BWTV-AI Mod 3 – Lesson 8: Building In Empathy/Distress

[Jean-Pierre Serra]

JP Serra Adding Empathy/Distress!

What I learned doing this assignment is that I have done a good job at putting enough empathy and distress in my pilot. I’ve also learned that once we have an idea, we can brainstorm other ideas to raise the stakes and make it more painful.

1. Look through your outline and see if any of these as a bigger frame for your story, or if you already have it in the story, can you emphasize or expand it:

• A. Crucible: None that fit in my pilot
• B. Betrayal: Mash disguises himself as a helpless little girl to ambush Urnek, Gunthor and the mineworkers. Mirelle betrays Lambert by stealing his kid’s toys and bringing them to life.
• C. Forced Decision: When Lambert finds the magical oil, he feels he doesn’t have a choice to report it to Mirelle, even though it’s the last thing he wants to do.
• D. Hurt those they love: Mirelle desperately wants kids. She is willing to hurt Lambert’s feelings to make her dream come true.
• E. Emotional Dilemma: The mineworker who asks protection to the king must accept to pay the king what he wants.
• F. Exposed: What will Lambert do when he finds out Mirelle experimented with the oil behind his back?
• G. Must Make Decision with Future Consequences: Lambert finished his son’s project but the cannon destroyed part of a building and almost killed some people. Now, out of revenge, someone has destroyed the weapon.

2. Looking at your scenes, are there places you can create situations to cause more Empathy/Distress?

Step 1: Check each scene to see if you can build any of these forms of Empathy/Distress into them.

• Undeserved misfortune: Lambert’s peaceful life as a blacksmith is upended by the discovery of the magical oil.
• External character conflicts: Lambert must deal with the villagers’ skepticism and the sorcereress deceptions.
• Plot intruding on life: His expertise leads him to uncovering a plot that thrusts him into unwanted danger.
• Plans that failed: Urnek and Gunthor successfully protected the gold but failed to protect the mineworkers who were abducted.
• Witnessing the pain of others
• Extreme consequences: After Cody’s weapon misfired, someone tore it to pieces.
• Major loss: The first two mineworkers are abducted at the beginning of the pilot. Now, 3 months later, it’s a dozen of mineworkers that are missing.
• Brings their wound present: When the school kid shows Mirelle the drawing of kids being afraid of her, it opens her wound that she cannot have children of her own. When Urnek argues with Lambert, the blacksmith reminds Urnek that he might be too dumb to understand the concept of strategic defenses. When Lambert’s son doesn’t show excitement to turn 12 and start his apprenticeship as an artisan, it saddens Lambert.

Run it through AI:
Undeserved Misfortune

• Lambert and Cody: The destruction of Cody’s automatic cannon project, something he dearly looked forward to, serves as a poignant example. This not only highlights the unpredictability of their world but also Lambert’s struggle to protect his son from disappointment, underscoring the fragility of their peace and safety.

External Character Conflicts

• Urnek’s Rivalry: Urnek secretly wishing for Lambert’s mechanical defenses to fail introduces external conflict rooted in their different approaches to protecting the town. This rivalry can be expanded to involve confrontations that challenge their principles and loyalty to the village.

Plot Intruding on Life

• Nayeli’s Arrival: Her adaptation to the heavily guarded and suspicious nature of Stonevale, coupled with her quest, can lead to personal dilemmas as she gets entangled with the town’s fate against her initial will.

Plans That Failed

• The Mineworker Ambush: The teaser’s grimlope attack demonstrates the village’s vulnerability and the failure of its existing protections, setting the stage for escalating threats.

Witnessing the Pain of Others

• Ben’s Orphanhood: Ben sharing his story with Nayeli provides a powerful moment for Nayeli (and the audience) to witness the direct consequences of the village’s dangers on its most innocent inhabitants.

Extreme Consequences

• Mirelle’s Experimentation: Her animation of a metal butterfly, despite Lambert’s prohibition, showcases the extreme consequences of curiosity unchecked by wisdom, potentially endangering the whole village.

Major Loss

• The Kidnapping: The abduction of the mineworker couple signifies a major loss for the community and particularly for Ben, emphasizing the personal stakes involved in the village’s security.

Brings Their Wound Present

• Lambert’s Internal Conflict: Cody’s rejection of the blacksmithing legacy and Lambert’s discovery of the animate oil magnify his internal conflict between preserving tradition and embracing new, uncertain powers.

Crucible

• Sylvanor’s Attack: The planned surprise attack by Sylvanor puts the entire village, especially its leadership and defenses, under a crucible, testing their resilience, unity, and strategies for survival.

Betrayal

• Mirelle’s Secret Origin: Revealing Mirelle as the progenitor of the village’s populace, especially if discovered by the villagers, could feel like a betrayal, unraveling trust and unity.

Forced Decision

• Lambert and Mirelle: Lambert destroying Mirelle’s animated butterfly and banning further experimentation forces them both into a corner, with Lambert choosing the town’s safety over scientific curiosity and Mirelle having to choose between her passion for magic and compliance with Lambert’s decree.

Hurt Those They Love

• Cody’s Adventure: Cody’s innocent adventure that leads to the animation of the metal fragments puts him in danger, causing Lambert distress and forcing him to confront his own creations.

Emotional Dilemma

• Nayeli’s Quest vs. New Bonds: Nayeli’s internal struggle between continuing her solitary quest for her tribe’s bow or forming new bonds in Stonevale, especially as she becomes involved in defending the town, creates a deep emotional dilemma.

Exposed

• Urnek’s Weakness: A situation where Urnek’s lack of cunning is exposed in a critical moment, perhaps during Sylvanor’s attack, could serve to humble him and force growth in unexpected ways.

[Moses Quainoo]

BWTV-AI MOD 3 – LESSON 8: BUILDING IN EMPATHY/DISTRESS

Moses Quainoo

ASSIGNMENT:

1. Look through your Outline and see if any of these as a bigger frame for your story, or if you already have it in the story, can you emphasize or expand it:

A. Crucible – SKYY LAR gets its legs trapped in synthetic waste, three seasons pass and it injures the left leg.

B. Betrayal – RAPHAEL rents SKY LAR’s roost to its girlfriend.

C. Forced Decision – SKYY LAR decides to form and lead a bird coalition against ecological destruction.

D. Hurt those they love –

E. Emotional Dilemma – EMMA must choose to stand with the Rebellion or protect her family’s reputation in the Beauty Industry.

F. Exposed –

G. Must Make Decision with Future Consequences – SKYY LAR and allies infiltrate the Beauty company’s HQ, and they will become targets.

2. Looking at your scenes, are there places you can create situations to cause more Empathy/Distress?

Step 1: Check each scene to see if you can build any of these forms of Empathy/Distress into them.

Undeserved misfortune – A falcon ambushes SKYY LAR’s freedom flight.

External character conflicts – SKYY LAR and Falcon engage in a dramatic aerial battle.

Plot intruding on life – SKYY LAR faces the looming threat of nesting area.

Plans that failed –

Witnessing the pain of others – EMMA witness SKYY LAR battling Falcon.

Extreme consequences –

Major loss – SKYY LAR loses it left leg.

Brings their wound present –

Step 2: Make those situations even worse.

Make it more painful –

Raise the stakes –

Create more loss –

Put any goal, need, value, or wound at significant risk –

Time this to be at the worst moment –

Make it more physically threatening –

3. Fill those into your current Outline and rewrite it.

5-ACT STRUCTURE =

Teaser:

Essence: SKYY LAR takes a much-deserved solo freedom flight over the London Eye. A mighty Falcon, equipped with a small, almost undetectable device, ambushes SKYY LAR. The birds engage in a fierce aerial battle. EMMA witnesses the ordeal from the ground.

Beginning: SURFACE: SKYY LAR takes a freedom flight over the London Eye. As it swoops and glides, we see both legs point backward. One leg is fitted with a prosthetic.

INTRIGUE 1: MYSTERY: What happened to the feral pigeon’s leg? What led to the injury? Why is one leg fitted with a prosthetic? What happened to SKYY LAR’s leg?

PLOT LAYER 1: SKYY LAR flight is abruptly interrupted by the sudden appearance of a Falcon.

INTRIGUE 2: CONSPIRACY: What conspiracy is happening in the avian world? What conspiracy is going on involving other species or external forces? What is the Falcon’s role in the avian world’s conspiracy? INTRIGUE 3: SECRET – The Falcon’s undetectable technological device hints at advanced, hidden agendas.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: The Falcon’s sudden appearance with an undetectable technological device. The ambush forces SKYY LAR into an intense aerial battle. Amid the chaos, the audience catches glimpses of SKYY LAR’s prosthetic leg.

INTRIGUE: MYSTERY: Where did the prosthetic come from? How has the prosthetic impacted SKYY LAR’s ability?

INTRIGUE: SECRET: The audience sees more of the prosthetic leg during the battle. (The Audience speculates about the events that led to SKYY LAR’s injury and the implications of its prosthetic for the ongoing conflict.)

INTRIGUE: WOUND: The prosthetic leg is a visual reminder of the physical and emotional wounds SKYY LAR endured. Viewers must ponder SKYY LAR’s hardships and how it persevered despite its injury. INTRIGUE: WOUND: (SKYY LAR’s prosthetic leg hints at a deeper layer to its character, yet to be fully revealed.) SKYY LAR uses the prosthetic leg to kick the Falcon’s eye. EMMA witnesses the ordeal from the ground.

TURNING POINT: A car coming towards them hit the Falcon.

Act 1: World and Character Introduction

Essence: SKYY LAR mentors young pigeons, goes to the market to seek sustenance, and gets its legs trapped in synthetic waste. EMMA discovers SKYY LAR and intervenes by de-stringing.

Beginning: Introduction to the World-EcoHaven:

INTRIGUE 1: Intriguing World – Introduction to EcoHaven, contrasting with the Ridley market

SURFACE LAYER: SKYY LAR is a dedicated squadron leader who mentors young pigeons on survival and thrives in the urban environment. INTRIGUE 2: Secret Identity – Hints at SKYY LAR’s unique role or abilities CHARACTER LAYER 1: SKYY LAR harbors a secret identity, possibly linked to its past or hidden abilities yet to be fully revealed. He is deeply connected to its habitat and the city.

INITIAL SEEDS OF DILEMMA: However, because of construction, SKYY LAR faces the looming threat of losing its nesting area. SKYY LAR needs to work on its sense of purpose or identity as a leader, questioning the effectiveness of its efforts to protect and guide its flock amidst growing environmental threats.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: Flashbacks or subtle hints throughout the episode suggest SKYY LAR is not just an ordinary feral pigeon. INTRIGUE: SECRET IDENTITY: What is the true identity of this feral pigeon? Middle/Incident: SKYY LAR goes to the RIDLEY market, a hotspot for illegal wildlife trade, unknowingly supported by the Beauty Industry, for sustenance.

INTRIGUE 3: Wound – SKYY LAR’s struggle with its new physical reality and identity. SKYY LAR gets its legs trapped in synthetic waste while seeking food and cannot break free for three seasons.

SURFACE LAYER: EMMA, an innocent, compassionate, and resourceful young girl, has a budding interest in environmentalism. She discovers SKYY LAR injured. She became interested in environmental activism during a school project and had a natural inclination to help others. She helps a distressed bird, intervenes by de-stringing, and cannot save one leg. LAYER: Past Transgression: EMMA’s family has ties to the beauty industry and is involved in undercover operations against it.

Turning Point 1: SKYY LAR loses its left leg, is physically challenged, and has an emotional, how-to, and mental shift crisis.

Turning Point 2: EMMA knows the family may be connected to the source of the waste and faces a moral dilemma regarding her family’s role in environmental harm. SURFACE: SKYY LAR’s injury and its subsequent partnership with EMMA form the central mystery of the pilot.

LAYER: Mysteries: The true origin of the synthetic waste and the extent of EMMA’s family’s involvement in environmental harm are mysteries to be uncovered.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: Through flashbacks, investigative scenes, and confrontations with industry representatives, the pilot gradually unravels the mysteries surrounding SKYY LAR’s injury and EMMA’s family connections.

Act 2: Conflict and Alliance Formation

Essence: EMMA takes SKYY LAR to her house and constructs a prosthetic leg for SKYY LAR to overcome barriers. While EMMA investigates the waste’s origin, SKYY LAR returns home to the community’s distress, overwhelming concern, and solidarity. RAVEN makes a strategic proposal.

Beginning: INTRODUCTION TO THE INTRIGUING WORLD:

EMMA takes SKYY LAR to her home.

SURFACE LAYER: EMMA constructs a prosthetic leg for SKYY LAR to overcome barriers.

INTRIGUE 1: Deception – EMMA’s internal conflict about her family’s actions

Character Layer: Hiding Past Transgressions: EMMA’s family has a hidden connection to the environmental harm that led to SKYY LAR’s injury. EMMA grapples with the connection while concealing her family’s involvement.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: EMMA’s conflicted emotions when faced with evidence that implicates her family in environmental harm hints at deeper secrets she’s trying to keep hidden. SKYY LAR realizes the extent of the environmental threat that led to its injury and the genuine care EMMA gives her. SKYY LAR and EMMA bond. SKYY LAR adapts to the new situation, and their bond strengthens. Conflict Introduction: EMMA investigates the origin of synthetic waste and uncovers troubling ties to her family’s investment. SKYY LAR returns to its original home under the train bridges to the extent of the communities’ distress, an overwhelming concern and solidarity.

SURFACE LAYER: RAPHAEL is an English Trumpeter Pigeon with a distinct personality and background who is indifferent. It tells SKYY LAR it rented out SKYY LAR’s roost. SKYY LAR faces a new reality. SKYY LAR acknowledges the scale of the injury and suffering witnessed among the 20,000 pigeons. The bird community has seen the adverse effects of environmental destruction firsthand. The ecological harm is not just incidental but a deliberate act by the Beauty Industry to monopolize resources, creating a direct conflict with the coalition’s goals. SKYY LAR can only protect its habitat if it forms and leads a bird coalition against ecological harm.

SURFACE LAYER: Hidden Relationship: RAVEN, a mentor figure mentors SKYY LAR and the Rebellion.

LAYER: RAVEN connects to ancient or mystical environmental knowledge and possibly a deeper connection to the events unfolding in the city. RAVEN offers guidance but, staying out of direct action, arrives from the Pembrokeshire Coast to spend the weekend.

INTRIGUE 2: Hidden Agenda – RAVEN’s mysterious proposal and his more profound understanding of the conflict.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: Through cryptic advice and enigmatic behavior, RAVEN hints at a deeper understanding of the conflict and its implications. As the pilot progresses, revelations about RAVEN’s past and true identity shed light on its motivations and the significance of its role in guiding the rebellion.

INTRIGUE 3: HIDDEN LAYER – Community’s distress and the overwhelming support for SKYY LAR’s leadership.

TURNING POINT 1: RAVEN makes a strategic yet mysterious proposal for SKYY LAR to lead a collective action against environmental harm. TURNING POINT 2: Having witnessed adverse effects firsthand, the bird community supports SKYY LAR to lead the act against environmental harm.

MIDPOINT: Conflict Expansion and Revelation

IMPOSSIBLE GOAL: SKYY LAR decides/commits to forming and leading the birds’ coalition to dismantle the deeply entrenched and influential Beauty Industry, which is causing environmental destruction. It is inspired by the overwhelming support from other pigeons and RAVEN’s proposal. SKYY LAR collaborates with EMMA to broaden the group to a bird-human alliance.

TURNING POINT 3: EMMA stands up for her environmental beliefs rather than protecting her family’s interests.

SURFACE: SKYY LAR’s injury forces it to confront its limitations and redefine its leadership role.

LAYER: Major Shift in Meaning: The discovery of the global conspiracy reshapes the rebellion’s goals and strategies, leading to a fundamental shift in their approach to combating environmental harm.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: The pilot culminates in a pivotal moment where SKYY LAR and its allies uncover the true scope of the Beauty Industry’s activities, prompting them to reassess their tactics and alliances. This revelation sets the stage for future conflicts and challenges as the rebellion prepares to confront the industry head-on.

Act 3: Challenges, Strategy Development and Infiltration, Discovery. Deepening of the Conflict:

Essence: SKYY LAR forms a core group, recruits RAVEN and skeptical RAPHAEL, and collaborates with EMMA. DR. GREEN joins. SKYY LAR and allies conduct peaceful fly-pasts, demand action from Industry, and infiltrate a Beauty Company Headquarters to gather evidence. The rebellion uncovers a global conspiracy that threatens their cause.

Beginning: SKYY LAR recruits RAVEN as a mentor and core member. SKYY LAR recruits RAPHAEL, who grows interested, prompted by realizations about the crisis.

SURFACE LAYER: RAPHAEL shifts his trajectory towards greater involvement. SKYY collaborates with EMMA to broaden the group with a human alliance.

SURFACE LAYER: DR. GREEN is an environmental scientist working on an ecological technology. She is focused on her research and somewhat detached from grassroots movements.

CHARACTER LAYER: DECEPTION: DR. AVA GREEN has a controversial past in the beauty industry and maintains secret connections to whistleblowers.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: Clues about DR. AVA GREEN’s past and hidden agenda emerge as he becomes more deeply involved with the rebellion. His interactions with other characters gradually expose his true motivations, mainly when he exhibits conflicting loyalties or conceals information. She encounters SKYY LAR and allies and chooses her innovative scientific discovery that could benefit the beauty industry by withholding it to support the coalition’s cause. She aligns her scientific expertise with SKYY LAR and EMMA’s coalition, seeing an opportunity to apply her work more effectively. (DR. GREEN joins and offers technological help). DR. AVA GREEN is an expert in a specific field of biotechnology that can counteract the harm of the beauty industry, making her role pivotal in the coalition’s strategy. RAVEN emphasizes the need for logical strategies, focusing on specific campaign targets and methods, while the coalition establishes communication networks, safe havens, and resource channels. He becomes increasingly aware of the potential risks and consequences of fully committing to the cause, including jeopardizing his interests and safety. RAPHAEL is approached by factions with conflicting interests who seek to exploit his hesitation for their own gain, further complicating his decision-making process. PLOT LAYER: Blackmail: RAPHAEL is coerced into greater involvement through blackmail, forcing him to make difficult choices to protect himself or his interests.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: Subtle hints or cryptic conversations imply that RAPHAEL is being manipulated or pressured into taking a more active role in the coalition, raising questions about his motives and loyalties.

LAYER: CONSPIRACY/SECRET MEETINGS: Raphael is engaged in secret negotiations with factions tied to the Beauty Industry. He is also observed having secret meetings with a group of pigeons tied to the Beauty Industry. These clandestine gatherings arouse suspicion among the alliance members, who wonder about Raphael’s true allegiances. DILEMMA INTENSIFIES: (SKYY LAR’s dilemma intensifies as the coalition gains momentum and begins confronting the Beauty Industry’s harmful practices.)

SURFACE LAYER: SKYY LAR and allies conducted a peaceful fly-past to raise awareness of the Beauty Industry’s environmental impact. EMMA complements it with a social media campaign. They write ‘Beauty Industry chemicals harmful’ in the sky. EMMA uses social media platforms to spread the same message and increase awareness. The campaign aims to pressure the industry to change harmful practices, such as adopting sustainable sourcing, reducing waste, and committing to eco-friendly manufacturing processes.

SITUATION LAYER: A wrong person turns good

A member of the Beauty Industry unexpectedly joins the coalition after witnessing the harmful effects of their practices, leading to a shift in alliances and strategies.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: A key figure from the Beauty Industry expresses remorse or takes a stand against their own company’s unethical actions, surprising both the coalition and viewers alike and prompting a reevaluation of their goals and tactics. SKYY LAR meets a Beauty Industry representative, presents the Rebellion’s case, and demands action. The 20,000 pigeons and other coalition members highly expect change and protection. The Beauty Industry dismisses the Rebellion’s effort as a minor nuisance, exaggerated ‘Sky rats,’ and portrays itself as environmentally responsible. Some industry players employ intimidation tactics to create internal fear and division. As a result, one fruit pigeon died, and people suspected the industry had caused it. RAPHAEL doubts the coalition’s potential impact and fears the results of taking a definitive stand. He chooses his benefit for the well-being of the alliance. RAVEN projects confidence and proposes action plans for the coalition in memory of a dead member. However, RAVEN is concerned that the coalition’s actions might provoke a severe backlash, endangering the movement and the broader avian community. EMMA fears her actions might expose her to danger as she delves deeper into activism.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: As EMMA delves deeper into activism, she struggles with her family’s involvement in environmental harm, leading to conflicts and moral dilemmas. Clues about her family connections and secret activities are gradually revealed through subtle interactions and discoveries made by other characters. SKYY LAR is still determining its ability to lead effectively with its new physical limitations and fears potential harm to its followers.

CHARACTER LAYER: Hidden Agenda: SKYY LAR has a hidden agenda to infiltrate and disrupt key facilities of the Beauty Industry.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: Throughout the pilot, subtle hints are dropped about SKYY LAR’s true intentions, such as secretive conversations with other birds and moments where it shows knowledge beyond its apparent role as a mentor. The coalition must now operate under the threat of constant surveillance, complicating their efforts to mobilize and act. SKYY LAR hides his fears and infiltrates the Beauty Company’s HQ to gather evidence to prioritize avian safety. INTRIGUE 1: Mystery – Infiltration of the Beauty Industry’s headquarters.

The mission is fraught with danger. They identified SKYY LAR as the critical figure. The Beauty Industry implemented advanced measures to hide its environmentally harmful practices, making it challenging for the Rebellion to find direct evidence. SKYY LAR and allies stumble on hidden information through a whistleblower revealing the industry’s broader, more sinister involvement in global environmental degradation.

INTRIGUE 2: Conspiracy – Uncovering the global conspiracy.

Sabotage Attempts: This is an instance where the alliance’s plans are compromised, leading to failed missions and potential danger for the members. Some evidence points to internal sabotage, and Raphael’s behavior during these incidents raises doubts about his loyalty. INTRIGUE 3: Accusation – RAPHAEL’s loyalty is questioned.

The Rebellion needs concrete evidence to convince the public and authorities. SKYY LAR questions its leadership in the face of a new challenge.

Turning Point 1: SKYY LAR and allies infiltrate a Beauty Industry facility and gather evidence.

Turning Point 2: The Industry covered its trail, and the Rebellion uncovered the global conspiracy.

Turning Point 3: SKYY LAR becomes a target.

SURFACE LAYER: SKYY LAR and allies uncover a global conspiracy from a whistleblower and become targets.

LAYER: ONGOING CONSPIRACIES: The beauty industry is orchestrating a larger conspiracy involving global environmental degradation.

Act 4: Complications Intensify: (Echoes Teaser) Mystery 2:

Essence: SKYY LAR takes a much-deserved solo freedom flight over the London Eye. A Falcon, equipped with a small, almost undetectable device, ambushes SKYY LAR, and a fierce aerial battle ensues. Beginning:

SKYY LAR takes a freedom flight over the London Eye. As it swoops and glides, we see both legs point backward. One leg is fitted with a prosthetic.

INTRIGUE: MYSTERY: What happened to the feral pigeon’s leg? What led to the injury? Why is one leg fitted with a prosthetic? SKYY LAR flight is abruptly interrupted by the sudden appearance of a Falcon with an undetectable technological device.

INTRIGUE 1: Secret Identity – The Falcon’s Connection to the Beauty Industry. The ambush forces SKYY LAR into an intense aerial battle. Amid the chaos, the audience catches glimpses of SKYY LAR’s prosthetic leg.

INTRIGUE: MYSTERY: Where did the prosthetic come from? How has the prosthetic impacted SKYY LAR’s ability?

INTRIGUE: SECRET: The audience sees more of the prosthetic leg during the battle. (The Audience speculates about the events that led to SKYY LAR’s injury and the implications of its prosthetic for the ongoing conflict.)

INTRIGUE: WOUND: The prosthetic leg is a visual reminder of the physical and emotional wounds SKYY LAR endured. Viewers must ponder SKYY LAR’s hardships and how it persevered despite its injury. INTRIGUE: WOUND: (SKYY LAR’s prosthetic leg hints at a deeper layer to its character, yet to be fully revealed.) SKYY LAR uses the prosthetic leg to kick the Falcon’s eye. EMMA witnesses the ordeal from the ground.

INTRIGUE 2: Deception – The true extent of the Beauty Industry’s cover-up operations.

INTRIGUE 3: Wound – SKYY LAR’s personal battle mirrored in the larger conflict.

Turning Point 1: A car coming towards them hit the Falcon. The mission’s outcome reveals sinister aspects of the Industry’s agenda, with RAPHAEL’s loyalty and RAVEN’s intentions under intense scrutiny. Turning Point 2: The coalition’s discovery of the Beauty Industry’s cover-up operations intensifies the conflict and sets up future confrontations.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: SKYY LAR and the rebellion delve deeper into their investigation; they stumble on clues suggesting a more significant and sinister agenda behind the industry’s actions. A whistleblower or critical piece of evidence unveils the scope of the conspiracy, setting the stage for future conflicts.

Act 5: Climactic Confrontation and Future Directions

Essence: The coalition reconsiders its strategies and fortifies its resolve on the ongoing threat from the beauty industry.

INTRIGUE 1: SECRET – RAPHAEL’s potential double-agent role.

INTRIGUE 2: CONSPIRACY – The Beauty Industry’s retaliatory strategies. INTRIGUE 3: STRANGE BEHAVIOR – RAPHAEL’s actions under scrutiny. The Beauty Industry might initiate legal actions against the Rebellion members, framing them as extremists or criminals who must face arrests or legal battles, diverting the group’s focus and resources. Responding to these threats and complications requires resources, which might drain the Rebellion’s already limited assets, impacting their ability to operate effectively. Some members might advocate aggressive actions against the beauty industry, shifting from their original non-violent stance, leading to legal repercussions, public backlash, or even personal harm.

HOW THE LAYER IS REVEALED: Suspicion arises among the rebellion members as RAPHAEL’s behavior becomes increasingly questionable. Secret meetings and clandestine activities hint at RAPHAEL’s double-agent role, creating tension and uncertainty within the group.

Turning Point: RAPHAEL’s allegiance is questioned, creating uncertainty for the next episodes.

CLIFFHANGER: Doubts about RAPHAEL’s allegiance introduce a critical moment of uncertainty, propelling the narrative into future episodes.

LOCK-IN: After SKYY LAR loses a left leg, forming and leading a birds-human alliance, shifts its role and responsibility to activism, public commitment, and action, becomes a target and venerable, psychologically transformed, committed to community and relationships, conducts a peaceful fly-past, demands action from Industry, infiltrating Beauty HQ’s facility. SKYY LAR feels alive again. It is doing what he does better and will continue for a very long time until death does it part on the sixth birthday.

AI GENERATED

5-Act Structure to evoke deeper emotional connections

Teaser:

Undeserved Misfortune: SKYY LAR’s peaceful flight interrupted by an aggressive Falcon showcases a clear instance of undeserved misfortune.

Witnessing the Pain of Others: EMMA witnesses SKYY LAR’s struggle, creating immediate empathy for both characters.

Improve: Delve deeper into SKYY LAR’s reaction to this ambush, emphasizing its confusion and pain to heighten audience empathy.

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Act 1: World and Character
Introduction

External Character Conflicts: SKYY LAR’s mentoring role juxtaposed with its injury showcases external conflicts impacting its life.

Plot Intruding on Life: The looming threat of losing its nesting area intrudes significantly on SKYY LAR’s life and its sense of identity.

Improve: Highlight the young pigeons’ reactions to SKYY LAR’s condition, deepening the sense of community distress and empathy.

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Act 2: Conflict and Alliance
Formation

Plans that Failed: SKYY LAR’s efforts to protect its community are undermined by the waste entanglement.

Major Loss: SKYY LAR loses its leg, a tangible symbol of its sacrifice and commitment.

Forced Decision: EMMA’s confrontation with her family’s role in environmental harm forces her into a moral dilemma.

Improve: Amplify the emotional weight of SKYY LAR’s injury and EMMA’s family revelations, possibly through more direct interactions showcasing their internal struggles.

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Act 3: Challenges, Strategy
Development, and Infiltration

Betrayal: RAPHAEL’s potential hidden agendas and secret meetings introduce the theme of betrayal.

Crucible: The infiltration of the Beauty Company Headquarters serves as a crucible, testing the characters’ resolve and unity.

Improve: Clarify the stakes during the infiltration, showcasing how the discoveries directly impact each character, especially SKYY LAR, to enhance the sense of personal investment and danger.

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Act 4: Complications Intensify

Exposed: The Falcon’s connection to the Beauty Industry and the conspiracy’s unveiling exposes the characters to greater dangers.

Extreme Consequences: The discovery of the cover-up operations reveals the extreme consequences of the Beauty Industry’s actions.

Improve: Intensify the Falcon’s menacing presence, tying its actions back to SKYY LAR’s past and the overarching conspiracy, to reinforce the emotional stakes and the sense of impending danger.

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Act 5: Climactic Confrontation and
Future Directions

Emotional Dilemma: RAPHAEL’s conflicted loyalties create an emotional dilemma that resonates with the audience.

Hurt Those They Love: The potential for the characters’ actions to have unintended negative impacts on their community heightens the emotional tension.

Improve: Deepen the portrayal of RAPHAEL’s inner conflict, showing his emotional turmoil and the repercussions of his actions on his relationships within the coalition, to create a more impactful cliffhanger.