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Lesson 12
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Jan’s Outline With Intrigue
WIL: When you think you’re there – haha – there is more pond to dive deeper and get yourself a clearer mind what you are story telling about. Bravo!
WAR
EXT. WAR ZONE – DAY – Intriguing World
Start:
A SOLDIER drinks from his canteen as a child approaches, mimicking the drinking sign.
Challenging Situation:
OLIVER signals over the intercom for the soldier to keep the child at a safe distance.
Conflict:
The soldier ignores the warning and
Action:
is ambushed by the child, who turns out to be a suicide bomber. Oliver orders his team to apprehend the accomplices.
Finish:
Oliver rushes to the injured soldier, trying to keep him alive.
Mystery: Where is Oliver, what is going on?
Empathy/Distress: Oliver motivates others to focus, a plan that fails
Open Loop: Is the soldier going to survive?
Payoff:
Irony: the motion of being kind can cost lives
Setup: Oliver is traumatizedEXT. MILITARY CAMP – IN FRONT OF POLICE BUILDING – DAY – Hidden Layer
Start:
Oliver wakes up from a dream, disturbed and agitated.
Challenging Situation:
His AIDE calls him in to continue an interrogation,
Conflict:
knowing that Oliver has these recurring dreams. And no news about the soldier in hospital
Action:
They walk back in to continue
Open Loop: there is an interrogation going on
Open Loop: the soldier is still alive
Mystery: who ordered this ambush, they were actually protecting a transport of their cocaine
Empathy/Distress: Why are we getting theses orders? Oliver is worried what they are doing as an army on behalf government
Payoff: soldier was brought back alive
Irony: we are getting shot for protecting cocaine dealers
Setup: Oliver is traumatized from earlierACT 1: TRAVEL
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – DAY – Secret identity
Start: Oliver interrogates MAHMOUD, a captured individual with indications of triggering the ambush.
Challenging Situation:
During the interrogation, Oliver is discreetly informed that the soldier did not survive the attack.
Conflict:
Oliver uses this information to accuse Mahmoud of murder, but Mahmoud remains unimpressed and unresponsive.
Action:
When the soldier turns to whisper in Oliver’s ear, Mahmoud seizes the opportunity to attack. Oliver restrains the guard at the door and convinces Mahmoud to back down. Mahmoud is led away
Finish:
as another soldier arrives, requesting Oliver’s presence to see his commanding officer.
Open Loop: Oliver promises Mahmoud to continue interrogation soon
Mystery: Is Oliver a soldier or a crime detective?
Empathy/Distress: the soldier didn’t make it
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: Oliver is good interrogator
Setup: Oliver is excellent at handling difficult situationsEXT. MILITARY CAMP – DAY – Hidden agenda
Start:
Oliver walks with his aide,
Challenging Situation:
discussing the lack of response to his previous complaint.
Conflict:
He expresses disappointment that his squad is assigned to guard German soldiers involved in questionable activities, such as organize cocaine transports for pharmaceutical companies.
Finish:
Talking into the HQ
Open Loop: What will army do about Oliver’s complaints
Mystery: Can we find out who was behind the ambush?
Empathy/Distress: loose soldiers in questionable activities
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: Oliver’s relation to HQ back homeINT. CAMP HQ – OFFICE – DAY – Wound
Start:
The COMMANDING OFFICER informs Oliver that he is being released to travel home.
Challenging Situation:
Oliver is surprised, thinking it’s related to his complaints, but it’s personal news.
Conflict:
His father has passed away, and he is being granted leave to assist his mother with the funeral arrangements.
Action:
Oliver falls silent, processing the news.
Finish/ Start:
Oliver is being dismissed,
Challenging Situation:
with the advise to stay as long as it takes.
Open Loop: Is Oliver coming back ?
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress: about his complaint/ message about his father’s accident
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: Oliver needs to take care about family issuesINT. CAMP HQ – TRAVEL MANAGEMENT – DAY Deception
Conflict:
Oliver and his aide learn that the next available passenger flight is in two days.
Open Loop: How does Oliver get to his mother?
Mystery: What is between Oliver and his family?
Empathy/Distress: How will I pretend to mourn about my father
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: Oliver is not finished with MahmoudEXT. CAMP – DAY – Wound
Action:
Oliver asks his aide to explore any options for an earlier departure.
Aide leaves, Oliver on his bed, alone, no tears.
Open Loop: Can aide find a flight to leave earlier
Mystery: why is Oliver not sad?
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: Stress with family is coming upINT. TENT/BARRACK – OLIVER – DAY – Strange Behavior
Start:
Oliver packs his belongings and tries to reach his mother on his satellite phone,
Challenging Situation:
but she doesn’t answer or there is no signal.
Conflict:
His aide enters and informs him of a flight departing in a few minutes, a cargo flight carrying damaged goods back to Germany.
Action:
Oliver seizes the opportunity and accepts the flight.
Finish:
They run
Open Loop: Can he get on the flight?
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress: decide quickly, no comfort
Payoff:
Irony: He doesn’t want to go but runs
Setup:EXT. AIRFIELD – DAWN – Hidden Agenda
Start:
Oliver asks his aide
Challenging Situation:
to ensure the assassin is kept well and alive until
Conflict:
his return in 5-6 days to continue the interrogation despite the funeral
Action:
Aide is not convinced but agrees
Finish:
Oliver phone rings
Open Loop: will the team wait until he is back with the interrogation?
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress: get a respectful travel home for the dead soldier
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:EXT. AIRFIELD – CARGO PLANE – DAWN
Start:
Aide points at Olivers pocket, his satellite phone rings, and it’s his mother, FREDDIE.
Challenging Situation:
The connection is noisy, but Oliver gathers that something is amiss. He reassures her that he will be there in a couple of hours, and they can talk about everything then.
Conflict:
Now he needs to finish this call as the cargo plane’s door closes,
Action:
Oliver rushes inside, same time the body bag with the dead soldier is loaded last minute into the same plane
Finish:
ending the call.
Open Loop: to understand what his mother was saying
Mystery: what is what mum has to say
Empathy/Distress: He speaks kindly to his mother/ but can’t understand what she says
Payoff: because of the quick decision he gets the flight
Irony: the dead soldier flies home with the same plane
Setup: Freddie (mother ) has some important informations for OliverINT. CARGO PLANE – DARK Wound/Strange Behavior
(Optional)
Oliver sitting in an uncomfortable position. And the uncomfortable view on the body bag.
EXT. AIRFIELD GERMANY – NIGHT – Secret
Start:
Unfavorable weather greets Oliver as he disembarks the plane.
Challenging Situation:
He approaches a soldier and inquires about nearby accommodations for a shower and some rest.
Conflict:
There is none The soldier recommends the 9-Inn.
Action:
Oliver leaves
Open Loop:
Mystery: why isn’t Oliver rushing home?
Empathy/Distress: almost home / need sleep
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: He has always guys to talk to in the armyINT. THE 9 INN – NIGHT – Intriguing World
Start:
Oliver requests a room and
Challenging Situation:
is given an exorbitant price for a short stay, as the establishment charges by the 30-minute increment.
Conflict:
After explaining his situation of coming from a war zone and needing rest before seeing his mother,
Action:
Oliver is granted a “hero’s rebate” with the understanding
Finish:
that he won’t require any extra services.
Open Loop: will Oliver get some special service
Mystery: Why is he accepting these circumstances
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:INT. ROOM WITH A BED – DARK – Wound
Start:
Oliver emerges from the shower, his tiredness evident.
Challenging Situation:
He struggles with his heavy backpack, revealing a gunshot wound or a scar on his arm, a testament to his past experiences.
Conflict:
Exhausted, he glances at his phone and watch,
Action:
rubs his face, and
Finish:
falls asleep.
Open Loop:
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress: thinking to connect with his mother/ not doing it
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:INT. ROOM WITH A BED – DARK Intriguing World
Start:
Oliver is restless in his sleep, bumping into someone’s arm and
Challenging Situation:
immediately becoming alert. XENIA, a semi-attractive pro, reassures him. Despite Oliver’s initial request for no services,
Conflict:
she explains that they needed the bed for her to rest after dealing with a difficult client. Nothing happened between them.
Action:
Oliver realizes it’s already morning and rushes to leave, offering Xenia €50 for driving him to the nearest car rental,
Finish:
which she accepts.
Open Loop:
Mystery: will we meet Xenia again?
Empathy/Distress: I got sleep/ I am late
Payoff: He didn’t receive any special treatment
Irony: paying a sex worker as a driver
Setup:ACT 2: ARRIVAL
EXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY Hidden Layer
Start:
Oliver drives into town, his aide on the phone
Challenging Situation:
taking in the sights of a place …His aide mocks him, he needs GPS at home?
Conflict:
he hasn’t been in a long time.
Action:
His GPS guides him and announces. Now it is about his mother and how she’s holding up. He hangs up
Finish:
200 meters to final address.
Open Loop: How will his mother being holding up?
Mystery: how come he hasn’t been home for so long?
Empathy/Distress: meeting his mother / meeting his mother
Payoff:
Irony: Oliver needs a GPS to find home
Setup: the home town and OliverEXT. HOME STREET – OLIVER – Secret
Start:
He misses the house, and as he gets out of the car, he runs into PETRA, who is about to lock up.
Challenging Situation:
They immediately clash, and just as Oliver’s GENERAL calls, he tries to delay the conversation.
Conflict:
After Petra insists, Oliver shows her his military ID to introduce himself.
Action:
Petra informs him of his mother’s passing the previous night.
Finish:
Neighbors heard a window constantly in the wind and called police.
Open Loop: What is the local homicide do next?
Mystery: What happened to his mother ?
Empathy/Distress: / he slept when she died
Payoff:
Irony: without needing sleep he could met her alive
Setup: What is this all aboutINT. HOME -PARENTS – DAY –
Start
Petra reluctantly agrees to accompany Oliver through the house, which feels strange since they are both police officers. While walking, Oliver notices an appointment note on the desk for a visit to the notary’s office.
Challenging Situation:
Oliver’s homecoming is marred by tension and loneliness. Petra informs him that they have found no evidence of a crime, as his mother was found fully dressed on her bed without any suspicious letters.
Conflict:
Oliver doesn’t believe it and argues that his parents’ deaths occurring within 59 hours raise suspicions. This revelation surprises Petra, as the homicide department has no information about his father’s passing. Oliver has no details.
Action:
In a fit of frustration, Oliver verbally confronts Petra, announcing his determination to investigate and defy the dismissive stance of the homicide department.
Finish:
Petra leaves and refuses to leave him with the keys. Oliver is stunned.
Open Loop: What is Oliver going to do about it?
Mystery: What happened to both of his parents and local police doesn’t know about?
Empathy/Distress: Oliver is worried , new situation, what to do next?
Payoff:
Irony: sitting in front of his home, he hasn’t been to quite long
Setup: Oliver embarks the journey to find the truthACT 3: DOORS SHUT
EXT. HOME STREET – DAY – Deception
Start:
Oliver sits alone on the doorsteps, contemplating his next move.
Challenging Situation:
He receives another call from his general, discussing
Conflict:
his suspicions about his parents’ deaths and his determination to uncover the truth.
Action:
The general assures him of support if needed.
Finish:
Oliver decides to clear his mind first but assumes he can handle it
Open Loop: Is homicide getting away with this?
Mystery: What is it between the two and him?
Empathy/Distress: he is crime investigator / he is son
Payoff:
Irony: flying home to help mother and now investigating her passing
Setup: the general becomes a player in this storyEXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY – Hidden agenda
Oliver walks through the town, unfamiliar with the buildings and feeling disconnected from his former home.
Open Loop:
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:INT. RESIDENTS’ REGISTRATION OFFICE – DAY Strange Behavior
Start:
Oliver visits the registry office to confirm his residency,
Challenging Situation:
but they are unable to find him in their digital records as they -digitally -only go back to 2009 and the file-files are with the digitizing company.
Conflict:
The REGISTRATION LADY, whose name tag shows her family name as Wind, sympathizes with his loss but can’t provide assistance without the required documents.
Open Loop: How will he get access to the house ?
Mystery: How come he has unregistered 19 years ago?
Empathy/Distress: condolences / no assistance
Payoff:
Irony: the lady reuses to help is a relative, is she?
Setup: Many people carrying the name WindEXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY Hidden Agenda
Start:
Oliver continues his search for answers, contacting the military police HQ in Germany
Challenging Situation:
to check his files and residency history. They promise to call him back with the information.
Conflict:
Oliver checks Google and finds contacts for his uncle, HANS WIND,
Action:
whom he decides to call.
Open Loop: Will he get access to the house ?
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress: having family/ having stress with family
Payoff: Speaking to the general allows him to use army intel
Irony: serving in the army made Oliver disappear what he originally wanted, now paddling backwards
Setup: Oliver’s network in the army is a fallbackINT. TOWN HALL OFFICE – DAY Deception
Start:
Over finds contacts for the next close relative. Uncle Hans knows details about his father’s accidental death at the shipyard and expresses condolences.
Challenging Situation:
He offers to meet the following day to mourn together, as he is out of town, discuss the funeral, and catch up on family matters.
Conflict:
It’s clearly a lie. He is in town, and across from him sits Clarice, observing Hans as he speaks.
Action:
After ending the call, they share a glance, wondering
Finish:
what their next move should be.
Open Loop: Will he get access to the house ?
Mystery:There is a history with Uncle Hans. What is it?
Empathy/Distress: I have helpful relatives / Uncle Hans is a liar
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: Introducing Clarice
Setup: Uncle Hans has an agendaINT. REGISTRY OFFICE – DAY – Strange behavior
Start:
Oliver meets with the registry office,
Challenging Situation:
asks for a certificate of birth
Conflict:
but they can’t provide assistance without specific documents, such as an residential confirmation and papers signed by his parents.
Action:
They sympathize with his loss
Finish:
but can’t bend the rules.
Open Loop: Will he get access to the house ?
Mystery: How come Oliver doesn’t publicly exist?
Empathy/Distress: what else option is there?
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: this city has so many WindsEXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY – Hidden Agenda
Start:
Oliver receives a call from the coroner’s office,
Challenging Situation:
returning his call, regarding his mother’s body.
Conflict:
They refuse to speak to him without a power of attorney
Action:
and abruptly end the call.
Finish:
Frustrated, Oliver realizes that the authorities won’t cooperate easily.
Open Loop:
Mystery: What is going in this town? Or this the new normal?
Empathy/Distress: being Cop/ being son
Payoff:
Irony: Oliver asks if there is working somebody with the name Wind, which they misunderstand as they think he s looking for a vitamin B relation .
Setup: Red flag: He must avoid cremation or fast funeralINT. BANK – DAY – Deception
Start
Oliver visits his mother’s bank
Challenging Situation:
and inquires information what he will need to get authority about and for her accounts.
Conflict:
The BANK CLERK, whose name tag again bears the name Wind, refuses to provide any information without a valid power of attorney.
Action:
They express condolences
Finish:
but remain firm.
Open Loop: Will he get access to any piece of paper to unwind this bureaucratic system?
Open Loop: Will he get access to the house ?
Mystery: How did the Wind clan has put so many people in the driving seats of this town?
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony: the more they block the better Oliver will become
Setup: This town will have fun with OliverEXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY Hidden agenda
Start:
Oliver receives a call from the military HQ,
Challenging Situation:
stating they couldn’t find any documents related to his previous residency. Before he joined the army.
Conflict:
Disheartened,
Action:
surrounded by masses of residents walking around him Oliver contemplates his next steps
Finish:
sitting there and lonesome on the market square of his home town.
Open Loop: Will he get access to any piece of paper to unwind this bureaucratic system?
Open Loop: Will he get access to the house ?
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:EXT. STREET NEAR TOPPER CAR COMPOUND – DAY – Wound/Secret
Start:
Oliver’s attention is caught by a large car dealer compound
Challenging Situation:
with the name “Toll, Top, Topper.” He looks at it with disdain,
Conflict:
particularly at a man named JÜRGEN, who appears to be involved with the customers.
Action:
Oliver turns away,
Finish:
feeling a sense of disgust.
Open Loop:
Mystery: There is a history with Jürgen, what is it?
Empathy/Distress : disgust about Jürgen
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: the Jürgen story leads to big woundEXT. COTTBUS STREETS – DAY
Start:
Challenging Situation:
Conflict:
Action:
Finish:Oliver unlocks his rental car and drives away.
Open Loop:
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:EXT. SHIPYARD WIND – DAY – Hidden Layer
Start:
Oliver finds Siggi, Helge’s long time right-hand man at the shipyard,
Challenging Situation:
Siggi shares information with Oliver. He talks about the shipyard deal and
Conflict:
his observations in the last 4-6 weeks, hinting at something suspicious.
Action:
Oliver asks for more details
Finish:
and Siggi leads him towards the jetties.
Open Loop: What was going on the last 4-6 weeks ?
Mystery: There is something weird about his fathers dead as well, what is it?
Empathy/Distress: seeing what his dad made out of the shipyard/ breaks his heart same time.
Payoff: Siggi remembers Oliver as a child that was always friendly with him.
Irony:
Setup: it will be about the shipyardEXT. SHIPYARD – YACHT & SAILING CLUB – DAY Hidden Agenda
Start:
Siggi shows Oliver the spot
Challenging Situation:
where the accident supposedly occurred,
Conflict:
involving his father falling into the lake.
Action:
Oliver looks around, the jetty, the boats. Oliver is about to walk away,
Finish: /Start:
When Siggi recognizes a boat coming in
Challenging Situation:
CLARICE, who identifies herself as Oliver’s cousin, appears and invites him to visit her and her father, Johan Feuer-Wind.
Conflict:
Clarice offers Oliver to stay at their house in case he understandably does not want to stay at home or his mother needs rest, she is unaware of Oliver’s mother’s passing, and Oliver realizes the family is not on the same page.
Action:
Clarice and departs and Oliver checks the time and realizes the time of his mother’s scheduled appointment at the notary’s office.
Finish:
Back on land Oliver turns and checks the jetty again with a thoughtful look.
Open Loop: What is Oliver going to do about his father’s accident ?
What was helge (father) doing the last 4-6 weeks that created seemingly a turmoil ?
Mystery: Siggi has a history with the family, what will this be?
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff: Doing his job well shows him quickly that something is off about the accident
Irony: a shipbuilder and sailor drowns on jetty
Setup: Oliver needs to investigate on his father’s dead too
Open Loop: what brought Clarice to this Yachtclub?
Mystery: what is the family connection to Clarice and her father Johan?
Empathy/Distress: putting the first pieces together / the stress will be in the family
Payoff:
Irony: Clarice would be Oliver’s kind of prey scheme but he kind of dislikes her
Setup: Clarice, Johan and the water Mill will become a storyINT. OFFICE – NOTARY WAITING ROOM – DAY Hidden Layer
Start:
Oliver requests to wait in the notary’s office for his mother,
Challenging Situation:
despite the secretary attempts to shoo him away. Oliver insists on staying,
Conflict:
and when the secretary goes to inform the notary,
Action:
she returns with the notary. Oliver has news.
Finish:
His mother passed away in the early morning.
Open Loop:
Mystery: the secretary has her own story with the Winds, what will it beg
Empathy/Distress: the secretary is worried if Freddie wants to meet Oliver, so they are not up to date either. / Oliver needs to hold back.
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: the secretary story about the Winds and the Lehners.INT. OFFICE – NOTARY STUDY – DAY – Conspiracy
Start:
The notary, a close friend of “Freddie,”
Challenging Situation:
offers Oliver a summary of the events leading up to her passing.
Conflict:
Oliver becomes firmer to question the peacefulness of both his parents’ deaths, and the notary somehow does not disagree. And
Action:
the notary suggests Oliver should stay in town until the will is read to the family. He urges to investigate further and stay. And then he hands Oliver a power of attorney that Oliver’s mother signed, just hours before her passing,
Finish:
granting him authority to handle her affairs.
Open Loop: Why should Oliver stay? What will be in the will?
Mystery: the notar y has his own history with Freddie, what will it be?
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff: confronting the notary directly with the message about his mother opens his heart instantly
Irony: the power of attorney was there all day as his mother seemingly guessed how the town will welcome him
Setup: the private notary story and informations about his mother’s life.ACT 4: BRAWL & SEX
EXT. LAKE DISTRICT – HIGHWAY – DAY – Intriguing World
Start:
Oliver drives car in nice landscape Lake District
INT. GOYATZ POLICE STATION – DAY Hidden Agenda
Challenging Situation:
Checking in, Oliver introduces himself and presents his PoA, Oliver receives intel about the accident,
Conflict:
but police does not see anything else than an accident.
Action:
Oliver files a request to see his father in the morgue and that he will file for an examination by the public prosecutor. Has asks for intel how to inform both police districts about to have knowledge about both deaths of his parent at two different places within 59 hours.
Finish:
Oliver announces to be back next day.
Open Loop: How to push forward what happened to his father
Mystery: How come this police station doesn’t see indications as well
Empathy/Distress: detective / son
Payoff: having the PoA some tasks can get started
Irony:
Setup: Investigation in the shipyard areaEXT. LAKE DISTRICT -View at SHIPYARD – SUNSET / BLUE HOUR Secret Identity
Start:
Oliver drives
Challenging Situation:
by the lake, stops the car, opens the door and has to throw up.
Conflict:
His gaze fixed on the shipyard on the other side of the lake, that belonged to his parents.
Action:
Oliver just stares. Other pictures in his head than what he sees.
Finish:
He gets out of the car and starts kicking and fighting trees. No tears.
Open Loop:
Mystery: There is something wrong about Oliver and his homelands, what is it?
Empathy/Distress: son / family
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: What are Oliver’s traumata ?EXT. POLICE HQ – NIGHT Imminent Threat
Start:
Oliver presents the power of attorney at the police headquarters,
Challenging Situation:
requesting access to his parents’ home and to see Petra.
Conflict:
Petra is not present, and they wont tell him.
Action:
Oliver offers two solutions, he will call military police and ask for assistance and they will know where she is or they call her and ask for permission to tell ´him the location. They do and
Finish:
Petra agrees to see her on a crime scene as she still carries the keys on her.
Open Loop: Does Oliver gets the keys finally ?
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: The Petra – Oliver head to head will lastEXT. CLOSE TO POLICE CRIME SCENE- NIGHT – Strange Behavior
Start:
Oliver arrive at crime scene, presenting his police ID requests to see Petra.
Challenging Situation:
Oliver presents his PoA again and receives keys. Petra challenges him
Conflict:
Why is he so into finding a crime about his parents passing? Is he so war traumatized that every corpse means a killing. Petra has no idea which boobytrap she just tapped in.
Action:
Oliver gives her the big picture what he’s found so far within less than one day. Father and mother died within 59 hours, in two police districts. His father fell from a ladder on a jetty where is nothing to work at from a ladder, and fell into water and drowned with two broken tight. So either you fall onto the jetty and break your bones but then you are on the jetty. Or you fall into the water and break probably nothing. His mother was fully dressed yet not on her bedside but his fathers, why would she do that, if she didn’t leave a letter? He adds 2-3 more indications and resumes, he would see enough initial suspicion to trigger an investigation. And he will.
Finish:
Oliver walks away, wishes Petra good luck with her crime scene, he would wish he would not have to go to THE crime scene he is going to.
Open Loop: Who is Petra? Why is she so hesitant to a case
Mystery: Is there something about the Winds Oliver should know?
Empathy/Distress: Petra is worried about Oliver , yet she taps into the wrongest questions af all
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: Oliver can now start to investigateINT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT Mystery
Start:
Oliver finally opens the door to his parents home.
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT – Mystery
Challenging Situation:
Oliver walks the rooms
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT – Mystery
Conflict:
Oliver walks into the bedroom
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT – Mystery
Action:
Oliver decides to leaves quickly
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT – Wound
Finish:
Oliver leaves – no results, impressions only.
Open Loop:
Mystery: Who might have an agenda with his parents to kill or have killed them?
Empathy/Distress: cop / son
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:INT. PROSECUTOR’S OFFICE – NIGHT – Suspicion
Start:
Oliver presents the power of attorney and
Challenging Situation:
files for the prevention of his mother’s body release, demanding an official examination.
Conflict:
The authorities require a „different“ validation of the power of attorney,
Action:
leaving Oliver frustrated and announcing pressure
Finish:
certain about his next move.
Open Loop: He wants his parents having both an examination and autopsy, will get this on motion ?
Mystery: the town, the town the town ?
Empathy/Distress: having PoA / not enough
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: connect the authorities in town and shipyard areaEXT. COTTBUS STREETS – BACK SALON – NIGHT – Hidden Layer
Start:
Walking with anger subsiding, Oliver ponders his options.
Challenging Situation:
Oliver sees a nightlife pub,
Conflict:
hesitating but ultimately seeking solace.
Action:
Oliver decides and walks and
Finish:
enters a nightlife pub BACK SALON.
Open Loop:
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:INT. BACK SALON – NIGHT – Secret identity/ Imminent Threat
Start:
Oliver finds himself among a few guests at the bar, attempts to calm down after this tumultuous day.
Challenging Situation:
Two groups of men arrive, seeking Oliver’s opinion and provoking a confrontation.
Conflict:
Oliver sees the conflict and tries to manage to avoid it but the guys leave no way out and it escalates into a 4 against 1 brawl.
Action:
Despite the outnumbering odds, Oliver fights without causing much damage to the bar. As the assailants flee, Oliver seizes their wallets before tending to his knife wound. MARIE, the bartender, thanks him for taking a stand and tends to his injury.
Finish:
They engage in conversation, and Oliver asks Marie for a recommendation for a simple hotel. Marie offers her own room above the bar for him to stay.
Open Loop: somebody staged a pub brawl to get him beaten up or worse, who?
Mystery: Who is already after Oliver?
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff: the knight gets the princess
Irony: people who fancy war emblems and stories come to provoke a soldier
Setup: the Marie-Oliver storyINT. APARTMENT – MARIE – NIGHT – Secret Identity
Start:
Oliver and Marie bump through the door already kissing
Challenging Situation:
and wildly into each others undressing
Conflict:
While Marie bumps all the time into the fresh bandaged wound which makes Oliver groan.
Action:
Marie playfully orders Oliver to be not such a pussy and they engage in a passionate and wild encounter of sex,
Finish:
finding joy and temporary solace in each other’s arms. Marie mumbles she feels like knowing him since a long time before she falls asleep.
Open Loop: Is this going to last ./. one night stand ?
Mystery: Do they have a history? He never had a girlfriend in home town; and she s too young.
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: Oliver’s traumata of restlessness and insomniaINT. APARTMENT – MARIE – NIGHT
Start:
After their encounter,
Challenging Situation:
Oliver is restless and
Conflict:
unable to sleep.
Action:
He gets dressed, leaves the apartment, and
Finish:
embarks on a restless night.
Open Loop: Is Oliver coming back?
Mystery:
Empathy/Distress: rest/ restless , tired / insomnia
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: The Marie and Oliver journey of trustEXT. COTTBUS STREETS – BACK SALON – NIGHT – Hidden Agenda
Start:
Oliver walks the streets,
Challenging Situation:
seeking a quiet moment to gather his thoughts.
Conflict:
Not possible
Action:
Suddenly, he begins walking briskly
Finish:
in a particular direction.
Open Loop: What is he after?
Mystery: Why is he running around in the middle of the night?
Empathy/Distress: lover/ son/ cop
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup:ACT 5: RESTLESS NIGHT
INT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT – Mystery / Strange Behavior
Start:
Oliver reenters the house, determined for a specific direction.
Challenging Situation:
He heads to the bedroom where his mother was found dead,
Conflict
placing himself on the bed, inhaling the room and inspecting the surroundings.
Action:
He checks the nightstand on his father’s side, contemplates how his mother’s body was moved into the bedroom, and searches through closets and sideboards. Oliver’s frustration grows as he finds no substantial leads. He rewinds the answering machine, listens to the messages, and searches other rooms of the house.
Finish:
Feeling defeated, Oliver gives up and exits the house.
Open Loop: What is he going to do next ?
Mystery: It feels obvious to Oliver that something is off, but he can’t put a fingertip on it
Empathy/Distress: son / cop // cop Son
Payoff: His determination and allowance to ask the universe for assistance
Irony: a cop talking to the universe?
Setup: Oliver and his relation to the Quanten theory and BuddhaEXT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT – Secret Identity
Start:
Oliver locks the house,
Challenging Situation:
preparing to walk away,
Conflict:
but something stops him in his tracks. The answer has been sent
Action:
Oliver reenters the house.
Finish:
Door closes behind him.
Open Loop:
Mystery: Oliver really talks to the universe?
Empathy/Distress:
Payoff:
Irony:
Setup: esoteric tools to handle crimeINT. PARENTS’ HOME – NIGHT – Mystery
Start:
Oliver returns to his mother’s desk, sits down, doing nothing. Tens his eyes …
Challenging Situation:
noticing a missing drawer on the right-hand side.
Conflict:
He explores further, finding a hidden compartment inside the drawer containing a diary.
Action:
Oliver reads – with his mother’s voice – the final entries aloud, expressing her suspicions about how she might not survive the own families attacks, she fears for deaths.
Finish:
The weight of the situation is evident on Oliver’s face.
Open Loop: Oliver is talking to the universe asking for answers, really.
Mystery: His mother is writing in her diary that she fears for her live because of her own family
Empathy/Distress: Buddhist / Cop
Payoff: allow others to help you
Irony:
Setup: Oliver will have to investigate this family and unveil what happened to his mother and maybe father as well -
LIKE THE JONESES – OUTLINE WITH INTRIGUE
What I learned doing this assignment is that, if you have to search too hard for the intrigue and mystery, then it’s probably missing. Every scene won’t have as much intrigue, but each scene should want to make you see the next scene. Also, we have a lot of description and structure for the scenes, so this should make the actual writing process easier. The outline can always be improved, so decide what your stopping point is.
Start: Jones Farmacy is celebrating its tenth anniversary. Challenging Situation: Everyone is asking something of WillieConflict: Tony receives very little acknowledgement Action: Henry outruns the loan sharks and breaks into his grandfather’s house to hide out.Finish: Henry discovers documents regarding an inheritance from his mother.
INT. MCMENAMINS – MYSTERY (WHY IS HENRY ON THE RUN)
Family and friends are gathered for the tenth anniversary celebration of Jones Farmacy, a cannabis business founded by Willie Jones and his son, Tony. As guests share stories and acknowledgements, they seem to each want something from Willie. His wife Elaine is ready for him to retire so they can move to Trinidad with her family. His son is ready for him to hand over the reins to him. The mayor wants him to commit to serving on the cannabis commission another four years. Tony is given very little acknowledgement for the success of Jones Farmacy. Heather Jones, Willie’s niece comes forward to speak…
A series of shots during Heather’s voiceover:
A dark tinted vehicle screeches to a halt and Henry Jones jumps in just as his assailants catch up with him
The same assailants purchase tickets to Portland, Ore
The assailants await Henry at the Portland Airport
Henry arrives at the airport in Eugene, Oregon and hails a taxi to Salem, OR.
Open Loop: Why is Henry on the run?Mystery: Why did Henry lie to Heather?Empathy/Distress: Payoff: Henry didn’t fly into Portland because the sharks were chasing him.Irony: Willie is talking retirement while entertaining new opportunities. Setup: Henry is headed to Salem, OR.
INT. PAPA JONES’ HOUSE – SECRET (WHATS UP WITH THIS INHERITANCE)
Henry Jones arrives at Grandpa Jones’ house in Salem, Ore. He takes in the property. He walks around the side of the house reminiscing. A car speeds past. He’s startled. He rushes to the side porch, raises a heavy ceramic flowerpot, and uses the key to enter the home, watching out behind him. He tiptoes through the house to ensure it is empty. He hears a car door close and rushes into a large walk-in closet. He discovers a peculiar looking box. Inside are documents from an inheritance from his mother to him and Heather. He calls Heather and accuses the whole family of being liars.
Open Loop: Who are the guys chasing Henry. Mystery: Why is Henry in Salem?Empathy/Distress: Henry is sad reading about his mother’s death. Payoff: Henry went to his grandfather’s house in Salem.Irony: Henry accuses the family of lying. Setup: Henry discovered an inheritance his mother left to him and Heather.
ACT 1
Start: Tony is going about just another day at the office. Challenging Situation: Tony is faced with a big decision. He needs to consult his father on the matter. Conflict: The clients pressure him to decide without his father. He delays them.Action: Tony questions Willie about giving him more responsibility. Finish: Willie shoots him down.
INT. JFP HEADQUARTERS – HIDDEN AGENDA: (The client is trying to help Tony get some exposure)
Tony goes about his normal tasks in the office. Just another day. The office aide asks for approval for $500. Tony tells her he will have to check with willie. She questions why he has to check with Willie on such a small amount. A visitor arrives and requests to meet with Tony. He is explaining how his offer could help boost Tony’s career if the public knows he closed the deal. The client offers Tony social media exposure. Tony wants to get Willie’s approval. The client informs him that the offer is to him, not Jones Farmacy. Tony tries to delay them but is unable to reach Willie. The client tells Tony he has until midnight to decide. After the client leaves, Willie arrives and Tony questions Willie about giving him more power in the decision making. Willie shoots him down, reminding him that they were still recovering from what happened six years ago.
Open Loop: What happened six years ago?Mystery: How did whatever happened affect Jones Farmacy?Empathy/Distress: Tony wants his father’s approval on his decisions.Payoff: Willie isn’t extending any more power to Tony.Irony: Tony hates having to get Willie’s approval and he went seeking Willie’s approval.Setup: Tony has a deadline of midnight to decide. Start: Tony hangs out with the other cannabis guys. Challenging Situation: The guys encourage him to get from under Willie. Do his own thing.Conflict: Tony doesn’t want to leave behind what he has built. He got the license.Action: Tony moves forward on the deal from earlier.Finish: The client gives him until midnight to decide.
INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE – PORTLAND SECRET: People want to do business with Tony without his father.
Tony is out kicking it with the other canna world guys at a private lounge in Portland. The guys heard about what happened earlier and encourage Tony to get from under Willie and do his own thing. The guys inform him that more people want to do business with him as a private contractor, not under Willie. Tony is hesitant to leave behind Jones Farmacy after all his hard work. Although being a private contractor is his dream. Tony and all the guys know JFP wouldn’t have gotten a license without him. Tony closes the deal from earlier without consulting with Willie. He feels good about it and decides to do more.
Mystery: Why don’t people want to do business with Willie? Deception: Tony closes the deal without Willie. Wound: Tony feels guilty for wanting to leave Jones Farmacy and do his own thing. Hidden Agenda: Tony is using this deal to boost his reputation not for Jones Farmacy. Hidden Layer: Tony is the reason Jones Farmacy has their licenses. Strange Behavior: Tony contacts his client at 11:59 to close the deal. Imminent Threat: Time is running out to close the deal.Suspicion: Why is everyone being so nice to Tony?Open Loop: Mystery: Why don’t people want to do business with Willie?Empathy/Distress: Tony feels guilty for wanting to move on from his father. Payoff: Tony closes the deal without telling Willie. Irony: Willie needs Tony more than Tony needs Willie. Setup: What happens when Willie finds out about Tony’s side deal?Start: Noelle requires him to take a breathalizer before leaving their son. Challenging Situation: Tony confides in Noelle about his role at JFPConflict: Noelle advises him to step out on his own and make a name for himselfAction: Noelle introduces Brian, the Green Diamonds VP to Tony as her boyfriend Finish: Brian hugs Ty before he and Noelle take off.
INT. TONY’S HOUSE – MYSTERY (What’s Tony’s history with alcohol?)
Noelle comes to Tony’s home to bring Ty. She gives him a breathalizer. He asks if that’s necessary. Tony confides in Noelle about what’s happening at JFP. Noelle encourages him to do more on his own. Noelle introduces Brian as her boyfriend and encourages Tony to talk to him about business. Brian hugs Ty before he and Noelle take off.
Open Loop: what made Noelle give Tony the breathalyzerMystery: What is Tony and Noelle’s history?Empathy/Distress: Tony feels disconnected from his son. Irony: Noelle wants Brian to advise Tony and Tony has way more knowledge and experience. Setup: Brian has a relationship with Ty and Noelle. Start: Flashback to six years ago, a drunk, stumbling Tony is being escorted off a baseball field Challenging Situation: Ty watches (then 6yrs old) as Tony is put in handcuffs. Conflict: Ty’s friends whisper about Ty’s dad. The parents whisper loudly. Action: Noelle embraces Ty and comforts him. Finish: Noelle puts Ty in the car then screams at Tony. Pete encourages him to get help. “saw what it did to your grandfather. Newspaper headline: Cannabis mogul arrested for public intoxication. Jones Farmacy
EXT. FLASHBACK BASEBALL PARK – MYSTERY (What happened to tony after this?)
We flashback to a severely intoxicated Tony, as he stumbles off the baseball field into the dugout. Noelle spots him and tries to intercede. We see Tony being put in handcuffs and carted off the field as Ty watches. The kids ask Ty if that is his dad. Noelle rushes to Ty and it is too late. Brian the coach is already consoling Ty. The team is dressed in green and orange. They are the Green Diamonds little league team. Brian walks Ty to the car where Noelle is railing Tony about his behavior. Pete ushers Noelle into the car and suggest to Tony that he get some help. We cut to the morning headlines: Cannabis Business Owner arrested for public intoxication.
Open Loop: Mystery: What happened at Jones Farmacy after these headlines? Empathy/Distress: Ty and Noelle are embarrassed in front of Ty’s friends. Tony leaves feeling ashamed in front of Pete and Ty. The incident is shared with the public. Payoff: Noelle and Brian have known each other for a while. Setup: The headlines can’t be good for business. Setup: What happens when Willie gets the news of Tony’s incident?Start: The guys tease Willie about his early retirement. Challenging Situation: They question if Tony is stepping up.Conflict: willie doesn’t feel Tony is ready Action: The Governor offers another four years on the LOCC.Finish: Willie asks for time to think about everything.
INT. SALEM SMOKERS LOUNGE – LOCC ROOM WOUND (Willie has not moved on from what happened six years ago.)
At the Salem lounge, the LOCC members tease Willie about his early retirement. They ask him if Tony will be running the day to day. Willie expresses his concerns about Tony being in charge. Willie tells the guys he doesn’t feel Tony is ready, reminding them of what occurred six years ago. The Governor interrupts and offers Willie another four years with the LOCC. Willie asks for time to think about everything.
Open Loop: Will Willie cave and hand things over to Tony?Mystery: What will it take for Willie to forgive Tony?Empathy/Distress: Willie is still affected by what happened six years ago. He feels betrayed by Tony. Payoff: We learn why willie doesn’t trust Tony and why he has limited power at Jones Farmacy.Irony: Willie doesn’t feel Tony is ready although Tony is sober and great at his job. Setup: Willie is considering all options for his future. Start: Elaine encourages Willie to give Tony another chance. Challenging Situation: Willie promised Elaine they could spend some time in Trinidad with her family. Conflict: Willie doesn’t trust Tony since the incident six years ago. Action: Elaine doesn’t back down on either. Finish: Willie says he’ll think about it.
INT. WILLIE’S HOUSE – SUSPICION: Did Elaine have something to do with the Atrium deal?
Willie discusses his exit plan with Elaine, who encourages him to give Tony a chance. Elaine feels Tony has made big improvements. Elaine discloses that Tony closed the Atrium deal without him. Willie becomes furious. Elaine reveals that Atrium offered Tony a solo deal. Elaine reminds him of his promise to spend time in Trinidad with her family. Elaine reminds Willie of all the good Tony has done.
Open Loop: Did Elaine set up the Atrium deal for Tony? Mystery: Will Willie go to Trinidad as promised?Empathy/Distress: Elaine understands how hard Tony has worked.Payoff: Willie knows about Tony’s deal with Atrium and is furious.Irony: Willie wants to retire but doesn’t want to give up control. Setup: Willie has to appease Elaine. Start: Henry accidentally bumps into Pete Roberts on his way to the LOCC.Challenging Situation: Henry questions Pete about the inheritance. Pete confirms.Conflict: Pete encourages Henry to talk to Willie before taking any action. Action: Pete tells Henry he can get more money if he keeps quiet. Finish: Pete gives him a referral to an estate attorney.
EXT. HEATHER’S COFFEE SHOP – DECEPTION (Willie forged documents to get his hands on Henry and Heather’s inheritance.)
Henry bumps into Pete Roberts as he is leaving Heather’s Coffee Shop. Henry corners Pete and shows him the paperwork concerning the inheritance. Pete is tightlipped at first. Pete eventually caves and gives Henry information about the inheritance and Willie’s involvement. Pete encourages Henry to talk to Willie and not to go public with the information. Pete assures Henry that he can get more of what he wants if he keeps quiet. Pete gives Henry a referral to an estate attorney.
Open Loop: How is Henry going to present the information to Willie?Mystery: How much was the inheritance?Empathy/Distress: Pete has empathy for Henry who lost his mother. Henry is frazzled learning about his uncle’s deception. Payoff: We learn how Willie got the inheritance. Irony: Henry goes to his family’s nemesis for information on his family. Mystery: Will Willie learn that Pete tipped off Henry. Start: Breaking news comes across Tony’s monitor. Challenging Situation: Pete’s staff are exiting Green Diamonds loading boxes into their cars.Conflict: Brian and Noelle try to reason with them. Pete says to let them go.Action: Brian decides to leave with them. Finish: Tony calls to check on Noelle.
INT. JONES FARMACY/INT. GREEN DIAMONDS – DECEPTION (Brian leaves without notifying Noelle.)
A breaking news report comes across Tony’s monitor as he’s working. Live footage of a walkout at Green Diamonds. Inside Green Diamonds, Brian and Noelle are trying to reason with the staff as they are packing their things and loading boxes in their cars. Pete tells them to let them go. Brian is bothered by Pete’s lack of concern. Noelle defends Pete. Brian returns to his office where he listens to the live coverage, as he hears the newscaster speak, he gives things a brief thought before deciding to leave as well. Tony watches on the live footage as Brian exits. He calls to check on Noelle who is unaware Brian has left.
Open Loop: How will Green Diamonds move forward?Mystery: Will Brian and Noelle stay together after this?Empathy/Distress: Noelle feels sorry for her father being the target. Tony offers Noelle support after seeing Brian walk out. Payoff: We learn why all the employees are leaving Irony: Noelle defends her father although she agrees with Brian and the other employees. Setup: Green Diamonds needs employees to stay afloat. Start: Pete warns Willie about Henry Challenging Situation: Willie accuses Pete of being disloyal. Conflict: Pete was trying to look out for Willie. Action: The Governor denies Pete’s LOCC renewal.Finish: Pete advises Willie to pay Henry off.INT. SMOKERS’ LOUNGE – SALEM SUSPICION (Willie is unsure if he can trust Pete to tell him the truth.
Back at the Salem lounge, Pete warns Willie that Henry has documentation about the inheritance. Pete informs Willie about his conversation with Henry. Willie is angry and accuses Pete of sabotage and jealousy. Pete explains that Henry could get the same info from any attorney. The Governor relieves Pete of his obligation to the LOCC, so he can focus on his business. Pete advises Willie to pay Henry off and fly under the radar. He reminds Willie that the LOCC does not need any extra attention.
Open Loop: What does Henry plan to do with the documentation? Mystery: Why did Pete decide to tell Willie if they’re not friends?Empathy/Distress: Willie is worried about the information that Henry has. Willie is angry with Pete for advising Henry.Payoff: Willie knows that Henry knows about the inheritance. Irony: Willie is accusing Pete of sabotage but doesn’t consider Pete his friend. Setup: How will Willie approach Henry. Start: Willie arrives back at JFP where Henry is waiting with his evidence. Challenging Situation: Willie doesn’t want Tony to know what’s going on with Henry.Conflict: Tony insists on joining Willie and Henry’s meeting. Action: Willie tells Tony he can’t be a part of the meeting. Finish: Willie tells Tony it’s nothing that concerns him.
INT. JFP OFFICES – DECEPTION (Henry and Willie both lie to Tony about their meeting.)
Henry is milling around at JFP when Willie arrives. Willie tries to casually acknowledge Henry who is being drilled by Tony. Henry wants to get right to business, so he interrupts Tony and asks to speak with Willie alone. Willie tells him it’s not Jones Farmacy business. Tony insists on being a part of the meeting stating that they’re all family. Henry drums up fake tears and says the meeting is about his mother and he wanted Willie to tell him stories about it.
Open Loop: What will Henry say to Willie?Mystery: How much does Tony know about the inheritance?Empathy/Distress: Tony feels sorry for Henry when he cries about his mother. Payoff: Henry plans to talk to Willie about the inheritance. Secret: Willie and Henry are really going to discuss the inheritance. Start: Brian confesses his love for Noelle and Ty. Challenging Situation: Brian tells her he’s leaving Green DiamondsConflict: Brian asks Noelle to leave with him. She says she’ll think about it. Action: Noelle reaches out to Tony for comfort. Noelle invites Tony to Ty’s theater rehearsal.Finish: Tony accepts. EXT. GREEN DIAMONDS PARKING LOT – HIDDEN LAYER (Noelle has to choose between her fiancé and her family.)
Brian confesses his love for Noelle and Ty. He lays it on thick. We sense he is up to something. Brian tells Noelle he’s not returning to Green Diamonds and that he is exploring new opportunities. Brian wants Noelle to leave too. She says she’ll think about it, but she is concerned about how it will impact she and Pete’s relationship. Noelle reaches out to Tony for comfort and guidance. Noelle invites Tony to Ty’s theater rehearsal. He accepts.
Open Loop: What will Noelle decide about Green Diamonds?Mystery: Why does Brian want her to leave?Empathy/Distress: Noelle is torn between her fiancé and her father. Noelle doesn’t want to betray her father. Payoff: Brian isn’t returning to Green Diamonds. Noelle is trusting Tony more. Irony: Brian wants Noelle to quit her job but he hasn’t secured any employment. Setup: Tony and Noelle plan to meet up at Ty’s rehearsal. Setup: Noelle has to make a difficult decision. Start: The news of the Green Diamonds strike spreads. Challenging Situation: Tony overhears Henry mention the LOCC to Willie.Conflict: Tony is questioned by the media about Green Diamonds.Action: Henry threatens to go to the LOCC about the inheritance.Finish: Willie lies to Tony.
INT. JONES FARMACY – INTRIGUING WORLD (The world of Corporate Cannabis)
A series of shots of the Green Diamonds walkout:
The nightly news anchor talks about the walkout
The dispensaries are low on Green Diamond products.
Green Diamond stock prices drop.
Inside the Smokers Lounge the same news plays
The large monitor in the Jones Farmacy plays the same story.
As Tony pulls into the parking lot the media rush him asking his thoughts and about Noelle. Tony has only kind words for Green Diamonds and their staff and the Roberts family. Willie doesn’t have any kind words for Pete Roberts. Henry approaches also has some kind, we think, words for Pete Roberts. Once Henry is out of sight, Tony rushes to question Willie about why Henry is hanging around. Tony accuses him of freeloading. Willie lies and tells Tony that Henry is interested in the cannabis business.
Open Loop: Green Diamonds has been exposed for license fraud. Mystery: Will Tony learn the real reason Henry is in town?Empathy/Distress: Tony has kind words for Green Diamonds and the Roberts family. Payoff: willie isn’t going to tell Tony about the inheritanceIrony: Tony accuses Henry of freeloading, but Willie stole Henry’s money. Setup: Henry refers to Pete as his attorney. Start: Willie reaches out to Pete for advice. Challenging Situation: Pete tells him to offer him a stake in the company. Conflict: Willie wants to pay Henry to go away. Action: Willie takes Pete’s advice and arranges a meeting with Henry. Finish: Henry invites Pete to speak on his behalf.
INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE SALEM – CONSPIRACY: (Pete devises a plan so that he and Willie both fly under the radar.)
Willie reaches out to Pete for advice. Pete tells Willie to offer Henry a stake in the company. Willie immediately rejects the idea. He says he doesn’t want any deal that will keep Henry around longer. Pete advises Willie that it will “cost him less” if he gives Henry stock instead of money. Pete convinces Willie to follow through with his advice to keep the LOCC out of this matter. Pete reminds him how much they have to lose, and he can’t stand any more bad press right now. Willie sets up a meeting with Henry. Henry invites Pete.
Open Loop: Will Henry accept the offer?Mystery: What happens if Henry doesn’t want the stock and demands cash?Empathy/Distress: Willie is worried he will lose his company. Pete is worried he will lose everything. Payoff: Irony: willie doesn’t trust Pete but reaches out to him for advice. Setup: This meeting is happening. Start: Tony sits at Ty’s play rehearsal next to Noelle. Challenging Situation: Tony asks Noelle what’s going on with Henry, Pete and Willie. Conflict: Noelle refuses to talk business. Action: Noelle asks Tony to take Ty with him for the night. Finish: Noelle informs Tony that she is going to meet Brian to talk.
INT. CHILDREN’S PLAYHOUSE – Strange Behavior: Tony and Noelle don’t trust one another’s intentions.
Tony and Noelle sit next to one another at the rehearsal. Tony asks Noelle if she knows anything about what’s going on with Henry, Pete, and Willie. Noelle denies knowing anything and refuses to talk about business. She accuses him of coming for that reason. Noelle asks tony to take Ty for the night. He accuses her of just inviting him for that reason. Noelle denies that and says she wants him to start spending more time with Ty. Noelle informs him that she is meeting up with Brian after rehearsal.
Open Loop: Noelle is starting to trust Tony more with Ty. Mystery: What will Noelle decide about Green Diamonds?Empathy/Distress: Noelle is still upset about the Green Diamonds incident. Irony: Noelle asks to talk to Tony and then accused him of focusing on work. Setup: Brian and Noelle are meeting up. Start: Henry hands Pete an envelope. Challenging Situation: Pete is dismayed by the info in the document. Conflict: Pete advises Willie that Henry says he will only accept CEO. Action: Pete advises Willie to take the deal. Finish: Willie signs the agreement. INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE SALEM – MYSTERY: Why does Henry want to be CEO?
Henry passes Pete an envelope. Pete pulls out the document and thoroughly reads it.. He is appalled and whispers something to Henry. Henry is not budging. Pete speaks with Willie and explains that Henry is only willing to take the CEO position, not the shares or a payout. Pete explains to Henry what he is giving up by passing on the shares. Henry doesn’t back down and stays adamant about being CEO. Pete has a talk with willie and tells him to take this deal, that it is even better than the shares in his favor. Willie asks how he’s supposed to explain that to Tony and the staff. Pete reminds him that it’s easier to disappoint his staff than to talk to the FBI. Willie signs and agrees to Henry Jones being CEO of Jones Farmacy.
Open Loop: Willie has to announce to Tony and the staff that Henry will be CEOMystery: What are Henry’s intentions as CEO? Empathy/Distress: Pete is worried about future backlash from Henry. Willie is worried about hurting Tony and his staff. Willie is also worried about a walkout like Pete had. Payoff: Henry doesn’t want money, he wants to be CEO. Payoff: Willie complies with Henry’s request. Irony: Henry doesn’t ask for money although he owes the sharks money. Setup:Start: Willie second guesses himself with Pete. Challenging Situation: Pete gives Willie the truth. Conflict: Willie doesn’t know how to tell Elaine. Action: Pete reminds Willie of how he got the inheritance. He tells him to be as convincing as possible. Finish: Willie accuses Pete of sabotage.
INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE SALEM – Mystery: What happens if Willie reneges on the deal with Henry?
Willie second guesses his decision to make Henry CEO. He drinks and smokes nervously. Pete gives Willie the truth about how he got the inheritance. Willie becomes defensive and emotional about betraying his dead sister. Pete explains to Willie that because acquired the inheritance through forgery, that he could face jail time and a six-figure fine and may have to fork over half the company to Henry if Henry gets the right attorney. He could lose his seat on the LOCC. Willie worries about how or if to tell Elaine. Pete advises him to come clean with Elaine. Willie accuses Pete of trying to sabotage his marriage and his business. Willie doesn’t like the newly redeemed Pete.
Open Loop: Will Willie tell Elaine about the blackmail?Mystery: What happens if Willie reneges on the deal with Henry?Empathy/Distress: Willie is regretful about betraying his sister. Payoff: We know how Willie got the inheritance. Irony: Willie accuses Pete of sabotage but still listens to his advice. Setup: Willie has to face his Tony and the world with the announcement of Henry as CEO. Start: Willie announces Henry as the CEO (via Twitter?)Challenging Situation: The staff start buzzing.Conflict: The staff look to Tony for guidance. Tony is clueless. He heads into Willie’s Action: Tony resigns from JFP via Twitter, effective immediately.Finish: Tony storms out.
INT. JFP LOBBY Secret: Henry blackmailed Willie into making him CEO.
Upon Pete’s advice, Willie announces Henry as the new CEO of Jones Farmacy from the LOCC offices. The staff gather in the lobby to view it. It hits Twitter and more staff immediately start buzzing. The staff migrate towards Tony’s office where he has not heard the news. Tony googles the announcement and sees the photo of Willie and Henry with the headline. Tony is furious but tries not to show it. “Jones Farmacy announces new CEO, Founder’s nephew Henry Jones.” The staff rapid fire questions at him. Tony charges down to Willie’s office, which is empty. Tony storms out, then later tweets his resignation. He hops in his car and observes the parking spot “Reserved for CEO”
Open Loop: The staff may walk out like at Green Diamonds. Mystery: Is Tony headed to confront Willie?Empathy/Distress: This is the ultimate betrayal for Tony by his father and cofounder. Payoff: The world knows Henry is the new CEO. Payoff: Tony quits immediately and tells the world. Mystery: How will Willie explain this to Tony?Setup: Tony is furious and headed somewhere. Start: Tony is fuming mad. Challenging Situation: Tony drives with no direction. Conflict: Tony’s phone rings nonstop. Action: Tony takes the Salem exit. Finish: He pulls into the LOCC parking lot where he sees his father and the other LOCC leaving.
INT. TONY’S CAR Wound: Tony is furious and hurt by Willie’s actions.
Tony is furious. He can barely focus on the highway. He drives, heaving, not paying much attention to the signs. His phone rings and rings disrupting his music. He finally turns off his phone and turns on the radio. A catchy tune plays and then the DJ breaks in with announcement of Tony’s departure from Jones Farmacy and Henry being named CEO. He takes the next exit to Salem. He pulls into the LOCC parking lot where he spots Willie and Henry and the LOCC members.
Open Loop: Will Tony pull up and confront Willie?Mystery: Does Tony want to hurt Henry?Empathy/Distress: Tony feels betrayed by Willie and Henry. Payoff: Tony ends up in the LOCC parking lot. Irony: Henry is blackmailing Willie but Tony believes they’re in cahoots. Setup: What is Tony’s next move for employment. Mystery: Will Tony fight for his share of Jones Farmacy?Start: The business crew discuss Tony’s announcement. Challenging Situation: Pete takes mental notes during the conversation.Conflict: The guys mention that Tony and Brian have both inquiring about LOCC activity. Action: Pete sends Tony a text asking for a meeting. Finish: Tony accepts the invite.
INT. SMOKERS LOUNGE PDX – Hidden Agenda: Pete is collecting intel on Tony.
The guys are discussing Tony’s departure and speculating over why he left. They bring up the Green Diamonds walkout when they realize who Pete is. Pete listens carefully and takes notes. The guys mention that Tony and Brian have both been inquiring about LOCC activity. Pete asks more questions. “What did he want to know?” Pete speculates. The guys are open to sharing at first, then realize Pete is LOCC himself and may not be trustworthy. Pete texts Tony asking for a meeting. Tony accepts the invite.
Mystery: Why does Pete want to meet up with Tony?Empathy/Distress: Pete expresses concern about Tony’s wellbeing.Payoff: Tony agrees to meet with Pete. Setup: Tony agrees to meet with Pete. Mystery: Why are Tony and Brian both inquiring about LOCC activity?Start: Tony approaches Brian. Challenging Situation: Brian is reluctant to talk to Tony. Conflict: Tony shares his suspicions about Willie. Action: Brian shares what he knows about Pete and Henry. Finish: Tony ponders his next move.
NT. SMOKERS’ LOUNGE – SALEM Intriguing World: World of Legal Cannabis
The Salem lounge is mostly empty except for a few faithful. Brian is in the VIP room smoking. Tony approaches. Brian tells Tony he shouldn’t have come looking for him. Tony shares his suspicions about Willie and the LOCC. Brian listens. Brian is hesitant to share but shares limited information. Tony and Brian discuss Ty. Tony thanks Brian for being in Ty’s life.
Open Loop: Why is Brian interested in LOCC activity?Mystery: What does Tony plan to do with the information he received?Empathy/Distress: Tony feels he has failed as a father and husband. Tony is jealous of Brian’s relationship with Ty. Payoff: Willie has some involvement in suspicious LOCC activity. Irony: Tony is grateful for Brian but also jealous of the relationship Brian has with Ty.Setup: Pete may also be involved in questionable LOCC activity. Start: He struggles in his role.Challenging Situation: Henry fumbles a presentation. Conflict: The staff have concerns that Henry can’t resolve.Action: Henry reaches out to Tony for advice. Finish: Tony offers him a deal.
INT. JONES FARMACY – Hidden Layer: Tony blackmails Henry for LOCC information in exchange for his help with the business.
Henry struggles in his new role as CEO. He cannot answer staff questions. He does not know laws, rules, etc. Henry fumbles a presentation and has to be saved by a lower staff member. The staff go to Willie with their concerns, but Willie is always unavailable. Henry reaches out to Tony for advice. Tony is hesitant at first, then later offers him help in exchange for more information on Willie’s activities and contacts.
Open Loop: Will Henry agree to give up information on Willie?Setup: Henry has no idea what he’s doing as CEO. Empathy/Distress: Henry is panicking and making bad business moves. Tony feels sorry for Henry. Payoff: Tony agrees to help Henry, with conditions. Irony: Henry is blackmailing Willie. Tony is blackmailing Henry. Setup: The staff are sick of saving Henry. Start: Tony and Heather have a talk about Willie. Challenging Situation: Heather suggests Tony talk to Willie. Conflict: Someone has been in their grandfather’s empty house. Action: Tony and Heather go to check out the house and reminisce over old photos. Finish: Henry listens from the attic.
INT. GRANDPA JONES’ HOUSE – Wound: Heather talked to Tony about having unresolved issues with her mom and dad.
Tony meets Heather at Grandpa Jones house. As they enter, Henry dashes for the attic, leaving behind a box of old pictures and memorabilia. He surveys the house as if he hasn’t been there for a while. He takes it all in and enters the front door. Heather shows him signs that someone has been in the house, although nothing is missing, there’s this box that wasn’t there before.. Tony suggests it was Henry or could’ve been Willie. Tony then checks the key stash spot outside. The key is in its place. They search the entire house. Tony questions Heather about the box of memorabilia. Heather says it’s just some old stuff. Tony explores the contents of the box, but nothing really jumps out other than some family photos. They stroll down memory lane while looking at old pictures of Heather and Henry’s mom, Monica. Heather explains how their mom’s death really fucked up Henry due to unresolved issues. Heather encourages Tony to talk to Willie. Henry listens from the attic. Heather asks if Tony wants to check the attic. He says no because that’s where their grandfather’s ghost is.
Open Loop: The box of memorabilia was not there the last time Heather was in the house. Mystery: Tony and Heather aren’t sure who has been in the house. Empathy/Distress: Heather and Tony reminisce over old photos. Heather has unresolved issues with both of her parents. Henry is sad as he listens from the attic. Payoff: Tony and Heather didn’t find anything related to the inheritance. Irony: Henry was hiding but left the box of photos in plain sight. Setup: Henry overheard Tony and Heather’s conversation.Start: Tony receives a string of emails offering him opportunities. Challenging Situation: Tony receives an email from Pete. He is unsure if he can trust him.Conflict: Pete wants to talk more about the LOCC concerns Action: Tony agrees to meet in Salem. Finish: Heather advises him to be careful.
INT. HEATHER’S COFFEE SHOP – Suspicion: Heather believes the LOCC may be dangerous extortionists.
Tony’s email dings continuously. He gets a string of job opportunities, one after the other. One of the emails is from Pete. Tony is leery about opening Pete’s email. Heather encourages him to read it. Pete wants to meet to discuss more LOCC concerns. Tony agrees to meet, but only at Heather’s after hours. Heather advises him to be careful with Pete and what he shares. Heather informs him of an unsolved incident in which she believes the LOCC were involved.
Open Loop: Heather’s friend left town two years ago and was never heard from again. Mystery: Why is Tony so leery of Pete all of a sudden?Empathy/Distress: Tony is worried about being associated with Pete. Heather is worried about Tony’s safety with Pete. Payoff: Tony will meet with Pete. Irony: Tony has been looking for information that Heather has had all along. Setup: Tony plans to look further into Heather’s accusations.
ACT 4
Start: Tony talks to Willie about the course of events. Challenging Situation: Willie doesn’t give Tony much information. Conflict: Willie tries to convince Tony to return and work with Henry. Action: Tony declines Willie’s offer.Finish: Willie warns Tony to be careful with Pete.
INT. WILLIE’S HOUSE – Wound: Tony feels insignificant at Jones Farmacy.
Tony and Willie have a conversation about the turn of events. Willie doesn’t share much. Tony tries to press for more information. Willie shuts down and remains quiet. When Tony turns to leave, Willie tries to convince him to return to Jones Farmacy and run the company with Henry. Tony declines the offer. Willie warns Tony to be careful with Pete and Brian. He says they’re not to be trusted.
Open Loop: Tony still does not know about the blackmail. Mystery: Will Willie still retire with Henry in charge alone?Empathy/Distress: Willie is shut off to Tony. Tony feels Willie doesn’t care about their relationship. Payoff: Tony and Willie finally talk alone. Payoff: Tony isn’t going back to Jones Farmacy. Irony: Willie isn’t trustworthy, but warning Tony about Pete and Brian. Setup: Elaine is still expecting to leave for Trinidad.Start: Tony reaches out to Noelle for advice.Challenging Situation: She advises him to follow his own intuition. Conflict: Brian arrives to pick up Noelle. Action: Tony confronts Brian. Finish: Brian reminds Tony that they’re not friends.
INT. GREEN DIAMONDS – Strange Behavior: Noelle is not as open to talking as before, so she deflects.
Tony pays Noelle a visit at work. He wants to vent about Willie asking him to return to the family business and pursuing a LOCC investigation. Noelle advises him to follow his own intuition, and to do what’s best for himself and Ty. She explains that she can’t be of much help because she is also torn about the family business. Brian arrives to pick up Noelle. Tony accuses Brian of being a traitor. Brian reminds Tony that they are not friends, and he has no obligation to him.
Open Loop: Noelle has to decide if she is going to follow Brian. Mystery: Why is Noelle behaving strangely now?Empathy/Distress: Tony is feeling guilty and having second thoughts. Noelle is also in turmoil. Payoff: Brian wants Noelle to leave in case Green Diamonds goes down and loses their license.Irony: Willie told tony that Brian couldn’t be trusted. Now he sees for himself.Setup: Tony sees Brian can’t be trusted. Start: Tony arrives to clean out his office. Challenging Situation: Tony spots Henry talking to an unknown man.Conflict: Tony receives a text from Pete wanting to meet. Action: Willie questions Henry about the identity of the guyFinish: Henry lies to Willie and Tony.
INT. JONES FARMACY – Deception: Henry lies to Willie and Tony about the identity of “Ronny”
Tony arrives at Jones Farmacy to clean out his office. When he enters, Henry is talking to an unknown man. This is one of the sharks from the teaser. Tony receives a text from Pete wanting to meet, just as Willie approaches him. Willie, Tony, and Henry convene. Willie asks Henry about the guy he was speaking with in the lobby. Henry lies to Willie and Tony about the identity of the guy. He says he is a potential client. Tony fires off questions. From what company? What kind of business does he want to do? What kind of license does he have? Henry answers them all with flying colors.
Open Loop: Will Ronny give up Henry’s location?Mystery: Who is Ronny’s boss?Empathy/Distress: Henry is under duress about how he’ll come up with the money. Payoff: Irony: Henry is hiding out from the sharks, but asked for the CEO position, which puts him in the spotlight. Setup: It’s only a matter of time before the sharks locate Henry. Start: Pete gives Tony info on the LOCC activity. Challenging Situation: Pete offers to repair things with Tony and Noelle. Conflict: Pete informs Tony of willie’s involvement in LOCC activity. Action: Pete offers Tony the VP position.Finish: Tony doesn’t say no.
INT. GREEN DIAMONDS – Conspiracy: The LOCC is extorting cannabis business owners.
Pete gives Tony more information on the LOCC and Willie’s involvement. Pete admits to having some involvement as well. Tony is appalled by the information on Willie extorting fellow cannabis businessmen. Pete confesses to Tony that he wants to get away from that life and get Green Diamonds back in the black. Pete talks to Tony about his outlook for Green Diamonds and suggests that Tony come on board as his Vice President. Tony is flattered and does not say no. Tony says he needs to run it past Noelle just to smooth out any kinks. Pete ups the stakes by offering to repair things between Tony and Noelle, and getting the supervised visitation agreement lifted. Tony asks for twenty-four hours to think about it.
Open Loop: Tony has info to incriminate the whole LOCC.Mystery: How will Tony expose the LOCC?Empathy/Distress: Tony is pissed that the LOCC is extorting hard working people. Payoff: Willie and Pete are both involved in the extortion ring at the LOCC. Irony: Pete offers Tony a job right after telling him he’s been extorting business owners. Setup: Pete offers Tony the VP position at Green Diamonds.
Act 5
Start: Tony receives numerous job opportunities.Challenging Situation: Conflict: Tony wants to be a VP but doesn’t want to cross JFP. Action: Tony gets a text inviting him to VIP at the Blazers game. Finish: Tony replies “I’ll be there.”
INT. TONY’S HOUSE – Hidden Layer: Willie and the Governor have business outside the LOCC.
Tony sits in his home office reminiscing, looking over old photos. He continues to receive opportunities via email. Tony does some research on the LOCC based on the information Brian and Pete provided. Tony sees several photos of Willie with the Governor. Tony sees Willie and the Governor arriving on a private jet in Trinidad together. Along with Heather’s friend that was being extorted. An aide packs several bags of luggage. They lead her to a car, load the bags and the car drives off. Wiilie and the Governor get back on the plane. He gets a text from Noelle inviting him to the Green Diamonds suite at the Blazers game. Ty will be there with Pete, she won’t be. Tony replies “I’ll be there.”
Open Loop: Tony hasn’t given Pete an answer yet. Mystery: what do Willie and the Governor have going on in TrinidadEmpathy/Distress: Tony worries about what he will learn about his father. Tony worries about his father going to prison. Payoff: Tony confirms Willie is involved. Irony: Willie is in the video with the woman that Heather says was being extorted. Setup: Pete will be expecting an answer from Tony about the VP position. Start: Tony stops by the LOCC suite where Willie is celebrating his early retirement. Challenging Situation: Henry is present celebrating with Willie. Conflict: Tony informs them he’s a guest of Green Diamonds. Action: Tony invites Willie to stop by and see Ty. Finish: Tony says his goodbyes and exits.
INT. MODA CENTER – LOCC SUITE Strange Behavior: Tony’s new VP position is announced unexpectedly. Suspicion: Willie decided to retire and leave for Trinidad.
The LOCC crew are all there celebrating Willie’s retirement and hiatus to Trinidad. Henry is there as well celebrating. Willie and Henry tell TONY how much they miss him at JFP. Tony informs him that he is a guest of Green Diamonds tonight. Tony tells Willie to swing by to see Ty. Tony says his goodbyes and exits. A Jumbotron message announcing Tony as the new VP of Green Diamonds comes across the Jumbotron. Tony waves to the crowd.
Open Loop: What will Willie do now?Mystery: What does this announcement mean for Jones Farmacy?Empathy/Distress: Willie is devastated by the news that Tony is VP of Green Diamonds. Payoff: Tony accepted the position at Green Diamonds. Irony: Willie didn’t invite Tony but expected him to hang out with him. Setup: The world knows Tony is the new VP of Green Diamonds. Start: Willie cancels his flight from his phone. Challenging Situation: Willie immediately gets a text from Elaine. Conflict: The loan sharks are at the game. Action: The loan sharks spot Henry on the Jumbotron. Finish: Henry’s phone buzzes.
INT. MODA CENTER – MOMENTS LATER – Imminent Threat: The sharks spot Henry in the arena.
Willie immediately cancels his flight to Trinidad. His phone rings nonstop from Elaine. Across the arena, the loan sharks are sitting in the stands. The announcer gives Green Diamonds a shout out, posting their faces on the Jumbotron. Then the LOCC’s guest suite. Henry is spotted on the Jumbotron. He tries to keep it subtle and quickly turns away from the camera. He pretends to get a call to turn the media away from him. “Duty calls.” His phone buzzes while he holds it to his ear. It’s the sharks. “We see you sucka.”
Open Loop: Will Henry get past the sharks. Mystery: What will the sharks do to Henry?Empathy/Distress: Elaine is upset about the canceled flight. Willie is panicking. Payoff: Willie decides against leaving for Trinidad. The Shark sees Henry. Irony: Henry’s phone rings while he’s pretending to take a call. Setup: The sharks have their eye on Henry.
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