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Day 5 – Attraction: A STAR IS BORN
Posted by cheryl croasmun on June 11, 2024 at 5:19 pm1. Please watch this scene and provide your insights/breakthroughs into what makes this character great from a writing perspective.
2. Read the other writers comments and make notes of any insights/breakthroughs you like.
3. Rethink or create a scene for your script using your new insights and rewrite that scene/character.
Sherry Miller replied 10 months, 1 week ago 4 Members · 3 Replies -
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Hmwk – week 2, day 5 – attraction – A Star is Born – Ch mastery class
Watch 1st time for:
· Where do you see attraction show up for Ally? She is willing put herself out there and sing for him and show him what she can create.
· Where do you see attraction show up for Jack? Jack is impressed and says,
Holy Shit, and tells her he will keep her secret but he’s bad at keeping secrets.
· What is causing that attraction? They both seem to be interested in music.
Watch 2nd time for:
· What drama is this scene built around? A couple sits in the middle of a deserted parking lot in the middle of the night. The woman shares with him the song she wrote and he is impressed and tells her she has talent.
· What profile items (right character, traits, secret, wound, future) showed up in these two character’s words and actions?wr
Ally: creative; emotionally expressive
Jack: protective; strong; caring
Future: indicated when he says he’ll keep her secret, then says he doesn’t keep secrets well.
Ally’s wound: she seems very talented but not brave enough to go after a singing, music writing career. Something in her past maybe holding her back. -
Their vulnerability and common ground in their creativity, or history of it, brings them together. Exposing their hearts, souls, to each other connects them. Chemistry, yes, but emotional connection cements them together. Plus original songs makes the connection more believable, the icing on the cake.
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Wow! When your own emotions rise to fever pitch when watching this movie, you know it’s great. It’s done it’s job. This is basically a modern romance built around music careers (and another version of A Star is Born. Possibly the best one). In this parking lot scene, it seemed they were already into each other. The long stares. The inuendo in their small talk. So…I decided to find the scene where they first met. In a bar, Ally sings her heart out in sexy dress and song “La Vie En Rose.” Jackson’s suddenly listening, not taking his eyes off her. He’s impressed. He’s already a star and sees a future for her. His soul mate? This excites him. Moving on to the parking lot, there’s such intensity between them as they sit on the ground and talk. It becomes more physical; they’re close, alone, and touching. Ally, Gaga, suddenly starts singing. She’s a little shy in public, but she trusts Jackson. She’s attracted to him right from the start. Now her feelings show. Their eyes are always connecting with each other. We’ve always heard in acting classes…”Act with your eyes.” And boy, these two did that. What draws them together is music, recognizing each other’s amazing talent. On the spot, Ally, writes a song. She talks/sings it, “Tell me something, boy, are you tired of trying to fill that void.” She perceptive and knows he needs something more than stardom. As an audience, we want them to connect, have a deeper relationship. Jackson suddenly asks, “Did you just write that?” She’s a little self-effacing but admits it. Now he’s even more impressed. A breakthrough, he’s here to stay, help her with her music, a path to being a star. In her breakthrough, she reveals a secret. She writes her own songs. Both have had wounds, both rejections. His wounds seem more in the past and he needs to deal with them. Hers are recent. Alley’s sweet, self-effacing, shy yet ambitious, supportive, strong. Determined and committed to music as well as to Jackson. She sings, “I’m falling…” and trails off. A breakthrough…falling in love. As she has more breakthroughs, we know she will grow stronger and more confident. Jackson is sensitive when it comes to love and his music. He’s a bit possessive, kind and giving, devoted. But has a wounded dark side. He’s played hard, partied hard and keeps deep feelings tucked inside a little. Okay, drama the scene is built around? Hmm. A convenience store parking lot late at night. Guaranteed to be dark. And they’ll be alone. Maybe a car or two, someone coming out with a coffee. Not much activity. It establishes their own little world, just the two of them.
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