Lesson 12

[Timothy Barley]

Tim’s lesson #12

[David Halligan]

Dave’s Level 3 Action Emotions

What I learned doing this assignment:

Even though my story has changed significantly from Lesson 1, I find it beneficial to recall the various tracks and maps we’ve created along the way.

Outline a Level 3 scene:

Excitement: The Hero’s races his scooter while being chased by robots toward a narrow wooden bridge that isn’t wide enough (and maybe not strong enough) for the Hero and a robot to race side by side.

Danger: The Hero speeds along the skinny bridge unaware that the Villain and his crew are rolling a boulder toward the far end.

Adrenaline: The Hero hits high gear trying to reach the end of the bridge before the boulder comes down a hill and crushes him.

First Draft of Level 3 Scene:

EXT. FOREST – DAY

The Hero on his Vespa GS scooter races along a path through the woods. He goes airborne as he flies over a knoll.

Two robots on wheels and a drone are in hot pursuit. One robot does a wild flip but lands upright.

The Hero fords a stream, splashing a robot. A little wiper pops out and cleans its visor. Squeak, squeak.

The robots try to grab the Hero each time they get close. The drone strafes the hero who swats him like a bug.

They race neck and neck toward a narrow wooden bridge.

ON BRIDGE

The Hero cuts off the robots sending one of them into a gorge.

The Hero zips along the rickety bridge. The second robot follows closely.

The drone flies past the Hero and speeds to the other side.

ACROSS GORGE

The drone flies up a hill where the Villain dislodges a boulder.

BACK ON BRIDGE

Loose planks fall into the gorge as the Hero and the robot speed along.

BACK ACROSS GORGE

The boulder picks up speed as it rolls toward the bridge.

BACK ON BRIDGE

The Hero is never going to make it across in time. At the last second he jerks the scooter off the side of the bridge, skids safely to a stop.

The huge rock flattens the second robot, continues to roll to the center of the bridge. The timbers strain and creak.

ON GORGE

The first robot reboots, starts to move away.

SOUND OF: bridge collapsing

The flattened robot lands on the rebooted one.

The boulder crushes them both.

BACK ACROSS GORGE

The Hero rights his scooter, dusts himself off, and drives away into the woods.

[Raz Ray]

Raz Ray: Level 3 Actions and Emotions.

What I learned from doing this assignment? After going from Danger to excitement, it’s rather complex going from excitement to adrenaline.

Danger: The Hero enters the penthouse of the world’s wealthiest man with her Death Squad group of killers. The Hero is a young girl carrying a naginata. The rest of the team surrounds the old man villain as he sits at his desk. The Hero approaches the desk and looks the villain in the eye. “The is an Arrest, surrender you live, resist you die.”

Excitement: This triggers the old Villain, and he turns into his reptilian self. The Death Squad behind the Hero takes action as they fire bullets that are bouncing off the Reptillian man’s skin. A colossal fight ensures that both of them are going back and forth, trying to kill each other, even knowing that the only thing that can kill this immortal beast is the Hero.

Adrenaline: After the Villain defeats the rest of the Death Squad team, he walks toward the Hero to confront her. He wants her weapon for himself. They both know they are the only ones that can kill each other. The Hero does not want to kill the villain, so she tries to be diplomatic, but she’s running out of time, and the villain is running out of patience.

[David Halligan]

Raz. I’ve been following your posts. Looks like you’ve got a grasp on your story. Good luck with it.
Dave, Pgh.
ps. I watched smiths make Naginatas on “Forged in Fire.” Awesome weapons.

[Kevin Lobo]

Kevin Lobo’s Level 3 Emotions: Danger, Excitement, and Adrenaline

What I learned…is that how well crafted the example in the lesson is. I used it as a template to guide my actions and the action steps in my head found an exact structure to flow based on the given example.

Outline of a scene(s) that includes

SETUP: The hero returns to his apartment having escaped the government agents who he now realizes are acting as part of the false setup that is the rival gang.

EXT. THE OLD RUNDOWN BUILDING – CONTINUOUS . .

The hero calmly exits the taxi knowing that he is re-entering the his first lab where he has already been attacked. He knows the government agents are following him and will most likely take down the local gang set to exact revenge on him for not bringing them the crypto they asked for as protection money.

SUSPENSE …Will the local gang hanging around attack and shoot him in the busy street.

With his heart thumping hard, expecting to be struck by blows or bullets at any time he calmly swipes into the building.

A local gang member gets into the elevator for him, waiting for the door to shut before pulling out his hand from his jacket which the hero assumes most likely holds a gun.

THE GANG MEMBER IN THE ELEVATOR

SURPRISE: Noticing the gang member’s hesitation in shooting him in sight of the other residents, the hero presses the door hold button allowing other residents to come in to the elevator thus creating a bit of an insurance against an attack.

CLICK! CLICK!

The hero quickly presses multiple level buttons ensuring that the elevator ride will be interrupted at multiple levels giving him time to…

SLAM!

– press the slamming elevator door and squeeze out thus leaving the gang member trapped in the elevator.

INT. THE BUILDING STAIRCASE – CONTINUOUS

ADRENALINE: – The hero starts racing up the building steps racing to his 7^th floor apartment to reach and salvage some of his equipment.

He has to pause multiple times to catch his breath after a few flights of steps leaving us in suspense if he losing precious time or will someone come racing up after him or having anticipated his move will the elevator gang member have alerted someone waiting at the top to come down the steps.

EXCITEMENT: Having made it safely to the 7^th floor, the hero calmly walks to his apartment past other residents so as not to raise unnecessary alarm.

He begins to gain confidence, enters his apartment, locks the door and shoves a heavy cupboard against the door.

Having gained a step ahead, the hero hesitates and seeing his equipment intact, hesitates and quickly logs in and triggers off the initial payload that will initiate the cyber-attack on his own controlling gang.

The gang are at the door breaking down the door.

INT. THE HERO’S SECRET APARTMENT – CONTINUOUS

DANGER: The hero sees the cyber-attack kick off with multiple lines of code scrolling across his screen, He verifies from another computer if the attack initiated off the cloud is good.

He hears the door go down and the blocking cupboard pushed over.

BANG! BANG!

The gang has entered the apartment shooting wildly.

SUSPENSE: The hero moves quickly to unplug his laptop, grab his documents, wallet but no sign of the gang… he hears the voices and radios of other gunmen and knows that the government agents have reached, probably shot down the local gang and now they are coming for him.

EXT. THE FIRE ESCAPE – CONTINUOUS

The only escape left for the hero is the fire escape and he calmly exist out on to the old, rickety fire escape, pressing back hard against the slimy walls to stay hidden and safe from a deadly fall to his death.

EXT. A LEDGE – CONTINUOUS

FEAR: – The hero hears the shouts of the government agents and the return replies and static on their radios as they look up and down the fire escape. He presses back hard into the ledge from both fears, getting shot by the government agents or from falling over to his death.

BEGIN INTERCUTS BETWEEN THE HERO’S ALERTS FROM HIS ATTACKS AND THE GOVERNEMNT AGENTS IN HIS APARTMENT.

The hero begins to descend down another level on the fire escape and sees…

…the agents begin to descend down after him…

ADRENALINE: . ..We see the hero gain confidence in taking two steps at a time as he sees the next level in sight –

– he also begins to hear voices below as other agents anticipating his arrival below are beginning to swarm the lower floors –

– he sees the window to an apartment open and slips in and shuts the window behind him – the alerts of his attacks reach a peak requiring further inputs from his… he has to make a decision… should he pause and log in and keep the attack going or continue to escape.

Eventually, he finds a quiet spot in the washroom as the old woman occupant of the apartment come around slowly to check her suspicison…

He hides behind the washroom door, puts his phone on mute and logs in – and thus successfully taking his cyber attack to the next level.

– He searches finds an old coat and hat, dons it and leads the old woman to the staircase mingling quickly with the other escaping occupants and thus hiding successfully.

He exits out on to the road and in the melee quickly slips away as he sees more government agent cars race back to the building.

EXCITEMENT: – he slips into a deli and looks at this alerts…the attack is succeeding…

RELIEF: He exits out of the back door of the deli and slips into a taxi. He hooks into the controlling gangs network and sees the panic messages and the interrupted data as the network goes down.

He has reached the center of the city and pauses comfortably hiding in a busy bus line knowing that he has set things in motion.

END INTERCUTS

[John Puffer]

John’s Level 3 Action Emotions (# 12)

What I learned…let the adrenaline flow.

Outline:

DANGER: Continuing where I left off in Lesson 10… The Russians chasing Evan and Julie burst through the wall of flame from the napalm. They got ambushed, sidetracked and behind, but not much and not for long. The Russian’s car screeches to a stop. One thug aims, sniper style, at Julie’s car, hits a tire, side rearview, taillight.

EXCITEMENT: Evan can’t drive much farther now. He slides sideways to a stop on the dirt road. They each get a Glock. Julie takes the grenade launcher, runs to her right into the dense forest. Evan, left. Russians take after them but are behind. They listen, hear noises, shoot in those directions. Evan and Julie shoot back just to let the thugs know they have guns. That slows them down. Julie and Evan circle back to the two vehicles, hiding, as planned, in wait for the thugs.

ADRENALIN: The sun has set, and the Russians aren’t stupid. They know what’s waiting for them unless they get back first. It’s a foot race now. Julie gets back first. Sees one thug. Fires one shot. Out of ammo. The shot hits the Russian in the pelvis, though, and he goes down. Julie grabs her back-up revolver just as side window glass shatters in front of her. She turns and fires. Three shots, all in the chest. The other Russian, mad with rage, distracted by Evan, takes a bullet in the shoulder, two in the chest. He fires wildly as he falls dying, the bullet piercing the gas tank of his own vehicle. KA-BOOM!

INT. TAURUS – DAY

SURPRISE: Evan checks the rear view. The Russians made it through the wall of fire.

DANGER: Two bullets ricochet off the Taurus’ rear window. The passenger-side mirror shatters, startling Julie. The right rear tire blows.

SUSPENSE: Julie spots an unpaved crossroad up ahead. Tells Evan to take it. Positions herself to unlock and open the suitcase.

SURPRISE: Evan yanks the car ninety degrees right. Julie veers sideways into him.

EXT. DIRT ROAD – CONTINUIOUS

SUSPENSE: Dense woods crowd both sides. Julie grabs the launcher. Evan hopes she’s read the instructions. Julie keeps working away. Loads a grenade. Leans out the window, prepares for a shot.

Evan swerves just as Julie fires.

EXCITEMENT: The grenade bursts well behind the TWO Russians, Tzakov and Motkin. Motkin checks the gas cloud in the rear-view. Knows it was a grenade. Tells Tzakov to stop the car. Tzakov brakes hard! Motkin kicks open the door. Aims, sniper style through the window, and rapid fires.

DANGER: Taurus’s left taillight shatters. Left rear tire blows.

FEAR: Evan and Julie have to ditch the car and run for it.

SURPRISE: Julie rams her Glock into Evan’s belt with alarming swiftness. Tells Evan not to lose it.

EXCITEMENT: Julie tucks the other Glock into her waist. Grabs the launcher and her sandwich, darts out the passenger door into the woods, right. Evan power-locks the doors, then bolts into the woods, left.

DANGER: Closing in from a hundred yards, the Russians spot them running off in different directions. The Explorer grinds to a halt behind the Taurus. The Russians split up, bolt into the woods.

SUSPENSE: Motkin stops, listens, hears Julie, fires several rounds.

EXT. WOODS – CONTINUOUS

ADRENALINE: Julie veers left. Bullets whiz by, hit trees. Motkin follows her into the woods.

SUSPENSE: Tzakov stops and listens, hears Evan’s footsteps, shoots in Evan’s direction.

ADRENALINE: Evan evades. Tzakov runs after him. Julie sprints onward, veers left again. Evan runs like a madman. Stumbles and lands hard.

SURPRISE: The Glock dislodges from his belt, but he doesn’t notice. He picks himself up and bolts.

ADRENALINE: Julie clutches the launcher and runs for dear life. She stops and listens to Motkin’s distant footsteps, takes a bite of sandwich, looks back. Motkin stops, hears Julie start to run again, farther away now, shoots anyway. Julie blazes onward, veering left toward the dirt road and the cars.

SUSPENSE: Tzakov stops, listens, hears distant footsteps, fires several rounds.

DANGER: Evan hears bullets whizzing by and hitting trees. He sprints on. Tzakov darts toward Evan.

ADRENALINE: Julie spots the unpaved road. She dashes toward it. Reaches the tree line and stops to catch her breath. She sees it’s safe, darts out of the woods, blunders into a deep, grassy ditch stumbles, falls, drops her sandwich. The launcher fires.

IN THE WOODS

SUSPENSE: Motkin stops, listens, sprints left.

DIRT ROAD

FEAR: Julie gathers herself, hobbling slightly, then pulls out her Glock. She sprints toward the Taurus.

IN THE WOODS

EXCITEMENT: Tzakov thinks he hears something and stops just as the grenade explodes behind him. He shields his head and ears, scampers back toward the cars.

DIRT ROAD

RELIEF: Julie reaches the Taurus. She grabs the door handle. Locked. A bullet pierces the side window.

ADRENALINE: She turns, shoots at Motkin.

IN THE WOODS

DANGER: Evan hears the shots. He bolts toward the cars.

DIRT ROAD

EXCITEMENT: Motkin shoots at Julie, who hits the ground hard, returns fire, heart thumping.

EXCITEMENT: Motkin takes five bullets in rapid succession. Falls back, dead. Julie checks herself. No holes. Excellent. Tzakov looms from the woods, winded, coughing. He sees Julie beside the car.

DANGER: Julie hears rustling at the edge of the woods. She turns, sees Tzakov, fires one shot, then — CLICK, CLICK — out of bullets.

EXCITEMENT: Tzakov takes that bullet in the pelvis, though, and stumbles backwards.

DANGER: Evan emerges from the woods behind the Explorer, spies Julie.

SUSPRNSE: Julie reaches in through the Taurus’ shattered window. Grabs her back-up revolver.

EXCITEMENT: Evan spots Tzakov and reaches for his Glock. Not there.

ADRENAKINE: Tzakov recovers and aims at Julie. Evan SHOUTS at him. Tzakov turns, shoots at Evan. Evan dives into the bush. Julie shoots at Tzakov. Tzakov takes a bullet in the shoulder. Julie continues to fire until the chambers empty. Tzakov takes three bullets to the chest, shoots wildly as he falls back. Hits the Explorer near the gas cap.

DANGER: Julie shields herself as the Explorer explodes!

RELIEF: An eternity passes. Julie just lies there, too tired to move.

EXCITEMENT: Evan bursts out of the bush, rushes to the Taurus. He sees Julie, face down, not sure she’s alive.

RELIEF: Julie whimpers, summons all her energy to stand. She can barely lock eyes with Evan. She folds into his arms. Cries at the sight of her Taurus. Evan comforts her.