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Lesson 12: Improving Description
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Lloyd’s description1!
Working hard every day to become the best writer I can and as a result I do become the best writer in Hollywood.
What I learned from this assignment is to stay away from writing wordy descriptions in past tense or passive voice. I went through my TV and streaming pilots and examined the descriptions to make sure they were written in the proper format and tense. I found multiple errors and formatting issues despite this being the 30 pass!
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CJ’s improved descriptions:
Very little changes for tense, did delete a ton of passive/excess verbiage, leading to trimming two pages!
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