Day 3 Assignments

Sherri Coffee

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March 28, 2022 at 8:02 pm

Sherri D. Coffee -Transformational Journey

What I learned doing this assignment was to structure the old ways and new ways to help construct the story and the journey.

1. Logline: A naive idealistic woman joins a lobby firm to build healthcare coalitions to “change the world”. She discovers an apathetic political system resistant to change. To “make lives better”, she must develop the necessary skills to penetrate the closed system.

2. Old ways: Naive. Lack of experience and political knowledge. Idealistic. She believes she can convince politicians to support better healthcare policies by sharing the facts. She continues to apply the logical data to all who will listen. Until she fails.

3. New ways: Knowledgeable and trained. Polished and well informed. Savvy. She learns what influences the system and leverages that knowledge to achieve her goals. She builds relationships to influence the system.

Linda Anderson

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March 28, 2022 at 10:07 pm

Linda’s Transformational Journey

I learned to be more specific about the Old and New Ways to make the transformation more compelling

1. Tell us your logline for the transformational journey.

In 2004, a young military chaplain, on his first tour of duty in Iraq, persuades his war-hardened commander to let him and two others stay behind when their bombed-out base is evacuation, even though he’s risking all their lives to fulfill a sacred promise to 20 fallen soldiers.

2. Tell us what you see as the Old Ways.

Inexperienced, superiority complex, rejecting how his father taught him to minister, not good with warmth and relationships, intellectual approach to being a chaplain

3. Tell us what you see as the New Ways.

Wiser and more empathetic, nonjudgmental, knows the benefit of warmth in relationships, sees his father’s ways as an asset, in touch with his deep emotions, willing to put himself on the line for others

Patrick Malone

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March 28, 2022 at 11:25 pm

Patrick Malone’s Transformational Journey

What I learned is where the journey begins for the transformational character and where it is likely to end. I filled in the edges of the puzzle.

1. Logline for the transformational journey:

An American Indian who has rejected his culture/heritage is confronted by an alien bent on killing his white friends. Only by embracing his native spirituality can he save his friends.

2. The Old Ways:

He lives in the dominant white world and disdains his heritage. He sees most Indians as poor, uneducated, and addicted.

3. The New Way:

He recognizes the natural qualities of his culture within himself. They are powerful and positive qualities. He embraces them and will use them to help his people.

Laura Hyler

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March 29, 2022 at 1:09 am

Laura Hyler’s Transformational Journey Assignment

What I learned from doing this assignment is that even when you think you have your story down pat, there are things that are difficult to answer concisely.

My Logline for the Transformational Journey

Logline:

A naïve widow must learn how to handle racism, or risk losing the love of her life.

The Old Ways

The lead character lost touch with the world around her while raising her children and caring for a terminally ill spouse. She believes that she is living in a “post-racial America.”

The New Ways

As a direct result of events in her life, she sees things through a new lense, when she experiences racist thinking towards her and her beau. She learns how to deal with racism instead of avoiding it.

Brenda Riolo

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March 29, 2022 at 1:29 am

Brenda’s Transformational Journey

What I learned doing this assignment is I wasn’t sure who the transformable character was in my story, and this assignment helped me choose one over the other. So I’m choosing one at this point, but I think both characters have a transformational journey in the story. I think the young son is a bit more dramatic for me at this point. I’m kind thinking my story idea may be a bit too complicated for a screenplay, but I’d like to see if I can make it simple so it’s easier to tell on screen.

1. Tell us your logline for the transformational journey. A depressed and lonely dying child begs his professional treasure hunter mother to take him on a treasure hunt, and they both discover that treasure and love can be found even in a hospital.

2. Tell us what you see as the Old Ways. The young boy is lonely and depressed. He doesn’t think his single mother loves him because he’s sick and because she’s always away on treasure hunting gigs. He feels damaged and broken inside and out and not a part of his mother’s life because of his illness. He acts out and treats his mother cruelly sometimes because he knows he’s supposed to love her but he can’t right now.

3. Tell us what you see as the New Ways. The young boy begins to treat his mother with kindness. He begins to understand her as a person, and why she keeps so busy. He learns that there isn’t anything wrong with him other than his illness. He and his mother learn to love each other.

Leanne Lucas

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March 29, 2022 at 4:12 pm

I learned that it is very difficult to show emotional/spiritual changes from old to new ways in a concrete, physical manner.

A Pilgrim girl, orphaned in the New World, struggles to survive the harsh conditions on her own strength until she comes to understand and truly believes the Lord will sustain her through anything.

OLD WAYS

· Questions God’s plan

· Makes her own plan

· Learns to shoot a gun

· Plants and waters crop despite drought

NEW WAYS

· Acknowledges God is in control, even when she doesn’t see answers to her prayers

· Accepts her elders guidance

· Recognizes violence is not the best way to survive

· Helps others with their crops

Sherwen Moore

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March 29, 2022 at 6:47 pm

Sherwen Moore – Transformational Journey

I learned that this is a great way to analyze your story and have it reach a point of interest. The beginning is just as important as the journey itself and the ending is nothing without the beginning. That is the puzzle for me…getting all the pieces right.

Logline:

A former agent quits the Agency to become a community activist but finds out he is still needed in law enforcement. A dinner engagement inadvertently entangles him with a rookie policeman in an intricate case that includes a hostage situation

Old Ways: Critical of law enforcement, cynical about the justice system, no confidence that police get it right, quit old job because he thought they were selfish, unfair and incompetent.

New Ways: Worked with a rookie policeman to resolve an intricate and complex crime. He became more tolerant, less critical, more objective, and willing to share skills he perfected in the Agency.

Lisandro Boccacci

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March 29, 2022 at 9:40 pm

Lisandro’s Transformational Journey

1. A Cherokee boy and his family are forced out of their homeland by the US Government joining their tribe in long treacherous journey across the states toward Oklahoma to start a new life.

2 Old Ways: In the old ways, much like Apocalypto, the boy is living with his family, enjoying life rather peacefully with his family and friend. Enjoying life as a free creature of earth.

3New Ways:

They have to pack up everything and move, all by force, if necessary, their peaceful little way of living has been stripped. Thier friends hurt, or worse killed. They lose mostly everything and suffer greatly just to get to the boats and ferry across to get to Oklahoma.

4.What i learned doing this assignment is how having your puzzles picked out and placed at the bookends of the journey, really helps you connect, and helps you discover what it could be, I enjoyed the thinking process behind that, and these simple steps really helped guide that.

Pat Shelby

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March 30, 2022 at 2:12 am

Pat’s Transformational Journey

What I learned doing this assignment is that defining the start and end points of the character arc and the qualities the character will demonstrate are key to defining the gradient changes.

1. Tell us your logline for the transformational journey.

A young man dreams of becoming a lauded Shakespearean actor, but when challenged by systematic racism, he neglects his wife and son before learning family is his most important accomplishment.

2. Tell us what you see as the Old Ways.

· Selfish

· Neglectful husband

· Neglectful parent

· Unfaithful

· Sees being American as a burden

· No desire to return home to visit relatives

3. Tell us what you see as the New Ways.

· Generous

· Tentative husband

· Adoring parent

· Monogamous

· Wants to return home to see family

· Wants to mentor American youth

Edward Brown

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March 31, 2022 at 1:01 pm

Edward Brown transition, I learned before/after important but need more ways for audience identify with characters and less preaching

Tanya old Ways : George old ways: Creator old ways:

Wants waltze wants sailor mate natural selection

At big ball win Mackinaw evolution

Self centered neglects self prophets

Vamp vampable Jesus

Czarina not assertive church/mosque/temp

Stay in Siberra Michigan sex for bonding

Don’t go Detroit no go to Siberia sapiens now smart

Lover/husband: wants total synergy partner know better

Infulencial George New ways less intervention

Help her career while still Go giver “in book”

Establish in society resist being vamped be Go Givers

Not a business owner like George resist being father suckered new Ways

Not slob like George will clean up/org parableTV Series

Not live in warehouse like George maybe an apartment/or opposites:

Not use hands for living like George live on boat G + T

Not associated with other races like George assert male prerogatives romance

not in command or assertive demand synergy Mars:

But because George: new way

Romantic Sapiens make peace or extinct

GOOD FATHER

Coachable

Makes women happy

Believes in dragons like her father

Tanya agrees or promotes meeting face to her pretty face hoping to vamp George into being a compliant Lover

David Bruno

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April 19, 2022 at 8:51 pm

David
Bruno, profound script class

What
I learned doing this assignment…

I
learned that the transformational journey is essential to a
profound script. The lead character must change and must
abandon the ‘old ways’ for the ‘new ways’.

DAY
3 LESSONS FOR A PROFOUND SCRIPT

ASSIGNMENTS:

Tell
us your log-line for the transformational journey.

”An
Evolutionary Biologist obsessed with finding the origins of Modern
Man comes to discover that the human species, Homo Sapiens, were
exiled to earth by aliens as the population of a penal colony.”

2.
Tell us
what you see as the Old Ways.

The old ways come
from academic viewpoints of established conventions. Such as the
theory of evolution, limitation of known propulsion methods for
space travel, old attitudes of disbelief concerning aliens, the fermi
paradox, etc.

3.
Tell us
what you see as the New Ways.

The new ways are an
open mind to possibilities of space travel using technology unknown
to academia. A view of man’s limitation of intelligence to know the
unknown and the possibilities of new knowledge

that contradict
established conventions.

4.
Answer
the question “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” (place
at top of your work).

5.
Post to
the forums at https://www.screenwritingclasses.com/forums/

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