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Day 7 Assignments
Posted by cheryl croasmun on May 22, 2022 at 5:17 amReply to post your assignments.
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Phyllis’ Completed P/S Grid #2
I learned from this assignment a variety of ways to strengthen character and scene work. I was a little less sure of myself with turning exposition into reveals, but hope that will come with time.
I strengthened Delia’s intro by adding a cover for her true goal.
I made the audience care more for Reese by putting her in an emotional dilemma with Sasha’s firing.
I made the audience care more about Finley because he cares about Duncan’s welfare, and not just his money.
I strengthened my antagonist, Delia by giving her an intriguing layer that she might care for her brother after all.
I added more depth to the character of Sasha’s boss, making her a mentor who would be cruelly disappointed by Sasha’s betrayal.
I strengthened one weak scene, in which Duncan is jailed, by raising the stakes. I strengthened the Sasha-Zack scenes by increasing the conflict and adding the irony.
I turned a brief talking scene into one that challenged Delia’s goal to win against Sasha.
I had every scene with Sasha’s mom be a situation that challenged Sasha’s goal, need or wound.
I revealed exposition about Sasha’s father through a reveal that Delia had built up an entire dossier about Sasha, to destroy her.
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Lesson 7
Marcus Completed P/S Grid #2
I learned a group of ways to improve my characters and what they’re doing.
I really tightened up a lot of the action and upped the ante on conflict. Each category in the grid guided me to seek specific problems, and when I found them, how to address them. It’s a lot of work! But hopefully, my script is up to the 50% I think it’s supposed to have achieved by this point in the process.
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Kim completed the P/S Grid #2
This was pretty tough for me. Mostly because since I worked so hard on the outline, I felt I didn’t have that many of these issues in my script. And therein lies my issue, haha. So, to be honest, I think I would need to put this away and take it out again to look at with a much more discerning eye.
But I did look at the scenes again and tried to find places to make the characters more “alive.” So, in general, I DID try to give them more depth and find places to challenge them more. I just think I would find more areas if I didn’t look at it for awhile. Or maybe I need a second set of eyes to tell me where I could make improvements.
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