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Lesson 10
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Title : E-5
Genre: Drama
Logline: When a tornado hits a restaurant and traps three employees and the owner in the basement, they decide in their growing desperation that the one they blame must pay the ultimate price.
Character studies:
Frank – restaurant owner, late 50’s. Overweight with thick eyeglasses and in poor health. Affable to the point of being meek. Dependent on his staff now to help him with daily activities due to his condition.
Scott – head waiter, late 20’s. Handsome, optimistic, has big plans for his future and is learning as much as he can about restaurant ownership from Frank. Always glad to lend a hand. Had a brief relationship with Linda that ended because her ambitions didn’t match his.
Linda – waitress, mid 20’s. Attractive, pleasant but unambitious. Just wants to be happy no matter what she’s doing. Still loves Scott, but understands they weren’t really compatible.
Josh – chef, late 20’s. Gruff, narcissistic, feels unappreciated for his skills, a bit unwashed for a chef. Attracted to Linda, who avoids him.
EXT. RESTAURANT – MIDDAY
A tornado siren is sounding, the sky dark. A lone figure, Josh, runs to the restaurant and enters. A “Closed For Today” sign hangs prominently on the door. He locks the door behind him.
INT. RESTAURANT- MIDDAY
Frank, Scott and Linda sit at a table in the closed restaurant to start an inventory of restaurant supplies. Scott and Linda are their voluntarily, secretly aware that Frank is sicker than anyone knows and wanting to just to help. Josh, who only cares for himself, is the only one being paid at his insistence. Another tornado siren sounds, and they all head down to the basement where not only will they be safe, but where the restaurant supplies are stored. Most of the supplies are old and obsolete, since Frank is an admitted hoarder and never throws anything away.
INT. RESTAURANT BASEMENT – MIDDAY
The basement is unfinished except for a small employee washroom. Shelves packed with restaurant supplies line the walls. There are no windows and only a few bare ceiling light bulbs, making the basement dreary and foreboding. Josh repeats what Frank had once told him; the basement wasn’t meant for human occupation, only storage. Frank looks away and barely responds.
As they begin the inventory, Josh complaining about the huge task ahead. Linda finds some old tablecloths she likes, describing them as retro. Josh tells her mockingly that all the junk in the basement is retro. As they argue, they hear what sounds like a freight train approaching. Curious, they gather by the basement stairs. As the sound grows louder and the building begins to groan and shake, Frank frantically motions them to hide under the staircase. The tornado slams into the restaurant, destroying it. Bricks, chairs and chucks of drywall still attached to studs cascade down the stairs. A section of the roof slams over the staircase, sealing them in. The lights flicker, but stay on.
Frightened but uninjured, the four of them try to lift the roof to no avail. Linda laughs once and reminds them they have their cellphones; all they need to do is call for help. None of them can get a signal; Linda suggests that the cellphone towers must have been destroyed.
Linda mentions that the power is still on; Josh asks if they still have running water in the bathroom. They gather in the small room and turn on the faucet; after a few tense seconds, the faucet sputters and water flows. Josh mentions that while they have water, they have no food.
All four look for any hole or breach in the ceiling that they might widen to escape; Linda find a section of the ceiling bulging downward, a floor joist cracked, from the weight of all the debris above it. Frank advises that they leave it alone, and they all back away and avoid the area. No other breech in the ceiling is found.
They each grab a chair the tornado had sent down the stairs and sit facing each other to discuss what they should do next. Josh complains that he should have found a better chef’s job and blames Frank for his low pay and being trapped with them, and that they’re all out of a job now. Scott suggests that Frank could rebuild; Frank replies it’s much too soon to even be discussing what he should do next; his immediate thought is to just call it quits. Josh is glad to hear that Frank isn’t his boss anymore, and berates him even more. Linda angrily fires back at Josh.
Frank realizes with a gasp that he had posted on the restaurant’s webpage that they would be closed for the day, and had sent out an email reminder to all their regular customers about the closure. That, and the “Closed For Today” sign on the door (should the door still be in the rubble) might lead the rescuers to think the restaurant was empty and not search for them right away. He decides to keep that a secret. Josh presses Frank to finish saying what he was about to say, but Frank remains mum.
Then Frank- having trouble now breathing- realizes he left his COPD medication upstairs and tells the others. Both Scott and Linda are sympathetic; Josh, unaware of Frank’s illness or its seriousness, is dismissive, which draws Linda’s ire.
Scott devises a plan to attract the attention of any rescuers outside. They’ll take turns knocking on the underside of the roof with a piece of brick, tapping out an S.O.S. Frank is unable to help in his condition.
HOURS LATER
Josh taps unenthusiastically, and then announces he’s done and won’t try again, declaring it pointless since no one has been heard outside the collapsed building. This once again draws Linda’s ire, who angrily takes over for Josh.
Scott and Josh discuss how they’ll bunk down for the night. They search through the restaurant supplies and find a stack of old seat cushions they can use as mattresses and pillows, and Linda’s tablecloths for sheets. Scott calls dibs on the corner of the basement by the washroom; Josh says he’ll sleep by Linda. Scott quietly replies that Josh had better ask Linda about that.
ONE HOUR LATER
Scott helps Frank- who’s steadily deteriorating- into a makeshift bed, then goes to his own bed. There is some lighthearted banter about it being the worst sleepover ever, with Josh in his usual sarcastic mood that Scott and Linda find amusing for a change. Scott asks Frank if he’s doing well; Frank says he feels better lying down. Scott optimistically assures Frank that they’ll double up their efforts tomorrow to attract rescuers, and get Frank the medical attention he needs. For the rest of the story, Frank rarely gets out of his bed and sleeps a lot.
INT. BASEMENT – MORNING
Josh is the first one awake; he’s surprised to see Scott and Linda sleeping together and stands up in anger. He roughly wakes them both out of jealously, reminding Scott that he promised Frank that they would double up their efforts to get help.
HOURS LATER
Scott has rigged up a swinging brick on a rope that he can pull from the basement to knock on the underside of the roof, making the task much easier. As he pulls the rope, he sits with Linda and Josh and makes small talk, Frank nearby in his bed. Josh presses Scott and Linda about their previous relationship, still jealous, but pleased to hear it hadn’t worked out. The discussion turns personal as they talk about their past and future hopes and aspirations, keenly aware those might never take place now. Scott talks about owning his own chain of restaurants someday. Linda is happy for him; Josh characteristically proclaims it’s unlikely to ever happen. As Scott already knows, Linda- although vaguely optimistic about her future- has no specific goals and dreams; whatever happens, she just wants to be content. Josh complains that he’ll probably always be underemployed because no one is smart enough to recognize how great a chef he is. To their surprise, Frank was awake and listening to them. When asked what his dreams were, he surprises them again by saying he had always wanted to be a dancer. Josh laughs and berates him for the impossibility of that dream, since Frank has always been overweight. Frank sadly admits he was never light on his feet, but still likes how expressive and graceful dancers are. This admission makes Josh laugh uproariously, much to the chagrin of Scott and Linda, who secretly seem to agree that Frank’s dream wasn’t ever obtainable.
Frank is asleep and the others- now sweaty in the stuffy, warm basement- are lounging about, Linda now the one pulling methodically on the rope. Josh suddenly sits up, a look of surprise on his face; Linda briefly stops pulling on the rope and stares at him, as does Scott. Josh says he figured out what Frank was about to tell them but then stopped- that Frank had posted on the restaurant’s webpage that they were closed on Monday, and that Frank always followed that up with an email to all their regular customers about any change of hours. That, along with the “Closed For Today” sign on the door, might explain why they haven’t heard any rescuers- no one is looking for them because they think the restaurant was empty. While both Scott and Linda dismiss Josh’s concern, their voices and expressions reveal that what Josh said might be true to some degree.
After some discussion about food and what they wish they had to eat right now, Josh is angered when Scott reveals that a signature dish that Josh makes- one he’s the most proud of- isn’t as good as one made by another chef in a more upscale restaurant. Josh says they should just stop talking about food then since all that’s doing is making them hungrier. He gets up and goes to a corner to sulk.
With all four of them struggling to breath, Scott decides to try again to find a breech in the ceiling to at least let some cooler, fresh air to sink into the basement. He finds a narrow crack between two floorboards and uses a steak knife from a box of them on a shelf to dig a small hole while standing on his chair. He smiles as he inhales the cooler air wafting down, and then invites the others to breathe it in as well. He laments that Frank isn’t well enough to try it himself. Josh nearly pushes Linda aside to go next, holding out his arm to keep her at bay as he hogs the fresh air; Linda glares at him and shares a glance of disgust with Scott.
Out of boredom as Scott and Linda talk, Scott pulling on the rope, Josh decides to go on what he tells them is an archaeological dig through the packed shelves. He laughs at old condiment dispensers, menu holders and ashtrays, and tosses aside something he can’t even identify. Then Josh comes across a stack of construction plans for the restaurant. He smiles as he flips through the pages for the upper level, realizing that a few minor things were built differently than what the plans show. But when he looks at the plans for the basement, his expression turns first to confusion, then astonishment, then anger. The plans show that where the washroom was located, an emergency egress was meant to be there. Josh realizes that Frank had the egress illegally converted to a washroom after the construction plans had been approved.
Josh races into the washroom, banging against the outer wall in the hope the egress is still there, but the wall is solid concrete. Enraged, he stands in the washroom entrance, holding up the plans. He yells at the others about the change, how Frank has doomed them. Scott and Linda stand up and back away from Frank, surprised and bewildered. Awaken by the yelling, Frank covers his face and sobs, admitting it was true. Scott asks him why and Frank says the plumbing was there and he thought an emergency egress would never be needed; a washroom just made more sense. Josh then asks Frank if he had posted that the restaurant would be closed on Monday, and sent out an email reminder to their customers; still sobbing, Frank says that was true. Josh loudly berates him, saying he hopes Frank dies first. Scott and Linda stare at Frank and say nothing.
HOURS LATER
Frank is asleep. Linda continues to pull on the rope, but with less vigor. Josh paces, still clutching the basement floor plans. He stops with a new thought and stares at Scott and Linda. Linda stops pulling on the rope, waiting for Josh to speak. Josh finally says he always wondered about the tips they received on major holidays when the restaurant was packed with customers; the tip money Frank divided among them- while more than average- didn’t seem to quite match the number customers they had served. Josh says he did some math after last New Year’s Eve and the average tip was only around twelve percent, lower than expected. Linda immediately defends Frank, saying that he would never cheat them on tips. Josh says there’s an easy way to find out and kicks at Frank’s cushion mattress to wake him up; Scott only makes a half-hearted attempt to stop him. Josh asks Frank about the tips and after some denial, Frank finally admits he needed the money to help keep the restaurant afloat. As Frank apologizes and sobs again, Linda takes a large step back and her stern expression reveals she no longer trusts or believes him.
Thirsty, Frank asks for a drink of water. Josh tells him to get one himself and walks away. Scott mechanically goes to get Frank a drink and hands it to him, unsmiling.
All of them are now disheveled, their eyes hollow, their expressions gaunt.
There’s a rumble in the ceiling that scares Linda; Josh proclaims that this might be the end. Angry that Josh is scaring Linda, he argues with Josh to stop. There’s another rumble. Josh is the only one to notice that the cracked joist underneath the bulge in the ceiling is now about to fall. He manages to push Scott underneath it as they continue to argue. The joist swings down, striking Scott on the side of the head. He collapses, his head bloodied. Josh smirks. Linda screams and runs to cradle him, crying. Josh reaches up and unscrews the light bulb right above her; she screams again. Josh screws the bulb back in and unscrews it one more time, eliciting another scream from Linda. Then Scott stirs and Josh, dismayed, realizes Scott isn’t dead. Scott sits up, bloodied and in pain. Josh points to Frank and says Frank is to blame for their impending deaths, including Linda’s, and the pain Scott feels now is just the start of what’s to come.
Scott stands up, his anger focused on Frank. He says that Josh was right all along about Frank. Josh reaches back and grabs a steak knife off a shelf and hands it to Scott, who immediately takes it. Frank then offers Linda a knife; she hesitates, and then grabs it. Josh takes one for himself and they all move to confront Frank. Awakened by the commotion, Frank struggles to his feet to defend himself and beg for mercy. There’s yet another rumble and the lights flicker off. Frank cries out in the dark. When the lights come back on, Frank is on the ground, holding a hand over his chest. He removes it to reveal a bloody stab wound, and looks up in astonishment at the three of them standing over him. Josh’s knife is clean; Linda’s knife is clean; there’s blood on Scott’s knife, his expression fierce.
Scott stabs Frank again, leaving his knife in him. Linda does the same. Josh hesitates, and then stabs Frank as well. Frank’s head rolls back and he dies.
They hear the deepest rumble yet; dust once again filters down from between the floorboards. Scott and Linda embrace; Josh yells to the ceiling to just get it over with. Instead, the section of roof that’s covering the staircase pulls away: rescuers have arrived. A beam of sunlight shines down on the three of them; they shade their eyes from the bright light. A rescuer pokes his head in and yells back to the others that there are survivors; a cheer goes up. The three are told that the tornado was an E-5, and that they’re the first survivors to be found, undoubtedly because the restaurant was so well constructed.
EXT. RESTAURANT – LATE AFTERNOON
They meekly exit and find out the front door and its “closed for today” sign is nowhere to be seen; a rescuer says because the tornado was so powerful, the door is probably a mile away. When asked if anyone else is downstairs, they don’t answer and walk away, staring straight ahead. Puzzled, the rescuer goes downstairs, sees Frank’s body, and then races back up with a look of horror and astonishment. A paramedic tries to get a closer look at Scott’s head wound; Scott rebuffs him. As the first responders clap and cheer on either side, Scott, Josh and Linda ignore them and continue walking, eyes wide, their expressions grave, fully aware they will soon be arrested for Frank’s murder.
Fade Out
The End
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Paul’s Outline (no. 1)
What I learned from this assignment is that it forces me to move forward even if there are still big gaps in my structure. Thank heavens for Placeholders!
Although it is incomplete, I am posting this Assignment now because I am so far behind the class schedule.
1. Overview
Title: Home at Last
Genre: Drama
Logline: Stopped by a phone call while she is about to commit suicide, a young woman discovers her past and her future while visiting a house for sale, unaware that the real-estate agent showing her around the house is her dead mother.[The character names Jill and Jack are provisional.]
2. Outline
ACT ONE
1. INT. APARTMENT. DAY.
JILL, late 20s, single, is fixing a noose around her neck. As she goes to step onto a chair, her cell phone rings. Unable to reach the phone, she removes the noose. A V.O. informs her she has inherited a house. There is a potential buyer, but they need her consent. She agrees to meet the Real-Estate Agent at the house for sale. Puts down the phone. Looks at the hanging noose. Snorts a line of coke. FADE OUT.2. INT. JILL’S CAR. NEXT DAY.
Jill is driving to the meeting with the Real-Estate Agent at the house she has inherited. It is in a remote location. Struggles to find it. Finally reaches it.3. EXT. HOUSE FOR SALE. SAME.
Jill parks outside the 2-storey, old-style house. There are no other cars. Looks at her watch. She is right on time. Gets out of car. Looks around the property. Time goes by. No Real-Estate Agent. She stands there, getting impatient.4. INT. HOUSE FOR SALE. SAME.
The REAL-ESTATE AGENT is observing Jill from inside the house.
5. EXT. HOUSE FOR SALE. SAME.
Jill is dialling the Real-Estate Agent’s number of her cell-phone when, suddenly, the Real-Estate Agent is standing next to her.
Surprised and bewildered at her sudden appearance, Jill asks how she got there, since there is no other car parked on the drive. Real-Estate Agent avoids the question. They go inside.6. INT. HOUSE. SAME.
The Agent shows Jill into the house. Jill asks for explanations about the inheritance. Agent explains. It belonged to her family for 3 generations. She is the last remaining heir. It is valued at $2 million. Jill could do with the money.7. INT. KITCHEN. SAME.
The place looks well-stocked for an empty house. The Agent prepares some coffee for Jill. She gives Jill piercing looks. Jill uncomfortable. Says things like, “I called you at a bad time, right?” that suggest she knows things about Jill that Jill would prefer to keep unknown.8. INT. MAIN BEDROOM. SAME.
They finish their coffee and begin to look around the house. Before entering the main bedroom, Jill suddenly halts. She feels like an electro-magnetic force keeping her out of the room. The Agent insists she go inside. Agent admits she also feel something strange in that room. “What could it be?”; she says, in a tone suggesting she knows the answer.PLACE-HOLDER: the conflict between Agent and Jill grows as the former shows how much she knows about Jill.
9. TURNING POINT
The doorbell rings. Agent explains it will be one of the potential buyers. She shows him in. Marianne is shocked to discover it is Jack, her drug-pusher.ACT TWO
10. INT. HOUSE. SAME.
Embarrassed encounter between Jack and Marianne. Agent observes their interaction. Hides the fact that she knows them both as well as they know themselves.11. INT.HOUSE. SAME.
MIDPOINT TURNING POINT
Jill decides the Agent knows far too much about her. She wants out.12. EXT. HOUSE. SAME.
Jill runs from the house to her car as the Agent and Jack observe from the doorstep. But her car want start. Mechanical fault.
Jack offers to drive Jill away in his car. His car won’t start either.
They are both trapped at the house.ACT THREE
PLACEHOLDER
Agent works on both Jill and Jack to gradually show them the error of their ways and bring about a transformed life-view in both of them.13. INT. HOUSE. SAME.
Jack recounts that he lived nearby as a child. He knows that a neighbor died giving birth in the house. He used to play with the woman’s daughter. Knows that her father used to treat her badly because saw her as the cause of his wife’s death. The young girl (Jill) always unhappy. As a boy, he tried to make her happy.PLACEHOLDER
Turning Point: Female and Male Client discover they are falling love.ACT FOUR
14. INT. HOUSE. SAME.
CLIMAX
Jill shouts in anger at Real-Estate Agent for meddling in her affairs and wanting to change, but Agent says it’s normal – any mother would do the same. Jill is thunderstruck.PLACEHOLDER
RESOLUTION
Jack decides he will buy the house. Jill says there is no need to buy it. She will live there with him.
Real Estate Agent disappears.15. EXT. HOUSE. SAME.
CLOSING SCENE
Another Real-Estate Agent (2) turns up with a potential buyer.
Jill explains the house is no longer on the market.
Shows Real-Estate Agent 2 the papers she was given by her dead mother. Agent accepts their validity.
Real-Estate Agent 2 leaves, apologizing to his client for wasting her time.
Jill and Jack go hand-in-hand back inside the house.END
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