Day 4: What I learned rewriting my scene/character…?

[Joan Butler]

Insights: My triangle is the racist female police chief, the male First Nations protester, and my protagonist, the female reporter. She tries to remain neutral while the other two try to convince her, he or she is right. This occurs over several scenes in different parts of the script. I don’t know if having them spread out is good or bad.

[Mi Lock]

I updated a sequence with a love triangle situation, tension between the two men is very tangible and I had a male character say his line without looking at the female character, as it reflects his feelings of being hurt stronger. The female character understands he’s been jealous so he still has feelings for her.

[Ann Marie]

what i learned was that a scene which i had only thought of as one character dropping in on the other two, suddenly offered a lot of opportunity in this triangular relationship, to build intrigue, subtext, hinting at past history and living into the future moments in a more focused nuanced way. It became a more important and revealing scene than I had first thought it was.

[Robert Kerr]

Bob Kerr:

What I learned rewriting my scene.

In my script there is a natural Triangle situation between the lead female character (Fran), her controlling father and the World Champion rowing coach. I have ignored this situation.

The breakthrough, by focusing on this Triangle situation, there is far more conflict, tension and struggle for transformation that will make the scenes and the script much more interesting.