buddy walk away. Carla sees napkins on the bar and grabs some to dry her outfit. The bartender finally notices her.
BARTENDER
Hey!? You in?
CARLA
What?
BARTENDER
Some chick just bought a round of shots for everyone standing at the bar. You want one?
CARLA
Umm…
BARTENDER
Yes or no?!
CARLA
Yeah. Yes! Thanks.
Bartender slides a shot over in front of Carla.
CARLA (CONT’D)
What is it?
The bartender has moved on without answering. Everyone standing at the bar yells and downs their shot. Carla follows suit.
CARLA (CONT’D)
Oh fuck I hate tequila.
HARRIET
Well, at least you finally got a drink!
CARLA
Yeah. (then) I think I’m gonna go. This isn’t really my scene. Maybe we could grab a coffee in the morning?
HARRIET
Oh no! Don’t get scared off so easily. I swear once you hit the dance floor you’re gonna love it.
CARLA
Yeah. No. This is too much for me.
HARRIET
You sure?
CARLA
I’m sure. I hate this.
HARRIET
Okay. Suit yourself.
CARLA
Let’s grab coffee tomorrow morning though. I’m dying to really catch up.
HARRIET
Sure. Same spot you dumped your Americano on me today? Same time?
CARLA
Oh man, I’m sorry about that. But yes, same spot same time. After I drop Sam at school.
HARRIET
Sounds good. Get home safe.
CARLA
I will. Sorry about tonight.
HARRIET
Stop being sorry all the time. It’s all good.
Harriet shimmy’s back over to the dance floor.
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Lesson 13
Trish’s Act 2 Reaction to TP 1
What I learned doing this assignment is to keep going even though I don’t have all the beats figured out yet.
1. Using your Beat Sheet, outline Key Scene 1.
Emma talks to some staff. Gets nowhere with cleaning ladies.
Emma observes hotel guests. Makes notes.
Emma does online research. Someone watches her internet activity.
2. Write the “Reaction to the Turning Point” scene. (this took a few scenes to get out)
INT. HOTEL HALLWAY – DAY
A cleaning cart blocks a hallway. Two cleaning ladies do their thing.
Emma tries to eavesdrop on them by standing out of sight in the entryway of a neighboring room.
CLEANING LADY 1
I told him, “stop playing video games”. It’s too much.
CLEANING LADY 2
It’s no good. They don’t listen.
This not being a helpful conversation, Emma pretends to exit that room and “happen” upon the ladies.
EMMA
Oh, hi there.
CLEANING LADY 1
Hi. Do you need something?
EMMA
I was wondering if I could ask you some questions.
The ladies exchange glances and shrug.
CLEANING LADY 2
About what?
EMMA
Something weird is happening here. Everyone keeps having nightmares.
CLEANING LADY 1
Bad dreams?
EMMA
Yes, everyone. It’s like it’s somehow on purpose.
They exchange glances again.
CLEANING LADY 2
We don’t know anything about that.
CLEANING LADY 1
Sam has been here a long time. Maybe he knows something.
Her friends shushes her.
CLEANING LADY 2
I heard Mercury is in retrograde. I bet that’s it.
Not the worst idea Emma’s ever heard.
EMMA
When’s it over? Do you know?
CLEANING LADY 2
2 more weeks, I think.
EMMA
We’ll be gone by then, in one way or another…Okay, thanks.
She leaves.
INT. HOTEL SITTING AREA – DAY
Emma sits with her iPad, pretending to read. She looks around to watch whatever guests are around. If they’re close, she listens in.
She makes some notes in the iPad.
EXT. LAKE PATH – DAY
Emma strolls along, looks for other guests to observe. A couple walks up ahead. (The woman is MARIA, who had the lesbian dream.)
Emma gets close enough to listen.
HUSBAND
You sure, you’re okay?
MARIA
Yes, stop asking me.
HUSBAND
You seem off.
MARIA
Stop analyzing me. That’s my job.
Maria notices Emma behind them.
EMMA
Oh, sorry. I’ll just —
She walks around them as if they were too slow. Oops.
INT. EMMA’S ROOM – DAY
Emma sits at the desk in her room with her laptop open.
She types into Bing and the words appear on the screen:
“mercury retrograde”
Results pop up. Specific phrases stand out.
“travel interruptions, communication errors, technology malfunctions”
She types in the AI (CoPilot) section:
“Can it cause bad dreams?”
Answer appears.
“No, bad dreams can come from stress…”
She jots another note in her iPad and looks over her existing notes. Goes back to Bing and types:
“Lucas McNare”
A ton of articles by him appear.
INT. OFFICE – DAY – CONTINUOUS
Elsewhere, on a computer monitor, everything Emma’s searching for is being duplicated here. No one is in the office at the moment.
BACK TO EMMA
She looks at the article titles. One of the search results looks different from the others:
“Salmon Recovery Plan”, “City Hall Investigation”, “Rapist killed in prison”
She clicks on the 3rd one.
“Convicted rapist, Dwayne Cooper, was killed in prison by other inmates”
A photo catches her eye.
In it, Lucas sits in a courtroom in the public seating area. The rapist is the defendant.
She types again:
“Lucas McNare + Dwayne Cooper”
A few articles pop up. She clicks on the most recent.
“Dwayne Cooper absolved of crime, posthumously.”
She reads it and talks aloud.
EMMA
Investigation by Lucas McNare leads to conviction…overturned…after death of the defendant.
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DR. ROBERT “AUGGIE” AMADOR’S: Act two: reaction to turning point:
ACT TWO PART ONE/PART TWO:
F. After conference, General Portman shows sympathy for the humiliated Dr. Robert “Auggie” Amador. He gives him boost of self-confidence! tell’s him to not lose faith to brush it off. He invites him to his house. He gets hired by General to lead project at secret government facilities. He’s brushed off this failure and for the first time in his life he doesn’t quit, but takes the Challenge!
G. He demonstrates he’s up for the job. Although he’s tricked to fail, and loses leadership position, he confronts his nemesis and re-takes control of the facility: He proves he’s skilled and still in control and has what it takes to finish his project.
H. After getting fired directly by the US president, he takes control into his own hands: He stands up to his superiors and finishes mission of his own! (General Portman assists him as he’s been fired by president as well).
[for re-write start with exciting conference scene. Rosisnki makes presentation with slides and video/ explains science easily and understandable; the “jerk” Rosinski humiliates him; there’s a fight among scientists. Auggie STORMS OUT; PORTMAN SPEAKS TO HIM; INSISTS HE QUITS HIS CURRENT POSITION AND COME WORK FOR HIM; B: BACKGROUND WITH PARTY: MAKE IT AUGGIE’S FAREWELL PARTY; BUT HAS CONVERSATION WITH SARAH;SHE WILL NOW LEAD THE TELESCOPE; WIFE HUMILIATES/BERATES HIM; DAUGHTER SUPPORTS HIM (TELLS HIM OF MAYAN STORY? OR INSERT MAYAN MYTHOLOGY?). DRIVE’S OFF NORTH TO MEET THE GENERAL.
D: PORTMAN HIRES AUGGIE AND AGREES TO HIS TERMS:
becomes:
Act two Beat Sheet:
INT. CONFERENCE HALL STAGE – NIGHT
General Portman takes sides with General Portman; Gives him needed boost of morality: tells him to brush it off/shake it off he’s gonna have much larger battles up ahead. GENERAL invites Auggie to his house
INT. GENERAL PORTMAN’S HOME – LATER
General discusses secret project with him: tells him why he’s the right man for the job right now. If he doesn’t take job offer, He’ll assign it to Rosinski. Auggie “answers” the call: HE WAS DESTINED FOR THIS JOB ! He will take the job, but on one condition: That he will be 100 percent in charge!General Portman agrees!
INT. COLORADO QUANTUM COMPUTING – DAY
AUGGIE CONFRONTS ROSINSKI, THEY HAVE A FIGHT. HIS NEMESIS RE-takes control of the project. Robert “Auugie” defies authority, its settled by arm-wrestling : Auggie wins, he’s now locked in to lead the project.
BECOMES:
ACT TWO OUTLINE:
INT. ASTRONOMY CONFERENCE – DAY
BEGINNING: General Portman approaches Robert “Auggie.”
MIDDLE;He tells him he gets what he’s saying. Auggie is impressed he gets it. THE GENERAL gives Auggie boost of confidence.
END: The General invites Auggie to his home.
INT. GENERAL PORTMAN’S HOME – LATER
BEGINNING: The General tells him the history of secret government cover-ups
MIDDLE: and why he’s the right man for the job right now with all the recent strides in quantum computing or QIS. If he doesn’t take the job, he’ll give it to his nemesis, Rosinski and he’ll get all the credit.
END: AUGGIE “answers the call!” He will take lead of the assignment but he must be 100 percent in charge! The general agrees to his terms.
INT. COLORADO QUANTUM COMPUTING – DAY
BEGINNING: AUGGIE confronts Rosinski, tells him what a jerk he is.
MIDDLE: ROSINSKI explains to him why he had to “shut him up”; Rosinski tells Auggie not to get it “Twisted”; no matter what the government told him, private money is behind this quest and that he—rosinski- will be in charge.
END: Auggie defies authority, they have a fight which gets physical(Rosinski tells him he couldn’t hold on tho his wife and now his girlfriend; makes government quote dig), the general stops the fight, they settle it by arm-wrestling. Auggie wins the arm wrestling competition. He will be in charge of the Project: Blending quantum computing with astronomy in their search for life in outer space.
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