Lesson 11

[Ian Patrick Williams]

What I learned from doing this assignment is to keep looking for scenes where I can add comedy situations plus physical humor, sight gags and punchlines.

Genre: comedy
Title: Unaccountable
Concept: A mild-mannered accountant must navigate a corrupt hip hop world when a gangsta rapper/ music mogul forcibly recruits him to cook the books of his criminal empire before an upcoming audit.

Scene: Jerry has tracked his crooked ex-partner to the Grand Cayman Islands and forced him to do Slaughter’s books in a way that exposes all his crimes. He waits for the plane that will get him back to Slaughter before the deadline he set. When his plane is cancelled, Jerry recognizes a cartel boss from the major Cayman bank he went to and approaches him.

Comedic Surprise
Jerry offers him Slaughter’s watch in exchange for a ride on his private jet.
Punchline
Jerry quotes Slaughter, calling it a ‘paddock’. The boss corrects him and identifies it as a $50,000 Patek Philippe. Jerry almost chokes.
Forced Union of Incompatibles
The drug boss agrees to the exchange.
Comedic Tragedy
On the plane, Jerry calls old friend Sophia Ma, a Treasury agent, and request she meets him when he lands. Suspicious, the drug boss pulls a gun, takes the phone and demands to know who he’s talking to.
Misinterpretation
Not knowing who it is, she answers “Ma”. The man returns the phone, thinking Jerry is talking with his mother.
Absurd Behavior
The man slaps his two grown sons, asking why they haven’t called THEIR mother like the good son Jerry.
Topper
Jerry tells Ma he’s bringing something for her. The boss slaps his sons again for not bringing something for their mother.
Comedic Tragedy
He grabs the thick envelope as evidence of Jerry’s gift but then questions Jerry as to what it is.
Topper
Jerry answers “A book; she loves reading.” The man shrugs and tells his sons they’re off the hook because their mother doesn’t read. Then he hits them with the envelope saying, “But you should have brought her SOMETHING!” He tosses it back to Jerry, saying “Kids today…”