Lesson 13

[David Thompson]

David Thompson Has Great Introductions!

What I learned doing this assignment is to give characters the best introduction possible, in as few words as possible, and in a very intriguing way. It’s the only spot in a screenplay where we can be very descriptive. The introduction to the world of the Furies is spread across multiple scenes, and I looked at each one, and made a lot of changes.

The world and the Fury, Tisiphone:

On the black motorcycle is TISIPHONE. A FURY. A goddess. Not one of the nicer goddesses, but a bloodthirsty goddess of revenge.

Heart stopping beauty mixed with literal heart stopping powers. Long, black hair, a love of black leather, and a long-standing friendship with Death himself.

Tisiphone wears the black chopper, it’s an extension of herself. Her hair streaming behind her.

The setting sun now gives her a halo of fire.

The Fury, Megaera:

One person stands out, MEGAERA. Age appears to be late 20s. Megaera is a Fury – this one is blonde, a “nuclear blonde” who is hot enough to fuse sand into glass. Her name literally means “Jealous Rage”.

No one else notices her. Which is good as she’s getting angrier by the second.

Finally, the Fury, Alecto:

The rider is a lithe woman, long black hair flowing out behind her. She’s in a maroon riding outfit.

ALECTO. She is the third Fury. Exotic. Lean muscle defines her form as she rides. Dark hair streaked with maroon. A goddess of vengeance who can assume any human form, so Alecto projects breath-taking beauty. The same type of beauty is often seen in leopards, huge, venomous snakes, and poisonous flowers. Her name means “endless anger”.

Main Character, Dan Lanahan:

DAN LANAHAN watches Simmons. Dan is about 40. Thin, pain-weary eyes that have seen it all, and didn’t even get a t-shirt. A big city cop squeezed into a small town.

[David Wickenden]

David Wickenden Has Great Introductions!

What do I learn while doing this assignment?

Both the situation and the description can add to the irony and description.

With Laura, we see a hardened anti-terrorist team gunning down multiple targets; the woman causing most of the damage. When she pulls of her helmet, she is not some jarhead, but a sophisticated woman who specializes in PTSD.

The Doc, who is LAURA AMOUR (36), a psychiatrist rather than a battle-harden warrior, takes off her helmet and shakes out her long, blonde hair.

When we are first introduced to Janice, she looks like a young street kid looking for trouble. The bag guys see this as well, because they nab her for notorious reasons, only to find that she is a competent and lethal cop.

The helpless girl/bad-ass cop, JANICE WILLIAMS, keeps her gun at the man’s head.