Day 9 Assignment

[Tracy Cheney]

<strong style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Tracy El Pueblo Setting Up The Future

I know there’s a lot of opinion against making the pilot as a set-up, but I am choosing to begin by focusing on the really tough journeys undertaken by anyone trying to get to frontier Los Angeles. The five lead characters will not be interacting with each other yet, but beginning their journeys toward each other in the pilot. I don’t want to gloss over their backstories — or present them in flashbacks. I did that originally like in LOST, which was the show I chose to analyze at the beginning of this process. However, I’ve since switched to the opposite approach for this draft. I’m going forward in a linear mode.

<u style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Act 1 Antonia

Village life in El Pueblo, 37 years in existence on the Spanish frontier

Idealistic Antonia fights against her caste status to achieve choice in life

How does her life change with the arrival of each foreign man?

The impact of these four men on each other’s goals

Act 2 Lucas

Enjoys being a big fish in a little pond – will Lucas be exposed as an imposter, a poor elegant gentleman roughin’ it?

Being instantly displaced by the arrival of Yankee pirate Joseph upsets the relationship with Antonia

Can he convince his uncle into making Lucas his heir?

Act 3 Father Diego

Is not cut out of the same cloth as the zealot missionaries controlling the territory

Can Diego come to terms with being historically a crypto-Jew?

Longs for life unencumbered by strictures imposed on a Catholic priest and the position his father created for him

Act 4 Thomas

Can Thomas live freely as an American fugitive slave in El Pueblo?

Can Thomas overcome his lowly status imposed by Spanish caste system after achieving leadership aboard ship life?

Regarded as fearsome warrior to keep locked up but still allowed to stay – why?

Act 5 Joseph

Can American pirate Joseph survive in enemy Spanish territory?

Joseph negotiates his status as a high-value prisoner despite religious animosity

Will he marry Antonia as she ardently plans?

[Sharon Scherle]

Jean’s Setting Up The Future

What I learned doing this assignment is that I was able to find several interesting events/character reveals/under-the-surface info that I could hint at, foreshadow, and create open loops and mystery without giving it all away.

2. Make a list of events/character reveals/under-the-surface info that COULD be set up in the pilot. Just use the obvious ones. You don’t need to create the entire season right now.

Sharra’s odd reaction/connection to the liquid metal pylons. It wants her.

Faolan and Sharra’s relationship.

Tanner and Faolan’s rivalry over Sharra.

Grayson is the one behind the attacks on Sharra.

Sharra craves family, to belong somewhere

The Vault is an alien entity.

Messing with time for a long time comes with a cost – mentally, emotionally, brain damage.

Faolan is the only other agent who knows that the Vault is a living being and that they are using it. That’s why he had a falling out with Lazarus.

Faolan is considered a rogue agent.

Sharra is destined to save the Vault.

3. Decide which you are going to include in the pilot.

4. Fill those into the Outline and tell us which ones you are going to use.

Sharra’s odd reaction/connection to the liquid metal pylons: When she is given the business card and touches the flowing silver logo, it lightly zaps her. The logo looks the same as the metal tattoos the Vault agents have behind their left ear. Sharra doesn’t notice them until the second episode.

Faolan and Sharra’s relationship: This is through Faolan. In the pilot, they don’t actually meet. However, when Faolan sneaks into the Vault complex, he gathers intel on Sharra. He takes a photo of her picture and looks at it longer than necessary. She means something to him. He also overhears a heated conversation between Tanner and Cam about Sharra being hurt. This will happen in a later episode. The series will show that time is fluid, not linear. This is one example.

Grayson is the one behind the attacks on Sharra: This one is harder to hint at. I hint at a sour relationship between Sharra and her brother during her interview and later at her parent’s gravesite. The only real clue will be on the email Faolan copied from the mugger’s computer. But it will be cryptic and only later will the watcher realize they were given the answer right from the start.

Sharra is destined to save the Vault: Lazarus recruits Sharra, someone with no qualifications because his future-self left a message for him to do so, stating that she is necessary to save the Vault. After the interview, Lazarus pulls out the note and reads that line.

Faolan is considered a rogue agent though Lazarus knows otherwise: When Faolan pulls out his Vault uniform for the first time, he looks resigned. He sneaks into the complex, avoiding being seen, steals a commlink device, and gathers info on Sharra from the computer system. After Sharra’s interview, the Wolf (Faolan’s nickname) is mentioned in passing and not in a good way.

[Elizabeth Appell]

Mod 3, Lesson 9 – Set Ups for Future Episodes

I learned that even if I’ve completed outlining my Pilot, I can still add new events to make it more interesting and intriguing.

ASSIGNMENT:

1. Go to your TV Pitch Bible: Look at the future episodes, five seasons, and character descriptions. Go to your BW Framework: Look at all the info there.

2. Make a list of events/character reveals/under-the-surface info that COULD be set up in the pilot. Just use the obvious ones. You don’t need to create the entire season right now.

3. Decide which you are going to include in the pilot.

4. Fill those into the Outline and tell us which ones you are going to use.

Possible events that COULD e set up in the pilot.

1. Lane suspects something dark going on with Margaret Gilgood

2. Paige steals Marta’s gold bracelet. Leaves is at Savage’s apartment after the tussle with him.

3. Lane “hooked’ into relationship with Leylah.

4. Paige confides in her boyfriend, Faron Jones, how she’s going “to get” Savage” and punish him for not staying away from her mother.

5. Leylah refuses to give up the relationship with Lane.

I probably will add #2: Paige steals Marta’s gold bracelet. Leaves is at Savage’s apartment after the tussle with him and use it in the Pilot.

6. Also might use #4: Paige confides in her boyfriend, Faron Jones, how she’s going “to get” Savage” and punish him for not staying away from her mother.

[Janeen Johnson]

Janeen’s Setting Up the Future

What I learned doing this assignment is that I had already put most of this in, but I hadn’t spelled it out every time in the outline so it might have gotten lost while I was writing the scenes. I spelled it out now.

Events/Character Reveals/Under-the-surface info

## Randi has Alzheimer’s <div>

## Cara still loved Mike — to death?

## What is this Mind Control/Intentional Medicine that Cara and Mindy use?

** Did Molly commit suicide or did Jim kill her?

** Was Mike and Mindy’s death an accident or murder?

** Will Cara fall for Jim because she is desperate to have a baby?

## What is Hunter’s real relationship to Mike’s family?

** Will Cara be able to farm?

** Why isn’t farming profitable?

** Will the twins’ legacy be maintained?

## Why don’t Mike and Randi want the Alaska brothers to help with the farming?

I’ll Include the ** items in the pilot or ## hint at them.

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[r. reid jr]

R. Reid Jr’s Setting Up The Future Episodes

What I learned doing this assignment is there are many ways to lay out the story and this slower way than just writing is going to make my story stronger and deeper.

ASSIGNMENT:

(1. Go to your TV Pitch Bible: Look at the future episodes, five seasons, and character descriptions. Go to your BW Framework: Look at all the info there.

2. Make a list of events/character reveals/under-the-surface info that COULD be set up in the pilot. Just use the obvious ones. You don’t need to create the entire season right now.)

In my pilot, FISH OUT OF WATER

AGENTS ARRIVE ON THE SCENE-BRUCE PLAYS THE PART OF INSURANCE AGENT

BELOW THE SURFACE BRUCE WENT TO THE BANK REPRESENTING THE FAMILIES WHO OWNED BOXES

BELOW THAT SURFACE BRUCE FOUND THE FAMILIES WHO OWNED BOXES IN THE BANK

BELOW THAT BRUCE GOT TO ONE OF THE EMPLOYEES TO GET THAT LIST (AT BAR WITH EMPLOYEE TO GET INFO)

BRUCE ENROLLS AT A LOCAL COLLEGE

BELOW THAT BRUCE GETS ADVICE TO ENROLL AT SCHOOL FROM AN OLD MAN WHO MISTAKES HIM FOR A NEW IMMIGRANT AND NOT AN ALIEN.

ABOVE THAT BRUCE HAS DEJA VU AS HE TAKES A SEAT NEXT TO A GIRL HE MET BEFORE.

BELOW THAT BRUCE WAS TRACING THE TECH AND STUCK UP A SHORT CONVERSATION WITH SNOWY ONLY SHE SEEMS TO BE A DIFFERENT PERSON WHO CLEARLY DOESN’T REMEMBER HIM.

EPISODE 2 HERE COMES THE AGENTS, WATCH OUT!

BRUCE HAS POSED AS AN INSURANCE AGENT FOR THE BANK. AND HE STARTS WORKING WITH TWO AGENTS OF A SPECIAL BRANCH THAT NO ONE KNOWS ABOUT.

3. Decide which you are going to include in the pilot.

Here are a few ways you can do that:

EVENT-bank robbers not knowing who they are once away from the bank – Open Loop about details of the event. – Intrigue us about it. Who trained them and why? – Go opposite it to create cover up. Someone recruited these people – Create a mystery around it. The mystery woman who Bruce spoke to comes in his dream– Present clues the audience might follow. –

Mystery woman presents herself as a past friend who Bruce can’t remember because he can’t remember anyone. Cliffhanger points to a more daunting reality. – Cause us to worry about the event or character involved. Bruce has a three way choice: trust the Mystery lady, work with Snowy and tell her the truth of what happened to her and or help the agents fully and help them get the Mystery woman.

Then it is all about selection and layering your choices of setups into the pilot.

4. Fill into the Outline.

Bruce slips himself into work the investigation that leads to an incident where a college school students erased the memory of a man suspected of human trafficking.

And only tracing back Bruce’s first attempt to find the Mystery people behind the use of a TECH Bruce is trying to find that leads him to an awkward conversation into a crowded bar where Bruce was tracing THE TECH. The awkward conversation was with a college student who seemed a bit disoriented and a slightly older woman who rushes her out of the bar after she claimed she had too much to drink.

Bruce sees the same girl after sitting in on a classes at college he is taking to catch up on earth customs in a sociology class. She starts talking to him and doesn’t realize they met before.

Bruce follows some dead-end leads before over hearing the male lead agent he would sell out whoever he could to close this case.

Meanwhile, Snowy and a group of classmates are in the local bar working on a group project. After a few hours they take a break and stretch their leges, while Bruce is at the table the same woman who took Snowy out of the bar and she claims to know Bruce and his past. As the group is returning she gets up and leaves and disappears into the crowded bar.

[Rob Sutherland]

Rob’s Setting up the future

What I learned doing this assignment is that just dropping a line of dialogue in here and there is enough to create intrigue about the future of the show and set up key elements of the Season.

Series events that could be set up in the pilot:

Seeking the Talen Blade

Vincent is the leader of the demons

The demon queen is at large, somewhere, plotting to seduce the Mirage

The Mirage had a family

Brendan White has a sixth sense, and a gambling habit

The Mirage’s voice can repel the demons

There are corpses on the moon put there by a demon

The Mirage is seeking one demon in particular – the one that can free him from his affliction.

Brendan White is hunting the Mirage

I’ll use:

Seeking the Talen Blade

Vincent is the leader of the demons

Brendan White has a sixth sense, and a gambling habit

The Mirage’s voice can repel the demons

There are corpses on the moon put there by a demon

The Mirage is seeking one demon in particular – the one that can free him from his affliction.

Brendan White is hunting the Mirage