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Day 5 Assignments
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Kathy’s Villain Has a Great Plan!
“What I learned is that I have a good start.”
What is the end goal? What are they trying to accomplish or stop that is so valuable that they’ll go to any means to achieve the goal?
Ben’s goal is to sell Simone’s house and keep the money for himself and Marcie.
How can the Villain accomplish that in a devious way? Brainstorm devious, dangerous, covert, and even disturbing ways your Villain could make all of this could happen.
Ben marries lonely single women who own expensive houses, gets control of their houses, divorces them, then sells their houses.
How can they cover it up? Ben is a handsome charming con man. He partners with Marcie to find women who are recently divorced and have expensive houses. He woos them, marries them, then cons them into putting his name on the deed. Marcie is his secret partner/lover.
Sequence it to make it as intriguing as possible, starting with a first event that is dangerous.
The first scene shows Ben’s ex-wife in a wheelchair at the airport, checking in for a flight to Portugal. We see her name on her passport. She tells both the gate agent and Simone that she is not coming back. She has a cast on her left leg. On the way to security, she drops her passport and Simone, who is there to greet Ben, picks it up. Simone doesn’t see her name on the passport.
Mystery: Who is the woman with a cast? Why is she leaving the country?
Intrigue: Why is she wearing a cast?
Suspense: Possibly someone put this lady in a dangerous situation and she was injured. She is so frightened that she is leaving the country.
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H Kathy. This will make a great story as so many have lived it in divorces and estate battles. This will be fun to see how you escalate!! I wrote a book on divorces and real estate which has some pretty wicked true stories with names changed to protect the writer – I will send you a copy or email you a pdf of the book. mikewilliamsen@gmail.com
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Just emailed you, thanks.
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I don’t see it in my emails. Can you please send again and I will send you my book
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“House snatching” is common for divorced people. I don’t understand this concept. Won’t women, and the disabled, object? Or is it that Simone rises out of the chaos to save the day for all victims?
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Jeff, house snatching is very common in divorce (my latest book) and especially in estate battles (next book once I get this screenplay up and running.
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Jeff Guenther’s – Villain Has a Great Plan!
“What I learned is…?” The villain’s GOAL must be something he/she really wants, something big. It must be sought through clandestine actions. The PLAN must cover the villain’s tracks and, as a side-effect, create major conflict for the Hero.
1. WHAT IS THE END GOAL? – to sacrifice indigent patients to Moloch and harvest their organs. A bit rude.
2. HOW CAN THE VILLAIN ACCOMPLISH THAT IN A DEVIOUS WAY? – run the hospital into bankruptcy and take it over. Cause the hospital to get a reputation for being haunted.
3. HOW CAN THEY COVER IT UP? – Replace nurses who quit with the Villain’s own people. Operate under the name of a mysterious holding company. “C.O. Jones Holding Co.” Create a smoke-screen with the adolescent patient.
4. SEQUENCE IT TO MAKE IT AS INTRIGUING AS POSSIBLE? – “Possessed” girl is admitted to Hospital. Poltergeist phenomena ensue. Someone recommends calling in an exorcist. The girl’s mother recommends an exorcist affiliated with a cult (as suggested by the father, but we don’t know that.) The exorcism results in disaster. Mother and father sue for custody. Their attorneys foreshadow the arrival of Moloch, himself. The phenomena go on. People quit, except for the MC. Interesting patients come and go. Head nun is at risk.
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Anyone here want to discuss these lessons over the phone? Could be fun!!
Text first (I’m in Los Angeles and don’t text before 10 am PST)
818 523-6586
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This reply was modified 3 years, 8 months ago by James Ridgley.
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I thought the point of the Confidentiality Agreement and THIS Forum is to discuss it here. I’m disappointed that there is very little conversation and interaction. Why do you want to take this offline?
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Because I talk better than the snail pace of messaging. Talking we can work on understanding concepts better – The speed of back and forth on the phone is much more fruitful and I like the personal aspect of it as well.
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I hear you. Thanks.
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Jim (?) that might be fun. SU expects us to interact among ourselves so I don’t see a problem among consenting adults.
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Subject Line: Roscoe’s – Villain Has a Great Plan!
“What I learned is…?” How very important a villain is in a thriller.
1. WHAT IS THE END GOAL? – The Navajo “Skinwalker/Witch” is a jealous family member. He/She wants to kill family clan in order to gain inheritance.
2. HOW CAN THE VILLAIN ACCOMPLISH THAT IN A DEVIOUS WAY? – To spiritually “Shape-Shift” into animals and to kill.
3. HOW CAN THEY COVER IT UP? – The ‘Skinwalker/Witch” will shape-shift back into human form to cover tracks.
4. SEQUENCE IT TO MAKE IT AS INTRIGUING AS POSSIBLE? – The “Skinwalker/Witch” comes out only at night. He/She will kill the weakest family members first. It will lead up to killing the oldest daughter who gets the family inheritance (Land and money on Indian Reservation.).
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I’m trying to understand the “law” in this world. Are you saying that murders may claim inheritances of their victims? That’s impossible/unbelievable.
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Hey Jeff – This is a super-natural thriller. There is no “Law”, but there will be retribution. I can only follow this class with each assignment. It’s just a growing idea. RP
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Thanks Roscoe. Super-natural is a challenge for me. That’s why I ask. I wish you the best, and hope to see it one day!
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Jeff – Sure. People kill people all the time to get their inheritance. It may not be a bullet in the head, but pull them off life support, switch meds, neglect. Hospice is the grim reaper of Medicar. Death bed wills are very common, very hard and expensive to contest…
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Jeff – Sure. People kill people all the time to get their inheritance. It may not be a bullet in the head, but pull them off life support, switch meds, neglect. Hospice is the grim reaper of Medicar. Death bed wills are very common, very hard and expensive to contest…
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Jeff’s villain has a great plan.
What I learned is…?
1. Get money
2. Steal/con it
3. Go bankrupt
4. Legit business & front, mama & friends love you, charm everyone, know the law/rules, smooth alibis for the cops… you get the money. But others ensure you won’t keep it.
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I’m assuming go bk to get away with the money?
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He is going through personal bankruptcy but doesn’t need to disclose this fact as he carries on his incorporated business, which is a separate entity. Ultimately his corporation goes bankrupt to avoid paying creditors, and yes, so he can effectively steal the hero’s money. He tells the hero that the proceeds from the sale of his heirloom boat were taken by the government when they seized all accounts to cover back-taxes (personal, corporate, and employees’ payroll taxes).
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James’ Villain has a great plan!
I got very confused as to what exactly counts as Intrigue and what is the Covered Secrets. My original thoughts were more MIS again. Revised and we’ll see how it pans out. When I look at the list for CHINATOWN – things like cutting the nose of the Hero – at this stage in creating our stories it’s terribly hard to know what details will be in my script to point out like that. I will say this is exciting stuff to work out. It’s a fresh approach to developing a story I have never done before. Makes my head swim in a good way.
VILLIAN’S GOAL:
PHIL (Tang’s best friend when they were young and played sport together): His Plan is to sell his Parents farm, and other farms, to the Billionaire to make a shit ton of money and leave this farm town life forever! Goal: to live the rest of his days in NYC!
INTRIGUE:
Phil and 2 others, dress in HOODS with voice disguise mechanisms to force Farmers, at gunpoint, to sign their farm deed over to them.
They kill the Mayor is a terrible way to warn others not to mess with the hooded ONES.
Find out who killed Tang’s Mother – as he didn’t do it. (I want to reveal at the end that various old-timer townsfolk faked her death together as the only way to get Tang to come home, and with her college degrees – to solve the problems they are having. Unless it is too complex to write)
Get a few more deeds to make it (Iowa farmland is $5,000 an acre: A 1,000 acre farm = $5M)
ONE WITNESS says that the leader Hooded Guy had a mis-step to him, they can tell because they breed horses and you gotta watch for that or they aren’t worth much but for studding.” (Phil has no toes on right foot from a farm accident)
Try to kill Tang and his Love Interest.
Blackmail the Sheriff into submission.
Pushing to sign the deal now – all cash.
Already sold Tang’s farm but Tang nor Dad knows about it.
COVERS SECRETS:
Needs to keep the Townsfolk in the dark about all this. And keep them quiet.
Try to “help” Tang find the Hooded Villains even though he is their leader.
Set the old neighbors and friends against Tang for being Trans Male.
Killing any one who finds out – but disguising the death as some other cause.
Keep Tang distracted and confused during his investigation.
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Subject Line: Wayne’s Villain Has a Great Plan!
What I learned: Surrender to process. Like a meal, one bite at a time.
1. The Villain’s End Goal. The Police Captain, Benjamin, approaching retirement, needs to kill all those who know his corruption and his amassed great fortune. He will never rest till those that know exist no more. Mostly he kills the police that worked with him in corruption.
2. How can this Villain accomplish this in a devious way. He will turn his accomplices on each other through false evidence and lies. He will hire professional corruption specialist, top her class, right out of school. Someone he can manipulate.
3. How can they cover it up? He will become mad and possessed, pretending to clear the air, investigate and find nothing. All the while his corrupt cronies die suspiciously or just disappear. He becomes a master detecting clues and taking the fight in a new direction. He has everybody bugged a goes after the one that is about to crack.
4. Sequence it to make it as intriguing as possible.
A. It starts with a staged attempt on Benjamin’s life. Gives him excuse to be suspicious.
B. He privately makes the rounds of all who will die telling them different lies as to who he thinks tried to kill him. He turns them all against each other.
C. He will hire professional corruption specialist, top of her class, right out of school. He controls the discussion by saying that she has damning evidence. So someone shows up to kill her but kills another cop and is shot dead trying to run away.
D. Someone is scared to the point of running, only to run into being killed and buried.
E. An old pro is asked for by the Captain. He’s well know for solving these shit storms. He’s only got one month left on the force. People think Benjamin is really scared for his life. This throws suspicion away from him.
F. We are building to the new hire and old pro are about to die. Benjamin is about to finish it all off.
G. Benjamin is being forced to leave, on good terms. He goes nuts but does not give himself up, he just dances on that edge.
H. The female corruption specialist plant the idea in Ben’s head that she thinks knows what happened but can’t tell him. She sets a trap. And gets him. The end.
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I have a few questions about his motive. As he’s near retirement, why suddenly go on the kill? Can’t he just fade away, and perhaps be a mentor to the corrupt? Or, if he’s suddenly got a change of heart and doesn’t like corruption, maybe he could keep all he’s got by being a star witness against the other bad cops? I’m sure you’ve considered all this, and so I’m looking forward to how this all works out. Best of luck.
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I’m definitely going to give that a think!
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Jeff and Wayne – Have Ben try to fade away into retirement but those who knew of his corruption are setting him up as the fall guy so they can take over forcing Ben to create a final resolution in a wicked cat and cat hunt.
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Another good idea!
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Larry’s Villain Has a Great Plan!
What I learned is that while developing the plot line I saw ways to increase the intrigue.
Setting: Chicago, U.S.A., the seamy side, 1961.
Villain: A ring of pedophiles, comprised of powerful city officials, operates as a secret society.
Storyline: A child is killed, a victim of the ring, and the Hero is assigned to solve it.
GOAL: The ring wants to continuously satisfy its needs.
INTRIGUE: The ring wants to continue obtaining “new material” and remain secretive and, once the detective becomes involved, will do anything to keep its existence and identities and a secret.
COVERS SECRETS: The ring takes a series of steps to misdirect the Hero, including setting up a fall guy, so as to shut down his investigation, and if all else fails, eliminate him.
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Pedophilia– that’s a rough topic, and perhaps a tough sell. And they are city officials… Why 1961 Chicago?
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It would done in an Alfred Hitchcock style. No child is actually seen victimized; all done by insinuation. The focus will be on the murder of a child. Why Chicago? Big city with large poor section – loss of children less of a concern. Police would be busy with “more important cases.” Also public more trusting of authority figures; pedophilia was not an open concern. Why 1961? Needed to be pre-internet so distribution of child porn only done through photographs,. Also contact lenses were relatively new (it’s an important detail re: the killer) Also the Blackhawks (my favourite hockey team) won the Stanley cup that year (minor detail in the story helps fixes the date – at least for hockey fans) and gives authenticity to story.
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I would switch the pedophelia ring to a ring of officials on the take from office tower developers.
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Thanks for your input. However to change the plotline to officials on the take would completely change the nature of my script. See my response the Jeff Bryce.
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Hi
out of the ring of pedophiles is there someone who stands out?
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Sorry for not seeing your question earlier. Most of the focus will be on the superintendent, but I initially shroud all identities to keep the audience guessing as to who is involved in the Ring. The audience will know the ring exists and that it wants additional victims, and eventually will want the hero dead, but will not not be sure who is acting on behalf of the Ring.
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I learned the important principle that you need to develop your villains plan thoroughly as a first step in writing your story. Coincidentally, I read in a separate book the same thing recently. Your villain comes first.
My villain, an Iranian militia general, has a great plan to take over th US military installation at Cheyenne Mountain, and hold the country for ransom.
This is accomplished by a decades-old plan to infiltrate the army with those loyal to Iran. They will “leave the gate open” to give him and his group access.
The general hates America because they killed his family in an airstrike.
Loyalists have been living American military lives. But it is essential that this plan remain secret.
He will accomplish this by:
1. Call up existing loyalists in the US Army
2. Keep the plan secret
3. Smuggle himself into the country
4. Be ready when the day arrives
5. Take over the facility and lock the door behind him. (The place can withstand a nuclear explosion.)
6. Hold the country for ransom with his finger on the red button.
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James – huge stakes and a huge wound for a revenge story – I like it!
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Thanks. Lots of kinks to work out, and I need to do a lot of layering, but the kernel is there.
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I’m interested in learning how the Iranian general smuggles himself into the country.
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Aha, Jeff. And therein lies the mystery! Actually, for backstory the general is a strong idealist, but it’s not him that gets into the country. It’s his sleeper cell that has infiltrated the US Military over the past decade, now 2 are assigned to Cheyenne Mountain. (Work with me..!) I know it’s a bit of stretch, but it really does seem to work for me. I agree I might need to adjust some elements, but I’m going with this angle for now.
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Melanie’s Villain has a Great Plan!
What I learned: By reverse engineering the villain’s plan you have a cool road map for the rest of the thriller. You can then intertwine the protagonist’s story throughout the villain’s journey.
What is the Villain’s end goal? Hank Gage, Chatham County cop and part of the Counter Narcotic Team tactical unit, is ready to live like the criminals he’s taken down for years and sweep his new knock-out/trophy girlfriend off her feet. But he’ll need cash and lots of it to seal the deal. His plan? Steal from a big drug deal going down at Port Wentworth. His end goal is the American dream – even if it means buying his way to a better life.
How can he accomplish this in a devious way? He will be the first on scene to steal the next big take before any of his unit are aware it exists. At the scene, he’ll kill all suspects. Operating as an exemplary cop on the case, he’ll take the lead, micromanage, and wrap the case up quickly.
How can he cover it up?
– Control evidence from the crime scene
– Silence any witnesses
– Close the case as soon as possible
– Stash cash in a “safe” place
Sequence it to make as intriguing as possible:
1. Pay off an informant (past druggie) to give him the lead on the next drug deal at the port so he can be first on scene and swipe the majority of the take before anyone else gets there.
2. Self-wound at scene using drug dealer’s gun
3. Stash cash in a hiding spot in his house
4. Manipulate police investigation to point to informant – run him out of town.
5. Falsify police report
6. Determine any witnesses from 911 tapes/silence them.
7. Destroy any evidence
8. Go on extended medical leave to a remote island with his new girlfriend – taking cash.
9. Take early retirement and start over...
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Covet what you see everyday AND a trophy wife to please. Interesting.
Does he get away with it? If so who is hurt? OR does karma have to ruin it for him?
Could have a great ironic ending such as the Trophy wife becomes a pain in the ass but he is stuck with her for some reason or another. Or she sleeps with everyone on the island paradise and he has to live with it or she will divulge the evidence she has on him regarding that last bust. Just thoughts. Hope it comes out great.
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Hi Melanie, I love your term “cool road map!” Your villain and his devious plan sound intriguing! Keep up the great work! 🙂
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Emmanuel Sullivan’s Villain Has a Great Plan!
What I learned is the villain has an equal role in moving the story forward and must battle with the hero to keep the story engaging.
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Michael Williamsen Thriller class #5
WIL – it is a nice exercise to write out the series to make sure the MIS intensifies at each step
If it was Beth’s plan to set up Catherine, why would she do this even before Nick had even met Catherine? And if she killed AI guy Nielsen, why would she make it look like Nick did it when she really wanted Nick back into her life?
What is the end goal?
To become the biggest human/sex trafficking ring.<div>How can the Villain accomplish that in a devious way?
He has border guards bring him migrant children stuck in the border cages
He has his thugs steal school buses filled with children.
He blackmails the mayor to gain control over city government.
He needs to stop Sheriff Mike from killing off his thugs
He needs to manipulate Victoria, Mike’s ex-wife by kidnapping her daughter and making her believe he is the only one who can find her.
How can they cover it up?
A secret condo to conduct business
Make Sheriff Mike look like an idiot
Blackmails the mayor
Kill the police chief
Set up Sheriff Mike as the kidnapper killing off competition as a serial killer
Buy Victoria’s house at the foreclosure sale to control her
Steal school buses with children while everyone is at the police chief’s funeral
Kill Sheriff Mike
Return Victoria’s daughter as the hero
Sequence it to make it as intriguing as possible.
Villain Bob attorney/kidnapper makes it obvious he is dating Sheriff Mike’s ex-wife – rubbing in Mike’s face and acting cozy with Mike’s young daughter
Bob blackmails the Mayor to support his kidnapping ring
As a distraction, Bob has the police chief killed. While everyone is at the police chief’s funeral, Bob’s thugs kidnap 2 bus loads of children
Mike gets info that Bob is the kidnapping ring kingpin
Mike gives evidence to Mayor not knowing Mayor is in Bob’s pocket
Mayor holds off reporting evidence, until…
Swat team arrests Mike as the kidnapper and serial killer
Bob lets Mike escape so he can have him killed
Bob’s driver brings Bob to kill Mike at the coffee shop Mike is going to
Bob and Mike square off trading off secrets thinking they will kill the other
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“Steal school buses with children while everyone is at the police chief’s funeral.” Scary, but seems darkly funny.
I’m rooting for you Sheriff Mike!
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Thanks Jeff! Sheriff Mike will need all the help he can get!! I have always thought the perfect time for a crime is during a police officer’s funeral.
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Ola Höglund’s Villain has a great plan!
What I learned is that it is delicate to balance what is according to the villain’s plan and what is happening that the villain couldn’t know would happen. The villain sometimes has to improvise and I have to show/tell the audience somewhere in the story when it’s planned and when it’s improvised. Otherwise I could lose the audience’s trust. I changed a few things in my story thanks to this assignment. Very rewarding.
1. GOAL
He wants Borowiak to be prisoned like he was. He wants to prove that Rostagno was just lucky in catching him. This time Rostagno will catch the wrong guy. He wants them both to suffer, not die.
This psychopath is all about prestige and having this project to feed from. Now it’s his time to profile Borowiak. He only kills them both if there is a risk getting caught. If so, he wants to make it look like they killed each other.
If he would just kill Borowiak and Rostagno separately as soon as he can, he would automatically be on the suspect list and he can’t risk revealing his new identity after all the work creating it. He wants to show himself, his dead mother, and them, that he can get away with murdering people this time. That’s his pleasure. Pure evil.
2. HOW TO ACCOMPLISH THE GOAL
Make sure both Rostagno and Borowiak end up living in the same town (the key being Borowiak’s wife) where he can control them in a better way than in New York.
Frame Borowiak for the element murders with Rostagno suspecting him.
Use their personalities knowing that Borowiak is always curious to find the truth, knowing Rostagno wants to impress his ex-wife and prove he is capable of catching the element killer.
Use all the information the villain has gathered through research and spyware since he moved back to the US from Mexico with a new plastic surgery face, pretending to be dumb as the new librarian.
3. COVER UP
Do the element murders in a complete different way than his previous violent killings. (The way Borowiak’s wife did it 25 years ago when she killed her fathers’s killer, making it look like an accident. The villain can’t know that she actually killed him, but he has connected the dots. Even if she didn’t do it, it will now look as if she or Borowiak did it.)
Chose victims from the perspective of Borowiak and Borowiak’s wife and wife’s father – the Greenpeace captain. As if the killer has a message to the world. But the villain is just making that up to hide his true revenge scheme. He not only knows about Borowiak’s wife and how her Greenpeace father died. He also knows that Borowiak has written articles about how psychopathic our society has become. That’s why all the victims are psychopaths of power.
The villain has also left a trace on each murder scene, a little bit of sand in different colors that he has taken from Borowiak’s house where Borowiak is trying to make a real mandala like the monks in Bhutan. Another “statement clue”.
(How the villain can know everything about the characters is revealed through the investigations and discussions of the two FBI agents when they consider Rostagno being the possible killer setting up Borowiak. If Rostagno could know and plan all this, then also the real villain could do that.)
4. SEQUENCE
1. Make Borowiak and Rostagno bump in to each other in the university library where the Villain works as a librarian. The villain has stolen the books that Borowiak borrowed to write his debate articles. He also discovers the books are gone. Rostagno investigates stolen books, interviewing Borowiak’s wife who works as the chief librarian.
2. First accident. Explosion. The victim being one of the towns richest and most important persons who own different companies within oil, dynamite, security, aviation. The security team that made the Greenpeace crew drown worked for his security company.
3. Second accident/suicide. Gas. The victim being a researcher in the environmental chemistry industry.
4. The villain hopes that Rostagno will contact Borowiak about profiling, but instead Rostagno has to interrogate Borowiak when Borowiak kidnaps the carpenter who hasn’t done his job with their roof, causing a flood in the kitchen after the greatest skyfall in the towns history. A bonus or problem for the villain?
5. Third accident. Water. The victim being the publisher of important newspaper. The villain calls the publisher to meet an anonymous informer at the same bar Borowiak eats at with Rostagno watching Borowiak from the Pizza hut opposite the bar. The next morning the publisher is found dead in his pool looking like the “skyfall pool” in Borowiak’s kitchen.
6. Steals Borowiak’s knife to use it if he needs to.
7. Plants the sand bottles in Borowiak’s wife’s office cabinet when he knows Rostagno is looking for Borowiak’s wife in the library. Rostagno finds them there.
8. Kills Rostagno’s police partner with Borowiak’s knife when he realizes that Rostagno has understood who the real killer is. Fills a bottle with the victim’s blood. Takes his gun.
9. Uses the blood, knife and gun to overpower Rostagno. He can now kill Rostagno with Borowiak’s knife and kill Borowiak with Rostagno’s gun.
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Leona Heraty’s Villain Has a Great Plan!
What I learned doing this assignment is…starting with the Villain’s goal and then reverse engineering the Villain’s plan helped me make sense of my Villain and what she’s all about and will help me crystalize my plot! Also, understanding that the Villain’s plan was created long before Page 1 of my script helps me to keep the whole story in perspective, and to not use flashbacks or backstory! Yeay!
To create your Villain’s plan, answer these four questions:
1. What is the end goal? Tuvelle wants to kill McKenzie because McKenzie caused her to break her “winning streak” with men and turned her into a loser in front of grandparents.
2. How can the Villain accomplish that in a devious way? Stalk McKenzie while she’s hiking to scare her, gain her trust, then push McKenzie off of Perilous Peak, so she falls to her death.
3. How can they cover it up?
· Wears a mask and cloak and stalks McKenzie when she’s going to and from work.
· Follows McKenzie in her car, on her way to work and when McKenzie gets lost on the way to her Mom’s house.
· Follows the Uber driver when he drives McKenzie to the state park.
· Screams on the hiking trails near McKenzie.
· Dresses up as a Masked Figure and switches the trail signs, causing McKenzie to get lost.
· More screams to frighten McKenzie.
· Appears on a ridge as the Masked Figure, and waves a knife, to frighten McKenzie.
· Sobs loudly near the cave.
· Leaves a backpack with bloody stains on it in the cave and a note from Tuvelle saying she’s being chased by a guy with a mask and knife, with her phone number, and to please help!
· The Masked Figure runs outside past the cave, while McKenzie rides out the storm and meets the Off-the-Grid club.
· McKenzie exits the cave and calls Tuvelle’s cell number. Tuvelle says she’s being stalked by a guy with a mask and a knife, then screams and the line goes dead.
· After Terry, the hiker, leaves for the visitor center to get help for Tuvelle, the Masked Figure appears on a ridge above McKenzie, moaning and waving a knife. The figure runs towards her.
· The Masked Figure runs past the gold mine, brandishing a knife. As McKenzie goes further into the mine, the Masked Ghoul rushes into the mine after her.
· The Masked Figure crawls out from the rubble by the old support beam and crawls over it and catches up to McKenzie. He jumps in an old mine cart and uses the levers to roll behind her.
· On the hallowed out log, McKenzie gives Tuvelle her backpack. Tuvelle says she’s being stalked by a Masked Figure and McKenzie says the guy is stalking her too. They should get to Perilous Peak where they can get cell coverage and call for help.
· Tuvelle SCREAMS! She points to a red mark on her arm and a Black Widow Spider that’s nearby. She’s been bitten by the spider!
· Tuvelle tells McKenzie not to trust Terry, he came back with the cloak and mask! He’s the guy terrorizing them!
· Tuvelle helps McKenzie up to Perilous Peak, and kicks Terry in the head!
· Tuvelle pushes Terry off Perilous Peak!
4. Sequence it to make it as intriguing as possible.
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Kimberly’s Villain has a great plan!
What I learned: the villain’s plan is the outline of the thriller and it should keep to action points, not conversation (I caught myself falling into that trap a couple of times)
What is Rian’s end goal? To escape the police
How can Rian accomplish that in a devious way? Use Emma to get off the mainland. Create distrust between Lacia and Emma while presenting as a white knight to each in order to get rid of Emma and, if he doesn’t need her anymore, Lacia.
How can he cover it up?
· Lead Emma to believe their outing was a quick adventure that accidentally went wrong.
· With Emma, steal Lacia’s boat.
· Steal from dwindling supplies and tell Lacia that Emma took them.
· Throw fish guts into water to attract sharks while Emma is in the water.
· Trigger Lacia’s PTSD by getting too close and making physical contact so that Emma sees her as unpredictable and dangerous.
· Play the innocent charmer by singing a song that triggers Lacia.
· Gaslighting both women throughout.
· Injure Lacia so that she cannot manage the sailboat alone and must teach him to sail.
· Destroy radio communication.
· Try to kill Lacia with intention to later kill Emma.
Sequence to make it as intriguing as possible:
· Lead Emma to believe their outing was a quick adventure that accidentally went wrong.
· With Emma, steal Lacia’s boat.
· Gaslighting both women throughout.
· Destroy radio communication.
· Injure Lacia so that she cannot manage the sailboat alone and must teach him to sail.
· Trigger Lacia’s PTSD by getting too close and making physical contact so that Emma sees her as unpredictable and dangerous.
· Steal from dwindling supplies and tell Lacia that Emma took them.
· Throw fish guts into water to attract sharks while Emma is in the water.
· Play the innocent charmer by singing a song that triggers Lacia.
· Try to kill Lacia with intention to later kill Emma.
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John Conte Day 5
The end goal of the Villain Hidee Fromm:
Kill Howard Golden and acquire his Soho Hidee will manipulate Detective Vince Vango to set up his father (Howard Golden). Hidee has a civil suit against Golden. She also plans to discredit Vince and ultimately be fired .
Hidee’s attorney Hilary Crane has a client, Ted Demond waiting on death row for murder. Detective Vango. Demond’s was the arresting officer .
During her tenure an art student at NYU Hidee had an affair with one of her professors, Howard Golden. When Hidee gets pregnant she approaches the father Golden. He refused responds ability and demands Hidee have an abortion. Hidee quits school to care for the baby The child is born with Autism. Due to her financial deficiency, Hidee institutionalizes her daughter Claire
In addition to Art Hidee, has a second passion of music.. She begins a career as a professional musician, She performs in local clubs., where she meets a fellow musician Vince Vango.
A scornful Hidee plans revenge. She remembers from a University Business class that, the value of art increases after the artist dies. She reestablishes a friendship with Golden to learn more about his clients. Eventually Hidee befriends some the artists exhibiting their art at Golden’s gallery.
Hidee murders one artist by hanging him in his studio. She leaves a note suggesting the death was a suicide. Vince Vango is assigned by his precinct to investigate the artist’s death.
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Andrea’s Villains plans. What i learned is that by planning out the steps the Villain will take it makes it so much clearer and brings clarity to my goals in achieving the outcome I want in the story.
The end goal: For my villain to make enough money to pay for his sick child.
How to accomplish his goal: By taking funds and setting up Barry the water purifier guy to take the fall. By taking focus off himself and blaming Barry he can accomplish his scam and keep it going. (at least for awhile)
How to cover up: By using distraction techniques. Blames being short staffed. Blames Covid. Blames Government for not paying enough for water safety. And blows whistle on innocent people.
Sequence: 1. Focus on the sick people. 2. Focus on Covid. 3. Focus on all of Barry’s mistakes and get him fired so another person can be hired and then that person will be blamed. 4. Sets up Barry to be a liar when on trail. 5. Uses blackmail. 6. And still thinking of more for ending.
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