Lesson 12

[David Wickenden]

David Wickenden BW FRAMEWORK

What I learned?

This really pulled everything together. Still need to get feedback, but the template really helped. I can see how this will benefit when the writing begins.

[David Wickenden]

Looking for a partner to exchange framework for feedback. If interested, contact me at wickendendave@gmail.com

[David Thompson]

Dave Thompson has completed the BW Framework!

What I learned doing this process is I’m tending to grasp at the “low hanging fruit” on my series, digging deep now, reaching for unique answers and creating the characters anew, after having written the novels.

[Sydney Burtner]

Syd’s is ready for feedback!

I’m a little behind, but I was directing a one-act for a theatre festival — and that was in first position. I look forward to communicating (efficiently). Cheers!

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to organize elements concisely. (Who am I kidding, there’s a lot of stuff I left out.)

[Moses Quainoo]

Moses Quainoo

(Ready for Professional Framework feedback from SU at $25

Module 1 – Lesson 12: Create Your BW Framework

“What I learned doing this process is…?”

#I filled in the blanks with answers from previous assignments. I turn the answers into bullet points. I am not posting the Framework yet. However, I could do with Professional Framework feedback from SU at $25.

ASSIGNMENT

Create a framework for the Old Toms TV show.

Download FRAMEWORK:
https://s3.amazonaws…Template-2.docx

To fill in each box, go to the lesson
mentioned. You already answered these questions, so you can easily just
fill in the blanks.

Turn those parts into BULLET POINTS (not
prose) for each box. Make sure each key point can be accessed at a glance.

Take a few hours off to let that process, then
return to your framework to improve parts or to fill in gaps that stand
out to you.

Don’t post the framework for now, but answer the question, “What I learned doing this process
is…?” and share your experience of putting it together, along with any
breakthroughs or insights you’ve had.

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[Anne Grant]

1.12 AG is ready for Professional Framework feedback from SU at $25.

What I learned: I have fallen behind and suddenly failing to get traction as we moved from 3-day assignments to 2-day. I am second-guessing all my answers. Life intrudes. The evaluation beckons. This course has been outstanding (150% improvement, even 200%). I do not want to slip-slide away now. (The order blanks don’t seem operative.) Thanks.

[Michael O’Keefe]

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Mike – Binge Worthy Framework

(Ready for professional feedback from SU $25)

Title: Between Lives Format/Genre: TV pilot – Sci-Fi By: Michael O’Keefe

(6 Main Character Version)

Concept: (Pre-Lesson 2)
A. Engaging and highly proactive hero… Caleb, high school loner living two disparate lives,

B. …up against a major conflict… learns of a supernatural foe coming to enslave the world.

C. …goes on unique transformational journey… He assembles a team, leads them into a shadow war,

D. …into an intriguing world….. to save both earth and Shangra La from anhiliation.

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Intriguing World: (Pre-Lesson 2)

<div>Sub-world… Shangra La, built from spent human emotions and existing in
parallel with earth.
…we haven’t explored before or haven’t
explored this way… Accessible to only a few

…that makes the transformational journey even more intriguing. Until
the two worlds unite against a common enemy.
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Circles of Characters: (Lesson 2)

Main Characters: Caleb, Victoria, Rick, Charles, Natalie, Annabelle Lee and
Shuri
Connected Characters: The Riders, Carolyn, Danyak, Lori,
Environment Characters: friends and acquiantances from Shangra La,
Natalie’s art friends, and school.</div><div>

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Character (1) – Caleb Engaging – Lesson 3

A. Role in the show: Reluctant Messiah – teen

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: psychic abilities allow him to travel between worlds at will, understand what each reality needs and lacks.

C. Moral Issue: With war comes death, Caleb hates taking any life, hard on him being leader

D. Unpredictable: He doesn’t handle stress well, his empathy causes him to teleport off a lot.

E. Empathetic: his kindness and love of life draw us to him. We feel his pain as being the leader requires him to do things against his gentle nature.

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Character (2) – Victoria Engaging – Lesson 3

A. Role in the show: Caleb’s love interest

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Able to sense people who are hurting and/or in need of help. || Purpose: To save Caleb from all that he faces both internally and externally.

C. Moral Issue: by befriending Caleb, will her compassion ruin her relationship w/ her dad who dislikes Caleb. Worse, will her feelings for Caleb provoke her unstable ex-boyfriend, Victor, to retaliate?

D. Unpredictable: Reacts emotionally and like Caleb, her desire to help ‘strays’ creates issues.

E. Empathetic: Beautiful and tenderhearted. She lives her convictions, who won’t let peer pressure affect her.

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Character (3) – Annabelle Lee Engaging – Lesson 3

A. Role in the show: Antagonist.

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: powerful witch on a mission to resurrect the ‘Old South.’

C. Moral Issue: She has no morals

D. Unpredictable: her actions appear noble. She does the ‘right’ thing for the wrong reasons.

E. Empathetic: Loyal to a way of life long gone.

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Character (4) – Charles Engaging – (Lesson 3)

A. Role in the show: Mentor,
friend and guide to both Caleb and Rick. He saves several of the main
characters from themselves.

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Expertise: Understanding of what
they face, what Caleb and his brother’s powers are, and how to develop them || Purpose: To train Caleb and his men to
fight, to be prepared for the upcoming war.

C. Moral Issue: By
wanting to go back in time to save his fiancé, what consequences will there be
by doing so and thereby altering the future

D. Unpredictable: He
looks at life like a game of checkers, moves w/ the big picture in mind;
doesn’t see the immediate costs.

E. Empathetic: Sacrificed
a life to watch over Caleb’s family.
Lonely and alone, he is nevertheless, committed to watching over and
training Caleb. His loyalty and selflessness are endearing traits any audience
will get behind.

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Character (5) – Natalie Engaging – (Lesson 3)

A. Role in the show: Wild Card

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Expertise: her artistic abilities enable her to create life or destroy it with her paintbrush || Purpose: Caleb & Rick’s mother, || Irony: She lives to create art and life; she ends up destroying both.

C. Moral Issue: She has no moral issues, save for the destruction of art

D. Unpredictable: She is mercurial; like Caleb, she travels back in time a lot for inspiration.

E. Empathetic: She is a gifted artist, obsessed with creation to the point of being dysfunctional.

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Character (6) Shuri Engaging – (Lesson 3)

A. Role in the show: A Guardian angel

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Shuri’s purpose, she ascends, becomes part of the Quorum, || Expertise – able to rewrite history.

C. Moral Issue: Obsessed with righting wrongs, with making sure the ‘good guys’ win

D. Unpredictable: She is unknowable; will do whatever she thinks, feels will work.

E. Empathetic: Her love for what is right, for seeing to it Caleb has the tools and love needed to finish the war.

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Character (1) Caleb Intriguing Layers – (Lesson 4)

A. Hidden Agendas: find Raquel in Shangra La & be w/ her

B. Competition: for leadership of the Riders; 2. for Victoria’s affections

C. Conspiracy: US Gov. is after them, he’s paranoid thanks to his mother’s fears

D. Secrets: his psychic abilities:
teleportation, telekinesis, reading minds, healing injuries

E. Deception: deceiving Victoria as to ‘why’ he is goes to Shangra La.

F. Wounds: death of Raquel & the subsequent death of his father

G. Secret Identities: Sylvan Park Robin Hood | The Ghost – art thief | Savior

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Character (2) Victoria Intriguing Layers – (Lesson 4)

A. Hidden Agendas: Marry Caleb and become a mother; she wants a family.

B. Competition: other women in Caleb’s life (Raquel & Lyderia) || role as leader of the Riders

C. Conspiracy: together with Shuri against the Council of Elders

D. Secrets: her abortion in phx || thanks to Shuri, being able to return to earth for week at a time as a flesh and blood human

E. Deception: Not on the pill, wants to become pregnant.

F. Wounds: her mother’s death; || the boy who filmed them having sex without her knowledge

G. Secret Identity: ascended – a true human crossover, thanks to Shuri’s powers

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Character (3) Annabelle Lee Intriguing Layers – (Lesson 4)

A. Hidden Agenda: be Queen of the Old South

B. Competition: other witches in her coven.

C. Conspiracy: Her & the old witch do black magic

D. Secrets: her use of technology w/ her magic

E. Deception: tricks her coven into doing her will

F. Wound: Fall of the Old South & death of family

G. Secret Identity: Southern Belle

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Character (4) Charles Intriguing Layers (Lesson 4)

A. Hidden Agendas: Return to 1850s and be w/ Subira, his woman

B. Competition: Andrew, wanting his woman, she was a black slave in the 1850s

C. Conspiracy: He and Shuri w/ the emotional collector panels for Shangra La.

D. Secrets: brief affair w/ Caleb’s mother, his ability to see a person’s future, his desire to return to the 1850s and his fiancé.

E. Deception: tricks Caleb into using his power to bring memories into reality so he can leave

F. Wound: Death of Subira, outliving his whole family

G. Secret Identity: Caleb’s bodyguard/mentor

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Character (5) Natalie Intriguing Layers (Lesson 4)

A. Hidden Agendas: bring the Old South into the present.

B. Competition: The Necros who have arrived

C. Conspiracy: her coven gathers people & supplies for the rising of the Old South.

D. Secrets: She is not human; she’s one of the original Necromancers that fled Shangra La.

E. Deception: What she wants, what she’s up to.

F. Wound: The fall of the Old South; loss of that way of life.

G. Secret Identity: Belle of the Ball

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Character (6) Shuri Intriguing Layers (Lesson 4)

A. Hidden Agendas: recreate a reality so the good guys win; || bring Shangra – La and Earth together w/out Feeders or Necros

B. Competition: other members on the Council of Elders

C. Conspiracy: She & Victoria against Council of Elders.

D. Secrets: she is ascending into the Quorum.

E. Deception: tricks the Council of Elders.

F. Wound: betrayed by the Council of Elders

G. Secret Identity: Quorum member

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Character (1) Caleb Emotional Depth – (Lesson 5)

A. Hope / Fear: Caleb hopes to reunite his family / Fear: Law enforcement will discover him and/or his mom and they’ll become lab rats.

B. Want / Need: Caleb wants to help the less fortunate / Needs: Love and Validation.

C. Base Negative Emotion / Public Mask: Base emotion: quiet loner / Public mask: special needs student

D. Weaknesses: head in the clouds, won’t see the bad in people, believes everyone can change.

E. Triggers: death of Raquel = terrified of being in cars || Dad’s death = fear of loss is magnified

F. Coping Mechanism: running away, fleeing; shutting down emotionally.

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Character (2) Victoria Emotional Depth (Lesson 5)

A. Hope / Fear: Victoria hopes to find real love / Fear: she will die young like her mother.

B. Want / Need: Victoria wants to be in love & loved/ Needs: to be a mother & start a family.

C. Base Negative Emotion / Public Mask: Base emotion: hurt, needing love / Public mask: sweet school girl

D. Weaknesses: fear of change, fear of loss

E. Triggers: Mother dying young from cancer || her abortion when in Phx || Dad’s affair w/ teacher.

F. Coping Mechanism:
distractions, focus time
and energy on the animal shelter.
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Character (3) Annabelle Lee Emotional Depth (Lesson 5)

A. Hope / Fear: She hopes to resurrect the Old South; fears she can’t bring the past to life.

B. Want / Need: Wants to keep safe & rule over the coven members / Needs to realize the shadow war is her problem too.

C. Base Negative Emotion / Public Mask: A necromancer / public mask; sweet Southern Belle

D. Weaknesses: pretty Southern women

E. Triggers: being near a necromancer, she will start to change, become one herself.

F. Coping Mechanism: use of black magic
and voodoo to get who/what she wants.
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Character (4) Charles Emotional Depth (Lesson 5)

A. Hope / Fear: Hopes: to find a way to return to his time / Fear: he will never get to go back in time.

B. Want / Need: Wants to become a father / Needs: to return to his world & marry his girl.

C. Base Negative Emotion / Public Mask: Bitter but determined / congenial old man

D. Weaknesses: ignorant about today’s world; lives in the past

E. Triggers: he is claustrophobic = his phobia || men yelling at women, he sees red always!

F. Coping Mechanism: his
music, playing music
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Character (5) Natalie Emotional Depth (Lesson 5)

A. Hope / Fear: Hopes to become the greatest of all the painters past and present.

B. Want / Need: Wants to keep painting, keep collecting past works from artists she knew/Needs to get her family together and be their ‘mother.’

C. Base Negative Emotion / Public Mask: stubborn and willful / carfree and eccentric

D. Weaknesses: The art world is her whole world, her only reason to be.

E. Triggers: Caleb’s wellbeing, he’s her favorite.

F. Coping Mechanism: painting, losing herself in the creation of
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Character (6) Shuri Emotional Depth (Lesson 5)

A. Hope / Fear: Hopes to rewrite history / Fear: evil will win; what she does won’t stop it.

B. Want / Need: Wants to fix the world/ Needs: rewrite reality so ‘good’ gets to win.

C. Base Negative Emotion/Public Mask: Base emotion: fear and inadequacy /Public mask: Defender of all that is good

D. Weaknesses: her need to control the future

E. Triggers: hidden agendas and liars, it’s why she hates council of elders for that reason.

F. Coping Mechanism: creating possible future scenarios in her mind

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Relationship Hooks – (Lesson 6)

Character 1: Caleb

Hot button = Being disingenuous, bullying or someone hurting another person.

Major Hook = his powers and where they will it takes him

Character 2: Victoria

Hot button = Liars and users; cruelty to animals

Major hook = her compassion and drive to find true love

Character 3: Annabelle Lee

Hot button = disrespectful people, a person lacking manners

Major hook = her fixation on a way of life long gone, and what she does to make it reality once again.

Character 4: Charles

Hot button = being hungry; as a slave, he was oftentimes hungry.

Major Hook = his influence over Caleb, his loyalty toward Caleb and his family.

Character 5: Natalie

Hot button = any interaction with law enforcement personnel.

Major Hook = her ability to create life or take it away with her paintbrush

Character 6: Shuri

Hot button = two-faced politicians

Major Hook = her ascension to the Quorum her ability to rewrite history.

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Character 1: Caleb – Empathy / Distress (Lesson 7)

A. Undeserved misfortune. (1) He is kidnapped and nearly killed in the resulting car accident, Caleb ends up in ICU; (2) Caleb’s girlfriend is murdered; (3) FBI and Homeland Security launch a nationwide manhunt for Caleb; (4) He’s forced to leave school, his home, his life and girlfriend; (5) His father’s cabin, Caleb’s childhood ‘place’ is blown up by US Gov.

B. External Character conflicts. (1) Intentional – Caleb is
kidnapped because of who he is, what he can do; (2) Unintentional – FBI
agent develops feelings for Caleb; (3) Unintentional – Caleb’s need for love
ruins FBI agent’s career, life, etc.; (4) Unintentional – Caleb’s girlfriend
has an unstable ex-boyfriend who kills her.</div><div>

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C. Plot intruding on life. (1) Caleb falling in love complicated by: what he can do & the secrets he keeps; (2) Victoria’s father, sic’s local police on Caleb, he does not like him; (3) Restraining order the dad serves Caleb, makes seeing Victoria harder; (4) Caleb’s psychic abilities allow him to see/feel/read Victoria’s mind; her love is real; (5) The kidnapping puts Caleb on FBI’s radar; (6) As leader of the Riders, Caleb has to be gone, lie about it, & isometimes returns wounded.

D. Moral dilemmas. (1) Caleb does not like lying to Victoria, but does so to protect her & himself; (2) Caleb does not believe in taking a life, but must as the shadow war intensifies; (3) As a leader, Caleb has to make choices & sacrifices that cause him pain and create self doubt.

E. Forced decisions they’d never make. (1) Caleb’s forced take refuge and join with the coven to repel the Necromancers; (2) Caleb bonds/melds w/ Annabelle Lee (leader of coven) her magic, his powers in order to thwart the enemy.

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Mystery – (Lesson 8)

Type 1: Shocking Event

A. Shocking Event: Caleb is kidnapped, taken away in a van. It collides with another vehicle. The captors (driver and passenger) vanish upon impact. Cocooned in a chrysalis, the shape of like his girl, Victoria, Caleb is ejected from the wreckage. The big mystery is: “What are they? How it possible?”

B. Secret: We, the audience, are not told about their immortality. We assume it’s magic as the van had occult symbols on the van walls.

C. Investigation: FBI agent on Caleb’s case, finds decades’ old fingerprints in van. When she returns to the crash site, she finds Caleb there. She questions him. Caleb gives her glimpse into his world, w/ his telepathic powers then vanishes (teleports off) in front of her.

Type 2: Over Time

A. Cover up: Necromancers, by the millions, are headed to earth. Their leader falls to earth first, takes the shape of a man and begins learning about earth. We learn it feeds off the dead to live, to grow stronger.

B. Secret: We, the audience, are not told why the Necromancers are coming to earth to wage war. Their end game (enslave man, breed humans for consumption) remains a mystery.

C. Reveals: (1) The Protagonist (Caleb) and his Riders
discover a way to defeat the Necromancers; (2) We learn it was Danyak who set
the Necromancers free!!
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Open Loops – (Lesson 9)

1. Something important happened… A tear in the fabric of space releases millions of Necromancers who

2. …that is incomplete… begin swimming through space, heading where?

3. …which creates a question about the future. Their appearance sets in motion Armageddon which is to follow in season two.

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Potential Layers – (Lesson 10)

I. PLOT LAYERS – Story beneath the story.

(1) Major scheme revealed – Caleb is more than human, he’s fighting a supernatural war w/ others like himself.

(2) Mystery revealed – his supernatural ability as told by Andrew driving the van, then later observed w/ Caleb’s interaction with the FBI agent at the crash site.

(3) Thought the story was one thing, it is another – the kidnapping was actually a rescue on Andrew’s part (Carolyn’s sent a gunslinger to capture Caleb).

4) Major shift in Meaning – goes from a love story to an end of the world story

(5) Hidden history – Caleb’s history with Lyderia.

(6) Hidden plan – find Raquel, then discover a way to live in Shangra La full time.

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(7) Major betrayal – Caleb is betrayed by his son & daughter; they murder Lori, his new love

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II. CHARACTER LAYERS – identity beneath the identity.

(1) Secret identity = Sylvan Park Robin Hood | The Ghost – art thief | Savior

(2) Character intrigue = Caleb is at home w/ rich art patrons, he’s lived everywhere

(3) Hidden relationships & conspiracies = his relationship with Lyderia (Raquel’s older sister); his attempts to save the school’s bad girl, Tiffany.

(4) Hidden Character history = frequent moves; people are
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Irony – (Lesson 11)

I. Character Irony = The character has opposites happening inside of him or her, or is behaving in a way that is opposite their normal behavior. Caleb is in love with Victoria, but is working to find a way back to Raquel in Shangra La.

A. Paradox with opposite Traits/Motivations = Calebs many trips to Shandra La in search of Raquel results in th discovery of Victoria who died and is living over there.

B. Values versus Needs = Caleb values all life, but needs to kill in order to save mankind from the Necromancers.

C. Presents one way/Is opposite = Andrew’s behavior presents him as an antagonist; turns out, he is looking out for their family.

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II. Situational
Irony = is a situation
where two opposites are present in the situation.

A. Appears to be X, but is Y. = Annabelle Lee appears to be a Southern Belle, a witch, but she is in fact, a Necromancer in disguise.

B. To get X, they give up Y. = To resurrect the Old South, Annabelle Lee is wiling to sacrifice the people and the landscape of the South in the present.

C. Avoiding X, they cause X. = Closing the portals between Shangra La & earth, the Council of Elders cause internal dissent: Feeders leave Shangra La, flee to earth as they will be starved if they stay in Shangra La.

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[Wayne Petitto]

Wayne Petitto’s BW Framework

What I learned doing this assignment is how to create bullet point mnemonics to keep my story consistent, intriguing, and flexible, w/o being bogged down by details.

Anyone wishing to trade our Frameworks for feedback, contact me at waynefpetitto@gmail.com.

Thanks,

Wayne