Day 13 Assignments

[Christina Parker]

Christina Parker Day 13 Unique Characters on the page.

What I learned from doing this assignment was that focussing on one character and their attributes really helped make creative choices that have more meaning. Because the dialogue is rooted in who they are. I’m looking forward to keep working on this for the rest of the dialogue.

Before (Connor’s dialogue)

CONNOR

Right, the ten plagues of Egypt in the who cares little town of Creede, I don’t think so.

After

CONNOR

Right, the ten plagues of Egypt in this dump of a town, I don’t think so.

Before

Jak begins to walk away.

CONNOR

Alright, I found an Egyptian box with ten figurines in one of the mines. Danny seems to think the figurines have something to do with the frogs. Says it’s the ten plagues of Egypt.

After

Jak begins to walk away.

CONNOR

Go on walk away but you’ll never find out what’s going on.

Jak stops, turns slowly.

I found an Egyptian box with ten of those figurines down the mine. Danny says all the frogs are linked to the ten plagues of Egypt.

Before (Jak’s Dialogue)

STEVE

I know whatever I say makes no difference to your behavior but I would ask that you reconsider your dress code. Do you have any idea how you look to people?

JAK

You mean how I look to the people in your congregation?

STEVE

Everyone! I don’t discriminate.

JAK

Yes, you do. You want to censor the way I look and it’s not happening.

She walks off. He goes to her, drunk, he stumbles knocking the low table, a photo of the woman falls. He picks it up. Staring at it he walks back to the couch. Jak walks up the stairs to her room.

JAK

(to herself)

I was hoping we could have a nice conversation, just for a change.

After

STEVE

You went out there looking like that?

JAK

Actually, no, I went out naked and put these clothes on before I came in.

STEVE

The way you dress is not acceptable.

JAK

To who, you and the judgemental so-called Christians in your church? Are you worried about your appearance?

She walks off. He goes to her, drunk, he stumbles knocking the low table. The photo of the woman falls. He picks it up. Staring at it he walks back to the couch. Jak walks up the stairs to her room. SLAMS the door, leans against it, upset.

• This reply was modified 3 years, 11 months ago by  Christina Parker.