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Subject Line: Roscoe’s – Trust Relationships
“What I learned is…?” How much relationships add another layer to the mystery story. Thank God – this is just a rough draft. This still needs work, but moving in good direction.
OPENING: A Navajo family is killed by a Skinwalker/Witch.
What is a skinwalker/witch? Why did the skinwalker kill the family?
INCITING INCIDENT: Tribal Cop is called into investigate Navajo deaths. Off the Indian Reservation.
Why are animal tracks larger than normal at crime scene?
CURRENT DIRECTION: Can tribal cop Stephen explain these deaths as spiritual in nature?
TWIST: A fearful, County Sheriff, says there is no money to help Stephen investigate. He’s on his own.
TURNING POINT 1: Stephen goes to home of his Navajo ex-wife Gabby.
MIS-TRUST: Stephen divorced Gabby because of her infidelity.
TRUST: Gabby never lied about her Navajo traditions. She knows a skinwalker is after her.
Why does the skinwalker follow Stephen? How come the skinwalker shape-shifts into a black wolf?
CURRENT DIRECTION: Why does wolf stop at the cedar ash circle around Gabby’s home?
TWIST: Gabby stands inside that circle and the wolf won’t cross it. She is protected.
Gabby is later found with bruises on her face.
CURRENT DIRECTION: The skinwalker attacks Stephen’s truck.
TWIST: Stephen’s cop partner shoots the skinwalker who disappears into dust.
Gabby wasn’t inside the car crash that killed her family.
MIDPOINT: Stephen interviews Gabby’s uncle Jack.
TRUST: Stephen always respected Gabby’s uncle Jack. The in-law supported Stephen in his divorce.
MIS-TRUST: Stephen believes Jack is lying to him for some reason.
Why does Gabby’s aunt Kathy attend a skinwalker meeting? Gabby then disappears.
CURRENT DIRECTION: Why does aunt Kathy threaten Stephen and Gabby?
TWIST: Aunt Kathy admits if she had the chance to kill Gabby. She would.
Why does Gabby visit a Navajo grandmother?
MIS-TRUST: Gabby never trusted anyone but her own dead grandmother.
TRUST: Gabby discovers an elder grandmother who helps her with this skinwalker.
CURRENT DIRECTION: Skinwalker catches up to Gabby.
TWIST: Skinwalker shape shifts into wolves and they kill Gabby’s close friend.
TURNING POINT 2: Stephen protects Gabby.
Why does Stephen go to a modern Shaman? What did a gun shop owner give Stephen?
MIS-TRUST: Stephen never believed in any kind of shaman.
TRUST: A female shaman sends Stephen in the right direction concerning this skinwalker.
Climax: Stephen and Gabby fight against the skinwalker.
Resolution: The skinwalker is finally killed.
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Kimberly’s Trust Relationships
What I learned: Adding specific complexity to relationships allows for more thrilling opportunities.
1. Main characters.
Hero: Lacia<div>
Villain: Rian
Red Herring Character: Emma
Trusted, but shouldn’t be: Rian
Isn’t trusted, but should be: Emma
2. Characters as trustable / not trustable.
Lacia (oldest child)
· basic state is trustable
· might appear not trustable – PTSD-caused outbursts
· circumstances causing a switch to not trustable – close physical contact, event that she can’t control, loud noises
· circumstances causing a switch from not trustable to trustable – when someone’s life is in danger
Rian (only child)
· basic state is not trustable
· might appear trustable – master manipulator and psychopath
· circumstances causing a switch to not trustable – when his safety/freedom is threatened, when he is confident he can get away with it
Emma (middle child)
· basic state is trustable
· might appear not trustable – allied with Rian to steal the boat and imprison Lacia
· circumstances causing a switch to not trustable – is easily manipulated by Rian, when jealous, when she is vying for attention
3. Character relationships.
Hero / Villain: Lacia doesn’t trust Rian from the beginning but lets her guard down as he sees to need her help; Rian sees Lacia as formidable foe but with exploitable weaknessesHero / Red Herring Character: Lacia sees Emma as petulant child and potentially dangerous; Emma sees Lacia as mother figure with all the conflicted emotions of love/hate/admire/envy
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Kathy’s Trust Relationships
What I learned doing this assignment is that I have trust issues built in.”
Create trust / distrust relationships between your characters and add them to your Thriller Map.
1. Make a list of the main characters.
Hero: Simone
Villain: Ben
Red Herring Character: Marcie
Trusted, but shouldn’t be: Ben
Isn’t trusted, but should be: Simone since Ben doesn’t trust Simone.
2. With each character, ask these questions:
Simone:
A. What is their basic state — trustable or not trustable? trustable
B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable? Not applicable for this character.
C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other? Will never be not trustable.
Ben:
A. What is their basic state — trustable or not trustable? Not trustable
B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable? Appears trustable to Simone so she marries him.
C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other? Will never be trustable.
Marcie:
A. What is their basic state — trustable or not trustable? Not trustable
B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable? Appears trustable to Ben but really isn’t, is selfish, wants Ben and the money for herself.
C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other? When she’s in danger, she turns on Ben.
Beth:
A. What is their basic state — trustable or not trustable? trustable
B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable? Not applicable for this character.
C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other? Not applicable for this character.
3. With each character relationship, brainstorm how trust or distrust might show up between them.
Hero / Villain: Simone/Ben
Ben is a handsome charming con man. He partners with Marcie to find women who are recently divorced and have expensive houses. He finds Simone and marries her. She trusts him until the end.
Simone marries Ben.
Simone signs a pre-nup which contains a hidden sentence.
She believes his lie about the note.
She believes his lie about playing tennis.
Red Herring Character: Simone/Marcie
Simone doesn’t know about Marcie, Ben’s secret partner/lover. Only meets her in the 3rd act.
Marcie runs down Simone with a car.
Marcie hits Simone with a tennis racquet.
Marcie hits Simone with the sailboat boom.
Marcie lies about the Coast Guard not coming.
Marcie shoots Simone.
Hero / Trusted, but shouldn’t be: Simone/Ben
Ben is a handsome charming con man. He partners with Marcie to find women who are recently divorced and have expensive houses. He finds Simone and marries her. She trusts him until the end but she shouldn’t have.
Ben fights with Simone.
Ben aims his gun at her.
Ben socks Simone on the boat.
Ben shoots at Simone on the boat
Hero / Isn’t trusted, but should be: not applicable
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Trust Relationships:
Hero / Villain: Tang – Phil
TRUST: Tang trust Phil as they were best friends growing up and now have that same connection or so Tang thinks. Phil plays it cool with Tang – over looks him being a Trans Male so they can remain tight – keep your friend close and your enemies closer! He can throw Tang off the scent and protect himself until it’s too late and he leaves for NYC.
DISTRUST: He says there’s nothing he is gonna learn about the death of the Mayor.
TRUST: Phil is interested in everything Tang has to say about the discovery of the black threads at the Mayor’s and mom’s murder.
DISTRUST: Phil declares that they haven’t said that the Mayor was murdered, and wants to know who actually did kill his Mom. (He wanted to but was scared away before he – and his 2 Hooded Buddies – could)
TRUST: Phil says he found out some info about his Mom’s death and meet him somewhere.
DISTRUST: Tang thinks it’s an odd place to meet and why demand the Girlfriend has to be there but no one else.
TRUST: Sees that Phil is alone and it seems that he has something to say.
DISTRUST: Oops, Phil is not alone and Tang and Girlfriend are bagged.
Hero / Red Herring Character: Tang – Sheriff
TRUST: When Tang first meets up with Sheriff it seems he is genuienally empathetic.
DISTRUST: When asked for info about the deaths and he doesn’t give it.
TRUST: He listens to Tang’s concerns about the evidence.
DISTRUST: When Tang finds hoods were delivered to his address and he knows nothing about it – is that true or not?
TRUST: Tang trusts him when he agrees that his son, Phil, must be stopped and arrested.
DISTRUST: Soon enough the Sheriff can’t be trusted as he last second gives Phil a chance to escape.
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Trust… Reveal… I’m guessing Foreshadow is coming soon.
We all notice these elements in what we’ve written. We all understand we need to include all these things. I guess the lessons are telling us that it is important to identify each of these things (even though we know they are there). Hmm…
I’m wondering how important it is to identify scene-by-scene MIS? My thinking is to lump it all into one category called Questions, because that (and forward motion) is really all that matters in the scene, isn’t it? Save the micro-MIS for character development. Any thoughts/feedback?
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Emmanuel Sullivan’s Trust Relationships
What I learned is relationships between the hero and villain are key to advancing the story, even if they both attempt at trusting and then distrusting each other. I think secondary character’s trust and distrust follow. This is a good exercise to plan out or add to story plots.
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Melanie’s Trust Relationships
What I learned: By incorporating trust/distrust relationships, I’m actually getting to know the hero better. I’ve got a long way to go but it helps throwing situations at her where she questions whether or not to trust the villain/red herring character and how she reacts to each. Cool.
Characters:
Hero: Vivienne Worth
Villain: Hugo Gage
Red Herring Character: Danny Worth, Vivienne’s ex-husband
Trusted, but shouldn’t be: Hugo Gage
Isn’t trusted, but should be: Lily Kramer, her best friend
Character States:
Hero: Vivienne Worth
Trustable. She’s a 911 Operator, handles people’s emergencies, and is a trusted go-to source for help.
Underneath it all, she’s wavering. She’s been strong for years in this line of work but having heard a woman die on the other end of the line, she questions her own credibility. Can she really be trusted with other people’s lives?
Depending on her success on the job, and taking her recent med prescription, she can flip back and forth from trusting herself vs. not trusting herself.
Villain: Hugo Gage
Trustable. His profession as a psychiatrist has a built in trust factor. His demeanor also contributes to his trust-ability since he is soft-spoken, thoughtful, and takes care of his plants with impeccable precision.
On the outside, he appears like the perfect quintessential therapist – a trusted caretaker of Vivienne’s deepest secrets. However, inside he is at war believing his client’s negligence helped take the life of his wife.
He wants to get into Vivienne’s head, so he will appear trustable to her in order to get what he wants.
Red Herring: Danny Worth (ex-husband)
Not Trustable. He’s Vivienne’s ex-husband for a reason, after hiding an extra marital affair. She would rather not have anything to do with him but is forced to face him as they coordinate visitation of their daughter.
He wants to be trusted, even though he’s messed up in the past, and appears to be for his daughter’s sake. However, he’s selfishly motivated and will do what he thinks is right in the circumstances.
Isn’t Trusted but should be: Lily Kramer (best friend)
Not Trustable. She reveals to Vivienne that she had a brief affair with her ex-husband. It’s devastating to Vivienne and changes her perspective on their friendship.
In conversation with Vivienne, she takes on the nurturing/supportive friend. She’s a widower, though, and will try to climb the ladder at the country club even if it means betraying a friend’s trust. She ends up being a victim of the killer.
Trust/Distrust Sequences:
Vivienne/Hugo
Trust: Vivienne assumes Hugo has her best interest at heart as her psychiatrist. She finally decides to talk to someone about her PTSD working at the call center and more specifically failing with the woman who died while on the phone with her.
Distrust: Hugo asks a question that seems inappropriate in the session – asking her exactly what happened on that particular 911 call and why she was negligent.
Trust: He prescribes medication to treat her anxiety.
Distrust: The medication does the opposite and makes her anxious. So she stops taking it.
Trust: He adjusts meds and tells her to call anytime, he’s avail.
Distrust: He shows up at her house the next day to return her umbrella (?). He didn’t call plus how did he know where she lives?
Trust: She researches him on the internet and finds favorable reviews.
Distrust: She goes to help her daughter after her 911 call. When she gets to the house she calls his office phone for help and he picks up. She hears his voice at the house – he’s the killer.
Hero/Red Herring
Vivienne/Danny
Distrust: He had an affair during their marriage and lied about it. This resulted in their divorce.
Distrust: Bruising on Natalie’s arm.
Trust: When she drops him off, she sees him wearing an expensive suit, schlepping dry cleaning. He’s got his act together. He’s friendly and seems like he wants to reconnect.
Distrust: he forgets to pick up Natalie at school, so she has to get her instead.
Distrust: He is at a cafe with another blonde woman. He lied about not being able to get Natalie
Distrust: Lily reveals their affair – his name is mud again.
Trust: He picks up when she calls him for help in the final scene. He rescues her.
Vivienne/Lily
Trust: She seems to want to help, takes her to coffee.
Distrust: Reveals her affair with Danny.
Trust: She invites Natalie over to her daughter’s sleepover and treats her to a night out. Natalie enjoys hanging out with the popular crowd.
Distrust: She avoids her at the country club, hangs out with people they never considered friends.
Trust: She becomes a target for the killer. She calls 911 (gets Vivienne) and pleads for help.
Distrust: Vivienne goes to hospital to visit Lily. Finds she is asleep, looks on her cell phone and sees her ex-husband’s number under recent calls.
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Subject line: Larry’s Trust Relationships
What I learned doing this assignment is that relationships between the characters provide more mystery, suspense, twists and intrigue. This also helps to start defining the characters more concisely. This was a very good exercise. Ideally, by the time we get to the climax the audience will be wondering exactly who is or is not in the Ring for it will appear almost everyone is. Identities will be revealed in the very final scene – or maybe not.
1. Make a list of the main characters.
· Hero: Detective
· Villain: The Pedophile Ring (School superintendent, Court Judge, Police Chief, School Principal)
· Red Herring Characters: Gym teacher (suspect in murder) + Police Station Captain (direct boss of Hero)
· Trusted, but shouldn’t be: Villain
· Isn’t trusted, but should be: Red Herring characters
2. With each character, ask these questions:
Character: Hero
· A. Basic state — trustable
· B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable? At one point the Hero will appear no trustable
· C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other?
· At beginning of act 3 (turning point #2 – lowest point) Hero’s wife leaves him; he will drink and heavily and question the value and purpose and prospects of his investigation: he will not trustable in continuing his investigation for a time
Character: The Ring
· A. Basic state — not trustable
· B. How might they really be not trustable, but appear trustable?
Initially, all members of the Ring appear trustable as they hold high positions of responsibility in the community
· C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other?
At the beginning, each appears to conduct himself in proper fashion according to his position, but as the film progresses, each will act in a suspicious way suggesting they are not trustable. Each one’s connection with the Ring will be signaled by the revelation of a signet ring on his finger and by communication between the ring members.
Character: Red Herring #1 – Gym Teacher
· A. Basic state — trustable
· B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable?
The Gym Teacher will not appear trustable because of his lack of an alibi and evidence (planted as part of a frame-up) makes him appear guilty
· C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other?
The detective will find contradictory information and determine the trial was a railroad job, which will make the teacher then appear innocent.
Character: Red Herring #2 – Police Station Captain
· A. Basic state — trustable
· B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable
During the Detective’s investigations, the captain will appear to be obstructing or misleading the Hero, but, in fact, he is always following police procedures. (This is to give some misdirection for the audience. Once there is a pattern of Villains in high places it will be looking for anyone who might be part of the Secret Society.)
· C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other?
At the end, it will be revealed the Captain cared about the Hero.
3. With each character relationship, brainstorm how trust or distrust might show up between them.
· Hero / Villain:
Initially, the Hero has no reason to distrust any of the Villains. One by one each reveals he is not as he appears to be:
The police chief appears to interfere with the Hero’s investigation so the Hero begins to question the chief’s motives
The judge railroads the trial so that the Teacher is found guilty so the Hero suspects the judge is crooked
The superintendent will try to trap and kill the Hero so the Hero realizes he is not the nice guy he pretended to be.
· Hero / Red Herring Character #1 – teacher
Initially, the Hero believes the teacher is guilty, but in an interview with the teacher, the Hero starts to have doubts and distrust turns to trust
Hero / Red Herring Character #2 – station captain
While initially trusting the captain, the Hero starts to suspect he is trying to thwart his investigation. At different points the captain appears to be hiding evidence, and at one point, to endanger the Hero’s life
4. Create a sequence for each trust/distrust relationship (like I did with Three Days of The Condor) and then add that to your map.
In terms of trust/distrust twists I have developed the following:
Hero/ Station Captain
(Here I want the audience to keep wondering if the Captain is part of the Ring.)
1. Trust
The captain and the hero have a friendly, working relationship
2. Distrust
The captain assigns the Hero to a high-profile murder case which is not his specialty.
Trust
3. The captain steers the Hero to a past assault case which provides a key clue to helping the Hero in his investigation.
Distrust
4. When a car appears to try to run over the Hero the captain downplays it as a “crazy driver hopped up on that new LSD drug.
Distrust
5. After a sniper shoots at the Hero from a rooftop, the captain collects the shells ahead of the Hero and also appears ready to push the hero off the edge of the roof.
Trust
6. At end, the captain has provided the Hero with a “ new-type” bullet-proof vest” which has saved the Hero’s life.
Hero/ Superintendent (alias psycho killer)
Trust
1. At beginning, superintendent ingratiates himself into the initial investigation of the teacher by providing “evidence” against the fall guy who he is framing for a child’s murder.
Distrust
2. When questioned the superintendent lies about his transfers to different school areas where he committed additional acts of atrocities (which is a key clue to finding him guilty of the murder).
Trust
3. The superintendent phones the Hero to tell him his son has been selected as a “special student” and will get special school board recognition.
Distrust
4. The superintendent later phones and tells the Hero he is holding his son hostage (who will be bait to trap and kill the Hero).
Hero/Detective’s Friend
Trust
1. At the beginning, they are good working buddies.
Distrust
2. The Hero overhears the captain assigning the friend to “oversee” the Hero’s activities and report all to the captain.
Trust
3. The friend helps a witness with a police sketch of a killer suspect
Distrust
4. The Hero finds the sketch “misplaced”.
Trust
5. The friend helps find the real killer.
Hero/Judge
Trust
1. The Hero believes the fall guy will get a fair trial, based on the judge’s reputation as a good judge.
Distrust
2. The judge railroads the trial to ensure a guilty verdict is found and that raises the Hero’s suspicions.
Superintendent/ Judge (Ring Leader)
Trust
1. The judge trusts the superintendent will kill the Hero.
Distrust
2. He has a back-up plan to kill the superintendent if he is captured by the police.
6. Give us the new version of your Thriller Map.
No idea as to the format the Thriller map is supposed to take.
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Kathryn’s Trust Relationships
What I learned: what a major breakthrough this lesson was!!!! This lesson took my three hours and was well worth every minute. I learned that alternating trust and distrust works so much better in terms of intrigue, and keeping the audience on their toes than what I had–which was mostly one way then a switch. I moved scenes around, added scenes, took out scenes and changed the trust/distrust in existing scenes. I also learned I have to change the midpoint to save a reveal for later, but I haven’t done that yet. I am very excited.
Hero: Max
Villain: Dr. S
Red Herring Character: Emily
Trusted, but shouldn’t be: Dr. S
Isn’t trusted, but should be: Good Dr.
MAX/ DR. S:
Trust: Dr. S takes care of Emily when she’s ill.
Distrust: Dr. S is the only one at the car crash funeral
– Trust: Dr. comes right away to treat his headaches
Distrust: Emily is having an affair with Dr. S
Trust: he leaks info about the good dr.’s virus killing the original Emily
Distrust: the Good Dr. is murdered
Trust: Dr. S finds the viral map in the good dr.’s office
– Distrust: person from car crash reported dead 2 months earlier
Trust: Dr. is about to administer life saving procedure
MAX/EMILY:
– Distrust: Emily can’t be at the opening
-Trust: Emily is first person by his side after accident
Distrust: Emily is having an affair
Trust: Emily shows him the good dr.’s work
-Distrust: surveillance on the watch she gave him
– Trust: Emily tries to take the bullet herself
-Distrust: drunk driver was Emily’s first patient
-Trust: Emily breaks code into private room with master viral controls
Distrust: Emily kills Dr. S
– Trust: Emily turns off the master controls
MAX/GOOD DR.
distrust: virus came from his lab
trust: good dr leads investigation into why the virus has mutated
distrust: virus killed Emily was the same!
trust: good dr is murdered
distrust: viral map in good dr office
trust: viral map is controlled by Dr. S
STRUCTURE FOR MR & MRS AMERCIA
OPENING: Mass of people don’t show up to campaign rally, all have fevers
-night of opening debate his wife is ill and can’t be there, Dr. S takes care of her
-people are getting sick right and left, linked to an uncontrolled viral infection
-virus came from good dr.’s lab
Max’s campaign manager is staunch
-Emily can’t remember details prior to cancer, he goes to meet her at a restaurant and she isn’t there. Max goes to his wife’s grave
-Good Dr. demands investigation into why
-Main “human party” candidate becomes the front runner
-Max is threatened by the opponent
-Max’s car is tailed the night of the announcement
INCITING INCIDENT: Max gets in a car crash.
-the funeral for the drunk driver has no attendees, but Dr. S, man was a war vet/amputee
-wakes up with/comforted by Emily, flashing lights, no memory; (Emily is in a Dr.’s coat—maybe flash to this later)
-rehab clinic is very secretive
-the rehab building is half blocked off for “construction”
-Pres uses rehab clinic alongside prosthetic uses with AI limbs
-Dr. S treats his pounding headaches
-the front runner dies (of the virus)
-(Original Emily was a physical therapist)
-campaign manager has a sick daughter, Max tells him the truth about Emily in private
-everyone who was treated is banned from voting…possibly anyone to come into contact with them
-cancer research center is shut down by investigators
-clinic has been funded by the opposing party
-target physical therapists for virus
-leaked to the press that Emily is AI, he denies
his house is targeted, and the clinic, death threats
Campaign manager meet the Dr., hands him paperwork,
TURNING POINT 1: Emily is arrested.
Max prepares to resign,
-alter voting polls, polls sky-rocket
Emily begs him to stop investigating the virus
-people get virus passports
Emily is having an affair with Dr. S
-Emily is the only person who’s worked there before, and after: show’s Max good Dr.’s work
-Pres finds surveillance attached to his watch
-Dr. S tells him The virus Emily died of is the mother of the ones killing everyone
he misses a check up and is followed
Max becomes president
-Good Dr is murdered
-the drunk driver was Emily’s first patient, after her death
-Dr. S finds viral map in Good Dr’s office
Max pulls over car following him—
-there is no one in the car following him, car blows up
Max leaves his “watch” in his car, then goes back in—he sees Emily put a body in the car?
-Emily is shot, insists he take her to the lab to fix herself
MIDPOINT: Max’s brain is in a robot body.
-he goes underground, under wife’s grave, to lab
-there is a crematorium in the lab
He is threatened with a Supreme Court case
-Max’s headaches make him blackout, Emily gives him a reboot, takes herself off the grid
TURNING POINT 2: The brain is dying, Max collapses during state of the union.
-Dr. S comes to treat Pres right away himself and Emily refuses
-the person in the car crash was reported dead two months earlier
Dr turns Emily off, but she is off the grid—he sends all workers to locate her
Emily breaks into code room with master controls
Dr. is about to administer life saving operation
-Emily infects the Dr and changes his “profile” with someone else
CLIMAX: Emily kills Dr. S and tells Max to turn her off.
-the Dr “kills himself”
-power in the clinic goes out. Dr. is dead, everyone else (except Emily) is “off”
-Emily tells the Pres his brain is in the body of a robot, but it’s dying, he has a choice, does he become full AI or die?
-Emily turns off the master controls, shows they were controlled by Dr. S
RESOLUTION: Max decides to become a full robot. Address the public as if he were human and funds the viral research. “the people are safe”
-Max sends politicians with virus to health conference w/officials in…Russia?
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Michael Williamsen TRUST #10 WIL: I am focusing on the new hero Victoria as she is the innocent hero who trusts and is trustworthy but must betray her trust to others secretly.
VILLAIN’S PLAN. Narcissist Attorney Bob will do anything to build and protect to become the biggest human and sex trafficking organization.
HERO Sheriff Mike’s ex-wife rookie reporter Victoria, dating the Villain
RED HERRING Sheriff Mike, alcoholic in reelection for sheriff
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OPENING
A man is killed in an alley with a knife and ziptie around his neck. ZiP!
INCITING INCEDENT (page 10)
Sheriff Mike is the investigator of the kidnappings. He is investigating a murder. Victoria is a reporter at the crime scene of the man killed with the Ziptie.
Mike and Villain Bob have a nasty encounter of front of Mike’s ex-wife Victoria. Victoria shows affection to both Mike’s driver as well as Villain Bob’s driver.
Victoria shows distrust to Sheriff Mike when she should
Victoria shows trust to Bob when she shouldn’t
We see a killing which end with kidnapping suspect with a ziptie around his neck. ZiP!
We see kidnappings.
More killings lead to suspicion of a serial killer. Another ziptie.
We see thugs taking children from border-crossing cages.
The Villain and sheriff Mike get in a finger pistol shootout in Mike’s office.
INCITING INCIDENT
Mike’s daughter disappears. (turn into INCITING INCEDENT??)
Sheriff Mike and Victoria’s daughter disappear
Victoria accuses Sheriff Mike of taking their daughter turning her against him
Victoria shows distrust to Sheriff Mike when she should
The Mayor is bribed to join the kidnappers. He says: “what do we do with Mike”
Serial killings and kidnappings escalate.
Sheriff Mike finds out he has terminal Prostate Cancer
Victoria shows trust to Sheriff Mike – finally
MIDPOINT
Victoria exposes evidence the Villain is the kidnapping ringleader is really Villain.
Victoria shows trust to Sheriff Mike
Victoria shows distrust to Bob – finally
Sheriff Mike gives evidence to his mis-trusted friend Mayor.
Sheriff Mike’s good friend Police Chief is killed.
School buses of children are kidnapped during Police Chief’s funeral.
Mike’s driver fixes the ex-wife’s purse with a ziptie. Zip!
Trust between Mike, Victoria, and Dave is challenged in every direction
TWIST we suspect all three may have something to do with serial killing
Mike’s driver Deputy Dave is killed as Mike was trying to send him to safety.
TURNING POINT 2
Victoria is in bed with Mike.
Victoria shows trust to Mike – too late
Mike is arrested and charged with being the kidnapper and the serial killer.
Mike’s trust to Mayor betrays him
Victoria escapes even before Mike tells her about the escape door
Mike feels betrayed by Victoria as she obviously knew more than he knew.
The villains’ driver Joe helps Mike escape into the Mexican Ghetto – with a tracker.
Driver Joe is betraying his boss Bob’s trust
Deputy Dan tells of Mike’s military medals in Mike’s office – one is a sniper medal.
Deputy Dan looks out the window and is shot in the head by a sniper.
Bob, Dan, Mayor betrayed themselves trusting Mike would disappear
CLIMAX
The tracking device leads Villain to Mike at a coffee shop
Driver Joe is betraying his boss Bob’s trust
The Mexican Ghetto shows their strength by rescuing their children and killing all the kidnappers.
Mike and Villain meet face to face in the coffee shop Both stating their intentions to kill each other.
Bob betrays himself trusting his arrogance to keep him alive
Villain shoots Mike.
Villain encounters some Mexican Gangsters with switch blades in the back alley.
. (at this point, we really don’t know who the ziptie strangler is. I could pin it on the Mexican Gangsters by them using the Ziptie but am preferring to leave it open.)
Mayor gets blown up.
TWIST – not really but a nice payoff
RESOLUTION
Villain’s driver, Mike’s ex-wife, and daughter meet on the beach in Mexico.
Ex-wife has a zip-tie holding her purse together. She pulls it off. Zip!
Villain’s driver Joe and Hero Victoria may have had more to do with ending the kidnapping ring and saving the children than we thought betraying the trust we the viewers had these were the good guys!
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Leona Heraty’s Trust Relationships
What I learned doing this assignment is…adding trust and distrust into the main characters’ relationships makes the action more exciting and intriguing!
Create trust / distrust relationships between your characters and add them to your Thriller Map.
1. Make a list of the main characters.
Hero: McKenzie
Villain: Tuvelle
Red Herring Character: Todd (as the Masked Figure)
Trusted, but shouldn’t be: Tuvelle
Isn’t trusted, but should be: Todd (after he’s been unmasked by McKenzie)2. With each character, ask these questions:
Hero: McKenzie
A. What is their basic state — trustable or not trustable? TrustableB. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable? N/A-McKenzie is the hero!
C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other? N/A-McKenzie is the hero!
Villain: Tuvelle
A. What is their basic state — trustable or not trustable? Not Trustable
B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable? Tuvelle appears trustable up until the climax, because she acts like the Masked Figure is after her, with the knife! Tuvelle also appears trustable because she asks McKenzie for help to get away from the Masked Figure, and she works with McKenzie where they both try to find places to hide from the Masked Figure.
C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other? Tuvelle switches from Trustable to Not Trustable at the climax on Perilous Peak, when she reveals she’s been sabotaging McKenzie since November 1<sup>st</sup> and she hired Todd to chase them, and she followed her to work earlier that day!
Red Herring Character: Todd (as the Masked Figure)
A. What is their basic state — trustable or not trustable? Trustable
B. How might they really be trustable, but appear not trustable OR be not trustable, but appear trustable? When Todd is dressed as the Masked Figure and has the plastic knife that he waves at Tuvelle and McKenzie, he appears to be Not Trustable and dangerous. But when McKenzie pulls off his mask, and she discovers the knife is plastic, she begin to trust him and believe his story that he was hired by Tuvelle to chase them!
C. What circumstances might cause them to switch from one to the other? After McKenzie pulls off Todd’s mask, and he shows her the knife is plastic, another knife appears strapped his leg, when he pant leg gets caught on some bushes, and the other knife is real!
3. With each character relationship, brainstorm how trust or distrust might show up between them.
Hero / Villain: McKenzie/Tuvelle
TRUST: The doorbell rings at
McKenzie’s Mom’s house, so McKenzie answers the door.DISTRUST: Tuvelle, dressed as
the Masked Figure, leaves a large creepy cardboard figure of the Grim
Reaper at the door.TRUST: McKenzie finds Tuvelle hiding behind a tree, crying in fear.
DISTRUST: Tuvelle says she’s
being chased by the Masked Figure and she’s twisted her ankle and she asks
McKenzie to help her. However, Tuvelle is lying, she hasn’t twisted her ankle.TRUST: Tuvelle tells McKenzie
she’ll stay hidden behind the big rock, if McKenzie will hike up to
Perilous Peak where she can get cell coverage and call 911.DISTRUST: Tuvelle also tells
McKenzie the main trails are washed out and she’ll never be able to make
it back to the Visitor Center for help, even though McKenzie thinks she
can find several old, unused trails back to the visitor center. Tuvelle
says McKenzie looks like a girl who “gets lost easily.”
TRUST: Tuvelle tells McKenzie
not to trust Terry when Terry says that Tuvelle paid him to dress up as
the Masked Figure and scare them. She says Terry’s a nut and she never
paid him anything…and that he just enjoys scaring women!DISTRUST: Tuvelle coaxes McKenzie
up to Perilous Peak and helps her up over the cliff, then turns on her and
Terry.Hero / Red Herring Character: McKenzie doesn’t trust Todd when he’s the Masked
Figure, and isn’t sure she should trust him even when he says he was paid
by Tuvelle to scare them. When McKenzie sees the “real” knife strapped to
his leg, she is immediately distrustful of him and afraid. She trusts him
in the end, on Perilous Peak, when he begs her to not trust Tuvelle, who
is crazy and wants to kill them both.
Hero / Trusted, but shouldn’t
be: McKenzie is the hero and is
trustworthy, but not always reliable because she has a poor sense of
direction and gets lost easily because she lacks confidence in her literal
sense of direction on the trails, but also metaphorically because she’s
unsure about the direction of her life and if she’s really on the right
career path or if she should change careers and go back to college to become
a park ranger.
Hero / Isn’t trusted, but should be:4. Create a sequence for each trust/distrust relationship (like I did with Three Days of The Condor) and then add that to your map. See #3 above.
5. Give us the new version of your Thriller Map.
ACT 1
OPENING: McKenzie is driving to work, and is followed by a Masked Figure!
CURRENT DIRECTION: McKenzie blasts the music, keeps driving and is oblivious that she’s being followed.
TRUST: McKenzie parks her car in the lot by her office, not worrying about it, even though it’s a valuable classic car.
DISTRUST: McKenzie gets to her car in the lot and gets in and starts to drive, then hears a THUMP THUMP. She gets out and realizes her 4 tires are flat!
TRUST: McKenzie looks around, is a little spooked, but shrugs and gets the fix-a-flat out of her trunk and fills up the tires, shrugs it off and drives out of the parking lot.
TWIST: The Masked Figure speeds by her and shakes their fist at McKenzie, but McKenzie is looking down for a second and doesn’t notice.
INCITING INCIDENT: McKenzie’s Mom forbids her to hike alone at Cuyamaca Rancho State Park, and wads up her flyer and hurls it into the trash! McKenzie stands up to her Mom and says she’s going anyway!
CURRENT DIRECTION: McKenzie grabs her keys and is about to head out the door, but she pauses to hug her Mom and sister and her Mom argues with her and tries to convince her not to hike to Perilous Peak.
TWIST: The Masked Figure gets out of his car, creeps
up onto rings McKenzie’s Mom’s doorstep, then leaves a large photo of the Grim
Reaper on the doormat, rings the doorbell and flits away like a phantom.TRUST: McKenzie opens the door,
without looking through the peephole, even though her Mom tells her to always
do this.DISTRUST: McKenzie is taken aback
and a little rattled when she sees the large cut-out figure of the Grim Reaper.TRUST: McKenzie she sees a group of
teenagers driving down the street and tells her Mom and sister it’s probably
the same kids who always toilet paper her Mom’s house on Halloween!TURNING POINT AT END OF ACT 1: McKenzie finds a backpack in the cave with a note that says “I’m being chased by a guy with a mask and knife! Please help me!
TRUST: McKenzie immediately worries about the person who wrote the note and decides to try to help them. She completely trusts that the note is real and she doesn’t think for a second that it might be fake.
CURRENT DIRECTION: McKenzie is looking through the backpack for clues to the note writer’s identity.
TWIST: McKenzie pulls out a bloody white scarf and SCREAMS!
ACT 2
TRUST: McKenzie follows the SCREAMS and finds Tuvelle huddled behind a rock, crying and distraught, and she immediately tries to comfort her.
MIDPOINT TURNING POINT: Tuvelle points to a red mark on her arm and a Black Widow Spider that’s nearby. She’s been bitten by the spider and she sprained her ankle!
DISTRUST: McKenzie says she can treat the spider bite with her first aid kit, but Tuvelle says she doesn’t need the treatment as she’s “built an immunity to Black Widow Spider bites” and McKenzie says she never heard of anyone building an immunity to Black Widow spiders and she should let her treat the bite anyway, but Tuvelle says no, it’s not necessary. McKenzie frowns, but reluctantly agrees not to do anything about the bite.
CURRENT DIRECTION: McKenzie wraps Tuvelle’s ankle with a bandage.
TWIST: A giant tree limb, battered by the rain, CRACKS and falls only a few feet away from them, making them both SCREAM!
ACT 3
TRUST: Tuvelle tells McKenzie she’ll never make it back to the Visitor Center, it’s too dangerous with the washed out trails, and that she should try to get to Perilous Peak where she can get cell coverage and dial 911 for her.
DISTRUST: McKenzie says she’s sure she can find the alternate trail down to the Visitor Center and maybe she should just go back the way she came but Tuvelle tells her she’ll never get there. McKenzie says the guy with the mask could be luring them further away from the Visitor Center, and she’s afraid to keep going to Perilous Peak and she doesn’t trust her own sense of direction because of the rain.
TURNING POINT: HUGE FAILURE/MAJOR SHIFT: When McKenzie falls through the rickety bridge to the stream below and scrapes her leg on a rock and blood gushes out of her wound.CURRENT DIRECTION: McKenzie surfaces from the water and crawls to the shore, her leg gushing with blood.
TWIST:<b style=”font-weight: bold;”> McKenzie picks her way through some downed tree limbs from the storm, trips and falls hits her bloody leg on a large stone, and SCREAMS in pain.
ACT 4
CLIMAX/ULTIMATE EXPRESSION OF THE CONFLICT: Tuvelle, dressed as the Masked Ghoul, climbs over the edge, and looks around for McKenzie, and Terry climbs over the edge and lunges at Tuvelle, dressed as the Masked Ghoul. They struggle on the ground and McKenzie sees her chance and pulls off the Masked Figure’s mask, it’s Tuvelle!
TRUST: Tuvelle coaxes McKenzie over the ledge and puts her hand out to pull McKenzie over the ledge.
DISTRUST: Tuvelle steps on Terry’s hand and tries to push him back so he can’t get over the ledge. She said he’s the one who was wearing the Mask and the cloak, not her.
TRUST: Terry begs McKenzie for help up over the ledge, where he can prove to her that he’s trustworthy and that Tuvelle hired him to wear a mask and scare them. McKenzie believes him and helps him up over the ledge to Perilous Peak.
TRUST: Tuvelle runs behind a rock on Perilous Peak, to “use the facilities” and McKenzie tells Terry he’s mistaken, the Tuvelle is the one who’s the victim here, because he’s been chasing them.
DISTRUST: McKenzie realizes that
Tuvelle just ran behind the rock…what happened to her sprained ankle? She
starts to question who Tuvelle really is and her motives.CURRENT DIRECTION: McKenzie is
stunned when she finds Tuvelle runs out from behind the rock, dressed as the
Masked Figure!TWIST: Tuvelle reaches out and SLAPS
McKenzie in the face, then rolls on the ground and SHRIEKS with demented
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Jeff Guenther’s Trust & Distrust
What I Learned: Trust and Distrust add yet another layer of thriller points, should probably be used lightly, not just for the sake of a twist, but when logical, maybe foreshadowed, thematic, in character, or totally unexpected, similar to other twists. This involves a ton of work.
1. list of main characters.
Hero: Nurse Allie:
Villain: Mr. Menzies, Father of Patient, initially trusted
Red Herring Character: Janitor Ralph “Red” Harrington
Isn’t trusted, but should be: Sr Polygrippa
Trusted, but shouldn’t be: M. Feeney, CEO.
Trusted by some until they see her while possessed. Clara, the poltergeist
2. nature of each character.
Nurse Allie:
A. basic nature? trustable
B. how might they be trustable but not appear so? phobia of sharp items might lessen confidence in her.
C. What might cause them to switch from one to the other? Operating Room stress might increase her fear.
Mr. Menzies: Clara’s father
A. basic nature? Untrustable
B. how might they be not trustable but appear so? pretends to be a loving father, but isn’t.
C. What might cause them to switch from one to the other? Hell freezing over.
Janitor Ralph “Red” Harrington:
A. basic nature? trustable
B. how might they be trustable but not appear so? Scary dude, a loner, likes to tell bizarre tales.
C. What might switch them from one to the other? Being put on the spot, have to leave his basement.
Sr. Polygrippa
A. basic nature? trustable
B. how might they be trustable but not appear so? Very religious, judgmental.
C. What might switch them from one to the other? Nothing
M. Feeney, CEO.
A. basic nature? trustable
B. how might they be trustable but not appear so? pinch-penny attitude.
C. What might switch them from one to the other? Loss of financial control.
Clara (Poltergeist)
A. basic nature? can be trusted as far as you can toss a live bull up a silo
B. how might they be not trustable but appear so? she’s young and cute and responsive
C. What might switch them from one to the other? Adolescence, experience, exorcism
3. Revised Map, w. Trust/Distrust Items
Reel 1. Setup: the Allie’s status quo, ending with the inciting event.
Boyfriend is iffy [relationship could end.]
Allie fears unemployment
Allie has a daughter [her secret could be revealed.]
CURRENT DIRECTION: Taking the job at Burgerpalooza
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 7. New options emerge. </font>Allie hears of job at Hospital
Desperate, Allie takes job at Hospital with bad rep.TRUST: Feeney’s polite and friendly to Allie.
TRUST: Polygrippa’s a nun; you can trust nuns, right?
CURRENT DIRECTION: Thinks Hospital job is safe.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Indigent patients may attack her [physical danger]
Young Clara is admitted for tonsillitis. VILLAIN’S PLAN TO ATTACK THE HOSPITAL
TRUST: Clara is a patient, therefore to be assisted
TRUST: Menzies fools Allie by showing concern about Clara
CURRENT DIRECTION: Allie’s off the indigent ward.
<font color=”#800000″>TRUST: Sr. Polygrippa seems competent.</font>
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Strange phenomena begin [the unknown] in the paying patient ward.
Allie fears for the young patient [danger to someone they know]
Allie promises (mother or nun) to protect the patient
Reel 2. Predicament ‘lock in’ to the conflict (end of Act 1).
CURRENT DIRECTION: Allie only has one patient.
TRUST: Clara is cute and responsive, nice to Allie
TRUST/SYMPATHY: Menzies plays the victim, being patient with his alcoholic wife.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Escalating phenomena, observed by Allie, definitely supernatural
The eldritch janitor [RH?] scares her [stalked].
CURRENT DIRECTION: Her job is safe.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 9. A trust is violated. </font>Her secret comes out.
CURRENT DIRECTION: The Hospital is a safe place.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 8. A mistake returns to haunt them. </font>Janitor: hospital haunted a long time ago, plastered up
DISTRUST: Janitor’s creepy, tells Allie scary stories.
DISTRUST: VILLAIN / Clara’s father, Menzies, disappears.
CURRENT DIRECTION: The hospital is fully staffed
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 6. New consequences emerge. </font>Staff start to quit. VILLAIN’S PLAN PART 1
Sr. Polygrippa’s team uses holy water, prayer, etc.
CURRENT DIRECTION: The phenomena seem to abate.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 14. The “solution” makes things worse. </font>Doesn’t work
CURRENT DIRECTION: Polygrippa tries more things.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Allie assigned to protect Clara, stay with her.
Reel 3. First attempt to deal with problem. Easy option fails, stakes rise.
CURRENT DIRECTION: Allie will assist in the O.R.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Allie fears infections from sharp medical instruments.
Clara is operated on. Phenomena start.
CURRENT DIRECTION: Operation is smoothly under way.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 2. Lost their resources. </font>Shortage of O.R. materiel found VILLAIN’S PLAN 3
MOTIF: Sharps, scalpels [presence of weapons]
They move Clara to another room.
TRUST: Clara thanks Allie a lot.
Clara’s mother dies in the room next to her. VILLAIN’S PLAN 2
DISTRUST: Clara’s mother is found dead.
Reel 4. More grandiose, extreme plan goes horribly wrong (ends with the mid-point)
Mother’s autopsy reveals she died from excess alcohol
Allie wonders where Mother got the alcohol.
CURRENT DIRECTION: They decide to shut down two floors.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 7. New options emerge. </font>Exorcist is found.
TRUST: Exorcist called in by Sr. Polygrippa
Exorcist scares Allie with stories [talking about the danger]
CURRENT DIRECTION: Restaffing begins. Exorcism starts.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 9. A trust is violated. </font>Calling in exorcist leaked to newspaper,
CURRENT DIRECTION: Staff is up to previous level.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 6. New consequences emerge. </font>Patients leave re newspaper VILLAIN’S ULTIMATE PLAN
Phenomena traced to proximity of Clara (next door, floor above, etc.)
DISTRUST: Phenomena center around Clara’s room
TRUST: Janitor tells Allie what she needs to know. (repeatedly)
They shut down those rooms, move Clara.
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Outbreak of phenomena is contained.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 10. We see unexpected side of someone. </font>Exorcist ID’s Clara as poltergeist. Panic.
DISTRUST: Menzies hadn’t told Allie Clara was a poltergeist
CURRENT DIRECTION: He prepares to exorcise Clara.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 1. Something planned for doesn’t happen. </font>Exorcist killed mysteriously.
TRUST: Janitor tells Allie what she needs to know. (repeatedly)
Reel 5. Allie retreats to address flaw Confronts her weakness. Fear? Lack of Faith?
Allie begins to investigate the rooms.
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie finds something strange about the room.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 6. New consequences emerge. </font><font color=”#800000″>DISTRUST: </font>Sr. Polygrippa orders Allie to stop snooping [demand to stop investigating.]
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie investigates basement,
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Allie Finds notes in her locker [threats]TRUST: Janitor tells Allie what she needs to know. (repeatedly)
DISTRUST: Nurse shows the threatening notes to her & gets bawled out
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie talks to Janitor, who knows stuff about the old wing.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 4. A new problem occurs. </font>Janitor dies during storm; is put in cold storage until police can get there
Allie could fear what killed the janitor, think it’s demonic.
Allie gets mad, decides to face her fears, even if she loses her job
Allie meets with Sr. Polygrippa, other peers
TRUST: Polygrippa meets with nurse and promise action will be taken
CURRENT DIRECTION: Sr. Polygrippa agrees to fix something
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 6. New consequences emerge. </font>Someone overhears her conversations [surveillance]
CURRENT DIRECTION: They requisition the repairs. <font color=”#800000″>DISTRUST: </font><font color=”#800000″>Feeney</font><font color=”#800000″> refuses Allie funds </font>
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 5. A lie uncovered. </font>Requisition denied. Money needed for repairs is not available VILLAIN’S PLAN 3
Reel 6. New plan, Allie prepared to change All goes wrong, and new revelation. (end of Act 2)
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Clara will be discharged soon.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 9. A trust is violated. </font>Co-worker reports Allie[someone covert near them.] Allie is punished.
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Polygrippa donates personal funds to order repairs, arranges to meet Allie.
TRUST: Polygrippa donates money
DISTRUST: Polygrippa doesn’t show up as she said she would.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 4. A new problem occurs. </font>Polygrippa is missing VILLAIN’S PLAN 2
Allie searches for Sister Polygrippa.
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>The funds are secured; they need Polygrippa’s signature.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Allie’s attacked while looking for Sister
Allie escapes but finds why there’s no money unneeded supplies and facilities are being bought.
TRUST: Allie finds Feeney doesn’t have the funds
Allie informs the CFO.
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>CFO calls in the auditors.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 6. New consequences emerge. </font>Allie threatened with firing.
Reel 7. Change, rejoins the battle. Goal reached, but . . .Final twist, Villain turns the tables.
The hospital is bankrupt [loss of a job or career.] VILLAIN’S ULTIMATE PLAN
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie looks for the books to give to the auditors.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Allie’s attacked while checking records [lured into danger].
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie hides in the cold storage room.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 13. The worst thing possible happens. </font>Allie finds Polygrippa in cold storage;
Polygrippa has records in her apron.
Allie finds evidence nun was looking at old employee records.
Allie finds evidence nun was looking at recent expenditures.
<font color=”#800000″>TRUST: Nurse finds Sr. P stole the papers that incriminate X</font>
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie gets evidence together and starts out of cold storage, but
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 6. New consequences emerge. </font>Janitor’s body is missing, replaced w. anat. skeleton
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie tries the door to go meet with the auditors.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Allie is locked in cold storage room
Reel 8. Finally defeats antagonist. Wrap up, epilogue, the New World
Allie uncovers speaking tube in cold storage room, calls for help.
Polygrippa’s evidence shows funds were spent for unnecessary expenditures VILLAIN’S PLAN 3
Allie finds that EMTs are being bribed to bring more indigents VILLAIN’S PLAN 4
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie plans to call the police.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. Allie finds o</font>rgan harvesting has begun. VILLAIN’S ULTIMATE PLAN
Allie fears she might be next.
DISTRUST: Menzies stalks Allie at the end
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie runs away from the transplant surgery wing.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>The head of the Hospital sees her.
DISTRUST: maybe Allie discovers Feeney’s in league with Mr. Menzies
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie hides in the basement.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. 12. Secret identity uncovered. </font>Menzies chases, tries to kill her.
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Allie runs to the top floor.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 11. It just got more dangerous. </font>Poltergeist appears in front of her, grinning fiendishly.
DISTRUST: Allie sees Clara in possessed state. (Yeah, that’ll do it!)
Menzies reminds Clara he’s her father, tells her to kill Allie
<font color=”#800000″>DISTRUST: Menzies sics Clara on Allie in her possessed state</font>
<font color=”#800000″>CURRENT DIRECTION: </font>Clara approaches Allie, arms outstretched.
<font color=”#800000″>TWIST: 3. Someone changes sides. </font>Clara swivels, pushes Father down stairwell, from 10 feet away.
TRUST: Clara kills Menzies
Clara embraces Allie. Allie tells the police Menzies stumbled and fell.
DISTRUST: What if Clara decides to kill Allie? Allie wonders.
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