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Terrell’s Profound Map Version 1
What I learned doing this assignment is how to bring everything together for a tight profound outline of my screenplay.
Logline: When a soft-hearted fighter from a third world slum catches the attention of a rich CEO she must uncover a genocidal conspiracy before his corporation destroys her orphanage and her city.
Profound truth: It is better to be of a lowly spirit with the poor than to divide the spoil with the proud.
Being humble among the meek/poor/week is better than being with those who oppress them2.What is the Transformational Journey?
Old Ways: Elitist, privileged, exploitative, self importance, selfish, proud, abusive,
not understanding what love actually is, segregated thinking, caste system, abuse of powerJourney: infatuated with a winning fighter from slums, spend time with her and her people
misunderstand the affection shown him, as he comes to understand love, tries to stop evil corporate plan, discovers real love, corrects way of the pastNew Ways: integrated thinking, compassion, the people come first, invest in the poorer population, equality, fairness
Transformational Logline: An abusive corporate rich kid falls for a fighter from the slums, learns what love really is and corrects his behavior and his corporation’s accordingly
3. Who are Your Lead Characters?
• Change Agent: Cyndi, Lower Seattle population
• Transformable Character: John and Jocelyn
• Oppression: the corporation, the elites personified in Evie4. How Do You Connect With Your Audience in the Beginning of the Movie?
A. Relatability: Cyndi is a popular underdog fighter, the entire lower class and some of upper class including John support her
B. Intrigue: Cyndi saves the life of her opponent even though the fight is to the death.
C. Empathy: The orphaned kids are with Cyndi in her locker room cheering for her, she fight for the kids
D. Likability: Cyndi takes care of an orphanage full of kids
5. What is the Gradient of the Change?
JOHN
EMOTIONAL GRADIENT: Desired Change. John is infatuated with Cyndi and takes it upon himself to try to go meet her.
We watch him go through these stages:
Excitement: Down to lower Seattle to watch underground fight. Ends up spending the evening with Cyndi and her peeps.
Hope: After enjoying himself, Cyndi and population had an effect on him. Makes pleas to the corporate board or/and his step mom to not destroy Lower Seattle
Discouragement: Plea is rejected heartlessly
Courage: Goes against order in front a crowd of elites
Triumph and Loss: City is still flooded, discovers real love
JOCELYN
EMOTIONAL GRADIENT: Forced Change. Jocelyn is aggravated at John’s attention to Cyndi and vice versa. We watch her go through these stages:
Denial: She ignores it on the surface. But she gets angry.
Anger: When she discovers that John spent the night with her, she tries to have her killed (maybe)
Bargaining: At the gala, Jocelyn tries to bargain in her on threatening way, she turns down John (stage) proposal.
Depression: thinking something bad with happen to her she wonders into Lower Seattle on her on where she is shown consideration and learns how lower Seattle citizens really are.
Acceptance: she just needs to show John that she really does love him despite the arranged marriage and party attitude/atmosphere they tend to shareACTION GRADIENT
SETUP
• Down to lower Seattle to watch underground fight. Likes a fighter named Cyndi.
• Meets Cyndi and her peoples, hangs out with them. Spends the evening/night there with Cyndi in this lower city slum area
John offers Cyndi a job as his bodyguard, she says yes. Invites her to New Seattle
JOURNEY
• John’s corporation has a plan to recover the lower land, through genocide.
• But John’s through excursion, his heart has softened in regard to residents and this plan, he tries to stop it, to no avail.
• After touring New Seattle with John they stop by John’s Corporation
• John gets into a fight with his Stepmom and she has Cyndi thrown out of the city.
• A secret hacker group approaches Cyndi about her recent access to John’s corporation. She is asked to spy.
•Cyndi agrees as they devise a plan to get her into a super exclusive gala
PAYOFF
• Cyndi uncovers the planned genocide, but the plan is put into action immediately (this may have to change)
John stands against his stepmom and corporation but loses Cyndi trust.
• it’s a race to save as many people as John and Cyndi can.
• John takes over the corporation with plans to make amends and bridge social economic gaps between both societies• Cindi and John make up
• John and Jocelyn are together nowCHALLENGE/WEAKNESS GRADIENT:
Challenge: struggles to fit in
Weakness: Callous and over self confident
Challenge: John’s audience unsympathetic
Weakness: over confident, shallow or weak argument
Challenge: Battle of wills
Weakness: loses
Challenge: flips script at last moment, tries to gain allies before big event
Weakness: desperation, going against status quo
Challenge: the woman he loves hates him
Challenge: confesses he knew about the plan all along6. What is the Transformational Structure of Your Story?
MiniMovie 1 – Status Quo and Call to Adventure
It’s the year 2222. Some haggard fans are watching combat sports on a platform 600 feet in the air. John Lee, corporate rick kid heads down to watch his favorite fighter “battle princess” Cyndi with his well dressed entourage. After the fight, John want to meet her. He has a bodyguard extend an invitation but Cyndi’s crew blows off the invitation. Not used to no as an answer, John ventures into this Lower Class slum area with his bodyguard to meet Cyndi. The others refuse to goChange Agent: Cyndi
Transformational Characters: John and Jocelyn
Old Ways: elitist, used to being served, catered to
The Vision: in a fight to the death, Cyndi lets her opponent win
Challenge: Meeting Cyndi
Weaknesses: segregation, separate society/classesMiniMovie 2 – Locked Into Conflict
John and his bodyguard are jumped by unknown assailants, Cyndi and her friend come to his rescue reluctantly they let John hang with them at the after party celebration, John get so drunk he spends the night in Old Seattle. He offer Cyndi a job as his new bodyguard. After he offers a huge sum of money and she accepts though not for the reason we think.
Old ways: Entitlement, throw money around
Challenge: seeing below the surfaces, responding to genuine needs, struggle to fit in
Weaknesses: Callous and over self confident, self importanceMiniMovie 3 – Hero Tries to Solve Problem – But Fails.
After spending the night, John heart softens over a plan to wipe out Old Seattle, pleas with his step mom and current CEO to reconsider and not wipe out the residents. But she is adamant and won’t budge.Change Agent: John asks his mother to reconsider the current corporate plan to flood Old Seattle, that’s basically genocide.
Vision: “We can approach this differently. Integrate our 2 societies not necessary to eliminate them to get the land. They could have a lot to offer if we include them.”
OldWays: corporate espionage, taking what we what,
NewWays: Inclusiveness, working together
Challenge: working through Evie’s hidden backstory, changing her mind
Weaknesses: Stubbornness, PrejudiceMiniMovie 4 – Hero Forms a New Plan
John tries to go through his fiance’ father and Evie’s business partner, Nanako Katashi.
John and Jocelyn engagement is based on a merger of their companies Fifth Insight and Psych Tech Mercenary Corps., a private military firm.Vision: John talk to Katashi about his idea so save the citizens and merge the two societies.
Old Ways: Evie wants to use Psych Tech Troop to execute her plan for the purge of Old Seattle citizenry.
New Ways: Katashi wants to agree and not see his troops use as mercenary against ordinary citizens but Evie is calling the shots. Katashi tells John he just want Jocelyn to be loved and taken care of, if John can propose publicly during the gala, and officially announce their engagement, John would become Sa-jang (president) of the military arm and Katashi could refer control to him.MIDPOINT:
Everything is coming to critical mass at the gala. Cyndi infiltrates, Evie plans to announce and move up her plan, Jocelyn is feel a type of way about John and may not say yes,Old Ways: secret elite gathering, plotting against the meek
Challenge: Cyndi learns about the plan against Old Seattle, Jocelyn does like all the attention John has been giving Cyndi and may say no to his proposal, Evie move up her time table for Old Seattle destruction with a simulated video of the destruction. John in his chasing after Cyndi forgets to propose leaving Jocelyn crushed and Katashi dismayed.
Weaknesses:
Ignored Jocelyn, pissed off Cyndi cause he knew these things were happening, underestimated Evie, hurt Katashi’s feelingsMiniMovie 5 – Hero Retreats & The Antagonism Prevails
As Evie executes her plan asap, (a plan months away, is now days away) John tries to patch things up with Jocelyn and Cyndi, plan how to rescues Citizens before the damn is sabotaged and Old Seattle flooded.Vision: must save Old Seattle, fix things with Jocelyn and Cyndi,
Old Ways: elites cheer Evie’s announcement
New Ways: John publicly betrays the ways of Evie, the Corporation, must protect Old Seattle.
Challenge: Cyndi runs out to tell the news, John chases her, a distraught Jocelyn wanders into Old Seattle alone under the hope that something bad will happen to her, Evie is on the warpath.MiniMovie 6 – Hero’s Bigger, Better Plan!
Citizens of Old Seattle brace for the disaster to come. John plans to evacuate Citizens to the battle needle and tunnel just need to hack automatic defense systems, plans to charge Evie and the board with crimes against humanity in an international tribunalOld Ways:
Evie will flood Old Seattle from 2 sources, John dodges that he was willing to go along with his corporation plan at first (doesn’t take responsibility, throws Evie under the bus). Evie partners with another mercenary team to sabotage the water ways, since Katashi is slow to act.
New Way:John convinces Cyndi he was fighting Evie’s plan. John and Jocelyn finally understand each other.
Challenge:evie is above the law but a tribunal will bring her crime to light. Can they hack the defensive mechanisms in time,
Weaknesses:Throwing Evie under the bus, Cyndi points out John benefited from an oppressive system til now, John insists he can’t change the past but he can try to change the futureMiniMovie 7 – Crisis & Climax
The flood come from two sources a river and Puget Sound. As Old Seattle goes under water, troops push them back to the battle needle, as they deny them access to New Seattle. One of Cyndi’s kids get caught in the flood, John manages to recuse her.New Ways: John and Cyndi and even Jocelyn work together to get people to safety
Vision: Old Seattle can be saved, hackers hack multiple New Seattle sources with a video feed Cyndi secretly obtained during the gala, the are able to sway New Seattle support to their side
Challenge: the children are in danger
Weaknesses:
Uncertainty. Guilt.Mini-Movie 8 – New Status Quo
John testifies to the tribunal, promises to dismantle the old system build kids a new home and learning center, drafts new mission statements for the company.Old Ways: Evie escapes will build her empire again (for a potential sequel)
New Way: Though work remains, Old Seattle is saved and the citizens of both societies on their way to new ways of being.
Profound Truth: It is better to be of a lowly spirit with the poor than to divide the spoil with the proud.7. How are the “Old Ways” Challenged?
A. Challenge through Questioning:
New Seattle is an elite cyber city build over the earthquake ruins of Old Seattle. New Seattle can no longer expand upward without reclaiming more land on the actual ground. Fifth Insight Corp. who built and runs the city plans to wipe the population out and take the land.
After hanging out with Cyndi and her friends John questions whether they really have to kill the citizens of lower Seattle, and if they could integrate old and new Seattle.B. Challenge by Counterexample:
John is surprised to see a resident DJ of New Seattle performing in an Old Seattle club. John chats with her about why she performs in the Old Seattle, her answer gives him food for thought.C. Challenge by “Should Work, But Doesn’t”:
John tries to order one of his expensive drinks in an Old Seattle club but the club doesn’t have the ingredients to make drinks like that he tries to flex his entitlement but to no avail
Cyndi says “he’ll have a beer.”D. Challenge through Living Metaphor
John tries to flex with his money but it’s not accepted, he is treated like family. “my family doesn’t treat anyone like this”
Whispers to Cyndi “aren’t these people poor.”
Cyndi says they just want to show you some love, it’s the culture down here
John is confused
Cyndi explains their world isn’t about money, ‘cause they don’t have any. It’s about what they do have. Love.
Takes John a long while to get it, but it’ll sink in eventually, then he will act on love, himself8. How are You Presenting Insights through Profound Moments?
A. Action delivers insight
Action: During a disaster John doesn’t hesitate to dive into dangerous floodwaters to save a child from Lower City.
Insight: John must really cares for the children nowAction: Cyndi must pass for high society on her secret mission but can’t walk in stilettos. She complains that she can’t fight or run in them. She is told is an elite gala she will infiltrate, not a fight or a track meet. Complains she cant even walk in them. She has to practice walking in them (training montage)
Insight/intrique: Cyndi is definitely not high society or a spy, can she really do this mission?B. Conflict delivers insight
Conflict: when Cyndi ,mentions she has a lot of kid John looks sick
Insight: He hates children (actually he has pedophoba)
Conflict: Jocelyn looks shocked when John asks her if she thought about having kids
Insight: He’s warming up to the idea of having kids loves.C. Irony delivers insight
Irony: after calling Old Seattle a shit hole, Jocelyn why John never brought her for a date there for date
Insight: Jocelyn is warming up to Old Seattle and/or she want John to take her on more dates even if it’s to a shit hole. They are arranged to be married, so John has put zero effort in courting her, despite them already being intimate in the past
Irony: John teases Jocelyn about saying she wants to “keeping her vag nice and tight” she’s insulted by his joke when John asks about her actually birthing children but hits back “I’d have to for your sake”
Insight: Jocelyn #1 loves John, she #2 would like to have children the old fashioned way” with John or she’s at least thought about it.9. What are the Most Profound Lines of the Movie?
Really uncomfortable with trying to identify this on the page. I don’t think I’ve written them yet.
Maybe 1, when Cyndi defines true or real love, “when you can respond to a person’s genuine need and not expect anything in return, you truly love that person.
10. How Do You Leave Us With A Profound Ending?
A. Express the Profound Truth: John turn his back on the exploitative ways of his corporation in front of a room of elites
B. The Change: John takes over the corporation, helps change laws to bring the 2 societies together, builds a learning center for the children
C. Payoffs: John and Jocelyn manage to get engaged or married, Seattle is a stronger city overall, corporate structure is changing or charged, Cyndi is the “battle princess” of one city, Evie is exiled and plotting revenge (for the sequel)
D. Surprising: Jocelyn is pregnant (she refuses alcohol thru the movie)
E. Parting Image/Line: John and Jocelyn play with the kids-
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Andrea Cabañas, Profound Map.
I learned that I now have a much better version of my new draft. Putting all information together helps me to visualise it better where I have to improve, where I have to cup parts of my story. Still, I got stuck in some parts, but it’s something I’ll work on as I start rewriting my script.
1. What is Your Profound Truth?
Don’t let religion stop you from being who you are.
2. What is the Transformational Journey?
Old Ways: prejudiced, ashamed, struggling with religious beliefs, fear of taking risks and telling the truth, insecure, spendthrift.
Journey: Zoe battles with her prejudices, and it’s hard for her to accept that she’s bisexual. When she knows her lover is a drug dealer, she holds back and thinks this is all a mistake. However, when she sees the church priest with a man, her religious beliefs are put into checkmate, giving her the strength to free herself and love whoever she wants regardless of gender.
New Ways: unprejudiced, proactive, accepting who she is, has more control over her finance, confident, and breaks the religious barrier that prevented her from being who she is. She proves to her mother that she’s worthy.
<div>Transformational Logline: A creative but insecure adult woman who lives with her controlling mother still needs to fight her religious prejudices to gain the freedom to be who she is.
3. Who are Your Lead Characters?
Change Agent (the one causing the change): Georgia, the priest
Transformable Character(s) (the one who makes the change): Zoe
Betraying Character (if you have one): Katrina?
Oppression: Religion4. How Do You Connect With Your Audience at the Beginning of the Movie?
A. Relatability – They Are Us! Welcome She’s a creative woman who loves what she does. Start realising that she needs to set down and save money if she wants to buy an apartment. Zoe wants her mother’s embrace, but she doesn’t have it. She’s in love with a man who doesn’t love her and suffers.
B. Intrigue Why does she go to a gay pub on her own? Why Katrina is so bitter with Zoe? Why is their relationship that way? What happened on July 1st? How did her uncle die? Who’s the man she sees in the pub with another man? Why she’s afraid of coming out? Why does the police is after Paula? Why Juan wants revenge?
C. Empathy She misses her uncle and wishes he was there to guide her. Zoe feels happy when her mother praises something she does. Zoe cries seeing a video of a calf being rescued by an animal rescue group.
D. Likability She confides her feelings with Georgia. She defends Georgia when someone bullies her friend. She ‘helps’ a butterfly to fly free.5.
What is the Gradient of the Change?The “Forced Change” Emotional Gradient
Denial: Zoe doesn’t accept her sexuality because she believes this is wrong.
Anger: her mother doesn’t leave her alone and pushes her to believe it’s wrong to be bisexual or homosexual. Zoe doesn’t like the way Katrina makes rude comments toward gays or when a man bullies Georgia in front of her.
Bargaining: she wants to know who’s Paula and why did she come into her life. She puts herself in line when Juan takes Katrina.
Depression: Zoe has sex with Juan (or someone else) when she sees Paula with another woman.
Acceptance: Zoe flirts with another woman/pays for a drink OR goes to the Mardi grass Parade.
Gradient 2. The Action Gradient
Setup:
Zoe has a casual relationship with a man but is confused about her feelings toward Paula. She doesn’t accept it because ‘it’s wrong’; she still has religious preconceptions—a barrier to accepting her sexuality.
Katrina suspects Zoe is lesbian and hires a private detective to follow her. But Zoe denies it.
Zoe works in a decor store—it’s hard to find a job. She pays back the money Paula lent her to create her website. A first client appears.
Zoe meets up with friends but ends the night in a gay pub hidden from everyone.
Through an investigation, Zoe learns from the federal police that Paula has connections to a drug dealer. She’s put in the spotlight and tells her mother she’s bisexual. Zoe’s kicked out of the house. Nothing she does is worth it.Journey:
She hides what happened to Paula from her friends, but not Georgia, who tries to convince her that being bisexual is okay.
Katrina doesn’t accept Zoe’s work choices as a freelancer interior designer. Still, Zoe tries to show her mother that she’s good at what she does, looking for recognition.
Nina tells Zoe desperately that she fell pregnant and needs help because she doesn’t want the baby. Zoe is caught between supporting her friend and denying help because of religious thoughts.
When she’s temporary with Georgia, helping to organise her exhibition, Katrina has a breakdown, and Zoe comes back to her mother.
Zoe tries to date other men (or James), but she senses her feelings for Paula are stronger.Payoff
Zoe sees the priest with a man. Zoe makes sure he sees her and questions him about God’s love/or condemnation for sinning. The priest goes to Katrina’s house and secretly tells her and Zoe that he’s leaving the church.
Zoe has a meeting with important people, and she’s hired (?)
Katrina recognises her daughter’s work and apologies for her absence. They embrace.
Zoe’s free to be with Paula, but Paula is caught by the police and is deported.
After Georgia’s exhibition, a man flirts with Zoe, and she proudly says she has a girlfriend.Gradient 3. The Challenge / Weakness Gradient
Denial: Zoe’s mother hires a private detective. Even with pictures showing her with Paula, she rages and denies it.
Challenge: to get over it and accept she also likes women.
Weakness: her prejudice doesn’t allow her to be happy.
Anger: James disappears as usual; Zoe’s feelings for Paula intensify. Zoe’s rude to a woman who flirts with her.
Challenge: Zoe struggles with her feelings/beliefs.
Weakness: indecisive, naive. Unable to decide by herself.
Bargaining: Zoe leaves temporarily with Georgia, and gets busier with work. Her mother has a breakdown, and she’s back to live with her.
Challenge: How to leave peacefully with her mother. She’s close to getting a deposit to buy her new flat.
Weakness: Submissive. Zoe still doesn’t want to upset her mother.
Challenge: to present a project
Weakness: unsure if she can make it
Acceptance: During a kidnap attempt, Zoe kisses Paula after being shot in front of her distressed mother. Paula is deported. During Georgia’s gallery opening night, Zoe meets a new woman.
Challenge: Zoe must live independently, without her mother’s shadow, and be free to be herself.
Weakness: She still loves James.
6. What is the Transformational Structure of Your Story?
Mini-Movie 1 Status Quo and Call to Adventure
Zoe dreams she makes love to a woman while her mother watches. She wakes up with James by her side. She loves James—or thinks she loves—but bachelor James doesn’t want to have a more serious relationship with her. Casual sex is fine for him.
She’s an interior designer and has a job at a decor store. Paula lent her money to create her website, starting her freelance career as a freelancer. Paula is lesbian; Zoe fell for her but is still resistant to accepting it. She struggles with her prejudice, realising that she may be bisexual.
Georgia is the only one who knows about Paula and Zoe’s feelings toward James. Zoe hides her relationship with Paula from her other two girlfriends, Nina and Claire. When they all meet in a nightclub and Paula arrives, Zoe gives an excuse and leaves.
Her controlling mother, Katrina, is suspicious of Zoe’s relationship with a woman, confirmed when she received photos from a private detective she hired.
Katrina shows it to Zoe, who denies it. They argue badly, and Zoe trips over Katrina’s cat food bowl and hurts herself (she hates her mother’s cat).
When Zoe leaves home, someone takes pictures of her.
Zoe goes to the cemetery where her uncle is buried. She talks to him, wishing he was there to give her strength. It shows he was born on the First of July 19XX.
Call to adventure – inciting incident
Mini-Movie 2 Locked Into Conflict
Zoe goes to a gay pub, and Paula is there (the nightclub is hers?). Zoe tries to end up this relationship; she tells Paula she likes men. Paula says Zoe needs to follow her feelings. They make love.
Zoe arrives home, and the church priest is there; her mother calls him to talk to her, but Zoe argues with Katrina, gives an excuse and leaves for work.
Zoe asks for Georgia’s help as working from home is difficult—her mother doesn’t leave her alone. Georgia questions Zoe why she doesn’t tell the truth to her mother. Zoe says she doesn’t want to let her mother down, and for now, she will keep things as they are.
Zoe’s boss discovers that Zoe made a landscape for one of their clients and doesn’t like it. She asks for a percentage of the job (in a conversation with the client, Zoe tells her she also does landscaping, which is why the client contracted her instead of the business owner). If Zoe wants to keep her job, she can’t do this anymore. She’s fired (?).
Georgia tells Zoe to contact the client and ask for a Google Review when the client makes a new proposal to her. Zoe has a meeting with a new client and gets excited about her new project.
Nina calls Zoe desperate, and they meet. She tells Zoe she’s pregnant but doesn’t want to go ahead with the pregnancy. Zoe struggles with helping her friend because she’s against abortion.
Zoe spends the weekend with Paula in her house in the hills. Someone hidden takes some pictures of the two.
Katrina calls, telling her that the cat is sick and needs to go to the vet. She needs help and cries like a baby over the phone. Zoe returns against her will.
Turning Point: Locked in.
Mini-Movie 3 — Hero Tries to Solve Problem But Fails.
Zoe arrives, and Katrina’s depressed. The cat had to be put down. Zoe notices her mother’s vulnerability and feels sorry for her. She holds her, and Katrina cries, embracing Zoe, who returns. Katrina apologises for being the mother she is and promises she will be a better one.
Zoe meets with a new client; it seems he’s a well-known actor or filmmaker. A bit of mystery in there, but it’s a big project which puts Zoe’s confidence in question. She’s not sure if she’s the right one for this project.
James calls Zoe, and they meet. They go to a concert and have dinner. When they’re about to leave the restaurant, they meet Paula, who approaches a bit angry and jealous. Zoe doesn’t know what to do. They have a bit of an argument; James doesn’t understand much and is rude to Paula, asking her to leave. An awkward moment and Zoe leaves with James.
Turning Point: Standard ways fail.
Mini-Movie 4 Hero Forms a Plan
Paula questions Zoe about her feelings for her. It’s now or never; she can’t have her and James simultaneously. It’s too convenient for her. Paula tells Zoe she loves her, who cries, not knowing what to do. They kiss.
The federal police come to Zoe’s house. They’re after a drug dealer who has connections to Paula. Zoe’s in the spotlight as the police force her to say she’s Paula’s girlfriend in front of Katrina.
Katrina kicks Zoe out of the house. Zoe begs her not to do this—she reminisces what happened to her uncle.
Katrina demands that Zoe break up with Paula to live in the house, return to the church to be cured, and live a normal life. But Zoe leaves and goes temporarily with Georgia.
Turning Point: Plan backfires.
Mini-Movie 5 Hero Retreats & Antagonist Wins
Zoe looks for answers and learns more about Paula’s obscure past, but Paula denies she’s in the drug trafficking game. Zoe doesn’t believe it and thinks it’s better to break up and forget about everything.
Georgia believes Paula is telling the truth and tells Zoe she’s been ridiculous.
The date arrives, and Zoe takes Nina to the abortion clinic. When they leave, Zoe hides from someone she knows is her mother’s friend. Nina notices it and thanks her friend for being supportive, even going against her will. Zoe spends the night at Nina’s house. Zoe rethinks her religious beliefs and sexuality. Something is changing.
Juan appears to Paula and blackmails her. She threatens him to stay away from Zoe and not to mess with her.
The feds are back, and Katrina helps them to catch Paula; unknowingly, she’s putting Zoe in danger.
Turning Point: The decision to change.
Mini-Movie 6 Hero’s Bigger, Better Plan!
Juan reaches Zoe pretending to be a client. He’s charming and flirts with her in the meeting. Zoe is excited about this new project.
Someone takes pictures of them.
Paula suddenly appears, an awkward moment between them. Zoe introduces Juan to Paula, who pretends to be polite as Juan. Juan makes sure Paula understands he’s not kidding; Paula is concerned.
Zoe and Paula argue; she tells Paula to forget about her, arguing about religion, how Katrina controls Zoe, etc. In the end, they kiss. Her feelings for Paula are stronger.
Zoe goes to the cemetery, where she meets Georgia. It’s the First of July, her uncle’s ‘birthday celebration’, a habit kept by Georgia that Zoe wasn’t aware of. Georgia puts some flowers on his grave, and they talk about him.
Zoe returns home to pick up something important to keep working from Georgia’s house when Katrina has a breakdown. She begs Zoe to return home. Zoe feels sorry for Katrina and decides to stay.
On an ordinary day, Zoe returns from a client meeting, and she spots the priest in a car with a man. She sees them kissing. She follows them, and the priest sees her. She asks questions about God’s thoughts about homosexuals. A big revelation to Zoe.
The priest goes to their home after a few days and says he’s leaving the church. He doesn’t say to Katrina what’s the real reason but for Zoe. He tells her that God loves us all the way we are, and he had enough of living hidden. Still, not everyone needs to know his reasons.
Feeling relieved, she goes to the nightclub and looks for Paula. She’s ready to say she loves her, but when they meet, Paula is with another woman. In anger, Zoe leaves.
On her way home (or leaving the nightclub), Zoe meets Juan ‘unexpectedly’. She vents her feelings, and he charmingly flirts. They spend the night together in his house.
Turning Point: The ultimate failure.
Mini-Movie 7 Crisis & Climax
Zoe wakes up and gets ready to leave when she hears Paula’s voice. Both are surprised to see each other at Juan’s house. Zoe questions Paula about what she’s doing in there, and Paula warns Juan again. Zoe realises what’s happening (a dangerous situation) and tries to leave, but one of Juan’s men stops her.
To think better about this, create a feasible tension for Zoe to realise how dangerous Juan can be. Paula may tell Zoe somehow for her to leave, to hide, go somewhere safe. She has something to do and doesn’t want Zoe to be hurt. But something goes wrong.
Zoe arrives home, and someone breaks into their house, taking her mother hostage. Zoe realises the danger and tells the man to take her instead.
The federal police come out of nowhere; Paula is shot, and Zoe rushes to hold her. The police take Juan and his men as prisoners. Katrina sees Zoe’s desperation about Paula and embraces her while the ambulance takes Paula away.
Paula is deported to Spain upon recovering from a gunshot wound.
Turning Point: Apparent victory.
Mini-Movie 8 New Status Quo
Zoe and Katrina reconcile, even though Katrina doesn’t accept her daughter’s sexual choice. Katrina loves her but won’t repeat the same mistake made with her uncle, who committed suicide.
Zoe moves to her new flat. James contacts her, but Zoe ignores him, saying she’s busy for the first time.
Zoe hands over the decoration project to the celebrity/filmmaker, and she receives another job proposal.
Three months later, Zoe receives a surprising gift from Paula. Georgia’s exhibition blooms, and Zoe tells her what’s the news.
Zoe flies to Barcelona (or Fiji), where she meets Paula (still working on it).
7. How are the “Old Ways” Challenged?
What beliefs are challenged that cause a main character to shift their perspective…and make the change?
A. Challenge through Questioning
Georgia senses that Zoe is confused about having feelings with Paula because of religion and teases her about how she feels about other ‘sins’ she commits.
GEORGIA
Hun, are you talking about religion? Fuck that.
Do you really believe that this is not okay? Let
me ask you something. Do you feel guilty
when you masturbate?
ZOE
Whoah!
GEORGIA
Don’t whoah me. It’s the same bloody
thing!
B. Challenge by Counterexample
Zoe’s late uncle. She blames herself for taking so long to contact her uncle.
Georgia, a confident trans woman, is happy with her decision and doesn’t care what people think of her. Zoe wonders when she will have the courage to free herself.
Katrina refers to Georgia as he/him.
C. Challenge by “Should Work, But Doesn’t”
Zoe goes out for dinner with James, but it doesn’t end as she wants. She can’t stop thinking about Paula.
D. Challenge through Living Metaphor
When Zoe safes a butterfly means she needs to do this with herself.
How are You Presenting Insights through Profound Moments?
A. Action delivers insight
Zoe sees Paula with another woman and sleeps with Juan – she’s jealous.
Whenever Katrina caresses Zoe or embraces her, even if for a short time, it’s noticeable that Zoe enjoys it: it shows she longs for her mother’s love.
Zoe praises her mother’s artwork, and both discuss minor adjustments: it shows Katrina starting to have confidence in herself. Their relationship improves.
B. Conflict delivers insight
Zoe takes Nina to the abortion clinic – going against her religious beliefs to support her friend.
When Zoe notices her mother is in danger, she’s the first to step up to save her life/defend her.
C. Irony delivers insight
Zoe sees the priest with a man – is what she feels for Paula really a sin?
Despite being a merciless assassin, Juan makes the cross sign whenever he kills the enemy – he’s religious.
Georgias gets punched once by a man who always bullies her. When he’s with another group of friends, he Teases Georgia, and they get into a fight. Georgia’s testosterone comes up, and she fights the man—but without losing her poise.
Insight: a Brazilian proverb: “Never poke a jaguar with a short stick”.
What are the Most Profound Lines of the Movie?
Pattern A: Height of the Emotion
Pattern B: Build Meaning Over Multiple ScenesKatrina comes to the Bible in her hands and gives it to Zoe to swear on it that she’s not a lesbian. Zoe hesitates, almost doing it but slaps the bible and tells Katrina to go to hell.
How Do You Leave Us With A Profound Ending?
A. Deliver The Profound Truth ProfoundlyZoe and Katrina are safe, and both embrace. Katrina tells Zoe she loves the way she is and apologies for everything she’s done for her.
B. Lead Characters Ending Represents The Change
C. Payoff Key Setups
D. Surprising, But InevitableWhen Zoe gets her big contract and someone connected to her client asks her for a date, although she’s tempted to accept, she tells him, ‘I think my girlfriend won’t like this.’
E. Leave Us with a Profound Parting Image/LineWhen Paula tells Zoe she loves her, Paula says, ‘Now it’s the time when you do the blank face and don’t say anything.’ Same line Zoe told James, but how on earth Paula says the same thing?
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Witten by E. Rebeiro.
Name of Story: The actress.
The setup:
Vinod and Devi are co-actors and have a close relationship that leads to sexual initimacy.
Devi is highly motivated to maintain her popularity as an actress. She is a Diva.
Pregnancy is unexpected and places Devi in a bind. She must choose between motherhood and her career as an actress.
Scene
During a break in shooting, Devi and Vinod vacation in Bali.They share moments of intimacy.
Weeks later:
FADE IN
A MAID RUBS DEVI’S BACK AS SHE RETCHES INTO A SINK.
A concerned look on Devi’s face.
CUT TO
A SIGN READS “WOMAN’S CLINIC”
A lady doctor walks into the exam room.
A radiology assistant performs an ultrasound on Devi’s lower
abdomen.
The doctor views the sonogram .
Devi’s concern shows on her face.
DOCTOR
The pregnancy test is positive and
your HCG counts are appropriate…
DOCTOR (CONT’D)
16.
But, it is too early to see
anything on ultrasound…
We can re-scan in another four
weeks…
Devi’s eyes are moist.She maintains a brave front.
DEVI
My options doctor?…
DOCTOR
If you want to discuss, my nurse
will make an appointment…
CUT TO
INT.DEVI’S MANSON – EVENING
NANDI, the maid brings Devi a glass of juice.
Devi wipes away tears.
NANDI
Mam, anything I can do for you?
Devi shakes her head.
Nandi is concerned.
Devi is lost in her thoughts.
NANDI (CONT’D)
Madam should I call…sir.
Devi rejects the idea.Shakes Her head.
She looks into empty space.
INT. SAGAR STUDIOS – DAY
An attendant enters.
Sagar looks up.
ATTENDANT
Sir Devi’s assistant called…She
cannot attend the shoot today..
ATTENDANT (CONT’D)
She had to see her doctor.
17.
SAGAR
What about Vinod?
ATTENDANT
He went to the hospital.
Sagar, confused and concerned.
Which hospital?
ATTENDANT (CONT’D)
Sir, no details.
CUT TO
HOSPITAL RECOVERY ROOM:
Devi is barely awake.
Nurse by her side checks her vital signs.
A monitor shows her heart rhythm.
There is a nasal cannula for oxygen.
An IV bag hangs on a pole. The tubing is connected to her
arm.
OUTSIDE:
Vinod talks to a nurse.
NURSE
She is stable, but we cannot tell
you anything more.
That is patient privacy.
VINOD
Please tell her that I am here.
The nurse nods.
INT.DEVI’S MANSON – DAY
Devi and Vinod are in her lounge.
VINOD
They would not tell me anything.
Devi considers.
18.
DEVI
We are not related …By blood or
marriage…
Vinod frustrated:
VINOD
What about love…
DEVI
You mean, momentary passion…
VINOD
There was a baby involved.
DEVI
Too early to call it a baby…
VINOD
You didn’t give it a chance…
Devi gets angry.
You’re a man…You think like a
man…What would you know?
She wipes a tear.
Vinod attempts to comfort her, tries to hold her.
She walks out of the embrace.
DEVI
Don’t…Not now!
Devi (To herself)
Sagar will have to do without me…
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E Rebeiro
The Actress
Analysis of the scene:
Devi as a top actress has ben approached by a businessman, connected to the underground in washing dirty money , through investments in Casinos and movies, to join their organization as a director of operations.
Devi rejects this offer.But now, her pregnancy places her between the ‘Rock and a Hard place’ The change offers her power. To continue as an actress, ‘fame’.
She feels abandoned by the love of her life Vinod.
This is the breaking point.
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