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Day 9 Assignments
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I’m not sure how to consider what I learned, as this has largely been the format I create outlines in. So it’s largely been my step 1, but I suppose I learned how to dissect the outline into its core components and see the process itemized on how it gets to that point.
EXT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Eerie noises from a dark, creepy old house on a stormy night. Then a male voice is yelling, while a female voice is screaming.
INT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
The house is even creepier inside. The noises, yelling and screaming continue, followed by a gunshot. At that point, the screaming ends. A woman’s bloody body lies lifeless.
A silhouette carries a gun as he cases the house.
Charlotte hides behind cover in the attic.
The silhouette lights the house on fire and is engulfed in the flames. While burning, he turns the gun on himself and kills himself.
In the attic smoke, and then the flames, traps Charlotte in the attic, with no means of escape. She is forced by the approaching flames to the window. Left with no other choice, she jumps from the window.
EXT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Charlotte’s body lies in the yard, impaled by the slats of a picket fence.
EXT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – DAY
A family moves boxes from a moving van into the house next door to the abandoned, burned out remains of Alyssa’s house. Mother, Laura, and her two children. Daughter Alyssa (16) and son Kodi (10).
While moving the boxes, Alyssa’s attention is drawn to the creepy house next door. She cautiously approaches the house, sensing evil, while hearing strange, eerie cries and moans coming from the house. For a moment, she thinks she sees a figure standing at the attic window. She takes a second look and there is no one there, but the curtains are moving.
Laura returns Alyssa to the present, telling her to get back to work and help move everything inside. Alyssa rolls her eyes, clearly not into it. She is obviously not happy about moving in.
As Alyssa picks up a box, a couple teenage girls pass by and smugly talk to her. They ask where she moved from, and laugh among themselves in a superior manner, feeling that Alyssa is clearly not worthy of their presence, or association with them.
They warn Alyssa to stay away from the haunted house next door, then strut smugly off, laughing at Alyssa. Alyssa instantly dislikes them, and is pretty pissed off, now even more unhappy about being in this new town, and wanting to pounce on the obnoxious girls and beat the shit out of them.
INT – SCHOOL – DAY
Alyssa arrives at school and immediately sees the teenage girls, surrounded by their clique. They see her, whisper to their friends, and they all laugh as Alyssa passes by.
During school, Charlotte approaches Alyssa and introduces herself, seemingly anxious to make friends with her. Alyssa is polite, but feels uneasy about her. Alyssa doesn’t realize that, in Sixth Sense style, no one else at school acknowledges Charlotte, nor has any interaction whatsoever with her.
Charlotte keeps talking to Alyssa and is immediately rather clingy. Despite having no other friends, Alyssa isn’t anxious to become fast friends with her. Yet it seems impossible to avoid her, or to keep her at arm’s length.
EXT – RESIDENTIAL STREET – DAY
As Alyssa walks home from school, Charlotte bounds up to her, all bubbly and friendly. Alyssa can’t believe the only girl who seems to want to be friends with her is the one girl she doesn’t want to be friends with.
Charlotte insist on walking home with Alyssa. They arrive at Alyssa’s house, and she quickly tries to ‘dismiss’ Charlotte, telling her this is her house. Alyssa just smiles, and skips off. Alyssa watches her and is shocked to see her run up to the abandoned house next door and go inside. Alyssa is sure no one can actually live there, and has no idea what Charlotte is doing.
EXT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Alyssa stands outside the house, examining it. She slowly goes to the front door and pushes it open.
INT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Alyssa enters to find the house dark and obviously abandoned. She slowly goes further inside. She tries the light switch, but nothing happens.
As she looks around, she hears creaks, groans, and eerie moans from within the house. She calls out Charlotte’s name, but hears only the same strange noises in response. She hears what sounds like a scream, and then a gunshot, echoing from upstairs. Alyssa runs away.
EXT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – DAY
Charlotte walks up as Alyssa is outside playing with Kodi. She tries to get Alyssa to go somewhere with her, but Alyssa declines, saying she needs to watch Kodi, and that they have some things planned.
Charlotte acknowledges this but, as she walks away, she is clearly pissed at Alyssa’s attention being dominated by Kodi.
EXT – STREET – EVENING
Alyssa and Kodi ride bikes together as cars speed by. Suddenly, Kodi’s bike swerves into the street, directly in front of a speeding car, which hits Kodi, knocking him literally out of his shoes. Kodi’s body is thrown about 100 feet and lands in an explosive pool of blood. He is instantly killed.
Across the street, Charlotte smiles to herself, then turns and walks away.
INT – SCHOOL – DAY
Alyssa sits alone, and it’s evident she’s been crying. Charlotte approaches her, says how sorry she is to hear about Kodi, and pushes herself onto Alyssa, telling her she can talk to her, and use her shoulder to cry on. Alyssa is too numb to want to do that, plus is by now even more uneasy about Charlotte. She thanks Charlotte politely, but says she would rather be alone.
Charlotte leaves, but it’s obvious to the viewer than she isn’t at all happy about being spurned like that.
EXT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – DAY
Charlotte comes over as Alyssa is in the yard, and again pushes herself onto Alyssa, reminding her that she is there for her. Alyssa is about to decline again, but Laura leaves the house, and reminds Alyssa that they need to go to the mortuary to pick out Kodi’s coffin. Laura catches herself, fighting back tears, as she and Alyssa hug and cry on each other’s shoulders.
Laura asks who Charlotte is and Alyssa is pretty dismissive of her. She says she’s no one, just a girl from school.
Since Laura and Alyssa need to leave, Charlotte excuses herself but, as she walks away, she is obviously very pissed off.
EXT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – EVENING
Alyssa sits alone on the porch as a car drives up. Alyssa’s best friend from her old town, and her boyfriend, get out of the car.
As Charlotte angrily watches from across the bushes between the houses, Alyssa and her friend hug each other, and Alyssa bursts into tears.
EXT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE / ALYSSA’S HOUSE – DAY
Charlotte watches from the attic as Alyssa, Laura, and Alyssa’s friends leave the house together. Charlotte angrily throws the curtains closed and turns away.
INT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
As Laura, Alyssa and her friends go about normal activities, Laura experiences a few ‘near misses’ where freak, but seemingly explainable dangers present themselves, to where she could have been injured or killed.
INT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Charlotte suddenly appears in the house as Laura, Alyssa and her friends finish dinner and put a movie on. Charlotte launches a paranormal attack, not visible to the others, in which Laura is killed when debris falls onto her.
(this is still a work in progress)
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This is now the completed version.
I’m not sure how to consider what I learned, as this has largely been the format I create outlines in. So it’s largely been my step 1, but I suppose I learned how to dissect the outline into its core components and see the process itemized on how it gets to that point.
EXT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Eerie noises from a dark, creepy old house on a stormy night. Then a male voice is yelling, while a female voice is screaming.
INT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
The house is even creepier inside. The noises, yelling and screaming continue, followed by a gunshot. At that point, the screaming ends. A woman’s bloody body lies lifeless.
A silhouette carries a gun as he cases the house.
Charlotte hides behind cover in the attic.
The silhouette lights the house on fire and is engulfed in the flames. While burning, he turns the gun on himself and kills himself.
In the attic smoke, and then the flames, traps Charlotte in the attic, with no means of escape. She is forced by the approaching flames to the window. Left with no other choice, she jumps from the window.
EXT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Charlotte’s body lies in the yard, impaled by the slats of a picket fence.
EXT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – DAY
A family moves boxes from a moving van into the house next door to the abandoned, burned out remains of Alyssa’s house. Mother, Laura, and her two children. Daughter Alyssa (16) and son Kodi (10).
While moving the boxes, Alyssa’s attention is drawn to the creepy house next door. She cautiously approaches the house, sensing evil, while hearing strange, eerie cries and moans coming from the house. For a moment, she thinks she sees a figure standing at the attic window. She takes a second look and there is no one there, but the curtains are moving.
Kodi sees her interest in the house and pauses to pay a little attention to it as well. He is very empathic and senses something very evil in the house. He tells Alyssa this, and warns her to keep clear of the house.
Laura returns Alyssa to the present, telling her to get back to work and help move everything inside. Alyssa rolls her eyes, clearly not into it. She is obviously not happy about moving in.
As Alyssa picks up a box, a couple teenage girls pass by and smugly talk to her. They ask where she moved from, and laugh among themselves in a superior manner, feeling that Alyssa is clearly not worthy of their presence, or association with them.
They warn Alyssa to stay away from the haunted house next door, then strut smugly off, laughing at Alyssa. Alyssa instantly dislikes them, and is pretty pissed off, now even more unhappy about being in this new town, and wanting to pounce on the obnoxious girls and beat the shit out of them.
Alyssa is pretty cold toward her mother, resenting her for making her move to this new town, and to leave her friends. Kodi tries to be the peacemaker, telling Alyssa to be a little more understanding of their mom. Alyssa gives Kodi a big hug, rather than getting pissed at him, showing how caring and protective she is of her little brother.
INT – SCHOOL – DAY
Alyssa arrives at school and immediately sees the teenage girls, surrounded by their clique. They see her, whisper to their friends, and they all laugh as Alyssa passes by.
During school, Charlotte approaches Alyssa and introduces herself, seemingly anxious to make friends with her. Alyssa is polite, but feels uneasy about her. Alyssa doesn’t realize that, in Sixth Sense style, no one else at school acknowledges Charlotte, nor has any interaction whatsoever with her.
Charlotte keeps talking to Alyssa and is immediately rather clingy. Despite having no other friends, Alyssa isn’t anxious to become fast friends with her. Yet it seems impossible to avoid her, or to keep her at arm’s length.
EXT – RESIDENTIAL STREET – DAY
As Alyssa walks home from school, Charlotte bounds up to her, all bubbly and friendly. Alyssa can’t believe the only girl who seems to want to be friends with her is the one girl she doesn’t want to be friends with.
Charlotte insist on walking home with Alyssa. They arrive at Alyssa’s house, and she quickly tries to ‘dismiss’ Charlotte, telling her this is her house. Alyssa just smiles, and skips off. Alyssa watches her and is shocked to see her run up to the abandoned house next door and go inside. Alyssa is sure no one can actually live there, and has no idea what Charlotte is doing.
EXT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Alyssa stands outside the house, examining it. She slowly goes to the front door and pushes it open.
INT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Alyssa enters to find the house dark and obviously abandoned. She slowly goes further inside. She tries the light switch, but nothing happens.
As she looks around, she hears creaks, groans, and eerie moans from within the house. She calls out Charlotte’s name, but hears only the same strange noises in response. She hears what sounds like a scream, and then a gunshot, echoing from upstairs. Alyssa runs away.
EXT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – DAY
Charlotte walks up as Alyssa is outside playing with Kodi. She tries to get Alyssa to go somewhere with her, but Alyssa declines, saying she needs to watch Kodi, and that they have some things planned.
Charlotte acknowledges this but, as she walks away, she is clearly pissed at Alyssa’s attention being dominated by Kodi.
INT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – EVENING
Alyssa and Kodi talk. Kodi asks Alyssa about Charlotte, and he tells her he has a really bad feeling about her. He says he feels something really dark and bad about her, and says he thinks Alyssa should be very careful about her, and not to trust her.
EXT – STREET – EVENING
Alyssa and Kodi ride bikes together as cars speed by. Suddenly, Kodi’s bike swerves into the street, directly in front of a speeding car, which hits Kodi, knocking him literally out of his shoes. Kodi’s body is thrown about 100 feet and lands in an explosive pool of blood. He is instantly killed.
Across the street, Charlotte smiles to herself, then turns and walks away.
INT – SCHOOL – DAY
Alyssa sits alone, and it’s evident she’s been crying. Charlotte approaches her, says how sorry she is to hear about Kodi, and pushes herself onto Alyssa, telling her she can talk to her, and use her shoulder to cry on. Alyssa is too numb to want to do that, plus is by now even more uneasy about Charlotte. She thanks Charlotte politely, but says she would rather be alone.
Charlotte leaves, but it’s obvious to the viewer than she isn’t at all happy about being spurned like that.
EXT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – DAY
Charlotte comes over as Alyssa is in the yard, and again pushes herself onto Alyssa, reminding her that she is there for her. Alyssa is about to decline again, but Laura leaves the house, and reminds Alyssa that they need to go to the mortuary to pick out Kodi’s coffin. Laura catches herself, fighting back tears, as she and Alyssa hug and cry on each other’s shoulders.
Laura asks who Charlotte is and Alyssa is pretty dismissive of her. She says she’s no one, just a girl from school.
Since Laura and Alyssa need to leave, Charlotte excuses herself but, as she walks away, she is obviously very pissed off.
Laura is immediately put off by Charlotte, and intentionally keeps her close to her and, by extension, away from Charlotte. She just senses that Charlotte would be destructive, rather than conducive, to helping Alyssa cope with their loss of Kodi. Laura has to be strong in facing the tragedy of Kodi’s death for her daughter’s sake, and puts her mind to helping her deal with it.
EXT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – EVENING
Alyssa sits alone on the porch as a car drives up. Alyssa’s best friend from her old town, and her boyfriend, get out of the car.
As Charlotte angrily watches from across the bushes between the houses, Alyssa and her friend hug each other, and Alyssa bursts into tears.
EXT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE / ALYSSA’S HOUSE – DAY
Charlotte watches from the attic as Alyssa, Laura, and Alyssa’s friends leave the house together. Charlotte angrily throws the curtains closed and turns away.
INT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Alyssa wakes up in a cold sweat from a nightmare, in which a zombie-like Kodi tries to warn her of danger coming her way.
INT – SCHOOL – DAY
Charlotte again approaches Alyssa at school, but Alyssa is getting very creeped out by her by this point. Alyssa becomes somewhat forceful in letting Charlotte know that she wants to be by herself, and doesn’t want to hang out with Charlotte. She is by now no longer caring about being polite as, clearly, Charlotte hasn’t gotten the hint.
INT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
As Laura, Alyssa and her friends go about normal activities, Laura and Alyssa’s friends experience a few ‘near misses’ where freak, but seemingly explainable dangers present themselves, to where she could have been injured or killed.
Alyssa and her friends discuss what’s been happening. Alyssa tells them about Charlotte and how she feels very leery of her. The boyfriend wants to confront Charlotte, but Alyssa and her friend ask him what they’re supposed to say to her. None of them believe on a rational level that Charlotte could be terrorizing them because, of course, that would make no logical sense. So he backs down.
INT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Alyssa again ventures into Charlotte’s house. She hears increasing eerie sounds and screaming but, this time, also sees quick, flashing images of fire engulfing the house. She closes her eyes and, when she opens them, the images and sounds of screaming are gone. She rushes from the house.
INT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Charlotte suddenly appears in the house as Laura, Alyssa and her friends finish dinner and put a movie on. Charlotte launches a paranormal attack, not visible to the others, in which Laura is killed when debris falls onto her, as Alyssa tries desperately to save her. As Laura dies, eerie laughter echoes through the house.
INT – ALYSSA’S HOUSE – NIGHT
Alyssa and her friends now believe, despite it seemingly physically impossible, that Charlotte is somehow terrorizing Alyssa’s family, and decides to go on the attack, to take the battle to Charlotte, and confront her, and get Charlotte to leave Alyssa alone. The boyfriend kind of takes charge and leads the group in an all out assault on Charlotte.
INT – CHARLOTTE’S HOUSE – NIGHT
The three kids go to Charlotte’s house to confront her. A battle to the death ensues, where Charlotte appears in her fully evil and paranormal splendor. She tells Alyssa that all she had to do was be her friend and everything would have been okay. Alyssa accuses Charlotte of killing Kodi and Laura, and says she’s going to kill her for it.
Charlotte disapparates and all hell breaks loose in the house. The kids freak and try to find Charlotte, who can appear and disappear at will, and can kinetically control physical objects and threaten the kids with them.
Alyssa’s best friend is the first to fall while battling Charlotte. Charlotte causes her to go up in flames in a case of spontaneous combustion, and she burns to death in agony, while images of Charlotte’s father burning to death flash onscreen. While burning, she falls into a tub of water, where the flames are extinguished, showing her dead, charred body floating in the water.
We see that Charlotte’s powers are much more powerful now, seemingly more powerful within her own lair. She is also demonstrating a particular cruelty, killing Alyssa’s friends in a manner that mirrors the circumstances of her own death.
The boyfriend is the next to die. Charlotte forces him to flee into the attic, where she pushes him over the stairs balcony. He falls to two stories to the main floor, where he breaks through the floor and lands on the cement basement floor with a blood-splattering thud, where is dies.
Now it’s just Alyssa and Charlotte. Alyssa now understands Charlotte a lot better and, with everyone she cares about now dead, she has nothing to lose. She has also learned somehow just how Charlotte died. She also figures that, since Charlotte died once, maybe she can again. And as Charlotte has now become almost completely physical, killing her seems possible.
So she leads Charlotte to the attic but Charlotte outmaneuvers her and gets her trapped by the window, to where it looks like Alyssa is going to die in the same manner that Charlotte did. However, just as Charlotte strikes, Alyssa is able to knock her out of the way with a weapon of convenience. Alyssa then runs from the attic, and down the stairs.
Alyssa runs down the stairs and to the front door. But just as she does, Charlotte appears at the bottom of the stairs, and kinetically piles stacks of furniture in front of the door, blocking Alyssa’s escape.
Alyssa stops and slowly turns around, facing Charlotte, who vows to kill Alyssa, and the final battle is on. Charlotte is bleeding from the wound she got in the attic, giving Alyssa a sense of confidence that she is now physical enough that she can be killed. She has also overused her powers to where, between that and her wounds, she is weakening. So attempts to throw dangers in Alyssa’s way kinetically as they fight, but is less and less able to do so.
Nevertheless, Charlotte is winning the battle. She gets Alyssa pinned and attempts to take the kill strike. As she does, Alyssa sees a shard of wood sticking out from the stairs and shoves Charlotte back toward it. The shard impales Charlotte, and traps her, as she can’t escape the large chunk of wood sticking through her body, and attached to the stairs.
In Charlotte’s now severely weakened state, she can no longer maintain her kinetic control over the physical objects around her, and the pile of furniture blocking the door falls away. Alyssa slowly walks to the door. As she approaches it, she tells Charlotte that this is for her mother, and for Kodi. She tells Charlotte to burn in hell, then lights the house on fire, then casually strolls through the front door.
The film closes with Alyssa slowly walking from the house as the fire rages behind her, completely engulfing the house, as Charlotte’s eerie, tortured screams echo in the night. We are left to believe Charlotte has been destroyed, but it is not confirmed, obviously opening up the opportunity for the sequel.
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Paul’s Horror Outline Version 1
3. What I learned from this assignment was that my story still has many gaps in it.
No Man’s Land / The Androphobes
Act 1.
INT. LYONS’ HOUSE
Daughter Stephanie is in the kitchen doing her homework, as her mother, Carol is busy preparing a meal. Asks mother for help. Mother discovers the assignment is to write an essay on why men have always been detrimental to humankind, with examples. Mother horrified. Calls Jack, husband.
Jack busy watching TV. Calls Carol to watch. Presidential candidates’ debate. Ms Emily, representing the No Man’s Land Party tells how men are to be eliminated. Jack reacts with denial. Carol takes it seriously.
They hear son, Matthew, screaming. Run to kitchen. Stephanie has Matthew on the ground, almost throttling him. Father tries to pull her off. She turns on him and bites his hand. Blood flows. We see Stephanie’s eyes with evil hatred, as though she is possessed. Only allows her mother to approach her and calm her down. Matthew runs away.
INT. BAR. EVENING. DAYS LATER
Ms Evily has won the election. Men in bar watching her swearing-in. Announces some of her anti-men measures. Men laugh. As they laugh, Evily announces her male V-P will not be taking up the office. Female Special Service officer steps forward and shoots him in the head. Camera focuses on her and we see the same diabolically possessed look as in Stephanie. A woman is called forward as the new V-P, replacing the dead man. Men watch, transfixed. Then barmaids and female guests, all with the same transfixed look start to attack and kill the men with kitchen knives and corkscrews and broken bottles till all the men lie dead on the floor. The women all cheer, “Peace, love and harmony at last!”.
INT. LYONS’ HOUSE.
Carol and Jack woken up by shouts in the street outside. Green-clad Amazons are going door-to-door with testosterone-sniffing dogs to locate men. See men being dragged out of their homes, shot and bodies loaded onto flat-back truck. Jack wakes up son and father-in-law. Hide in cellar.
Turning-point: Matthew, thinking it’s all just a big joke, escapes through the cellar window. Is picked up by the Amazons. Carol runs out, pleads for his life. But they kill him. Daughter runs out. Is about to betray father and grandfather. Carol has to shut her up. Amazons with sniffer-dogs enter house. Carol manages to distract them from door to cellar. Carol, traumatized at the killing of her son, determined to do all she can to protect husband and father. But own daughter is fifth-column in the home.
ACT 2
INT. HOSPITAL WARD.
Carol turns up at work as nurse at hospital. Assigned to the castration ward. Men are led in hand-cuffs into the operating theater. The island state needs a quota of eunuchs for heavy work.
INT. LYONS’ HOME.
Women journalists on TV vaunting the most recent advances in implementing the no-man’s-land policies. Carol switches it off. Daughter switches it back on. Mother and daughter at odds. Daughter threatens to tell teacher about mother protecting husband and grand-father.
INT. CELLAR OF LYONS’ HOME.
Carol talks in whispers with father and husband. Have to leave. Can’t trust daughter. Knock at door.
INT. LYONS’ HOME.
Neighbor with daughter arrives. Updates Carol on situation on their street. No more men. Again, daughter about to snitch. Carol just about manages to keep her quiet.
INT. CELLAR OF LYONS’ HOME. NIGHT.
Jack and Carol’s father sneak out of house when daughter asleep.
INT. STEPHANIE’S SCHOOL. DAY.
Stephanie is in the library, removing all books written by men. Throws them on a bonfire in the school playground. Tells teacher her mother is hiding men.
INT. LYONS’ HOME. EVENING.
A group of Amazons arrive. All have the evil, possessed look in their eyes. Been tipped off by Stephanie’s school. Stephanie, directs them to the cellar. Its empty. Amazon’s leave. Stephanie shouts at mother with that evil, possessed look in her eyes.
EXT. FOREST. DAY.
Carol has taken time off work to visit husband in hide-away in forest. Jack and her father have joined group of other men, in hiding in underground shelter in forest. Carol brings food. Men starving. Carol updates them on situation. Men dispirited. Carol gives morale-booster talk.
EXT. PRESIDENTIAL RESIDENCE.
Turning point: President Evily arrives home in government limousine. Tells security detail they are not needed. Female bodyguards try to protest. She tells them to go home. Evily enters house. Has a secret male harem. She doesn’t walk the talk.
ACT 3
INT. HOSPITAL.
Carol witness to gender selection in maternity ward. Women expecting male baby are immediately sent for abortions. Women in nervous expectation of result of tests.
INT. LYONS’ HOME.
Carol and daughter watching TV news. Reports of women being executed for protecting male family-members. Stephanie cheers. Possessed, evil look returns to her eyes. Asks mother where her father and grand-father have gone. Carol claims she returned home to find house empty.
OTHER SCENES
Mass graves of men.
Boys dragged out of school for execution.
Sperm bank running short.
Women go to mainland to collect sperm.
ACT 4
Carol helps organize a small group of the men to launch attack on the Amazons, kill some, capture others.
INT. LYONS’ HOUSE.
Stephanie turns up dressed as an Amazon. Denounces her mother. Carol is taken away.
Fighting begins. Some men are killed, leaving only a small handful of resistors. Jack takes a leading role in the fighting.
This makes her even more determined. She leads the remaining small group of men and some women to take on the Amazons to overthrow the head of the feminist state. Outcome unknown when the movie ends.
INT. PRESIDENTIAL RESIDENCE.
Evily’s Amazon body-guards discover her secret male harem. Revolt begins.
Carol reappears. She had not been executed. Manages to rejoin her husband. Together they celebrate the death of Evily at the hands of her Amazon body-guards.
END (Very much work in progress).
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Bob’s Horror Outline Version 1
What I learned doing this assignment is I will need to go back and add clues and foreshadowing as well as expand the outline later.
INT. – OMEGA CHI PARTY ROOM – NIGHT
Brothers Blago and Uncle Barf try to impress some girls at a party. Among the girls they try to impress are Diane Lynch and Sue Weal. Sue, the steady date of Brother Froggie, puts down the antics while Diane leaves.
Blago sees Mort, a fraternity pledge, and harasses him to restore his own ego. The basement phone rings and Blago orders Mort to answer it.
Mort answers the call. On the other end of the phone is the voice of a sexy woman. The voice teases Mort and invites him for a rendezvous in the roof house.
INT. – ROOF HOUSE – NIGHT
Mort enters the dark roof house and calls out and reaches to turn on the light.
Suddenly, a figure jumps out of the darkness. It is dressed in a black robe, is masked, and wields a paddle adorned with the fraternity’s Greek letters. The paddle comes down and bludgeons Mort to death.
EXT. – OMEGA CHI PARTY ROOM -NIGHT
A body crashes outside the party room unheard over the loud party music.
EXT. – OMEGA CHI YARD – DAY
Police and coroner remove Mort’s body in front of a group of brothers. A detective is talking with the fraternity’s faculty advisor, Teddy Wheeler.
INT. – OMEGA CHI DINING ROOM – DAY
Teddy Wheeler addresses the brothers. The police are considering the death a suicide based on the college’s input regarding Mort’s psychological profile. Teddy emphasizes the college’s desire to keep this quiet.
INT. – OMEGA CHI HOUSE VARIOUS ROOMS – DAY/NIGHT
Brothers go about their activities and antics.
INT. – BASEMENT COAL ROOM – NIGHT
A room formerly used in this 100-year-old mansion for coal storage has been converted to a secret meeting room. Most brothers are dressed in black robes identical to the one worn by the murderer. Officers, including Caesar, the fraternity president, wear different color robes representing their officer rank. This is the weekly meeting held by the brothers.
Caesar addresses the meeting regarding Mort. Then, they move on to more pertinent business – the upcoming Halloween party.
Social chairman, Nad, says maybe they should postpone in respect for Mort. He is booed down. Blago says this better be the best party ever.
INT. – OMEGA CHI LIBRARY – DAY
Nad and a few brothers prepare party posters to be hung at local girls’ schools.
INT. – OMEGA CHI ENTRY FOYER – DAY
A bulletin board in the foyer displays the party poster. A blood red message on the poster says to cancel the party or Mort will just be the first.
Nad sees the poster and questions who did it. Everyone denies it.
INT. – FROGGIE’S ROOM – DAY
Sue and Froggie discuss Mort’s death and decide it was a prank.
INT. – NAD’S SHARED TRIPLE ROOM – NIGHT
Nad enters his room. Black Sabbath is playing Nad reaches to turn on the light. Nothing happens. The music gets louder. Suddenly, his roommate appears in front of him and scares the crap out of him.
INT. – OMEGA CHI DINING ROOM – NIGHT
Teddy Wheeler is over for dinner. Nad shows him the defiled poster. Teddy ponders the possibility there is a real threat. He offers an opinion the party might be postponed when a brother comes in with a beer for Teddy.
INT. – GIRLS’ SCHOOL DORMITORY – NIGHT
Nad and a couple of brothers are hanging posters in a neighboring girls’ school. Nad is separated from the group. As he continues to hang posters, the lights go out.
At first, he thinks it’s another prank by his roommate.
But suddenly he hears movement and believes he sees a dark shadow.
Nad runs down unfamiliar corridors trying to escape what he believes may be a killer.
Panic increases as he runs for his life and eventually into the group of other brothers. The other brothers ridicule him for believing he was being chased. The monster watches as they leave.
INT. – NAD’S SHARED TRIPLE ROOM – DAY
Nad studies the defiled poster.
INT. – CHEM LAB – DAY
Nad is the last one left in the lab after class ends. The monster appears and chases Nad. Nad manages to use the items in the lab to help escape the monster.
INT. – SCHOOL HALLWAY – DAY
Nad runs into Teddy Wheeler as he hurries from the lab.
INT. TEDDY WHEELER’S OFFICE – DAY
Nad tells Teddy about the monster. Teddy dismisses it as a prank. We see that Teddy has an Omega Chi fraternity paddle on his wall (a gift to the faculty advisor).
When Nad leaves, he passes a girl on the way in. Teddy finishes talking with the girl. When she goes, Teddy locks his door.
When he turns around, the monster is holding the honorary paddle.
Teddy is bludgeoned to death. A party poster is pinned to the body.
INT. – BASEMENT COAL ROOM – NIGHT
Nad advocates canceling the party. The brotherhood disagrees.
EXT. – OMEGA CHI FRATERNITY HOUSE – NIGHT
Partygoers arrive at the party.
INT. – OMEGA CHI BASEMENT PARTY ROOM – NIGHT
Brothers and guests attend the party. Some hang out in the bar room; others dance in on the adjacent dance room. Diane Lynch is at the bar talking with Brother Hawes. She tries to seduce him but is unsuccessful. Hawes says he’s saving himself and tries to convince Diane she should do the same.
A wasted Uncle Barf interrupts. He tries to impress her by offering to show her the meeting room where the fraternity has a coffin and skeleton. She agrees to meet him.
Before she leaves, Caesar comes to the bar and begins talking with her using his stature as president to impress her. She excuses herself.
INT. – BASEMENT COAL ROOM – NIGHT
Uncle Barf enters the dark room and calls out for Diane. Instead of Diane, the monster in the black robe appears. Uncle Barf tries to convince the monster he is innocent and shouldn’t be killed.
The monster bludgeons Uncle Barf.
INT. – OMEGA CHI BASEMENT BAR ROOM – NIGHT
The party is in full swing. Brothers hook up with girls and gradually leave the party room. Caesar is looking for Diane and spots her. He invites her up to his single room. She agrees.
They leave together.
INT. – OMEGA CHI BASEMENT DANCE FLOOR – NIGHT
Uncle Barf staggers into the dance area, bleeding from his forehead. He staggers and falls. Dancers part ways and girls start to scream.
Brothers Nad, Froggie, Blago and Hawes take charge. They look for Caesar but don’t see him.
Nad and Froggie go to look for Caesar while Blago and Hawes attend to Uncle Barf.
INT. – CAESAR’S SINGLE ROOM – NIGHT
Nad and Froggie enter the room. Caesar is dead in the center of the bed. Bludgeoned and posed in a sacrificial position.
INT. – OMEGA CHI PARTY ROOM – NIGHT
Froggie goes to talk with Sue Weal while Nad goes to find Blago and Hawes.
A trail of blood leads to the:
INT. – BASEMENT COAL ROOM – NIGHT
Nad enters the room to find Hawes and Blago tied near the coffin. The monster’s voice is heard in the room. The monster gives Nad the option to pick one of the brothers to die.
Instead, Nad manages to free both brothers using a strategy similar to his escape in the lab and they escape into the:
INT. – OMEGA CHI BASEMENT PARTY ROOM – NIGHT
Where Nad puts together the puzzle of who the monster might be. He decides to face the monster and returns to the:
INT. – BASEMENT COAL ROOM – NIGHT
Nad calls out to the monster and wants to know why it is terrorizing the fraternity. The monster provides insight into the reason but is not appeased and attacks Nad. Nad fends off a blow but ends up falling into the coffin, apparently dead.
INT. – OMEGA CHI PARTY ROOM – NIGHT
The music stops and the lights go out. The monster appears in the room and starts bludgeoning brothers. Froggie starts leading the partygoers out a basement exit. He is cut down by the monster.
Nad arrives in the room. He has a ritual sword from the basement coal room and goes after the monster. In the dark he kills Sue Weal. The monster is about to bludgeon Nad when the music and lights come back on and he manages to wield the sword and injure the monster’s arm, drawing blood.
The monster runs out of the room.
INT. – BASEMENT COAL ROOM – NIGHT
Nad, followed by Blago, Hawes, and other brothers follow the trail of blood to a set of hidden stairs that lead to the:
INT. – OMEGA CHI ROOF HOUSE – NIGHT
Diane Lynch sits lying alone in the roof house, apparently dead from the wound. The black robe and Omega Chi paddle lie on top of the robe.
Nad tells everyone what the monster had told her about her sister being raped by someone at the fraternity. Everyone looks a Blago who admits he had sex with her but claims it wasn’t rape. Diane awakens races at Blago and pushes him off the roof. She falls with him.
EXT. – OMEGA CHI YARD – NIGHT
Two bodies fall into the yard.
INT. – OMEGA CHI BASEMENT BAR ROOM – NIGHT
The police have arrived on the scene and are sorting through it. A girl who looks very much like Diane Lynch passes bodies and panicked partygoers and comes to one of the officers. She says she is looking for her sister.
The monster comes after Nad. He escapes by hiding in the coffin.
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JUDITH’S HORROR OUTLINE – VERSION 1 – L9 – HOMEWORK
WHAT I LEARNED
ACT 1 –
INT. SHRINK’S OFFICE – DAY
JANE’S SHRINK assures her that she is ready to conquer her sedetapobia. This trip to the woods with her fiance will convince that she is well.
They leave her office and go into the lobby where Jane’s fiance, JAKE waits. Jane introduces hime to the shrink. She thanks him for helping her show Jane that she is ready to face the world.
INT. JANE’S APARTMENT – DAY
Jane packs her suitcase. Her dear FRIEND helps her. Soft music plays in the background. They are almost finished. Friend closes the suitcase and stares at Jane.
She says, “what?” I don’t think you should go. I don’t trust the Shrink.
“Are you here to help me or hurt me?” To help of course. You’re my best friend. I’ve always watched your back.
Yes, ever since kindergarten. I’ll be okay. I feel strong. Jake will be there. I can call you anytime I need to talk.
INT. SHRINK’S OFFICE – DAY
The Shrink sits behind her desk. A plastic sheet on her desk with white powder spread over it. The shrink takes a straw, collects some of the powder and sucks it up her nose. She sits back in the glory of her habit. “Won’t have to deal with that bitch for three weeks.”
INT. JAKE’S CAR – DAY
Jane and Jake ride along enjoying the scenery and discussing their plans for the trip. Soft music plays on the radio. Jane reaches over and turns on the song. Jake looks at herand she holds her finger up to her mouth. Silence. A big smile graces Jane’s face.
EXT. WOODS – DAY
As they drive into the trees a soft breeze rustles through the trees. A concerned look on Jane’s face.
Jake wants to know what’s wrong. I didn’t know it would be so dark. Not by the cabin Jake assures her.
There’s a lake and open spaces along with the trees.
EXT. CABIN – DAY
Arriving at the cabin Jane looks a little more relieved. She smiles at Jake.
The CARETAKER waves and smiles as the couple exit there car. I just got here. She unlocks the cabin.
They enter. The Caretaker is horrified. Things are thrown about and it’s a mess.
I cleaned this up yesterday. Got it ready for you. I don’t know what happened. Must have been some teenagers pulling a prank. She inspects the rest of the cabin while Jane ane Jake shrug their shoulders. Jane whispers to Jake that she wishes they could leave. He assures her all is well.
The Caretaker rushes from the kitchen. This is the worst they’ve ever done. The food is spoiled. I’ll go to the store and get supplies.
Jake assures her that they can shop. She better clean up this place by the time they get back. She humbly apolgizes.
ACT 2 –
EXT. CABIN – DAY
When they leave the cabin, they see a man fishing by their dock. Jake goes up to him and asks what he is doing there. He seems not bothered by Jake’s insistence that he leave. He promises he will.
INT. COUNTRY STORE – DAY
Jake and Jane shop for supplies. As Jane passes a newsstand she doesn’t notice a newspaper article about a psychiatrist under investigation for using unorthodox practices.
EXT. WOODS -LATER
Jake and Jane arrives back at the cabin. When Jake exists the car he notices that the fisherman sits in his chair on the dock. He calls to him. The guy ignores him.
Jake rushes up to the him. Jane follows. What’s wrong she says. Jake faces the fisherman and sees that his face looks like a bite mark on his cheek. He pushes on him and the man falls over.
Jane screams. What’s going on here?
They rush toward the cabin but before they can get there, they are attacked by a wild boar. In order to keep from being bunted, they race into the woods. They run and run finally getting to an opening in the trees. It is a circle surrounded by the pines.
They listen. All is creepily silent. It’s so silent. I kept stand the silence. But the silence is not all that is wrong. Soon a group of boars surround them. They take each other’s hands expecting the worse, when a weird sound from nowhere bursts on the scene. The boars stop in their tracks and run away. They look at one another and laugh in relief. Let’s get out of here. Jake leads the way back to the cabin.
EXT WOODS – OUTSIDE THE CABIN – LATER
Jake and Jane make it back to the cabin. Nothing in site. The fisherman from the dock is gone. They enter. A soft rustle in the trees.
INT. CABIN – DAY
As they enter, they see that the caretaker has done a beautiful job. Jane is relieved. She’s impressed. Jake tells Jane he will get the groceries from the car.
They put the groceries into the refrigerator. Hug one another and sigh a relief.
Jane goes into the bedroom. We hear a scream. Jake rushes into the room.
INT. CABIN – BEDROOM – NIGHT
Jane stands pointing to the caretaker lying on the floor. Jake moves over to her and touches her neck. She’s dead.
Jane freaks out. Jake comforts her. He tries to use his phone but there is not reception. He tries Jane’s phone. It doesn’t work either.
Panicking, Jane jumps up and down. Jake calms her. He tells her he’ll take the body outside. They can get help tomorrow. The roads are too dark to drive at night. He leaves with the caretaker. Jane puts on as much sounds as she can find in the cabin. Jake is gone for awhile. Suddenly, he bursts into the cabin.
He shouts when he enters, “lock the doors, the boar is back.”
The boar rams against the door repeatedly. He starts to give way. Then the boar stops and horrible squealing sounds are heard. They look out the window and see a figure with a mask hacking the pig to death.
Who is this person. Are they here to help. Jane starts to open the door, but Jake cautions her. If she’s here to help why is she wearing a mask.
They try to figure out what to do. They barricade up the windows and other doors. Wait in silence, but the mask figure just stands there. Jane is freaking out from the silence but Jake comforts her. The figure doesn’t attack the whole night.
EXT. CABIN – DAY
Jake lifts the caretaker’s body into the car while Jane watches. He tells her he’ll be right back, but Jane jumps into the car. Jake gets in. He pushes on the ignition, but the car won’t start.
They decide to go back into the cabin and plan what they will do. They start to the cabin when Jane stops in her tracks. She points to the dock. Jake wants to know what is wrong. The body, the body of the fisherman is gone.
?????ADD THAT THEY WALK FOR HELP….weather, rain, flooded out bridge
INT. CABIN – AFTERNOON
Jake and Jane return to the cabin. They decide to have lunch. They’ve settled down. They decide to walk to town and get the sheriff. They grab their coats, start to leave when there is a BANGING on the door. They look out the window and the masked figure is back. It bangs on the door and around the cabin. It bangs on the back door.
They find weapons to defend themselves. Much banging. Threatening. Then silence. Jane runs around turning on all the things that will make sounds. A big roar in the room. Jake tries to get her to settle down when suddenly the lights and all sound stop. Jake, it’s pulled the electrical feed. I’ll have to go outside to fix it.
Jane doesn’t want him to. He insists he must. He arms himself. Creeps outside. Jane waits in terror. Suddenly, Jake knocks on the door. Let me in, it’s back. He succeeds in entering. Jane bolts the door.
The creature bangs on the door again. Jane is hysterical. Jake can’t calm her. He tries over and over, to no avail. When suddenly he stops. Pushes Jane away. And opens the door. He lets it in. Moves over to her, pulls off her mask, it’s the shrink, he kisses her.
In total freak out mode, Jane scrams, flees into the bedroom. Locks the door. Silence. She hears nothing. She searches the room for a weapon. Stops suddenly. Finds as photo of a little girl and boy. She stares at it. Freddie.
FB memory of her and her older brother. They have a terrible fight. He is taken away in an ambulance. She is hauled off to a home. Her mother has disowned her. Later she commits suicide.
She stands tall. Raises the weapon she has found. Crawls out the bedroom window. Jake and Shrink break down the door and see that she has escaped.
They chase her through the woods. Catch her. She’s frantic. They creep toward her. Jake pulls out a gun. She screams. He shoots the shrink. She sinks to the ground with a quizzical look on his face. Thanks for your help, shrink. Jane is completely out of it. He bangs her hard on the head. He drags her to his car. Drives off.
INT. MASON HOME FOR THE INSANE – DAY
Jake talks with a doctor. He tells him that Jane has not responded to the medications they gave her. She hears nothing. He tells Jake he can visit, take her for a walk, but don’t expect anything in return. Jake thanks him and tells him whatever I can do for my little sister.
He goes to Jane. She sits in front of the window in a wheel chair. A blank look on her face.
EXT. MASON HOME FOR THE INSANE – DAY
Jake wheels Jane down a path past other visitors toward an isolated area. He parks the chair. Sits on the bench next to it. Well, Jane, no more sounds for you. SILENCE is the reward for you hurting me when we were kids, making mom think I was dead and her killing herself in grief. So good to have found you, little sister. Jane’s still head slowly turns toward Jake, she rises from her chair, a harrowing scream, a knife and Jake is dead, stabbed.
The attendants come running. Find Jake dead and Jane disappeared.
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Chris Grant’s Horror Outline Version 1
What I learned is: I’m digging too far into the specifics of my outline and it’s slowing me down too much. So I’m posting my progress so far. Don’t want to fall too far behind.
ACT 1 — SET UP FOR HORROR
EXT. ISLA DE LOS MUERTOS – SUNSET
Opening/prologue: Start the mystery of the monster by showing us the result of their violence.
Atmosphere of Evil established – A fisherman steps off his boat into a dark perilous ocean. Before he does, he speaks a curse. Fight – Cristian’s father curses everyone as he is forced into the ocean.The fisherman are told to swim but the Narco fires into the water to rile up the squid. Surprised / blindsided
Thrown into the monster – Senor Cordova is told to jump into the water.The ocean starts to boil. The fisherman swim for their lives. They are consumed by something under the water. Senor Cordova jumps into the froth. He floats for a moment, laughing at his own fear. Suddenly, he’s dragged under by some malevolent force.
Monster Reveal: Squid Powers -Unrelenting hunger when frenzied. Death – Senor Cordova – Cristian’s father and first one killed.why – He will not give up his boat motor to the Narcos.how – He’s pushed into the sea and consumed by the squid.Demand – Putting together the pieces
EXT. BEACHES OF ST. ELENA NIGHT/DAY
Forces of nature – The ocean seems, at every turn, to be punishing the fisherman for some kind of transgression. More importantly, it’s stopping them from finding out what happened to the missing men.
EXT. STREETS OF QUITO DAY
Connect with the characters – Cristian Cordova is an outcast from his fishing village. He lives in Quito, pretending to go to school, but spending his time doing drugs. He suffers from visions. Horrible images that he’s suffered from since childhood. His mother calls him to return to their village. His father didn’t come home from the sea. Cristian tells his mother that he’ll get on a bus and come home. Traveling across Ecuador to the Esmeraldas is like traveling back in time. The coast is simple fishing towns mixed of traditional indigenous cultures.
EXT. HARBOR DAY
The fisherman are angry. Their numbers are dwindling fast. They have boats but no men. They are losing their way of living quickly.
The fishermen in the village believe Cristian’s return is a bad omen. He’s been ostracized in his own village.
Cristian arrives in his home town. It’s depressed, dominated by a failing fishing industry. He hates being back here.
Mentally tortured – Cristian has been bullied and mistreated by the other fishermen in the village since he was a child. His complete mentality is based on his hatred for them.He doesn’t really want to return to this cursed place.
EXT. BEACH DAY
o Forces of nature – The ocean seems, at every turn, to be punishing the fisherman for some kind of transgression. More importantly, it’s stopping them from finding out what happened to the missing men.
The next morning, a mutilated body appears in the sand.
During 1st Act: Foreshadowing as cluesPossessed – The dead body on the beach sits up from rigor mortis and sighs.
Death – Fisherman 1 – In the boat with Senor Cordova. Washes up as a corpse on shore.Why – also sacrificed to the squid How – Unseen but generally consumed by the sea.<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>The characters are warned not to do it. – The fisherman in the village want to go back to sea and earn their living. But Cristian warns them something is wrong. The sea is angry for some reason and they must find out why first. Something inside our body – Crabs and worms eating the dead corpses.The only one who sees the monster – Cristian’s visions foretell of the monster to come. The corpse speaks to him when no one else does.Try to solve it – The fisherman try to make sense of what has happened but come to the wrong conclusions. This only makes them more angry at Cristian.
INT. DOCK SIDE BAR NIGHT
Denial of Horror – The fisherman fight about what to do. They disregard the warnings. Some of them want to head back out with the first tide.
o Try to solve it – The fisherman try to make sense of what has happened but come to the wrong conclusions. They sit around the harbor bar getting drunk and cursing their misfortune. The Harbormaster tells them they are just superstitious drunks.
o Cristian shows up to inquire with the Harbor Master about his father’s boat.
Threatened – The fisherman don’t want to see him in their bar. they threaten to beat him up outside the bar where they all drink. He provokes them and gets beat up by multiple people at once.Threatened – The fisherman think Cristian is a bad omen and they threaten to beat him up outside the bar where they all drink. He provokes them and gets beat up by multiple people at once. They beat him up for showing up again and spoiling their season.
EXT. HARBOR MOUTH NIGHT
· That night the sea punishes them once again. The wind howls and the ocean tumbles.
INT. BACK PORCH FACING THE SEA. NIGHT
· Cristian gets high out back of his mother’s shack.
· Watching the ocean, he has a vision of his lost father. Senor Cordova tells him that all are cursed. He tells his son to avenge him and the others.
· Cristian doesn’t understand what his father wants.
· His hallucinations seem to be drug-induced.
EXT. HARBOR MORNING
Safety taken away – The next morning, the harbor is left empty of water. The boats are left on the sinking sands. The fisherman are furious they can’t go out again.Cristian believes it’s a natural occurrence but they blame him anyway . The villagers take it out on Cristian’s family and burn his father’s boat.
1st Act turning point: Characters are locked into horror
Monster: The nature of the beast. – A whale is attacked in the ocean in the nights. Some unseen force drags it under. It struggles, trying to get free. It lets off a monstrous scream that can be heard for miles.
The next day, the tides return and the fishermen head back to the sea.
Menacing Stranger – Narcos that the Harbor Master introduces Cristian to are dubious at best. They aren’t from their village and are not friendly. Being lured into danger – The Harbor Master lures Cristian into traveling on his drug boat. He doesn’t know that the smugglers were responsible for his father.
Doing something forbidden – Cristian decides to get on the boat with the Narcos when his father’s boat is burned.Denial – Cristian takes up this journey despite the warnings of danger.ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN
1st half of 2nd Act: The monster is present, but hidden
EXT OCEAN DAY
o Isolated / Trapped / Abducted – The smugglers promise to take him to the Isla Del Muertos where his father was last seen. Cristian, intent on finding out what happened to his father, agrees to crew on a drug running fast boat.
o Three men on a boat. One of them doesn’t speak to him. The other is naive. They don’t know each other very well.
· On the way out, listening to Iron Maiden. The youngest Narco is Cristian’s age. They have a lot in common. This kid thinks this is the way out of his life back home.
EXT OPEN SEA SUNSET
· They do drugs together.
o Unknown motive – Narcos who take Cristian out in the boat the first night seem to be good guys. They don’t believe he’s bad luck. But they aren’t really on his side.
§ Denial – Cristian goes along with them because they offer him drugs.
A squid flies next to the boat. A bunch of them do. Cristian watches as it glides over the surface of the water using it’s body as a sail.
o The only one who sees the monster – He sees the flying squid on the water when no one else does.
Monster Reveal: Squid Powers -Seems intelligent. Demand – CuriosityMonster Reveal: Smugglers Power – Causing people to work against their own best interests. – Demand – Discovery –
EXT. OPEN SEA NIGHT.
· Along the way they become entangled in a vast array of fishing nets in the ocean. Ghost nets are everywhere in the ocean, trapping and killing all life. They’ve entered a giant marine graveyard.
Monster Reveal: Squid Limitations – Initially hesitant. Demand – Curiosity Smugglers Weaknesses – Fragile egos, guilt. Demand – Conflict
o Monster Reveal: Smugglers Weaknesses – Stupidity Demand Conflict
Escape – Cristian understands that the ghost nets are going to cause problems for the boats if they can’t see them coming.
EXT. -3.1793068079250313, -80.43770094109634 ISLA DEL MUERTOS NIGHT
o Lured into the horror – Cristian has to swim into the nets to try and free the boats. It’s like swimming through a graveyard of rotting animals of all kinds.
Death – Sea Animals – Why Caught in the nets How – Can’t free themselves and end up drowning.Back into it – Swimming underwater and getting caught in the ghost nets with no way to get out.
o Walking into a trap – Arriving at the Isla Del Muertos, the smugglers meet up with another boat. These smugglers have guns. Cristian realizes he’s been deceived. He’s trapped by the Narcos.
EXT. ISLA DEL MUERTOS SUNSET
Kidnapped – Cristian is forced to work for the Narcos. He finds out that the two fishermen he’s with have also been forced to work on their behalf.Working with someone, then they become the evil one – The dealers give the two men in the boats the guns. They don’t really want to shoot anyone but they must do so in order to survive themselves.One of us killed – The Narcos are preying on the fisherman. They want their boat motors and they are willing to kill them for them. Escape – Cristian realizes that he’s made a mistake and must solve this problem.They offer them an option, give them their engine and swim for shore or be shot and killed. Out of the frying pan and into the fire – Being offered the chance to swim to shore or shot.
EXT. TANGLED GHOST NETS DRIFT – SUNSET
Cristian is forced to board the other ship so they can steal the engine.
Tricked – Cristian has been tricked by the Narcos into stealing for them. Fisherman 1 is not having it. He recognizes the other Narcos with Cristian. They’ve all fished this coast line before. He points out that they are now robbing their own brothers.Fisherman 1 hates that Cristian is the one who is trying to ruin them and fight him then and there. A struggle ensues. The leader of the smugglers fires his machine gun.
EXT. DOWN IN THE NETS SUNSET
Fisherman 2 jumps overboard and starts swimming out to sea.
Dilemma: Who to save: Them or me? Or Person A versus Person B? Either be the person stealing the motor or be the person swimming for your life. Fisherman forced to prey on one another.
Fisherman dumps the engine in the water and it immediately sinks down. The Narco loses his patience.
See another killed – Cristian is forced to watch as the fisherman from his village are forced into the water and eaten.
o Narco 1 orders Narco 2 to fire at the water. He looks down and sees a squid. They now surround the boat in the nets. The squid attack the injured squid and drag it down for consumption. A feeding frenzy begins as the squid cannibalize their own. The water churns.
Death – Fisherman 2 – Forced into the water by the Narcos and told to swim for the island. He tells Cristian he’ll say hi to his father for him.Why – Given a choice to swim for their lives or be shot.How – Can’t escape the squid once they enter the water.
o Physically tortured – Watching someone get eaten,
o That first moment when you jump in the water and you can’t see what’s going on beneath the surface. He dives down underneath where he sees that he’s already surrounded. He turns around and a blood red squid attacks his head. He struggles against it, surfaces trying to get air, screams for help. He’s pulled down by his legs into the water.
§ Cristian reaches for him but he’s pulled down too fast. Still he fights against the squid. Cristian can see that when he twists, the squid let go. The squids take bites out of him tearing. He screams underwater, his voice traveling back up to the surface.
o 25 feet down, he drowns. And the squid dismember him quickly.
o The water is filled with red squid and red blood.
§ Fisherman 2 – Consumed by the squid
§ Why – Won’t give up his motor
§ How – Shot and falls into the water. At least he’s dead before the squid get to him.
Friends in danger –o Cristian sees the people he has grown up with killed by the smugglers. He barely makes it back to his boat.
o Fight – Much like Cristian’s father, Cristian wants to fight back against what’s happening but cannot. He tries to help the fisherman out of the water but he’s torn apart.
EXT. DRIFTING IN THE NETS – NIGHT
Monster Reveal: Smugglers Purpose – Steal the boat engines from the fisherman Try to solve it – Cristian realizes this is how his father must have been killed.The group has been infiltrated – Cristian goes along with the Narcos in order to get his revenge.
MIDPOINT: The monster is worse than we thought!
EXT. ISLA DE LOS MUERTOS
The engine is just below the surface and sinking fast and they are still caught in the nets. The Narcos know if they don’t deliver the engine they will most likely be shot as well. They younger Narco wants to go home. The older Narco explains that they must deliver the engine or they will also be killed.The engine is caught about 15 feet below the surface, dangling in the nets.The boat that Cristian is on is damaged from bullet holes and taking on water.Deliver the drugs to the freighter offshore. Nobody cares if you come back. Demand – DiscoveryMonster Reveal: Squid Powers – Can’t be stopped in the water. Demand – TerrorMonster Reveal: Squid Powers – Can attack from multiple angles. Demand – ConflictMonster Reveal: Squid Powers -Escapes easily – Demand – ConflictMonster Reveal: Smugglers Power – Extortion – Warns fisherman that their families are at risk if they don’t cooperate. Demand – Conflict Cristian tries to dive for the motor but the squid are everywhere. He fights with the other Narcos about what to do. If they kill him, then they will have to swim for the motor.
EXT. ISLA DEL MUERTOS NIGHT
The drug dealers are on the way. They get a call that they have to be ready for the rendezvous and they need two engines. Worse, their own engine has become caught in the nets.Monster Reveal: Squid Powers – Pack hunting at high speed. Demand – Putting the pieces togetherMonster Reveal: Squid Limitations – Can’t leave the water for very long. Demand – Conflict Smugglers Weaknesses – Stupidity Demand ConflictTrapped – The boats become entangled in the nets. Escape – Revving the boat engines to free them and making matters worse.
EXT DOWN IN THE WATER WITH THE SQUID – NIGHT
Full pursuit by the killer – Cristian is told to get in the water and free the motor of the boat that’s become entangled in the nets. He shines his flashlight into the water. It attracts the squid. It almost seems as if they are curious about it.Cristian agrees to go into the water if the Drug Dealers can cover him. He tells them not to fire at the squid while he’s in the waterHe dives into the water with the flashlight in his teeth. He only needs to get a wench rope around the engine. The squid are on the other side of the net. They reach for him but can’t get to him.While he’s down there he sees the nets, full of dead animals, he swaps to lines on the boat, the same way the fisherman did in his village. He makes it back out of the water. The squid cannot reach him.
2nd half of 2nd Act: Monster pursuing / attacking characters, delivering clues with each attack
EXT. ISLA DEL MUERTOS. NIGHT
· Any attempts to free their boats from the nets only makes it worse. They call the Harbor Master who is furious they have fucked up. He’s out on the water as well and will come to intercept them.
Forced into a dangerous environment – Boats drifting amid a large mass of nets that catch the motors and cause them to overheat.
EXT FREEING THE NETS
Since they are all fisherman, they Narcos start to reel in the nets on the boats. They are full of stinking dead fish. The imbalance starts immediately as they rush to get freed from the nets.
o The burned body of the first fisherman literally rolls out of the net on to Narco 1. He freaks out as the partially eaten body drapes over him.
Impending doom – Sinking boats, omens of approaching death, creatures swimming up from the dark to feed.
They manage to get the motor back up out of the water. It’s waterlogged so they let it drain.
· Together they start working on it to get it back up and running. Cristian knows that it’s rigged to catch fire. They can’t turn the engine over until it’s had a chance to dry.
EXT. HARBOR MASTER ARRIVES NIGHT
The Harbor Master arrives in another boat. He is accompanied by two other armed gunmen. He sees the other boats loaded with nets and laughs at these pathetic fisherman who can’t catch a fish with on ocean full of nets.
Cristian immediately confronts him, asks him why he’s doing it? His answer is to sacrifice a man to the Red Devils. His boat is heavy in the water, it has a large trunk on the deck strapped down. Too much ballast on their boat.
His wife, a woman, is spared. The Harbor master will turn her into a sex-slave to pay back her transit to the United States.
He offers Cristian drugs. Cristian refuses.
· He’s having heavy withdrawal from the drugs. The Harbor Master knows it.
He explains this is a dog eat dog world and the Chinese are off the coast taking all the fish in this region. In a couple of years it will be all dried out. They’ll move on and leave us to perish. So I’m getting out while I can. He says he has a gun to his head as well and it’s 50 miles out to sea waiting for his cargo. This trunk of cocaine will get him away from this Hell. But he has to sail through it first.
The other Narcos do the drugs.
He reveals the smuggled people on board. Criminals who have just escaped from an Ecuadorian prison.
And the woman whose husband was left and killed.
· The Narcos drag the boats together so they can transfer the motors.
o Terrorized – Night falls. The smugglers try to start their boats but immediately cause a fire from Cristian’s rewiring.
o The woman lunges at the Harbormaster, gets a knife in his leg.
o He orders Cristian and the girl to be shackled to the boat.
Death – Narco 1 – Rebels against shooting people and ends up in the water as a victim.Why – Freaks out and tries to stop the Narcos from killing people.How – Gets shot and wounded and ends up in the water as well.Give up – The main Narco, who knows what kind of monster he’s become, goes down into the water knowing what’s about to happen.Death – Narco 2 – Boat catches fire and jumps into the water only to be consumed while burned.Why – Chaos caused by the first Narco sets the boats on fire and burns the other Narco alive.Several of smuggled Narcos are forced to jump into the water while the flames consume them, set upon by the angry squid. In the dark of night, they are all sinking fast.The Harbor Master orders Narco 1 and 2 to shoot Cristian but they refuse. How – he ends up in the nets.
Charge blindly into action – The Narco who can’t take it anymore causes chaos when he refuses to kill others.Out of the frying pan and into the fire – Catching fire on a burning boat or jumping into the ocean and being eaten. Escape attempt takes them into it – People shackled together in the water try to escape but get tangled up in the nets.Shackled – Someone is shackled to the boat as it sinks. Cristian has to free himself and the others as they are dragged down by squid.Escape – The prisoners must try to unshackle themselves from the sinking boat before they enter the water. Attacked or chased – forced to swim in a closed area with a horde of ravenous squid.Fight – Once in the water, fighting against the squid that immediately try to swarm you.Monster approaching – Being chased underwater, swimming for your life against creatures that attack from every direction.Monster trying to get to you – Squid pulls you down and tries to smother you, others attack your limbs and pull in different directions.Escape – Being dragged down until you drown.Escape – The dilemma gets worse, as burning is no alternative to being eaten.
Death Kidnapped Victim – Smuggled aboard drug dealers boat. Tries to frantically escape and doesn’t make it.Why – tries to escape and jumps right into the fireHow – Squid attack and drag him into the depths.§ Attempt something that fails
The kidnapped person tries to swim for his life not knowing what’s in the water.Monster Reveal: Squid Limitations – Flashlight in the eyes under water momentarily pushes them back. Demand – DiscoveryMonster Reveal: Smugglers Limitations – All must submit to the higher authority or die. Demand – DiscoveryMonster Reveal: Smugglers Limitations – Also afraid of the water.Monster Reveal: Squid Weaknesses – Can be fought off one-on-one but not in groups. Needs an anchor to pull. Demand – TerrorMonster Reveal: Smugglers Weaknesses – Panic Demand – Terror
ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR
EXT. BOAT WRECKAGE. NIGHT
Fight to the death – One by one the people on the boats must try to swim to the nearby island. None are able to escape the nets before the squid attack them. Another character loses it (hysterical) – One of the other smugglers, a fisherman from a local village, can’t take it anymore. He attempts to sabotage the smugglers but ends up in the water as well. Environment changing around you – Cristian discovers the ghost nets are full of dead bodies of fisherman who got caught and drowned.Try to Solve it – Cristian realizes the only way out of the nets is to cut them loose so they can drift. He’ll have to jump in and cut them lose.
EXT. GHOST NETS NIGHT
· Hysteria – They drug dealer is willing to sacrifice his own men to protect the drugs. But he inadvertently causes the boats to separate and drift apart from the container of drugs they are transporting.
o A character refuses to take action – Fisherman refuses to shoot another man and is shot himself.
o Internal conflict in the group – Fisherman who can’t take it anymore who end up in the water. Narcos fight each other to survive.
§ Escape – Trapped in your own trap. The Narcos now have to battle each other to survive.
Death Head Narco – Goes down with the ship after he runs out of bullets and gets violently torn apart.Why – Won’t give up on the drugs in the crate and runs out of bullets as his boat is sinking.
§ How – Completely dismembered by the squid.
Betrayed – The main Narco sacrifices his own men to survive.EXT. SINKING BOATS. NIGHT
3rd Act: Characters solve the puzzle and fight back, apparently killing monster
Monster Reveal: Squid Weaknesses – Scared of light. – Demand – DiscoveryMonster Reveal: Smugglers Weaknesses – need to stay with drug shipment or face death.Monster Reveal: Squid Appetite – Rising up from the depths of the sea to feed on the fresh dead. Like most predators, they prefer live or freshly dead prey. So there’s lots of half eaten dead corpses in the nets. Demand – Discovery
EXT. ALMOST IN THE WATER. DAWN
· The thrilling escape from death – Cristian is forced into the water with the squid. He manages to distract them long enough to get to the floating crate full of cocaine that is drifting on the tide. One end of it bobs above the waves.
o Slimed – Tentacles across your face, slimy fish guts, rotting animals in drift nets, an exploding whale full of sea worms, A rotting corpse on the beach being eaten by crabs.
o No escape or their escape route has been cut off –
o Trapped within the nets, the only way to get free is to swim down and release the nets under water.
o Injured, wounded, or debilitated – Cristian is cut and bleeding, but still must enter the water to cut the nets. As his bleeding worsens, he must swim as fast as he can through a startled bunch of squid.
§ Fight – Trying to fight off squid one by one as they attack.
· Death returns to take one or more. The Narco runs out of bullets as his boat sinks into the horde of squid. He is torn to pieces.
o Cannot see (fog, being underwater), speak or yell, hear (too loud or too quiet) The squid appear from the dark all around. They attack anything in the area. A shark swims up to Cristian and the squid devour it, giving him the chance to get away.
o Face to face with the monster – Cristian dives into the water to free the nets. He has a flashlight that he turns on and off in the water. The squid get curious and start to approach. They feel him with their tentacles as he dives down to the bottom.
§ Hide – Diving down to the bottom to get away from the bloody mayhem.
§ Fight – Cristian fights a squid underwater and successfully frees himself.
EXT. FLOATING CRATE OF COCAINE. SUNRISE
Resolution – Cristian manages to climb aboard a container full of cocaine. With the squid lapping at his feet, he watches the sun rise, cast adrift in a sea full of red. In the calm he drifts away from the nets and out to sea. The squid disappear to the deeper water and leave him cast adrift.Lost – Cristian is set adrift at sea floating on a trunk full of cocaine.Escape – Cristian makes it to the trunk of cocaine but he’s set adrift on the ocean.
§ Cristian Cordova – Sole Survivor
Resolution: Survivors live…but somehow, the monster is still alive for the sequel
Monster Reveal: Squid Weaknesses – Disappear at sunrise. Demand – Discovery
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3. In this lesson I learned how simple it is to take a difficult to read outline and make it readable in scenes.
1. Follow the steps above to create your readable outline.
ACT 1 — SET UP FOR HORROR
INT. DININGROOM – DAY
WORKER ONE toils away at laying new wallpaper in a freshly redone empty room. Worker One fails to notice the radio coming to life as he rolls the wallpaper on. Screams start to emanate from the radio as WORKER TWO, looking very similar to Worker One, approaches in a trancelike state with a hammer in hand. He attacks Worker One with the hammer, hitting him over and over again.
INT. DININGROOM – DAY
A different radio is playing strange sounds as HUSBAND tries to get it to work properly, growing frustrated. SON sits at the table eagerly awaiting food as YOUNGER DAUGHTER sits strapped in next to the table. CARETAKER rushes around the table, setting plates down as she does. Caretaker nearly runs into OLDER DAUGHTER as Older Daughter comes walking into the room on her phone. Older Daughter tries to finish her call. As the family settles and starts to eat, MOTHER finally arrives. The family seems unsurprised as Mother takes her seat and begins eating late. Caretaker asks how things are. Mother seems exhausted.
GRANDMOTHER sits in her room staring out her window and listening to the muffled sounds of the conversation below.
The radio springs back to life with a hiss and Husband slams the top of the device in frustration. He throws it in the garbage, sending Mother into a fit. Caretaker tries to calm the situation while Older Daughter throws up her arms in disbelief. Older Daughter makes a mother for Son to leave the room and grabs Younger Daughter as Husband, Mother, and Caretaker try to settle things.
INT. FOYER – DAY
The Older Daughter hears the doorbell ring. She goes to answer the door it is the NEIGHBOR. Outside, a number of cars are leaving. Neighbor suggests that it might be a good idea to come with them before the lockdown goes into effect and that while being couped up in any house can drive a person nutty, this particular house always seemed particularly chilly. The Older Daughter asks how long they have to make the decision. As Neighbor explains, Mother comes down the stairs and gives a strained smile. Mother explains that there is no possible way they can leave as Grandmother is far to ill. They’ll just have to wait it out. Mother leaves and Older Daughter explains that houses are all basically the same. Their biggest problem is a family in turmoil.
Neighbor tells Older Daughter that they are welcome to move down the street to Neighbor’s house if they need to and hands Older Daughter a key. Neighbor leaves.
Older Daughter walks into the LIVINGROOM and asks Mother if she explained the situation. Mother waves it off and Older Daughter explains to Son, Younger Daughter, Husband, and Caretaker. Caretaker nods resolutely and Son does not believe that the quarantine is real. Husband casts blame on Mother for shooting down the idea of leaving and suggests Mother is the real problem here. Mother leaves and we can hear her upstairs addressing Grandmother.
INT. DINING ROOM – DAY
A few weeks have passed and the family is noticeably stressed. The family can see armed patrols moving about outside.
EXT. HOUSE – DAY
Son notices the tree shadow is bent strangely one day while looking out the window. He catches Older Daughter’s attention and she makes her way outside into the yard. Son follows and they meet with Caretaker on the lawn. They follow the shadow and realize it is pointing to a small marker in the ground. As they approach, Mother comes running out asking what possessed them to go outside with he patrols going around. There are a multitude of dead animals around the marker.
As Mother approaches the market, she faints and hits her head on the rock. Panicking, Older Daughter has Caretaker help her carry Mother inside while directing Son to come inside with them. They rush her to a bed to provide medical assistance.
INT. HOUSE – DAY
Days pass and things at the house have changed. Mother is back on her feet, but mostly stays in her room. Older Daughter is taking care of Grandma now. Grandma is less responsive than ever. Younger Daughter hasn’t stopped crying for days. Son is trying to provide support with Caretaker. Husband has gone back to his workroom and rarely leaves.
INT. DINNING ROOM – NIGHT
During dinner Mother grows frustrated with Younger Daughter crying and blames Older Daughter for not taking care of her. Husband starts arguing with Mother. He grabs her wrist and discovers a mark. Husband is accused of creating mark on Mother by Son and Husband goes to strike Son, but begs off and leaves instead. Mother looks down at the marks and as Caretaker steps in to help, Mother leaves.
Caretaker suddenly leaves as well. Older Daughter tells Son to look after Younger Daughter and follows Caretaker. Older Daughter finds Caretaker in the attic looking at old books. Caretaker is researching the houses history.
ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN
INT. HOUSE – DAY
Older Daughter receives their weekly rations from the ration patrol and closes the door. Son and Caretaker help her to move the food into the kitchen. Everyone is looking very down.
As the food is being stored by Son, Caretaker, and Older Daughter, Mother goes into Grandma’s room for the first time in weeks. Mother seems surprisingly upbeat. Grandma sees a horrid face in the window and turns around to see Mother. Mother notices this and closes the door behind her, gently before locking it. Mother and Grandma talk and Grandma utters some religious words as Mother moves closer. They do nothing. Mother moves around to the bed and snags a pillow. She gets Grandma against a wall and suffocates her, then cries softly and turns Grandma back to the window. Mother leaves and returns to her own room.
Older Daughter, Son, and Caretaker move Grandma into the freezer downstairs to keep her from decomposing. They are distraught. Caretaker explains some of the history of the house. About how it seems to drive people nutty and how only 10 years ago a renovator killer his work partner and then starved to death in the basement. He seemed bound to the house.
MIDPOINT: The monster is worse than we thought!
INT. DINNING ROOM – NIGHT
Realizing the Younger Daughter always cries when Mother is around, Mother decides to poison Younger Daughter to keep Mother’s secret. Younger Daughter starts foaming at the dinner table and Son goes outside looking for help. PATROL MEMBER panics and shoots Son in full view of the family. The family, including Mother, look on – horrified.
ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR
INT. WORKROOM – NIGHT
Mother walks into Husband’s workroom as he is having a drink. Husband turns and looks at Mother, nervously. Husband notices something about Mother that tips him off to the fact that she isn’t who she used to be. Husband calls Mother out on it. Husband realizes she must have killed Grandma and appears possessed. Starts to wonder if Mother killed Younger Daughter too. Mother seems taken aback, but leaves. Husband keeps drinking.
INT. BATHROOM – NIGHT
Husband runs himself a bath. Mother sneaks in as Husband drunkenly relaxes in the tub. Mother pushes him under water/drowns him.
INT. DININGROOM – NIGHT
Older Daughter and Caretaker notice Mother walking trancelike and soaked. Caretaker puts together what has happened and tells Older Daughter. Older Daughter and Caretaker discuss what to do, decide that trying to trap Mother is best.
INT. MOTHER’S ROOM – NIGHT
Older Daughter and Caretaker lock Mother’s room door from the outside.
INT. DINNING ROOM – NIGHT
They start plotting how many days until the next ration dump arrives. The SPIRIT unlocks Mother’s door and sets her free in the house. Mother makes her way out and attacks Caretaker and Older Daughter in the dinning room. Caretaker and Older Daughter escape.
INT. HOUSE – NIGHT
Older Daughter and Caretaker move to a second strategy of fleeing from Mother. The workroom has a bolt on the door so they try to make their way to that room. The door is locked – they assume the key must have been taken to Mother’s room.
INT. MOTHER’S ROOM – NIGHT
Older Daughter and Caretaker arrive in Mother’s room. They find pictures of Husband cheating and papers Older Daughter had kept from Mother. They realize the Spirit feeds its victims paranoia. Caretaker presents a book. It has the same symbol that the marker in the yard had. Caretaker believes that destroying the book will destroy the Spirit. Caretaker tries to light it on fire, but the book doesn’t burn. Mother appears. Older Daughter and Caretaker flee into the basement, but not before Mother lands a deep gash on Older Daughter with a pair of scissors.
INT. BASEMENT – NIGHT
Older Daughter and Caretaker flee over a dangerous wooden floor. Caretaker props a dying Older Daughter up along the wall as they wait. Mother tries to follow, but she falls through the flooring and dies on a piece of jagged wood. As Mother dies and Caretaker looks on, as Older Daughter breathes a sigh of relief. As Caretaker goes to assist Older Daughter up, Older Daughter stabs Caretaker.
INT. POLICE STATION – DAY
Older Daughter recounts her story to police. Older Daughter is carrying a book with her and won’t let it go.
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Dan’s Horror Outline Version 1
What I learned doing this assignment is… there’s still more I need to develop, but this was a great way to break the story and produce the spine of the outline, so to speak.
INT – SUBURBAN HOME
A YOUNG BOY, 10, is trying to escape his home, as he’s pursued by an unseen force. He stops as he sees: two front doors. He doesn’t know which one to pick. With the figure approaching, he opens the left door and enters it.
Suddenly, he’s back in his room. He knows he fucked up, and starts screaming as a shadowy figure approaches him. The boy’s eyes grow wide… then wider… then impossibly, abnormally wide, as the top of his head bends backwards like someone’s trying to pry him open.
INT – THERAPY ROOM
KENDALL GRADY, 16, has her eyes closed while her therapist tries to get her to talk about an incident. Her therapist explains that Kendall isn’t helping herself by ignoring the facts around her. Just because her drug use led to a tragedy doesn’t mean she’s a drug addict; but at the same time, she has to hold herself accountable for what happened.
Kendall leaves therapy to see her mom, NORA GRADY, early 40s, waiting in the car with fast food. Nora comes across super supportive. Kendall explains that her therapist suggested she touch base with Austin and set the record straight. Kendall wonders if maybe he laced her joint that day by accident – to which Nora purses her lips disapprovingly.
The pair head home, where they see Kendall’s father/Nora’s husband JACK GRADY, 40s, working away on his laptop, talking about an upcoming estate sale.
The doorbell rings and it’s Austin, 17, Kendall’s friend, asking if he could talk to her. They talk outside on the front porch. Austin says he didn’t know what else to do because Kendall wasn’t responding to him: he wants to know how she’s doing, and to know that he would never hurt her in any way. Kendall says she’s doing okay, but the details of that day are still fuzzy, and she isn’t sure if she can trust Austin again. They get into an argument when Austin tries to challenge Kendall’s narrative of what happened; Kendall dismisses him and tells him to leave.
Inside, Nora tells Jack she doesn’t think it’s a good idea for Kendall to be talking to Austin, and she doesn’t trust leaving Kendall by herself this week when they both have work. Jack protests, but when Kendall comes inside, he tells her he needs her help at an estate sale tomorrow. She agrees to go, reluctantly. Nora is satisfied.
INT – SUBURBAN HOME/ESTATE SALE
Kendall joins Jack at the estate sale, which happens to be in the house of the boy that was killed in the opening scene. Jack tells Kendall that the family disappeared, and police aren’t sure what happened to them. Probably involved in shady business and left the country.
While sifting through the objects, Kendall finds an interesting looking KALEIDOSCOPE. She puts it to her eye and is awestruck by the almost impossible display of colors. The kaleidoscope moves in an otherworldly way – unlike any kaleidoscope she’s ever seen. She stops when she hears what sounds like the faint echo of the boy screaming. She looks around the house, puts the object back, and gets back to work.
INT. GRADY HOME
While doing Kendall’s laundry, Nora finds the kaleidoscope and Jack says it was from the estate sale. Nora assumes Kendall stole the kaleidoscope, but Kendall insists she didn’t. It must have… fallen into her bag? The family have an argument over Kendall being untrustworthy.
INT. KENDALL’S BEDROOM
Kendall lays on her bed and puts the kaleidoscope to her eye. Suddenly, a disturbing pattern emerges through the eyepiece; a needle is released from the kaleidoscope and it goes right through her eye – but Kendall then wakes up, realizing it was a nightmare.
INT. GRADY HOME – FOYER
At night, Kendall sees Austin outside, smiling at her creepily. He then slips toward the house, and Kendall hears noises downstairs. She runs downstairs, whispers for Austin. Sees something moving through one of the large cabinets on the bottom of the kitchen counter. She opens it, sees nothing. Nora comes downstairs, asks what’s going on. Kendall says she thinks someone is in the house. Nora wakes up Jack; they look around but don’t find anything.
ACT 2
INT. GRADY HOME – KITCHEN
The next morning, Nora cooks Kendall breakfast. Kendall slumps into her seat with a dead look in her eye. She doesn’t touch her food – just looks at Nora and grins. Everything Nora says, Kendall repeats it to her, backwards. Nora gets nervous, but Kendall snaps out of it the second Jack comes into the room.
INT – AUSTIN’S JOB
Kendall approaches Austin and tells him not to come to her house again. Austin doesn’t understand- says he was working last night. Kendall says he’s lying again, and a frustrated Austin grills her: says her facts about him aren’t adding up. Why would he lace her joint when he’s in love with her? He gave her a regular joint, because her parents were stressing her out.
There has to be another reason why she totally blacked out that day. Something happened with the baby that was so awful, Kendall must have blocked it out of her memory. That’s really what happened. Denial is a powerful thing. Kendall tells him to stop gaslighting her. She never wants to speak to him again.
INT – GRADY HOME
Nora is cleaning, telling Jack on the phone that something is wrong with Kendall. Suddenly, she hears something upstairs. She hears weird chewing noises coming from Kendall’s room. She bangs on the door; Kendall doesn’t answer. Suddenly, the chewing stops. Nora cracks open the door, and looks inside to see… Kendall floating in the air. Nora gasps, closes the door. Runs downstairs… to find Kendall downstairs, acting normal.
Nora tells Jack that something is wrong with Kendall. She’s acting… possessed or something. Jack tells Nora that she’s overreacting and that she needs to get out of the house. Her mind is playing tricks on her.
INT – KENDALL’S ROOM
Kendall looks at her reflection, notices her mirror has somehow grown… bigger? She looks at the kaleidoscope on her desk. She takes it and starts playing with it, looking at the colors. She takes it in the hallway to see the colors change into an otherworldly display. Then she hears something.
ANOTHER SCARY SCENE
After this, Kendall knows something is wrong and is keeping her eyes peeled to try to figure out what it is.
INT – THERAPIST’S OFFICE
Nora sits down with the therapist. Brings up Kendall’s strange behavior. The therapist tells her if he didn’t know any better, it sounds like Nora is saying Kendall was possessed. The therapist tells Nora there’s someone she should contact – someone better suited for this issue.
INT – GRADY HOME
Kendall realizes that there are MORE SMALL MIRRORS in the hallway, seemingly coming out of nowhere. She calls Jack and explains that something is in the house but she doesn’t know what. Jack shushes her, tells her she just has an overactive imagination. She’s always been so silly.
Kendall then tries to tell Nora, who acts scared toward her. Nora simply tries to calm Kendall down, which makes Kendall even more frustrated. Kendall goes into her room, and Nora answers the door to find – a PRIEST.
After Nora tells the Priest everything about the baby incident, the Priest tells Nora Kendall seems to have attracted an evil presence because of the unspeakable tragedy. It’s consuming her, and Nora must do whatever she can to stop it. Nora brings the Priest to Kendall’s room, where they find Kendall chewing on something under her bed. Kendall screeches like a banshee when the Priest puts holy water on her, and flees the room. Nora and the Priest look to see what’s under Kendall’s bed: a collection of BABY LIMBS. The Priest tells Nora that they need to take serious action.
Kendall, now seemingly normal, wakes up from a nap on the downstairs couch. As she goes upstairs… something starts to chase her through the house. It’s unclear what it is. She then turns into a corner and accidentally breaks a mirror. She then turns around to see… the Priest. But it’s not really a priest … It’s dressed as a priest but has a DEMONIC FACE WITH NO EYES.
Kendall screams, and runs out of the house.
Nora calls Jack, but he’s still at work. The Priest tells Nora that they don’t have time to waste; they need to take care of this now.
INT – JACK’S OFFICE
Kendall runs to her dad’s office. Finds out through his assistant that… he hasn’t been in the office in three days. WTF?
INT – GRADY HOME, BOILER ROOM
Jack gets a call from Nora in his “office.” He takes it; when he hangs up, we see he’s actually in the boiler room, without the faintest realization that’s where he actually is.
INT – AUSTIN’S HOME/PLACE OF WORK?
Kendall finds Austin. She makes sure that Austin really was at work on the dates he said he was (and not at her house). Once it checks out, she says something really weird is going on in her house. Austin helps her figure it out, and realize it all dates back to that kaleidoscope going into her house.
INT – GRADY HOUSE
The Priest returns from the basement, and tells Nora that her daughter is even more dangerous than they thought. The Priest believes she… somehow kept the baby alive, and is guarding it. Nora follows the priest downstairs, where Kendall is tied up, ready to be “exorcized”.
INT – JACK’S OFFICE
Kendall looks up the family from the estate sale, the last owners of the kaleidoscope. Austin cross references the family on social media, somehow connects them to a previous owner who managed to escape from the kaleidoscope. Kendall tells him to drive to the woman.
INT – GRADY HOME
The Priest and Nora confront the possessed Kendal. During the “exorcism”, Kendall gets loose and kills the priest, then brushes past Nora and runs away. Nora follows Kendall through the house.
EXT – WOMAN”S HOME
Kendall and Austin talk to the woman. She says that the kaleidoscope destroyed her family. She threw it in the dump. But she isn’t surprised that it found its way back to people.
The woman explains that the kaleidoscope makes you see things that aren’t there. Kaleidoscopes work by mirrors. So the kaleidoscope puts up mirrors in the house, and breaks the family members apart, locking them into their own nightmares.
The only way to get out is to get out of the house, and not go back. Eventually, the kaleidoscope will weaken and whatever entity lives inside it, will go to sleep. But once it’s woken up, it will do whatever it takes to lure its victims into its realm.
INT – GRADY HOME
Nora follows “Kendall” through the home, until she finds a GIGANTIC MIRROR DOOR that has somehow popped up in the threshold of the next room. Nora peaks her head inside, then starts to go back… until she hears the soft cries of the baby.
INT- BOILER ROOM
Jack continues to do his work. He hears his secretary tell him that his wife and daughter are here, and have planned a surprise party for him! He walks out of the “office” to enter the “kitchen,” with Kendall and Nora smiling at him creepily. They tell him to sit down for dinner.
They also take him through the mirror doors, where they reveal that they are made of plastic. They are life-size dolls that are always smiling. Jack smiles back at them, satisfied that everything is finally all right in the house.
INT – AUSTIN’S CAR
Austin tells Kendall that there’s no way any of this is real. Kendall tells him to come back to their house and see for himself.
EXT – GRADY HOME
When Kendall and Austin go inside, they don’t see anything. No parents. Nothing. Kendall realizes that she has to enter the house alone; the kaleidoscope doesn’t want Austin.
Kendall tells Austin to get help, and goes back into the house by herself. When she does, Austin immediately opens the door after her – but she isn’t there.
INT – GRADY HOME
Kendall travels through a mirror maze full of horrors; the shifting object, the demonic priest, deformed plastic people. Eventually, she stumbles upon a scene through the mirror. She rewatches the events of what happened that day: she was watching the baby when she smoked a joint, then passed out. While she slept the baby choked to death on a plastic toy airplane.
Kendall is frustrated. But she finally is ready to watch the scene again with objectivity. She realizes that she only smoked in her room out the window, which means she wasn’t watching the baby at the time. “Wait a minute… this couldn’t have happened.”
She realizes that that scene is being played out on a MIRROR. Angrily, she smashes the mirror, which cracks and reveals the actual scene: Nora falling asleep on the couch, then waking up to find the dead baby. Then… snapping.
INT – NORA’S MIRROR MAZE
Nora approaches “Kendall”, who is holding the baby. She takes the baby from Kendall, and says she thought she lost him! She’s so overcome with emotion.
INT – KENDALL’S MIRROR MAZE
Kendall watches Nora, in the memory, then storm into Kendall’s room and see her sleeping. Nora then shouts at Kendall, telling her she was supposed to be watching the baby!
Kendall realizes what happened: her mother slipped into denial, unable to face it was really her fault. Just then, the DEMON emerges: its arms are wrapped around its torso and face, covering its eyes. It has a wide mouth, laughing like a hyena. It chases Kendall out of the memory.
Goes through the maze and smashes another mirror, making her way into…
JACK’S MIRROR MAZE
Kendall bursts into the kitchen, where Jack is laughing with plastic Kendall and Nora. She convinces him that it’s not real, and he follows her to find Nora.
They smash more mirrors and stumble upon…
NORA’S MIRROR MAZE
Nora is cradling her baby in her hand. Kendall tries to tell her mother that this isn’t real: the baby is dead and… Nora was the one who was responsible for it. It’s unspeakably tragic but Nora has to face reality and wake up from this.
Nora doesn’t listen… then, the demon emerges.
Jack drags Kendall back, protecting her from the demon. The demon walks up to Nora and uncovers its eyes. Its eyes are kaleidoscopic. Nora’s face then becomes kaleidoscopic, and the demon devours her.
INT – MIRROR MAZE
Jack and Kendall run out of the maze, but the demon follows them. It almost catches them, but Kendall takes a mirror shard and stabs the demon. She then redirects the mirrors with Jack so that the demon is trapped, and scared of itself. This buys the duo enough time to leave the maze and escape from the house.
INT – GRADY HOME
Kendall and Jack leave their house, and go back into reality. They never enter the house again.
DEDUMONT
The kaleidoscope finds its way to an estate sale…
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I learned it’s good to plot the whole story out no matter how rough to get the situations set up
EXT. TOMKINS FARM – DAY
ELLIE, RAJ, and SON stare at the farm they were sent to inspect. Racist signs out front. On the porch of the farmhouse Jonah a ornery looking man wields a shotgun.
Raj is unmoved and goes to the gate while Ellie gets back in the car. Son calls the office for help but gets no signal. He sends a text.
Raj yells to Jonah to let them in. Jonah takes a shot near Raj. Kills a gopher. Laughs.
Raj says they have orders to inspect their farm.
Jonah says they have nothing to hide so he lets them in.
Ellie is coaxed out of the car.
They’re let in the farm and the gate clanks shut behind them.
Ellie tries to get out but the gate is locked.
EXT: IN THE FARM GROUNDS – DAY
MIDGE (8) is pulled roughly into the house by GRANNY (65) as the inspectors approach the farmhouse.
The inspectors tell Jonah the chickens they’ve been selling have been flagged. There are some abnormalities.
Jonah takes them to the barn.
They go inside and Jonah slams the door shut and locks them in the barn.
INT: BARN – DAY
They try and get out but there’s no escape. Raj tries kicking the door open but it’s no use. Son tries to call the police again but still has no signal.
Ellie sees a dead animal carcass hanging on a meathook. She screams.
After calming her down Son sees a storm door and thinks it may be the way out. It’s got a lock on it. He figures out the way to break the lock Then he climbs down into the cellar.
Raj and Ellie wait to see. There is silence. They call down. Nothing. Maybe he got out.
Suddenly Son shouts in fear. Help me!
Raj grabs a shovel and goes down the cellar. He rushes back up fear on his face. He slams the door shut and locks it.
It was horrible. I couldn’t rescue Son. He’s gone.
Ellie sobs.
INT: BARN – LATER
The barn door opens and Kate slips in.
Sorry Jonah locked you in here.
They tell her Son has been killed in the cellar. She says no. Don’t worry. He’s not dead. I know what’s going on.
She reveals that Granny has been experimenting with poultry. There are just weird birds down there.
She goes over and opens the door to the cellar.
Son’s detached head flies out. Kate gasps. Faints.
The monster is coming out.
They slam the door shut just in time.
They revive Kate and they run to the house as the door to the cellar strains.
INT: FARMHOUSE – DAY
The three of them get to the house. The place is a mess. Eli is drunk, Midge is playing with a makeshift doll. Kate tells them that there’s a monster in the barn. Granny says nonsense. That’s Henry. Ruth says you’ve still been experimenting haven’t you. Granny says shut your face. Turns out Granny has been cross breeding eggs with duck turkey and chicken sperm.
Suddenly the door burst open. Henry peeks his head in.
He’s glassy eyed and can barely keep his eyes open. Eli staggers over to him. You need a drink.
He staggers in and then we see the Turducken who claws Eli’s face and pecks him to death.
Jonah shoots at it. Blasts the chickens head off and it falls.
He thinks he’s killed it. But the chicken head regenerates.
Granny yells at the monster telling it to get back in the barn.
It comes at Granny but Jonah shoots it again.
The monster turns to Jonah. Grabs the gun from him and kills Jonah
Ellie grabs Midge and runs upstairs.
Raj, Ruth Kate and Granny follow them up. They all crowd in a bedroom as the monster climbs the stairs.
INT. UPSTAIRS BEDROOM – DAY
The monster breaks in. Raj fights with it as the others go out the window.
The monster slashes Raj.
Ruth blares loud music and the monster stops.
Monster runs off to the barn.
INT: DOWNSTAIRS – LATER
The remaining people regroup. Raj is wounded badly.
We need to get him help.
They keep the music blaring to keep the Turducken at bay.
The power is cut off and the music stops. It goes dark.
They hide in the dark.
EXT. OUTSIDE – LATER
The monster is out there. They can hear it.
Ruth goes out on the roof thinking it’s safe. The turducken flutters up and kills her.
Crams her body parts in the chimney and drops them into the house.
The turducken is on the roof.
Granny explains what the turducken is. The only way to kill it is to separate all three heads at once. The only way is to get the turducken to hang upside down. They will fall asleep and we can cut off the heads.
There’s a contraption in the barn. A rack. If we get the turducken on the rack we can turn it upside down
Kate tries to reason with it while Ellie and Midge run for the barn.
INT: BARN – DAY
Ellie gets Midge to hide in the storm cellar. Wait here and don’t come out until someone comes to get you.
INT: FARMHOUSE –
The turducken breaks into the house. Granny throws a lantern at it and the house goes up in flames. They run out leaving Raj to burn.
The turducken chases Granny and Kate to the barn.
The monster kills Granny.
INT: BARN – DAY
Kate gets safely in the barn. The turducken approaches.
He comes in. Has Ellie and Kate penned it. It looks like a certain death when Raj appears out of nowhere and shoots the turducken.
The turducken turns and kills Raj giving Kate and Ellie a chance to escape.
Ellie tries to send Kate into the cellar with Midge. But the monster is in the way.
They try a rope trap to hang the monster upside down.
It works for a moment until the rope breaks and the monster falls.
Ellie goes on the rack. The monster sinks his claws into her. Now! Kate turns the rack.
It turns the monster upside down. The heads fall asleep. Ellie pulls a knife out and slices off the three heads.
The monster falls to the ground.
Kate gets Ellie down from the rack. The celebrate the killing. Then Henry’s eyes finally pop open. They cut all the extraneous limbs off. Now it’s just Henry.
Thank god. I’m safe. What happened. You killed everyone but us. Even Midge?
No. She’s safe.
Let me see her.
They let Midge out of the cellar.
Henry hugs her. Reunited at last.
They a claw springs from Henry’s side and clutches Midge by the throat.
Ellie takes an ax and chops off Henry’s head. Dead for good.
The police pull up to the house.
Kate and Ellie and Midge are taken away.
Ellie says goodby to Midge.
Midge hugs her tight we see a claw emerge from Midge’s side as she hugs her.
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Lisandro Boccacci’s horror outline version 1
what i learned doing this assignment is seeing how over time how laying out this bit of information help fill in the plot. Its like planting a seed and watching everything bloom into something big. It’s still rough, but close, i just have to find places for the character journey track, but other than that, I feel on track and I love the story that is evolving.
ACT 1 – SET UP FOR HORROR
INT – COURTHOUSE / COURTROOM – DAY
The judge is reviewing a police body cam… showing a police chase on foot ending one officer accidently shooting another officer and then catching up to the suspect and using violent force to subdue the person, causing extreme harm. role: out of control: the main antagonist.
A cop shoots other cop on accident. The officer slowly loses his energy. falling to the ground. The video continues to show the officer chases down suspect, fires at the suspect and hits him on the leg, and runs back to the officer screaming, “Officer down and I’m shot!” Starting to realize he shot his own partner. The officer calls for back up, and an ambulance… more shots are fired, and the officer has no clue what is happening. More officers arrive and open vest of the office that has been </font>shot. They notice a bullet got through the vest, bleeding from bellow his armpit. They have to stop the bleeding. the officer runs after the suspect and catches up to the suspect and starts beating him to death. The officer is beating the suspect to death and another officer has to step in to stop him. Wrong place at the wrong time. The main officer has mistakenly shot at his partner.
After the camera footage ends, the focus is on the ex-cop sitting in the stand. He is the body cam officer in the courtroom opening scene and sitting the court room having to answer some hard questions. role: .Leader: intro: He gets called up on the stand as a witness.
EXT – COURTHOUSE – DAY
role: Moral One: Introduced: he is the one that picks the group up from the courthouse
INT – BAR – DAY
Connect with the characters – The 3 main characters meet the victim of this crime for dinner and celebrate his innocence and wining his lawsuit. here at the party, we get to learn a little about everyone’s personality through their actions and how they speak. role: love interest/ lovers character intro: she meets the leader at the bar in the opening scene.
The girlfriend of the leader, lives with the leader, they share everything together, works as a waitress during the day, she joins her boyfriend for the thrill, loves the idea of getting back at cops. she also has a history of back encounters and drug use. 2. traits: rough around the edges, but hard working makes up for it, protective of her brother, she is very beautiful. 3. fears: losing her brother, but fears if she doesn’t live her life now that she will miss the boat. 4 she wants to live life to the fullest. she needs to let go of her past and move on from her family. 5. her aura of having been through the harshness of life, her loyalty to the leader and brother. /rooting factors: she comes from a good family, she’s good looking, bit of a black sheep, hard ass attitude makes her personality likeable. she has a great relationship with the leader, feels like a soulmate connection. everyone in the group finds her attractive and charming.
the leader’s Traits: Experienced, bold, rational. has a history of breaking the law. Has experience going through the court system… he learned the law… and has created a YouTube channel to get police officers in trouble. 3. Fears: he is afraid of ending up homeless, afraid of losing his loved ones. 4. Wants/needs: He has a need to find justice for how much the police have ruined his life. he wants to go out and put bad cops behind bars. He wants to have a good time while doing it. 5. Likeability/rooting factors: talks a lot, isn’t afraid to speak his mind. Has a history of breaking the law. Has experience going through the court system… he learned the law… and has created a YouTube channel to get police officers in trouble. relates to others: Very friendly and jokey with his friends and can be tender and caring with his girlfriend.
The moral one, he is a family man; he owns and drives the car. He is a professor by day, and a constitutional scholar. he has partnered up with the leader to make these live streams and has hit the jackpot. 2. traits: Intelligent, a good negotiator, outstanding citizen model. 3. Fears: He is afraid of letting his family down. Afraid to lose them. 4. wants/needs: He wants to do good in the world. he needs to put his family first. 5. likeability/ rooting factors: he is likable because he is a good person at heart. root factors is that he is a family man. 6. he reacts under stress: he just goes into action without thinking.7. relationship to other characters: He is looked at as the responsible one, an honest great guy. relations to group: he is looked upon as the oldest and wisest, survival depends on being the first to act. 5 fighting back: he owns a pistol; he knows his right to defend himself
INT – PRISON – DAY
the ex-cop is in the worst of moods and gets in a fight with the other inmates. he is quick to get back on his feet and take control of the situation, uses weapons if he needs to. The ex cop is in denial: he doesn’t accept his temper to be a problem. (He has a bad temper, and its revealed he is strong, and can fight multiple men at once.) every year he gets attacked multiple times while in prison.
INT – HOSPITAL – DAY
During his last year he gets his face cut up really bad and is sent to the hospital with his life clinging. After some time, he takes off his bandages to reveal his hideous scared face and left with a face without a nose. This one of the officers who was fired, sued, and sent to prison for three years. That changed him as a man. It has also left him disfigured. In prison his face was slashed up, and his nose was cut off. He wants his revenge. 2. traits: enduring, strong, revengeful. 3 Fears: accepting that he can’t go back to his old life, he fears never being able to fix his face. and he cant take being made fun of. 4 wants/needs: he wants his revenge. he needs to calm his temper. 5. likeability: we like him because of how much he has endured and suffered. he is rooted in being a solid guy. always comes through.
EXT – PRISON – DAY
Monster Reveal: The ex-cop, with a bandaged face is let out of prison. its been three years.
INT – HOTEL – DAY
He makes it to hotel. uncovers his face, slowly but painfully…to reveal he is missing a nose… his face all cut up. he is seeing his face for the first time… his temper is out of control. he reacts to stress: by finding strength within and forcing his way. and starts to laugh at his horrific face. he enjoys it scaring people with his face.
EXT – BAR – NIGHT
The brother,. Is the carrier character. character intro: he walks in with double fisting beer when the group is out celebrating. role: the carrier: he is the younger brother to the girlfriend/love interest. he is given a tip about where dirty cops work, he talks to his friend, just become a police officer, character intro: we first see him talking to the carrier, role: complainer: he is also the younger officer in the group. bit of a rooky. 3 Fears: he is afraid of getting shot on the line of duty. 4. wants/needs he wants to start a family of his own. he needs to mature. 5. likeability: honest, young, charming. he comes from a family of police officers. <font face=”inherit”>role: the carrier: he is the younger brother to the girlfriend. he trying to fit in, be part of the group, but also the one who gave the group the tip about the public parking lot, and how the cops are taking advantage of people there. 2Traits: has asthma issues, polite, drinker, socialite, always trying to please others. 3 fears: being left out. 4.he wants to spend time with his sister, but he needs to go out and find his own place in life. 5likeablility: Hes funny. root factors: he finds they are staying together as a family is important. He calls his older sister who is with the leader at the time as well and tells her about the tip.
INT – LEADER’S HOME – NIGHT
The leader calls his driver friend and talks to him about the tip. while they are talking the driver sends the leader a link to a new article about the victim has gone missing, suspected dead. The driver wants to lay low and warns them against doing anything, but the leader convinces the driver to go through with one last video tonight. The leader tells everyone to get ready, that the driver was going to pick everyone up and get all together.
INT – DRIVER’S CAR – NIGHT
He stops by the younger brother’s house, picks him up, he drives to the Leader’s place and pick him up, and the older sister. They drive to the location. They talk about not doing it and going back, Denial of horror – the leader of the group reassured them that as long as they have their cameras rolling and know their rights, that they have nothing to worry about.
EXT – PARKING LOT – NIGHT
Before they can start streaming live, they are surrounded by the police cars in a secluded area away from the city. Rescuer intro: he is part of the squad that surrounds the victims’ cars. the lights shining in their faces, blinding them… and the dark figures surrounding them… officers screaming at them. They pull out their cell phones and cameras and start streaming live to capture any wrongdoing. The officers begin to ask questions, see their ID, and threaten to arrest them for denying the request. They talk back to the officers… telling them they know the law, there is no sign at the park that says that there is a curfew. The officers threaten them and continue to ask them to step out of the car. They refuse to get out of the car and stand their ground. one of the officers grabs and pulls back on the window, smashing it and a fight the leader gets hand cuffed to the door. the complainer’s reaction to horror: he is filled with fear. …under stress the girlfriend: they panic and lose control, will just react and blindly and go toward harm’s way if they have to. leaders Stress reaction: He can stay calm and clear headed, which is why he can lead. the younger brother, under stress they react by following his sister’s lead and he becomes the weakest and scared the most out of the group. Leader’s relationship to group after first horror: He becomes the thing they cling on for rationality.
The Police yell at them, and mess with them for a while. the complainer doesn’t like what’s happening. after the police have their fun and play their mind games with the main group in their car…the main monster, the ex-cop bent on revenge comes out… ready to play with no rules or laws stopping him…The man in the pig mask and talking through a megaphone, with a K-9 by his side throws a couple of gas grenades and creates a fog around the car. The group knows something is up… when the officers stand back and the figure with pig mask shows up. The driver starts their car and try to drive away… but its too late… their car is hooked up to a tow truck and the dog is let loose, viciously barking at them through the car windows. the other cops tell the complainer that he was used to set this whole thing up, they knew about his friendship with the younger brother and he is in Denial: he doesn’t want to believe that it was a set up, and he was played. relationship with others: they don’t trust him fully as a rooky and he is trying to gain the groups respect.<font face=”inherit”> </font>
ACT 2
EXT – FORREST – NIGHT
The ex-cop has his tow truck and drags the characters out into the field where there is no Wi-Fi and internet, but the ex-cop has his own special camera with a special long range wireless antenna, and K-9 dog. They realize that none of their phones or computers are connected, their live streaming has ended. They can’t escape and are now being dragged by a tow truck. Driver’s horror reaction: they react by getting more focused on the situation, going from jokey to serious. driver’s Denial: He believes as long as he knows his rights, they can’t hurt him. once stopped. The driver tells them to stay calm and pulls out a gun from the glovebox. The driver goes by himself to unhook the car… the K9 gets loose and starts tearing the driver apart. The driver shoots back into the darkness … misses the dog. . the complainer under stress: he tends to coward a bit and his, he runs or hides. his relationships with other characters: he is viewed upon as the rooky so they treat him like dirt. The driver almost gets eaten alive by a dog, and he is out of bullets. The group gets out of the car to help fight off the K9, the driver limps back into the car and locks everything once they are all inside the car. One of the officers (The complainer) guarding the perimeter gets shot by accident. he makes his way over to the car. falls over the hood of the car bleeding to death…shot by the driver… that officer drops his gun and the older sister sees that. she will attack by any means necessary, even taking a gun and using it if she has but She becomes hysterical and needs to be controlled from doing something stupid. The ex-cop has complete command of the dog… uses it to keep the victims from running and uses it for defense. If the victims can eliminate the dog, they have a better chance at running. They stay in the car; they discuss running and getting to an area with internet and cellphone access.
MIDPOINT – He allows the rooky to die… and this doesn’t sit right with the other cops. The monster is worse than we thought – He starts using his baton stick to break and destroy their car. He argues with the other officers about the officer bleeding to death. the ex cop’s relationship with other characters: the officers have the highest respect for him, but they view his temper as his weakness. They have to take him. Eventually he lets a couple of officers take him to a hospital. the complainer’s insight: don’t be a coward.<font face=”inherit”> Which no this situation made the circle perimeter guarding the area </font>smaller.<font face=”inherit”> and the gun that was left behind… the sister still has an eye on it. </font> they duck down into the car, shielding themselves form the glass that flying in the air, every time the ex cops swings his baton.
ACT 3 – FULL OUT HORROR
The carrier character gets pulled out and is forced to fight the ex-cop, another makes a run for it… a third goes out looking for the first character, and only one stays in the car. A few officers who have secured the perimeter fire back at the one trying to escape… the younger brother gets completely pulled out of the car…they try to pull him back in the car…but the younger brother gets dragged out and pulled into the darkness… with the younger brother gone, they don’t know whether to run for it, stay put, or try to save him. They argue about what to do…the sister grabs the gun that was left behind by the shot officer, runs after her brother….the driver makes a run for it… the younger brother gets tied by the neck and get pulled up off his feet. The older sister finds him and fires at the ex cop and at the dog, they make a run for it into the darkness around them. She manages to cut the rope down. and they make a run for it. The ex-cop uses a megaphone to let them know they are all going to die tonight. one by one… sending everyone in a panic, and sets his K9 loose again. He is in control even if the victims are out running about. The driver is being shot at from the officers that are securing the perimeter. He has to run tree to tree… dogging bullets until the K9 attacks the driver again. The younger brother gets an asthma attack…close to suffocating, needs his spray. The older sister runs back to the car for the spray. The ex-officer attacks them both electric shocker gun… He is just using what normal officers have… the leader gets somewhat tazed but is strong enough to withstand it…The sister grazes the ex-cops face, breaking the mask. they run for it with the asthma spray. They can’t get to the younger brother. Death returns to take one or more: one of the officers, The rescuer, switches sides and begins to help the driver escape, end up shooting the dog dead The rescuer ends up getting wounded badly and makes it out of the dead zone, the no radio, no Wi-Fi, no internet area and manages to call for back up. Here the brother has an Asthma attack and dies from that. the sister is in great Denial: that her brother is dead. the officers have lost control, things are getting out of hand, the night was just meant to scare them out of town. dog by shooting it dead, and they make a run for it out of internet dead zone, able to call for back up. The ex-cop takes off the mask.. still alive… but that bullet could of killed him. He has lost his temper. He picks up knife and runs after them. The younger brother chokes to death. he was the cause for getting them to the set-up point. He dies from an asthma attack that was induced form being hung for a minute. the leader tries to get to the younger brother but has to break the side mirror in order to come free. the leader is Fighting back: he uses a lug nut wrench that’s in the trunk of the car, he uses that to physically fight the ex cop. Back up arrives and police swarm the area and there is a shootout between good cops and bad cops. the rest hiding in the forest from the bullets. the ex-cop manages to escape the shootout but chases down the girlfriend/sister, but the main guy has one last fight in order to save his girlfriend, face to face, both have knives…horror situation: one last final fight, knife fight. its a fair fight, the monster and the leader seem to be on the same level. but ends up getting seriously hurt in doing so…fight to the death, the leader gets cut up, but manages to stab the ex-cop in the back… rendering him useless with his life hanging by a string. they reach the good officers and are escorted out of the area and into an ambulance, her insight: having someone there to help you isn’t a weakness and if she has to rely on herself, she flexible enough to get by. the driver although his skin is torn to shreds, he is fighting for his life in ambulance, and the brother is found dead. the driver’s motto: Fight for your right. the leader’s ability to stay calm and think is what got him out alive. The ex-cop manages to walk to his trailer…He manages to get back to his trailer where he has a computer booth running multiple live cam feeds to a website. where he was running a live feed from multiple cameras to a website that is hitting 5 thousand views. <font face=”inherit”>we see an audience of billionaires looking at their screens. all of their live feeds </font>stop<font face=”inherit”> as the ex cop pushes end live feed. </font>he tells the driver to go. The trailer pulls out of an old barn… and drives off on a dirty road. They leave just in time before the good cops swarm the area.
INT – AIRPORT – NIGHT
the ex-cop<font face=”inherit”> is using his laptop checking his millions in his bank account and watches the news… the survivors in the hospital alive. this makes the ex-cop furious. causes a scene and airport </font>security reaches him before he can leave. end of movie. <font face=”inherit”> the </font>insight from him is: going down the path of revenge brings your own destruction.
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