Day 7 Assignment

[Andrea Higgins]

Hi Patrick,

I think you did a good job with establishing a scenario that works for the assignment. Here are just a few thoughts that occurred to me as I was trying to think through the guidelines we have been working with. Only take them to heart if they help.

There are moments that work effectively for Trent (his subtext and need come through in how he manipulates Angie, for example). But I think that scene would work equally well for Robert (smooth, gregarious, and name dropping gossip).

Since Trent is the one that ultimately wins the power play in the scene (albeit in response to his power/position with Lindsey being threatened), I wonder if Trent should already be waiting for Robert in the VIP room when the scene begins. That way you could use Angie as a way to deflate Robert’s smooth gregarious strategies, thereby brining in his self esteem issue.

Once he and Trent are together, the challenge is drawing out the conspiratorial/needy qualities in Trent, because now he seems to be in control. But perhaps if there was a way to somehow have Trent seem to want to bring Lindsey down as well — invite Robert to help. Basically set up a trap. This would give you a surprise reveal, and would also help to show Trent’s personality change before and after the reveal.

Hope this helps.

[Patrick Malone]

Thank you Andrea for your notes. I felt good about accomplishing this assignment. I like your idea of having Trent and Robert join to bring down Lindsey. That’s another way this could have gone.

You did a great job on your script and I like the changes you made to make it even better. You covered their characteristics and several of the Interest Points. I tired to copy the notes I added on your script here, but it wouldn’t copy.

Patrick