Lesson 11

[Andre]

Andre’s Dramatic Reveals.

1. Make a list of the important reveals that I want the audience to experience.
A. Lawfare as Warfare. Legal system as a weapon, against citizens.
 Falsely accuse innocents of crime(s) they did not commit. No matter how UNJUST.
 Hegemonic forces shielded behind authoritative control systems.
 The unlimited power of corruption. Unchecked balance of powers.
 Lawfare: Using and abusing legal-judicial-political system as weapon.
 When there is no enemy, create one; even within the ranks.

B. Collateral Damage.
 Doing research for an artificial intelligence certification, Our Hero comes across a file labeled “APT28”.
 Falsely associating our Hero with threat group APT28.
i. The unlimited power of corrupted authority.
ii. Lawfare: Using and abusing Law enforcement as political warfare.
C. NATO expansionism; crossing red lines (year 2014).
D. Distorting history for future generational confusion.
E. Space Race.
 How much money did US pay Russia to ferry us astronauts into space?
 If Russia is such a threat, why support them financially?
 If Russia is such a threat, why did US rely on them to get astronauts into space between (years) at a cost of ($per seat)?
 Why did US import German Nazi’s to create a space industry-NASA?
 Make it make sense?

2. Sequence them to fit my Thriller Map.
Plot 1: Main Story.
Plot 2: Protagonist/Hero POV.
Plot 3: Antagonist/Villain POV.
Plot 4- Red Herring POV

ACT 1
Opening
• File APT28
• Doing research for an artificial intelligence certification, Our Hero comes across a file labeled “APT28”.
• Establish his prodigy.
• Establish him living in an apartment 28.
• Establish his wealth, old money, not new and wasteful.
• During research in AI, he identifies a file labeled APT28.

Inciting Incident
• 2016 Presidential campaign of HC compromised.
• Our Hero lives in apartment 28.
• Cyber-attack.

Turning Point
• Was the compromise a false flag by the dnc itself?
• When there is no enemy, create one. Falsely associating our Hero with a threat group APT28.
• Associating Hero with terrorist organization.
• Loss of income adversely affecting credit.
• Bankruptcy.
• Tax problems, agents with guns.
• Vehicle kill-switch.
• Have there been cyber-attacks on The US Anti-Doping Agency and World Anti-Doping Agency (WADA)? Nuclear weapons manufacturing and storage facilities, The Organization for the Prohibition of Chemical Weapons (OPCW) and The Spiez Swiss Chemicals Laboratory?
• Have there been occurrences regarding Oil pipelines, Derailed trains, wild forest fires, disrupted financial systems, food shortages, ports of entry (marine, rail)?
• How to become president: Selling State secrets. Money over loyalty.

ACT 2
New Plan
• How deep does this rabbit hole go?
• Trust not their smiles, for they deviously display their fangs.

Plan In Action
• Down the rabbit hole, there is no there, there.
• Cash, the charismatic Indian personal banker who steals from him, then ghosts him.
• If Russia is such a threat, why did US rely on them to get astronauts into space between (years) at a cost of ($per seat)?
• Why does the technology seem to be uniform?

MidPoint
• Hero is Veteran of military with service with NATO.
• Hero’s sister/brother are a part of the setup, with power of attorney, and eyes on an inheritance payout (if he is removed from the picture).
• Blood is not thicker than (water) a thick wallet.

ACT 3
Rethink everything
• Trust no one, not even family.
• Partisan divide, the united divided states of America.
• Simply living in an apartment with similar number, that is “attributed” to a threat group (that may or may not be itself an independent contractor of the us dod, designed for false flag operations).
• The fake friend who fucks and impregnates his girlfriend,
• who turns out to be a for-hire bimbo.
• Blood is not thicker than a fat wallet. The compromised family.
• Microchipping his pet.
• The War of 1782.

New Plan
• Get your passport, and move away.

Turning Point: Huge failure/Major Shift
• Open borders, Russian czars.
• Failed financial system.
• Multiple “enemies”.
• The pet has a tracking device implanted, moving items ransacked.

ACT 4
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
• The Cyber Attack is a false flag operation, planted with the intent on perpetual warfare.
• Plausible Deniability. APT 28 is an independent contractor in addition to APT29, APT30, APT32, APT33, APT37, APT38, APT39, APT41, APT5, and others. Contracted to conduct false flag operations resulting in plausible deniability on the part of the government.
• Plausible Deniability: the ability of people, typically senior officials in a formal or informal chain of command, to deny knowledge of or responsibility for actions committed by or on behalf of members of their organizational hierarchy. -Wikipedia.
• The future of space, peace or war?

Resolution
• To be concluded…

Note: This sequence will be adjusted as development occurs.

5. Tell Forums about the reveals I built into my Thriller Map.
Note: This Reveal ordering to be adjusted as time goes on)
ACT 1
REVEAL 1:
• Intrigue: A file labeled APT28 is found on a computer.
• Reveal: Our Heo lives in apartment #28.

REVEAL 2
• Suspense Lawfare as Warfare. Legal system as a weapon, against citizens.
• Reveal: Falsely accuse innocents of crime(s) they did not commit. No matter how UNJUST.

REVEAL 3
• Mystery: Hegemonic forces shielded behind authoritative control systems.
• Reveal: The power of immunity.

REVEAL 4
• Intrigue: The unlimited power of corruption. Unchecked balance of powers.
• Reveal: Justice is bought.

Turning Point 1
REVEAL 5
• Intrigue: Lawfare: Using and abusing legal-judicial-political system as weapon.
• Reveal: When there is no enemy, create one; even within the ranks.

REVEAL 6
• Suspense: Character Assassination.
• Reveal: Doing research for an artificial intelligence certification, Our Hero comes across a file labeled “APT28”.
• Suspense: Falsely associating our Hero with threat group APT28.
• Reveal: The unlimited power of corrupted authority.
• Reveal: Lawfare: Using and abusing Law enforcement as political warfare.

REVEAL 7
• Suspense: Character Assassination continues…
• Suspense: Associating Hero with terrorist organization.
• Intrigue: Loss of income adversely affecting credit.
• Intrigue: Bankruptcy.
• Mystery/Intrigue: Tax problems, agents with guns.
• Intrigue: Vehicle kill-switch.
• Reveal: The use and abuse of the system.

ACT 2
REVEAL 8
• Mystery: How deep does this rabbit hole go?
• Intrigue: Space Race.
• Reveal: If Russia is such a threat, why did US rely on them to get astronauts into space between (years) at a cost of ($per seat)?
• Intrigue: He focuses applying his genius to, “peaceful uses of outer space, to be of great value and offer benefits to all mankind (1) section 50901”.

REVEAL 9
• Mystery: The government wants Hero to use his genius, to create a space weapon.
• Intrigue: He focuses applying his genius to, “peaceful uses of outer space, to be of great value and offer benefits to all mankind (1) section 50901”.
• Reveal: They don’t like his plan, and move forward with systematically assassinating his character.
• Intrigue: All the people who are willing to be part of this diabolical plan.

REVEAL 10
• Suspense: 2016 APT28 reportedly compromises the Hillary Clinton campaign, the Democratic National Committee, and the Democratic Congressional Campaign Committee.
• Reveal: tbd

REVEAL 11
• Suspense: 2014 NATO Expansion. Crossing the red line.
• Intrigue: Distorting history for future generational confusion.
• Reveal: manipulating geographical map lines terrain.

REVEAL 12
• Suspense: 2018 the US indicts five GRU Unit 26165 officers associated with APT28 for cyber operations (including close-access operations) conducted between 2014 and 2018 against
o WADA World Anti-Doping Agency,
o the US Anti-Doping Agency,
o a US nuclear facility,
o (OPCW) the Organization for the Prohibition of Chemical Weapons,
o the Spiez Swiss Chemicals Laboratory,
o and other organizations.
• Reveal: tbd

REVEAL 13
• Suspense- False Flag attacks.
• Reveal- Oil pipelines. Derailing trains. Forrest fires. Disrupting financial systems. Food shortages.

REVEAL 14
• Mystery: Did APT28 compromise said situations?
• Reveal: tbd

REVEAL 15
• Mystery: Is APT28 a threat group?
• Intrigue: It/They are attributed to such group.
• Mystery: Who(m) is doing the attributing?

REVEAL 16
• Intrigue: Is our Hero part of this APT28 threat group, or simply a resident of apartment 28?
• Reveal: He simply lives in an apartment.
• Suspense/Intrigue: But he is former military.

PLAN IN ACTION
REVEAL 17
• Mystery/Suspense: Down the rabbit hole, there is no there, there.
• Intrigue: Our Hero is an American veteran, wrongfully separated with medical malpractice that is covered up by the Villains. His record from overseas has been manipulated with a false narrative, and he has no access to it.

Essentially the us government screwed him over using character assassination via medical malpractice.
• Mystery: What secrets are they (the government) hiding, using him as collateral?
• Intrigue: Our Hero is a veteran, who served overseas with NATO.
• Reveal: Medical malpractice.
• Reveal: Collateral damage in a sick game of overload rulership.

REVEAL 18
• Mystery: Controlling the negative narrative of the negro.
• Reveal: Juneteenth.
• Mystery: False promises with potential high returns.
• Intrigue: Reparations.

MIDPOINT TURNING POINT
REVEAL 19
• Intrigue: Blood is not thicker than (water) a thick wallet.
• Reveal: Hero’s sister/brother are a part of the setup, with power of attorney, and eyes on an inheritance payout (if he is removed from the picture).

REVEAL 20
• Suspense: The plan designed centuries ago… mind control through religion, money, government etc.
• Intrigue: The illusion of independence; false freedom.
• Reveal: 1782.

ACT 3
REVEAL 21
• Suspense: Trust no one, not phony-friends, not even family.
• Reveal: The fake friend who fucks and impregnates his girlfriend, who turns out to be a for-hire bimbo.
• Reveal: Blood is not thicker than a fat wallet. The compromised family.

REVEAL 22
• Suspense: Knives out, the darkest nights of his soul.
• Mystery: Who or what truly runs the world? It ain’t God nor Allah.
• Suspense: Losing faith. No longer believing in God.
• Intrigue: God doesn’t write checks, but maybe he should.
• Mystery: Religions of the world are psychological manipulations for mind control.

REVEAL 23
• Suspense: Open borders, invading forces.
• Reveal: When you import the third world…
• Mystery: IF you have an unchecked issue at the border, why leave it open?

REVEAL 24
• Intrigue: Creating the Federal Reserve.
• Reveal: Taxation; Pimping America.
• Mystery: Printing money at will, yet tax the people at will.

REVEAL 25
• Intrigue: Free and open press.
• Reveal: it is not so free; it is very controlled dissemination of information.

NEW PLAN
REVEAL 26
• Intrigue: Get your passport, and move away.
• Suspense: The corrupted state agency goes through your things.
• Missing items, ransacked moving boxes.
• Intrigue: More corrupted badges, shielded by authoritarianism.
• Reveal: The department of injustice.

TURNING POINT-HUGE FAILURE / MAJOR SHIFT
REVEAL 27
• Suspense/Mystery: The pet has a tracking device implanted, moving items ransacked.
• Intrigue: No friends remaining. No one to trust, but trust itself.

REVEAL 28
• Intrigue: 1782 was a set-up, this is the crescendo.
• Reveal: Freedoms eroded, or the illusion fading away.

ACT 4
REVEAL 29
• Suspense: The Cyber Attack is a false flag operation, planted with the intent on perpetual warfare.
• Suspense/Intrigue: Plausible Deniability. APT 28 is an independent contractor in addition to APT29, APT30, APT32, APT33, APT37, APT38, APT39, APT41, APT5, and others. Contracted to conduct false flag operations resulting in plausible deniability on the part of the government.
Plausible Deniability: the ability of people, typically senior officials in a formal or informal chain of command, to deny knowledge of or responsibility for actions committed by or on behalf of members of their organizational hierarchy. -Wikipedia.
The future of space, peace or war?

RESOLUTION
REVEAL 30
• Mystery/Suspense: The end.
• Reveal: To be concluded…

6. What I learned is…
There is no other genre in which dramatic reveals are more valuable or entertaining. With the mysteries I have created and the clandestine plan of the Villain, my script is going to be filled with reveals.
If well written, the audience gets a surprising experience of Character and/or Plot. But how do I do this in a way that adds to the emotional roller coaster the audience ha already been on? To understand that, we must be able to distinguish the difference between Exposition and a Reveal.

EXPOSITION:
Information about Character, Story Logic, or Backstory given without dramatic impact.
There are important pieces of information that an audience needs in order to understand a story, but if it is presented as pure exposition, those scenes (and maybe the entire script) will feel boring.
There are few problems with information delivered as Exposition:
• It stops the Action so Exposition can be explained to the audience.
• It is usually backstory details; some useful; most not.
• And it does not engage the audience emotionally.

REVEAL:
Something under the surface is discovered or brought to our attention in a dramatic way.
When a deep part of Character is revealed dramatically, it creates an emotional experience for the audience. It is interesting and entertaining. It is not just information; it is a bonding moment between Audience and Character.
• Something covered up.
• Demand is created for us to discover it (shown through Mystery, Intrigue, or Suspense).
• Revealed in a dramatic way.
Two BIG Keys to the Reveal that do not show up within Exposition…
1. I create demand for the Reveal beforehand by building in M.I.S.
2. The Reveal must be done with dramatic impact.

The beautiful thing about dramatic reveals is, they deliver key pieces of character backstory without it feeling like exposition. These reveals may be some of the best moments of my story for the audience.

 
How is the Reveal created?
Work backwards. Start with the reveal, then the cover up, and finally how I will create demand.
A. What is the reveal?
The thing that I reveal is either a secret or some key piece of information or truth that changes the audience’s perspective of the story in some way. This needs to be something that is important to the story, thus worth doing this kind of work on and worth the audience wondering about.

REVEAL #
o Something is covered up.
o Demand is created for audience to discover it through (M.I.S.) Mystery. Intrigue. Suspense.
Revealed in a dramatic way.

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End Andre's Dramatic Reveals.

• This reply was modified 10 months, 1 week ago by  Andre Howard. Reason: Plots 1,2, and 3 under Sequence them to fit my Thriller Map. There are atleast three plots to this story

[David Harper]

David’s Dramatic Reveals

What I learned doing this: It’s more difficult than it looks. I’ve been struggling with this one, but I’m posting what I have so far. I’ll need to continue working on this one as I develop the idea.

Reveal: FBI Agent Schwartz is working for the villain.
How was it covered up? He is an FBI agent.
What MIS is used to create the demand to know the truth?

Reveal: Damien has a twin
How was it covered up? Separated at birth when given up for adoption.
What MIS is used to create the demand to know the truth? Damien is mistaken as his brother by the mob.

Reveal: The Baltimore cops are dirty
How was it covered up? They are cops, and also they agree to help him
What MIS is used to create the demand to know the truth?
Mystery – Will they help him?
Intrigue – They seem to recognize him when he walks in

Reveal: The mob wants Damien dead
How was it covered up? They mistake Damien for his brother.
What MIS is used to create the demand to know the truth?
Intrigue – Why is the video of the teacher so offensive to the mob?
Mystery – Why do they want him dead?

Reveal: The FBI is using Damien as bait
How was it covered up? They tell him he is on his own
What MIS is used to create the demand to know the truth?
Suspense – How will Damien escape the grasp of the mob?
Mystery – Why won’t the FBI protect him?

Reveal: Sony Festimado is also in danger from his mob bosses
How was it covered up? He appears to be calling the shots, his bosses stay in the background, out of the eye of law enforcement
What MIS is used to create the demand to know the truth?
Intrigue – Phone calls to Sonny with thinly veiled threats
Mystery – Who are the people who keep calling him?
Intrigue – Some new guys show up, and Sonny’s guys don’t know who they are or why they’re there

[Matteo Ribaudo]

Day 11: Creating Demand for Reveals

At this point the script is already writing itself and discovery of new information floods out with each leasson.

Thriller Map with reveals and twists:

Cold Opening
In a near by river a newly pregnant woman’s bare legs walk out of the water. She comes to a tent and goes inside. Inside lies a man. She lays down with him.

Life threatening event:
Suddenly Guerrilla soldiers invade their tent and drag the man out. They knock her down causing a facial scar. They beat him to almost death. His wife pleads for mercy. They drag her inside and try and rape her. The man’s body is tossed into the lake and crocodiles devour him. The soldiers inside get killed by the woman. She comes out covered ins blood. She stands by the river and weeps her lost love. She dives in the water.

Mystery: Who is this woman and how did she fight the soldiers off?
Mystery 2: Why would she dive into the water with the crocodiles?
Intrigue: There is something not normal about this woman but what?
Suspense: Will she survive the Crocodile infested waters?

A. What is the reveal? Magdalena is a shapeshifting crocodile
B. How did it get covered up? We don’t see her change into croc.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? How does she swim into the croc infested waters as a human?
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact.
When she turns into the crocodile our hero must escape her wrath.

TWIST 1:
Direction: A pregnant woman exits a crocodile infested waters to a tent without concern.
Twist:Safely in her tent she ins attacked by soldiers.
TWIST 2:
Direction: They kill her husband and feed him to crocodiles. They drag her inside and try to rape her.
Twist: She kill them and comes out covered in blood.

Twist 3:
Direction: She screams sadness.
Twist: She dives into the river with the crocodiles.

Hero OPENING: Our hero and his longtime sports agent arrive at Jungle expedition. He’s hungover and doesn’t want to go. The sports agent tries to convince and then the expedition is cancelled due to incremental weather.

Mystery1: How is this conceded sports legend our hero?
Mystery 2: Why is his agent so hell bent on going into the jungle?

Life Threatening situation: Mudslides, flooding, treacherous terrain awaits them if they go in the jungle.

A. What is the reveal? Agent carries a gun.
B. How did it get covered up? With his shirt.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? Why does a sports agent have a gun on vacation?
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. The agent pulls out the gun when something stalks them in the jungle at night.

Twist 4:
Direction: Our hero and his longtime sports agent arrive at Jungle expedition.
Twist: Our Hero doesn’t want to go.

Twist 5:
Direction: The agent talks him into going.
Twist: Weather prevents them from going.

INCITING INCIDENT: A woman tells them she can take them into the jungle and the weather will be fine.

Mystery: Who is this strange woman that tells them it’s safe to go into the jungle,
Intrigue: The agent wants to still go even though he’s less adventurous and physically capable and despite all the other tour guides not going in, he eggs on our Hero to go.

Suspense: What will happen when the go into the jungle.

Twist 6:
Direction: The go to leave for the hotel.
Twist: A strange woman takes them on the expedition despite the weather report..

Twist 7:
Direction: They hike the jungle and it’s beautiful.
Twist: Their guide gets them lost and they have to camp the night.

A. What is the reveal? How vast the jungle is.
B. How did it get covered up? From outside looking in it looks pleasant and accessible.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? Being lost in the jungle is life or death.
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. When Bravo climbs to the top of a mountain the jungle extends for miles.

TURNING POINT 1: The hero and his agent and guide have to spend the night in the jungle. The next day they’re left alone in the jungle and have no way out. They realize they cant get out alive without a guide.

Life threatening situations: There’s many predators that are in the jungle that can kill our hero. Snakes and pumas, and deadly spiders are everywhere in the jungle.
A. What is the reveal? Theres folklore about blood thirsty animals that inhabit the jungle.
B. How did it get covered up? They look normal because they haven’t fed yet.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? They don’t see Lilith or Magdalena for who they are until its too late.
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. When they feed they transform into the animals.

Mystery: Why does Magdalena eat a snake raw.
Intrigue: Why does her cold blood need warmth from the fire?

A. What is the reveal? Lilith stalks them at night as a shapeshifting puma.
B. How did it get covered up? The darkness is great cover.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? What rustles and growls in the night.
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. When the hero escapes Lilith growls as she runs after him as a puma.

Mystery: Something stalks them at night.
Mystery: What lurks in the shadows.
Suspense: The predator moves closer to strike.
Intrigue: Where did Magdalena go?

Life Threatening :Lost in the jungle without water, the danger of hydration and potential death.

Intrigue: Why is the agent okay with being lost in the jungle? Mystery: Why does Agent keep putting them in dangerous circumstances? Cliff diving and climbing sketching rocks.
Intrigue: Does the agent have a death wish for our hero?
Suspense:Will he survive this trip?

Twist 8:
Direction: Something stalks them in the darkness.
Twist: Its a cute animal that comes into sight.

Twist 9:
Direction: In the morning they go to hike home.
Twist: The guide has left them alone.

Twist 10:
Direction: The hero tries to find their way out.
Twist: The agent plans to kill him with his gun.

Twist 11:
Direction: The agent plans to kill the hero.
Twist: He tosses his gun down the cliff.

MIDPOINT: Magdalena returns and leads them to a cavern for safety. Our hero is glad to see our true villain.
Intrigue: Where did Magdalena go and why did she come back?

A. What is the reveal?The Cave is a trap
B. How did it get covered up? Its an old medical outpost for the military.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? Why is all the equipment still being used.
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. The equipment is used for blood transfusion for Lilith.

Mystery: What’s in the cave?

Mystery: A maze in the cavern leads them to Lilith’s chamber where she waits to feed.
Mystery: Who is Lilith and why is she so pale?
Intrigue: Why does Lilith not go out in the daytime?

Suspense: Will they see sunlight ever again.

Twist 12:
Direction: They need water and drink rain water from the leaves.
Twist: They become sick and need to find help.

Twist 12.2
Direction: They find a sign for and aid station and come to a cave system.
Twist: Magdalena is waiting for them.

Twist 13:
Direction: Hero is glad to see Magdalena after she explains she went to go to get water and when she returned they were gone.
Twist: Magdalena is leading them into a trap set in the cave.

Twist 14:
Direction: Magdalena leads them into the cave system to get a radio or something to help the Hero.
Twist: She leads them to her blood thirsty vampire daughter Lilith.

Twist 15:
Direction: Lilith looks harmless and friendly.
Twist: She’s blood thirsty and waits to feed.

Intrigue: The mother and daughter argue a lot. She wants to get out and see the world but its not safe.

Mystery: Why does Magdalena and Lilith go swimming at night with the crocodiles?

TURNING POINT 2:
Villain’s plan: Magdalena hold them hostage to drain their blood. The mother uses a rusty IV to transfuse blood from their arms to feed Lilith.
Mystery: Is Lilith a vampire?
Intrigue: Our hero tries take Lilith under his wing and pin her against her mother.

Twist 16:
Direction: The agent and Hero get tied up and have to escape.
Twist: The agent confesses his plans to kill them both.

Twist 17:
Direction: The mother brings men to her daughter to feed.
Twist: The daughter hates her mother for not letting her out in the real world to hunt her prey.

Twist 18:
Direction: Magdalena transfuses blood from the agent to make it last longer.
Twist: Lilith smashes the blood supply after she feeds and doesn’t feel like his blood is helping.

Twist 19:
Direction: Our hero decides to befriend the vampire to escape Magdalena before his blood is gone.
Twist: Lilith helps the hero escape

Suspense: As the agent’s blood is almost gone and she plans a grand feast of the hero, but the daughter has second thoughts as she feels a connection to our hero as a father figure.
Life threatening events: The agent dead body is tossed in the river.

Hero’s false hope is dangerous as Lilith will need to feed again.

A. What is the reveal? Lilith is a vampire shapeshifter
B. How did it get covered up? She is an innocent looking girl.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? Her pale complexion makes her look weak.
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. When the hero escapes Lilith has great speed and is ferocious.

CLIMAX:
Villain’s plan: The mother decides to kill the hero because he is getting too close to her daughter. The hero and Lilith escape the mother as she falls to her death.

A. What is the reveal? Lilith father was a puma shape shifter.
B. How did it get covered up? Magdalena doesn’t know that she has her father’s genes.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? Lilith wants a father figure in her life.
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. Lilith growls as she runs after him as a puma. When she turns 15.

Twist 20:
Direction: The hero and Lilith escape Magdalena.
Twist: Lilith just wants to hunt the hero in the open jungle.

Twist 21:
Direction: Lilith is about to eat the hero.
Twist:Magdalena saves the hero.

Twist 22:
Direction:The hero and Magdalena now must fend off Lilith’s rage and cross the crocodile infested waters.
Twist: The hero sees Magdalena for what she is shapeshifter crocodile.

Twist 23:
Direction: The hero and Magdalena want to trap Lilith back in the cave.
Twist: Lilith traps them in the cave.

Twist 24:
Direction: Magdalena tricks her daughter into forgiving her.
Twist: Magdalena punishes her for not listening to her.

Twist 25:
Direction: Magdalena ties the hero up to feed Lilith and drain him dry.
Twist: Lilith wont feed.

Twist 26:
Direction: Lilith pleads for his life.
Twist: Magdalena agrees.

Twist 27:
Direction: Magdalena says she wont kill him.
Twist: Lilith makes him into a vampire.

What is the reveal?A hero can be honorable
B. How did it get covered up? He’s a selfish prick who only cares about himself most of the way.
C. What M.I.S. can be used to create demand to know the truth? He tries to save his agent but it’s too late
D. When you reveal the truth, it must have dramatic impact. His heroics to save his agent comes around too late and he’s eaten by Magdalena as a croc.

RESOLUTION: Our hero takes on a father’s role and replaces Magdalena’s for getting Lilith food. The hero is forced to deal with Lilith’s hunger now.

Twist 28:
Direction: Our hero’s now a vampire.
Twist: He lures new people into the jungle

• This reply was modified 10 months ago by  Matteo Ribaudo.