Lesson 13

[j y]

Jessica Tremblay’s Elevated Scene Structures
What I learned from doing this assignment is… I was able to elevate a few scenes by using the model. After realizing some weakest scenes could actually be removed without affecting the scripts, I cleaned up the script even more. It was also interesting to see that my strongest scenes were already following the model, so that just confirmed that the model worked.

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[Tasha Espinoza]

Tasha’s Elevated Scene Structures

What I learned from doing this assignment is that it really helps to try all 11 when you’re starting to see how each structure can change a single scene. It will help give you a feel for how each one could work.

-Components of the scene:
Scene 41 – Linda teaches Bethany to center herself.

-What I’m trying to Accomplish:
In this scene I’m trying to set-up Bethany’s enlightenment training to pay-off the power she exhibits and uses in the climax to defeat Deacon Anders. This scene shows Bethany struggling to master her inner emotional state because there needs to be an arc to learning her skills.

-The structures I liked:
IRONY
-Beginning: Bethany chats with Amy on the phone saying that she’s looking forward to today’s lesson with Linda because Yoga is chill, but when she enters the bounce zone building, it’s a scene of noise and chaos as children bounce off trampolines covering the floors and walls.
-Middle: Linda makes Bethany practice tree pose in the middle of the bouncing facility and Bethany freaks out as she continues to lose her footing and fall.
-Ending: Bethany realizes she won’t be able to get up if she doesn’t calm herself. She tries the breathing techniques Linda shows her and she is able to stand up and attempt Tree Pose over and over again.
SUSPENSE
-Beginning: Linda serenely and expertly demonstrates tree pose while standing on top of a fence with two angry dogs on either side waiting for her to fall.
-Middle: Bethany wobbles terribly as Linda helps her onto the fence.
-Ending: After Linda encourages Bethany to breath and find her center, she lets go of Bethany. Bethany holds the pose…for a second before toppling over into the yard of one of the ferocious dogs.
CRUCIBLE
-Beginning: Deacon Anders shows up at Bethany and Linda’s yoga lesson and commands D23 to harm Bethany.The characters are placed in the crucible.
-Middle: Bethany is so scared, she can’t center herself but Linda tries in vain to get her to center herself.
-Ending: D23 lifts the two of them up, but only a few feet because Bethany is able to center herself and project an effective wall of protection that makes them safe from D23’s attack. Bethany learns that centering herself is the key to using her other skills.
TWIST
-Beginning: Bethany tries to maintain Tree Pose in a chaotic mall. She keeps falling over and she gets frustrated.
-Middle: Linda tries to communicate something to Bethany but she’s so flustered she can’t understand, so Soleil steps in and tells Bethany that she needs to center herself or she will never be able to tap into the energy necessary to command any of the skills they are teaching her.
-Ending: Discouraged, Bethany declares she’s giving up, but when Soleil implores her to stay and gently touches one of her hands, Bethany is launched into a white void. When she returns to reality, she is on the floor and a concerned Soleil and Linda tell her she needs to take a break. She tells them where she went and Soleil tells her she accessed her inner God realm.

-Scene Structure I chose:
Twist

-New Scene:

INT. BUSY MALL – DAY

Bethany tries to maintain Tree Pose among the chaos of the Food Court near a very loud indoor water feature.
Linda and Soleil watch her from a table, sipping on a fountain sodas and sharing an oversized pretzel.

Surprise, surprise, Bethany keeps getting agitated and falling over.

BETHANY
There is no way I’m going to be able to hold this pose, let alone find inner calm in this place. Can we please go?

Linda gets up and walks over to Bethany. She makes a bunch a hand gestures but Bethany is too frustrated to follow.

BETHANY
What? Linda? I’m sorry, I don’t understand. Could you just…

Linda nods and beckons for Soleil, who looks like an angel floating to them as her fabric billows behind her.

SOLEIL
Bethany, you have to ignore all this…
(gesturing to the entire mall)
…when centering yourself or you will never be able to tabl into the energy you need to command any of the skills we teach you.

BETHANY
Sure. Super easy, why wasn’t I trying that before.

SOLEIL
I know it’s hard–

BETHANY
(interrupting)
It’s impossible!

SOLEIL
But you’ll get there.

BETHANY
Not today I won’t. I’m sorry, I have to go.

Soleil hurries after her.

SOLEIL
No! Bethany! Don’t go! You are in perfect state of mind!

Bethany stops and turns to her.

BETHANY
For what–

Bethany’s sentence is interrupted when she collides with Soleil and…

INT. UNKNOWN SPACE

…is immediately launched into a white void.

At first she is shocked and freaked out, but as she gently tumbles through the void, she finds it pleasant and relaxing. She stretches out and puts her hands behind her head.

BETHANY
(looking around)
Need I say it? Where am I–

INT. BUSY MALL – DAY

Bethany snaps back to her reality. Soleil and Linda hover over her with concern.

They help her to a sitting place.

Bethany is surprised to see that no one but Linda and Soleil are concerned by her laying on the floor. Mall patrons carry on with the business of shopping and eating.

SOLEIL
We think you’re right, we should call it a day. We’re sorry we pushed you.

BETHANY
Don’t be, I was, I went to..someplace great. It was like all glowy and stuff. Did I die?

Linda and Soleil look at each.

SOLEIL
We’re pretty sure you just passed out.

Linda thinks of something and becomes very animated, pointing upward a lot.

BETHANY
What?

Soleil looks pointedly at Linda.

SOLEIL
Or you reached a form of enlightenment called the inner God realm.

BETHANY
The what now?

SOLEIL
We’ll recommend a few books. But pretty sure it wasn’t that. Shall we.

Linda and Soleil gather up their stuff and head out of the Food Court. Bethany follows them very confused.

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