Day 14 Assignments

[Sandra Gibson]

Sandra’s Thriller Map Version 1

What I learned is that I can write scenes without dialogue in order to get a better sense of what the characters are doing in their actions and intentions.

INT. MUSEUM – NIGHT

Two security guards peer into a mirrored locked room. They see a large podium with a historical manuscript standing alone in the middle of the room. A single bright light illuminates the text, all in hand-written French.

Both guards look at each other, shrugging their shoulders.

As they begin to walk away, one of the guards gasps in horror as he sees the head of a person appear as a dark shadow over the manuscript. The shadow disappears as quickly as it appeared.

The two guards look at each other in disbelief. They don’t know how to interpret or process this. They walk away and continue their duties.

INT. FOYER – DAY

A large package arrives by courier at the front door. Max accepts it and takes it up to the library. He tells Celine it’s a surprise and will show her later.

He carefully unwraps the package, kisses the manuscript, wipes the glass covering it, sets it on a wooden podium.

Celine enters the library and sees the manuscript. She is angered to find out he was the so-called anonymous bidder.

INT. LIBRARY – LATER THAT EVENING

Maxim can’t sleep. He goes to the library to play the digital grand piano for a few minutes. He turns it off, then goes back to his bedroom to sleep. He hears the piano playing by itself. It stops. He smokes a cigar to try to calm his nerves.

EXT. PARK – DAY

Lilith is going on her daily jog in the park. She sees “Mom” calling on her cell phone and answers the call. She says she knows exactly what they can do to break the curse and that she will take care of it.

She goes to a private place where no one can hear her. She makes a call, continues jogging.

INT. BEDROOM – LATER THAT EVENING

Max is tossing and turning in his sleep. He awakens to see the image of someone standing over him with a knife in his hand. He SHRIEKS.

The figure disappears. He takes grabs a gun from under his bed, SHOOTS out into the darkness. He calls the police and says that someone has broken into his house.

The police arrive a few minutes later. They search the house thoroughly and find no one. They sit down with Max to interview him and take notes. The police exit, looking at each other with a look of concern.

INT. BEDROOM – EVENING

Max is in bed reading. There is a gentle KNOCK on the door. Celine enters. She looks sullen and pale.

He tells her the bad news about Bitcoin crashing. She says she has even more bad news – she has terminal cancer and has only weeks to live. Max throws a lamp off its stand. He apologizes then takes her in his arms and holds her tenderly.

The phone rings. It’s Lilith. She says she and Victor broke up and needs somewhere to stay. Max suggest she come live with him and Celine for awhile. She eagerly accepts the invitation.

EXT. PARK – EVENING

Maxim goes for a walk alone in Central Park. There are only a handful of people in the distance.

He sits on a bench, aims a gun to his head.

Lilith, jogging, sees him, runs as fast as she can toward him. She pulls his arm away from his head. A SHOT is fired as the gun falls to the ground.

He tries to pick it up. She kicks it out of his reach. He cries out to let him do it. A passerby picks up the gun and hurls it into the nearby lake.

Max puts his head in his hands in defeat. Lilith sits beside him, puts her arm around his shoulder. He exclaims that his life is over.

[Kim Jaspers]

Assignment 14 – KIM J’S READABLE THRILLER MAP

THE FEDERATION WEST by Kim Jaspers

LOGLINE: A struggling artist pulled into an alternate reality must vanquish the demons she’s created in her graphic novel to free herself and save humanity.

INT. CAROL’S DINING ROOM – DAY

SAGE GREELEY (25) frantically works on her graphic novel, THE FEDERATION WEST. Her mom’s dining room wall is papered with her illustrations. We see meticulously detailed notecards on a bulletin board laying out the story beats. Sage tells Carol she’s going to save humanity through her graphic novel. Carol’s concerned and asks if she’s taking her medication. Sage says, “yes,” but we see Sage in the bathroom mirror as she raises a pill to her lips. Smash to black, the toilet FLUSHES. Sage establishes herself as an unreliable protagonist.

INT. ALKALOID PUBLISHING OFFICE – DAY

Publisher J.J. and his editor, DIANA (32), review Sage’s manuscript. We don’t see their faces during their exchange, focusing instead on the manuscript.

INT. HOLLYWOOD HILLS MANSION – DAY

J.J.’s mysterious WIFE looks at the manuscript, her face obscured by a sun hat, as she talks to J.J. on the phone about it. J.J., whose face we don’t see, tells his Wife that the author’s mother has LPS conservatorship over her. J.J. reveals a producer friend wants to buy the movie rights before the book is even published. Unwitting Sage is on the cusp of a 7-figure book and movie deal.

EXT. SANTA CRUZ BEACH BOARDWALK – DAY

A frequent flyer at the Boardwalk, Sage waits in line to ride the Cliff Hanger. A woman with wild hair, a ratty fake fur jacket, and grungy clothing, LINDSEY, watches the ride from a nearby lemonade stand. When Sage gets off the ride and walks away, Two SHADOWY MEN follow her. Lindsey steps out to walk side by side with Sage and tells her she’s being followed. When the men get too close, Lindsey grabs Sage, and they run off the Boardwalk–

EXT. BOARDWALK PARKING LOT – DAY

–And into the parking lot. They hide. When Sage asks who the men are following them, Lindsey deflects by saying, “it’s a lot to unpack.” When Sage asks Lindsey who she is and what she wants, she replies, “I’m Lindsey, and you need my help.”

INT. SANTA CRUZ DONUT SHOP – DAY

Sage and Lindsey hide in the donut shop to elude the Shadowy Men. Sage notices them on the sidewalk, and Sage and Lindsey hide underneath their booth to avoid detection.

Increasingly paranoid, Sage hears the VOICES (Juno and Minerva) talking about her (they appear throughout), concerned as Sage slips further into a delusional state.

INT. LINDSEY’S MOTEL ROOM – NIGHT

Sage and Lindsey go to Lindsey’s motel. The phone is ringing inside the room when they arrive. Lindsey refuses to answer the phone because it’s “them” calling. Who are they?

Sage tells Lindsey she needs to go home because her mom will worry that she’s missed dinner. Lindsey drives Sage to Carol’s (Sage’s mom’s) house.

EXT. CAROL GREELEY’S HOUSE – NIGHT

A stranger, Andrea, opens up, talks to Sage through the chain opening. Andrea says she’s a renter, that the rental agent told her that the woman who lived there before died. Sage is alarmed. She knows Carol is not dead. It’s Carol’s house.

Andrea shows Sage the rental agreement and suggests Sage call the police, but Sage can’t find her phone. When Sage asks to come in so she can look around and Andrea says, “I’m not letting some woman who claims this is her mother’s house into my home.”

Lindsey insists Sage go to the police. Sage declines stating the police “know her” from her history of incidents resulting in 5150 holds that they won’t take her concerns seriously, perhaps even initiate another hold on her. Lindsey is alarmed by Sage’s psychiatric history and her missing mother. Sage begs Lindsey’s help to figure out what’s going on. Lindsey agrees to help only if Sage goes to the police.

INT. SANTA CRUZ POLICE STATION – NIGHT

Sage reports Carol’s disappearance and Andrea posing as a renter in Carol’s home. When Sage says the woman indicated Carol might be dead, Desk Sergeant Morales sends officers to Sage’s home. He thinks Sage might be involved in Carol’s disappearance.

I/E. CAROL’S HOUSE – NIGHT

Officers Debs and Lucero search Carol’s home and find nothing amiss, except Carol’s purse is still on her dresser. No strange woman. Sage insists that something’s happened to Carol. Lucero and Debs (who also know Sage) wonder if Sage might have something to do with Carol’s disappearance. No one’s sure of anything.

Sage tells Lindsey (who’s waiting in the car) she’s going to go home. Lindsey refuses to let her, saying it’s not safe, insists Sage go with her. Sage reluctantly agrees.

INT. LINDSEY’S MOTEL ROOM – NIGHT

While Lindsey is in the shower, Sage fishes around in Lindsey’s ratty purse and finds a designer wallet full of cash and expensive sunglasses inconsistent with Lindsey’s post-grunge vibe. Lindsey’s suitcase is locked.

INT. LINDSEY’S CADILLAC – NEXT MORNING

Sage still can’t get a hold of Carol. Lindsey convinces Sage to Los Angeles with her that it’s not safe to return home.

I/E. CAROL’S HOUSE – DAY

Carol’s friend, Fran, distressed she can’t get a hold of Carol, finds her in the laundry room in the basement. She woke up in the corner behind a laundry rack full of clothes, so the officers didn’t see her the night before. Carol has no memory of what happened. Someone locked the laundry room door from the outside, and Fran believes Sage is the only one who could have locked Carol down there. Carol refuses to believe that Sage would harm her.

INT. THE FEDERATION WEST CENTER (LOS ANGELES) – DAY

Lindsey brings Sage inside, and Sage sees the Federation West motto: “Interception, not Resurrection” from her graphic novel.

Lindsey hands Sage off to BEVERLY, who instructs Sage to sign some papers. Sage, distracted, signs. Lindsey walks out. Distressed at Lindsey’s departure, Sage gets up to follow her out. Paul forcefully maneuvers Sage back into her chair. He and Beverly threaten her with hard restraints. Sage is now a captive at the Fed West Center but doesn’t understand why.

INT. SCPD – DAY

Carol reports Sage missing. Morales is confused, as Sage reported Carol missing the night before. Carol plays the phone messages from Sage left from Lindsey’s phone, but the number is blocked. Sage, incommunicado, doesn’t know Carol has been found. Calls to Sage’s phone go directly to VM.

INT. SVEN’S FEDERATION WEST OFFICE – DAY

Sage sits in front of her graphic novel villain, SVEN SVENSEN. He has a copy of Sage’s manuscript and demands she explain how she knows the story. Shocked, Sage asks how Sven got the manuscript and if he knows about her mother’s disappearance. Sven demands to know if the manuscript has been circulated. He indicates the novel’s critical battle will ensure The Federation West’s destruction and that Sage must revise it. Sage refuses, believing it will alter the fate of humanity, mirroring the novel’s story. Sven calls his thugs.

INT. FED WEST INTERROGATION ROOM – DAY

Sven’s security THUGS restrain Sage in a chair and tase her for information about who else has seen the graphic novel. She refuses to tell them anything. They take her back to Sven.

INT. SVEN’S FEDERATION WEST OFFICE – DAY

Sven demands she rewrite the battle under threats of more torture. The voices in Sage’s head return telling her she’d better make the changes/better not make the changes. Sage buys time by saying she needs a good editor and she cannot do a rewrite hungry. She goes to the cafeteria.

INT. FEDERATION WEST CAFETERIA – DAY

At her table, the African American man introduces himself as publisher “J.J.” — Sage is very excited, “J.J. Jacobs?” “I’m Sage Greeley” “Oh, yes, Sage. I remember your graphic novel. What are we doing living in it?” Paul brings J.J.’s editor DIANA to the cafeteria, and Sage is convinced she’s living in her graphic novel. She now believes The Federation West has also snatched her publisher and editor too.

INT. SAGE’S ROOM AT THE FED WEST CENTER – NIGHT

A guard comes for Sage to bring her to her windowless, locked room. She hears a familiar male voice screaming lyrics from his popular anti-drug song. It’s Trey Montero, a famous pop singer whose battle with schizophrenia has been very public. Is he real or a fabrication of Sage’s skewed reality?

In the morning, when her door opens automatically, Sage inspects the lock mechanism closely.

INT. FED WEST CAFETERIA – DAY

Alarmed at Sage’s level of disturbance, Diana asks if Sage takes medication for her “thoughts.” Sage reveals she hasn’t taken medication in weeks, says it dulls her creativity.

INT. FED WEST CLASSROOM – DAY

Sven leads a group at the center. Sage, J.J., and Diana are there when Trey is brought in. He’s emaciated, disheveled, and delusional. Sage is obsessed that they’re mistreating him.

INT. SAGE’S ROOM – NIGHT

When Sage returns to her room, she slips a bit of folded paper into the door lock mechanism to prevent it from locking securely.

Sage hears Trey again screaming that he wants to die, needs his meds. The noise stops suddenly. Sage slips out of her room to investigate and finds he’s hung himself in his bathroom. She gets him down, revives him, tells him she’s going for help.

INT. DORMITORY CORRIDOR – NIGHT

Sage sneaks out and sees Sven and Lindsey dragging something heavy that looks like a body rolled up in a sheet. Sage believes it’s Trey. Sven and Lindsey shove the body into the incinerator. When she sees Sven and Lindsey kiss passionately, Sage learns her mentor and villain are romantically involved. She’s starting to put the puzzle together.

INT. FEDERATION WEST CLINIC – NIGHT

Diana sneaks into the clinic and reads Sage’s and Trey’s chart notes. We learn that Lindsey is actually the treating psychiatrist and that she’s filing for conservatorship of Sage and Trey to get at their money — his current and her future. Diana is actually a therapist who is part of the game to make Sage believe she’s living in her graphic novel as a psychiatric “treatment” (Lindsey claims she can cure psychotic disorders without medication – Sage and Trey are her “subjects” – but she’s really after their money). Fed West Diana and Fed West J.J. are role-playing. Diana steals some medication for Sage.

INT. CAFETERIA – DAY

Diana slips Sage some pills, and Sage confronts Diana. She sees Trey there, so she wonders who Sven and Lindsey put in the incinerator. Are there more “subjects”?

INT. SVEN’S OFFICE – NIGHT

Sage breaks into Sven’s office and finds: 1) her dead phone (she charges it immediately), 2) paperwork related to her and Trey, 3) a letter opener with a metal blade, and 4) a .38 revolver. She pockets the gun, puts the letter opener in her sock.

She turns on the location services knowing that her mother can track her on the “find my phone” locator. Poised to dial Carol’s number, Sage hears footsteps outside the door. She hides underneath Sven’s desk and turns off the phone just as Sven enters. When he slides his feet underneath his desk, he finds Sage. He drags her out, and she loses the gun. He tries to kill her, but she kills him first with the letter opener.

INT. DIANA’S KITCHEN – NIGHT

Diana is at home and hears a glass break. She follows red wine pawprints into her kitchen, where Lindsey is waiting with a gun. Lindsey kills Diana.

INT. CAROL’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Carol’s phone dings, waking her up. The locator says Sage’s cell phone has been located in Los Angeles, some 300 miles away.

EXT. FED WEST GROUNDS – NIGHT

When Sage leaves Sven’s office, Lindsey sees her and runs after her. Sage breaks a 2nd-floor window and climbs out of the building to the lawn. Lindsey takes the stairs, catches Sage as she’s climbing over the perimeter fence. Lindsey knocks Sage out cold.

INT. SANTA CRUZ POLICE STATION – NIGHT

Carol shows Morales the location of the phone. He calls the LAPD.

I/E. LAPD SWAT COMMAND CENTER – DAY

SWAT suits up for a raid on the Fed West Center.

EXT. FED WEST FRONT ENTRANCE – DAY

The real J.J. shows up at the Center, wanting to confront his wife, Lindsey. We learn the J.J. at the Center is an imposter.

INT. SAGE’S ROOM – DAY

Sage awakens in her room, restrained to the bed. Lindsey is going to draw blood to prove her medication non-compliance — FAKE J.J. assists. They remove one arm restraint, and Sage fights them both off and frees herself from the restraints. She’s pure adrenalin. She grabs the hypodermic needle Lindsey had and keeps J.J. and Lindsey at bay as she escapes, locking Lindsey and J.J. in the room.

INT. FED WEST SECURITY ROOM/FRONT ENTRANCE – DAY

Beverly watches multiple monitors and sees the REAL J.J. in front, looking for his wife, Lindsey, to confront her. The SWAT team arrives. Beverly learns something is going on and announces a “CODE BLACK” over the intercom. Lindsey instructs Beverly to get her and J.J. out of the locked room. Beverly informs Lindsey of the impending raid, says “it’s go time.” When Beverly goes into the stairwell to free Lindsey and J.J., Sage plunges a hypodermic in Beverly’s neck, knocking her out.

INT. FED WEST CENTER DORMITORY FLOOR – DAY

There’s a SWAT raid—lots of action. Paul is on the floor with a gun, shoots an officer in the vest. SWAT kills Paul. Lindsey and FAKE J.J. are arrested. Sage is found safe.

INT. CAROL’S HOUSE – DAY

Sage is now home with Carol. A copy of her published graphic novel arrives. She and Carol toast Sage’s success. Sage tells Carol she’s learned her lesson and she will be faithful with her medication. She tells Carol she has a sequel to the graphic novel in mind. Carol is speechless.

INT. SAGE’S ROOM – NIGHT

That evening in bed, Sage tries to draw but can’t. She’s flat, listless, uninspired.

INT. SAGE’S BATHROOM – NIGHT

Carol yells to Sage that Trey is on the phone to congratulate her. Sage looks at herself in the bathroom mirror, holds a pill up to her mouth. Smash to black as the toilet FLUSHES. Sage’s V.O. “Hello?” as she answers the phone over black. We suspect she’s ready for another adventure.

• This reply was modified 3 years, 11 months ago by  Kim Jaspers.
• This reply was modified 3 years, 11 months ago by  Kim Jaspers.

[Alan Larson]

Hi, Kim – Want exchange critiques on this first version of our Thriller Maps?

Thanks! – alan

[Kim Jaspers]

Yes! Thank you, Alan.

[Alan Larson]

ASSIGNMENT – DAY 14

Subject line: Alan’s Readable Thriller Map

What I learned is: There are many different methods to making a Thriller more compelling and it is important to use every available aspect.

Alan’s Thriller Map – A BLIND EYE

For: My friends who have been victims.

INT. CHINOOK BISTRO OFFICE – NIGHT

A printer whirrs out a WANTED poster sketch of a ‘Person of Interest’ in several Missing Girl cases: About 5’10”, brown hair, athlete build, silver wedding ring.

INT. CHINOOK BISTRO – NIGHT

The Manager drops the sketch on the hostess stand. The sketch morphs into the matching face of Jay Crockett, (35), a wise-cracking Denver Everyman.

At a back corner table, Jay and Holly Sampson (22) eat dinner. They appear to be having an affair. They get up to leave together, but Jay veers to the restroom.

At the bar, a tall blond surfer dude, Blake, chats up Holly and asks if she wants to smoke the ‘World’s Best Weed’ with him. She agrees. Blake gives Jay a double-take.

As Jay and Holly leave the bistro, the hostess pulls out the police sketch of Jay and phones the police. Walk in. No name. Paid with cash.

INT. WHITE SPRINTER VAN – NIGHT

Holly smokes weed with Blake. Blake roofies her. She passes out. He ties her up and drives away, abducting her.

INT. SMALL TOWN SOUTH DAKOTA HOUSE – NIGHT

Her stepfather molests sassy thirteen-year-old Madison Hansen.

INT. JAY’S HOUSE – NIGHT

Jay walks into an empty house. Jay and Lacy have been married for three years, but she’s never home. She claims to be pulling all-nighters for her law school classes.

INT. CHINOOK BISTRO – DAY

Denver Police Detective Swaboda and Quinn talk with the hostess about the sketch.

EXT. SMALL TOWN SOUTH DAKOTA HOUSE – DAY

Madison runs away from home. She hitchhikes to Sioux Falls.

INT. SIOUX FALLS BUS TERMINAL – DAY

Madison buys a bus ticket to Denver. $149. She’s shocked to be almost broke.

INT. HIGHLAND TAVERN – NIGHT

At the bar, a big well-dressed guy, the Rolex Creep, buys Erin Raynor (25ish) a green appletini. Jay sees him slip white powder into Erin’s drink. Jay debates whether to help or not. Drugged, Erin falls off her bar stool. But, Jay won’t let the Rolex Creep carry Erin out. The bartender calls the police. The Rolex Creep threatens to kill Jay.

LATER

Detective Swaboda and Quinn flash their gold shields and question Jay. Quinn shows Jay the police sketch of him. He can’t explain it. Quinn brings Jay in for questioning.

INT. POLICE LINEUP ROOM – NIGHT

Jay walks out in a lineup. The Chinook Hostess and Waitress identify Jay. Detective Swaboda, Quinn, and other officers confer. Not enough evidence. They release Jay.

INT. DENVER BUS TERMINAL – DAY

Jay stalks the terminal. He finds Madison there all alone. “Waiting for someone?” “No.” “I’m Jay. You look hungry. Let me buy you lunch.” After lunch, Jay phones the Mrs. for permission, then offers Madison a place to stay. She accepts and leaves with Jay.

INT. HIDEOUT HOUSE – DAY

‘Bus Terminal Jay’ turns out to be Finn, Jay’s doppelganger, a sex trafficker. Finn takes Madison to their hideout, ties her to a bed and cuts her clothes off.

Blake and the Rolex Creep congratulate Finn and tell him to keep using Jay’s name.

INT. HIGHLAND TAVERN – NIGHT

Erin thanks Jay and asks him to walk her home. The bartender tells Erin that Jay, “saved your butt last night.” She seems in disbelief.

EXT. ERIN’S HOUSE – NIGHT

Jay walks Erin home, sees the Rolex Creep drive by, and shoves her into her house to protect her. But, Erin was wearing a police wire to entrap Jay. Quinn arrests Jay.

INT. DENVER POLICE STATION – NIGHT

Jay learns Holly’s been abducted and wants to help rescue her. Quinn learns Jay is Holly’s older half-brother, not her abductor. Quinn releases Jay. Jay & Erin review mugshots to catch the traffickers. Jay IDs Blake’s mugshot.

INT. JAY’S HOUSE – NIGHT

Lacy moved out without talking to Jay. Jay’s dumbfounded and miserable.

INT. DENVER POLICE STATION – DAY

Police arrest Blake. They’re sure they can learn Holly’s whereabouts from Blake. But Blake gets released on bail.

EXT. CHEESMAN PARK – DAY

Police find Blake dead in a gully.

INT. DENVER POLICE STATION – NIGHT

Jay and Erin bond as they review more mugshots.

INT. JAY’S HOUSE – DAY

Lacy wants to move back in, but Jay confronts her. Lacy forged Jay’s signature to get her law school paid for by Jay and Holly’s rich dad. Lacy swears she isn’t cheating on Jay with another man. Jay doesn’t believe her. Lacy storms out. They’re done.

INT. JAY’S BOSS’S OFFICE – DAY

Because of the police sketch, Jay needs Detective Quinn to vouch for him. His boss calls the police. There is no Detective Quinn on the Denver PD. Jay gets fired.

INT. DENVER POLICE STATION – DAY

An angry Jay confronts Quinn. But, Quinn isn’t a police officer. She’s a Special Agent for the FBI leading a joint ‘Missing Girls’ task force with the Denver Police Department.

The FBI have eBay-like pages for Holly and Erin. The eBay pages sit on the dark web run by a sophisticated sex trafficking gang. Holly’s one of several girls abducted by the gang. They auction abducted girls to the highest bidder.

Jay learns the Rolex Creep, Blake and Finn belong to the gang.

The FBI hack the traffickers’ messages. The traffickers desperately want Erin because she’s an attractive ‘Spinner’ that speaks fluent Mandarin. The traffickers sell several girls to a Truck Brothel in Iowa. Two of the sold girls fit the descriptions of Holly and Madison. Quinn is sure they can rescue Holly in Iowa.

EXT. WORLD’S LARGEST TRUCKSTOP – DAY

Erin and Jay go with Quinn to help ID traffickers. Jay overhears truckers and follows them to a semi. The FBI follows Jay and rescues the girls. But, Holly wasn’t among the rescued girls. She’s still missing. Dark web auction bids for Holly and Erin skyrocket.

INT. FBI VAN – DAY

Madison won’t talk to the police for fear of them. But she will talk to Jay. She tells Jay that Holly and all the other eBay girls have been shipped west. Madison identifies the Rolex Creep as the Big O – Orlando Skoda. Jay and Erin leave to eat lunch.

EXT. WORLD’S LARGEST TRUCKSTOP – DAY

A truck brothel thug chases after Jay and Erin. The thug captures Jay and will kill him. But, Agent Quinn arrives just in time to shoot the thug and save Jay.

INT. FBI OFFICE – DAY

FBI agents verify Holly’s being shipped to China.

Via Facebook, Erin gets offered and accepts a modeling job in Mexico. Erin agrees to sneak off to Mexico with Jay without telling the FBI. But the FBI hack a message. The modeling job is fake. Erin agrees to be wired and tracked by the FBI in LA as bait to catch the traffickers, blindsiding Jay. But, Erin insists Jay must go with Quinn to LA.

EXT. LOS ANGELES AIRPORT – DAY

Traffickers pick Erin up in a limo. They lock her in the back, which is shielded to prevent her from calling for help or being tracked. They drive into the limo garage eluding the FBI cars, then smuggle Erin to a boat bound for China.

EXT. LOS ANGELES MARINA – DAY

Traffickers order Erin leave the limo without any possessions wearing only a bikini. But, Erin hides her phone in her bikini bottom, which the FBI quickly tracks to the Marina.

LATER

Jay charges to the boat, but is caught by Finn and Orlando. Agent Quinn arrives in time to kill the two traffickers, saving Jay and rescuing Erin and the other abducted women. But Holly isn’t there.

INT. FBI OFFICE – DAY

The FBI learns Holly’s already been smuggled to China. Using his and Holly’s rich father’s money, Jay wins the bid to buy Holly back from the traffickers.

EXT. Dongguan PARK – DAY

Traffickers bait and switch delivery of Holly with some other lookalike abducted girl.

INT. BEIJING BROTHEL – DAY

The traffickers sell and smuggle Holly into the brothel.

Jay learns Holly’s location from the FBI. He goes to the brothel as a John and verifies it’s Holly at the brothel.

LATER

Jay and a Security Guy from Holly’s dad’s company go to the brothel. They pay to be with Holly and are escorted to her room. Afterwards, Jay and the Security Guy walk out of the brothel. Except it’s Holly disguised as the Security Guy. The Chinese discover the deception and chase after them. Jay and Holly barely escape.

INT. BEIJING AIRPORT – DAY

Holly hopes to fly home with Jay. But, an alarm goes off when they scan Holly’s passport. Chinese police arrest Jay for trafficking Holly.

LATER

With the FBI’s help, the Chinese release Jay. He flies to vacation in Hawaii with Erin.

THE END