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Day 7 Assignments
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Sunil Pappu’s Story Map
“What I learned doing this assignment is to identify the three tracks and merge them to map the story and form the new structure.”
1. Opening:
Action 1: An illegal fight club inside the prison pits Svetlana against a giant inmate with seemingly good odds of a win. An Israeli fighter roots for Svetlana, the underdog, and she beats her opponent using martial arts Krav Maga and leaves him close to death.
Mission 1: The Israeli fighter takes all the winnings to her in the form of prison supplies, and she picks up an American peanut butter jar and eats a handful. He warns her to watch what she eats before practice the next day.
2. Inciting Incident:
Action 2: The prison guards who lost their bets decide to teach her a lesson and put her in restraints and interrogate her to find out who she really is. She breaks out of her restraints and almost chokes them to death. She is caught on the CCTV camera.
Villain 1: KGB agent alerts Commander Mikhail of a possible facial recognition match to a defected dead agent.
Villain 2: To go after her as a deflector from the KGB and clear his name or stick to his secret mission from the Kremlin.
Villain 3: He puts up a contract with the prison guards to get an inmate to take her out and bring him proof of death.
3. Act 1 Turning Point:
Action 3: An inmate takes the hit contract put out by the KGB Commander for Svetlana to get even with her for his humiliating defeat in the prison fight club. He tries to rape her but is brutally killed instead.
Mission 2: She is activated by the CIA for a mission she thought would never be sanctioned until now. The Israeli fighter gives her a postcard that has just arrived and tells her: “Time to go?” The postcard is an image of her in KGB training which is code for activation.
Action 4: She puts her carefully thought-out plan into action. She gets to a vantage point with a sniper rifle and takes out all the guards. She flips the postcard and examines it under a flame to read coordinates in magic ink and enters them into the computer at the guard station to see the target location of a missile silo. She saves the Israeli fighter and traps the prison inmates in the fight arena and escapes off into the woods.
Villain 4: Mikhail orders the military canine unit and sends his agents on skis with automatic weapons… who are killed by her, and a sniper in the woods who is an ex-military fighter Igor who went into hiding because he doesn’t believe in the war on Ukraine.
Action 5: The KGB Commander orders more agents and sends assassins into the forest to take her down.
Action 6: She is chased by assassins on motorbikes airdropped into the forest. … she uses her sniper rifle on the move, quickly moving from one vantage point to the next using the natural terrain… takes out the chopper.
Villain 5: She uses one of the sat phones to threaten Mikhail in Russian that she’s coming for him to teach him a lesson this time. He warns her that she’s a dead woman if she comes after him.
Action 7: She gets knocked out by a KGB agent, but she gets some help from the sniper to neutralize him.
Mission 3: She falls through the cracks into the icy lake and is rescued by the ex-military sniper Igor and his rescue dog.
4. Mid-Point:
Mission 4: An Ex-military sniper saves her and team up with her against the KGB assassins.
Villain 6: KGB commander knows she has been activated to stop him and wants her dead.
Mission 5: The military and KGB fortify the Missile Silo to make it impossible to enter without being detected while they scour the forest.
Action 8: Mikhail reaches the missile silo and sets up snipers to keep a lookout for Svetlana and take anybody that moves within a mile… Svetlana anticipates their positions and, with the help of her partner Igor, takes out the first sniper. She uses his position to neutralize the others.
Action 9: She enters the missile silo to stop the launch and shuts off power to the building. She has her sniper scope, and she sets up shots and is ready to ambush the enemy.
5. Crisis/Dilemma:
Villain 7: One of the snipers goes after Igor and captures him. Mikhail beats him and lets Svetlana hear him shoot and kill the rescue dog (the one that saved Svetlana).
Action 10: She is forced to surrender when her partner Igor is taken hostage and beaten up, and the rescue dog is shot dead by Mikhail in the woods.
6. Act 2 Turning Point:
Action 11: She is restrained and tortured like a defector to reveal her CIA secrets, and the missile launch is initiated.
Villain 8: Mikhail enters the target coordinates for the tactical nuclear missile launch and initiates the sequence.
7. Climax:
Action 12: Svetlana breaks out of her restraints to kill the agents guarding her.
Mission 6: She takes on the Commander in an ultimate hand-to-hand combat. She changes the missile target just in time to implode the missile silo on itself.
8. Resolution:
Mission 7: She rushes to save her partner Igor in the woods whose been kept barely alive. The other missile launch sites have all been deactivated as well, and Russia is sanctioned heavily by NATO. Even China condemns its actions of starting a nuclear war and signs on the UN Treaty for the Prohibition of nuclear weapons.
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What I’ve learned from this lesson is to go through each scene and tag with A, M, V…
Still in progress and I have questions but so far
OPENING 1:
Scene 1: V1 (Order): we see Melissa Chen in a laboratory full of animals she’s creating a virus. Nick Chen walks in tells her to finish up they are meeting their funders tonight: we leave in thirty minutes. She warns them it’s not ready thousands of people could die. He ignores her warning: our funders are hard core and then threatens her. She fights back but he still ignores her. Writers Note: Why are they creating deadly viruses?
Scene 2: V2 Natalia Volkova with her minder Lev is waiting for Nick Chen to arrive. She’s also waiting for Serge Ivanov to bring a suitcase full of money. They both arrive just in time. Nick introduces Melissa as Doctor Steel the real genius behind the virus. Nick catches Ivanov looking at his sister he warns him off. Volkova reminds them that they are all there to serve their respective Motherlands. Lev asks them to open their respective suitcases at the same time…then we cut to Writers Note: Why does Volkova want the virus?
Or Scenes 3, 4 or 5 could be our openings….that’s what I have in my current 3 Act outline..
OPENING 2:
Scene 3: We are flying above Vienna heading towards Prater Park.
Scene 4: We linger above the iconic big wheel the Wiener Riesenard synonymous with the Third Man we know we are in Vienna. We know this is a movie about spies.
Scenes 5 &6: A1 We see Rachel Gilroy for the first time she’s being shot at. She coolly takes out the enemy: a Chinese sniper. Writers Note: Why is she being shot at?
Scenes 7 & 8: She’s scouring the rooftops protecting an intelligence meeting. Her and colleague, Matt Edwards, are waiting for Serge Ivanov. She gives the Biergarten the all clear.
Scene 9: M1/Order Serge arrives. Rachel reminds Edwards that Green gave them one hour to get Serge’s Intel. Let’s bring this in in 30 she says.
Scene 10: Ivanov & Edwards exchange greetings. Ivanov wants a deal: the CIA extract him and his informant goes by the name of Dr. Steel give them new lives away from Chinese and Russian governments and agencies. But Green has been stalling. Edwards says he’ll call Green right now and secure the deal but wants to know who Dr. Steel is and where he is. Writers note: Why is Green stalling? Why is Russian and Chinese agencies and governments after Ivanov and DR. Steel?
Scene 11: A2: Rachel spots a second Chinese sniper on the rooftops and a Chinese agent with a backpack taking a seat near Edwards and Ivanov. She warns Edwards but he doesn’t hear her. The Chinese sniper is able to shoot and wound her before she shoots him dead. A second Chinese agent wearing a backpack enters the café. Writers note: Why do Chinese agents want Ivanov?
Scenes 12 to 14: A3: Edwards hears Rachel’s warning, A Chinese agent approachs their table and warns Ivanov to come peacefully: they are surrounded. Edwards grabs Ivanov and drags him to safety with the help of Rachel and with the Chinese agents in pursuit. However, Rachel spots a guy hanging around she uses her binoculars: it’s her father, veteran CIA Agent, Steven Gilroy. Rachel photographs him. Writers Note: Why is Steven Gilroy here?
Scenes 15 & 16: Steven Gilroy is on his phone to Ivanov. He’s cutting him a deal and asks him to meet him at a local bakery but not before checking there’s only one copy of a video.
Scene 17: Steven calls Volkova tells her Ivanov will be at the bakery in ten minutes if she wants the flash drive containing the video. Writers Note: Why did Steven call Volkova and handing Ivanov to her? Why did Steven ask Volkova if we’re done? Why is Volkova working for the Chinese apart from the money? Why does Ivanov trust Steven more than Green?
Scene 18: A4: Rachel shoots at Steven and he manages to run off. Writer’s Note: why would Rachel shoot at a fellow CIA agent and especially one who is also her own father?
Scene 19: M2: Edwards tries to get Ivanov to come with him to their CIA safehouse but he tells him he got a better deal. Rachel decides to follow him: they still haven’t secured the intel they need.
Scene 20 to 23: M3: Rachel follows Ivanov from a distance sees that he enters a bakery.
Scene 24: Rachel enters the bakery just as there’s a muffled gunshot. Volkova and Lev emerge from the kitchen having just shot Ivanov and taken his hardware.
INCITING INCIDENT
Scene 25: A5: Rachel goes to Ivanov tries to save him and to persuade him to give her the Intel that he wanted to share. Reveal: Volkova killed him because he was cutting a deal with the CIA. When Rachel asks about Dr. Steel Ivanov tells her she’s in Vienna and will find her. Ivanov dies. Writers Note: Rachel still no closer to knowing who Dr. Steel is or what Intel Ivanov wanted to share.
FIRST TURNING POINT END OF ACT 1
Scene 26 & 27: Order 2/M4: Rachel asks Edwards to catch up Volkova and follow her wait until she arrives.
Scene 28: A6: Rachel and Edwards ambush Volkova and Lev. There’s a fight they almost kill Rachel and Edwards but Rachel fights back and kills Lev and Volkova.
Structure Recap:
• • Opening 1 to 4 pages: Rachel Gilroy, elite CIA sniper, is ambushed by Chinese snipers during an intelligence meeting with the CIA’s Russian Informant, Serge Ivanov.
• • Inciting Incident 10 to 15 pages: Serge Ivanov is left for dead by his boss Natalia Volkova, but before he dies he tells Rachel she must protect a Dr. Steel.
• • First Turning Point at end of Act 1 – Rachel kills Volkova
might be better than finding out her father is being investigated for treason
• • Mid-Point: A Mark Taylor steals a deadly virus from a local laboratory.
• • Second Turning Point at end of Act 2 –– Rachel is now dying having been infected with the virus and has only 1 hour to live.
• • Crisis: Rachel has to decide whether to risk Dr. Steel’s life to take out Mark and regain control of the helicopter. Mark throws Rachel from the helicopter.
• • Climax: Rachel swims to the yacht in search of her parents and the antivirals that will save her life.
• • Resolution: Rachel saves her parents lives, takes out Nick, and finally gets an answer to why her father disrupted her meeting.
• But there’s a twist…
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Lesson 7: Map Out Your Story
What I learned (was reminded) is how amazing it is to map out your story without worrying about dialog. I also find myself fleshing out a lot of ideas. I’m also already seeing the weak spots in the story. I have a lot of work to do. 😒
OPENING
M1: Janine Henderson, student reporter and Yale Junior, arrives in break away Republic of XXXXX in Central Asia. She goes on Spring Break to meet with fellow student journalist
A1: A power sharing arrangement has been made between the majority Christian population and the minority Muslim population. (The Mahenga). The Presidential Cabinet will all board the Presidential plane, fly a celebratory flight over the country and then have a parade and celebration to praise the new Unity Government.
V1: General Resnik, commander of the military avoids the plane ride at the last minute, declaring he is ill.
INCITING INCIDENT
A2 The President’s plane is shot down. Pandemonium breaks out.
M2: Janine races to the origin site of the missile.
V2: General Resnik arrives at the parade site. The military says he is in charge now and must do what he is right. Resnik declares terrorists shot down the President’s plane and vows to avenge the loss. Resnik is challenged by another cabinet member who says he is next in line of succession. He also was not on the plane.
M3: Janine talks to someone who saw the shooter escape. Believes they got into a military vehicle. They show her a photograph.
A3: A bomb goes off killing the cabinet member. (We see clearly Resnik’s henchmen planted the bomb)
V3: General Resnik declares that he must rule the country now. He will not stop until “terrorism” is rated out.
M3: Janine hides out with a local family of Mahenga Muslim people. They tell her that they had nothing to do with the Presidential plane being shot down and that this is just a pretext to wipe out their population
A4: Mahenga men are rounded up and arrested.
A5: Militia begin combing the streets Non-residents are being expelled. They are brought to train stations and the airport.
FIRST TURNING POINT (END OF ACT 1)
M4: Janine decides she will stay with the Mahenga people and show the TRUTH.
A6: Local attacks against Mahenga take place.
V4: General Resnik gives an order to disband all local governments.The military begins seizing everything.
M5: Janine reaches her friend (Speaker of the House ) in DC. She says she is in the country. She says it is nothing but a coup and that a genocide is starting. Janine is told there must be proof.
V4: Resnik’s people receive word of Janine’s call. They are told to hunt her down. All outside communication including Internet and phone service is blocked.
M6: Janine flees to THE ROCK the ancestral home of the Mahenga to learn the true story.MID-POINT
VILLAIN: General Resnik holds a Triumph of the Will style rally.
ACTION: The Mahenga men that were rounded up are executed.
MISSION: Janine gets footage of the execution and its aftermath.
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SECOND TURNING POINT (END OF ACT 2)
HERO Janine sends footer of the execution and its aftermath out to the world
VILLAIN: A full scale assault is launched agains the Mahenga.….
CRISIS
ACTION: Janine is captured.
VILLAIN: They pressure Janine to _____
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CLIMAX
ACTION: International Peacekeeping forces invade XXX and put down the genocide.
MISSION: Janine escapes.
ACTION: General Resnik is arrested
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RESOLUTION
MISSION: Janine reports what has happened to the world. She helps the Mahenga people
ACTION: The widows of the President and Vice-President vow to form a unity government and work together for peace
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Danielle LEGRAND’s STORY MAP
What I have learnt during this assignement is to find a balance in the structure of my story between the mission, the action, and the villain’s track.
MISSION
M1 : Saving his life
M2 : Preventing a war
M3 : Protecting his wife and the scientist
M4: Find who the Villains are
M5 : Repairing the cyber-attack damages
M6 : Getting back to normality
VILLAIN TRACK
V1 : Acting like a very reliable and indispensable collaborator
V2 : Giving orders nobody would discuss
V3 : Directing a cyber-attack to create a diversion
V4 : Finding the hero
V5 : Obtaining the sparking off the war.
V6 : Killing the hero
ACTION TRACK
A1 : Poisoning the hero
A2 : Launching a cyber-attack
A3 : Escaping of the hero
A4 : Trying to save the President’s life
A5: Chasing the hero
A6 : The First Lady’s Investigation
A7 : The capture and torture of the hero
A8 : The rescue
OPENING
V1
V2
INCITING INCIDENT
A1
A2
V3
M1
M2
END OF FIRST ACT – TURNING POINT
A3
M3
V4
A4
A5
MIDPOINT
M4
SECOND TURNING POINT :
A4
V5
CRISIS / DILEMNA
A7
V6
CLIMAX
A6
A8
RESOLUTION
A8
M5
M6
TOM’s day organizing the President’s daily activities. We can see he has important tasks in hand and he is the closest person to the President. Each presidential day is rythmed at a steady tempo by him. On the other hand, PAMELA the PRESIDENT’s wife appears as a modern sportive young woman (ex. karate champion) and also as a romantic one who would appreciate more privacy with her husband.
The nurse who comes and vaccinates the PRESIDENT according to schedule has been secretly switched with a VILLAIN’s accomplice. First she has killed the real nurse, then she inoculates the hero with a timing poison. To get the antidote the VILLAIN wants him to do something which would start a war with CHINA.
The PRESIDENT decides to trick the VILLAIN and flee (hidden in a laundry van) to get some help without compromising the scientist who could find the antidote. He has to change his clothes and his general appearance. He becomes an ordinary citizen with a gigantic problem to solve.
The President understands he has to solve his problems on his own.He has to find who his opponents are without overlooking a search for the antidote as soon as possible. The Russian Mobis after him. PAMELA suspects something wrong is happening. She does a little private investigation and she understands her husband is in trouble. She is ready to make anything to find what is going on.
THE SCIENTIST is lacking a rare component for making the antidote. The President becomes weaker and weaker and has trouble escaping detection from the Mob after him.
The hero is caught by the villains who want to force him into starting a war. He is beaten and tortured but he does not give up. He knows he is going to die
PAMELA has found clues which lead her to the VILLAINS. The SCIENTIST has managed to get in touch with her since he has been successful making a specific antidote. They break into the criminals‘ den.
These ones get a good thrashing by the FIRST LADY who is still well trained in karate. In the meantime the scientist saves the hero and the C.I.A. remand them in custody before sending them to a Chinese prison.
We learn the Presidential couple always has had their secret codes and connections which have proved to be very useful in such a situation. As they receive the Queen of England they share funny moments of complicity as they can see Her Majesty has also her personal secret codes.
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Jan’s Story Map
WIL: To go back and re elaborate what I missed to do – or think -beforehand
1. Look through your three tracks (Mission, Villain, and Action) and find the points that could work for this structure.
Opening
A1 Kitty races through the world of codes and numbers, the final competition who get’s the 5 jobs as highly paid white hats for the Malta casino conglomerate. (Her normal life).
M1 Kitty is among the five winners, next day a relocation agent will touch base and show her around et al. Kitty and the other 4 decide to celebrate at a mutual dinner. Beach Club dinner and party;
V1 DARK supervising the op on Malta from his HQInciting Incident
M2. Kitty wants to go home from the party, allows to be talked into one last drink (this decision will change her life (beginning)).
A2 A sudden shooting in the club leads to a panic,
M3 A2 Kitty safes a life, leads to
A3 Kitty gets drugged
M4 Kitty wakes up next morning on a rock above the sea and is tattooed with a color- and beautiful lizard that vibrates when she looks at it.First Turning Point at end of Act 1:
3. (re check :!! Kitty faints in Bar Petrus? Because when se wakes up is ACT 2 beginning of adventure) ?? )
V2 DARK adjusts plan to reality : find, get, bring them
M5 Kitty finds the bar where she was drugged and learns from Petrus that she has one of three parts of a magic tattoo and
M6 that she has ten days to unite the tattoos otherwise it will start to dissolve and kill her
A5 reloc Agent shows up shows her apt with strong backbone, Kitty gets arrested by police;
A6 Kitty will not allow to get pushed around by police officers;
V3 Two goons on the street are not enough to overwhelm Kitty. Who is she? Dark sends more people.
A8 Kitty recieves call from Dark
V4 Dark send false intel to local policeMid-Point :
V5 a. Second call from DARK while she is with Petrus and Paul in the hospital, who explains that she got no chance – It’s not the ten days only but everything he will send her way, goons, bribe police, infiltrate her company, kill everyone around her. Petrus advise: it s not about the money and brain only, she should accept to listen to the energy of the lizard. Then she will be able to go into the zone and solve the riddle.
V7 DARK orders more people to Malta;
V8 DARK continues to manipulate local police;A9 Kitty uses company computer to set huge algorithm
A 10 Kitty chases goons with tattoo 2, losses them , he s taken to SofiaV9 DARK caught tattoo 2 and has it transplanted to his skin, killing him
A 11 more goons arrive
A 12 Kitty surrounded by goons , sorts it – without killing
A 13 Georgie arrives on Malta – now it gets serious;Second Turning Point at end of Act 2:
V12 DARKs right hand man Georgie enters the police station gets hold of Kitty,V13 kills Lusare. DARK sends a pic to Kitty’s phone where she can see that Dark has already transplanted one Tattoo to his chest. Her Tattoo goes dark.)
Crisis :
the head of IT of the casino company makes a statement, either Kitty shows up for the „leisure“ life of her white hat challenge” or let go of the job (her goal) ./.(need to fight for justice)
A? Kitty follows tracks for Tattoo 3
V14 DARK feels tattoo vibrating, knows Kitty is closing in on tattoo3
A 14 Kitty finds tattoo 3V16 DARK has airport closed
A 15 Kitty tricks Georgie and kidnaps private jet; setting of false intel about targeted airport
V 17 Dark sends people to wrong airport
A 16 goons preparing at the wrong airportClimax:
M18 Kitty fights through the HQ of DARK,
V20 A18 Georgie frees himself;
M19 / V21 Kitty finishes Georgie then
M20 /V22 A 20 DARK mano a Mano – knows she may not kill him either.
M21 / V23 Kitty ties the three of them together,
A21 Kitty let the tattoo decideResolution
M23 Returning to Malta another algorithm of Kitty has practically „robbed“ the casino without the four white hats even realizing and she therefore has won the round as white hat as well. Stepping out of the companies door, Paul and Petrus are waiting for her. Kitty shows Pertus her wrists, both show tattoos -
Nick’s Story Map
What I learned: It was a good way to organize plot points, but got a little confusing placing mission/action/villain in their proper order of events.
MISSION:
M1—Plans to go on a camping trip with close friends for R&R, to get his mind off the war and his permanent injuries.
M2— To find a campsite quick and avoid ever seeing the skinheads again.
M3—To escape in the SUV, get help, and come back for the girls.
M4—To escape on motorcycles and get help.
M5—With new legs, Juan is on a mad mission to save his friends.
M6—To find a modern campsite—and peace.
VILLAIN:
V1—Mankill and his skinheads attack Juan and his friends at the gas station.
V2—Mankill and his skinheads arrive at farmstead with a dusty display of Harley gamesmanship.
V3—He smashes Juan’s prothesis.
V4—He brutalizes and sodomizes Juan.
V5—He terrorizes and hangs Emilio.
V6—He vows to kill Juan and chases after him on his Harley.
ACTION:
A1—Juan as a soldier in active combat.
A2—Confrontation with skinheads at cafe/gas station.
A3—Skinheads attack and capture Gloria and Coral.
A4—Gloria kills two skinheads in knife fight.
A5—Mankill chases after Juan and Emilio and captures them.
A6—Mankill smashes Juan’s prostheses.
A7—Juan and Emilio escape again and chased. Emilio is caught.
A8—Juan has an encounter with an alligator.
A9—Juan kills man beating his dog.
A10—Juan saves Emilio from hanging.
A11—Juan blows up machine shed.
A12—Juan and Emilio kill all Mankill’s kin.
A13—Mankill chases fleeing SUV and gets blown up.
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OPENING:
Juan as a soldier in active combat. He steps on a mine and gets blown up (A1). He plans to go on a camping trip with closest friends for R&R, to get his mind off the war and his permanent injuries (M1).
INCITING INCIDENT:
After Emilio dissed him in front of the cafe/gas station, Mankill and his skinheads attack Juan and his friends (V1)(A2). They are saved by the sheriff’s intervention. But, it’s getting late and they must find an out of the way campsite quick and avoid ever seeing the skinheads again (M2).
END OF ACT 1:
Mankill and his skinheads arrive at farmstead with a big display of adolescent Harley showmanship and block the only lane out of the campsite further up the lane (V2). Juan et al are trapped.
MID-POINT:
A foursome of skinheads attack and capture Gloria and Coral who are waiting for Juan and Emilio to return from moving the Harley’s out of the lane while most skinheads are busy inside eating (A3). Gloria kills two skinheads in knife fight (A4). Juan and Emilio escape in the SUV to get help to come back and save the girls, but run out of gas (M3). They are captured by Mankill who smashes Juan’s prothesis (V3). Mankill brutalizes and sodomizes Juan (V4).
END OF ACT 2:
Juan and Emilio escape again, this time on a Harley, under a hail of bullets, one of which strikes the gas line. They run out of gas again (M4) (A6).Emilio is caught by the skinheads (A5)..
CRISIS:
Juan escapes by swimming under the water of the swamp (A7). An alligator attacks him (A8). Mankill drags Emilio back to farmstead to be tortured (V4).
CLIMAX:
Despondent, friends gone, no legs, and skinheads looking for him, Juan crawls back to the farmstead and hides under a spring-toothed cultivator, then gets an idea to make new legs out of the spring-tooth tines. He crafts weaponized legs in the machine shed without getting noticed and they work. Juan is now on a mad mission to save his friends (M5). Juan empales the man who beat on the dog that saved him earlier (A8). He blows up the machine shed (A10) as a diversion to save Emilio from a hanging (A9).
Juan and Emilio join forces and find the girls restrained and being molested by the brute skinheads. They kill all Mankill’s kin with horrible and crafty efficiency (A11). Mankill chases down the now gassed, fleeing SUV (A12). A final fight in which Mankill gets blown up—we think (A13).
RESOLUTION:
To find a modern campsite—and peace (M6).
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Laura Woodworth’s Story Map
What I learned doing this assignment is to note the place in my current draft of this screenplay where I can infuse more purpose-driven action, with a more defined mission.
Below I’ve inserted the additional Mission/Villain/Action that I need to revise in the screenplay.
1. Opening: Opening image is the bus crash; Rachel senses something is wrong but doesn’t grasp what it is – until she sees the deadly “accident” reported on the evening news and realizes her vision was a prophetic premonition. In the meantime, she prays for a young man Luke and sees a miraculous intervention as her prayers are answered and we realize she has a “super power” of sorts (unique talent) in her prayer life.
Question: Who is Rachel – what is God revealing to her and why?
2. Inciting Incident: “What inciting incident is strong enough to send the hero on the journey?” I must be irreversible.
Rachel “sees” the bridge collapse but passes it off as a crazy idea in her head – until she watches horrified as the catastrophe is reported on live television. She realized God tried to warn her but she didn’t listen and now lives are lost – again. She can’t ignore the prophetic visions any longer. She begins the journey of listening, obedience and prayer: her journey to cooperate with what God is showing her and use her “super power” of prayer to stop the evil.
INSERT VILLAIN: Stronger: the power of fear over the army (here and elsewhere)
3. First Turning Point at End of Act 1 – point of no return. What locks her into the story?
Acting on the prompting of God in her spirit, Rachel prays for Philadelphia and the evil she senses is about to happen. She goes to a new and deeper level of spiritual warfare prayers against what she senses is about to happen. When a suicide bomb attack is thwarted in the Philadelphia subway system, she realizes it was a direct result of her prayers. She has seen her prayers answered in a big way, beyond her normal realm of life. Evil has been thwarted, countless lives saved, and she is resolved to pray when God says pray!
INSERT VILLAIN: Stronger: Inside people at the White House creating the narrative
4. Midpoint: some kind of twist changes the meaning of the story. The journey is the same, but the purpose or meaning has changed.
Sick with food poisoning, Rachel doesn’t pray for the next city that God has shown her. She wakes up to the news that Chicago has been hit: a deadly terrorist act on a crowded bus. The weightiness of the situation increases and she realizes that this isn’t just a one-off situation; there is an evil army force instigating these attacks and her thought that they are all connected is confirmed. This has become a matter of life or death for her and she is willing to risk all to stop this evil. She takes action.
5. Second Turning Point at end of Act 2: Usually this is the point where the Hero’s plan has failed. All hope is lost, the hero feels defeated. The hero has to change to achieve her goal. They have to accept something about themselves or accept that their way of doing things just won’t work anymore.
After the Chicago incident, Rachel’s desperation has driven her to desperate action to warn who she can of the evil planned before it happens. She has come under the radar of the FBI (and Pharoan) and they haul her in as a suspect with no one believing her story of God’s prophetic warnings. Evan’s work career and their marriage is on the line. All hope is lost. She has to change her tactic to achiever her goal. Her way of doing things just won’t work anymore.
INSERT ACTION: Escape/evade in car
INSERT VILLAIN: Go after her FBI husband, or her church (attack what’s dear to her)
6. Crisis/Dilemma: Hero has to make a very tough decision often where she loses something either way.
Shown the big attack that is coming, Rachel must make a tough and dangerous decision. She loses something either way; her life/marriage – or others’ lives. Knowing that the villain is tracking her, she decides to allow herself to be kidnapped by them with a plan to lead the FBI directly to them.
INSERT ACTION Chase/pursuit on foot
7. Climax: the hero and villain come face to face for the showdown and there will be only one winner.
Rachel is captured by Vegard and tortured for information, even while the multiple hospital attacks are in motion. But – her plan works. Evan and the FBI figure out her scribbled notes in her prayer journal and take action to search hospitals and locate the bombs. They locate Rachel and once all the bombs are disarmed, attack and save her, killing Vegard and, in their minds gaining victory. But —-
INSERT VILLAIN: Stronger: launch the most horrific attack while she watches seemingly helpless
Twist: They missed a bomb! The Children’s Mercy Hospital where friends Brian and Lisa are at with their new baby. The FBI and Evan and Rachel race to find and disarm the last hidden bomb – seconds before it explodes! The hospital is saved. They have won.
8. Resolution: The resolution gives us an answer to the question that the inciting incident asked. It tells us how this conflict has been resolved.
Question: Who is Rachel – what is God revealing to her and why?
Rachel’s prophetic visions have been verified and the villain behind the attacks defeated. Her guilt resolved, her reputation cleared, her friends and their child saved, her marriage recovered.
Denouement: The bird commits an “honor” suicide; Vegard slinks off. Rachel is back in church with Evan, friendships restored. They join in on the ceremony to dedicate Brian and Lisa’s baby to the Lord, lifted up with the words, “This child is yours,” which brings a satisfying ending and yet sets the stage for what’s next. A sequel…
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FOUNDLING story map REV 1.0
OPENING: …
…A 1: The night of Order 66- the Jedi Temple on Coruscant is under siege by the
V1: Emperor’s Clone Troopers
A1: The Jedi Caretakers defend the Nursery of Force Sensitive infants- The Jedi elevate the Basinets up out of view near the ceiling, out of eyesight –
V1: the Clone Troopers take losses, but overwhelm the small number of Jedi Caretakers-
A1: Elzee is last alive, a Padawan who is able to escape with only 3 sealed Basinets –
INCITING INCIDENT: …
M 1: …JW and Olivia go out on their day, their separate ways after paying respects to the grave of their children a dozen feet away from their house…
M 2: …JW tracks an animal he shot which leads him to the young Padawan, Elzee- he tends to her wounds.
A2:…The four Mandalorian Foundlings skulk along the rooftops, keeping out of sight as they look down on a drug deal going down between two gangs- The Pykes and the Black Sun- they are trading 30 pieces of Beskar for a blue drug.
A3: …the Foundlings run out across metal braces between the buildings, pull their side arms and make their drop- Shooting GREEN INK (paint ball) in the face masks of each criminal gang- The Foundlings steal the Beskar, and Din smashes the drugs, and they all make their escape into the rear door of the market…Din is grabbed by Olivia, the way a mother grabs her kid and yanks him back from getting hurt-
V 1: …Asa and his Bounty hunters arrive in town seeking a doctor for Asa’s dismembered arm.
V2: …at the Medical Center, the doctor asks about the clean cauterized cut- “This was done by a Lightsaber, yes?“
V3:…we CUT TO a FLASHBACK to Asa and the Bounty Hunters entering Elzee’s camp to try to take the Basinets- She defends skillfully, but gets shot- but not before she cuts Asa’s gun arm off-
V4: …Asa’s Assassination Droid, HK-51 shoots each basinet with tracker tags…
M2: …JW returns with Elzee in the bed of his Hauler (pick-up truck) to find four Foundlings sitting around his dinner table –
A 3: …Olivia tends to Elzee’s wounds- she’s done this before in her younger days.
A4:…JW enlists the pint sized, Din Djarin to come with him to his ship- they go down a long underground tunnel to the hangar underneath their barn… JW and Olivia’s ship is in disrepair. JW makes note that he has to add to his to do list- fix the ramp. They grab the medical supplies and head back…
V5:…at the Medical Center, Asa and HK-51 receive a hologram call from the Broker who engaged them on this bounty- He says that if they cannot deliver the Bounty in 2 days, he’ll give the bounty to Cad Bane and they will not get costs or time spent covered and won’t get another job. The Broker reminds them that this is supposed to be Top Secret- The doctor is pretending to be asleep as she listens in- Asa sends HK to collect Hall and Kerry as he rises and approaches the doctor- cut away before the murder…
M 3:…Olivia and JW talk in bed, they have to help both the Jedi and the Foundlings.
M4:…the next morning, JW wakes the four Foundlings and enlists them to help him get the ship ready- They need to clear stored junk over the hangar entrance…
M5:…A local Magistrate arrives fishing for information- having heard that JW was up at the Caldera the day before hunting- he drops that strangers, outworlders are skulking about- He lets JW know that the doctor was found dead in her office-
END OF FIRST ACT — TURNING POINT
M6:…as their conversation continues- He conveys that there are strangers, outworlders, lurking about and that the local Doctor was found dead this morning-
V4:…the Magistrate is shot by someone hidden in the morning fog- Asa and his Bounty Hunters used the Tracking Tags…
A6: …JW’s goes to grab his sidearm, but he doesn’t have it. In his younger days, he be strapped.
V5:…Asa and his Bounty Hunters keep obscured in the morning fog- shooting from undercover- The Foundlings pull their sidearms and shoot -GREEN INK- hitting one of the Bounty Hunters in the face, blinding her- She screams out in stinging pain from the INK.
A7:…JW scolds the Foundlings to get back into the house- The Foundlings change out their INK CLIPS for ENERGY CLIPS in their guns -JW calls out to Olivia who is already on the move helping Elzee towards the tunnel entrance in the house…
A8:…inside the house- JW sends the Foundlings to help Olivia get Elzee and her Basinets to their ship- Din remains with JW at the front door…
V8:…HK-51 aims and SHOOT the front door…
A9:…the entryway door explodes in on JW and Din- M7:…in the tunnel between the ranch house and their hidden hangar- Olivia, Elzee and the Foundlings (Fedus, Jixie and Calleen) pushing the Basinets are rocked by the explosion above-
A10:…JW rises and searches the rubble for Din- worried- REVEAL, Din is at the door unhurt except for a stubbed toe- He shoots… JW: “Get your ass away from that door!”
M8:…Olivia, Elzee and the Foundlings arrive with the Basinets- The SHIP is not ready to fly-
A11:…above, inside the house- JW and Din discover the tunnel entrance is caved in- they have to sneak out another way- and get past their unknown adversaries (Asa and the Bounty Hunters)-
MID-POINT
A2:…JW & Olivia get their ship off the ground -and into space- Olivia sets course for BALFOUR- the planet Elzee says she needs to goto –
A3:…the SHIP rattles and vibrates – the ramp hatch won’t close all the way- they’re losing air! JW flies, as… -Olivia runs out of the co-pilot seat -barking as she throw out AIR MASKS to the Foundlings- Jixie puts a mask on Elzee, as… Olivia rushes to find the source of the problem…JW puts the ship into a dive back down into the atmosphere…
V?:…Asa and the Bounty Hunters watch -Hall shoots at the ship -HK-51 pivots and kills Hall- HK-51: “Blow up the ship and we don’t get paid.” Kerry: “So you shot, Hall?”
V?:…Asa, HK-51 and Kerry drive their speeder bikes into their ship which is parked nearby…
A?:…JW levels the SMUGGLER ship off from the dive -the sound of air rushing by…
A?:…INSIDE- Olivia works on fixing the hatch seal as wind rips through their ship-
V?:…The BOUNTY HUNTER ship (need to name it) rockets up into the sky -following the Tracking Tag… –
M?:…they set course for Balfour and make the jump into Hyperspace…
V?:…Asa and the Bounty Hunters arrive at their ship (type and name), board and fly off after JW, Olivia and their new family…
V?:…on JW and Olivia’s ship- REVEAL / ILLUSTRATE the Tracking Tags are still functional…
A 3:… DEBATE -should they take the Basinets with her into town or leave them at the ship?
SECOND TURNING POINT at END of ACT 2
M?:… issues with the ship- they land- Elzee needs greater medical help –
A 2: …Jixie discovers the TRACKING TAGS…
V 3:…Asa moves in on JW and Din as they work on his Smuggler ship (name the ship)- They make everyone give up their WEAPONS-
CRISIS
M?:…Olivia returns with Elzee from the local town doctor…
A2: …Elzee (healed and better, but not 100%) rises to fight, igniting her Lightsaber…
V?:… Asa kills Elzee and then looks to Din…
A?:…JW rises and picks a fight with Asa, stirring up his ego and rage… V?:…Asa kills JW and the Olivia when she flies into a rage over her husband’s death…
V 3:…Asa and the Bounty Hunters -look to the Foundlings who stand by -take the Basinets and leaves the Foundlings alive and alone.
M?:…The Foundlings overhear the Bounty Hunter’s chatter -their destination is Kamino. The Foundlings fight over what to do- Din turns and walks towards the local town. Fedus: “Where are you going?” Din: “To get a ship and complete the job, JW and Olivia committed to-“
M?:…the Foundlings stop their fighting, nod- Jixie: “This is the way.” Calleen: “This is the way.”Fedus (finally): “This is the way.”-they follow after Din…
A?:…in town, the Foundlings sneak into a hangar- find a ship -but there is a Droid on it-
CLIMAX
A 2: …the Foundlings arrive on KAMINO in their newly stolen ship (type and name?)…
A 3: …the Foundlings sneak inside the Kaminoan Cloning Facility through an exhaust vent (been done before- figure out something new-)…
M3:…the Foundlings run into- the JANGO FETT clone younglings- They drop down into a bunk room -Each side faces off against each other- who will do what first? The JANGO CLONE’S conditioning hasn’t taken hold fully yet- a lone JANGO CLONE moves to pull the ALARM on the wall- Din calls out- “Please, don’t-“
A?:…ESCAPE- The Foundlings steal a Kaminoan SUBMARINE -dive into the depths of the violent ocean -into final dog fight w/ Kamino Fighter craft…
RESOLUTION
M 3:…The Foundlings deliver the Pods and Elzee to the planet Balfour- (to whom?) M?:…the Foundlings return JW and Olivia to their ranch and bury them next to their children.
A 4:…the Foundlings turn and look back on the Pyke and Black Sun gangs standing opposite them- It’s a wild west gun fight- Mando Adult: “What’s the trouble-“Pyke: “They stole from us-“ Black Sun: “and destroyed our product-“ Din: “The Beskar was fake and the drugs, were drugs-“
A?:… the Mandalorian adults move into back up of their Foundlings…
V 3:…The Pykes and Black Sun look to each other-
A?:…GUNS are drawn- CUT TO BLACK
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Wendy’s Story Map
THE 3 ACT STRUCTURE
Opening
V: He hits the Heroine over the head and the audience does not know who hit her.
H: She is making dinner for guests and is hit over the head and she is sent to the hospital when she was found by the guests.
V: Inciting Incident: The Villain and the female anesthesia MD, his accomplice, decide to pull the plug on the heroine.
First Turning Point at end of Act 1:She dies on the OR Table
H: She dies on the OR table but comes back to life
V Mistake: He never planned for her to come back to life. She was to remain dead so he could be with the woman he is having an affair with
H First Action: When she dies there is an audible scream and all the scrub sinks turn on at the same time blasting with hot water, the clocks go crazy and computers do crazy things. the anesthesia accomplice is trapped by her monitor cords and is strangled to death
V: He begins to run from room to room looking for a place to hide
H: She begins to kill anyone that tries to stop her
V Dilemma: He has killed his 3rd wife and is scared but doesn’t know if he should stand and fight or run
Mid point/Second Turning Point at end of Act 2:
V Decision: He calls out for the MP’s to help him
<font face=”inherit”>H Crisis/</font>Obstacle<font face=”inherit”>: It is a military hospital so the MP’s arrive and begin a gun fight with her</font>
S: The hospital is located on a base and the MP’s are un aware of her being murdered by her husband and they are protecting him
H Escalation: The Navy Seals are brought in to aid the hunt for her
Climax: The Heroine captures the Villain and gets him to confess to all the murders and the fact that he is having an affair. One of the OR staff members overhears the conversation and turns to the Heroine’s side and the Villain escapes
V Plan/ Hideout: he goes to the O2 room where he hides
H Overwhelming odds: The Seals learn how to hurt her by electrocautery
V Capture: The Villain is captured again and he confesses to all the murders in front of the OR staff
S Resolution: The Seals break in and “kill” the Heroine and the OR staff tell them what he has done and they arrest him
V Fitting Ending: As the MP’s are walking him out She comes out of no where with a crani-drill and drills a deep hole in his head and kills him
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