Lesson 11

[Lloyd Shellenberger]

Lloyd’s Scene requirements

Working hard every day to become the best writer I can be and as a result I do become the best writer in Hollywood.

What I learned from this assignment is the outlining process is universal throughout the different platforms and essential to setting up the writing process.

CONCEPT: Col. Benjamin Greene, a former CIA assassin turn Special Operations Commander, and his crew are brutally recruited into a top-secret Pentagon agency to make sure the nations secret, stay secret.

Inciting Incident of Season 1: The Puzzle Works forces Col. Greene to kill a woman he is with or watch his son
die. They also threaten his son, forcing him to agree to their demands.

2. List your A, B, and C Stories.

A story =Col. Greene and his crew are brutally recruited into the Puzzle Works. They must complete the
dangerous missions under the threat of exposure, even death.

B story = Col. Greene’s relationship with his son, 1ST Sergeant Desmoines, and his crew.

C story = Col. Greene always under the threat of exposure, arrest and compromise from Politicians, Police,
Drug lords, and a host of questionable players from the Puzzle Works.

I have outlined 11 pages of scenes and descriptions because my Pilot consists of two episodes.

[CJ Lyons]

CJ’s Scene Requirements

What I learned from this assignment was… the power of dissecting my general scene ideas to make sure each one serves multiple purposes and includes conflict.

This led me to re-arrange and expand several of the B story scenes, increasing their impact on the A story, and I fleshed out some “to be determined” scenes now that I understood the characters’ conflict/challenge better.

My outline is now five pages long with these “bare bone” descriptions.