Day 6 Assignment

[Sharon Scherle]

Jean’s Stacks Intrigue

What I learned doing this assignment is that it’s good to be deliberate in laying out intrigue. Planning with the turning points in mind helped me make the outline more interesting.

I started with the turning point at the end of each act. Then I filled in areas that lead up to the turning point.

Act 1:
Intrigue: Lazarus studies Sharra without her
knowledge.

Secret: Tanner has a metal tattoo behind his
left ear. It’s just like the logo on the business card.

Deception: Lazarus collides with Sharra on
purpose.

Conspiracy: Lazarus sent Tanner to intercept
Sharra.

Secret Identity: Time travellers out to fix
the world.

Hidden Agenda: Tanner, doing surveillance, is
there to help Sharra pick up her dropped things, gives her the card and the invitation to
call.

Strange Behavior: At home, Sharra touches the logo.
It zaps her like the first time.

Act 1 Turning Point: Curious, she makes a call
to Vault Agency

Act 2:

Intriguing World: Timer Travelers!

Intrigue: Sharra, going through a client’s numbers,
discovers her boss is embezzling money and makes a USB copy.

Mystery: Why is Faolan gathering intel on
Sharra? How does he know her?

Secret: Sharra has a USB stick with evidence against
her boss.

Deception: Lazarus promises adventure,
interesting people and places, stimulating work but says nothing about it
being fixing timelines.

Secret Identity: Faolan, in 1825, pulls out a
Vault uniform. He has the same tattoo.
Wound: Faolan looks resigned when pulling out
his Vault uniform.

Hidden Agenda: Sharra confides in Dash about
something’s going on with her boss. He offers her a job elsewhere but not
because he’s concerned for her, but to steer her away from Vault Agency.

Strange Behavior: Faolan sneaks into the Vault
and steals a comlink.

Accusation: Tanner and Lazarus have a
disagreement about Sharra’s recruitment.

Act 2 Turning Point: Sharra gets mugged/stabbed.
She thinks it’s her boss out to get her. But she still has the USB stick.

Act 3:

Intriguing World: Tanner, at the Vault, is
called back to Sharra’s timeline – Sharra’s stabbed!

Intrigue: Faolan takes out the mugger. Checks for
a tattoo – no tattoo. Faolan takes the satchel.

Mystery: Faolan gets the mugger’s name and
address off his license and gets in a taxi.

Secret: Sharra looks at the USB stick. She has
to do something with it.

Deception: Dash calls Sharra in concern, she falls
for it. He says some things that he shouldn’t know but she doesn’t pick up
on it.

Conspiracy: Sharra’s convinced the mugging was
set up by her boss.

Secret Identity: Cam heals Sharra. His
behavior is off but not enough to put your finger on.

Wound: Tanner wants a piece of the mugger for
hurting Sharra.

Hidden Agenda: When Lazarus wants to keep
Sharra overnight, Sharra readily agrees using her trauma to stay, eying
his computer.

Strange Behavior: Cam acts a bit unusual, with less
emotion than is normal.

Accusation: The stabbing proves Tanner’s point
– Sharra’s not a fit for the agency. Lazarus tells him otherwise.

Act 3 Turning Point: Lazarus sends Tanner back
in time to stop the mugging. Sharra puts the USB stick in an envelope and addresses it, then sneaks onto Lazarus’ computer, into her file, discovers a
section on her parents’ death.

Act 4:

Intriguing World: Tanner shifts back to stop
the mugging but not soon enough.

Intrigue: Lazarus reads the note his future-self
came back and left for him. The note states Sharra is crucial to fixing
the Vault.

Mystery: The mugger experiences the tail end
of a shift but has no time to think about it because Tanner bursts in.

Secret: Faolan is willing to kill the mugger
for no reason.

Conspiracy: Lazarus sends Tanner to watch over
Sharra and to bring her in.
Secret Identity: Faolan picks the mugger’s house
locks.

Wound: Tanner beats the mugger unconscious for
hurting Sharra. Sharra visits her parents’ gravesite for advice. Get’s none.

Hidden Agenda: Lazarus reads the note his
future-self came back and left for him. The note states Sharra is crucial
to fixing the Vault.

Hidden Layer: Faolan prints off an email from
the mugger’s computer.

Strange Behavior: Faolan waits out of sight for
Sharra. Spots her leaving her work building He goes to speak to her but spots
Tanner and slips back out of sight. He’s drawn to Sharra.

Act 4 Turning Point: The battered mugger gets
a call to kidnap Sharra. Faolan goes to interact with Sharra but Tanner
comes and he vanishes.

Act 5:
Intrigue:

Faolan is back in London. He changes
out of his Vault uniform into dress clothes for a dinner party he’s
hosting. He has the satchel and a photo of a smiling Sharra.

Mystery: The boss didn’t hire the mugger. Then
who did?

Secret: Earlier, Sharra had mailed the USB
stick to the NYPD

Deception: Tanner is only with Sharra at
Lazarus’ command, not by choice.

Conspiracy: Dash sets up Sharra’s boss to take
the fall for Sharra’s stabbing/mugging.

Wound: Sharra brings bodyguard Tanner to her
home so she can pack a few belongings. He sees her meager personal effects.

Hidden Agenda: Sharra calls Dash and lets him
know she’s leaving. He gives her directions on where to meet. Tanner
drives her to a warehouse. Knows something’s off.

Hidden Layer: Faolan reads the email and
realizes there is a rogue agent.

Accusation: Sharra accuses her boss of
hiring the mugger which he adamantly denies.

Act 5: Turning Point: A showdown between the
mugger, Sharra’s boss, Tanner and Sharra. Sharra shifts with Lazarus to
the Vault and discovers it’s something otherworldly.

[Tracy Cheney]

Tracy El Pueblo Stacking Intrique

I need to keep thinking about these ideas. Even so, it took me four days to come up with this much! I got thrown off when a little piece of research changed everything I’d thought and written about my one true historical character for years. Since the other four main characters are fictional, I can make them fit. But my real man is now an even bigger enigma!

Antonia

1. In El <st1:city w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Pueblo</st1:place></st1:city>, Antonia meets and rejects Senor Lopez as marriage partner. She wants to choose for love.

2. Conspiracy: Grandma doesn’t tell Antonia that she herself had free will to choose spouse. The frontier families have evolved the arranged marriages. Berates Antonia for another rejection instead of forcing her into this union.

3. Hidden Agenda: Antonia tosses off careless comment that maybe her 15 y-o cousin would be better suited since she is “good girl,” scared of Grandmother.

4. Mystery: Antonia runs to Aunt’s house, finds uncle very sick with mysterious illness.

5. Priest arrives, tells Antonia God’s will is mysterious and must be accepted. She rejects Church position that as daughter of Eve she never stops paying for that original sin with punishments.

6. Intriguing world: Distraught aunt tells Antonia to fetch an Indian shaman, will try anything to save husband.

7. Secret: Antonia doesn’t disclose going unaccompanied to native village to get shaman and again to hire woman to grind corn. Feels empowered.

Act 1 After uncle’s funeral, Antonia’s told by her grandmother since
she rejected latest marriage suitor, Antonia will be the nanny for her
nieces and nephews until Aunt’s baby is born.<div>

Lucas

1. In court, Lucas observes case against a group of insurgents who receive the death penalty.

2. In law class, Lucas defends his loyalist position using speech verbatim he heard in court.

3. Lucas receives letter in his humble accommodations that father injured; Lucas decides to stay in <st1:place w:st=”on”><st1:city w:st=”on”>Mexico City</st1:city></st1:place>, as he loves the cosmopolitan life.

4. At dance class with wealthy girlfriend, Lucas receives withering criticism of his technique and lack of emotion.

5. Conspiracy: After dance class, Lucas surrounded by gang led by law student who heard his pro-loyalist speech in class; his friend is beat up. The militants urges Lucas to join the army and spy on his bourgeois friends.

6. Hidden Agenda: Lucas afraid of being pressed into military service, avoids going out alone or at night.

7. Receives letter that father died, must come home. Lucas no longer has his father’s protection or allowance.

8. Wound: At home from university, Lucas’s father denied burial since committed suicide. Family shunned by town.

Act 2 Eldest brother, who inherited everything, informs Lucas
he must head north to uncle in <st1:state w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>California</st1:place></st1:state>
as he is cut off from all funds.</div><div>

Father Diego

1. Family attends Diego’s ordination at seminary in Mexican city, Queretero, where the revolution was originally planned. All happy!

2. When Diego’s father tells Diego he’s set up to take over the small parish church at home in northern Mexico, Diego announces he’s going to serve the cause of the revolutionaries for social justice. All alarmed!

3. Conspiracy: Behind Diego’s back, his father meets with the bishop to make “special” arrangements.

4. Hidden Agenda: Diego agrees to visit home, after being away for a few years. When visiting the old parish priest, discovers he’s given sanctuary to Indian insurgents fighting the empire.

5. Betrayal: Diego asks his wealthy father for aid for these men. Instead, his father trades them off to the Comanche.

6. All is not as it seems: Diego is stunned by father’s justification that he must appease the Comanche to fend off raids; it’s what kept his business and home intact for the family.

7. Moral dilemma: Diego re-evaluates the family’s vast trading business built over hundreds of years. Discovers his father sells African slaves he steals from Spanish ships to the Americans in <st1:city w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>New Orleans</st1:place></st1:city>.

8. Deception: Diego’s father must get rid of this moral conscious upsetting his carefully calibrated business, but also protect Diego from crossing the authorities. Diego’s plum role within the church hierarchy is revealed only if Diego fulfills his part.

Act 3 Father Diego is assigned far away to <st1:place w:st=”on”><st1:state w:st=”on”>California</st1:state></st1:place> out of the action when his
father pulls strings in the Church. Diego is a risk, and at risk.</div><div>

Thomas

1. Revelry in streets of <st1:place w:st=”on”><st1:city w:st=”on”>Buenos Aires</st1:city>, <st1:country-region w:st=”on”>Argentina</st1:country-region></st1:place> – announcement of two ships sailing on 1 year anniversary to destroy Spanish targets – one east, one west

2. Hidden Agenda: Thomas is eager to sign up for the ship heading east to <st1:place w:st=”on”>Africa</st1:place> with Captain Bouchard, a local war hero. Thomas knows of <st1:country-region w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Sierra Leone</st1:place></st1:country-region>, a homeland for former slaves.

3. World: In a bar, local mariners debate merits of the two captains to sail with. They hate Bouchard for how he treated them during <st1:country-region w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Argentina</st1:place></st1:country-region>’s war for independence. They say it’s bad omen that he’s changed the name of the warship they captured for this trip.

4. The locals sign on with the other captain heading west into the Pacific, seeking fabled Spanish treasure ships. They depart.

5. The leftover crew assembled by Bouchard are rough foreign mercenaries. They segregate below decks by ethnicity and country and literacy. That’s the divisor.

6. The restless crew of 250 is held on board in the harbor for days, due to delays getting the warship fully outfitted. Bouchard’s two brothers-in-law join the officers, totally inexperienced.

7. When a seaman slaps one of his relatives, Bouchard arrests him, provoking a brawl on deck. One seaman throws an ax at Bouchard, who stabs him dead. Other crew barricade themselves in cabins. The marines have to bust them out, killing another sailor and wounding more.

8. For staying out of the fight, and understanding orders in both French and Spanish, Thomas rewarded with better position.

Act 4 Thomas regrets signing up with harsh Captain Bouchard as
the frigate finally weighs anchor heading east across the Atlantic. He
can’t swim, or he’d jump in the harbor to get to shore.</div><div>

Joseph

1. Joseph on wharf in <st1:city w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Boston</st1:place></st1:city> – shipbuilding yards all around. He’s a master carpenter, finished with last repairs on old whaling ship <st1:city w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Elizabeth</st1:place></st1:city>. He recommends to captain’s men she isn’t seaworthy for what they are planning.

2. The men ask if he’ll sign on for the young captain’s first voyage, but Joseph refuses — he’s done with the miseries of sea life and merchant ships. He’s ready to settle down.

3. Intriguing World: Joseph picks up his girlfriend from the Young Ladies Seminary; they attend Anabaptist church service with Joseph’s parents and family dressed in plain clothes.

4. Accusation: Joseph and his brother are jumped in the evening near Paul Revere’s house (or old <st1:place w:st=”on”><st1:placename w:st=”on”>North</st1:placename> <st1:placetype w:st=”on”>Church</st1:placetype></st1:place>). Joseph thinks it’s a press gang for the sea captain, but it’s Protestants attacking them for their religious beliefs. Anabaptists are nonviolent, except Joseph. He’s had to swear and fight onboard as sailors do. He beats them back.

5. Joseph counseled by girlfriend and minister. He vows to do better but not in his nature to stand by if someone else is getting hurt. Minister: there is no such thing as a righteous violence or war.

6. Hidden Agenda: Fellow carpenters along the wharf say good money to be made at the Naval Yard building first American warship. Be a patriot and join us. Joseph won’t swear allegiance.

7. Deception: Mates invite Joseph to a tavern. Drunkenness is against his faith, but one pint of ale he decides is fine.

Act 5 Joseph wakes up leaving <st1:city w:st=”on”>Boston</st1:city>
on the whaling ship <st1:city w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Elizabeth</st1:place></st1:city>
against his will. They head to south Pacific for valuable
sperm whale oil on a two-year voyage. Joseph plans to jump ship when they land
for water and supplies and return to <st1:city w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Boston</st1:place></st1:city>.
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[Elizabeth Appell]

Binge Worthy – Mod 3, Lesson 6 Stacking intrigue to get to the Turning point

I learned I need to figure out the turning points first and then stack the intriguing reasons they are important.

ASSIGNMENT:

1. Make a list of your turning points.

• Act 1

 Strange behavior: Lane depressed and drinking due to financially strapped/can’t find a story for second book

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 Hidden Agenda: Lane Baer announces he has an interview for a teaching job a girl’s school

 Intrigue: Lane has dream about slitting his agent’s throat

 Accusation: Paige heard about student killed at school where Lane is going for an interview

 Turning Point: A girl is killed at the girl’s school. She is the sister of the character who is obsessed with Lane.

• Act 2

 Strange Behavior: Dog follows Lane into street. Car clips it. Lane carries it to safety.

 Hidden Agenda: Gilgood desperate for a teacher. Hires Baer.

 Mystery: A girl watches Baer from second floor.

 Intrigue: Flashback of Destry Baer, the father, hard on Baer’s writing.

 Wound: Marta leaves bank with on-coming migraine.

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 Turning point: Hidden Layer: Marta has make-over. Becomes a different personality.

• Act 3

 Mystery: Marta thinks there is an intruder in the house.

 Strange Behavior: Looks for Lane’s gun.

 Hidden Agenda: Paige comes home early. Finds mother hiding something.

 Hidden Agenda: Lane comes home, crawls in bed. Finds gun.

 Turning Point: Mystery: Lane hides gun. Marta watches him.

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• Act 4

Intriguing World: Gilgood gives Baer tour of school

Mystery: Baer sees girl on third Floor landing. Who is she?

Secret Identity: Somebody leaves request for book to be autographed. Who?

Hidden Layer: Gilgood demands Baer drop Bovary from syllabus.

Strange Behavior: When Leylah is in the room, the words come to Baer.

Turning Point: Intrigue: Savage warns Baer to watch his back with girls and Gilgood.

• Act 5

Strange behavior: Leylah comes on very strong trying to seduce Baer.

Accusation: Gilgood threatens Baer about crossing the line with students.

Hidden Layer: Savage comes to dinner. Attracted to Marta.

Secret: Lane jealous of Marta.

Turning Point: Intrigue: Paige hates Savage. “He’s scary. Daddy, he’s going to make you sad.

[Janeen Johnson]

Janeen Stacks Intrigue

What I learned doing this assignment is that stepping through this helps me put into words, the more subtle hints/clues I had in mind when designing the acts and turning points so I won’t forget to include them in the actual scenes.

Turning Points and Intrigue leading up to them:

ACT 1

Accusation: Jim accuses Molly of hiding that Hunter is Mike’s son, not Jim’s.

Wound: Jim believes Molly always and still loved Mike.

Strange Behavior: Molly stays with abusive Jim.

Act 1: Turning Point: Act 1 Turning Point: (J Major Conflict) Jim blows up at Molly and she commits suicide (perhaps only seeing Molly die at the crossing and then the funeral scene of people saying they are so sorry — suicide?)

ACT 2

Strange Behavior: Mindy finds the suicide note while helping Gabe with homework and sends a copy to herself.

Accusation: Mike and Mindy conjecture that Jim wrote the note. What does that mean happened to Molly?

Intrigue: Mike and Mindy don’t believe Molly would have committed suicide.

Hidden Layer: Mindy gets premonition of her own death

Conspiracy: Mike and Mindy decide to wait until after the holidays to expose that Molly didn’t commit suicide

Act 2: Turning Point: (M Major Conflict): Mike wants to expose the evidence they have that Molly’s death may not have been a suicide and Mindy reluctantly agrees.

(M Ending) The NY’s Eve accident where Mike and Mindy’s car crashes into the train just as Molly had.

ACT 3

Intriguing World: Farm funeral customs/offers are foreign to outsiders.

Secret: Randi has Alzheimer’s and no one alive knows

Wound: Cara loved Mike and he loved her before he met Mindy. Cara was cheated out of Mike by Mindy

Deception: Offers of help are veiled offers to take over farmland from the Campions

Mystery: Why are Randi (and Mike) so dead set against the Alaska brothers getting the farmland?

Act 3: Act 3 Turning Point: (R Turning Point 2) Randi realizes she has to make Cara stay or risk losing the twins’ legacy that she has promised to pass on to them.

ACT 4

Strange Behavior: Randi insists that Cara must stay in farm but doesn’t reveal her reason is her Alzheimer’s

Accusation: Jim is not to be trusted/relied on.

Conspiracy: Farm funeral customs/offers are explained to Cara by Randi

Act 4: Act 4 Turning Point: (C Major Conflict) Randi convinces Cara that a huge part of the kids’ legacy will be gone if she doesn’t farm for them — Mike’s brothers will come down from Alaska.

Jim has promised that he will help Cara with all of the farming Randi is livid and explains about Molly’s accident/suicide;

ACT 5

Mystery: Randi is adamant with Cara that Jim is not a good guy for her to consider as a baby-daddy

Hidden Agenda: Cara wonders if her love for Mike had something to do with Mike and Mindy’s death — after all, she had just signed the legal docs and Mindy always kept Mike away from her.

Wound: Cara never stopped loving Mike — that’s why she’s still single

Act 5: Act 5 Climax/Turning Point/Lock In: Cara does some mind control work and decides she must honor her commitment to Mindy/Mike and thinks about Jim as a replacement for her boyfriend.

( C Ending) Cara opts to stay, out of guilt that she may have caused Mike/Mindy’s accident with her own wish for Mike. Thinks Jim/Hunter will help her and then sees Jim’s violence

Act 5 Lock In: Hunter says he’ll help her and Jim is furious with Hunter; Gabe flinches; the twins shudder; Randi gasps; Cara is shocked;

[r. reid jr]

R. Reid Jr’s STACKING INTRIGUE MOD 3 LESSON 6

“What I learned doing this assignment is there is always another way to keep going back to BW framework for more and more ideas. Or to test if what we are doing is making sense in the story.

1. Make a list of your turning points.

Act 1 THE ROBBERY AT THE BANK<div>

Act 2 POSING AS AN INSURANCE AGENT TO THE BANK

Act 3 WORKING WITH TWO SPECIAL AGENTS AS AN INSURANCE AGENT REPRESENTING THE BANK.

Act 4 MEETING SNOWY IN THE BAR BUT NOT KNOWING WHO SHE IS.

Act 5 MEETING SNOWY AGAIN IN CLASS AND SHE DOESN’T KNOW WHO HE IS AND ACCEPTING HIM HER STUDY GROUP.

Intriguing World: PEOPLE BEING MADE TO DO THINGS AND NOT HAVING ANY MEMORY OF IT.

Intrigue: HUNTING DOWN THE TECH. BEING LED TO NEW PEOPLE.

Mystery: WHO IS CONTROLLING THIS TECH?
Secret: WHO IS CONTROLLING SNOWY.
Deception: BRUCE AS AN INSURANCE AGENTS FOR BOX HOLDERS.

Conspiracy: SAME TECH THAT CONTROLLED SNOWY IS THE SAME TECH THAT PULLED OFF THAT HEIST AT THE BANK.

Secret Identity: BRUCE AS AN INSURANCE AGENT.

Wound: SNOWY NOT KNOWING WHO SHE IS OR WHO BRUCE IS.

Hidden Agenda: BRUCE OVER THE AGENTS TO GET TO THE MYSTERIOUS WOMAN (HE ASSUMES IT IS THE WOMAN WHO WAS HUSTLING SNOWY OUT OF THE BAR).

Hidden Layer: ONE OF THE AGENTS LIKES BRUCE AS THEY WORK TOGETHER IT IS HIDDEN.

Strange Behavior: SNOWY AT THE BAR, SNOWY RUNNING FROM THE AGENTS.

Accusation: THE MYSTERIOUS WOMAN IS BEHIND IT ALL.

Act 1 Turning Point: SNOWY’S FIGHT AT THE BAR AND IN FRONT OF THE AGENTS AND BRUCE MEETING HER AGAIN IN THE CLASS. IT IS AT THIS POINT BRUCE SEES SHE MIGHT BE A KEY TO THIS WHOLE THING.

INTRIGUE 1: MYSTERY: The bank is being robbed and the people doing are very sophisticated and even seem well trained by someone.

INTRIGUE 2: ACCUSATION: The agents and police arrest everyone involved with the robbery only they didn’t steal anything. They just moved things around and only stole stationery that is made to look like money.

SECRET: Once caught it is evident that no one knows each other nor do they have any idea why they were at the bank.

INTRIGUE 3: The special ‘agents’ were tipped off by the bank.

SECRET: Using his own tech that identifies when a special TECH is being used. Like plane fumes he finds the bank and sees what is going down. But he is not authorized to do anything but only watch.

INTRIGUE 4 The next day Bruce issues himself a special private insurance ID to investigate what happened.

SECRET: Bruce found owners of the deposit boxes and asks 3 estates to protect their interests after news appears on the TV.

STRANGE BEHAVIOR: A few days before Bruce was tracking this TECH to a bar but is too late cause the TECH has done it’s damage on someone unknown in the bar.

MYSTERY: Bumping into a girl in the bar who is a bit under the weather is escorted by her friend to go home and recover. But later speaking to the bouncer he finds out the very girl he spoke to briefly was involved with laying out a few guys in the bar.

INTRIGUE 5/HIDDEN LAYER: Bruce poses as an insurance investigator to the bank to keep everything “hush” “hush” and later poses to the special agents investigating to be working also for a special insurance.

ACT Turning POINT. Snowy the girl in the bar is the first victim of the TECH as she is dispatched to scramble someone’s brains (who as it turns out was involved in human trafficking). She ends up ditching the TECH and running until she is corner and takes a stand to fight. But then suddenly is turned off and has a complete blank memory of anything.

Mystery: Bruce shows up to classes to get a better lay of the land with locals, turns out Snowy sitting next to him (and he introduces himself again) she has no idea who he is, except he is a graduated student returning to brush up on some extra credits. She has no recollection of their conversations in the bar or of scrambling a man’s brains in the park or of laying out four guys in the bar.

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[Natasha Le Petit]

Mod 3 – Lesson 6:

What I learnt from doing this exercise is just to keep brainstorming all the ways you can add intrigue and set ups leading up to each turning point.

Act 1 – Joe’s dad turns up after being away.
His mother talks about an organisation, where they come to check on the family at night. Joe sees a strange person in his room. He discovers his mother has been having secret meetings and has lied about going to work.

Act 2 – Joe recognises the real estate agent as being in his bedroom the previous night. Abbey receives a threatening visitor who won’t stop banging on the door.
– why have they suddenly got so much money? Joe seems to be the only one confused or wanting to question it? Joe doesn’t like the way the agent touches him, he doesn’t like the way the housekeeper stares at him.
The lights go out in the house and father Thomas tells abbey, ‘they’ are starting earlier.
He warns her not to open the door to anyone.

Act 3 – the neighbourhood boys turn on Joe and threaten him
We see that Joe’s new dog won’t go near any of the family or their friends. In turn, the family despise the dog but Simon is intrigued by the way the dog and Joe get along.
We see a young girl staring at Joe’s window, then at the crowds gathering. We see a figure in the forest following the boys and Joe. We see at first glance, there’s something not right about Sam and Danny. They stand too close to Joe. They take him too far into the forest.

Act 4 – Joe discovers disturbing books/photos in his parents room. Joe’s dad burns Doreen’s number.
We know that the previous owner died. Perhaps he was also a priest? Michael was watching the interaction between Joe and Doreen. We know they don’t like each other.
Abbey comes up against a snake, then a figure holding an axe.
We know she has been told not to leave the property, he can’t protect her outside. She has been warned about the snakes. We know that there is something or someone that was trying to get into the house.

[Rob Sutherland]

Rob Stacks Intrigue

What I learned doing this assignment is the benefits of foreshadowing the turning points, setting up the opposite situation to them in advance to give them more weight.

Turning Points:

Act 1 The barman is “The Mirage”

Act 2 Julia has a history with the demons

Act 3 The Mirage is investigating the demons, hunting for one in particular

Act 4 Julia unwittingly brings the demons to the Mirage’s doorstep

Act 5 – Madeleine is kidnapped

Act 1: Set up the barman as Joe Everyman, nondescript, minimal dialogue, a background character without any real presence in the story

Act 2: Set up Julia as being a random victim

Act 3: Suggest that the Mirage has no interest in the demons and just wants to be left alone.

Act 4: Have The Mirage and Madeleine indicate how the house that they share is a safe space, away from the world where no one can harm them.

Act 5: Foreshadow that “The Mirage” will keep Madeleine safe. Then when the demons come and take her away he is even more motivated to rescue her when she is kidnapped.