• Lloyd Shellenberger

    Member
    November 10, 2023 at 5:11 am

    Lloyd’s description1!

    Working hard every day to become the best writer I can and as a result I do become the best writer in Hollywood.

    What I learned from this assignment is to stay away from writing wordy descriptions in past tense or passive voice. I went through my TV and streaming pilots and examined the descriptions to make sure they were written in the proper format and tense. I found multiple errors and formatting issues despite this being the 30 pass!

  • CJ Lyons

    Member
    November 20, 2023 at 7:39 pm

    CJ’s improved descriptions:

    Very little changes for tense, did delete a ton of passive/excess verbiage, leading to trimming two pages!

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