• Phyllis Strong

    Member
    June 14, 2022 at 11:21 pm

    Phyllis’ Completed P/S Grid #2

    I learned from this assignment a variety of ways to strengthen character and scene work. I was a little less sure of myself with turning exposition into reveals, but hope that will come with time.

    I strengthened Delia’s intro by adding a cover for her true goal.

    I made the audience care more for Reese by putting her in an emotional dilemma with Sasha’s firing.

    I made the audience care more about Finley because he cares about Duncan’s welfare, and not just his money.

    I strengthened my antagonist, Delia by giving her an intriguing layer that she might care for her brother after all.

    I added more depth to the character of Sasha’s boss, making her a mentor who would be cruelly disappointed by Sasha’s betrayal.

    I strengthened one weak scene, in which Duncan is jailed, by raising the stakes. I strengthened the Sasha-Zack scenes by increasing the conflict and adding the irony.

    I turned a brief talking scene into one that challenged Delia’s goal to win against Sasha.

    I had every scene with Sasha’s mom be a situation that challenged Sasha’s goal, need or wound.

    I revealed exposition about Sasha’s father through a reveal that Delia had built up an entire dossier about Sasha, to destroy her.

  • Marcus Wolf

    Member
    June 18, 2022 at 9:01 pm

    Lesson 7

    Marcus Completed P/S Grid #2

    I learned a group of ways to improve my characters and what they’re doing.

    I really tightened up a lot of the action and upped the ante on conflict. Each category in the grid guided me to seek specific problems, and when I found them, how to address them. It’s a lot of work! But hopefully, my script is up to the 50% I think it’s supposed to have achieved by this point in the process.

  • Kimberly Gore

    Member
    June 28, 2022 at 11:21 pm

    Kim completed the P/S Grid #2

    This was pretty tough for me. Mostly because since I worked so hard on the outline, I felt I didn’t have that many of these issues in my script. And therein lies my issue, haha. So, to be honest, I think I would need to put this away and take it out again to look at with a much more discerning eye.

    But I did look at the scenes again and tried to find places to make the characters more “alive.” So, in general, I DID try to give them more depth and find places to challenge them more. I just think I would find more areas if I didn’t look at it for awhile. Or maybe I need a second set of eyes to tell me where I could make improvements.

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