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Day 23 Assignment
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Don Thompson – QE #5
Logline: It’s 1970, and a prostitute and her pimp are raided by New York City police only to find the pimp arrested and the prostitute unexpectedly set free for reasons that later reveal just how deep corruption, and betrayal, can go.
Essence: the corrupted know no limits.
Inside a dingy New York City apartment in Queens, BRANDY (25) sits on a couch and watches television while smoking a cigarette. In the kitchen, PHILLIP (30) looks at a drawer with a baggy of cocaine. Phillip closes the drawer and SHOUTS to Brandy.
PHILLIP: Do you love me?
Brandy looks his way and squashes her cigarette in an ashtray. Then she gets up and switches the TV channel.
Then she turns to him.
BRANDY: I’ll love you when you make good on the money you owe me.
She returns to the chair and sits. On the TV plays JEOPARDY.
PHILLIP: How can you watch that shit?
BRANDY: How can you not love Jeopardy? It’s so educational. Watch this show for six months and you’ll have a Ph.D.
PHILLIP: Sure thing, doc. I’ll sign up for your first class at NYU!
BRANDY: Don’t put it beyond me. I’m smarter than you think.
Beat.
BRANDY: I’m sorry, come on over and sit with me.
Phillip walks over to the couch and sits. He turns to her.
PHILLIP: Do you need me?
BRANDY: I need you.
PHILLIP: Do you love me?
BRANDY: I love you to the moon.
PHILLIP: Do I deserve it?
BRANDY: Sometimes.
PHILLIP: I deserve the world. You know that. I know that. Anyone that treats you with such respect deserves the world.
BRANDY: I’d be happier if you paid me on time.
Phillip looks down, gets up from the chair, strolls back to the kitchen, turns toward her.
PHILLIP (with a sense of guilt): Ok, I’m sorry about that, honey, really. But I have my reasons for managing your money.
BRANDY: Yeah, because you’re a control freak and an asshole, even if a polite one.
Just then there is a LOUD KNOCK on the door. TWO POLICE OFFICERS (35, 40) stand outside the door to the apartment.
POLICE: Ok, open up! NYPD at your service!
Phillip jumps up and runs to the door.
PHILLIP: Let me handle this.
Phillip goes to the door and opens it. Brandy retreats to the kitchen and lights a cigarette.
PHILLIP: How may I help you, officers?
OFFICER ONE: Let us in.
PHILLIP: Do you have a warrant?
OFFICER TWO: We don’t need a warrant.
The two officers enter the apartment. Brandy looks on.
BRANDY: He’s innocent!
PHILLIP: And so is she!
OFFICER ONE: I’m sure you both are — you’re the picture of innocence!
The two officers move around the apartment and start rummaging.
Phillip now stands in front of the drawer in the kitchen where the cocaine is.
Officer Two approaches him.
OFFICER TWO: Step aside, please.
PHILLIP: You don’t have a warrant.
Officer One steps behind Officer Two. They both look at Phillip in an intimidating way.
OFFICER ONE: You’re a pimp and we’ve been receiving a lot of complaints about you and the girlie from the neighbors.
PHILLIP: Ah… don’t know what the heck you’re talking about. I’m a businessman. I run a reputable business.
OFFICER TWO: Doing what?
PHILLIP: Reputable things.
BRANDY: We do extremely reputable things in this apartment!
OFFICER ONE (to Brandy): Such as?
Officer Two and One turn around and look at Brandy.
BRANDY: Charity work.
OFFICER TWO: Really? What kind of Charity work?
BRANDY: For the poor.
OFFICER ONE: What poor?
Beat.
BRANDY: Well… me, for one!
Beat.
OFFICER ONE: Sit down honey. Keep your mouth shut and you’ll get out of this without any issues.
Brandy sits.
OFFICER TWO: Let me look in that drawer.
PHILLIP: With all due respect, officer, you don’t have a warrant.
Officer One grabs Phillip and shoves him aside. Officer Two opens the drawer. He grabs the bag of cocaine and holds it up.
OFFICER TWO: Wow. Quite a stash!
PHILLIP: I didn’t know that was here, honest! I’m a reputable businessman!
BRANDY: He’s telling the truth!
Officer One turns Phillip around and handcuffs him.
OFFICER ONE: Come on, let’s go.
Officer one walks Phillip out of the apartment.
PHILLIP (to Brandy): I’ll be back in an hour.
BRANDY: Don’t hurt him!
Officer One leads Phillip outside.
Officer two stays behind and turns to Brandy.
OFFICER TWO: You Ok honey?
BRANDY: I’m fine.
OFFICER TWO: You did good.
Officer two reaches into his pocket and grabs an envelope full of cash, handing it to Brandy.
OFFICER TWO: It’s your first step toward independence.
BRANDY: Will I see you later?
OFFICER TWO: Absolutely.
Officer Two puts his hand up to Brandy’s cheek.
OFFICER TWO: You did good.
BRANDY: Sure.
Officer two leaves.
BRANDY: Don’t sell it all at once.
OFFICER TWO: I’m not selling it. The boys love a good high. Makes the night shift easier.
Brandy nods.
Officer Two leaves.
END OF SCENE
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SUBJECT: Monica’s QE Cycle #5 Scene
LOGLINE: In order to clean up the rampant drug trafficking Toronto police send undercover officers in to nightclubs to discover the source.
ESSENCE: Don’t always believe what your eyes tell you.
SCENE:
INT. NOISY TORONTO NIGHTCLUB – NIGHT
BRANDY and PHILLIP are dancing to the Rolling Stones song, I (Can’t Get No) Satisfaction. Brandy, 30s, sexy, gyrates around Phillip, 40s, devilishly handsome, well-dressed, too old to be a stoner, shuffles his feet out of time with the beat.
The dance floor is crowded. The music loud. Until….BANG, BANG, BANG.
VOICE (O.S.)
POLICE! Everyone down.
CUT TO:
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM 1 – NIGHT
Brandy slouches in her chair. Her hands are cuffed to the metal bars embedded in the table. One of her legs jumps up and down. She turns her head to take in the room. She looks straight at the big wall mirror and runs her tongue over her lips. Then winks at the mirror.
Phillip is also cuffed to the table. He leans into the table, eyes also taking in the room.
PHILLIP
Don’t bother. They may or may not be in there.
BRANDY
Why are we here?
PHILLIP
Wrong place at the wrong time sugar.
BRANDY
I’m not your sugar.
PHILLIP
Really?! Your sex moves on the dance floor would suggest otherwise.
The door opens. DETECTIVE SOPHIE MILLER, late-40s, fit, attractive and DETECTIVE PAUL HARRISON, 50s, army fit, distinguished looking, follows Miller in. Miller takes a seat at the table. Harrison stands with his back to the door.
DETECTIVE MILLER
You’ve both been read your rights?
Brandy and Phillip nod yes.
DETECTIVE MILLER
You’re charged with possession of a controlled substance for the purpose of trafficking.
BRANDY
How’d you figure that?
DETECTIVE MILLER
The quantity.
BRANDY
I don’t know what you’re talking about. I didn’t have any controlled substance on me.
Harrison steps away from the door. He withdraws a small baggie full of white powder. The baggie is inside an evidence bag. He plops it on the table.
DETECTIVE HARRISON
You’re saying this isn’t yours?
BRANDY
That’s what I’m saying.
Harrison looks to Phillip.
PHILLIP
Not mine, sir.
Harrison snorts.
DETECTIVE MILLER
I wonder then, how it got inside your purse Ms Betts. Any ideas?
BRANDY
Someone put it there. Does this mean, I’m going to be famous?
DETECTIVE MILLER
Being arrested, convicted and sent to jail doesn’t make you famous. It makes you infamous.
BRANDY
But that’s the same thing, right?
Miller shakes her head.
DETECTIVE MILLER
No. It’s not the same thing.
PHILLIP
Ma’am, I’m sure if she says someone put it in her purse, someone did.
DETECTIVE MILLER
Like you, maybe?
PHILLIP
No, ma’am. Why would I do that? I have no criminal record.
DETECTIVE MILLER
Then why were you at the nightclub notorious for drugs and prostitution?
PHILLIP
To relax. I’ve been much stressed lately.
DETECTIVE MILLER
So you thought to get high, get laid, stress gone?
PHILLIP
No, ma’am.
A knock at the door. Harrison opens it a crack. He has a whispered conversation with the person on the other side. He closes the door holding a piece of paper. Harrison walks over to the table and puts it in front of Miller.
DETECTIVE MILLER
Well isn’t that interesting.
She looks from one to the other. She beckons to someone on the other side of the mirror. Harrison steps to one side of the door. The door opens.
DETECTIVE MILLER
Brandy Betts you’ll go with these fine Toronto police officers to the holding cell.
BRANDY
What do you mean? I’m innocent.
DETECTIVE MILLER
Your fingerprints are all over the baggie. Only your fingerprints. I suggest you call your lawyer. Or your daddy.
The two officer’s un-cuff Brandy from the table. She struggles between them. Then tries to dig her heels into the carpet.
BRANDY
You can’t do this to me. Don’t you know who I am?
DETECTIVE MILLER
Do enlighten us.
BRANDY
The mayor’s daughter.
DETECTIVE HARRISON
I know the mayor personally. He doesn’t have a daughter.
The officer’s pick her up by her arms and escort out of the room. Brandy starts cursing like a sailor all the way down the hall.
Silence. Harrison comes over and un-cuffs Phillip from the table. He rubs his wrists.
PHILLIP
I hate doing that. You can do it next time Sophie.
DETECTIVE MILLER
But you’re her type. Daddy figure with that salt and pepper hair. And you play the rich playboy so well. What would you have done if she wanted to go home with you?
PHILLIP
Made out in the back of the Porsche.
DETECTIVE HARRISON
The police Porsche?!
PHILLIP
(examines his nails)
The same.
DETECTIVE HARRISON
Maybe I’ll take the next undercover.
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LOGLINE: Woman comes to aid of man arrested for stealing the crown from last year’s winner of the Big Hunk Beauty Contest only to be arrested for the crime.
ESSENCE: Cheating to help others only gets you in trouble.
EXT. SUPER VALUE MOTEL – MORNING
BRANDY, in her 60s, with heavy lines on her tanned face, her dried-out blond locks swooped up into a messy ponytail, exits Room 505 to head toward her 1998 Nissan. She climbs inside.
INT. NISSAN
Brandy’s phone beeps.
BRANDY
Who’s calling me this early?
She taps it on.
BRANDY
Yeah. Jail? For what?
She pauses.
BRANDY
He was at my party all night, then we ended up, well, you know. I have to keep past contestants happy.
She pauses.
BRANDY
Okay, I’ll be down there.
INT. PO-DUNK JAIL – DAY
PHILLIP, a handsome man in his 60s, is sitting on a cot in a jail cell, when an OFFICER pushes in another INMATE. Phillip stands up and gestures to the cot.
PHILLIP
Please, have a seat.
INMATE
Ain’t ever had that happen before.
The Inmate sits down.
PHILLIP
(grins)
Don’t worry, I won’t be here that long.
BRANDY (O.S.)
Oh, where is he? He’s not getting beaten up or raped, is he?
Brandy appears and pushes her arms through the cell.
SOUND: Wolf whistle.
Brandy smiles and bows deeply before diverting her attention back to Phillip.
Phillip locks his fingers into Brandy’s. They try smooching through the bars. They separate.
PHILLIP
Did you get the goods?
BRANDY
Oh, yeah, he had tons of mousse and spray tan. You’ll be the best looking contestant on stage…as long as this little arrest doesn’t get publicized.
PHILLIP
I told them I didn’t do it.
BRANDY
You talked to them? You should have waited for your lawyer. No more talking until Shirly arrives.
She looks around at the other inmates and catches the eye of a younger, good-looking man, and winks. He smiles back.
BRANDY
See me in another 10 years and we’ll get you winning Mr. Hunk Beauty Contest. But you got to stay out of jail.
She gives Phillip a meaningful stare.
INT. POLICE STATION – CHIEF’S OFFICE
MARY PIPPENS, in her 40s, types away at the computer, when Brandy opens the door and enters.
MARY PIPPENS
Processing is down the hall.
Brandy sits in a chair and smiles. Mary frowns.
BRANDY
Must be great to be in charge of this whole place.
MARY PIPPENS
You have 30 seconds to tell me why you’re here or I’ll have ten cops all over you.
BRANDY
(excitedly)
Really? All over me?
MARY PIPPENS
Twenty, 19…
BRANDY
I’m Phillip Sander’s manager.
MARY PIPPENS
Manager. Hmm.
BRANDY
He didn’t steal that crown. I know Phillip. He’d never do anything like that.
MARY PIPPENS
Do you know who did steal it?
Brandy looks taken aback.
BRANDY
No. I had a party last night. Brent was at my house. There was no way I’d know that.
MARY PIPPENS
Brent Kohlman was at your place?
BRANDY
Yeah. I had a party, then, well, Brent and I went for a drive. You know. Then, well…
MARY PIPPENS
So you took him for a drive.
BRANDY
He took me for a drive.
MARY PIPPENS
Then what happened?
BRANDY
Well, I don’t expect you need to know the rest.
Brandy winks.
BRANDY
Let’s just say it was a lot of fun.
Mary Pippens stands up.
MARY PIPPENS
You have the right to remain silent…
INT. PRISONER VISITING ROOM – DAY
Brandy, in prison orange, is led inside a room, with a large glass window. On the opposite side is Phillip, looking old and haggard. Brandy and Phillip pick up their respective phones.
BRANDY
Phillip? It’s been years. Did you ever win the Mr. Hunk Beauty Contest?
PHILLIP
I sure did. About time they selected someone from the other side of the tracks. How’s prison life?
BRANDY
They let me do a talent show every month. The inmates love it because it gives them something to do. I love it because of the attention. I still got it in me.
She does a little tap-dance step.
BRANDY
I still don’t know who set me up.
PHILLIP
That’s why I’m here. I’m a total wreck. My life is destroyed.
BRANDY
Why? You must be a celebrity.
PHILLIP
Of course, but the guilt makes me do strange things, say strange things.
BRANDY
Guilt? I told you to stop obsessing over eating a little ice cream here and there.
PHILLIP
I have fitness equipment to deal with that. No, this is worse.
BRANDY
Worse than ice cream?
PHILLIP
I took Brent Kohlman’s crown and knocked him off.
BRANDY
You took Brent’s crown? Do you know how much those things cost?
PHILLIP
(eyeroll)
Of course, I won my own the next year.
BRANDY
So you have two crowns?
PHILLIP
I didn’t do it for the crown, Brandy, I did it for you.
BRANDY
So I could live in prison for the rest of my life?
PHILLIP
You were so in love with Brent, you couldn’t see that I was in love with you.
BRANDY
This is how you treat the people you love?
PHILLIP
I deserved you, Brandy, not Brent. He was a sleazebag.
BRANDY
I picked you up at a strip bar, Phillip. Before that, you were a professional shoplifter. My mother warned me about you.
Phillip coughs and stands up.
PHILLIP
Ah, I feel so much better. Thanks for listening. When does your next appeal come up?
BRANDY
Not until 2024.
PHILLIP
Oh, well, at least you have an audience who will watch you. Bye. I have to get ready for my wedding.
BRANDY
Wedding?
PHILLIP
You never married me, Brandy, so I had no other alternatives. Enjoy prison life.
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Janeen’s QE Cycle #5 First Draft
LOGLINE: A nanny to a wealthy tween tries to keep the boy from being arrested for shoplifting even though he did it. The boy, vengeful because she made him give the item back, tells the police that she molested him.
ESSENCE: Tweens are vicious and vengeful.
SCENE
INT. VINTAGE JEWELRY SHOP – DAY
PHILLIP, a 12-yo boy in expensive clothes looks at jewelry in an upscale vintage jewelry shop.
BRANDY, his 24-yo nanny has been with his family since she was an undergrad.
Phillip nudges Brandy and shows her a beautiful necklace.
BRANDY
That is gorgeous. Your mom has great taste and I’m sure she’d love to get that for her birthday next week.PHILLIP Do you like it?
The STORE MANAGER watches them closely.
BRANDY I love it.
Brandy looks for matching earrings holding them up to Phillip’s ears. They laugh, obviously comfortable together.
BRANDY (CONT’D)
I’ll look for earrings, you look for a bracelet.Phillip slips the necklace into his jacket pocket and they eventually give up on finding matching earrings or a bracelet.
BRANDY (CONT’D) Let’s go. I know another place.
They leave the store.
EXT. VINTAGE JEWELRY SHOP – CONTINUOUSPHILLIP looks furtively down at his hand while he twiddles something in his jacket pocket.
BRANDY What is that?
Phillip pulls out the necklace.
PHILLIP You said you liked it.
BRANDY
I do. And your mother will love it, but you have to go back in and pay for it.PHILLIP
It’s only $80. The guy will never miss it.They hear sirens approaching from a distance.
BRANDY
We have to go back in now, young man, and you will confess and pay for this immediately.They stare into each other’s eyes in a showdown as the sirens draw closer.
Phillip heaves a sigh and they head back inside.
INT. VINTAGE JEWELRY SHOP – CONTINUOUS
STORE OWNER
I’ve already called the police. I saw you steal the necklace. BRANDY nudges PHILLIP.PHILLIP (feigning dejection)
I’ll pay for it. Sorry.
The police pull up outside the shop.
INT. POLICE INTERVIEW ROOM – LATER
BRANDY sits at the table while a stern looking SERGEANT interrogates her.
BRANDY (brightly)
This is all a simple mistake. My employers are very prominent people. He can afford the necklace. We were joking around and he probably slipped it in his pocket the way we all pocket our phones when we need a free hand.
SERGEANT
Did you see him pocket the necklace?BRANDY (still brightly)
No, of course not, or I would have insisted he pay for it. It was an accident.
SERGEANT
The manager has it on video.He pays a short video from a security camera that shows Phillip checking to be sure no one is watching before pocketing the necklace.
SERGEANT (CONT’D) Why do you think he stole it? A dare? A bet?
BRANDY (faltering)
I have no idea. I hope you won’t charge him with theft. His parents will blame me and I need this job.
The sergeant grunts to signify her needs are irrelevant.
BRANDY (CONT’D)
I realize he needs to be punished or this kind of behavior will escalate, but he’s only twelve. I think his parents will punish him enough to ensure he never does anything like this again.The sergeant stands to leave the room.
INT. POLICE INTERVIEW ROOM 2 – DAY
A SECOND SERGEANT is interviewing PHILLIP.SECOND SERGEANT
So how do you think the necklace got in your pocket?PHILLIP
I probably dumped it in my pocket when I put my phone in to free up my hands so I could check out some bracelets.The sergeant looks irked.
SECOND SERGEANT Show me your phone.
Phillip automatically leans forward to pull his phone out of his back pocket.
The sergeant gives him a deadpan stare. Phillip looks guilty and immediately slips the phone into his jacket pocket.
PHILLIP (whiny)
I didn’t steal the necklace. I must have slipped it in my pocket by accident. Can I please go home now? I have a lot of homework.
SECOND SERGEANT
This isn’t going to go away. What do you think we should do?PHILLIP
My folks are definitely going to fire Brandy. (beat)That’s probably a good thing.
SECOND SERGEANT
Why?
Phillip looks frightened and trapped for a moment and then sneers slightly and becomes more confident.
PHILLIP Because I took it for her.
SECOND SERGEANT
Explain.
There is an awkward silence and the sergeant’s posture and expression belie his conviction that Phillip will lie.
PHILLIP
She asked me to get her a necklace. She knows I don’t have that kind of money, but we’re having sex and girls like presents.SECOND SERGEANT You’re having sex? With Brandy? That’s surprising.
PHILLIP
Why? She’s been my nanny for five years. She was still giving me my bedtime baths when she started.The sergeant looks skeptical.
PHILLIP (CONT’D) (defensively)
She liked what she saw.
INT. POLICE INTERVIEW ROOM – MOMENTS LATERSERGEANT
Are you and Phillip close?BRANDY
Yes. I’ve been his nanny for five years.SERGEANT
Are you having sex with him?Brandy is flabbergasted.
BRANDY
Of course not! I have a boyfriend.SERGEANT
He says you’re having sex.Brandy considers that a beat.
BRANDY
Why would he make up something so awful?SERGEANT You said you were close.
BRANDY Not like that!
INT. POLICE STATION HALLWAY – MOMENTS LATER
The SERGEANT, SECOND SERGEANT and a POLICE CAPTAIN are confabbing in the hallway.
SERGEANT
Do we arrest him for theft? Her for sexual assault of a minor? Both of them? Neither?POLICE CAPTAIN Phillip’s parents are rich. The parents will have both of them deny it and without any physical proof, the case won’t even make it to a grand jury.
SECOND SERGEANT
But what if it’s sexual assault?POLICE CAPTAIN
It won’t matter. The kid’s parents are rich. Was the property returned?The sergeants nod.
POLICE CAPTAIN (CONT’D) Then it seems no one took anything from anyone.
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QE Cycle #5 Scene
Logline: A talent agent attempts to save his potential client from arrest, but ultimately learns he’s the one who’s going to need saving.
Essence: Sometimes the innocent can be a cover for danger and evil.
Scene:
INT. EXCLUSIVE RESTAURANT – NIGHT
The last few patrons are scattered throughout the open air establishment.
PHILLIP (55), attempting to control his anxiety, talks to a STOUT POLICE OFFICER and a WIRY POLICE OFFICER.
Witnessing the exchange is BRANDY (22) who looks worried at the attention she’s getting from the remaining patrons. She holds her cell phone ready to send out a text at any moment.
PHILLIP
I assure you gentlemen, this is just a huge misunderstanding. I do deserve the benefit of the doubt.
The stout officer strokes his chin, skeptical.
PHILLIP
Look at her. Is that what a common criminal looks like?
They face Brandy as she pouts and immediately buries her head into her cell phone and types.
PHILLIP
Gentlemen, I know your situation. But here’s mine…
Brandy is in the middle of a cell phone chat. The message reads:
“Two cops only. Seems like no more will show up.”
PHILLIP
…I can either give her a lucrative contract and hope I don’t lose millions. Or, I can let her go, and hope I don’t regret it later. Either way, it doesn’t mesh for me. Do you see where I’m at?
STOUT OFFICER
Sounds like you’re in a pickle.
BRANDY
Please, I want to be one of the top singers in the world.
Outside in a wooded area, a MAN DRESSED IN BLACK with a clear view into the restaurant, focuses on his cell phone. His return message reads:
“I’m going to take them all out.”
Brandy reads the message and then CRIES uncontrollably.
PHILLIP
You see how this plight is ruining her. And it’s gonna be all my fault. All my fault.
WIRY OFFICER
We can clear this up at the station.
Brandy continues to text:
“We have little time left.”
PHILLIP
I’ve been a model citizen all my life. Do you know what this will do to my business?
A WOMAN PATRON gets up from her table and in mid stride drops to the plush carpet. THUD!
The surrounding customers collectively GASP at the sight. A waiter darts to the woman to give first aide.
PHILLIP
Officers, that seems to need more attention than us.
STOUT OFFICER
You stay put. We’ll radio in an ambulance.
The wiry officer gets on his radio and relays instructions.
PHILLIP
(to Brandy)
You can try helping a bit. Instead of chatting with your fans.
BRANDY
Things would be different if I had my contract.
PHILLIP
You have to earn it my dear.
Brandy acknowledges that as a challenge, hops onto a small stage and grabs the microphone.
BRANDY
Ladies and gentlemen. Listen to these vocal cords. I hope you enjoy.
Brandy HUMS a song which gets everyone’s attention.
CROSSHAIRS show the police officers and Phillip in its sight.
BRANDY
Is everyone enjoying the melody? Let me know. I greatly would appreciate it.
Phillip grows more frustrated and turns to the officers.
PHILLIP
Please tell me what’s the charge? You haven’t even stated a charge.
STOUT OFFICER
Miss lady singer there was seen brandishing a weapon with a suspicious individual in the parking lot.
WIRY OFFICER
That’s cause for an investigation. Given today’s climate, we need to pursue this. And since you associate with her, you’re also coming with us.
At this moment, a NAKED WOMAN is chased by a NAKED MAN who run towards the restaurant’s parking area and jump into a car.
A few folks offer headshakes as others look away.
PHILLIP
And you’re not going to do anything about that?
STOUT OFFICER
It was a quick peep show.
WIRY OFFICER
They’ll be fine by themselves.
BRANDY
Ladies and gentlemen, I will be the next superstar!
STOUT OFFICER
OK, Miss Superstar, it’s time to go.
PHILLIP
My word this can’t happen. It can’t happen. I’m about to lose millions!
WIRY OFFICER
Wow. Listen to you. I thought you cared about Miss Superstar over there. What are your priorities?
STOUT OFFICER
(to Brandy)
Get down! Now!
A VAN pulls up outside. The DRIVER signals the assassin dressed in black who creeps up the restaurant.
Brandy eases herself off the stage.
BRANDY
I was adopted. I’m a special needs person.
STOUT OFFICER
Bad excuse, Miss Superstar.
BANG! A thunderous blast from a rifle makes everyone jump for cover.
The police officers reach for their guns.
ASSASSIN
No! Not today! Up!
Phillip and the officers raise their arms.
BRANDY
He’s the real problem.
Brandy points at Phillip.
PHILLIP
After everything I’ve done for you?!
Two supporting men dressed in black secure the perimeter as no one moves.
Brandy positions herself behind the assassin who aims at Phillip.
BRANDY
Now we can really negotiate.
Phillip and the police officers swallow a lump.
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Rebecca’s QE -5 cycle 1
Logline: It’s 4AM, Brandy and Phillip make out while waiting in a parking lot for Brandy’s brother for a drug buy until Police arrive and question the couple. Brandy lies to protect Phillip, but is arrested after they search her purse.
Essence: Brandy lies to protect Philips perceived drug habit, but Philip uses Brandy to nab her drug dealing brother.
SCENE:
EXT. PARKING LOT – NIGHT
It’s 4AM when a car pulls in and parks in dimly lit section of a parking lot behind a public housing apartment building in a rough area of the city.
INT. CAR – CONT.
PHILLIP, early twenties, rests behind the wheel; BRANDY, slightly younger (blonde hair blue eyes), sits in the passenger seat. She exits the car, checks out the empty lot, and gets into the back seat.
BRANDY
Phillip, you’ll be more comfortable back here.
She pats the back seat and runs her fingers through the hairs on the back of his neck.
PHILLIP
Why did your brother pick this place and awful hour?
BRANDY
He said all the night people pass out, and very few people in public housing head out for jobs this early. It’s quiet and peaceful this time of night. I’m lonely back here by myself. Please.
Phillip caves and joins her in the backseat. Brandy curls up close to him.
PHILLIP
You sure he’ll show?
BRANDY
He said between 4 and 4:30. How long will you be good?
PHILLIP
Two hours.
Brandy kisses him deep and snuggles closer. Phillip puts his arm around her shoulders.
BRANDY
Philip, I was just thinking.
PHILIP
That could be dangerous for you.
They both laugh.
BRANDY
(Still chuckling)
Seriously! When will I get to meet your mother? I’ve never met a Senator before.
Phillip cringes slightly
PHILLIP
Mom’s only a state senator. I’m waiting until I’m better. Perhaps, at graduation. This will be my last hit. I promise.
Phillip smiles, Brandy brightens.
BRANDY
That long? I’ve never been close to a celebrity or anyone as rich and put together like your mother.
Phillip fakes a smile before he turns serious.
PHILLIP
Bran, we need to keep this, my habit, between just you and me. Don’t ever reveal my real name, not even to your brother. If the press found out they’d have a field day. It would ruin my mother. Promise me. If I keep up my grades, I can finish first in my class. Only a month to go. After graduation, things will be good for me, for us.
Phillip shoots her a sincere loving look.
BRANDY
Sweetheart, I love you. I would never ever snitch on you to anyone. You should know that.
She picks up his hand and places it over her heart and connects with his eyes. They remain like that for a few beats. Brandy removes her sweater and she’s not wearing a bra. She replaces his hand and holds in in place with hers.
BRANDY
You want to, you know, what while we wait? Ever do it in the back seat?
Phillip removes both hands, kisses hers, and checks out the parking lot.
PHILLIP
No, I prefer the comfort of privacy of my bed. What if your brother catches us?
BRANDY
Danny never runs on time. ( seductive look) Come on I’ll make it fun.
She unbuttons Phillips shirt and runs her hands over his chest. Phillip begins to respond. She moves down towards his jeans and unzips them. He responds.
BRANDY
Pleasure me, honey, make me sing.
A bright light flashes into the front seat and then blinds the couple. They jump apart and hurriedly rearrange their clothes.
They hear a tap on the window.
BRANDY (whispering)
Shit, Danny?
A second flashlight beams in on them and they hear voices. Fear freezes on their face. Could it be gang-bangers? Someone tries the door, finds it unlocked, and opens it. The man with the flashlight beams the light on himself. The flashlight on the other side of the car illuminates the partially dressed Phillip and Brandy. It’s the POLICE.
OFFICER 1
Get out of the car NOW.
Brandy zaps on her sweater. Phillip zips his jeans. The both exit the car. The officer on other side joins the group and stands between the couple and the car.
OFFICER 1
What are you doing HERE?
Brandy, being caught in a compromising position, becomes incensed. Phillip retains his cool.
BRANDY
What the hell do you think we were doing?
OFFICER 1
It’s obvious what you were doing, but why here in this parking space, behind this building in an unsafe neighborhood at…
Officer checks his watch.
OFFICER 1 (CONT.)
At 4:15 AM in the morning?
He flashes his light on Phillip showing a stupid embarrassed grin but remains silent.
BRANDY
Do you think we’re stupid enough to do it while driving and cause an accident. We stopped here.
Officer 2 flashes his light into her eyes.
OFFICER 2
Cut the crap girlie. How old are you?
BRANDY
Twenty one.
Phillip finally speaks up.
PHILLIP
She’s twenty-one.
Both officers motion them to in front of the headlights of their patrol car. The couple obliges. Officer 1 glares at Brandy, his voice rough.
OFFICER 1
Again, why are you parked here at 4AM.
Brandy begins to cave.
BRANDY
We’re here to meet up with my brother. He sent me a text to meet him in this exact spot and that he’d be here between 4 and 4:30. He’s driving from Newport News.
The officer looks like he’s not buying it. Brandy looks at the apartment building as her mind races. She points up at a window.
BRANDY (CONT.)
My brother lives here. His girlfriend kicked him out.
She looks towards Phillip.
BRANDY (CONT.)
Danny wanted Creed and me to help him get his stuff.
The officer shakes his head with disbelief. He looks towards Phillip.
OFFICER 1
At a known drug transaction sight. Girlfriends, always quick to protect their scum ball boyfriends.
Brandy moves in close to Phillip and puts her arm around him.
BRANDY
Phil’s not a scumball. He’s a good boyfriend. Smart, goes to college, prominent family.
Phillip squirms and moves slightly away.
PHILLIP
Brandy, tell the truth. It’s ok. Stop with the lies.
Both officers stand waiting, officer 1, hands on hips, officer 2 hand near gun. Brandy, frightened and scared, begins to shake.
BRANDY
(Agitated)
Ok, Ok. We’re here to meet a drug dealer, make a buy. Phillip has a problem, ran out medicine.
OFFICER 2
Is the drug dealer your brother? You said you were meeting him here?
BRANDY
No, my God. What time is it.
OFFICER 2
4:25.
OFFICER 1
I need to see some ID.
PHILLIP
My wallets in the front cup holder. Brandy’s purse on the floor of the passenger side.
Officer 2 to grabs the wallet and purse from the car. He hands the wallet to Phillip and the purse to Officer 1.
OFFICER 1
Please hand me your drivers license.
Philip complies. The officer checks the ID and smiles. He then hold up Brandy’s large purse.
BRANDY
It’s in my billfold.
Officer 1 rummages through the purse and comes up with a square flowered zippered make up bag along with the bifold. He hands the bifold to Brandy who gives him her ID. Officer 1 hands it to Officer 2 who looks at it and returns it to Brandy.
OFFICER 2
Interesting.
Officer 1 unzips the makeup bag. His face lights up.
OFFICER 1
And what do we find in here. Is this your makeup bag?
BRANDY
(Combative)
No, I never saw it before in my life.
Phillip looks discussed.
PHILLIP
Brandy, stop it. There on to us. No more lies.
Officer 1 hands the bag to Officer 2 who looks inside, rezips it, puts it into an evidence bag, and secures it into the front of the police cruiser. He returns with one pair of handcuffs as Officer 1 reads Brandy her rights. Officer 2 cuffs her. Brandy screams and kicks as they put her into the patrol car and leave. Phillip returns to his car and cries. He wipes his eyes.
EXT. PARKING LOT – MOMENTS LATER
Car lights speed into the parking lot. Phillip gets out and waits by his car. The other car stops close. DANNY gets out.
PHILLIP
You’re late.
DANNY
Where’s my sister?
PHILLIP
She had other plans.
Danny checks out the parking lot. Still no activity.
DANNY
You got the money?
Phillip hands him three one-hundred dollar bills.
PHILLIP
Three hundred, that right.
DANNY
Yep.
Danny hands Phillip a brown paper bag. Phillip checks out the contents, gets into his car, and drives towards the parking lot entrance and stops. Four screaming patrols cars, lights flashing, speed past him and surround Danny’s car. Phillip watches as Danny and his accomplice get cuffed and placed into a patrol car that speeds off. Danny backs up, gets out of the car and walks over to a detective. He hands him the bag.
PHILLIP
Hi Tim, here’s your evidence.
TIM
Thanks Phil, great work. We finally nailed that SOB. It’s taken us too long to get that slimy a-hole. Finally, vindication, for my kid brother.
PHILLIP
He didn’t deserve to die so young.
The two men man-hug.
TIM
Go home get some rest. Come by the precinct tomorrow around eleven for a debriefing.
PHILLIP
Give Aunt Mary a hug from me. I’ll be buy in a few days to visit.
Tim gives Phillip a thumbs up.
END OF SCENE
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Hope McPherson’s QE Cycle #5
Logline: After a deadly car accident, Philip talks to the police, including to an officer to whom he has close ties.
Essence: Hell hath no fury like a cuckolded husband.
EXT. DESERTED ROADSIDE – NIGHT
Two cars – a Chevy sitting on its roof and a Volvo, dented but upright – hiss and groan, motionless on the side of the highway. The driver’s side door of the still upright car opens. PHILIP (30s) climbs out, leans against the hood, dazed.
He staggers around to the other side of the car, wrenches open the door. BRANDY (30s) unbuckles her seatbelt.
PHILIP
You okay?
Brandy nods and climbs out of the passenger’s seat.
PHILIP
I’ll be right back.
Philip makes his way to the other car. Its driver, a middle-aged man, hangs upside-down and lifeless – a small bullet hole in his temple. Sirens scream in the distance.
EXT. POLICE CRUISER – CONTINUING
OFFICER BESS TOMAS has the peddle to the metal, speeding to the accident in the distance. Her partner, OFFICER DAVE HADLEY, points toward the cars.
DAVE
There they—
The dark night lights up in a bright yellow and orange FIREBALL. A second later, the BOOM and SHOCKWAVE hit their cruiser. Bess slams on the brakes and the car pitches to a halt just out of range of engulfed vehicle. She and Officer Hadley jump out of their car and run toward the fiery tangle.
EXT. DESERTED ROADSIDE – LATER
EMERGENCY VEHICLES line the road. Philip and Brandy sit on the back of separate AID CARS. Both have blankets over their shoulders. EMTs expertly check them out as Officer Bess Tomas questions Philip and Officer Dave Hadley questions Brandy. The cops each hold notepads and pens, jotting down replies.
PHILIP
Brandy wanted to stay. Loves karaoke. It was my idea to leave.
Bess steps to the side for the EMT who shines a light at each of Philip’s pupils.
BESS
How much did you drink tonight, Sir?
PHILIP
One glass of …
BESS
Wine?
PHILIP
Champagne.
Bess catches her breath.
BESS
Celebrating something?
PHILIP
My wife was celebrating a promotion.
Bess’ eyes narrow.
BESS
Did you know the occupant of the other vehicle?
Philip shrugs. The EMT finishes his exam.
PHILIP
Not really. Poor bastard.
EMT
Sir, call your physician tomorrow. They may want to run more tests. But you were lucky.
PHILIP
Thanks very much, Sir. I’ll do that. So I’m cleared to drive?
The EMT nods.
BESS
The passenger’s side’s a mess, but Volvo’s are tanks. It’ll get you home.
The EMT leaves. Bess sits beside Philip, leans close.
BESS
You’re married?!
PHILIP
Babe, I should have told you. I’m sorry.
BESS
This was a hell of the way to find out.
PHILIP
It’s been over for a long time between us. I wouldn’t be surprised if the promotion was the excuse Brandy’s been waiting for to kick me to the curb. You’ve done a breathalyzer on her, too, right?
BESS
You said you only had one glass of champagne.
PHILIP
That’s all I had. I lost count of her chasers.
Bess scribbles a note. Philip watches as firefighters extract the charred body from the crisped Chevy.
BESS
What did you mean by “Not really” when I asked if you knew him?
PHILIP
I did see him before the crash.
Bess listens, pen poised over notepad.
PHILIP
He’d been hitting on Brandy at the club.
BESS
What did you do when he was hitting on … your wife. Damn it, you’ve been married this whole time?
PHILIP
She encouraged him! I used to get embarrassed. Not anymore.
BESS
He obviously left at the same time. You weren’t planning a threesome, were you?
PHILIP
God, no. Brandy and I haven’t had sex in months. Between her temper and her all-consuming job.
BESS
Her temper?
Philip glances over at his wife, who’s got her hand on the arm of the EMT examining her. She’s smiling coyly at the hunky medic.
PHILIP
The guy said something that pissed her off. Hell, he probably declined her, er, generous offer. I finally convinced her to leave. Wasn’t in the mood to spend another evening out apologizing to the staff and other customers for the tantrum I knew was coming.
BESS
And you let her drive?
PHILIP
I’m not sure I’ll can forgive myself for that. I should have insisted. But she can be a …
BESS
Bitch?
PHILIP
Tidal wave. That guy had no idea …
BESS
About what?
PHILIP
That she has a gun under her front seat.
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Doug Ryan-QE #5
Logline: Brandy and Phillip are postal carriers that have a secret, Postal Inspector Todd was called in to get to the truth.
Essence: Phillip professes to help Brandy but ends up trying to take her down, Brandy won’t go down without a fight.
EXT. LOADING DOCK POST OFFICE – DAY
BRANDY, 40’S in USPS uniform stands next to a cart and puffs on her vape. She watches as a carrier truck speeds past the dock. Inside she sees PHILLIP 20’S, he looks at her as well.
Brandy nods in his direction and he nods in hers. He exits his truck and darts up to her. He is short much shorter than Brandy.
PHILLIP
All done with your route?
She puffs her vape and blows it in his face. He coughs and winces.
BRANDY
Hell no. I gotta go talk to some postal cop.
She looks at him accusingly. He looks away and then goes in to whisper in her ear.
PHILLIP
You know me, I’m the man baby, I would never drop dime.
Brandy narrows her eyes and puts her hand on her hip.
BRANDY
Um, hum. I believe dat. Well I gotta go talk to this guy. You keep your ears open on who blabbed.
He nods and looks nervous, but puffs out his chest and lifts his head high.
PHILLIP
Don’t worry B, I have it under control. I got this girl.
Brandy looks at him unimpressed. She shakes her head and walks into the building. He takes a deep breath and lets out a sigh.
A tall man, INSPECTOR TODD, 35 steps from around the corner. He towers over Phillip.
INSPECTOR TODD
Hi I’m Inspector Dan Todd.
Phillip has a blank deer in headlights stare. Todd moves closer and pulls out a recording device.
INSPECTOR TODD
Well you were adamant about telling your side of the events first.
Phillip looks around to see if anyone is watching him.
PHILLIP
Sure lets go talk in my truck.
INT. POST OFFICE-BACK ROOM – LATER
Brandy sits next to a small desk in a grungy office. There is a mail cart outside the door overflowing. She stares at the first 3 rows are all FBI’s most wanted.
She studies faces trying to force it to memory. The last face she sees, a bearded man with long hair and glasses looks familiar.
BRANDY
No fucking way.
INSPECTOR TODD (O.S.)
Recognize someone?
Brandy spins around to see Todd at the door. He’s does not look like he sounds.
BRANDY
Oh, no. I thought you would be younger?
Todd rolls his eyes as he shuts the door and makes his way to the seat in front of Brandy.
INSPECTOR TODD
Get that all the time.
Brandy’s eyes dart over to the door. Todd looks at the door.
INSPECTOR TODD
Expecting someone?
BRANDY
Naw. So whats up I got a route and lunch to get back to.
Todd pulls out the recording device and sets it on the desk. He turns it on as he sits and crosses his legs. He is sitting almost perfectly straight with his hand on the desk.
Brandy eyes his posture and does the opposite, sitting with her legs stretched. She is almost leaning out of the chair.
INSPECTOR TODD
This is inspector Dan Todd US postal inspector five one zero three eight. It is October 19th 2020. I am interviewing Carrier Brandy Smalls about an incident on September 30th involving another carrier Phillip Stonewall.
Brandy’s eyebrows raise and she sits up a bit, with a smile.
BRANDY
So where Phil at? Don’t he need to be here too? I mean thats only right, right?
INSPECTOR TODD
He’ll be in, in a minute. I wanted to get your version of what happened on September 30th.
Brandy stares at the recorder and takes a deep breath. She turns to Todd and lets out the breath as she speaks.
BRANDY
So you know i’m doing my thing on my route. And then out of nowhere I sees this truck like. Going super slow behind the Walmart. I don’t know what it was but I was compelled to see what they was up to.
Inspector Todd narrows his eyes in fascination at her story.
INSPECTOR TODD
So you deviated from your route to follow this truck?
She throws her hands up in a grand gesture, becoming animated. Moving around in her chair and using her arms to tell the story.
BRANDY
Yeah man. I was like “Yo” Cuz I heard about them dumping those things and I’m like,
Todd cuts her off.
INSPECTOR TODD
Dumping what things?
BRANDY
Votes dummy. I’m like “not on my watch.”
She throws her hands out and grabs her crotch. Todd laughs at her antics.
INSPECTOR TODD
You seem way too into this persona.
Brandy shakes her head and sits up.
BRANDY
Naw. It’s who I am man. You know just me.
INSPECTOR TODD
Is this how Phill knows you?
She looks to the side and squints her eyes. Todd looks at the door.
INSPECTOR TODD
Phill come on in.
The door opens and in steps Phillip. He looks at Brandy and she eyes him.
PHILLIP
Hello everyone.
INSPECTOR TODD
Hi. Please sit over there.
Todd points to the other side of the desk. Phillip makes his way to the chair and sit. He is visibly nervous and keeps looking around, purposely avoids making eye contact.
BRANDY
What up Phill! Why you creeping like a mug?
Phillip makes eye contact and quickly looks at the desktop.
PHILLIP
Hey Brandy.
Todd drums his fingers on the desk.
INSPECTOR TODD
Philip Stonewall has entered the room and now we will get his version of the event.
BRANDY
Yo, I didn’t finish my version.
PHILLIP
Yo Brandy it’s all good. I already gave him the 411.
Brady shifts in her seat to look at Phillip. Her ice cold stare is felt by Phillip even though he is looking down at the desk.
BRANDY
Wait you already hear this motherfuckers side? Now you want me to…
INSPECTOR TODD
Shut it. Go ahead Phill, in your own words and time.
PHILLIP
Well it’s like I told you earlier. I went round to the spot where Brandy said to meet me and…
BRANDY
What!? Bold faced lie!
INSPECTOR TODD
Brandy! Please continue Phillip.
He sighs and looks at the other two in the room.
BRANDY
Yeah Phill go on with your fucking lies.
INSPECTOR TODD
HEY! Enough!
Brandy throws her hands up.
PHILLIP
Well she was at the spot and well she had the whole thing set up. There was a makeshift bed and she even set up a camera.
Brandy’s eyes widen and her mouth drops wide open. Todd sees this and his look stops her from making a sound.
PHILLIP
Well, she closed the van and turned on the cam. And, we had sex. Right there on all the mail
He begins to cry. Brandy is stunned and laughs.
PHILLIP
I don’t know why but it was a fetish for her, not me.
INSPECTOR TODD
How long have you two been having relations?
Phillip sniffles and runs his arm across his nose wiping the snot away. He uses the back of his hand to clear his tears.
PHILLIP
Two months.
INSPECTOR TODD
Who instigated the relationship?
PHILLIP
She did.
Brandy jumps out of her seat and starts pointing her hands at the two men in the room.
BRANDY
Bullshit motherfucker!
INSPECTOR TODD
You sit down now!
BRANDY
I’ll sit but you show him the video Mr. Postman!
Inspector Todd pulls out his phone and plays a video, showing it to Phillip. Brandy sits. Phillip looks at the video. His eyes widen.
VIDEO:
Phillip is pulling out bags of mail from his truck. He riffles through them pulling out handfuls of green envelopes. The camera zooms in.
They are voter registration forms and mail ballots. Phillip walks them to a bin and tosses them in. He repeats the process
BACK TO SCENE
Phillip looks up at the two of them, his tears are gone and his face is red. He is embarrassed, but that fades as anger boils up inside him. Brandy flips him off.
BRANDY
That’s right motherfucker! Whatcha got now bitch?
PHILLIP
Fuck!
INSPECTOR TODD
Care to revise your statement before I read you your rights?
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Kathleen Schank
Assign #23
Logline: An argument in a bar starts over a Brandy who has a bit. Her new boyfriend doesn’t like the fact that her ex shows up and begins to drink with her, inviting her back. It all ends when the police are called to settle a fight between them, and Brandy betrays her new man.
Essence: Watch out for women who have a nature that drives you to drink. You could get arrested for having more than your Phil.
Scene:
INT. LOCAL BAR WHERE BRANDY LIKES TO STAY
Brandy and Philip arrive for their date at her favorite bar. Everything is okay until they meet her ex-boyfriend Tom who shows up seemingly expectedly. The bartender is barely able to save Tom’s life from his beating when Philip gets angry by calling the police.
BRANDY
Tom- I didn’t know you show up! Come on and we’ll have a couple drinks with Philip my new boyfriend. Phil- Sweetie, this is Tom, he’s my ex boyfriend from a long time ago. I haven’t seen him in years.
TOM
It’s been a long time. She meant the world to me- I thought she’d stay with me. Brandy got away-
BRANDY
Cheers! Philip- it’s to you.
PHILIP
What a surprise, Brandy- darling. What is this for? Cheers to me- this poor fellow, is he following you around?
BRANDY
Are you following me?
TOM
Philip- I was feeling dismal and I knew that Brandy was at the bar. Here she is…
PHILIP
Tom- If only there were another Brandy at the bar. Do forgive me for having enjoyed too much! More, please! Bartender… Another one here for this suffered man.
BRANDY
Just stay here and sit. Just sit, Tom – next to me for a little more. Like we used to do.
PHILIP
As long as Tom’s here- why don’t you tell us, what caused the break up between you and her? The unbearable separation- the indomitable agony… does it not go away?
BRANDY
It’s fine. I thought I told him about you…
PHILIP
She didn’t tell you? Does that account for the awful feeling I had? Hadn’t she dumped you before I met her? Brandy- tell me.
BRANDY
Philip, more please-
(extend her glass)
I just haven’t seen him in a while. It’s like I told you- we broke up years ago.
PHILIP
Oh really- because if you were happier with Tom here… come on, who’s the better man?
TOM
Him? The better man- listen Philip you’d better stay quiet while I talk to Brandy here.
(Aside)
Honey- I always loved you. I don’t know why you left… Come back.
BRANDY
(Turning to Tom)
It’s good to see you. I really missed you.
TOM
(Turns to Phil)
You’re nothing. You’re not better than me…
PHILIP
(Shouts)
How could you say that to me?
TOM
Ha, ha, ha! Look at you-
PHILIP
(Angered)
Look at me? What about you- huh?
Phil punches Tom in the face and he falls over the barstool backwards drunk. Phil shoves him again and he blacks out.
BRANDY
Oh, Phil no! Tom, are you alright? Bartender! Call someone!
PHILIP
Sorry, dear.
The bartender rushes over to Tom who is lying on the ground in pain.
BARTENDER
He’s Blacked out. I’ll call the ambulance right away.
(Calling)
Hello police-
OPERATOR
This is 9-1-1…
MOMENTS LATER
Ambulance arrives and several police officers in their cars. They enter and take care of their work. They begin to interrogate the couple.
PHILIP
Officer, Brandy had nothing to do with this argument. I only had a little… I just couldn’t believe her ex-boyfriend wanted her to go home with him. He was really annoying.
POLICE OFFICER
You punched him. Correct?
BRANDY
Philip hit Tom.
PHILIP
I can’t help it that Brandy was drunk. Tom was drunk-
Brandy, you got drunk on purpose. You should’ve know what may happen.
BRANDY
Officer, I am personal friends with the owner of the bar. Philip, you gave my ex a black eye. There was no need for an argument to have begun! The bartender would’ve settled it.
PHILIP
Settled it? The fellow was breathing down my neck and started laughing at me…
BRANDY
Laughed about what? How he’d done it to me a thousand times and why you look- unsatisfied!
POLICE OFFICER
Is that why you hit the man in the face, and beat him until he could no longer stand and blacked out, is that true?
PHILIP
He blacked out because he’s stupid. He’s soo stupid – or he would’ve shut up and already left here. He wouldn’t be lying on the ground, and if it weren’t for that ambulance arriving I’d have polished him off…
The police officer begins to arrest Philip and reads him his rights as he cuffs him.
POLICE OFFICER
You have the right to remain silent… Anything you say, can and will be held against you…
MOMENTS LATER
POLICE OFFICER
Come with me please, down to the station and talk further.
BRANDY
I’m going to meet Tom at the hospital. He still loves me, and you’re mean.
PHILIP
Ha! You’re going with Tom? What?!
BRANDY
Maybe we’ll meet up here again soon. Bye, Phil!
PHIL
Don’t forget about me and the sex we had!
BRANDY
I might Phil, I just might. Bye.
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JOSEPH’S QE CYCLE #5
LOGLINE: A SHREWD INVESTMENT BROKER TURNS THE LEGAL TABLES ON
A PREVIOUSLY RELIABLE SUBORDINATE.
ESSENCE: Phillip enjoys playing victim, then lures in his
mark for the kill.
SCENE:
EXT. HIGH RISE SCAFFOLDING – DAY
Phillip clumsily works the cables in an effort to release the
scaffold downward, before Brandy leans out the window at him.
BRANDY
Jesus! My God,, Phillip, don’t do
it. Don’t do it.
PHILLIP
Relax. I wasn’t going to jump.
Brandy bursts out in laughter, as she nearly frightened him
over the edge.
BRANDY
You’ve taken this “I can do it all”
attitude a bit far though.
A downward street view shows numerous FED agents, dressed in
black, quickly blanketing the building.
PHILLIP
(after a glance to the
street)
They’re here to say they don’t like
prima donas. Even hard working,
successful ones.
BRANDY
What are you saying?
Phillip climbs back into the office.
INT. LUXURIOUS OFFICE – CONTINUOUS
PHILLIP
With my social interests, Brandy,
I’d do the worst kind of jail time.
BRANDY
Okay, show’s over for today. What
are you rehearsing for, summer
stock? That’s my side gig.
Phillip pours a quick bourbon, neat, then gulps.
PHILLIP
I’m not acting.
BRANDY
You know I can help. Anything you
want me to do, I’m ready. I’m your
team player, just say the word.
PHILLIP
If you would be so kind.
BRANDY
Careful, deadly stuff that booze.
PHILLIP
It’s only killing me a little every
day. Not like the one-time fatal
financial blow I delivered as a
thank you to my parents.
BRANDY
That was a completely unexpected
collapse, by all accounts. Not your
fault. Now what’s with the panic
act?
PHILLIP
I wouldn’t put on a show for my
only true friend in the company.
BRANDY
I’d like to think I show everyone
here the same concern and respect.
I simply want to belong. This place
is everything to me. Don’t know
what I’d do without it.
PHILLIP
Pardon me if I don’t share that
enthusiasm at the moment. Right now
I’m wishing I’d taken that mid-west
position, so I wouldn’t have to
face this.
2.
BRANDY
I could do a Sarah Silverman
impersonation rant, that might
distract them while you’re sneaking
out the back.
PHILLIP
It’s out the window and over the
scaffolding, or off to prison.
There’s no sneaking away.
BRANDY
(paces)
Give me a minute to think. I’ll
vouch for your integrity, and every
legal investment/trade made here.
If…
PHILLIP
If what?
BRANDY
We trade offices. Even if one of us
does move up to executive V-P,
we’ll likely stay on this floor.
PHILLIP
Maybe we discuss that at a more
appropriate time.
BRANDY
Okay, your choice.
PHILLIP
You should really make yourself
scarce before they come up here,
wouldn’t want them to implicate you
in anything.
BRANDY
Hey, you saw my purchases all the
way down the line. Total
transparency. No inside moves.
PHILLIP
I’d be the first one to defend you.
But under the circumstances, not
sure how that goes over.
BRANDY
You have a sound track record too.
Not sure what they could be after.
3.
PHILLIP
I never even asked for your file
access to check those dates of
purchase against withdrawals,
that’s how much I was hands off the
money.
BRANDY
Might be better if you had looked
them over. I don’t mind giving you
access for a quick review, in case.
Brandy hands over the log-in code from her iphone notes.
BRANDY (CONT’D)
Just say you need to review them,
if they ask.
PHILLIP
This means a lot.
BRANDY
And, I’m staying. No matter what
happens. I’ve nothing to hide.
PHILLIP
Maybe let me take a bathroom break?
It could be a long interview.
BRANDY
I’ll come and get you when they
arrive.
INT. MENS EXECUTIVE BATHROOM LOUNGE – SAME
Brandy slowly enters, calls out for Phillip. Crickets, as she
proceeds down the row of mahogany stall doors.
Peering under a few, she notes the toilet paper dragging on
the floor.
BRANDY
(speaks through the door)
You’re still the only adult I know
who spins the roll.
PHILLIP
Go away.
BRANDY
Unfortunately, those two scary guys
in your office won’t.
4.
PHILLIP
I can’t go to jail, Brandy. It’s
not my destiny. Boarding schools,
prep schools, Ivy League. My
parents gave up everything to see I
was the chosen one.
BRANDY
Great. Then let’s go back to your
office and sing the chorus of
Fiddler on the Roof. Or I could
bring them in here. Shouldn’t be
too humiliating.
PHILLIP
Hell, no. Just get me another pair
of pants from my bottom desk
drawer.
BRANDY
(suppresses a laugh)
“Here sits Phillip, pressed and
fitted, came to fart, but
accidentally shitted”.
PHILLIP
Could you just get the pants.
LUXURIOUS OFFICE
PHILLIP
Gentlemen, welcome. I’m sure this
is not an easy assignment for you.
FED 1
I’ll tell you, it was certainly a
shock to me, considering most
people believe this is a top flight
investment firm.
PHILLIP
We’ve had our problems, no doubt.
But we’ve only recently collected
our internal audit. You beat us to
disclosure, is all.
Phillip looks up from his keyboard typing.
PHILLIP (CONT’D)
You don’t mind if I complete this
sale, do you? Every little bit will
help with the payoff of our
clients.
5.
A be-my-guest wave from FED 2, as Phillip’s screen view shows
him in Brandy’s account, changing dates, dollar amounts.
FED 1
I understand that you two were both
up for the same promotion position
this month.
PHILLIP
Competition’s hell, the closer you
get to the top.
FED 1
(to Brandy)
And your uncle is the current
President of this firm?
BRANDY
I don’t use that as a crutch.
PHILLIP
(to Brandy)
You pull that on us all the time,
what are you talking about.
BRANDY
I actually hadn’t had a chance to
tell Phillip that I was formally
selected, this morning. It’s a
senior executive role that more
suited my skills, whereas Phillip
is the brains behind all
transactions.
Phillip throws her a “that’s not helping” look.
FED 2
The company’s two billion dollars
in debt.
PHILLIP
Sadly, yes.
BRANDY
Phillip gets so caught up in the
numbers, sometimes, though, I don’t
know how he stays so honest.
Another sharp glare, then a smile, as Phillip retrieves
printer sheets when they spit out. Hands them to FED 1.
6.
PHILLIP
I believe this will explain
everything.
FED 1 glances at printed data, then at Brandy.
PHILLIP (CONT’D)
As your analysts will see, this
deal is intended to see that we
lose even more capital over the
next few months, while she pockets
plenty.
BRANDY
(catching on)
Now wait just a minute. Is he-
FED 2
(to Brandy)
You have the right to remain
silent.
-
Joe’s QE 5
What I learned doing this that improved my writing is I can jam all 21 techniques into a scene, but I need more practice focusing on character interactions
LOGLINE: Brandy seeks revenge on her brother for disposing of her priceless collection.
ESSENCE: One person’s meat is another’s poison
(Max. Ent. Tech. list rearranged below from original list here)
Max Entertainment Techniques Sequenced for Outline:
Surprise – they’re coming for him in the stands.
Hook – So many security guards converging on our section. Must be after a whole slew of bad guys.
Anticipatory Dialogue – They’re looking right at us. Right at me.
Misinterpretation – Phillip laughs at their humor; they say he’s laughing at them.
Mislead/Reveal – Brandy is happy that he threw her bears for her favorite skater
More interesting setting – the room is dark, dank, and soundproof
Superior Position – Brandy and a guard nod at one another once Phillip is tossed into the chair.
Dilemma – The door is open; he can stay and take it or leave and have them bring him back if they find he has lied even once
Dilemma – guard can go get a coffee and let them have at him, or stay and have the fun himself. He forgoes the coffee
Suspense – 3 guards stand around him, one with handcuffs, one with a baton out, one asking questions while shining a light in his face
Something Unseen – a baton coming off a holster makes Phillip’s eyes bug out
Predictions – you could be with us for quite a while
Intrigue – Is a guard in on it?
Uncomfortable Moment – A guard jingles his handcuffs
Mystery – Why is Brandy doing this?
Uncertainty: Hope/fear – May be released or go to jail
Betrayal – she leaves him with a misunderstanding by the guards of what he did with the bears
Character changes radically – Brandy suddenly walks away
Creating a future – better have your toothbrush
Major Twist – Brandy pays a security guard as she leaves the room
Cliffhanger – Brandy leaves with his getting a slap on the wrist but the room gets very quiet when he asks, Is that it?
Dramatic Character Relationships:
Chief Security Guard: sly, powerful, greedy, amiable.
Character Subtext – Greg is playing both sides of this situation
Brandy/Chief:
Rapport – entertaining/amiable
Conflict – status seeking/powerful
Contrast – needy/greedy
Competition – deceptive/sly
Phillip/Chief:
Rapport – polite/amiable
Conflict – sense of entitlement/powerful
Contrast – guilt ridden/greedy
Competition – manipulative/sly
Reveals:
Current Situation/ Cover up: detained by security guards
Demand: threatened by guards
Reveal: revenge
Current Situation/ Cover up: being questioned
Demand: did he do it?
Reveal: she did it
Current Situation/ Cover up: he is in legal trouble
Demand: will he go to jail?
Reveal: he and chief are both in on his sister’s revenge scheme
Scene:
INT. ICE RINK – NIGHT
A skater twirls with a flourish as she completes her routine to hearty applause. Teddy bears rain onto the ice. One is picked up by a security guard who huddles with other guards. They nod and point up into the stands.
BRANDY
She’s my absolute favorite. I run her fan club.
PHILLIP
I know. I threw all the bears to her. Gently. And away from her.
Brandy, 13, is bright eyed and confident. Phillip beside her, 15, geeky and relaxed. He’s watching the action below them as seven security guards race up into the stands.
PHILLIP
Goodness! They must be after an entire gang.
Converging on the section where the two sit.
PHILLIP
The bad buys must be near us. I’ll protect you.
She moves close to him.
BRANDY
Please do.
They stop at Phillip who plops a nervous handful of raisins into his mouth.
PHILLIP
What’s shakin’?
SECURITY GUARD 1
We know what you did, sir. Come with us please.
He’s trying to process as he glances from one security guard to another, then blankly at Brandy who seems frozen to her seat, mute.
SECURITY GUARD 2
Now, sir.
Phillip pops up like a jack-in-the-box.
PHILLIP
(nervous laughter)
It must have been one of my church antics. I asked for forgiveness. I’m…under arrest?
SECURITY GUARD 1
Not yet, sir. Find this funny, do you?
PHILLIP
No! Absurd, maybe.
The Security Guard grabs him.
PHILLIP
Not you, I mean, the situation.
As he’s lifted and carried away, he glances at Brandy who is talking too softly to hear, to the Chief Security Guard who leads her away from their seats.
INT. SECURITY GUARD OFFICE – LATER
A dark, dank room with soundproofing on the walls and door.
Brandy and the chief security guard wink at one another as Phillip is tossed into a chair by four burly security guards who surround him. The Chief stands behind them.
Brandy drops to the floor beside Phillip, hugging his waist and crying out with a little too much drama.
BRANDY
Why are you doing this to my brother? All he did was throw my bears onto the ice for me. That’s what you do when you like a skater!
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
One of them had a detonator attached.
Brandy stands and stares down at her brother.
BRANDY
Detonator? Did you…?
PHILLIP
No! Of course not! Did you? You had the time.
Chief Security Guard glances at Brandy. Goes to the door and opens it.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
Tell you what. You can leave now, or stay for questioning. If you leave and we find evidence enough to bring you back in, things will not go well for you. Your choice.
Phillip stares at the open, beckoning door. Then at his sister. Then the guards.
PHILLIP
I’ll stay. I’m sure I will only get what I deserve.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
(smiling)
Let’s see. I can go get myself a cup of coffee while my cohorts here
(air quotes)
“talk” with you, or stay and
(air quotes)
“Talk” with you myself. Hmmm. I’ll stay.
One guard shines a light in Phillip’s face. A second un-clips then re-clips handcuffs onto his belt. Phillip’s eyes bug as he stares at a third guard. The guard ever so slowly un-holsters his baton, then smacks his palm with it over and over.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
Make yourself comfortable. You may be here a while.
A fourth guard jingles his handcuffs. Phillip stares at them. The guard jingles them again, glancing at Brandy to say, “that’s your cue.” She comes closer to Phillip.
BRANDY
This is all just a big misunderstanding. Phillip wouldn’t hurt a fly.
(at him)
Would you?
PHILLIP
No! I have no idea what this is all about! Did you do something bad?
BRANDY
Me? ME? Do something? When have I ever?
PHILLIP
True. True. Always a first time, though.
Chief Security Guard steps between them, pulls out a plastic detonator-looking device.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
And how do you explain this, around the neck of one of the bears?
Phillip moves to examine it; Chief Security Guard pulls it back and pockets it.
PHILLIP
Wait! That looks like plastic–
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
It’s real enough! And I’m the one asking the questions here.
BRANDY
Oh Phillip! How could you?
PHILLIP
I DIDN’T, I tell you.
BRANDY
(to chief security guard)
Do what you must with him! I have washed my hands of the whole affair.
(to Phillip)
Our parents will be SO disappointed to have a jail bird in the family! My own brother!
With a final glance back at her brother, she marches out the door that shuts with an ominous SLAM.
SECURITY GUARD 1
(to Phillip)
I hope you brought your toothbrush.
The four guards form a tight circle around Phillip.
PHILLIP
(to Chief Security Guard)
How much did she pay you, Greg?
The other guards stare at the two.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
Twenty dollars.
From his pocket he pulls out a bald doll.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
Said you cut her Barbie doll’s hair off.
PHILLIP
She said she wanted a punk Barbie. Then she got upset when she saw it. I know her well enough to know her look of revenge I saw that day. But this was elaborate even for her. Was I convincing?
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
A born actor.
PHILLIP
(to other guards)
You know you guys can’t arrest people unless they’ve actually committed a felony, right?
He disperses them with a dismissive wave. Embarrassed, they step back.
Phillip stands.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
Uh, twenty dollars. You said you would double whatever she paid me.
PHILLIP
Sure. I’ll get it for you from my parents when I get home. I’ll take of her then, too.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
When you get home?
Phillip pushes the Chief Security Guard.
PHILLIP
MOVE, Greg. Don’t get your underwear in a bundle; I’m good for it.
CHIEF SECURITY GUARD
Sit down, Phil.
All five burly guards surround the teen.
-
SCENE QE CYCLE #5 FIRST DRAFT
Essence: Lying can get you killed.
Logline: A couple take a drive along a treacherous mountain road that leads to a showdown.
EXT. MANSION – DAY
A young couple leave the mansion and dash to a parked car in the pouring rain.
INT. CAR – DAY
PHILLIP, 28, handsome and upper crust, sits behind the wheel.
BRANDY, 25, super cute, but nowhere near Phillip’s caliber, sits in the passenger seat.
PHILLIP
This is crazy. Yesterday you told me you’re pregnant and today you want to sample wedding cakes.
BRANDY
(Laughs as she ruffles his wet hair)
I know, right? But it’s not really crazy, is it? I mean we’ve been together for over a month now.
Phillip politely brushes her hand away from his head and holds it as he looks at her.
PHILLIP
No, we haven’t. Been together. And who said we were getting married?
Through a window an elegant-looking older woman stares at the car, a scowl on her face. Abruptly, she closes the curtains.
BRANDY
She hates me living here with you…
PHILLIP
It’s her house. She feels put upon.
BRANDY
But I’m going to be her daughter-in-law!
Phillip lets her hand go and shakes his head. He starts the car.
BRANDY
She’ll come to love me! Just like you did. You do love me, don’t you?
Phillip sighs. He puts on his left blinker and turns.
BRANDY
(pause)
Why are you making a left? The bakery is the other way.
PHILLIP
I’m sure this is the right way.
BRANDY
Only if you’re going over the mountain. Is that such a good idea in this rain? I mean, knowing what you’ve been through before on this road…
Phillip keeps checking his rearview mirror. Brandy notices. She glances behind them, but no one is there.
PHILLIP
Brandy, I don’t mind helping you out, but you’ve been living at my house since my birthday party a month ago.
BRANDY
I thought you wanted me here!
PHILLIP
Honestly, I’ve been too polite to ask you to leave!
BRANDY
Well it’s too late now, what with the baby and all.
PHILLIP
We never slept together.
BRANDY
You don’t remember waking up naked next to me?PHILLIP
That happened one time! And I don’t remember us –
(waves his hand back and forth between them)
Together! It’s impossible.
BRANDY
We were. And we could be again if only your mother didn’t keep me locked away from you every night.
PHILLIP
The guesthouse naturally has a different key from the main house.
Brandy shrugs, looks happily at her phone.
BRANDY
Let me tell you the flavors I picked to sample…red velvet, coconut and lime, pink champagne, carrot –
PHILLIP
I hate carrot.
BRANDY
Oh darn. I love carrot! Let’s go big and have two cakes!
Phillip frowns.
PHILLIP
Brandy, I think you’re super nice, a lot of fun, great laughs, but we barely know each other…
Brandy begins to cry.
PHILLIP
Please don’t cry. Don’t you have anywhere to go?BRANDY
Are you breaking up with me?PHILLIP
What about your parents?
BRANDY
They’re probably sailing in the Mediterranean. And my brother is on tour, the violinist. My other brother is studying penguins in the antarctic.
Phillip looks at her oddly. She bursts out laughing.
BRANDY (CONT)
No. I have not heard from them.
(looks at phone)
I’m thinking a three tiered cake with a bride and groom on the top. I love those.
The road turns mountainous. The rain gets heavier. Phillip goes too fast around a curve. Brandy looks up as a truck passes and nearly hits them. Brandy screams.
BRANDY (CONT)
Phillip! Jesus! That was close.Phillip begins to shake and sweat visibly pours from his forehead.
PHILLIP
I need to find a pull out. I can’t see the road! Brandy! Help me!
BRANDY
Take your foot off the gas!
(covers his hand on the steering wheel with hers)
You’re having a panic attack. Breathe. In and out through your nose.
Brandy takes a few deep breaths and Phillip follows. He begins to relax.
BRANDY
Good. Go slow, ride it out. Driving in the rain is a trigger for you. You’re having a physical reaction to a memory, that’s all.
Phillip regains his composure as the rain suddenly lets up. He looks over at Brandy with gratitude.
PHILLIP
Thanks. All I could think about was her…final moments…I feel such…
His voice catches. He can’t get it out.
Brandy puts her hand on his shoulder. Phillip sheds a few tears. Brandy wipes one away.
BRANDY
It wasn’t your fault. It was an accident.
They drive in silence for a moment. The rain completely stops and the sun comes out.
Phillip perks up. He smiles at Brandy.
PHILLIP
You know what? I do like carrot cake. The first pull out I see we are turning around.
A POLICE SIREN
Phillip looks in his rearview mirror.
PHILLIP
Oh, shit. I forgot.
He steps on the accelerator.
BRANDY
What are you doing? Phillip! Stop!
Phillip ignores her, swerving around the curves, driving recklessly away from the cop who is now in hot pursuit.
BRANDY (CONT)
(points to the side of a cliff)
Pull over!
Phillip keeps going.
BRANDY
Please God, let me live to become Mrs. Phillip Wurst the 3rd, the sausage prince of America!
Phillip reacts with surprise. He takes his foot off the gas pedal.
Brandy smiles. She sighs deeply. She doesn’t see Phillip scowling.
Phillip takes the next pull over and the police car follows.
EXT. CAR – DAY
OFFICER FRANK, 30 and chiseled, walks to the driver’s side, his gun out.
Phillip grins, his hands on the wheel.
PHILLIP
Really darling, do you think that is necessary?
The Cop looks at Phillip and smirks. Brandy gets out of the car. Officer Frank immediately points the gun at her.
OFFICER FRANK
Freeze!
Brandy ignores him and continues to walk around the car to the driver’s side.
BRANDY
(points to Phillip)
Do you know who he is?
OFFICER FRANK
I said, freeze!
Brandy continues to walk toward him, causing Officer Frank to step back. Phillip makes funny faces behind Brandy’s back that only Officer Frank can see.
BRANDY
He is Phillip Wurst, the sausage prince of America! Heir to Wurst Pork Industries! And I’m his fiancee!
OFFICER FRANK
Shut up! Put your hands in the air!
BRANDY
The Wursts own this town and the police in it! Don’t mess with us or you’ll be busted to street patrol or a desk job, whatever you hate the most.
The Officer Frank grabs Brandy by the arm and whirls her around, pushing her onto the car.
BRANDY
Hey that hurts! Phillip, tell him to stop.
Officer Frank handcuffs her.
Phillip gets out of the car and walks over to her.
PHILLIP
My mother saw your pregnancy test in the garbage can. It was negative. Even if it was positive, I knew it wasn’t mine.
Phillip walks up to the Officer Frank and gives him a sloppy kiss.
PHILLIP
You see, we don’t play on the same team.
(to Frank)
Thank you, darling.
OFFICER FRANK
(enamored and wounded at the same time)
Why did you speed away from me? You could have been killed.
PHILLIP
(shrugs)
For a moment, I felt like cake.
Brandy tries to run away, but Phillip trips her and she lands face down in the mud.
PHILLIP
What to do?
He lifts her up easily to her feet.
PHILLIP
(looking out over the cliff at the expansive mountain view)
With you?
Phillip and Officer Frank begin to laugh.
PHILLIP
That was no accident that killed my greedy little sister.
BRANDY
(gasps)
You?
PHILLIP
That’s right. Doesn’t mean I don’t feel bad about it. Just like I’ll feel bad about you from time to time.
OFFICER FRANK
Best to avoid this road from now on, baby.
PHILLIP
Good idea.
Phillip grabs Officer Frank’s revolver and points it at Brandy’s head.
PHILLIP
You think you can weasel your way into our filthy rich lives. Well you’re wrong. Except the part about us owning the town and the police.
He cocks the gun and Brandy gasps, shutting her eyes to the inevitable about to unfold when suddenly –
WOMAN’S VOICE (O.S.)
Put the gun down, Phillip.
Phillip looks up to see his Mother standing there, pointing a gun at him.
-
Critique of Carolyn Bliesener SCENE QE CYCLE #5 FIRST DRAFT
Essence: Lying can get you killed.
Logline: A couple take a drive along a treacherous mountain road that leads to a showdown.
EXT. MANSION – DAY
A young couple leave the mansion and dash to a parked car in the pouring rain.
INT. CAR – DAY
PHILLIP, 28, handsome and upper crust, sits behind the wheel.
BRANDY, 25, super cute, but nowhere near Phillip’s caliber, sits in the passenger seat.
PHILLIP
This is crazy. Yesterday you told me you’re pregnant and today you want to sample wedding cakes. Anticipatory dialogue
BRANDY
(Laughs as she ruffles his wet hair)
I know, right? But it’s not really crazy, is it? I mean we’ve been together for over a month now.
Phillip politely brushes her hand away from his head and holds it as he looks at her.
PHILLIP
No, we haven’t. Been together. And who said we were getting married?
Uncomfortable momentThrough a window an elegant-looking older woman stares at the car, a scowl on her face. Abruptly, she closes the curtains. Intrigue
BRANDY
She hates me living here with you…
PHILLIP
It’s her house. She feels put upon.
BRANDY
But I’m going to be her daughter-in-law!
Phillip lets her hand go and shakes his head. He starts the car.
BRANDY
She’ll come to love me! Just like you did. You do love me, don’t you?
Phillip sighs. He puts on his left blinker and turns.
BRANDY
(pause)
Why are you making a left? The bakery is the other way. Suspense
PHILLIP
I’m sure this is the right way. Intrigue
BRANDY
Only if you’re going over the mountain. Is that such a good idea in this rain? I mean, knowing what you’ve been through before on this road… Twist
Phillip keeps checking his rearview mirror. Brandy notices. She glances behind them, but no one is there. Mystery
PHILLIP
Brandy, I don’t mind helping you out, but you’ve been living at my house since my birthday party a month ago. Uncertainty
BRANDY
I thought you wanted me here! Misinterpretation
PHILLIP
Honestly, I’ve been too polite to ask you to leave! Surprise
BRANDY
Well, it’s too late now, what with the baby and all. Twist
PHILLIP
We never slept together.
BRANDY
You don’t remember waking up naked next to me?PHILLIP
That happened one time! And I don’t remember us –
(waves his hand back and forth between them)
Together! It’s impossible. Uncertainty
BRANDY
We were. And we could be again if only your mother didn’t keep me locked away from you every night. Surprise
PHILLIP
The guesthouse naturally has a different key from the main house.
Brandy shrugs, looks happily at her phone.
BRANDY
Let me tell you the flavors I picked to sample…red velvet, coconut and lime, pink champagne, carrot –
PHILLIP
I hate carrot.
BRANDY
Oh darn. I love carrot! Let’s go big and have two cakes!
Phillip frowns.
PHILLIP
Brandy, I think you’re super nice, a lot of fun, great laughs, but we barely know each other…
Brandy begins to cry.
PHILLIP
Please don’t cry. Don’t you have anywhere to go?BRANDY
Are you breaking up with me?PHILLIP
What about your parents?
BRANDY
They’re probably sailing in the Mediterranean. And my brother is on tour, the violinist. My other brother is studying penguins in the Antarctic.
Phillip looks at her oddly. She bursts out laughing.
BRANDY (CONT)
No. I have not heard from them.
(looks at phone)
I’m thinking a three-tiered cake with a bride and groom on top. I love those.
The road turns mountainous. The rain gets heavier. Phillip goes too fast around a curve. Brandy looks up as a truck passes and nearly hits them. Brandy screams. Surprise
BRANDY (CONT)
Phillip! Jesus! That was close.Phillip begins to shake and sweat visibly pours from his forehead.
PHILLIP
I need to find a pull out. I can’t see the road! Brandy! Help me! Suspense
BRANDY
Take your foot off the gas!
(covers his hand on the steering wheel with hers)
You’re having a panic attack. Breathe. In and out through your nose.
Brandy takes a few deep breaths and Phillip follows. He begins to relax.
BRANDY
Good. Go slow, ride it out. Driving in the rain is a trigger for you. You’re having a physical reaction to a memory, that’s all.
Phillip regains his composure as the rain suddenly lets up. He looks over at Brandy with gratitude.
PHILLIP
Thanks. All I could think about was her…final moments…I feel such… Mystery
His voice catches. He can’t get it out.
Brandy puts her hand on his shoulder. Phillip sheds a few tears. Brandy wipes one away.
BRANDY
It wasn’t your fault. It was an accident. Mystery
They drive in silence for a moment. The rain completely stops and the sun comes out.
Phillip perks up. He smiles at Brandy.
PHILLIP
You know what? I do like carrot cake. The first pull out I see we are turning around. Intrigue
A POLICE SIREN
Phillip looks in his rearview mirror.
PHILLIP
Oh, shit. I forgot.
He steps on the accelerator.
BRANDY
What are you doing? Phillip! Stop!
Phillip ignores her, swerving around the curves, driving recklessly away from the cop who is now in hot pursuit. Surprise
BRANDY (CONT)
(points to the side of a cliff)
Pull over!
Phillip keeps going.
BRANDY
Please God, let me live to become Mrs. Phillip Wurst the 3rd, the sausage prince of America!
Phillip reacts with surprise. He takes his foot off the gas pedal.
Brandy smiles. She sighs deeply. She doesn’t see Phillip scowling. Mystery
Phillip takes the next pull over and the police car follows.
EXT. CAR – DAY
OFFICER FRANK, 30 and chiseled, walks to the driver’s side, his gun out.
Phillip grins, his hands on the wheel.
PHILLIP
Really darling, do you think that is necessary? Surprise
The Cop looks at Phillip and smirks. Brandy gets out of the car. Officer Frank immediately points the gun at her.
OFFICER FRANK
Freeze!
Brandy ignores him and continues to walk around the car to the driver’s side.
BRANDY
(points at Phillip)
Do you know who he is?
OFFICER FRANK
I said, freeze!
Brandy continues to walk toward him, causing Officer Frank to step back. Phillip makes funny faces behind Brandy’s back that only Officer Frank can see. Intrigue
BRANDY
He is Phillip Wurst, the sausage prince of America! Heir to Wurst Pork Industries! And I’m his fiancée!
OFFICER FRANK
Shut up! Put your hands in the air! Suspense
BRANDY
The Wursts own this town and the police in it! Don’t mess with us or you’ll be busted to street patrol or a desk job, whatever you hate the most.
The Officer Frank grabs Brandy by the arm and whirls her around, pushing her onto the car.
BRANDY
Hey that hurts! Phillip, tell him to stop.
Officer Frank handcuffs her. Surprise
Phillip gets out of the car and walks over to her.
PHILLIP
My mother saw your pregnancy test in the garbage can. It was negative. Even if it was positive, I knew it wasn’t mine.
Phillip walks up to the Officer Frank and gives him a sloppy kiss. Surprise
PHILLIP
You see, we don’t play on the same team. Surprise
(to Frank)
Thank you, darling.
OFFICER FRANK
(enamored and wounded at the same time)
Why did you speed away from me? You could have been killed.
PHILLIP
(shrugs)
For a moment, I felt like cake.
Brandy tries to run away, but Phillip trips her and she lands face down in the mud.
PHILLIP
What to do?
He lifts her up easily to her feet.
PHILLIP
(looking out over the cliff at the expansive mountain view)
With you?
Phillip and Officer Frank begin to laugh. Demand
PHILLIP
That was no accident that killed my greedy little sister. Reveal
BRANDY
(gasps)
You?
PHILLIP
That’s right. Doesn’t mean I don’t feel bad about it. Just like I’ll feel bad about you from time to time. Anticipatory dialogue
OFFICER FRANK
Best to avoid this road from now on, baby.
PHILLIP
Good idea.
Phillip grabs Officer Frank’s revolver and points it at Brandy’s head. Surprise
PHILLIP
You think you can weasel your way into our filthy rich lives. Well, you’re wrong. Except the part about us owning the town and the police.
He cocks the gun and Brandy gasps, shutting her eyes to the inevitable about to unfold when suddenly –
WOMAN’S VOICE (O.S.)
Put the gun down, Phillip.
Phillip looks up to see his Mother standing there, pointing a gun at him. Cliffhanger
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LOGLINE: A car accident draws more than one scammer.
ESSENCE: Everyone wants to fleece everyone else.
SCENE: A Lamborghini runs off a country road.
EXT. TWO LANE HIGHWAY WHERE TWO TOWNSHIPS MEET – NIGHT
NANCY smacks SQUIRE when he wants to help her exit a Lamborghini that’s in a ditch.
Their sports car just wiped out a giant high voltage steel tower.
Big boned Nancy’s outfit and hairdo are decades younger than her late-forties.
Squire’s smile charms. His eyes scheme. Jet black hair belies his sixty-plus years.
SQUIRE
But what the hell just happened? I could have
been killed. You could have handled this a lot better.NANCY
Are you okay? Cuts, bruises? If you
hit your head, you can’t be injured.SQUIRE
One minute I’m on top of the world.
Next I see law suits and jail time.NANCY
You and you’re damn senior moments. You sweet-talked
me into doing this. Now we’re aimed straight downhill.SQUIRE
One minute we have the usual heated
discussion. Next, we tramp around in the boonies.NANCY
Our best days are behind us.
So much for a rosy future.SQUIRE
You just totaled a quarter-million
dollar wet dream rental car.NANCY
And you were too cheap to take the comprehensive
insurance. Our financial future is a freshly dug grave!A police car arrives. Policewoman OFFICER FRITZ exits and opens her notebook.
Nancy rushes up to her.
NANCY
Good to see a female on the job. I’m always
looking for ways to jack up – not off – guys
who follow their joints around looking to stick it in …Squire steps up sporting his smoothest smile for Officer Fritz.
SQUIRE
Your hair looks good. You got here so quick.
Did someone call or …Officer Fritz nods at the downed steel tower.
OFFICER FRITZ
First clue was our power went out …SQUIRE
You’re so smart. You should be the police chief.OFFICER FRITZ
Actually I am. Also, receptionist, janitor and maid.NANCY
You the only one at the cop house.SQUIRE
She meant “police station,” didn’t you, Honey?NANCY
Don’t honey me, cocksucker. After what you did.OFFICER FRITZ
Whoa! What happened here? Sir?ANOTHER COP CAR – flashing lights, siren – speeds at them.
Nancy nods at Squire.
NANCY
He had way too many snorts at your
dumpy diner. Had to check his Schwab account
on his phone doing twenty over the speed limit.Fritz writes.
Squire gapes at Nancy like she’s possessed.
SQUIRE
I’m sure you’re smarter than to believe that, Officer.
It was her who insisted on driving. I let her. My bad.NANCY
If it was me driving, we wouldn’t be in this hellhole.SQUIRE
Officer, she didn’t mean that. I bet your cozy
little community has a comfy motel a ways out
of town where town folk renew old acquaintances.OFFICER FRITZ
Let’s see your drivers’ licenses.Squire and Nancy hand them over.
OFFICER FRITZ
Same last name. You’re married.NANCY
Were. He pimps me now instead of pumping. I wear
knee pads. Mouth wash a dozen times a day. He says
it’s how I earn my alimony.The other police car screeches to a halt. Uniformed OFFICER MARLON fumbles from the car, tightens his belt that holds up heavy cop paraphernalia.
He tries to look older than his 20 years. Rushes back to grab his uniform hat. Joins them.
Nancy spreads her arms. Fields a grin like she will mount this lad where he stands.
NANCY
Do we get to vote which officer cuffs us face
down. Does what he must to get us to
come. Up. Again and again. With the truth.OFFICER FRITZ
All taken care of, Officer Marlon.Officer Marlon whips out a GPS. Waves it in a loop for the best signal.
OFFICER MARLON
Not according to this. Their vee-hickle’s
just inside our town border.OFFICER FRITZ
Skid marks. They left the pavement
on our side of the border. It’s my collar.OFFICER MARLON
But it’s my turn.NANCY
Are you two screwing with us?Officer Marlon composes himself. Tries to think of something cop-ish to say.
Squire uses his best sad face on Officer Fritz.
SQUIRE
I’m not used to all this drama. How serious is it?
Fritz glances at the wrecked Lambo and broken high voltage tower.
A utility truck pulls up. Workmen carry equipment to the downed tower.
OFFICER FRITZ
Car moving plenty fast. Driver lost control. Pure
and simple. Don’t know what you pay for electricity.
Next month’s bill’s gonna be a whopper.MARLON
What about that deer?
Fritz stops writing.
Squire blinks, staggers in a circle. Did he say ‘a deer’? Am I losing my mind?
Marlon shows him several pictures of deer galloping across the highway.
Squire’s face lights up.
SQUIRE
Oh, I forgot. Swerved to avoid that critter.
Made us to run off the road.He reaches for one of Marlon’s pictures. Marlon pulls it back.
MARLON
How much cash yah got on yah?OFFICER FRITZ
Better yet.She holds an attacking 7-foot grizzly bear photo, Photoshopped into the middle of the two lane.
MARLON
My deer are more believable.Squire looks through his wallet.
SQUIRE
Two thousand.Marlon examines Squire’s tiny wallet.
MARLON
I spotted more inside that there flap.SQUIRE
Those are grocery store coupons.OFFICER FRITZ
How about the fierce-some bear for $1800?Marlon shuffles his deck and produces another photo.
MARLON
My best deer for $1775.A car with a State Farm Insurance ad on its side parks.
OFFICER FRITZ
That’s Mel. Your time’s just about run out.Squire wipes sweat off his neck and takes deep breathes.
Nancy takes his hand.
NANCY
What’ll it be? Defrauding the insurance
company, or do you have an extra quarter
million to buy the wrecked booty-magnet?SQUIRE
What about the tower of power?
I bet it costs more than the Lambo.MARLON
For $2000, which deer picture do you like?SQUIRE
You just said $1775.OFFICER FRITZ
A person’s better motivated to run off the
road by a bear than a deer. $3000. Final price.MARLON
The man has only $2000.Fritz whips out a wireless credit card reader. She waves it in a loop.
OFFICER FRITZ
Good signal.Reluctantly Squire pulls out a credit card.
MARLON
If you want my best deer, I’ll let it go for $2500.SQUIRE
Why’s the price keep spiking for Chrissakes?MARLON
It’s a true mystery.Fritz holds the card reader under Marlon’s nose.
OFFICER FRITZ
If you wanta use my
machine, we be splittin’ it.In his eighties, insurance man Mel exits his car with a clipboard. Takes pictures of the sports car and electric tower. Joins the others.
MEL
What’s happened to these lovely children?Fritz looks at Squire and Nancy.
OFFICER FRITZ
Give us a moment.She takes Mel by the arm and walks him over to the Lamborghini.
They exchange whispered shouts and return.
Mel hands Squire the clipboard.
MEL
Sign at the bottom.SQUIRE
Xeroxed handwriting. It ain’t mine.MEL
It’s your account of how that horrible beast …He turns to Fritz and Marlon.
MEL
So what’s it this time? The bear or the deer?In horror, Squire stares at Nancy. She doesn’t even try to hide her grin. #
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