Day 10 Assignments

[Christina Parker]

Christina Parker

What I learned from this assignment was that it was important to have talking heads with meaningful action. While looking at my pilot, I only had one scene that needed to change, because it was boring not talking heads. But this is important to look at.

Old Scene

INT. PETERS HALL – NEXT DAY

Elizabeth notices the cardboard she fixed over the broken panel is on the floor. She tapes it back.

ELIZABETH

Those boys.

(pause)

Good morning, Connor.

Connor walks into the hall in his pajamas. Goes into the bathroom.

ELIZABETH (CONT.)

Typical.

INT. PETERS BATHROOM – CONTINUOUS

Connor is about to pee when he notices the water in the toilet is clear. He turns on the faucet the water runs clear.

CONNOR

Cool.

Radio is on in the kitchen. Connor flushes the toilet. Washes his hands, walks back to his room.

RADIO ANNOUNCER

The Creede water supply is free of contaminants. Well, that’s the official statement from the water board. The rivers are clear and the town water is safe to drink.

New Scene

INT. PETERS HALL – NEXT DAY

Elizabeth notices the cardboard she fixed over the broken panel is on the floor.

ELIZABETH

Those boys.

She tapes it back. Walks to the kitchen.

Connor walks out of his room in his pajamas. Someone is watching him.

ELI

Hey!

Connor turns sleepily. Eli springs out water pistol in his hand he shoots clear water in Connor’s face.

CONNOR

I’m gonna’ get you.

Eli pretends to be scared & runs Connor chases him. Eli loves it. The boys play.

RADIO ANNOUNCER (O.S.)

The Creede water supply is free of contaminants. Well, that’s the official statement from the water board. The rivers are clear and the town water is safe to drink.