Confidentiality Agreement

[Beverley Wood]

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[Beverley Wood]

Is this where the confidentiality agreement is supposed to be? Thanks, I can not find the rewrite class in my courses, help! thankyou.

[Julian Biba]

Hi,
my name is Julian!
I have written 7 full feature scripts, 3 shorts that I shot and a documentary that in total got me many IMDB awards.
I want to be able to go back at the scripts I have written and get them better before putting them out to producers and directors.
I got into this “story telling” thing because of telling my stories (I used to be a child soldier in a communist country, a bodyguard of the mostly targeted and later killed politician; illegal emigrant, imprisoned, tortured and survived missions where I was sent to die) to people who encouraged me to write them. It was ScreenwritingU who put me on the map as a screenwriter. So, this is my solution to writing even in genres out of my comfort zone, like … comedy 😉

[Julian Biba]

Hi, my name is Julian! I have written 7 full feature scripts, 3 shorts that I shot and a documentary that in total got me many IMDB awards. I want to be able to go back at the scripts I have written and get them better before putting them out to producers and directors. I got into this “story telling” thing because of telling my stories (I used to be a child soldier in a communist country, a bodyguard of the mostly targeted and later killed politician; illegal emigrant, imprisoned, tortured and survived missions where I was sent to die) to people who encouraged me to write them. It was ScreenwritingU who put me on the map as a screenwriter. So, this is my solution to writing even in genres out of my comfort zone, like … comedy 😉

[Beverley Wood]

@julian-biba have you found the class yet? can we get in? I can’t…

[Julian Biba]

No, I haven’t found it yet. I emailed Cheryl again yesterday but still nothing…

[Beverley Wood]

Thanks! I think they are having issues with the new platform but hopefully solved soon!

[Julian Biba]

WHISPERS OF THE PAST

OUTLINE

MM1
INT. DANIEL’S VILLA – MORNING
DANIEL, in his 80s, making coffee in the kitchen and listens to 60s music. He hears his doorbell ring and checks his security camera. There is a young woman with a luggage on her hand. Daniel buzzes her in and continues making his coffee. LIZA, early 20s, leaves her luggage in the hallway and goes to the kitchen.

EXT. AIRPORT – NEW YORK – DAY
BEN, late 20s, waiting at the entrance door of the airport terminal checking often his watch.
A yellow taxi cuts in front of two cars and parks right in front of him. Liza gets out of the taxi carrying her luggage on one hand and a handbag in the other.
Liza holds his arm walking in the terminal.
INT. VILLA IN THE SUBURBS – EVENING
Daniel reading the newspaper while listens to some old music on the turntable. He spots an article with title “A new wave of Albanian emigrants reaches Italian shores!” and pulls the newspaper near to his face to look better.
He then looks at a picture from 1940s of himself with Sofia and Dr. Skampa.
His son, ELI, late 40s, enters the house and then Daniel’s study room.
Eli finds out about Liza and insists that she has to marry a Jew. Daniel reminds him that he is an Accepted Jew not a born one. Eli leaves the room slamming the door. Gets out of the house and jump on his car leaving in a hurry.
Daniel gets up from his chair and picks up from the bookshelf an old disk. He puts on the turntable listening at a music from the forties. He pours some Albanian cognac in a glass and sits on his chair, smiling at first and then a tear goes down his cheek.

MM2
TRANSITION:
INT. RESTAURANT – EVENING
1943, Thessaloniki, Greece
The same song old Daniel was listening continues in the restaurant performed by a live band while several couples dance on the dance floor. Daniel, 35 years old, is dancing swing with a beautiful girl. The other couples either continue dancing or stop, but all watch with admiration the couples dance.
SOFIA, a 20 year old girl enters the restaurant looking around to find somebody and stares at Daniel and the girl dancing. Daniel sees her and nods with a smile, but Sofia doesn’t seem pleased.
When the dance ends, Daniel and the girl goes back to their table. Sofia goes there as well and nods at the girl to leave. Girl: “And who are you supposed to be?” Sofia: “His wife…!” Daniel tries to keep himself from laughing and open his arms innocently when the girl gives him a questioning look. The girl leaves upset and Sofia sits in her place.
Daniel: “Wife…?” Sofia: “Do you want her back?” Daniel: “Maybe we should take some time apart from each other…!” Sofia: “So you can play with more women? I’m not like them!” Daniel: “Why are you…” Sofia: “I’m pregnant!” Daniel is worryingly surprised. Daniel: “I can only marry a Jewish woman!” Sofia: “My father will be furious with me if he finds out… and I’m not going to kill this baby!” Daniel: “No, I don’t want that either, but…” Sofia: “I need to use the restroom!” Daniel stands up as the gentleman he is, while Sofia gets up and leaves the table.
Petros, 23 years old, looks at them from the bar with an ironic angry face.
INT. AT THE RESTAURANT – BY THE LADIES ROOM – NIGHT
Sofia comes out of the ladies room facing Petros staring at her. She tries to ignore him but he grabs her arm and open with his jacket with the other hand, showing a revolver. She stops and gives him an ironic look.
Petros tries to intimidate her but Daniel comes to her aid.
INT. RESTAURANT – DANCING FLOOR – SAME
The band starts a slow romantic song and all couples follow with a slow dance.
Sofia gets closer to Daniel putting her hand on his cheek and kissing slowly the other side of his neck, then puts her head on his shoulder.
Daniel smiles and closes his eyes shortly to enjoy that moment.
INT. RESTAURANT – BY THE BAND – NIGHT
Suddenly the music stops and an SS officer, HANS 31 year old, takes the microphone.
Another officer, Dieter 30 year old, stands by the entrance door, while his soldiers stand by behind him.
Sofia looks at Alex, the restaurant owner, with her eyes wide open from fear.
Daniel and Sofia follow Alex walking casually. He leads them behind the bar and through a door to the back of the restaurant.
DIETER, 30 year old, stands at the door of the restaurant and once Hans stops talking, he orders his soldiers to enter the venue.
Petro realizes the escape of Daniel and Sofia, then sees the soldiers checking for IDs and weapons. Being afraid of getting caught he gets out in the same way they did.
EXT. ON THE STREET – NIGHT
Daniel and Sofia are confronted by Petro who shoots at Daniel but Sabine gets in front of him getting hit in the head, but is alive. Petro calls the German patrol exposing Daniel as being a Jew causing him to run away …. 

MM3
EXT. STREET IN FRONT OF DANIEL’S APARTMENT – NIGHT
Daniel sees German soldiers in front of his building, while others check the building’s apartments during a massive search for Jews.
The Germans are doing a whole city sweep.

INT. IN ALEX’S RESTAURANT – NIGHT
Daniel goes back Alex’s restaurant and asks his help. Alex arranges for him to go to Albania, at Dr. Skampa’s house. Before leaving Daniel asks Alex’s to help stealing Sofia from the hospital.
INT. SOFIA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Dieter and Hans are dining in Sofia’s house as guests of her father. Petro interrupts telling them that Sofia was shot by a Jew who escaped the patrol’s pursue.
They all get up and leave to hospital.
INT. AT THE HOSPITAL – NIGHT
Daniel and Alex steal Sofia from the hospital.
Daniel and Alex carry unconscious Sofia on a stretcher and get her on the back of a truck.
EXT. AT THE HOSPITAL – NIGHT
Hans and his platoon realize that Sofia isn’t in the hospital. Petro is escorting them and finds out from the hospital worker that Daniel took Sofia on a truck and shows him the direction they departed. Petro reports this to the Hans and guides them to follow the escapees, but tells her parents to wait at home.
EXT. ON THE ROAD – DAWN
Daniel and unconscious Sofia traveling out of Thessaloniki towards Albania.
The Germans with Petro spot them and shoot some warning rounds in the air to force them stop. The truck drives away faster and Hans orders his soldiers to shoot directly at the target.
Sofia’s arm falls over the edge of the end of the truck making them believe that she was killed.
The truck make several zig-zags then crosses the Greek – Albanian border catching off guard the Italian / Albanian border patrol. The truck disappears between the mountains, that makes it dangerous for the Germans to follow.
INT. SOFIA’S HOUSE – DAY
Hans visits Sofia’s parents while they having breakfast being served by a young man and tells them that she was killed by Daniel. Petros whispers on Sofia’s father’s ear that it was Germans who actually killed her.
Sofia’s father is angered and attacks Hans with a knife from the table. Hans dodges the knife and punches him hard dropping him on the floor.
Hans: “You bastard was supposed to give us all the Jews!” Sofia’s father: “I did and that’s how you repay me!” Hans: “What about this young Jewish servant of yours! You fucking homo! Didn’t you think I’ll find out?”
Hans shoots the young servant on the head, then both Sofia’s parents. Then he turns of Petros in Greek: “How is your communist father doing?” Petros: “Let me explain…!” Hans shoots Petro. Hans: “I don’t care, you are all the same to me!” then he turns to his soldiers: “This would be a good residence for me. Clean it up!”
MM4:
INT. DR. SKAMPA’S HOME – NIGHT
Daniel is welcomed by doctor Skampa who hides him in his house while treating Sofia’s injury.
Sofia is in coma for several months and Daniel waits desperately by her bedside.
INT. GERMAN COMMAND HEADQUARTER – DAY
The Hans and Dieter are ordered to enter in Albania with their army.
EXT. MOUNTAINS OVERSEEING THE MAIN ROAD – DAY
RAMIZ, in his late 20s, together with a few other communist guerrilla throws hand grenades to the German convoy of Hans and Dieter. The results are: 1 dead soldier and several injured.
EXT. ALBANIAN VILLAGE – DAY
Hans orders his soldiers to gather 100 men from the nearest village. He tells the people of the village that would execute 100 men every time one of his soldiers was killed. Then he orders his soldiers to execute the 100 men they gathered.
INT. AT THE HOSPITAL – ALBANIA – DAY
Albanian partisans want to take with them the injured Italian soldiers at Dr. Skampa’s clinic.
Dr. Skampa stops them and explains that the injured are no danger to anyone and will leave the country as soon as they get better.
Someone raised the volume of the radio in the hallway and they hear that Italy has officially capitulated and the German troops have entered the Albanian territory. German officials have declared that they are not invading Albania but instead they are just passing through. To the critics about violence and terror caused to the village of Borova by the German troops, their commander answered: “Whoever decides to attack the troops of the Third Reich is going to face our iron fist!”
A courier, Ramiz, comes running and whispers something to the partisan commander.
The Italian military men decide to go with the partisans.
MM5:
EXT. CITY STREETS – DAY
German army enters the city while the people look at them with fear.
INT. AT THE HOSPITAL – DAY
At the hospital doctor Skampa is introduced to the 2 German commanders who thank him for caring for their soldiers and are pleasantly surprised to realize his speaks very well German.
EXT. CITY’S STREET – DAY
Ramiz’s profession is photographer and he is working in the plaza of the city. He is platonically in love with ELSA, Dr. Skampa’s daughter and sneaks a picture of her walking on the main plaza escorted by Daniel.
INT. AT THE HOSPITAL – DAY
German commanders check on their injured soldiers and are invited for dinner at doctor Scampa’s house.
INT. DR. SKAMPA’S HOUSE – DAY
Dr. Skampa explains to Daniel that has to stay in the basement while the German commanders have dinner in the house.
EXT. AT THE ENTRANCE OF DR SKAMPA’S HOUSE – EVENING
Dr. Skampa convinces Hans and Dieter to leave their soldiers outside while dinning with him.
INT. DR. SKAMPA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
The German commanders eat and drink a lot in Dr. Skampa’s and his wife’s company. Daniel and Sofia hide in the basement and keep quiet.
Ramiz goes to Dr. Skampa’s home and the soldiers notify Dr. Skampa about the guest.
Ramiz ask his daughter’s hand in marriage without her agreement. Dr. Skampa disagrees and escorts him out. Ramiz tells Dr. Skampa that he protects the Jews too, but Dr. Skampa doesn’t admit on hiding Daniel.

MM6:
INT. AT THE HOSPITAL – EVENING
Dieter’s car brakes hard in front of the hospital.
Just before he gets in the building, Hans car arrives in the same manner. Hans gets fast out of the car escorted by two SS soldiers and Ramiz.
Hans pays Ramiz that shows gratitude and follows them satisfied.
Dr. Skampa recognizes Ramiz from the window of his office and calls his wife: “Go now to baptize the baby with the family and the guests. I’ll meet you there. We’ll need some money for the celebration!”
The Germans and Ramiz rush in Dr. Skampa’s office and confront him about Daniel. They show him the picture taken by Ramiz of Daniel escorting his daughter at the plaza of the city.
Dieter: “Swear that it isn’t true and I’ll kill this dirtbag right here!” Hans: “Let the man go, he think he is doing something good, but it is for the wrong reasons!” Hans nods Ramiz to leave and he does so keeping his head down and giving one more shy look at Dr. Skampa.
Dr. Skampa admits having but refuses to surrender Daniel unless they decide first to kill him and his family publicly.
German commanders give him time till the morning to get rid of the Jew. Dr. Skampa: “Thank you my friends!”
Dieter: “Are you really going to let the Jew go?” Hans: “My loyalty lyes only with Hitler!” Hans nods at his SS soldiers “Dead or alive, it’s all the same!” They leave right away.
Dr. Skampa calls the priest: “Please bring your incoming guests where you taught me the Old Testament!”
Dr. Skampa gets out of the back of the clinic and takes a horse cab and disappears in the dark streets.
EXT. OUTSIDE DR. SKAMPA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Hans and Dieter wait in their car while their SS soldiers search Dr. Skampa’s house.
EXT. IN FRONT OF THE PRIEST’S VILLAGE HOUSE – NIGHT
Dr. Skampa meets his friend and asks him to switch cars. Then he tells his family and the guests to get in his car and they leave the city fast.
EXT. MAIN ROAD OF THE CITY EXIT – NIGHT
Dr. Skampa’s car stops at a German roadblock while exiting the city, but they finally let them through, when he tells them that is going to his summer house in the north of the country for a few days.
EXT. HIGHWAY – NIGHT
Dr. Skampa’s car is stopped by a roadblock of the partizans led by Ramiz. He gives them hard time but then allows them to leave.
EXT. AT THE PORT – NIGHT
Daniel begs Sofia to join him, but she is too weak to travel. He promises Sofia that will come back and get her.
Dr. Skampa gets Daniel on the fishing boat that he has already paid for the service.
His wife asks him where would they go. He answers: “South, to a friend’s house!”

MM7:
INT. DR. SKAMPA FRIEND’S HOUSE – DAY
Dr. Skampa and family hear on radio that Germany has declared defeat and their forces are leaving the city that same day carrying a white flag.
They are happy and decide to return to their home.
INT. IN THE CHURCH – NIGHT
Dieter and Hans meet with Ramiz and some partizans to discuss their surrender. After the priest’s intervention, Ramiz agrees to let them leave the city in peace to avoid a bloodshed.
EXT. MAIN ROAD – CITY OUTSCIRTS – DAY
German troops led by Hans and Dieter leave peacefully the city carrying a white flag, but are sneak attacked by a group of partisans led by Ramiz and have to fight their way out.
EXT. IN FRONT OF THE CHURCH – DAY
Many people are gathered in front of the church where Ramiz becomes the prosecutor and the judge of the priest, which he accuses of collaborating with the Nazis and hangs him in front of the crowd.
EXT. DR. SKAMPA’S HOUSE – FRONT YARD – DAY
Ramiz and three other partisans come out of Dr. Skampa’s neighbor house carrying Jewlry and gold coins. Then he enters Dr. Skampa’s house to force him give up his wealth. Dr. Skampa refuses and they torture him but without success.
Then Ramiz decides to torture his wife, while sending another partisan to find his daughter in the house and kill her if she resists.
They hear the girls screaming and then a few shoots. Dr. Skampa acts like he wants to cooperate and grubs Ramiz’s revolver, killing him and another partisan, but gets killed with his wife by the last partisan left on the front yard.
INT. ALBANIAN EMBASSY – DAY
Daniel goes at the Albanian Embassy to ask about Dr. Skampa’s family and Sofia, but is told that they were all killed by Germans when leaving the city.

MM8
INT. LIZA BOYFRIEND’S HOUSE – DAY
Eli tries to convince Liza to go back home with him, while explaining the reasons to her boyfriend and family.
He recognizes the old picture of Daniel with Sofia and Dr. Skampa hanging on the wall and questions Liza about it.
Boyfriend’s mother explains to him: “The three people on that photo are: my father, a Jewish man he saved and that man’s fiancée, which is the lady seating next to you… we call her aunty Sofia!”
Eli: “You were Daniel’s fiancée?”
Eli calls his father and put’s Sofia on the phone (Greek): “I am so happy to hear your voice my love…!”

A. EPIC DRAMA

B. Title: WHISPERS OF THE PAST

C. High Concept:
A Jewish man flees the Nazis with his infant son, believing his wife perished in the chaos. Fifty years later, his granddaughter uncovers a shocking truth: her grandmother is still alive, making possible to reunite a family torn apart by war.
D. Main Conflict:
Daniel escapes the Nazis in Greece and goes into hiding in Albania, but that country gets occupied by the Nazis as well. So he has to leave again with his newborn son, but he has to leave behind his beloved wife, hoping they will reunite again after the war.
E. Transformational Journey:
From a doubtful person Daniel turns into a believer of the goodness of the people’s heart, although the people who helped him don’t make it and he loses his wife in the process, remaining alone to raise his newborn son. Fifty years later, by chance (or will of God) his granddaughter finds his long lost wife and her grandmother.
F. Opposition:
The Nazis follow Daniel from Greece into Albania and want to capture him but a good man who gave him safe heaven makes sure that he escapes. The new regime in Albania tells him that the family who helped him and his wife were killed by the Nazis, although that was done by the new communist regime.