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Lesson 1
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Hilton Garrett, Intriguing Concept and World
What I learned – a deeper awareness of concept and character and the world of the series.
1. Present your concept
A disillusioned journalist seeking the truth about his parents’ death on a lonely road twenty five years ago uncovers a link to a powerful southern politician who is under the thumb of a violent New Jersey organized crime family seeking to expand its operations into Atlanta and Savannah, Georgia.
a. A wounded and disillusioned journalist learns that his parents’ death was not an accident but a murder.
b. He is threatened by unseen forces that will kill to keep the murder a secret.
c. He must, for the first time since his parents died, return to the scene.
d. He must face his deepest fear as he gradually realizes his mistake in calling it an accident, and as he discovers layers of truth and the danger it poses.
2. The world of the series
Unique sub world – small town south Georgia corrupted by big city Mafia and a crooked sheriff
Previously unexplored – Criminal influence on a quiet southern town as big-city organized crime moves into rural Georgia
The unknown – How does a Bible belt county respond to outside criminality?
The unseen – FBI scrutiny
Unheard of dangers – the Mafia kills to keep secrets
Reason to explore it – to see how innocence can be corrupted
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CJ’s Intriguing Concept and World of Patient X:
What I learned from this assignment…to keep the focus narrow on the most exciting elements of this world, characters and their story.
1. Present your Concept.
A. Engaging and highly proactive hero… ER physician, Dr. Angela Rossi
B. …up against a major conflict… suddenly develops psychic powers
C. …goes on unique transformational journey… thrusting her into the hunt for a global cabal of killers
D. …Into an intriguing world… after she learns her powers come from a fatal prion disease and she’s Patient X in the plot to spread it across humanity.
=> ER physician Dr. Angela Rossi suddenly develops psychic powers thrusting her into the hunt for a global cabal of killers after she learns her powers come from a fatal prion disease and she’s Patient X in the plot to spread it across humanity.
2. Tell us the World of this show.
Unique Sub-World: The world of prions, a genetically engineered form of Fatal Insomnia that imbues its victims with special powers even as it threatens to kill them—and will kill the rest of humanity if it spreads.
Previously unexplored: We’ve seen plenty of post-apocalyptic plague worlds (Last of Us, Walking Dead, etc) showing us how humanity fights to survive AFTER most of their world is destroyed, but what of Patient X? What if she could find a way to stop the destruction of mankind before it begins? What would a person sacrifice to achieve that?
The unknown: what form the powers take
The unseen: the other devastating symptoms
Unheard of Dangers: killing vast numbers to find the few with powers
Reason to explore it: Rossi has to find out what’s causing her symptoms to save herself and then when she learns kids are being exposed, to save them and stop the spread.
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Intriguing Concept and World of The Puzzle Works formally known as Benjamin Greene.
Working hard every day to become the best writer I can be and as a result I do become the best writer in Hollywood.
What I learned from the assignment is how to picket and isolate the essential elements that make a great pitch.
Lloyd Shellenberger Module 2 – Lesson 1: What Makes a Great TV Pitch Bible?
High Concept to incorporate into pitch:
Col. Benjamin Greene, a former CIA assassin turned Special Operations Commander, is recruited into a world of intrigue and murder by a highly secretive Pentagon agency .
A. Engaging and highly proactive hero.
Col. Greene is a former Assassin and career Special Operations Soldier with training and real world knowledge.
B. Up against a major conflict…
Still reeling from the sudden death of his wife he is at the most vulnerable time in his life while trying to protect his son from the Puzzle Works.
C. …goes on unique transformational journey.
Col. Greene will spiral into a world of alcohol and murder as his humanity fades. His son tries to be his conscience but unfortunately his son has leveraged his soul as well.
D. …Into an intriguing world.
The world of the Puzzle works is filled with Black suit agents, murderers, assassins, Analyst, police, politicians, FBI agents, and spies. All these elements conspire to stop or control Col. Greene and his crew.
2. Tell us the World of this show. This is the Special Operations world tinged with the Espionage world. It operates outside the confines of a military post and could take our crew anywhere.
Unique Sub-World: The rules are killed or be killed. No-one can be trusted and Black bag money flows like water. Nothing is as it appears, nothing!
Previously unexplored:
This agency is off the books and funded by Black bag money that doesn’t exist and agents that don’t exist. It is very hard for Col. Greene and his crew to protect themselves when they never really know who the enemy is.
The unknown:
Everyone is an agent and no one tells the truth. Each mission could be the final setup or betrayal. Will the Black suits help you or kill you?
The unseen:
There are agendas and rules that govern this world but they are never spoken. Col. Greene is able to navigate them because nobody is better than him at reading the tea leaves. FBI Investigation. Drug lords plans to keep their territories or take them back.
Unheard of Dangers:
Murder is often the stock and trade while betrayal is the buzzword of the day. Will the local police chief go after Col. Greene and his crew? How far behind is Agent Stockton?
Reason to explore it:
There is unlimited free money in this world. The Black bag money never stops flowing. For people like Col. Greene, First Sergeant Desmoines, this is a place to become rich. SPC. Jones see it as a place to hide.
Hook 1:
What if a retired CIA assassin was brought into the agency to cover up the biggest government gaffs that could bring down the whole house?
Hook 2:
How does Col. Greene and his crew escape once they realize their is no retirement in this field?
Hook 3. What if everything they believed about the Puzzle Works and Col. Greene is wrong, then who are they really?
Hook 4. Betrayal becomes the order of the day and no one is immune to it, not even father and son.
Hook 5: Nothing is as it seems, nothing!
Hook 6: How does a Special Operations Commander and former Special Forces soldier navigate the dangerous underworld of the Puzzle Works?
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BRIAN BULL – Intriguing Concept and World
“What I learned from doing this assignment is…
I need to keep working on making my story more and more intriguing. I also need to learn more about the Psychic Realm myself because it is a world that is very unique and unexplored.ASSIGNMENT
Name of the Show – FORESIGHT
Present your Concept:
A lonely, middle-aged Optometrist creates a pair of “psychic glasses” from a crystal ball that enables him to see the future…
B. …inadvertently through the glasses he witnesses an attempted murder…
C. …love-stricken he must try and stop the murder from happening..
D. …as he tries to navigate the psychic world.
2. Tell us the World of this show.
Intriguing World
Having the ability to see the future…
…a love-stricken Optometrist witnesses a murder…
…and he must stop it from happening.Unique Sub-World: The Psychics Realm
Previously unexplored: Glasses enabling you to see the future
The unknown: How the future relates to the present
The unseen: Betrayals and misinterpretations
Unheard of Dangers: Not everything is as it might appear
Reasons to explore it: A chance to make the things right, better
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