Day 11 Assignments

[Timothy Barley]

Subject line: Tim Barley’s Edited TV Pitch Bible

What I learned from doing this assignment is that in my mind, I have a lot of work to do and stop kidding myself that “it’s good enough.” I want to edit and re-edit and punch up and add intrigue, “underwrite” items, elevate things and make everything better. This usually happens at 11:30 pm as I’m about to go to bed…

I have to stop seeing everything as a problem, and see how “problems” might be amazing POSSIBILITIES for set ups for intrigue/loop/mystery.

Just not enough time in the day to write, work a full-time job and sleep…

• This reply was modified 2 years, 7 months ago by  Timothy Barley.

[Wendy Weising]

Wendy Weising’s Edited TV Pitch Bible

The process has removed tons of fluff. I guess I’m a fluffy person.

What I learned doing this assignment is this is hard stuff. I struggle with being concise.

[Timothy Barley]

Couldn’t agree with you more. And, at times for me, I make a change and that leads to a change in something earlier in the season, etc. All for the better, but it IS the hard part.

[Laurie Brown]

(Laurie Brown’s) Creating Your TV Pitch Bible

What I learned from this assignment is that the pitch bible is a marketing tool, yes, but it is also the entire outline of the show The set ups and pay offs must be carefully timed and I’m assuming that you only reveal in the pitch bible episodes and seasons as much as you will reveal in the actual writing of the episodes. For that reason, I think I have a good start, that I could send to a producer, but that I’ll be working on it much more as the course progresses.

[Elizabeth Dickinson]

Elizabeth Dickinson’s Edited TV Pitch Bible

What I learned doing this assignment is that I’m still discovering inherent intrigue that I was forgetting to see and write as intrigue in the pitch bible. (My d’oh moment…) I still wish I could get clarity since I used the pilot episode as my way to summarize the season, so do I just skip episode 1 when I get to the episode summaries and say “already shared”? Otherwise, everything’s getting continually shorter, but there’s still work to do on the episode summaries, which still give me the willies…

[Ben Ather]

Subject line: Ben’s Edited TV Pitch Bible

What I learned doing this assignment is

After I read through my TV Pitch Bible, I found that I need to fix many things. It is funny that I spent too much time trying to make my first draft perfect, only to find out that it was not close enough. Next thing to do is to get feedback from another person. A second eye will find problems I could not or believed that they were fine.

[Avi K]

What I learned doing this assignment is

My bible feels too long and I’m sure another pass would show me what needs tightening. Feedback will definitely help.

[P.G. Sundling]

P.G. Sundling’s Edited TV Pitch Bible

4. Tell us what this process did for your TV Pitch Bible and answer the question, “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work.

I switched from indented paragraphs to block paragraphs to have it look more spacious. This process added a few pages. It took a week of work to get the page count back down. I didn’t include fluff, so I had to decide which details I could skip. It’s a complex plot and most of it matters.

Going with two half-seasons for the episode list gave me twice the amount of episodes for the first season. Given that, I’m OK with my 11 pages page length.

I’ll get lots of feedback to find clarity issues. Everything is of course clear to me.