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Day 11 Assignments
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Lois Creating Irony
What I learned doing this assignment is…my show is not set up for irony. I tried 20 times and I don’t like any of them.
ASSIGNMENT 1: Example Show
Watch the next episode of your Example Show and notice where irony shows up in this show — both in this episode and throughout the episodes you’ve already seen.
Tell us the irony you have already discovered in the Example Show.
Sawyer has taken the name of the man who ruined his childhood
Kate appears to be a kind and helpful person, but she killed her father
Charlie thought he was a big deal when he was playing second fiddle to his brother. Now he’s actually doing important things but thinks he’s a nobody
Claire was put on flight 815 so she would have to raise her baby, and not give him up for adoption. But everybody on that flight died.
Deadline: 24 hours
ASSIGNMENT 2: Your Show
Look back through your previous assignments and find at least 20 different situations or character components that you could go opposite to create irony.
With each, brainstorm ideas for ways it could go opposite.
1) Ramos doesn’t see Meff morph – what if he does and pretends otherwise?
2) Meff refuses to go to the cave and goes to his own birthday party as a stinky skunk
3) Meff doesn’t like being petted
4) Polly is afraid of Meff when he morphs, instead of thinking he’s an adorable skunk
5) Meff decides to live his life as a skunk, like Aunt Abigail
6) Meff decides to take the anti-morphing drug so he can’t be a wereskunk
7) Meff decides to sell mephiderite on the sly and get rich
8) Ramos tells everybody that Meff is a wereskunk
9) Meff wants to win the Skunk Beauty Pageant
10) Meff uses dirty tricks to win the Skunk Beauty Pageant – instead of destroy it.
11) Meff’s family wants him back, but he likes living with Kamali (who bought him for a pet)
12) Meff’s family believes a-sale-is-a-sale and doesn’t try to get Meff back.
13) Meff is a weak skunk and needs protecting all the time (instead of having super-power spray)
14) Meff’s family is happy to sell their skunk farm to Mann, who now has all the mephiderite.
15) Instead of trying to rescue Meff, Polly helps him win the contest, much to his chagrin.
16) Instead of skunk-mind, which makes Meff love being a skunk, he gets bully mind
17) Meff tries to get his whole family to take the anti-morphing drug.
18) Meff’s mom sneaks the anti-morphing drug into his food
19) Polly sneaks the anti-morphing drug into Meff’s food.
20) The family thinks they morph because of the mephiderite, but it’s actually genetic.
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Brenda Clarke IRONY
Brainstorming ideas is coming along slowly and I realise I have to give this more thought as I need to develop the process in order to get more involved with the characters and what is happening. So far, I feel I am getting some good ideas but will only be for the first few episodes but the more I get into this, hopefully the more ideas will come to me. Fingers Crossed!
Assignment #1 Riverdale epsiode 11. To Riverdale and Back Again.
Overall irony is Jughead’s narration, saying that if you scratch beneath the surface Riverdale is really not such a nice place to live and that perhaps there is some darker/evil elements that lurk in the town.
Character Irony would be Veronica is now being an “investigator” trying to find out the truth of her fathers involvement with the Blossoms, as her dad is a convicted felon. Alice, Betty’s mum acts as though butter wouldn’t melt in her mouth and we realise that Mr Jones knows more about her past etc.
Situational Irony was whilst at the high school dance everyone enjoying themselves the Sheriff was raiding Mr. Jones’ bungalow where he found a revolver in a tin box. The dance is disrupted when they find out Jughead’s dad has been arrested for Jason’s murder!
Assignment #2
My show Convicts:
IRONY
Elliot wealthy aristocratic, yet has sexual relationship with sailor. Is he ready to renounce his heritage in order to reunite with Richard?
Harriet, appears to be a hard working woman, well liked in the district (knows horses well) but when Rosie goes missing she is willing to do what ever it takes to get her back. Including doing a robbery for criminals.
Rosie gets involved in a crime because of her sister, she really didn’t want to have anything to do with her, now she is going to be shipped off to Australia.
Richard is a handsome sailor who helps Elliot escape the night of the arrest.
Irony is that Elliot is weak and unsure of what to do, he hits the bottle and depression whereas Harriet, steps up and takes action to find out what happened to Rosie.
Elliot and Harriet both hide their homosexuality even though they come from very different backgrounds, their secrets unit them.
Were Elliot and Richard set up, why was the Molly house raided that night when they were there? Could Richard have a jealous mate and dobbed them into the authorities? Perhaps this sailor mate could have found a note in Richards room from Elliot confirming his adoration and looking forward to catching up at the Molly house?
Mrs Wright suspicious about her daughters changed behaviour, she neglects her work with the horses. Ferrier has to take over whilst Harriet goes investigating.
Otto Edwards, Elliot’s father, badgers him to pull himself together. Sister sticks up for her brother – don’t be so hard on him. Perhaps she somehow seeks her brothers confidence and eventually he trusts her to reveal why he is “lost/troubled”.
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Yuck — I did this again — I put the mod 1 assignment in Mod2
Lois’ Edited TV Pitch Bible
what I learned. I need to see a completed pitch bible. I don’t know what a poster page looks like I don’t have any idea what a good balance of text and white space looks like. I don’t know what fonts are industry standard. I don’t know how this lesson is different from Mod2 lesson 9. And I don’t know how to show fonts in this forum anyway. This is the point at which we need feedback — not at the end of Mod 1. That form made no sense to me.
What SkunkBoy (a family cartoon) is About:
Meff, a risk-taking 11-year-old boy, who unexpectedly becomes a skunk when he gets sprayed by a skunk, must defeat a powerful mad-scientist who is attempting to steal the asteroid from his family’s farm. When he gets sold as a pet skunk, he has to learn to be both a skunk and a man while navigating the world of skunk-pet-owners.
SkunkBoy character descriptions
Matthew “Meff” Polecat
A sneaky show-off 11-year-old boy becomes a skunk when he gets sprayed by a skunk. He can become a boy again if he eats a rotten egg. But as a skunk, he’s the town’s best hope to defeat the mad scientist who has opened a pharmaceutical factory, right next to the skunk cave. Meff must hide his secret in order to do undercover work while competing in the Skunk Beauty Contest, as a skunk. When discovered, he must fight for his life, and the town of Skunk Hollow, against the mad scientist, in the form of an owl.
Kamali Parker
A skilled chemist with a serious accident in her past, who moved to Skunk Hollow to work for the new pharmaceutical factory. She buys a pet skunk from the local skunk farm, not knowing that he’s really Meff, the owner’s son. When she learns that her new boss is a mad-scientist who plans to harm the skunks, she must choose between protecting her pets and keeping her job. Or can she destroy his plans from the inside?
Howland Mann
He is a mad-scientist whose dream is to become a skunk-eating owl, for recreation. In order to do this, he needs the asteroid that is only found on the Skunk Farm, and the owners won’t sell. He hates skunks, but manufactures skunk beauty products, to get into their good-graces. He’s not just Kamali Parker’s boss, he knows her secret.
Polly Polecat
One of Meff’s triplet younger sisters. She’s the one with the white forelock. When Meff gets to be a skunk, and she doesn’t, she’s jealous. The next time she sees him as a skunk, she sells him to a customer (Kamali Parker) as a pet. She’s a capitalist, much like Howland Mann. Disregarding her family’s safety, she makes jewelry from the asteroid to sell at the Skunk Beauty Pageant. Howland Mann buys it all.
5 seasons of SkunkBoy
Season 1: Matthew “Meff” Polecat is late to his 11th birthday party. On the way home from school, he gets sprayed by a skunk and turns into a skunk. Even though he thinks, “It’s my party, and I’ll stink if I want to,” first he has to become human again, or nobody will give him presents. The second time he turns into a skunk, his sister Polly sells him as a pet. His new owner, who works for the series villain, enters him in the Skunk Beauty Pageant. Can he win the contest without revealing his secret identity. Can he protect his family farm from the evil mad-scientist who is stealing the asteroid? And will his super-spray be enough to defeat the mad-scientist who is now a skunk-eating owl?
First Season Episodes:
episode one:
He’s a Skunk: On his way to his 11th birthday party, Meff gets sprayed by a skunk and turns into a skunk.
Meff must learn to be a skunk.
An owl swoops down and nearly catches him.
Meff runs to hide in the hen house where his sister, Polly, who loves skunks, starts petting him.
His sister tells him she knows just the person who will buy him for a pet.
episode two:
He’s a Boy: Meff eats a rotten egg and becomes human again.
Meff’s Aunt Abigail (who was the skunk who sprayed him) assumes human form and attends the family dinner welcoming Meff to his skunkhood.
Polly’s family has kept their were-skunk heritage a secret. But now that Meff has become a skunk, he could betray that secret by his typical show-off behavior.
Meanwhile, Howland Mann knocks on the door, and tries to buy the Skunk Farm. Dad refuses. Howland says he is a rock collector, and asks if can buy the gigantic asteroid that’s near the hen house. Dad refuses. Howland tells them their farm isn’t a safe place for skunks with that owl around. Dad says he’ll shoot the owl. Howland says he can’t shoot it because the owl is an endangered species.
Dad tells Meff “If you can’t be a gentleman, be a skunk.” He gives Meff a bottle of skunk-spray to carry with him just-in-case. Aunt Abigail tells him it’s always good to be a skunk. Meff sprays himself.
episode three:
He’s a Party Animal: Meff, in skunk form, runs to the cave where skunks live, again barely avoiding the owl. His cousins have prepared a skunk party for him.
In this episode, Meff discovers that Howland Mann is more than just a man who wants to buy the skunk farm. He owns the new pharmaceutical company next door to the skunk cave.
His skunk-aunt Abigail gives him his first lesson in being a skunk by taking him to spy on the new chemical company.
Meff sees an employee, Kamali Parker, experimenting with a piece of the asteroid from his farm. One vial is labeled: Owl.
Kamali sees the two skunks, and attempts to trap them both – for pets.
episode four:
He’s Been Sold: Meff is running the family skunk supply shop. Hunters come into the shop to purchase skunk spray to disguise their scent in the woods. He tests the can, accidentally spraying Meff, who runs behind the counter.The customer doesn’t see him change. The customer rings the bell. Polly comes into the store angry – calling for Meff – Meff is supposed to be running the store – this is no time to play.
Polly finds Meff, in skunk form. She’s sure he did it on purpose, goofing off. She rings up the hunter.
Kamali Parker comes into the shop to buy a pet.
Polly sells Meff to Kamali.
Dad goes to Kamali’s apartment to get him back. She won’t swap him or sell him back.
episode five:
Howland claims there’s a rabies epidemic on the Skunk Farm. He rounds up all the skunks for quarantine and testing. While they are in captivity, he tries to gas them to death, but Polly sneaks in and frees them (including Meff and Abigail). Polly boosts them into the alley. Just as they are about to escape Howland spots them. Kamali comes by with a van, and even though she has doubts, Polly helps all the skunks into the van. Kamali spots Meff and is thrilled to have him back.
episode six:
Who’s the Prettiest? : Kamali enters Meff in the annual Skunk Beauty Pageant
Meff gets beauty treatments and learns skunk tricks, like walking on his hands.
Meanwhile Howland Mann captures Aunt Abigail while she’s snooping in his lab. He decides to try out his new hair-grow product on her. It works. Howland captures her and enters her in the Skunk Beauty Pageant.
Meff and Abigail meet again at Howland’s booth in the beauty pageant huckster room and plot their escape.
Polly is feeling sorry for selling her brother and tries to sneak him a rotten egg. Kamali stops her. She doesn’t want to ruin her skunkie’s breath during the contest.
episode seven:
In Skunk Mind: Meff’s family goes looking for him at the Skunk Beauty Pageant.
Polly opens Meff’s cage. He runs to the nearest booth which has skunk habitats. Because he is in Skunk Mind, he can’t resist playing in one.
Kamali gets him back from the habitat. He hisses. She looks at the pricetag on the habitat and shakes her head.
Mom tries to free Abigail, on the pretext of petting her lovely long tresses. Howland stops her.
It’s time for the competition. Howland and Kamali carry their skunks in cages to the Green Room.
episode eight:
His Rear End: Meff competes in the Skunk Beauty Pageant.
Meff opens his cage. Then other cages. Freed skunks cause chaos in the Green Room. Polly tries again to bring a rotten egg to Meff, but one of the other skunks gets it first. The recipient’s furious owner causes more chaos.
Polly sells her asteroid jewelry. Howland Mann buys all of it and makes a spray that freezes people. He tests it on Meff’s dad in the men’s room.
Meff’s mom breaks into the Men’s room, hauls Dad out and recognizes the smell of the asteroid.
Meanwhile, Meff is on stage competing. Howland Mann emcees, praising Meff as Meff shows his rear end.
episode nine:
Not a Rotten Egg: Meff wins the Skunk Beauty Pageant
Meff’s prize is the habitat he loved. Polly tries again to sneak him a rotten egg.
While Meff is going crazy on stage, trying to get that egg, Kamali chases him. Meff leads her off stage, just in time to save her from Howland Mann’s spray that freezes the audience. Dad is just starting to thaw.
Kamali loads Meff into her car. He takes over the steering wheel, in her lap, and drives her to his Skunk Farm.
episode ten:
Biting the Tire: At the Skunk Farm, Howland’s trucks are parked near the asteroid landing spot. His crew are loading pieces of asteroid onto their trucks.
Meff leaps out of Kamali’s car and bites the tires of the trucks, causing them to go flat. His cousin skunks join him. Then all the skunks spray, scaring away the workers.
Howland arrives, sees that the skunks have foiled him again. He’s angry. He takes the drug Kamali made that turns him into a skunk-eating owl.
Howland (as an owl) swoops threateningly around the skunks. Most of them run to the cave.
Abigail escapes from Howland and eats a rotten egg. When she morphs her hair is luxuriously long. Meff is the only remaining skunk. Howland swoops.
episode eleven:
Spray Away: Howland / owl attacks Meff / skunk
Howland attacks. Meff bleeds. Meff turns his rear end toward the owl and manages to spray him in the eyes. The owl is blinded and flops to the ground. Polly picks Meff up and carries him to the cave. She gives him a rotten egg. He becomes human again, and limps out to find Kamali looking desperately for her skunk.
Polly calls an ambulance for her brother and Animal Control for Howland, who is ill as well as blinded.
Animal control comes to take Howland / owl away. They promise to do their best because he is an endangered species.
Season 2: Kamali sells Howland Mann’s company to Big Pharma. Big Pharma comes across Howland’s notes about asteroid and tries to use their government contacts to take it from Meff’s family.
Meanwhile, Howland Mann recovers. He catches and eats a mouse and returns to human form. Then he joins forces with Meff’s family to get his business back from Big Pharma. Meff’s family sees advantage in this untrustworthy partnership. Howland fires Kamali. Kamali gets a job with the FDA.
In the legal battle to regain ownership of Howland’s company – Howland betrays the Skunk Farm, in a grab for the rights to the asteroid. But Kamali, in her job with the FDA, temporarily stops him.
Kamali’s boss disagrees and sends the issue of ownership of the asteroid to the courts.
Season 3: Howland, through his political connections, is now head of the FDA. He claims there is a pandemic and he needs the asteroid to save everybody.
Meff’s family organizes a Conspiracy Theory group that denies the pandemic exists. Hospitals corroborate that there is no influx of patients. Howland claims that asteroids belong to the goverment, since they have rare minerals that no person should be able to make a profit from just because one fell on their land.
Kamali agrees that nobody should make a profit from an asteroid. But since there is no disease, nobody needs to do anything right now.
Meff has returned from his latest spying adventure. He ate a rotten egg. He isn’t changing to human again. Is he sick? Was the hen that laid the egg sick? Is he stuck? Nobody has ever changed back and forth in a lifetime as much as Meff has in the past two years.
Season 4: Meff is sick. His family doesn’t trust Howland, but Howland is the only scientist who would have any idea what’s going on, because Howland knows their secret. Only Howland can possibly diagnose and treat him. Howland determines that more asteroid won’t fix him. His change mechanism is worn out – like a diabetic’s pancreas. Only there’s no were-skunk insulin equivalent. Yes, he could try to make one in the lab, but it won’t be instant. He could maybe give Meff one more change, but it would be Meff’s last. Meff must choose. Meff chooses to live his life as a skunk.
Season 5: Meff has made his choice. He is now a skunk permanently. Polly desperately wants to be a skunk. Kamali is now running Howland’s old company. Howland is running the FDA. Polly gets a job in Kamali’s lab to learn how to turn herself into a skunk. Howland wants to keep the science for himself. He’s desperate to stop Polly.
Polly, the entrepreneurial were-skunk is putting the whole family in danger.
She questions how important is it to keep their skunk-side a secret?
Howland (head of FDA) gets the skunk farm quarantined, claiming something dangerous is going on.
Is now the chance for Howland to take the asteroid he’s been wanting since the beginning?
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Lisa’s Edited TV Pitch Bible
Sorry, the formatting didn’t transfer here.
Jane The Vegan
45 minute comedy
Jane, a die-hard vegan is forced to become a vampire after being struck by a slaughterhouse truck while doing vegan activism. When her bloodlust becomes uncontrollable, she is taken to the vampires of Orange County. They teach her to control her impulses, and supply her with blood from their own blood bank. Jane doesn’t know if she can trust them, but she has no choice since she has to stay alive to take care of her sick mother.
Jane is in school for her PHD in Biomedical research. Her mentor and teacher, Dr. Berkwood tells Jane about a vision she had while on Ayahuasca. She was a witch in the 1400s, and her people were being enslaved and killed by Vlad The Impaler. She created a spell to give her people an edge over Vlad, which turned out to be a curse- the curse of the vampire. However, she thinks her vision was just her subconscious processing her traumas.
Dr Berkwood doesn’t know that Vlad is alive, has changed his violent ways, and runs a support group for people who suffer from rage addiction, like his partner Bram Stoker
After the death of her mother, Jane goes on an Ayahuasca retreat. She sees visions of farms of people, who are enslaved, raped, and eventually killed, all to provide blood for the vampires. Marc confirms that the farms exist, and Jane tells Dr. Berkwood everything. Dr. Berkwood does past life regression and realizes that her visions were indeed from a past life. She vows to destroy the curse she started at any cost. She and Jane go on a mission to end the farms. Jane has to find an ethical way to get blood, or die.
Character Descriptions
Jane (20’s)
Jane is a vegan, who loves animals and hates suffering. She is intelligent and resourceful, always thinking of new ideas. She is open-minded, but has a strong moral compass. She tries not to do anything that harms other beings. She has a small circle of close friends, and is dedicated to her work in biomedical research, determined to find cures from illnesses like her mother’s cancer. She gets engrossed in her studies to take her mind off her problems.
Dr. Berkwood (40’s)
Dr Berkwood is a vegan activist, teacher and mentor to Jane, who is like a daughter to her. She has supernatural abilities, which she has a hard time accepting, due to the analytical and scientific side of herself. She compares factory farming to slavery. She wants to turn everyone vegan. Many of her students are like children to her, so she struggles when she has to let her them go on to continue their lives after school.
Marc (30’s)
Marc is a vampire who was turned by Lucy Westerna in the 1950’s. He’s a country guy who thinks for himself, but he’s kind of shy. He doesn’t like harming others, but drinks the farmed blood because he doesn’t know any other way. He is expressive and adorable. He wants to connect with people, but can’t because they are food. He’s intrigued by Jane and protective of her. He loves animals, so he doesn’t eat them.
Lucy (20’s)
Lucy Westrena was turned in the late 1800’s. Bram Stoker immortalized her in a book, in exchange for her turning him and giving him eternal life. She strives for beauty, and lives in Orange County. She’s a narcissist and pathological liar. She’s best friends with Mina, but will betray anyone for power. She is obsessed with Marc, but he doesn’t love her because of her bad character.
Mina (20’s)
Mina is a rich Orange County Vampire and best friends with Lucy. She comes off as sweet but has a dark side. She never found love, but she uses rich old men and compels them to write her into their wills so she can get all of their wealth after they die.
Heather (20’s)
Heather is Jane’s best friend. She is obsessed with vampires. She’s an art major. She’s obsessed with beauty, and is only vegan for vain reasons, but sometimes goes to activism events with Jane. Jane is constantly schooling her on what it means to be vegan and what she can eat on a vegan diet. Heather is an incredible artist, but she lacks common sense. However, she says something profound every once in a while.
Ammo (20’s)
Ammo has known Jane since high school. He’s a lab assistant at Jane’s university, and a self- proclaimed engineer who makes inventions he thinks are groundbreaking, but they’re really just impractical versions of things that already exist. He’s anti-vegan, but is really into Jane. He has a way of being charming at first, but turns on anyone who doesn’t agree with him, except for Jane, since he hopes she will change. He thinks he’s God’s gift to women, but is not attractive.
Elizabeth (50’s)
Elizabeth is Jane’s mother. She is loving and compassionate, and was always very funny, and the one Jane would go to for advice, but becomes weak and sick from cancer. She wants the best for Jane and has always been supportive and proud of her. She gets messages from the other side when she’s out of it, which makes her mistrustful of Jane in that state.
Bram Stoker (40’s-50’s)
Bram Stoker created the book “Dracula” to immortalize Lucy Westerna in exchange for her turning him. He used to be one of Lucy’s suitors, but is a closeted gay who is in a relationship with Vlad the Impaler. He has anger and jealousy issues. He hates the “G” word, and kills anyone who suspects he might be gay, even though he is very flambouyant and eccentric. He pretends to be a womanizer, but he isn’t fooling anyone.
Vlad the Impaler (Brad Impala, 40’s)
Vlad now goes by Brad to hide his violent past. He has an accent that no one can pinpoint, but he swears he is American, born in the United States. He now has a 12- step program for Rage-a- holics like Bram, and is very understanding of their violent behavior. He fell in love with Bram upon attempting to kill him, but they ended up making out instead. Brad wants Bram to be out of the closet, and assures him that the reason for Bram’s anger is that he is suppressing his true feelings.
Episode Descriptions
Episode 1: Hungry Like the Wolf
Jane goes to a vegan activism event outside a slaughterhouse, and gets run over by a slaughterhouse truck. Marc saves her by turning into a vampire.
She wakes up on Marc’s couch. Marc explains to her what happened, and that she has to choose whether to drink blood, or die. Jane realizes she left her sick mother with her brother. She rushes home where her brother is furious.
She goes outside to feed the squirrels, but they don’t trust her anymore. She’s very tempted by them and chases one into a tree. Ammo stops by her house to check on her. She can’t control herself and feasts on his blood.
Episode 2: Girls Just Wanna Have Fun
Marc comes in to stop Jane from killing Ammo. He compels Ammo to make him not remember what happened. Marc brings Jane to Orange County, where she meets some fellow vampires, Vlad and Bram.
Mina and Lucy crash the party, which makes Marc angry, perhaps because they could expose his dark past, which he worries will make Jane hate him. Jane buys some blood from Mina, so she doesn’t get tempted to harm humans or animals.
Jane goes back to school, shocking Dr. Berkwood at how quickly Jane recovered from the accident. Jane finds her blood to be missing from her lunch cooler, and is mysteriously locked inside of Dr. Berkwood’s office with her. She breaks the door down with superhuman strength. Dr. Berkwood tells Jane to take some time off to recover.
Episode 3: Vlad & Brad
In the 1800’s, Lucy has a tea party. She Bram, one of her potential suitors, along with Vlad, since she thinks he would be a good match for her best friend, Mina.
Vlad is attracted to Bram, so he sleeps with Lucy and turns her, just to piss Bram off. Bram figures out Lucy’s secret, and convinces her to make him immortal in exchange for him immortalizing her in a book. Vlad finds out and is furious. He goes to Bram’s house at night to kill him, but their fight turns into a makeout sesh.
In present day, Bram gets angry with his house slaves and compels them all to kill themselves. Vlad comes home to the mess and gently tells Bram that he needs to come out, so that he can keep his rage under control.
Episode 4: Here Comes the Sun
Marc is training to be a police officer in the 1950’s, and assigned to pick up the local vagrants in Anaheim and take them to a remote location where he isn’t allowed inside.
Jane awakens, looking hungover because vampires don’t like the sun. she continues on her routine, but senses she is being watched. She nearly plunges a knife into Marc’s chest and accuses him of stealing her blood from school, but Marc swears it wasn’t him. Marc shows her how she can still communicate with the animals.
Marc, Jane and Heather attend activism in a park. Jane recounts all the terrible things that happen in factory farms, as Marc recalls the work he did at the human farms.
Jane comes home to find her mom being taken to the hospital. Marc tells Jane about how she has the option to turn her mother to save her.
Episode 5: Living on a Prayer
Jane returns to work. Everyone can tell something is off with her.
Jane gets angry at someone at an animal rights protest. She is tempted to kill, but Marc calms her down and tells her to slow down and rest, but she gets angry with him.
Jane visits her mom in the hospital as her mom’s condition worsens. She cuts her hand to give her mom her blood, just as her mom goes into A-fib and doctors rush in, and make Jane leave the room.
Episode 6: Don’t You forget About Me
Dr. Berkwood is going through a divorce with an omnivore and wealthy lawyer who forces their kids to eat meat, and the kids don’t like it. Dr. Berkwood buries herself in her work to cope.
Jane decides to go visit her mom, who is stable, but on a c-pap machine. Elizabeth wakes up and says some meaningful last words before she passes away, and Jane doesn’t have a chance to save her.
Episode 7: Beat It
Jane is stricken with grief from losing her mom, and has a breakdown at school. Dr. Berkwood tells her about plant medicine and how it helped her with her grief of losing her father. She also tells her a vision she had in which she was part of the Romani people, gypsies, who were enslaved and murdered by Vlad the Imapler. She created a curse to give her people super human strength so they could survive, but Vlad decides to fight like them. He bites a vampire and it tastes good. He begins biting others.
Bram has a barbecue to support Jane in her grief, and Lucy spikes Jane’s meal with meat, which enrages Jane, causing a fight. Jane tells Dr. Berkwood about Lucy. Dr Berkwood teaches her remote viewing. She tries to see Lucy, but Lucy sees her, and it freaks her out.
Episode 8: All Night Long
Jane goes on an ayahuasca retreat. She has visions of farms of people who are used for their blood. Some attendees try to help decipher her experience, but it doesn’t make sense to her. A healer does a clearing session on Jane, which causes Jane’s eyes to turn red and her veins start bulging, like when she’s hungry for blood, and everyone thinks she is possessed. The shaman comes and does something to calm Jane down.
When Jane tells Marc about her visions, he tells her that the farms are actually real, and that’s where her blood comes from. Jane is disgusted with herself and vows to never drink farmed blood again.
Season 2: People Farms
Jane starts getting sick, because she doesn’t have a blood supply anymore, so she tries to get blood ethically. Heather gets worried about Jane, Jane tells her she’s a vampire. Heather consents to Jane feeding on her. Jane comes out as vampire to Dr. Berkwood, and Dr. Berkwood doesn’t know if she can trust her. Dr Berkwood goes to a past life regression therapy and finds that she started the curse of the vampire, but Vlad killed her before she could correct the spell. Heather gets raped, and Jane goes on a mission to find the rapist rapist, making her first kill.
Season 3: The Dark Passenger
Jane decides to kill for blood. She is learning magic from Dr. Berkwood. There are conspiracy theorists who believe vampires are real, so a team of redneck Vampire hunters come into town, making it difficult for Jane to hunt. The higher ranked vampires that were turned by Vlad are still alive and started the illuminati. Jane kills a vampire hunter, who happened to be Mina’s son. Mina sets out to find her son’s killer
Season 4: Out for Blood
Jane is working with Dr. Berkwood on making synthetic blood. The elite vampires feel threatened, because Jane can make a lot of money. Jane starts doing activism in the vampire community to show them that they can live harmoniously with humans as their equals. Dr. Berkwood uses science, combined with magic to cause the blood to make the vampires mortal again. Lucy destroys the lab where they were working on the blood, causing Jane and Dr. Berkwood to have to start over.
Season 5: Burning Down the House
Some of the vampires start teaming up to free the people from the people farms, and doing activism to save the humans. Some vampires will be happy to be mortal again, while others are enraged. Some of the people farms get destroyed, and a war starts.
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Module 2 Lesson 11
Griff’s Edited TV Bible for THE LAST STRAW
What I learned doing this assignment: No matter how good it is, it can be better.
Genre: Dramatic Series
Format: I hour Episodic
Concept
Two teenage brothers discover their mother has gone missing. To find her they must escape from foster care and survive life on the street to follow clues into dangerous and unknown territory.
World of the Show
Suburbia, and all is not well. Two single parents trying to bring up challenging teens and young adults have enough on their plates without being launched into trouble with the law.
Unique Sub-worlds
· The social services and foster care system
· The splintered homeless community and Southwest border encampments.
· The migrant world of Coyotes, border patrol, and abusive labor.
· A corrupt and violent immigration system.
Summary
How do two completely opposite teen brothers navigate adolescence with no father at home and a distracted single mother who is trying to forge a new career?
Brothers Randy and Todd are separated by only two years, but they are light-years apart in personality. Randy is small, athletic, and angry while younger brother Todd, a big kid for his age, is constantly being misidentified as the older of the two, leading to Randy’s incessant bullying of his “little” brother.
Single mom Stephanie is tired of shilling vanity products to young mothers, thinly disguised as a parental advice column. While she bids for more serious assignments at her magazine, Randy and Todd are constantly at each other’s throats and failing at school, putting Stephanie on notice that their messy home life needs some attention.
When the neighbor’s troubled daughter (and Randy’s crush), Marcey, drops a tantalizing scandal in her lap, Stephanie must find a way to pursue the story while keeping county social services from putting the unmanageable boys in foster care.
Pressures boil over and lead to a huge argument which spills into the street and brings out the neighbors and the cops. The next morning finds things settled down, except that both Stephanie and Marcey have gone missing.
Randy and Todd are shocked and puzzled – did Stephanie finally have enough and run away? Has she been abducted? What does Marcey have to do with it? In order to find out, the boys are going to have to elude foster care and stay together. Then what? Hit the road to find out what became of their mom, that’s what!
Main Characters
Stephanie Sherwood: Single mother doing her best to raise two challenging teen boys while trying to break into investigative journalism.
Randy Sherwood: Seventeen, compact, and angry. He remembers just enough about his estranged father to miss him in his life. He relentlessly bullies his younger but bigger brother, Todd. Has a big crush on the neighbor’s daughter, Marcey.
Todd Sherwood: Fifteen but looks twenty-something. A big kid who seems slow-witted until he has something to say. He is secretly accepting martial arts tips from the neighbor as a way of defending himself from Randy.
Brad Collins: The nerdy music teacher across the street used to be a famous rock star. He keeps a low profile, trying to do the best he can for daughter Marcey. Brad blames his former celebrity avatar for the drug overdose of Marcey’s mother.
Marcey Collins: Twenty, fierce and fit, Marcey pretends to be an aimless party girl to protect her father from worrying about the real danger – she leaves supplies in the desert for migrants crossing into Arizona.
Supporting Characters:
Harmony: Marcey’s best friend and partner in crime (and love.)
Agent Vaughan: Keeping an eye on Marcey, suspects her of illegally aiding immigrants.
Morgan Blackledge: The estranged father of Randy and Todd. He’s been in the Amazon looking for the ingredients to patent new drugs.
Maria: A young migrant who is saved from death when she finds the supplies left by Marcey and Harmony.
El Jefe: Mexican drug kingpin with aspirations to save the world (his way.)
Environmental Characters:
School counselors; social workers; police officers and detectives; foster parents; homeless/houseless tricksters and angels; human traffickers; border patrol agents; Coyotes; drug smugglers.
12 Episodes
Pilot: “Form Follows Dysfunction”
Stephanie is jolted awake after falling asleep at her keyboard late the previous night. She has overslept again and must get her two boys to school. She manages to get them in the car in a cyclone of last-minute cajoling.
Rushing to class to avoid another tardy, the boys collide with some of the seniors. One of the lettermen is impressed at the solid wall that Todd presents, while Randy scurries off before they can bully him.
Returning home to work on her now-past deadline, Stephanie is distracted by the neighbor’s party animal daughter, just coming in from another long night out.
Just when she thinks she can settle down to work, the school calls – they boys have got into another “incident” and she must come down and meet with the Vice Principal, who wants to set up a home inspection schedule to check on the boy’s welfare.
Episode Two: “Snot Sucker”
As Stephanie pushes her editor for better writing assignments, she is increasingly distracted on the home front. Randy and Todd voice their frustrations about getting to school on time and Stephanie’s erratic housekeeping. They feel like they need to take matters into their own hands.
Stephanie turns in her parenting columns despite feeling like a shill for manufacturers of products like The Snot Sucker. Stephanie lets her own cynicism creep into the advice column and one of her pieces gets some harsh pushback from readers.
Todd suggests that he and Randy start getting up early and walking to school to avoid relying on Mom. That would require Randy getting out of bed. Early.
Stephanie threatens to quit if her editor doesn’t take her seriously. Her editor, calling her bluff observes, “And who will that inconvenience?”
Episode Three: “Life Isn’t Fair”
Randy takes bullying Todd to a new level after failing to impress Marcey with his basketball moves. To add insult to injury, he can’t do much damage beating up on Todd due to his “little” brother’s size and density, and it just serves to further aggravate Stephanie.
Stephanie tries to improve her role at home with some inspired meal preparation. She can’t go far from the computer, however, and ends up trying to parboil her laptop.
Marcey attempts to pacify Brad but is still reluctant to come clean about her true desert adventures and her real relationship with Harmony. Brad deals with his frustration in the usual way, turning his amplifier up to “11” and blasting out some of the old Hell Toupee tunes.
Getting to school on their own isn’t working out any better than relying on Stephanie, and soon the school counselors are on the phone about serial tardiness and threatening a home visit.
Episode Four: “Gimme The Ball, Gimme The Ball, Gimme…”
Randy’s passion is sports. He spends much of his time shooting hoops in his backyard on a broken-down backstop. He almost never misses a shot.
He keeps going out for various sports but the bigger guys just can’t get beyond his small size. He takes out his frustrations by beating up on Todd. Todd confides in Brad, who has an idea to give him some self-defense training.
Stephanie continues putting out fluff parenting pieces, but becomes distracted by Marcey and Harmony’s comings and goings. Is Marcey the shallow hedonist she pretends to be?
When senior lettermen follow Randy and Todd to the local Quik Mart, Randy is ready to fight. They show no interest in him. Instead they try to recruit Todd for football. Randy goes ballistic.
Episode Five: “Martha Stewart You Ain’t”
Todd, signing up for a Home Economics class in cooking, tries to keep it quiet because he knows what Randy will do if he finds out. But when report cards come out Randy not only finds out about the cooking class, but that Todd is a straight-A student. If Todd thought Randy’s teasing was bad before …
Todd starts preparing lunches for himself and Randy. Stephanie is impressed, grateful, even. Randy reacts predictable, teasing Todd for being an overeater. But when he samples the delicious lunch and, later, the dinner Todd prepares for the family, he is at a loss for both words and punches.
Randy is not the only one who begins to see Todd through a different lens – Stephanie realizes she has been overlooking Todd’s creative side. Just when things seem like they are improving Todd makes some lunches for Marcey and Harmony to take to the desert. Her gratitude toward Todd sends Randy into a tantrum.
Episode Six: “Whatever Became of Crash Damitch?”
Randy’s bullying causes Todd to seek out Brad for some adult supervision. Brad has some eccentric interests, among them martial arts and firearms. Brad thinks some aikido training might be the remedy Todd needs to get Randy off his back.
Brad struggles to find satisfaction in his teaching when all his young students seem to want to do is to mimic YouTube videos. As a guitarist, Brad didn’t come up as a shredder, and is not impressed by it. He wants his students to study music, not just tricks and technique.
Stephanie is concerned about the amount of time Todd has been spending with Brad, thinking that Marcey is probably a bad influence. Meanwhile it is Randy that has developed a crush on Marcey.
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Episode Seven: “Cul-de-sac Diplomacy”
The mysterious Agent Vaughan continues to stake out the cul-de-sac, to the chagrin of both Stephanie and Brad. Brad thinks the narcs are about to come down on Marcey and Stephanie thinks it has something to do with her boys and their troublemaking.
The more Stephanie lurks around the more defensive Marcey becomes, telling to leave Agent Vaughan alone and to back off. Tensions flare as everyone starts to feel examined under a microscope.
Agent Vaughan won’t back off and won’t be exposed, either, preferring to keep the pressure on and see what boils over.
Stephanie finds out that anonymous tips have been phoned in that she is creating an unwholesome atmosphere at home by entertaining men when the boys are home. This complete fabrication nevertheless makes her situation with the county counselors worse.
Episode Eight: “ …And Your Enemies Closer.”
On the day of the home inspection things couldn’t go worse – the boys get into a fight just before the social worker is due and Stephanie’s editor calls with bad news.
Trying to put the best face possible on it, they almost squeak through the interview when Agent Vaughan shows up at the door, pretending to be Stephanie’s boyfriend. He gets the reaction he expects from Randy and Todd, and Stephanie is warned that the report to the county is not going to be flattering.
To make matters worse, Marcey pulls up just as Agent Vaughan is leaving, and confronts him about spying on her. Agent Vaughan is bemused, pleased with the results of his agit-prop.
Episode Nine: “Do You Know Who I Used To Be?”
Brad’s biggest fear is that Marcey will end up like her mother, a drug addict who overdosed. He doesn’t know that her party lifestyle is an act and that his daughter is far more serious and formidable than he thinks. His efforts to reign her in fail.
Marcey realizes Brad is worried about her, but her party girl charade allows her to disappear into the desert with Harmony, where they leave supplies for migrants crossing the border illegally. It is dangerous but also risks being prosecuted by the Border Patrol if she is caught.
All the while, Brad’s past is tugging at him, and he discovers that the other members of the old band are planning to attend a nostalgic Rock convention in Las Vegas.
During Stephanie’s prying into Marcey’s activities, she becomes aware of Brad’s celebrity past. Has Stephanie stumbled onto a story that could turn her career around?
Episode Ten: “The Border Crossed Us.”
Stephanie pays unwanted interest in Marcey and Harmony packing the SUV with water and supplies. She is skeptical that all this is for parties out in the desert.
Convinced that Marcey is sitting on a tinderbox that she can exploit, Stephanie decides to interview the mysterious man who has been staking-out Brad’s house, because she assumes he holds the key to what Marcey is up to.
Randy and Todd’s friction becomes more pronounced until Todd applies an Aikido move that completely surprises his brother. Randy begins to regard Todd in another light.
Stephanie confers with Brad and gets the whole background about the drug overdose death of Marcey’s mother and her Hispanic heritage.
Marcey does her best to be elusive, but Stephanie is determined to get a scoop out of it, thinking there’s some scandal to be exploited. Following Marcey and Harmony out to the desert, she inadvertently leads the Border Patrol to the girls.
Episode Eleven: “Land of Opportunity”
Maria tries to tough out the poor conditions at the labor camp because she needs to send money home to her family in Mexico. It becomes clear to her that the bosses play the workers off against one another.
Maria may be small, but she is no pushover. When she stands up to bullying the bosses punish the other workers and turn them against her,
In the fields, Maria tries to get help for a pregnant girl who has collapsed with asthma. She begs for transportation to take the girl to a clinic. The bosses are in no hurry to help out, and the girl dies.
Episode Twelve: “Take A Number
Stephanie, trying to make a deadline, is late to pick up the boys from school. They decide to walk over to the Quick Mart, and Todd shows off some of the moves he learned from Brad. A passing squad car sees two boys fighting and the cops pick them up.
Stephanie loses it, not so much angry at the boys as with herself and the situation. But the boys don’t see it that way. Shouting and accusations spill over and the boys and Stephanie all threaten to run away from home.
Marcey, already on edge with Stephanie’s prying into her business, gets into the act, taking the boys’ side. The argument spills out into the street and attracts the neighbors and the cops.
Late that night things eventually settle down and everyone goes to bed.
In the morning Stephanie and Marcey are both missing.
Five Seasons
Season 1: Running Away From Home
A. Concept: A single mother struggles to raise two troublesome teenagers while trying to break a big story for a magazine.
B. Arc/Journey: Stephanie stumbles onto a big story that requires her to tail Marcey, leaving the boys to fend for themselves
C. Main Conflict: Stephanie tries to keep Social Services at bay while pursuing her lead.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: What does Marcey do out in the desert?
E. Cliffhanger: After a big argument with the boys Stephanie and Marcey are missing.
B Story: Agent Vaughan has already taken an interest in Marcey’s activities.
C Story: Brad is itching to get the old band back together.
D Story: Supplies left in the desert by Marcey and Harmony save the life of Maria, a young migrant girl.
Season 2: Where Did Mom Go?
A. Concept: Brothers Randy and Todd are cast into the foster care system and separated.
B. Arc/Journey: The authorities ignore the boys’ insights into what happened to Stephanie and so the boys resolve to find her themselves.
C. Main Conflict: The boys must elude capture and learn to cooperate in order to survive a hostile homeless environment.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: Randy and Todd make allies and enemies in their quest to find Mom.
E. Cliffhanger: Estranged father, Morgan, finds the boys and joins in the search for the missing Stephanie.
B Story: Marcey’s discovers Stephanie following her in the desert. She misunderstands Stephanie’s motives and they are first chased by Coyotes and then arrested by Border Patrol.
C Story: Marcey is sprung from custody by Brad before the shadowy Agent Vaughan can get to her, so he takes Stephanie captive instead.
D Story: Maria ends up in a farm labor camp and is victimized by co-workers and bosses.
Season 3: Who Is This Dad Guy, Anyway?
A. Concept: Randy and Todd end up in protective custody but are finally released into the care of their estranged father, Morgan Blackledge.
B. Arc/Journey: Morgan is an eccentric Indiana Jones character who, surprisingly, signs up for the mission of tracking down Stephanie.
C. Main Conflict: Morgan and sons follow tantalizing leads that take them into dangerous drug cartel territory.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: Morgan begins to suspect that Agent Vaughan is not actually a law enforcement agent of any kind.
E. Cliffhanger: Morgan and the boys are taken into “custody” by Agent Vaughan and re-united with Stephanie.
B Story: Brad sets out in the old tour bus to find Marcey but succeeds only in crossing paths with the drug cartel.
C Story: Maria stands up to the farm bosses and is beaten and left in the desert to die.
Season 4: Bring Mom Home or Bust!
A. Concept: Stephanie, Morgan and the boys find themselves detained by Agent Vaughan.
B. Arc/Journey: Randy and Todd must learn to embrace their differences and work together. Stephanie and Morgan’s reunion reveals that they never stopped being in love.
C. Main Conflict: Morgan and Brad expose Agent Vaughan’s unwholesome intentions towards Marcey.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: El Jefe encounters Agent Vaughan and vows to find out who he really is.
E. Cliffhanger: Stephanie changes the focus of her story. Will it have the desired impact?
B Story: El Jefe turns out to be Brad’s biggest fan.
C Story: Coyotes find half-dead Maria in the desert and turn her over to El Jefe’s men.
Season 5: All Is Forgiven.
A. Concept: Stephanie struggles to get her life back together and to publish her story.
B. Arc/Journey: Randy and Todd re-enter “normal” life as celebrities. Brad’s tour bus is converted into a mobile clinic for farmworkers.
C. Main Conflict: Stephanie has trouble finding a publisher for her story until she ties in the sensational idea of the drug lord with a “heart of gold.”
D. Mystery/Open Loops: Where did the money come from to convert the bus?
E. Cliffhanger: Agent Vaughan resurfaces.
B. Story: Brad gets the old band together for a reunion tour and donates his share of profits to the clinic project.
C. Story: Maria comes to work for the mobile clinic.
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From going through the tv pitch bible I realised there were quite a few repetitive words and some sentences. I have made some improvements but the more I work on this the better it will become over time.
TITLE: ANTIPODES
GENRE: Historical Drama
FORMAT: 1 Hour (57/8minutes UK)
CONCEPT: England 1830’s where two LGBTQ people’s stories play out.
A middle-class horse trainer turns into a bad ass to find the whereabouts of her missing lover. Her secret is that she is a closeted lesbian and in love with her maid. She discovers her true grit and leaves no stone unturned as she slowly delves into the criminal underworld to find answers.
A feeble aristocratic gentleman comes to terms with his true self when his lover is arrested for “crimes of an unnatural act”. He hides his homosexuality from his overbearing father but discovers his back bone in the hope to re-unite with his lover, a common sailor.
WORLD: The divided social structure of 1830’s England from the upper crust of the aristocracy, to hard working middle class society, through to the working class and down to the seedy underworld of criminals. Covering the legal journey of convicted felons from the arrest to jail time/imprisoned in a ship hulk, to the court trials at the Old Bailey and eventual sentencing to several years hard labour. Then facing the trials and tribulations of the lengthy ships voyage whilst being transported. Facing the unknown and arduous life in new colonies of Australia.
SUMMARY: Harriet Wright a middle-class horse trainer wakes one morning to find her maid hasn’t turned up from her day off. She leaves no stone unturned to find her, which leads her to the criminal underworld. To gain the trust of the underworld boss she must partake in a crime. Will they give her answers of the whereabouts of her maid Rosie? Can she trust them or is she being used? Harriet becomes a pants wearing law breaker when committing scandalous crimes for the underworld boss. Can she keep her dark secret that Rosie her maid is her lover from her doting mother? Harriet is a woman of action and will go to the ends of the earth to be with her one true love.
Elliot Otto Edwards an aristocratic gentleman narrowly escapes being arrested when he and his lover Richard spend the night in a Molly House. His lover, a common sailor is arrested for “crimes of an unnatural act”. Elliot becomes a recluse and hits the bottle not knowing what to do about his circumstances. Eventually he comes out to his sister and finds the courage to rescue his lover Richard. Will he forfeit his heritage and wealth to be with the love of his life or sacrifice his happiness to fulfil his father’s wishes, to continue the family blood-line?
Both Harriet and Elliot have a chance meeting when in London and discover they have common ground. The two decide to work together to find their lovers and venture into a marriage of convenience, which surprises both their families. Rosie has been arrested along with her sister Tilly for being in possession of stolen clothing and are about to be shipped off to Australia for 7 years hard labour. Richard on the
other hand is held up in a ship hulk prior to his court appearance. He manages to avoid the noose and is sentenced to 10 years hard labour in Australia.
All three convicts suffer the perilous voyage with sickness, unwanted pregnancy, sailing through severe storms and death. Their lovers Harriet and Elliot find out only too late that the ship has sailed for the Antipodes. What will they do? Will they make the dramatic decision to set sail after Rosie and Richard or live a fake unfulfilled life together just to make their families happy?
CHARACTER DESCRIPTIONS:
HARRIET WRIGHT
A. Role in the show: Heroine, Lover/daughter
B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Adventurer/horse trainer C. Moral Issue: falls in love with her maid
D. Unpredictable: a woman of action, defiant
E. Empathetic: Hard working, lonerIntriguing Layers
A. Hidden Agendas: leaves no stone unturned to find her lover
B. Competition: Hard on herself
C. Conspiracy: with criminal underworld
D. Secrets: lesbian in love with her maid
E. Deception: hides both her love life and criminal activities from her mother
F. Wound: hates her father for abandoning her when a small child
G. Secret Identity: wears a disguise when carrying out crimes for the underworld criminalsEmotional Depth
A. Hope: to find her lover & live a happy life/Fear: her mother will find out she is a lesbian and part time criminal
B. Want: to be happy & successful / Need: the love of Rosie
C. Base Negative Emotion: fearful/ Public Mask: She is in control
D. Weaknesses: lack of belief in herself
E. Triggers: doesn’t like to be threatened (hates cruelty to animals)
F. Coping Mechanism: fights back, lashes out With Criminals: she goes bold.ELLIOT OTTO EDWARDS
A. Role in the show: reluctant hero/lover/son/brother
B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: seeks out his lover/expert swordsman
C. Moral Issue: falls in love with common sailor
D. Unpredictable: He comes to his senses/discovers a backbone
E. Empathetic: he leaves his heritage/wealth behind to find true happiness with RichardIntriguing Layers
A. Hidden Agendas: His sexuality is a secret, but perhaps he hopes to have a fake marriage but doesn’t know who with yet
B. Competition: competes for fathers’ love?C. Conspiracy: with Harriet to seek out person who told authorities to raid “Molly House”
D. Secrets: homosexual, comes out to sister
E. Deception He & Harriet fake marriageF. Wound: Father cruel to him when a child
G. Secret Identity: lives a double life (can be quite feminine (bottom)Emotional Depth
A. Hope to find Richard/keep his wealthy &inheritance Fear: father will find out
B. Want the love of Richard / Need: love and validation
C. Base Negative Emotion fear/shame/ Public Mask: Proud straight English Gent D. Weaknesses: Alcohol/sex
E. Triggers: father pushes his buttons
F. Coping Mechanism: tends to shut down, hide, cry, seclusion, inaction, gets drunkROSIE COTTON
A. Role in the show: Lover/Maid/Sister
B. Unique Purpose gets caught in a crime set up by her sister. She is caught with stolen clothing.
Expertise: happy go lucky/good person
C. Moral Issue: she doesn’t doubt her lesbianism yet hates criminal activities/sister D. Unpredictable: decides to keep child after being raped on-board ship
E. Empathetic: Bad things happen to her, yet she remains a good personIntriguing Layers
A. Hidden Agendas: She is fairly-open
B. Competition: her sister is the jealous one
C. Conspiracy:
D. Secrets: in love with her mistress
E. Deception: fake boyfriend
F. Wound: left on streets as youngster
G. Secret Identity: She was a Child pick pocket with sister TillyEmotional Depth
A. Hope: to live a happy life/ Fear: poverty/unhappy
B. Want: to be liked/ Need: the love of her mistress
C. Base Negative Emotion: unsettled / Public Mask: happy go lucky
D. Weaknesses: low self esteem
E. Triggers: Sisters taunting, stress of going back to having nothing/ losing her job F. Coping Mechanism: Denial, ignore it, pretend it didn’t happenRICHARD SMITH
A. Role in the show: Common Sailor/Lover
B. Unique Purpose: transported to Australia for “crimes of an unnatural act” Expertise: Cockswain/Helmsman
C. Moral Issue: falls in love with a rich Gentleman
D. Unpredictable: manages to steer ship through storm whilst on voyage/becomes a heroE. Empathetic: hard life/ decent person
Intriguing Layers
A. Hidden Agendas: his homosexuality
B. Competition: overtly masculine with his mates (a top)
C. Conspiracy:
D. Secrets: his sexuality/gay friends
E. Deception: over compensates his masculinity for being gay. F. Wound: misses his mother as she died when young
G. Secret Identity: Hides his homosexualityEmotional Depth
A. Hope: good life / Fear: found out for being gay
B. Want to be rich &popular / Need: to be loved
C. Base Negative Emotion: fear. Public Mask: butch bravado D. Weaknesses: Doubting himself/abilities
E. Triggers: doesn’t like to be teased
F. Coping Mechanism: uses his fists, fights backMINOR CHARACTERS/CHARACTER CIRCLE/RELATIONSHIPS
(I have included an actual graph in my tv pitch bible, which I wasn’t able to copy/past here)
EPISODE DESCRIPTIONS:
Pilot #1 In the Closet
Hook/Intrigue: Harriet’s maid hasn’t turned up from her day off
Journey: Harriet leaves no stone unturned to find her
Challenge/Conflict: Both Harriet & Elliot hide their sexuality from their families
Action/Reaction: Elliot wallows in self-doubt whilst Harriet scours the local town trying to find answers to Rosie’s whereabouts.
Cliff-hanger: FLASHBACKS: Rosie and Tilly’s arrested, Elliot narrowly escapes while his lover is arrest having spent the night in a Molly House.
Episode #2 Secrets Revealed
Hook/Intrigue: Harriet in her search for Rosie comes across Tilly’s association with the criminal underworld.
Journey: Harriet continues to find Rosie
Challenge/Conflict: Harriet and Elliot both introduced to prospective partners.Action/Reaction: Elliot finally comes out to his younger sister, they both agree to keep it a secret from their father Sir Oswald Edwards.
Episode #3 Fork In the Road
Cliff-hanger: Harriet must perform a crime to gain the trust of the criminal underworld boss. In order to protect her identity she dresses as a man when carrying out crimes.
Hook/Intrigue: Harriet does the crime on behalf of the underworld boss. She must rob one of the crime boss’s competitors and put an end to his corruption.
Journey: Elliot decides to rescue Richard, Harriet gets more involved with the criminal underworld
Challenge/Conflict: Oswald is outrage at his son’s lack of interest in the family bloodline/heritage/estate. Harriet’s mother, Mrs. Wright curious about her daughter’s curious change in behaviour
Action/Reaction: Elliot decides to find his lover
Cliff-hanger: Harriet receives 5 dot tattoo on the back of her hand, a symbol she can be trusted by the criminal underworld. Harriet must break in to the legal records office to find information about Rosie
Episode #4 Trust Your Gut
Hook/Intrigue: Rosie spends her day off with her sister Tilly.
Journey: Rosie and Tilly arrested by local constable and thrown into jail awaiting a trial. Elliot makes careful enquires about the raid on the Molly House.
Challenge/Conflict: Harriet can’t find any details of Rosie’s arrest, too many people on the books.
Action/Reaction: Tilly steels the clothing from a gentleman client and makes a quick escape, handing some of the items to her naive sister
Cliff-hanger: Harriet’s awkward date night where he forces her to give him a quick “hand job”.
Episode #5 Revenge Best Served Cold
Hook/Intrigue: Harriet finds the name of the jail where Rosie and Tilly are being held.
Journey: Harriet makes plans to visit the prison, must make plans for someone to care for her horses/stables
Challenge/Conflict: Elliot’s awkward date night, she gives him a bad blow job in the orangery “a little less teeth”.
Action/Reaction: Harriet plans a highway robbery, is this something the criminal underworld has arranged or is she now going rogue?
Cliff-hanger: Harriet seeks revenge on her prospective future husband (arranged by her doting mother) by robbing him whilst he travels on a highway in his carriage
Episode #6 Popularity Can Be Dangerous
Hook/Intrigue: Harriet keeps both her criminal activities and sexuality from her mother.
Journey: Harriet loves her involvement with the criminal underworld and her popularity is rising within the ranks.
Challenge/Conflict: Elliot’s sister tries to soften the rift between her father and her brother by suggesting that perhaps he is better off being a bachelor. (she is married with a young son and a second child on the way)
Action/Reaction: Elliot tracks down Richards land lady at the Sailors digs and finds out he is awaiting a trial in a ships prison hulk. Murky character eaves drop on the conversation.
Cliff-hanger: Elliot receives a blackmail letter.
Episode #7 Facing the Truth
Hook/Intrigue: Harriet involved in more criminal activities Journey: Harriet misses her lover.
Challenge/Conflict: Elliot fights with his father, he says he is willing to give up his heritage/wealth and that everything should be passed onto his sister and her son.
Action/Reaction: Mrs. Wright very curious as to why her daughter is so determined to find their maid.
Cliff-hanger: Harriet comes out to her mother. Mrs. Wright is furious and starts to throw out her daughters’ belongings at the front door.
Episode #8 Upside Down
Hook/Intrigue: Mrs Wright may be coming ‘round to her daughters’ sexuality.
Journey: Harriet finally arrives at the prison only to find that she is too late. Rosie was carted off to London for her trial only a few days earlier.
Challenge/Conflict: Elliot must find the name of the prison hulk that Richard is being held.
Action/Reaction: Harriet extremely disappointed in missing her lover drowns her sorrows. Chance meeting with Elliot, he takes pity on the drunken Harriet and takes her to his club.
Cliff-hanger: Harriet and Elliot wind up in bed together, but it’s not what you think. The two discover they have common ground and decide to work together to find their lovers.
FIVE SEASONS DESCRIPTIONS:
Season #1
England 1830’s. Harriet Wright a middle-class horse trainer turns bad ass to find the whereabouts of her missing lover. She leaves no stone unturned which leads her to the criminal underworld. To gain the trust of the gangland boss she must partake in crime. Will they give her answers of the whereabouts of her maid? Can she trust them or is she being used? To protect her from the authorities she decides to
disguise herself as a man when partaking in illegal activities. She also must hide both her sexuality and crimes from her doting mother.
When Harriet passes “the test” she is given a tattoo on the back of her right hand, 5 dots placed between her thumb. A “sign” she can be trusted. Elliot Otto Edwards an aristocratic gentleman comes to terms with his true self when his lover is arrested for “crimes of an unnatural act”. He becomes a recluse and hits the bottle not knowing what to do about his circumstances. Eventually he comes out to his sister and finds the courage to rescue his lover. We also see the back story of the lovers, how they met etc. and follow the crime/arrest of Tilly/Rosie and Richard.
Season #2 Crime vs Law
Harriet uses her new-found skills and tracks down the culprit responsible for blackmailing Elliot. He comes to a gruesome end. She also finds the prison where Rosie is being held and the ship hulk where Richard is captive. In the meantime, Richard proposes a marriage of convenience with Harriet.
Harriet is now more popular with the criminal underworld than the main boss, who now plots to exterminate her for good. Will she accept Elliot’s hand in marriage, will the crime boss murder Harriet? Can she survive? We also see how Rosie/Tilly cope with being arrested as well as Richard. Harriet/Elliot turn up to the prison/hulk having just missed their partners being transported to the court house a few days earlier.
Season #3 Prison/Hulks, Old Bailey
Harriet turns the tables and extinguishes the crime boss, she has now earned herself another tattoo to crown her glory. Both Harriet/Elliot attempt to track down their lovers whilst shocking both their families with a sudden announcement of marriage. Harriet has now proved herself as an individual not to be messed with.
We follow Rosie/Tilly and their court case where they are both convicted for 7 years hard labour in Australia (Tilly for robbery of clothing and being in possession of stolen clothing, Rosie for being in possession of stolen clothing. Richards court case, is more serious as death by hanging is the usual punishment for his crime but as he is such a fit/healthy strong young man his life is saved but sentenced to 10 years hard labour in Australia. Harriet/Elliot find themselves once again too late to rescue their lovers as they are already being transported to London Docks ready for transportation.
Season #4 Bound for the Antipodes
Focus now shifts towards the Rosie and Richard as Harriet/Elliot seem to be always one step behind. The ship has already sailed with their lovers on board. During the voyage Rosie/Tilly struggle with their sisterly relationship. Tilly once again comes to the rescue of Rosie, when she decides to have sex with the sailors to save her younger sister from the ordeal. During the voyage Tilly becomes ill and one of the Sailors takes Rosie and forces her have sex with a young seaman (both are virgins).
As Tilly’s health deteriorates Rosie makes amends with Tilly and thanks her for her love and protection ever since they were little street urchins. Tilly dies and her body tipped into the ocean.
Harriet/Elliot must decide what to do next? Are they ready to forsake their comfortable lives to re-unite with their lovers’? Rosie becomes sea sick, or is it something more than that? During the journey, there is a storm at sea, the Captain calls upon Richard to help steer the ship through the storm. Will they survive?
Harriet feels more alive than she ever has with her new gained criminal activities however, she misses the ship on which her lover Rosie has sailed away to Australia. Will she pursue her to the Antipodes or remain bereft for the rest of her life?
Season #5 The New Colonies/Australia
Life in the great open spaces of Australia. Richard now considered a hero, for saving the ship is given a smaller private dwelling rather than being shoved in with the great unwashed in prison. Rosie now heavily pregnant struggles without her sister. Harriet/Elliot decide to travel to the ends of the earth to be with their one true loves, despite conflict from their families. Will they find their lovers alive? How will they find them?
Brief look at the sea voyage of Harriet/Elliot in opposite conditions of their partners. (wealth/first class). Once in Melbourne they first track down Richard. Richard knows of the whereabouts of Rosie and warns them that he heard she was “not well”. They find Rosie with a young baby girl, in the most shocking condition. Elliot hires and architect and draws up plans to house them all. Rosie one day sees the Sailor that forced the young man have sex with her. Harriet takes her revenge out on this low life, kills him and dumps his body into the bay where the sharks do the rest. Criminal underworld from the U.K has transpired in this young city. Harriet/Elliot’s new home is set upon by thieves. Harriet confronts the burglars and upon showing them her “crown” tattoo, the felons apologise and make a hasty retreat.
Elliot suggest that Richard and Rosie marry for them to “properly all live together” under the one roof. Series ends with a second marriage and the four of them moving into a large resplendent home in the new city of Melbourne.
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