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Day 7 Assignment
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Harvey’s Scene Ratings
1. (E8) EXT. NEW YORK HARBOR – DAY
As he and his Father arrive in America as immigrants, Idris, 6, is stunned by the grandeur of the Statue of Liberty
2. (E7) INT. IDRIS’S STUDIO – DAY
Idris, now 26 and a sculptor, is troubled that he’s creating a Statue of Liberty replica for an anti-immigration campaign.
3. (E8) EXT. LIBERTY ISLAND – DAY
Idris sees the Senator responsible for the anti-immigration campaign and Dorkman, the ad exec executing the campaign. The Statue of Liberty looks angry.
4. (E10) EXT. LIBERTY ISAND – NIGHT
Amid a raging thunderstorm, the Statue of Liberty comes to life and disappears from her pedestals.
5. (E10) EXT. BATTERY PARK – NIGHT
A Homeless Man watches in disbelief as Liberty, a normal-sized woman dressed just like the Statue of Liberty, with her torch and crown, wades out of the harbor and strides into Manhattan.
6. (E10) EXT. CITY STREET – NIGHT
Liberty encounters two hookers and speaks for the first time.
7. (E8) EXT. SHOREL:INE – DAY
Reporters from around the world report on the mysterious disappearance of the Statue of Liberty. Large, grim men comb Liberty Island.
8. (E9) INT. MADISON SQUARE GARDEN – DAY
The Mayor of NYC meets the Director from Homeland Security who’s responsible for returning the Statue of Liberty.
9. (E8) EXT. BUILDING ROOFTOP – DAY
Large, grim men haul Idris away for questioning.
10. (E10) INT. CITY HALL – DAY
Flak and Cornfield meet each other and the mayor, and start partnering in the investigation.
11. (E6) INT. HOLDING FACILITY – DAY
Idris is questioned by Homeland Security and Dorkman comes for him.
12. (E7) EXT. 9/11 MEMORIAL – DAY
Liberty gazes sadly at it.
13. (E9) EXT. LIBERTY ISLAND – DAY
Flak and Cornfield examine the island, learn there are no clues, and see the Homeless Man in the distance ranting that the Statue of Liberty is alive.
14. (E8) INT. DORKMAN’S AD AGENCY – DAY
Liberty, insisting she’s the Statue of Liberty, tries to see Dorkman, who’s meeting with the Senator. Idris rescues her from security guards and leads her away.
15. (E8) INT./EXT. IDRIS AND LIBERTY – DAY
Idris is attracted to Liberty and wants her to model for his Statue of Liberty replica. She’s angry that she was mistreated at Dorkman’s agency.
16. (E6) INT. MADISON SQUARE GARDEN – DAY
The Director orders Homeland Security to be more aggressive in its search.
17. (E6) INT. FBI OFFICE – DAY
Flak and Cornfield decide to visit Dorkman
18. (E8) INT. IDRIS’S STUDIO – DAY
Idris and Liberty warm-up, but he’s appalled to learn she wants to stop the campaign he’s working on. He agrees to introduce her to Dorkman, but first, she wants to see her brother.
19. (E6) EXT. MANHATTAN STREETS – DAY
Flak and Cornfield see that Homeland Security is questioning men of Middle East descent.
20. (E7) INT. DORKMAN’S AD AGENCY – DAY
Flak and Cornfield question Dorkman, but make no progress.
21. (E7) INT. CAMPAIGN OFFICE – DAY
Pleased with the media attention he’s getting, the Senator argues for zero immigration.
22. (E9) EXT. UNION PARK – DAY
Liberty exults in her humanity as she and Idris visit her “brother,” the statue of Lafayette that sculptor Bartholdi did before he made her. Idris remains skeptical that she’s the Statue of Liberty.
23. (E10) EXT. ALLEY – DAY
Angry that Idris doesn’t believe her, she convinces him she’s the Statue of Liberty by morphing her arm into green metal.
24. (E7) EXT. STREET – DAY
As Idris collects his wits, he and Liberty are confronted by Large, Grim Men, who grow suspicious of them.
25. (E9) INT. IDRIS’S STUDIO – NIGHT
Idris and Liberty warm up to each other.
In the bathroom, Liberty sees herself as a woman. For the first time.
Liberty reveals she has only several days before she must return to her pedestal. If she doesn’t, she can never return. Alarmed, Idris arranges to have Liberty meet Dorkman, but conceals his involvement in the campaign. Liberty’s thrilled and kisses him. It’s her first kiss. Ever.
On a cot, Liberty falls asleep. For the first time.
26. (E6) INT. IDRIS’S STUDIO – DAY
Idris is anxious as Liberty leaves to meet Dorkman.
27. (E10) INT. DORKMAN’S AGENCY – DAY
Liberty confronts Dorkman, but he makes her the face of the ad campaign and instructs her to return tomorrow. Liberty cluelessly thinks she’ll be on TV to make her case.
28. (E7) INT. THE DIRECTOR’S OFFICE – DAY
The Mayor is critical of Homeland Security’s intention to conduct a building-to-building search of lower Manhattan, but demands that he return the statue soon.
29. (E8) INT. DORKMAN’S OFFICE – DAY
Idris is appalled that Dorkman’s using Liberty in the campaign, and unsuccessfully tries to persuade him that she’s the actual Statue of Liberty.
30. (E8) INT./EXT.SHOPPING – DAY
Liberty realizes she’s attracted to Idris, and Simon, Idris’s neighbor, takes her shopping so she can dress more attractively for Idris.
31. (E7) INT. FBI OFFICE – DAY
Flak wonders if the Homeless Man might be right about Liberty coming down from her pedestal.
32. (E10) INT. IDRIS’S STUDIO – NIGHT
Flak and Cornfield confront Liberty and then Idris. Idris wants to tell Liberty the truth about his involvement in the campaign, but instead they make love. It’s her first time.
33. (E8) EXT. BUILDING – DAY
On her way to Dorkman’s, Liberty realizes she’s in love with Idris.
34. (E6) 7INT. IDRIS’S STUDIO – DAY
Idris freaks that Liberty has left for Dorkman’s agency.
35. (E10) INT. DORKMAN’S AGENCY – DAY
Liberty realizes she’s being exploited and is hauled away by security.
36. (E8) INT. POLICE STATION – DAY
Liberty is interrogated by Flak and Cornfield.
37. (E9) INT. POLICE STATION – DAY
Idris sees Liberty in jail. He’s stunned when she says she wants to stay with him.
38. (E8) INT. IDRIS’S STUDIO – DAY
Idris wrestles with what he should do. He decides to end his involvement in the campaign and topples his statue-in-progress.
39. (E7) INT. OFFICE SUITE – NIGHT
The Director orders ICE to hold Liberty.
40. (E9) INT. DORKMAN’S LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
Dorkman realizes Liberty is the actual Statue of Liberty.
41. (E9) INT. HOLDING CELL – NIGHT
ICE comes for Liberty.
42. (E9) INT. POLICE STATION – NIGHT
As Liberty is taken to a mental institution, she tells Idris she loves him.
43. (E8) INT. CAMPAIGN OFFICE – NIGHT
Thinking she’s a terrorist, the Senator wants Liberty deported immediately.
44. (E7) INT. OFFICE SUITE – NIGHT
The Director demands that Homeland Security bring in Liberty for questioning.
45. (E7) INT. POLICE STATION – NIGHT
Flak and Cornfield see evidence that perhaps the Statue of Liberty walked away from her pedestal.
46. (E7) INT. IDRIS’S STUDIO – NIGHT
Flak and Cornfield break into the studio and Flak grabs Liberty’s crown.
47. (E8) INT. PSYCHIATRIC INSTITUTION – NIGHT
Idris and Dorkman sneak into the mental hospital disguised as shrinks.
48. (E7) INT. POLICE CAR – NIGHT
Flak and Cornfield drive to the institution to talk with Liberty.
· (E9) INT. PSYCHIATRIC INSTITUTION – NIGHT
Idris and Dorkman free Liberty from her cell. She finally learns the truth about Idris and is leery of Dorkman.
The Senator arrives with ICE. The Director arrives with Homeland Security.
49. (E10) INT. PSYCHIATRIC INSTITUTION ROOF – NIGHT
As they flee, Idris, Liberty, and Dorkman confront the Senator and ICE. She convinces him she’s the Statue of Liberty. The trio race off in the campaign’s “Liberty is security” blimp.
50. (E9) INT. PSYCHIATRIC INSTITUTION – NIGHT
Flak and Cornfield arrive and the Homeless Man tells them the Statue of Liberty walks among them.
51. (E10) INT. BLIMP – NIGHT
Dorkman vows to stop the campaign and Liberty forgives him and Idris. A Homeland Security helicopter forces them to land on the Empire State Building and flee into the building. Liberty starts to age.
52. (E10) EXT. EMPIRE STATE BUILDING – NIGHT
Idris, Liberty, and Dorkman exit the building and are surrounded by Homeland Security. They’re rescued at the last moment by Flak and Cornfield who drive them away.
53. (E10) INT. POLICE CAR – NIGHT
Flak realizes Liberty’s the Statue of Liberty. Pursued by Homeland Security, they race to Liberty Island.
54. (E10) EXT. DOCKS – NIGHT
Liberty continues to age, but convinces the Mayor of who she is.
55. (E10) EXT. LIBERTY ISLAND – NIGHT
Liberty rejuvenates once on the island. The Senator and then Homeland Security confront her and Idris. He thanks her for reviving his idealism; she thanks him for teaching her what it’s like to be a woman. In a blazing white light, she returns to her pedestal as keeper of the flame.
All is well.
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Rewrite Assignment 7
Aleta Rafton’s Scene Ratings
Revised Beat Sheet Version 2
ACT 1
LIVING ROOM INTERIOR – LATE AFTERNOON E-2
Hank is applying a tracking dot to each ornament then carefully wrapping them before putting them in separate small storage containers which are then put in a larger ornament storage box.
JACK’S BEDROOM – LATE AFTERNOON E-6
Jack and friend play with drone Hank gave Jack for Christmas. Jack criticizes Hank but friend thinks he might be OK since he gave Jack the drone and the computer work he does is cool. Samantha loves that Hank is always around helping while her dad is hardly home and just watches sports alone when he is home. Jack flies the drone downstairs to see what’s happening in the living room.
1. Accidentally flies too close to Hank causing him to lose his balance and fall off the ladder. Expresses concern that Hank may get hurt
2. Jack tells Samantha to watch. ‘See what wimp Hank is’ as he deliberately flies the drone too close to Jack’s head and makes him fall of the ladder
3. Samantha is disappointed in Jack because Hank may really hurt himself
LIVING ROOM INTERIOR – LATE AFTERNOON E-9
Drone flies hear Hank’s head as he’s standing on the ladder. He stumbles off the ladder and the ornament he was holding goes flying in air which Shadow grabs before it hits the ground. Julie walks in just in time to see Hank recover and not fall to the floor not knowing that Jack drove the drone near his head and says ’Nice save!’ Grandpa praises Shadow for catching ornament.
Hank doesn’t openly blame Jack but knows he may really have tried to hurt him
1. Hank holds it in but Grandpa saw what happened and tells Hank be should talk to Jack
2. Julie is oblivious
LIVING ROOM STAIRS – LATE AFTERNOON E-8
Jack with Samantha see the chaos they caused and race back to his room
HANK’S OFFICE SEEN FROM DRONE – LATE AFTERNOON E-3
Jack is flying the drone in Hank’s office trying to prove to his friend what a nerd Hank is. He knocks over some papers. Then Jack crashes the drone into the wall.
HALLWAY OUTSIDE JACK’S BEDROOM – LATE AFTERNOON E-4
Hank overhears Jack making fun of him and trash talking the drone he made for him for Christmas. Hank goes upstairs to his office to get more tracking dots and cleans up the papers off the floor the drone knocked over.
HANK’S OFFICE E-2
Hank is fixing the drone trying to hand loosen a screw. Jack enters. Hank grabs machine oil to loosen the area explaining to Jack how useful it is. Jack tells Hank his dad could loosen that with his bare hands. Jack leaves with Shadow.
JACK’S BEDROOM E-2
Hank returns the fixed drone and leaves. Jack is trying to open an old piggybank but can’t just by pulling. He goes to get the machine oil Hank used, applies it and opens the bank. Samantha comments that Hank knows a lot.
JACK’S BEDROOM – LATE AFTERNOON E-4
Jack and his friend are chasing Shadow with the drone. Julie calls upstairs that Jack’s friend’s mom needs her home. Jack plays alone with Shadow and then picks up photo of his dad while lying on the bed and reminisces about how life used to be. Jack hears Hank in his office.
LIVING ROOM – LATE AFTERNOON E-6
Hank is nearly done taking off ornaments from tree. Julie nearby in kitchen calls to Jack to come downstairs to help Hank with the ornaments. Jack comes downstairs just as Hank is about to apply a tracking dot to the firetruck ornament that is his favorite. Jack yells at Hank to not touch that ornament and grabs it out of Hank’s hands, puts the tracking dot on it himself and then rehangs it on the tree. Jack sees tracking device and secretly removes batteries so it won’t work.
KITCHEN – LATE AFTERNOON E-4
Julie calls Hank into kitchen to explain that Jack and his dad were in the midst of repairing the firetruck ornament when his dad died. Hank admits he’s failing to connect with Jack.
LIVING ROOM TV – LATE AFTERNOON E-6
Grandpa dozing in his chair and ottoman. Breaking News comes on TV with story about escaped lion loose in NYC. They all come to watch and Julie gets call from her news station that she needs to come in to cover the lion story
Hank and Julie are now dressed as Indiana Jones and his female sidekick for a New Year’s Eve costume party they are going to later.
Distracted by TV news story about a lion loose in NYC, Julie knocks the special fire truck storage box under the table while grabbing her bag to go to the news station to work on the escaped lion story. Julie calls to Jack to come help to make sure Shadow and Grandpa are taken care of.
After the news story segment ends on TV, Hank returns to taking ornaments off the tree. Jack tells him there are no more storage boxes for ornaments and assumes all the ornaments are off the tree. Hank carries the tree out to the curb for the garbage pickup.
Jack, down from his bedroom, is playing fetch with Shadow. The ball goes under the table but Shadow comes back with the empty firetruck storage box instead of the ball.
STREET IN FRONT OF HOUSE – SUN IS SETTING E-5
Jack is running down the street yelling at garbage truck driver to stop as he sees the ornament hanging from the tree on the back of the truck.
INSIDE GARBAGE TRUCK CAB – SUN IS SETTING E-4
Garbage truck driver has on headphones and is rocking out to music. Keeps on driving oblivious to Jack’s screams.
STREET IN FRONT OF HOUSE – SUN IS SETTING E-7
Hank runs to street, sees why Jack is chasing the garbage truck and run past Jack but fails to catch the garbage truck. Jack disappointed in Hank again.
ACT 2
STREET IN FRONT OF HOUSE – DUSK E-8
Jack and Hank stopped running and are watching as garbage truck keeps moving farther away. Grandpa pulls up driving motorcycle sidecar with Shadow in it. Hank and Jack climb in and they take to follow the garbage truck up ahead. Wild ride as they finally catch up to garbage truck.
CLOSEUP – HANK HANGING OUT OF SIDECAR E-9
Grandpa driving sidecar catches up with garbage truck. Hank reaches out a little but not far enough to grab ornament. Truck drives off with ornament dangling from back. Jack yells at Hank.
STREET – NIGHT E-6
Jack, Hank, Grandpa and Shadow standing by parked motorcycle sidecar. Hank puts hand in pocket pulls out handheld tracking device excited thinking they have a chance to find the firetruck. But it doesn’t work. Then Jack pulls out the batteries he removed and gives them to Hank. They jump back in the sidecar this time with Hank insisting on driving. Hank is disappointed In Jack.
IN MOTORCYCLE SIDECAR – NIGHT
They ride wildly through the streets of NYC and eventually are led to the outskirts of town to the city dump.
CITY DUMP -NIGHT E-10
They are walking through the dump searching for the tree with the firetruck ornament and run into the lion on the loose with the ornament hanging from his neck. Hank after many failed attempts which loosen the firetruck from his mane, uses his costume whip to back the lion into a container whose door Grandpa and Jack slam shut. Hank picks up the ornament but as Jack runs to hug him in gratitude, it gets knocked loose and the scarf Julie knitted him comes off and is lying on the ground. An owl swoops down, picks up the firetruck and flies off. Hank uses the tracker to follow the owl but forgets his cap.
MOTORCYCLE SIDECAR – NIGHT E-7
They have another wild ride back to the city until they are stopped in New Year’s traffic. The tracker loses its signal. Grandpa, Jack and Shadow decide to return home but Hank wants to walk home alone.
CITY DUMP– NIGHT E-6
Julie with news crew at dump filming where they heard on police scanner someone saw the loose lion. Julie picks up the scarf she sees lying on the ground and it looks just like the one she knitted Hank for Christmas.
ACT 3
CITY STREETS – NIGHT E-7
Hank is walking alone when the tracker starts working again. Excited Hank follows the directions on the tracker to the top of One Times Square taking back alleys. Hank spots the owl holding the ornament with the lion chasing it. He runs following the owl and the lion
ONE TIMES SQUARE – NIGHT E-7
Hank follows the owl and the lion enter One Times Square through an alley back door and follow them up the steps to the top of the building.
TOP OF ONE TIMES SQUARE – NIGHT – SNOW STARTS FALLING –E-9
At the top of the building the owl flies lands on top of the New year’s Eve Ball breaking free of the lion who stands growling at the owl. Hank whips the lion back away and jumps onto scaffolding to get closer to the New Year’s Eve ball where he sees the owl with the ornament dangling from his beak.
STEET BELOW NEW YEAR’S EVE BALL DROP – NIGHT -E-9
Julie with news crew is filming man up on scaffold. Snow is blurring camera lens so man can’t be identified. Julie doesn’t know it’s her husband. Someone yells the lion is there. Hook and ladder crew are called to rescue lion.
LIVING ROOM INTERIOR – NIGHT E-8
Jack and Grandpa are watching TV when Breaking News comes on showing man on scaffold on top of One Times Square Building. They know it’s Hank. They run to join Julie and watch in horror at Hank above the crowd. They run into Samantha and her family there.
SCAFFOLD AT ROOF OF ONE TIMES SQUARE – NIGHT E-10
Hank ties one end of the whip to the scaffold and swings out to grab the firetruck from the owl’s beak and his cap flies off falling to the ground. He knocks it loose but it drops from his hand. Regardless of what happens with the ornament, watching from below Jack is in awe of Hank.
STREET BELOW NEW YEAR’S EVE BALL DROP – NIGHT E-10
News crew films man swinging out near ball. Unbeknownst to Julie the firetruck falls in her bag. Samantha asks Jack if the cap she found belongs to Hank? Jack is about to tell Julie that it was Hank swinging about the crowd when Hank appears. Jack runs to hug him and Hank whispers not to say anything to his mom. Hank winks at Grandpa to get him to keep the secret too. Samantha silently hands Hank his cap.
LIVING ROOM INTERIOR – NIGHT E -5 Feel good
Everyone is home. In the background the TV is showing the man swinging near the New Year’s Eve Ball. Hank is Jack’s hero even without the ornament because he risked his life to retrieve the ornament. Julie finds the firetruck in her bag. Jack, Hank and Grandpa exchange glances but say how funny/odd it is. Julie smiles knowingly wondering out loud who was behind all this. Julie pulls the scarf she found at the dump and wraps it around Hank’s neck and gives him a big kiss on the cheek. Jack puts the firetruck in its ornament box.
HANK’S STUDY INTERIOR – DAYLIGHT -E 3 Happy Ending
Hank and Jack are repairing the firetruck ornament
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Christina Parker Scene Ratings
ACT ONE
1. (E7) EXT. EGYPT 1893 – DUSK
An archaeologist and his servant find an ancient box. They are going to America to sell it for a great price.
2. (E7) EXT. TOWN STREET Present Day – DAY
Tub & Gazza are two bumbling but menacing criminals, new in the town of Creede.
3. (E7) INT. CLASSROOM – DAY
We meet Connor, 14, his friend Danny. Connor is a rebel who doesn’t like Jak, the goth girl.
4. (E7) EXT. SCHOOL GROUNDS – DAY
Connor has an 8yro brother Eli. Connor doesn’t want his brother hanging around him. Baxter, another of Connor’s friends is a smart nerd who gets bullied by Kade.
5. (E6) INT. GIFT SHOP – DAY
Connor steals an item for his mum’s birthday, he is seen by the local pastor and crop duster, Steve. Steve questions his own faith. Danny, Connor’s friend is a Christian.
6. (E6) INT. SHOP: CURIOSITY KILLED THE CAT – LATER…
A woman Elizabeth, Connor’s mom, takes out the meager days takings from the till.
7. (E7) INT. PETERS HOUSE – CONT…
The woman is Elizabeth, Connor’s mum. She reprimands Connor for not bringing Eli home as he has asthma. Connor has an attitude when he sees Eli has made a potholder for his mom’s birthday. Connor accidentally drops it and it breaks. Eli is upset.
8. (E9) EXT. and then INT. MINE – CONT…
Connor meets up with Baxter and Danny at the abandoned mine. They go inside while exploring a rock slide has Connor stumbling into a vertical shaft. He finds an ancient box buried down a tunnel and the boys make their way out. The box opens to reveal ten figurines. Connor gives a frog figurine to Baxter and the Nile god figurine to Danny. As they leave the water they spilled previously has turned to blood.
ACT TWO
1. (E6) INT. TRAIN 1893 – DAY
The servant warns his master, the archaeologist, that the box will only bring death. The archaeologist rebukes him.
2. (E7) INT. STEVE”S LOUNGE Present – NIGHT
Steve watches TV & drinks alone. Jak walks in and they have an argument about her dress code.
3. (E9) INT. CONNORS ROOM – NIGHT
Planes adorn the room Eli plays with one of the figurines from the box while outside the room Connor and his mum argue about chores. Eli drops the figurine under Connor’s bed.
Baxter calls Connor to tell him he has found information on the box. It represented the ten plagues of Egypt and there was a warning on the box. He relates that the Nile God was the god of water.
While in the kitchen Elizabeth turns on the faucet blood fills the glass.
Elizabeth interrupts Baxter to tell Connor not to drink the water. Connor wants to know if Elizabeth had a lot of money would she move to the city.
4. (E8) INT. 1893 BEDROOM CREEDE – DAY
The servant secretly takes the box from his master’s room and hides it. The archaeologist shoots his servant.
5. (E6) INT. PETERS BATHROOM – CONT…
The shower pours blood. Elizabeth is shocked.
6. (E5) PETERS KITCHEN – LATER
Elizabeth on the phone: The water board finds that the contamination in the water is blood but hides it from the public.
Connor and Eli watch the TV report on the town trying to cope with the strange red water. Show rivers of blood and the town trying to cope with the situation. Need to change it so Connor is pushing his Mom to go to town. Because he’s grounded for a day.
7. (E6) EXT. TOWN– LATER
Elizabeth takes the boys to get some bottled water from the town hall that has been shipped in but as they are handed out the water in the bottles turns red.
8. (E6) INT. ANTIQUE DEALERS – LATER
Tub & Gazza try to sell stolen goods. This scene is part of scene 14.
9. (E6) EXT. STREET – CONT…
A fire hydrant bursts gushing blood. Lawns sprinklers spout red blood. Vending water machines are now red. No coffee signs due to bad water.
10. (E7) INT ANTIQUE DEALERS – LATER
Connor finds out the box could be worth a fortune if he can get the other three figurines. Tub and Gazza overhear and want it.
11. (E8) INT CONNORS ROOM – LATER
Connor tries to find the missing figurine (that’s under the bed) Tub & Gazza plan to steal the box when they all go to bed. But they bungle the burglary and run away empty-handed.
12. (E5) INT. PETERS BATHROOM – MORNING
The water is clear again. Need to make this bigger
ACT THREE
1. (E7) INT. BAXTERS HOUSE – CONT…
The frog plague starts in Baxter’s room because he has the frog god figurine. The water turned to blood because of Danny’s figurine. The kid’s show initiative in getting rid of the frogs but they multiple outside Baxters house. Danny says it’s because opening the box has resulted in bringing back the ten plagues of Egypt. All Connor wants are the figurines. Danny gives him his but Baxter’s dog runs off with his.
2. (E7) EXT. PARK – CONT…
Jak has no friends, she manipulates herself into the boy’s group with the frog figurine and dog. Tub & Gazza are following. Everyone but Connor is convinced that putting the box back in the mine will stop the plagues. Connor lies to his friends about doing it. Instead, he is going to sell it.
3. (E8) INT. ANTIQUE DEALERS – LATER
Gazza, posing as the dealer, tricks the box from Connor.
ACT FOUR
1. (E8) EXT. STREET – CONT…
Connor gives chase to get the box back. The frog plague in the town gets worse and traffic is backed up. Connor gets in the back of Tub & Gazza’s van without them noticing. Cars are smashing.
2. (E7) EXT. FREDRICKS HOUSE – LATER
Gazza makes calls to fence the box. Through the window, Connor sees that Gazza is the sinister of the two criminals.
3. (E9) INT. FREDRICKS HOUSE – CONT…
Connor goes inside but his phone rings, the ring tone alerts the crooks.
Baxter, Danny & Jak ring Connor. It rings out.
Hiding from the crooks, Connor opens a trap door and falls into the cellar unconscious. Tub & Gazza don’t have a clue.
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Fred’s Scene Ratings
What I learned from this assignment is that the high entertainment value scores often had a twist, or original take on an idea that made the scene interesting in a refreshing way. However, the low scores were all boring because they only conveyed information without any intriguing action/visual sequence. The more I can come up with creative ideas to spice up mundane plot points, the more entertainment value my script will hold.
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