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Day 7 Assignment
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Lori’s Connection with Audience
What I learned doing this assignment is to be intentional about creating a connection with the audience.
Pastor Thomas
A. Relatability – Thomas seems anxious about Christmas coming so soon. Most adults have felt this.
B. Intrigue – Things are going on under the surface with Thomas that the audience doesn’t know, but they can see that he’s troubled.
C. Empathy – Thomas is asked to take care of some difficult situations.
D. Likability – Thomas is sometimes self-sacrificing when it comes to helping others.
Deacon John
A. Relatability – an average, good old boy trying his best
B. Intrigue – what’s his story
C. Empathy – underappreciated
D. Likability – funny
Mariam
A. Relatability – lonely and trying to make connections
B. Intrigue – Does she like Thomas?
C. Empathy – widow
D. Likability – She makes everyone homemade presents for Christmas.
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<div>Jeff’s connection with audience</div><div>What I learned with this assignment- there’s a number of ways to connect to your audience. </div><div>
</div>1-Tell us which characters you are going to INTENTIONALLY create a connection with the audience. <div>I have intentionally connected all three of the main characters to the audience. I have written a story that I would want to see. You are going to see yourself in everyone of these characters. You’ve been there or seen it before in your life.
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</div><div>2-With each character, tell us how you’ll use each of the four ways of connecting with the audience in the first 30 minutes of the movie.</div><div>Einstein has had a huge loss and has had a tough time getting his life back in order. Dude is at rock bottom. Jen is looking for a job. (Relatability)</div><div>What’s up with Einstein? Why do they call him Einstein? What’s he doing in the crazy room. Jen has mental issues but has something spot out her. What happened to dude ? Is he going to freak out on everyone? (Intrigued) Einstein has a sadness about him and has done nothing but the crazy room for 3 years. Jen is beautiful but has some big mental challenges and can’t get outta her own way. Dude is homeless(empathy) Einstein is a good ball player and gets on the field at pet o. He’s liked by nearly everyone. He’s funny and silly and brilliant. Jen is a great worker and can stand up for herself. She’s kind and funny and has a beautiful energy. Dude is good to his dog. He’s been through enough and you root for him. He’s pretty positive and decides to say yes to life again. </div><div>
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What I learned doing this assignment is that my main character is too bland. Trauma pushes her into the background, makes her passive. Not enough layers.
Ros -Transformational Character
Relatability: This script (beginning in 1956) is consciously created for the thousands of unmarried mothers who for many decades were coerced/forced into giving up their children for adoption in countries all over the world. Today unmarried girls can choose to keep their babies and the day will come in the not too distant future when all those bereft mothers will have died. This is their story, of life-long silent grief and impact that can never be undone. In the first thirty minutes we see Ros finding herself pregnant. We learn from her the circumstances and see some of her pregnancy journey.
Intrigue: Ros marries some years after losing her firstborn child to adoption. A chance discussion makes her future husband’s views on the subject very clear and Ros chooses to stay silent. We wonder if the secret will remain so forever.
Empathy: We have seen the forces of society conspire to force Ros to yield her child against every instinct in her body. We have seen the judgement and treatment of medical staff.
Likability: Ros is an ordinary girl at the start of a teaching career, whose life changes forever in one night. She blames herself for accepting the lift home from a dance that results in her rape (days before contraception) and her reasons for choosing not to force accountability. We can see ourselves in situations where we have chosen not to battle an issue. We see her choosing her fight – trying to challenge the system and losing.
Matthew -(son) Transformational Character and Change Agent
Relatability: We meet him as a small child with an older brother, being told by his adoptive parents how he was ‘chosen’ and therefore very special. We all love cute little children and we see Matt with his little boy language and way of understanding, his reactions, and the reactions and questions of his older (natural born) brother.
Intrigue: We wonder what changes will happen as he grows and how the family story will end. We realize he’s Ros’s son and wonder whether they will ever meet -by chance or choice.
Empathy: We watch on several occasions as the family dynamic changes during Matt’s childhood following the arrival of a third son -whose birth was deemed to be medically impossible. Matthew is no longer needed as a playmate for the first born son.
Likability: We see Matt unable to please his adoptive parents. He understands instinctively that since his younger brother’s birth his place in the family has changed and he no longer fits the mould. We wonder if things will go from bad to worse or whether they will improve.
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Amanda’s Connection with Audience
What I learned doing this assignment is this a good way to evaluate and build a character.
1. Tell us which characters you are going to INTENTIONALLY create a connection with the audience. Allison, Jade,
2. With each character, tell us how you’ll use each of the four ways of connecting with the audience in the first 30 minutes of the movie.
Allison
a) relatability: Allison is a “good girl”, with a good education and looking forward to a nice life, circle of friends
b) intrigue: she gets on a party mood and finds out a new side of herself
c) empathy: She lost her ring and is devastated (she needs to find it)
d) likability: She’s on her bachelorette party trip with her friends and having a good time, she also has a white, small, fluffy dog.
Jade
a) relatability: A party girls who’s trying to get her act together, circle of friends
b) intrigue: Can she keep her act together at the party?
c) empathy: She’s got a little relapse
d) likability: She’s a part of a group of friends
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Dale’s Transformational Structure (Lesson 6)
Dale’s Connection with Audience (Lesson 7)
I’m first posting the Mini Movie structure assignment here, as I cannot find the Lesson 6 forum, then I will post for lesson 7.
Transformational Structure:
What I learned doing this assignment was how challenging it is to line up historical events with transformational events. This assignment pushed me back to the research to try to best do that.
Mini movie structure for Pickering’s Harem:
MM#1 pgs 1-15 Status Quo and Call to Adventure
Antonia’s normal world is one in which she is a Vassar student gaining honors in three areas, physics, philosophy and astronomy, attending a class taught by Maria Mitchell, who discovered a comet. She has received a home education from her father, equal to that of her brother (and her other sister – who also becomes a scientist.) She has been encouraged by her uncle in her interests in science, and even, from an early age, is invited into his lab to be his “assistant.” Not only does her father, a minister and an amateur naturalist, treat her equally.
The Call to Adventure/ Inciting Incident: When she goes to work for Pickering at HCO
Change Agent: Pickering
Transformational Character: Antonia
Old Ways: Entitled, naïve
The Vision: Make a contribution to science
Challenge: The work environment she enters only partially allows women to do science
Weakness: Shy, unassuming
MM#2 Locked into Conflict
Even though Antonia is disappointed to learn that she will not be able to make direct observations in the observatory (she might complain to her sister or her father about this?) and will only be a “computer” at less than ½ the pay, she soon realizes that her only other choice is teaching, and at least here, she is working in the scientific realm. So she begrudgingly accepts these conditions, albeit not ideal.
Old Ways: Some anger and resentment at this compromise
Challenge: How to still try and make a valuable contribution
Weaknesses: Doesn’t feel like she needs to follow authority (this may also be a strength)
MM#3 Hero tries to solve problem but fails.
When she works, under Pickering’s guidance, on the discovery and analysis of the binary star Beta Lyrae 1889, she is very excited by the discovery of double K lines. She feels like she’s making a real contribution. However, she barely gets any credit for it, which angers her.
Change Agent: Pickering, through his not according her proper credit, forces her to stand up for herself more.
Old Ways: Assuming she doesn’t have to fight for herself, but it will be given her naturally
New Ways: Realizing she is going to have to fight
Weaknesses: Is still shy and emotionally fragile and so this is difficult for her.
MM#4 Hero forms a new plan
Fighting to express her own independent discoveries, Antonia realizes that the photos shot with the 11 inch Draper (her uncle’s!) telescope is enabling to see things the other computers haven’t. She forms her own insights and in turn a more sophisticated classification system than the “accepted” Fleming/Pickering one. Annie Jump Cannon, meanwhile, works on simply refining that accepted system.
Vision: To make a true contribution to astronomy
Old Ways: Still believes her discovery will stand on its own
New Ways: Begins to believe she can make independent discoveries without Pickering or Fleming’s guidance
Turning Point / Midpoint: Pickering pressures her to finish her work, she leaves in frustration and exhaustion.
MM#5 Hero retreats and the Antagonism Prevails
Frustrated, Antonia goes home to live with her father – who complains to Pickering on behalf of his daughter (which she doesn’t want him to do.) She works at the Gilman School. She has taken her data with her because past experience has made her wonder if Pickering will give her credit for her discoveries. He asks her to come back, or at least let someone else continue with her data. “I do not think it is fair that I should pass the work into other hands until it can stand as work done by me,” she writes Pickering. Enter the antagonist, Anna Draper, who, though she is Antonia’s niece, represents the “old ways” in terms of women being contributors but being happy to be in the background, as she was for her husband. She tells Antonia she has still made plenty of contributions to science with the egotistical need to get personal credit for it. (Although, interestingly, she once harbored the dream of continuing her husband’s research herself. She ended up deciding to let Pickering, with his greater resources and equipment, take on the task.)
Vision: To get appropriate credit for her work.
Old Ways: Retreating, at first.
New Ways: Stands up to Pickering with her letter to him.
Betraying Character: She discovers that her aunt is encouraging Pickering to sever his relationship with her niece.
Challenge: How to continue her work under these conditions.
MM#6 – Hero’s Bigger, Better Plan
Antonia agrees to return when it appears that Pickering will, in fact, give her proper credit for her discoveries in terms of spectral lines. It was published in 1897 as “Spectra of Bright Stars Photographed with the 11-inch Draper Telescope as Part of the Henry Draper Memorial and Discussed by Antonia C. Maury under the direction of Edward Charles Pickering.” It was the first time, in fact, that a woman is given this sort of credit. But it is only a partial victory.
Despite two other astronomers praising the important subtleties of her classification system, Pickering uses the Annie Jump Cannon system, adapted from the Pickering/Fleming system, as the official spectral analysis system for the The Revised Harvard Photometry, published in 1908. Danish astronomer, Ejnar Hertzsprung of Copenhagen, an astronomer who had discovered Antonia’s system and used it distinguish red dwarf stars from giants, wrote the following to Professor Pickering: “To neglect the c-properties in classifying stellar spectra, I think, is nearly the same thing as if the zoologist, who has detected the deciding differences between a whale and a fish, would continue classifying them together.”
Old Ways: Passively accept what is happening
New Ways: Create a new path for herself, one she can live with
MM#7: Crisis and Climax
Antonia must decide whether to continue work at the observatory or to leave it, because of the lack of recognition for how much more significant her classification system is than the one that is adopted. There will be a scene between her and Pickering where she challenges him on using Annie’s system and not her own. His answers do not satisfy her, and, at this important crossroads, she chooses to leave and returns to teaching.
Old Ways: Try to get along.
New Ways: Give up on adapting to a system that doesn’t full recognize her contributions and strike out on her own to form a new path.
MM#8:
She returns in 1918 to the Harvard Observatory as an adjunct professor and researcher, under the leadership of Professor Harlow Shapley, who is much better about giving her full credit for her work. She throws herself into her passion for binary systems, her favorite being Beta Lyrae which still has mysterious aspects to it. Her work summarizing many years of research on the spectroscopic analysis of this star gets published in 1933.
NOTE: *Not until 1922 did the International Astronomical Union (IAU) modify its classification system based on the work done by Maury and Hertzsprung, a formulation known as the Hertzsprung–Russell diagram.[12][16] Astronomer Dorrit Hoffleit has presented scientific evidence to support the view that stellar morphology was held back by 30 years as a result of the failure to adopt Antonia Maury’s stellar classification theory sooner
And of course, in 1943, she gets properly recognized with the Annie Jump Cannon award. The film returns to this moment, and to her finishing her speech, as the audience heartily applauds.
CONNECTING WITH THE TRANSFORMATIONAL CHARACTER (Lesson 7)
What I learned from this assignment is to take things I knew about the character and show how they create audience connection in the four ways.
RELATABILITY — THEY ARE US
We relate to Antonia’s naivete of how things really are in the world of science for women. We relate to her intelligence and desire to make a mark in the world.
INTRIGUE
For Antonia, the intrigue is how will she, as a highly intelligent and well educated woman in the sciences deal with a rather tedious and repetitive job that doesn’t pay women well?
EMPATHY
We are at first excited for Antonia as she graduates and embarks on a career in astronomy, and then, like her, disappointed by how limited the work is (for example, she can’t be in the observatory looking at the night sky which she was so looking forward to.). We also feel for her shyness and reserved nature. She is awkward and stumbles over her worlds – she is certainly not charming and beautiful like her aunt. (Perhaps Pickering praises her aunt to her, and she clearly doesn’t have these same traits.)
LIKABILITY
We see Antonia’s likeability in that, after her mother’s death, she delayed in responding to Pickering’s letter because she was taking over the household and arranging for her sibling’s education. We see she is caring and family oriented.
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Valerie’s Connection with Audience
ASSIGNMENT
Tell us which characters you
are going to INTENTIONALLY create a connection with the audience.
With each character, tell us
how you’ll use each of the four ways of connecting with the audience in
the first 30 minutes of the movie. A. Relatability B. Intrigue C. Empathy D. Likability
Answer the question “What I
learned doing this assignment is…?” (place at top of your work).
Post to the forums at
https://www.screenwritingclasses.com/forums/Subject line: (Your name’s) Connection with Audience (place in first line)
I learned to use relatability, intrigue, empathy, and likeability to create a full character, a rounded one to show the audience what they are like.
Mary Belinda is the character I am going to intentionally create a connection with.
Relatability-We relate to her as she is so loving to her horse and rides him often. Many people have had a pet that they have loved or have a pet presently that they love.
Intrigue-Mary Belinda receives a blackmail letter addressed to her twin sister with no indication of who it came from or what the particulars are that she is being blackmailed for.
Empathy-Mary Belinda’s twin sister has either drowned or been murdered. The audience will feel badly for her, as many people have suddenly lost someone they are close to. The audience sees how very upset she is about losing her twin sister.
Likeability-We see her likability when she shares with the gravedigger how her sister told her God painted the sky with beautiful colors just for them and how she carefully places her sister’s favorite flowers-pink roses in the casket with her. She see how caring she is to her sister.
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Lauren’s Connection with Audience
What I learned doing this assignment:
The four ways to connect intentionally with the audience so it ensures they go on the journey and experience the character transformation. The Transformable Character and the Change Agent must be the focus because they experience the purest form of the journey.
1. Tell us which characters you are going to INTENTIONALLY create a connection with the audience.
The woman (Transformational Character)
Her brother (Change Agent)2. With each character, tell us how you’ll use each of the four ways of connecting with the audience in the first 30 minutes of the movie.
A. Relatability
The woman (Transformational Character): Her instinct to survive no matter what the circumstances are is very strong.
Her brother (Change Agent): He wants to save his sister from her hellish life; he won’t give up on her.
B. Intrigue
The woman (Transformational Character): Why does she do these horrible things? Why doesn’t she run when she’s outside the compound collecting children?
Her brother (Change Agent): How did he know how to find her? How did he acquire the skills to hunt down sex traffickers? Why does he care what happens to his sister if she’s a member of this terrible organization?
C. Empathy
The woman (Transformational Character): Her existence is bleak, she’s horribly mistreated, she’s clearly moved by the visit with her brother. There’s a good human being trapped inside her somewhere.
Her brother (Change Agent): He watched the murder of his mother and the kidnapping of his sister. He was too young to stop what happened to them.
D. Likability
The woman (Transformational Character): She has a similar sense of humor as her brother. She’s somehow retained her humor even after all she’s been through. She shows small acts of kindness to the children: loosens the handcuffs on them when the driver isn’t looking and/or gives a piece of candy/sip of water to another.
Her brother (Change Agent): He genuinely loves his sister and has an affable personality despite his past. He’s spent much of his life tracking down and assassinating sex traffickers.
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Karen Tolliver Connection with Audience
What I learned doing this assignment is how much an actual film is structured. I thought the connection to a character came natural based on the actions of that Character. Now I realize all of the connections I feel for a Character was deliberately built into the film. What a way to manipulate a film and have an opportunity to make it turn out great.
Sharon Anderson:
A. Relatability: Through a flashback of Sharon’s childhood showing that her father left the home when she was two years old. She grew up without him around.
B. Intrigue: Sharon experiences several times watching the bank reconciliations rolling down and disappear while on her computer.
C. Empathy: Sharon getting arrested by the FBI for embezzlement.
D. Likability: Sharon helps Andrea with her business. Also she takes care of her pet Cocker Spaniel.
Andrea Taylor:
A. Relatability: A millennial social media Influencer Andrea raises awareness of Lupus the disease her sister died of ten years ago.
B. Intrigue: Andrea quits her Computer tech job with a major company to become a Social Media Influencer.
C. Empathy: Andrea has a fear of flying. When the girls must travel to Aruba Andrea almost doesn’t make the trip because of her fear.
D. Likability: Andrea always has Sharon’s back and speaks her mind a lot of times.
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