Lesson 11

[dave korr]

Dave Korr’s query letter for lesson 7:

“Your friggin’ shark ate my mom, my sister, and almost got Granny!”

SHARK STANK is a serial action sit-com – like JAWS meets FALLOUT – set on a slowly sinking mega-yacht, where a cute and klutzy Do-Gooder must battle: a vengeful Schwarzenegger wannabe, his sadistic, drugged-up Fart Shark, and Satan himself, to save her hot and often-naked teen pals from getting eaten – and not in the good way.

BIO: seeing JAWS 22 times helped me to outwit an attacking shark, who then followed me down the shoreline for a mile and a Happy Meal.

If you like my concept, I’d be happy to send you the pilot script. Thanks.

Best,

Dave Korr
973-901-8181
David.korr@gmail.com

[dave korr]

Dave Korr’s query letter for lesson 11:

“Your friggin’ shark ate my mom, my sister, and almost got Granny!”

SHARK STANK is an action sit-com – like FALLOUT meets JAWS – where a cute and klutzy Do-Gooder battles: a vengeful Schwarzenegger wannabe, his sadistic drugged-up Fart Shark, and Satan himself on a slowly sinking mega-yacht – all to save her hot and often-naked Teen Pals from getting eaten – and not in the good way.

Ron Perlman would make a great Satan, who’s constant schemes to get the Do-Gooder to replace him in Hell always backfire.

A teen version of Anna Farris would be perfect as the klutzy Do-Gooder.

BIO: having seen JAWS 22 times helped me to outwit an attacking shark, who kept following me down the shoreline for a mile and a potential Happy Meal.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the pilot script. Thanks.

Best,

Dave Korr
973-901-8181
David.korr@gmail.com

[dave korr]

Dave Korr’s query letter for lesson 11:

“Your friggin’ shark ate my mom, my sister, and almost got Granny!”

SHARK STANK is a action sit-com – like FALLOUT meets JAWS – where a cute and klutzy Do-Gooder battles: a vengeful Schwarzenegger wannabe, his sadistic drugged-up Fart Shark, and Satan himself on a slowly sinking mega-yacht – all to save her hot and often-naked Teen Pals from getting eaten – and not in the good way.

Ron Perlman would make a great Satan, who’s schemes always backfire.

A teen version of Anna Farris would be perfect as the klutzy Do-Gooder.

BIO: having seen JAWS 22 times helped me to outwit an attacking shark, who kept following me down the shoreline for a mile and his Happy Meal.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the pilot script. Thanks.

Best,

Dave Korr
973-901-8181
David.korr@gmail.com

[dave korr]

Dave Korr’s query letter redraft for lesson 11:

“Your friggin’ shark ate my mom, my sister, and almost got Granny!”

SHARK STANK is an action sit-com – like FALLOUT – where a cute and klutzy Do-Gooder must battle: a vengeful Schwarzenegger Wannabe, his sadistic drugged-up Fart Shark, and Satan himself on a slowly sinking mega-yacht – all to save her hot and often-naked Teen Pals from getting eaten – and not in the good way.

Ron Perlman would make a great Satan, who’s schemes always backfire.

A teen version of Anna Farris would be perfect as the klutzy Do-Gooder.

BIO: having seen JAWS 22 times helped me to outwit an attacking shark, who kept following me down the Palm Beach shoreline for a mile and a Happy Meal.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the pilot script. Thanks.

Best,

Dave Korr
973-901-8181
David.korr@gmail.com

[Rebecca Sukle]

Hi David,

Interesting concept but needed tweaking for a smoother read. Query letters don’t usually contain cast suggestions. The following edit is just a suggestion to make your short, curiosity arousing query even more interesting. Wishing you all the best with your marketing.
Rebecca

Dear (Producer Name),

"Your friggin shark ate my mom, sis, and almost got granny!"

SHARK STANK is an action sitcom, blending elements of FALLOUT and JAWS. It follows a clumsy but well-meaning protagonist who battles a vengeful tough guy, his dangerous drug-enhanced shark, and even Satan on a sinking mega-yacht. The hero's mission is to save her attractive and often scantily-clad teenage friends from being devoured.
BIO: Watching JAWS 22 times helped me outsmart a shark that chased me down the shoreline for a mile, hoping I’d be its Happy Meal.

Best,
Name
Contact info

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[Rebecca Sukle]

Rebecca’s Query Letter
Dear :

Many Wives, is an historical drama series based on the four unique wives of American writer Sherwood Anderson.

“You run our company? Ridiculous idea.”

A business tycoon decides to risk wealth, family, and reputation for a chance at literary fame. His wife thinks he’s lost his mind. How will she and the children survive?

Set against the patriarchal backdrop of early 20th-century America, "Many Wives" tells the gripping story of Cornelia Anderson, the first wife of the renowned story teller Sherwood Anderson. Cornelia, educated and business-savvy, invests her inheritance in her husband's paint business. Despite the woman’s pivotal role, she is barred from leadership by the male-dominated society. Under Cornelia’s guidance, the business flourishes until Sherwood decides to gamble everything on a literary career.
Determined to secure her children's future, she enters a covert business partnership with a successful courtesan brothel owner in a venture outside societal norms. Cornelia's enterprise thrives as Sherwood spirals further into madness by the reappearance of his long-dead father, the man he thought he killed.

BIO: Sukle, an optioned screenwriter and quarter-finalist in the Faith in Film International Screenplay Contest, has researched and published two novels about early twentieth-century labor history. Her connection to Anderson’s final wife, Eleanor, who inherited his literary property, and close friendship with Eleanor’s heirs encouraged her to write the story.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Best,

Rebecca (RS) Sukle
Sgs@imagespirit.com

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[William Whalen]

William Whelan — Query Letter Draft 1
What I learned doing this assignment is to write a first draft of my query letter.
Dear Producer
My name is William Whelan, and I have written a RomCom/Thriller screenplay titled Lady Wiseguy. It is the story of Liza, a mafia princess, who wishes to break with the family and pursue her dream of becoming an actor and sophisticated lady. Lady Wiseguy is Pygmalion meets Goodfellas with a dash of Thelma and Louise. During her journey Liza will experience: the death of her father, incarceration of her brother, betrayal by her best friend, an attempted rape, a contract being put out on her life by a rival family member, and unrequited love before finally achieving an opportunity to realize her dream. I would appreciate the opportunity to send you my screenplay at your earliest convenience since I think it is a good fit for your production company.
Yours truly,
William Whelan
860884 2081
wmwhelan99 2gmail.com

[Rebecca Sukle]

Hello William,

Most interesting concept. I hope you don’t mind but I used your information to lead with an attention grabbing hook followed by genre, title, and comps. I tweaked the concept to make it even more exciting. I left out your assessment because your concept says it all and you targeted your market. The rewritten query is only a suggestion and hooked me to want to read the script. Wishing you great results with your marketing.

Best, Rebecca

Dear (producer name),

Imagine if Eliza Doolittle was a mafia princess, dodging bullets and betrayal while trying to become a sophisticated lady.

I am excited to introduce you to my RomCom/Thriller screenplay, Lady Wiseguy. This unique story blends the charm of Pygmalion with the grit of Goodfellas, and a touch of Thelma and Louise.

Lady Wiseguy follows the journey of Liza, a determined mafia princess who dreams of breaking free from her criminal family to become an actor and a refined woman. Liza's path is anything but smooth. She faces the death of her father, her brother’s incarceration, betrayal by her best friend, an attempted rape, and a hit ordered on her life by a rival family member. Amidst this chaos, she also grapples with unrequited love. Despite these challenges, Liza's relentless spirit leads her towards an opportunity to achieve her dreams.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Thank you for your time and consideration,

William Whelan
Contact information

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[Rebecca Sukle]

Rebecca’s Query Letter version 2

Dear (Producer):

Many Wives, is an historical drama series focused on the wives of Sherwood Anderson.

“You run our company? Ridiculous idea.”

A business tycoon decides to risk wealth, family, and reputation for a chance at literary fame. His wife thinks he’s lost his mind. How will she and the children survive?

Set against the patriarchal backdrop of early 20th-century America, "Many Wives" begins with the story of Cornelia Anderson, the first wife of the renowned story teller Sherwood Anderson. Cornelia, educated and business-savvy, invests time and money into her husband's paint business but barred from leadership by the male-dominated society. The business flourishes until Sherwood decides to gamble everything on a literary career. Determined to secure her children's future, she enters a covert business partnership in a venture outside societal norms. Cornelia's enterprise thrives as Sherwood spirals further into madness by the man he thought he killed…his father.

BIO: Sukle, an optioned screenwriter and quarter-finalist in the Faith in Film International Screenplay Contest. Her connection to Anderson’s final wife, Eleanor, who inherited his literary property, and close friendship with Eleanor’s heirs encouraged her to write the story.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Best,

Rebecca Sukle
Contact information

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[Paul McGregor]

(Sorry, Rebecca. I first posted this in the wrong place.)
Congratulations, Rebecca, on having an optioned script and on your success if the Faith in Film International Festival. I just have one question: the title is Many Wives, but your script seems to concentrate on Sherwood’s first wife, Cornelia Lane. Does the script do justice to the title?
Good luck with this course and all your writing.
Paul

[William Whalen]

Hi Rebecca,
Thanks for your very helpful comments, it certainly energizes my query letter. You certainly have a talent for creating hooks and I will incorporate many of your suggestions into my revision. Also, I will read your query letter revision over the weekend and send my comments by Monday.
Best,
Bill Whelan

[Paul McGregor]

Paul’s Query Letter – Draft ONE
4. What I learned from this assignment is that I have to be open to critical feedback and use it to improve the Query Letter.
Title: FRANK
Genre: Drama
Opening Hook:
If someone tried to destroy your family, wouldn’t you want to make sawdust of them?
Synopsis:
Frank is retiring after decades as a logger and looking forward to time with his grand-children. But when he discovers his son-in-law is doing drugs, his world begins to crumble. Faced with bankers and lawyers trying to foreclose his daughter’s house, and debt-collecting drug-dealers threatening to end her life, Frank has to learn new skills fast. He uses those skills to defeat the lawyers and bankers, but turns to his old logging skills to deal with the son-in-law.
Request: If you like the concept, I would be happy to send you the script.
Bio: This script is inspired by a true story in my family.
Contact info: email / phone / address
END

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[Rebecca Sukle]

Hi Paul,

Interesting concept. I just needed a different hook and shorter concept. Please keep in mind the following rewrite is only a suggestion. Best of luck with your marketing.

Rebecca

Dear (Producer name)

What would you do if the skills that built your life became the only way to save it?

As retiring logger Frank looks forward to time with his grandchildren, his world shatters when he discovers his son-in-law’s drug addiction. With ruthless bankers, lawyers, and drug dealers threatening his family, Frank must swiftly adapt and use his logging expertise to protect his daughter and reclaim their future.

Bio: This script is inspired by a true story in my family.

If you like the concept, I would be happy to send you the script.

Best,

Paul
Contact information

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[Paul McGregor]

Hello Rebecca,
Thank you! Very interesting. I take your point about being shorter. I like the way you shortened the logline. Maybe I don’t need to go into the ‘new skills/old skills’ thing.
Now I must repay the complement, and look at your assignment and see if I can provide any feedback.
Again, many thanks!
Paul

[William Whalen]

Hi Rebecca,
I think your query letter works great with your intro hooks are very effective. I also liked your revision of the plot synopsis – it flows much better and held my interest throughout versus the prior iteration. Good work.
Best,
Bill Whelan

[William Whalen]

William Whelan – Query Letter Revision #1
Dear (producer name),
Imagine if Eliza Doolittle was a mafia princess, who navigates family intrigues, dodges bullets, and survives betrayal, while trying to become a sophisticated lady.
I am excited to introduce you to my RomCom/Thriller screenplay, Lady Wiseguy. This unique story blends the charm of Pygmalion with the grit of Goodfellas, and a touch of Thelma and Louise.
Lady Wiseguy follows the journey of Liza, a determined mafia princess who dreams of breaking free from her criminal family to become an actor and a genteel woman. Liza’s path is anything but trouble-free. She faces the death of her father, her brother’s incarceration, betrayal by her best friend, an attempted rape, as well as a hit ordered on her life by a rival family member. Amidst this chaos, she also grapples with humiliation, rejection, and unrequited love. Despite these challenges, Liza’s relentless spirit leads her towards an opportunity to achieve her dreams.
If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.
Thank you for your time and consideration,
William Whelan
Contact information

[Paul McGregor]

Congratulations, Rebecca, on having an optioned script and on your success if the Faith in Film International Festival. I just have one question: the title is Many Wives, but your script seems to concentrate on Sherwood’s first wife, Cornelia Lane. Does the script do justice to the title?
Good luck with this course and all your writing.
Paul

[Rebecca Sukle]

Rebecca’s Query Letter V3

Dear (Producer’s Name):

Many Wives is a historical drama series that focuses on the four wives of Sherwood Anderson.

A business tycoon decides to risk wealth, family, and reputation for a chance at literary fame. His wife, Cornelia, thinks he's lost his mind; how will she and the children survive?

Determined to secure her future, Cornelia enters a covert business partnership in a venture outside societal norms. Her enterprise thrives as Sherwood spirals further into madness.

The series, amidst the societal upheavals of the early 20th century, follows Cornelia Lane Anderson as she navigates a male-dominated world to protect her children against Sherwood's pursuit of literary fame in a journey filled with subsequent wives, ambition, betrayal, and with help from his fourth wife, Eleanor Copenhaver, reconciliation.

Sukle is an optioned screenwriter and quarter-finalist in the Faith in Film International Screenplay Contest. Her connection to Anderson’s final wife, Eleanor, who inherited his literary property, and close friendship with Eleanor’s heirs encouraged her to write the story.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Best,

Rebecca (RS) Sukle

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[Michael Wallace]

Very well done Rebecca. You certainly are a talented a writer and your query letter does get me to want to read your screenplay.
All the best, Michael Wallace

[Michael Wallace]

What I learned from this assignment is to keep refining my pitch and query letter to make it more concise and appealing.

Michael Wallace’s query letter DRAFT ONE

Dear (Producer’s name),
“The Kid from Lynbrook” is a dramedy about a Wall Street executive that returns to his hometown and mentors a twelve-year-old kid in a school stock trading club, to win back his childhood sweetheart.
Everything is going great until it is discovered through an SEC probe that using the executives inside information the kid is trading real stocks in an account set up in his mother’s name and making a fortune.

The politically motivated NYS AG, who vows to clean up Wall Street in his quest to become the next Governor, faces the dilemma of prosecuting a kid for insider trading after the Kid refuses to settle, and the media won’t let the story go away.

The Executive is forced to choose between testifying against the Kid, and losing the girl, or face charges against himself and risk losing his career and fortune.

There have been many successful movies about Wall Street, but none from the perspective of a twelve-year-old kid

If this concept interests you, I’d be happy send you the script.

Best, Michael Wallace
Mjwallace@newviewent.com

[Rebecca Sukle]

Hi Michael,

A most intriguing concept. With a few tweaks focusing on the main hooks, this can be short, sweet,and to the point except you need to tell if it is a feature or a series. No need to remind a producer of the obvious about it being a unique concept.

I think you’ve got this. The cub wolf of Wall Street hooked me. Tweaks below.\

Wishing you great success,
\
Rebecca

Dear (Producer):

The Kid from Lynbrook is a dramedy ( feature or series ?)
about a Wall Street executive mentoring a twelve-year-old in a school stock trading club to win back his childhood sweetheart.

Everything goes awry when the SEC discovers the kid is trading real stocks using inside information.

A politically ambitious NYS AG must decide whether to prosecute the kid, while the executive faces a dilemma: testify against the kid and lose the girl or face charges and risk his career and fortune.

If this concept interests you, I’d be happy send you the script.

Best,

Michael Wallace

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[Michael Wallace]

Lesson 12 – Putting Marketing Campaigns into Action
Michael Wallace’s Marketing Campaign
What I learned in this lesson was to organize all of the work I had done prior to taking this course, and the lessons I learned in this course to develop and implement a more focused marketing campaign for myself and my screenplays.
Prior to taking this course I had written four screenplays three of which I had continued to rewrite until I got a “Recommend” from a reputable Screenwriting coverage service that was recommended by a successful screenwriter, The fourth screenplay I have a “Consider” and will go back to rewriting until I get a “Recommend” after I have done some more work on my marketing campaign. I have entered my first three scripts in the Final Draft Big Break Contest.
Prior to taking this course I had already set up lists in IMDb Pro of potential collaborators on my projects. I have continually reached out to Producers through LinkedIn, and had sent some query letters with little response. I am going to use what I learned about improving my pitch and query letter to reach out to more Producers., using the filters in IMDb Pro that I learned in this class to find a whole new list of people to pitch to.
I have listed my screenplays on Ink Tip on a rotating basis and have got some views. The biggest challenge is that I need to develop more relationships in this business which I am working on, and that is the key to success, as I have learned in my many other business ventures.

[Eden De Ruse-Moore]

Lesson 11 Query: 1st draft
Eden De Ruse-Moore Query Letter
Yankee Doodle Daddy
Genre: Dramedy

It’s Inauguration Day. Your wife is the President Elect. That’s big news! Even bigger news is—you just found out she’s pregnant!

Joe Harley, the highest paid Yankee in baseball history steps up to the plate to handle all things baby in the White House. And he is determined to be an All-Star, stay-at-home Dad. But, when Baby Ruth is born…

Will Joe’s new role as the First Daddy be his undoing or his redemption?

POTUS, works 24/7 dealing with a Senate investigation coined “Babygate” as a Russian land grab heats up. Joe now feels lost and undervalued after insisting on becoming a stay-at-home Dad, he fumbles through fatherhood and grapples with his own identity. Then, a sex scandal breaks with the First Daddy at its center.

Joe needs to turn things around and bring his ‘A-game to his Babygate testimony or else… this ex-Yankee could lose what matters most to him, his family.

With an entire world watching, Joe knows he can’t afford to strike out.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Eden De Ruse-Moore
BIO: Eden, a former journalist on Capitol Hill, is an optioned screenwriter. She has been a finalist in multiple screenwriting contests.

Contact information inserted here.

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[Rebecca Sukle]

Hi Eden,

Great title, interesting concept, and good bio. You might consider punching up the concept a notch by shortening it to your best hooks. A suggested concept below with just a few tweaks. I look forward to seeing your work on the big screen.

Best,

Rebecca

Inauguration Day: your wife is the President-Elect. Even bigger news—she’s pregnant!

Joe Harley, the highest-paid Yankee in baseball history, is determined to be an All-Star stay-at-home Dad in the White House. But when Baby Ruth is born, he struggles with fatherhood and his identity.

As the President deals with a Senate investigation dubbed “Babygate” and a Russian land grab heats up, Joe feels lost and undervalued. His fumbling through fatherhood escalates until a sex scandal puts him at the center of national attention.

Joe must bring an ‘A-game to his Babygate testimony, or risk losing what matters most—his family. With the world watching, he knows he can’t afford to strike out.

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[Ian Patrick Williams]

(Apologies about the formatting; I don’t know why my posts are always turned into block paragraphs after I copy and paste.)

Ian’s Query Letter Draft ONE
What I learned doing this assignment is to combine all of the lessons into one.
Dear: ____________
Because of your past productions of action films such as ____, I was hoping to interest you in my latest script.
Title: The Coming Storm
Genre: Action
LOGLINE: When his superiors tell a rookie Black detective to just follow protocol, he goes it alone to stop a white supremacist group from triggering a race war across America

SYNOPSIS: The Southern Poverty Law Center now says there are 1400 hate groups across our country; collectively, they are now calling for a race war across America. What if the FBI had credible evidence that the event that they were calling for was imminent but decided to slow-walk any preemptive response?
Rookie Black detective MILES ROUSSARD feels he has no choice but to buck the system, confront the neo-Nazi leaders, conduct searches and ultimately follow the man he feels is the one who will trigger the event. Little does he know that they’ve been setting him up to be the fall guy in the Governor’s assassination and HE is actually the event they’ve been promising.

Please let me know if I can send you The Coming Storm.

Bio: Ian Patrick Williams shares the Chicago Emmy award for co-authoring the teleplay BLEACHER BUMS for PBS-TV; the script was later adapted and produced by Showtime. Masterfilm International released his action screenplay THE BLACK SEA RAID in 2010. In 2017 Status Media Entertainment released his Roaring 20’s piece GANGSTER LAND. MJR Films has a current option on PROPHET OF THE THIRD REICH.

[Eden De Ruse-Moore]

Hi Rebecca,
Your suggestions are amazing I was thinking about cutting my qurey in half word wise and you have got me moving in the right direction. Much appreciated.
Eden

[Eden De Ruse-Moore]

Hello Rebecca,
I second Michael’s comments. You are a talented writer and after reading your V3 Query. I was wondering if you have the actual "life rights" to the story of this family. If you do, this is a BIG buzz word that producers like — therefore, I would recommend putting it inside your query. If you do not you mentioned that you are connected to Eleanor, perhaps you can ask about getting this in writing. I can see this as a limited series with lots of conflict and drama.
Best of luck,
Eden
p.s. apoloiges for keyboard malfunctions.

[Eden De Ruse-Moore]

Lesson 11 Query: 2nd draft

Eden De Ruse-Moore Query Letter
Yankee Doodle Daddy
Genre: Dramedy

Dear (Producer’s Name):

Inauguration Day: Your wife is the President-Elect. Even bigger news—she’s pregnant!

Joe Harley, the highest-paid ballplayer in Yankee history, is determined to be an All-Star, stay-at-home Dad in the White House.

But when Baby Ruth is born, Joe struggles with fatherhood and his identity.

As the President deals with a Senate investigation dubbed “Babygate” and a Russian land grab heats up, Joe feels lost and undervalued. His fumbling through fatherhood escalates and then a sex scandal breaks with Joe at the center.

This legendary Yankee must bring his ‘A-game to his Babygate testimony, or…

He could lose what matters most—his family. With the world watching, Joe knows he can’t afford to strike out.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

BIO: Eden, is an optioned screenwriter. She has been a finalist in multiple screenwriting contests.

Best,

Eden De Ruse-Moore
Phone
Email

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[Michael HARRIS]

Michael Harris’s Query Letter Draft ONE
I learned that reviewing another’s Query letter can help me become a better query writer.

Can Ken and Eli save “Wawasee,” their small lakeside community from Al Capone’s influence while navigating the hidden secrets of their own families’ pasts.

Two boys from different worlds unite to uncover Al Capone's hidden empire in their lakeside town during the Great Depression, facing danger and forging an unbreakable bond.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

BIO: Michael grew up in the real-life small lakeside town of Syracuse where he made his own exploration of the mysteries of lake “Wawasee.”

Contact:
Michael L Harris
MichaelHarrisActor@gmail.com
Michael Harris’s Query Letter Draft TWO
I learned that reviewing another’s Query letter can help me become a better query writer.

Chances are you didn’t spend your summer vacation uncovering Al Capone’s influence in your small hometown, but that’s exactly what Ken in Eli do in “Wawasee,” a 1 – hour, Coming of Age /Action Adventure TV series.

Ken and Eli, two boys from different worlds unite to uncover Al Capone’s hidden empire in their lakeside town during the Great Depression, facing danger and forging an unbreakable bond.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Michael grew up in the real-life small lakeside town of Syracuse where he made his own exploration of the mysteries of lake “Wawasee.”

Contact:
Michael L Harris
MichaelHarrisActor@gmail.com

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[Pamela Milton]

Pamela’ Quey letter 1st draft
Dear Ms. Blankinship,
I am pleased to submit for your consideration The Great Bank Robbery of 1934, a comedy/ action film script.
“Hands up! This a robbery!”
A 1934 newsreel introduces the Chutney Gang as they rob the bank in the small town of Yesterday. But when the employees pull their own guns, it quickly becomes an armed stand-off.
In a desperate attempt to escape a suffocating future with her fiancé, FBI agent, Zebulon Hardcore, aspiring dancer, Tempest Headley, “kidnaps” the Chutney Gang during a bank heist. The run-away bride quicky becomes their ad hoc leader. Their life of crime goes well until the ill-fated armed stand-off. Forty-six years later (1980), Tempest and the gang are prominent citizens living under assumed names in Yesterday.
In 1980, an IRS investigator, Mc Kenna Worth, is sent undercover by her boss to investigate the possible embezzlement of bank funds which were reported by the town officials as stolen. Great career booster: except her boss plans to take the money his self, have McKenna take the fall for its theft and arrange for her to be conveniently disposed of. Where’s HR when you need them?
All parties converge in a shootout between the IRS, hired thugs and the Chutney Gang trying to claim the money as their own.
Ice cold lemonade, hot fried chicken, smoking tommy guns and geriatric bank robbers bring together two strong willed women in a hail of bullets, embezzlement and ballet shoes.
If this concept interests you I would be glad to send you the script.
Regards,
Pamela Milton
miltonpamela5@gmail.com
803-782-4824
BIO: During my tenure as a co-director with Section 22 Productions I contributed several film scripts for the company’s future production. I have also served as owner/president of Harbinger Corporation, a film production company, and Upstart Talent Agency.

[Pamela Milton]

Pamela’s Query Letter – second draft
Dear Mr. Blankenship,
I am pleased to submit for your consideration The Great Bank Robbery of 1934, a comedy/action film script. It reflects the genre and budget range you have frequently produced work in

“Hands up! This is a robbery!” A 1934 newsreel introduces the Chutney Gang robbing a bank in the small town of Yesterday. When the employees pull their own guns, it becomes an armed stand-off.

In a desperate attempt to escape her future with fiancé, FBI agent Zebulon Hardcore, aspiring dancer Tempest Headley “kidnaps” the Chutney Gang during the heist and becomes their ad hoc leader. Forty-six years later in 1980, Tempest and the gang are prominent citizens living comfortably under assumed names in Yesterday until IRS investigator McKenna Worth is sent undercover to investigate possible embezzlement by town officials. She is unaware her boss plans to take the funds himself, have McKenna take the fall, and arrange for her disposal.

All parties converge in a shootout between the IRS, hired thugs, and the Chutney Gang, each trying to claim the money.

Ice-cold lemonade, hot fried chicken, smoking tommy guns, and geriatric bank robbers bring together two strong-willed women in a hail of bullets, embezzlement, and ballet shoes.

If this concept interests you, I would be glad to send you the script.

BIO: As co-director with Section 22 Productions, I contributed several film scripts. I have also served as owner/president of Harbinger Corporation, a film production company, and Upstart Talent Agency. Previous to this, my first attempt at working as a freelance scriptwriter I was contracted to write an action/drama spec script for a producer.

Regards,
[Name]
[Contact Information]