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Lesson 15
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Roback Profound Dialogue Height of Emotion Assign 15 Part 1
What I learned: Repeating certain lines of dialogue in key scenes can make a powerful scene even more powerful and profound.
Five most exciting scenes: (Questions 1,2 and 3 combined)
a. Brick flies through window of hut in Poland
Fanny looks outside – sees Poles murdering Jews. Mother comes up behind her and closes shutters – One G-d and so many enemies
b. Fanny confronts Mother after her wedding night.
Her mother replies “It was a surprise to me. Why shouldn’t it be a surprise to you.”
c. Fanny looks out window at locals in Beauport who go to church but no longer shop at the store. She says to her children “One G-d and so many enemies.”
d. The locals gather outside the store at night holding torches. “One G-d and so many enemies.”
e. Fanny returns with baby Joe after the St. Jean Baptist parade. Her husband looks at her with disgust. Fanny says, “It was a surprise to me, why shouldn’t it be a surprise to you.”
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Roback Profound Dialogue Assign 15 Part 2
Build Meaning Over Multiple Experiences.
What I learned: Using the same line in a different context adds depth and irony to the situation.
1.The three lines:
One G-d and so many enemies
It was a surprise to me. Why shouldn’t it be a surprise to you?
When I finish my book it will be heaven on earth.
2. I have already covered the arcs for the first two bon mots.
When Fanny complains of being overworked because she is doing everything and Moses sits in his little office and does nothing he tells her” When I finish my book it will be heaven on earth.
When they are starving Moses tells her” When I finish my book it will be heaven on earth.”
When the boycott is over and the red squad of the RCMP seizes his book which has just been published Fanny tells her husband, “When you finish your book it will be heaven on earth” This is when she informs him that from now on they will sleep in separate rooms.
3. I covered the first two lines in Assignment one. I covered the third line is question 2.
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ASSIGNMENT Day 15.1
Bob Rowen’s Height of the Emotion.
What I learned doing this assignment is the importance of identifying emotional moments in my script and the need to brainstorm possible dialogue with deeper meaning to match them.
A list of the 5 most emotional moments in my screenplay; (a) lines that deliver the deeper meaning of the scene; (b) quick explanation of the emotion and meaning of the scene; (c) new line to replace there:
1. Emotional Moment: Wade Meadows is granted tenure and no longer serves at the pleasure of the school board.
a. Wade expresses great pleasure of no longer having to coach winning football in order to teach.
b. Teaching is all he ever wanted to do and that too much emphasis is placed on Friday night football.
c. Wade says “Now I can freely and enthusiastically answer my calling to teach.
2. Emotional Moment: The school board bans the books Wade Meadows needs for his curriculum.
a. The school board president gets his way in banning not only the books in the
school library Wade needs for his curriculum but also requires the same book titles be removed from his classroom library.
b. Wade believes the students should have access to the books in order to do their research.
c. Wade says “There are many ways to climb a tree.” He makes arrangements to have the books available for his students in the county library.
3. Emotional Moment: Wade is now more committed than ever to teach history as it actually happened, not some censored view of it.
a. Wade expresses his feeling that the president of the school board is representing a group that screens the “facts” of history then authorizes only those that fit their world view.
b. Students should be free to explore all the “facts” of history in order to decide for themselves how best to understand the present in terms of the past that created it.
c. Wade reminds his students that if we don’t learn from the mistakes of the past, we’re likely to repeat them.
4. Emotional Moment: Student Trevor Blake demands to know why current affairs are not being adequately included in Wade’s instructional program.
a. Trevor confronts Wade wanting to know why he’s not practicing what he’s been preaching.
b. Trevor is disappointed in Wade, his teacher, for whom he has great admiration.
c. Trevor says “What ever happened to Truth, Toleration, and Liberty?”
5. Emotional Moment: Students are assigned “Current Events Write-ups” and then required to present and debate the results of their work in class. The school board president is furious about Wade’s circumvention of the Board’s directives.
a. Wade asks the principal for help in addressing the challenge of including the topic of “current affairs” in class, given how political the schooling environment has become.
b. The principal says “You’ve got tenure, I don’t so I’ve got to be careful on how I advise you”.
c. The principal says “Find a way to let the students carry your water when it comes to the teaching of current affairs”.
ASSIGNMENT Day 15.2
Bob Rowen Builds Meaning with Dialogue Over Multiple Experiences.
What I learned doing this assignment is to first identify lines in the developing draft outline of my script so I can create an arc from the beginning to the end of the profound dialogue for each of the selected lines.
Select three (3) lines that you want to build deep meaning around. Create an arc for each line — Beginning meaning to ending meaning. Build the line into at least three scenes that work for the arc. For each one, tell us the line, the arc, and the different meaning you gave the line in the scenes it appeared.
CHARACTERS: Wade Meadows, Teacher. Don Walker, Principal. Ken Franks, President of the School Board. Madelynn Meadows, Wade’s Wife. Trevor Blake, Student.
Line 1: “Now I can freely and enthusiastically answer my calling.”
Opening: Don tells Wade he must produce a winning football program in order to remain on the teaching staff. Wade acknowledges he serves at the pleasure of the school board during his three-year probationary period. Don says it’s unfortunate but the school is judged by how well the football team is doing. Don makes it very clear that the power players in the school district want a winning football coach; a social science teacher is secondary. Wade decides to accept the job offer given the 3-year plan Don has proposed.
Wade produces a winning football program during his probationary period but runs into a buzzsaw with Franks over conservative-minded curriculum issues.
The swing vote on the school board is also the president of the Boosters club and that saves Wade’s bacon a couple of times during his non-tenured probation period!
At the beginning of Wade’s fourth year, he is granted tenure. After explaining the significance of tenure to Madelynn, Wade says “Now I can freely and enthusiastically answer my calling”.
Line 2: “Whatever happened to Truth, Toleration, and Liberty?”
Act 2: Don shares with Wade that the president of the school board (Franks) believes Wade is indoctrinating the students with a radical left agenda. Franks convinced the school board to ban books from the school library. He also ordered removal of books from Wade’s classroom library.
Wade shares his concerns about the school board’s behavior with Madelynn. Madelynn suggests Wade not include current affairs in class because it would entice Franks to cause more problems. Wade agrees and skirts covering current affairs in class.
Trevor confronts Wade asking why current affairs are not being included in class. Trevor says “Whatever happened to Truth, Toleration, and Liberty?”… Wade’s rallying cry from early on.
Line 3: “Let the students carry your water.”
The members of the Progressive Students Club, led by Trevor, demand current affairs be covered in class. Wade agrees that current affairs is definitely a vital part of the civics curriculum but states the politics of the school district is making it difficult to include an active treatment of current affairs in the classroom.
The students don’t understand why Wade is succumbing to the political environment of the school district. They point to the books that have been banned in the school library and the books that were removed from Wade’s classroom library. Trevor demands to know why Wade is not standing up to the administration in protest to the interference and censorship that’s taking place. In response to the students’ demands, Wade promises to turn things around.
Wade shares what’s taking place in the classroom and asks Don for help on how to include current affairs in his civics instruction while avoiding having any more problems with Franks. Don reminds Wade that the principal doesn’t have tenure so it’s necessary for him to be careful on how he supervises his teachers. Don smiles…then suggests maybe you can find a way to “Let the students carry your water” regarding current affairs in the classroom. Wade immediately sees a way to do that…but decides not to share his thinking with Don so as not to involve him in any way.
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Susan A. Willard’s Height of the Emotion
Day 15 Assignment 15 – 1
What I learned doing this assignment is the more deep, profound statements are intertwined into the story arc, the more the characters’ journeys can work together to create a fluid and clear message.
What else I learned doing this assignment is by using the emotional moments and building deeper meaning into dialogue is not as hard as I thought, but I had to be willing to try new ideas and change some old ones.
The Five Most Emotional Moments in My Screenplay:
1. Emotion: Walter (grandpa) is Overwhelmed / in Denial of what he is going through.
· Meaning: He can’t understand what or why everything is, all at once, happening to him.
· New Line of Dialogue: Noticing grandpa’s emotional state, his grandson says, “Hey grandpa, ‘Anything can happen all at once, and it does.’ It’s normal.” “Anything can happen.”
2. Emotion: Landon (grandson) is Overwhelmed / in Denial of what he is going through, however, Landon is used to these emotions because of his current struggles with being a young, new amputee, with new frustrating prosthetics, no friends, or opportunities for fun, except summer with grandpa. Now it looks like summer is doomed.
· Meaning: He can’t understand what or why everything is, all at once, happening to him.
· New Line of Dialogue: Noticing his grandson’s emotional state, grandad says, “Once the truth is found, we can defeat ‘Any Things’ that are happening, and have a great summer.”
3. Emotion: Shock and Depression hit both grandpa and grandson, when they find Oscar, in a medical bed, unresponsive, medicated, looking terrible, with all types of equipment hooked up to him. They stand in shock and depression trying to figure out how to help Oscar.
· Meaning: The Oscar and the truth have been found, and neither are in good shape.
· New Line of Dialogue: Grandpa says, “We must do more than find the truth before we stop the “Any Things” from happening. The next “One Steps are gonna be tough.”
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4. Emotion: Grandpa Panics. Grandson has gone to the restroom. The lights are out. The Clinic is closed. Someone enters the room from the hall. Grandpa has no way to signal his grandson. The man goes to the bathroom, hearing noise, and yells at the person inside.
· Meaning: Grandpa needs and finds a way to signal his grandson of the bad guy so that he can be ready for whatever comes next. He quickly blurts out the first thing he thinks of.
· New Line of Dialogue: Grandpa yells, “Coming your way – One Big Step of Evil Truth.”
5. Emotion: Acceptance, Relief, and Exceedingly Happy: grandpa and grandson have been able to end the journey they are on, with their lives, and are able to start a do over for summer activities.
· Meaning: They understand their search for Oscar, their nightmare is over. They found out the truth and want to stop it. They are free, safe, and have a lot to tell everyone that will listen.
· New Line of Dialogue: Grandpa says, “Aha, Evil is vulnerable.” Grandson says, “And… Evil makes mistakes!”
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Susan A. Willard’s Builds Meaning with Dialogue
Day 15 Assignment 15 – 2
What I learned doing this assignment is fun and entertaining. It allowed me to use my creative skills. I know that I will still have to rework some of the ideas, but the starting place is a better start than anything I have tried before. Thank you.
The Three Lines To Build Meaning Over Multiple Experiences:
A. Line 1: “One Step at a time”:
i. Arc Scene: The grandson is showing grandpa how to put on his new prosthetics, liners, socks, and vacuum seal closure so he can walk properly.
a. New Line Meaning: The grandson must remind himself how to do the process of putting on his feet otherwise he will either not be able to walk properly, or the mechanics will hurt his tender amputation sites. Answer: He put his prosthetics on “One step at a time.”
ii. Arc Scene: The grandpa is wondering how in the world they will find out what happened to his friend, and the mystery of how he has just disappeared.
a. New Line Meaning: The grandson relates the process of his prosthetics with his grandpa’s overwhelming look at his friend’s disappearance, and asks him, “Grandpa, how do I put on my prosthetics? The Answer is “One step at a time. Start with the small first step and go to the next small step, until you’re done.”
iii. Arc Scene: Grandpa and grandson are investigating a place of interest when they get interrupted. The grandson unexpectedly uses his prosthetic foot to save grandpa,
a. New Line Meaning: The grandson is not helpless even when his prosthetic foot is off. He saves grandpa by using his foot which is being worked with in the moment grandpa needs help. Answer: Grandson took eliminated the threat to grandpa, “One step at a time.” Which is also a play on words. He could say “How do you get rid of the bad guys, ‘One foot at a time.’”
iv. Arc Scene: At the end of the movie, grandpa is wrestling with how to start his new life, how to move on, how to deal with all the emotions and actions needed to resolve.
a. New Line Meaning: His son, (his grandson’s dad), says, “Hey dad, let’s get Landon (his grandson) lead the way – one step at a time.” The Answer is “That through all the distress, mystery, challenges, and frustrations, if they follow Landon’s leadership of taking everything – one step at a time – then they can accomplish anything. It also indicates that Landon becomes an independent amputee with his new feet (and even helped grandpa through the day), while grandpa realizes how much he can use the help of others and how much they need his help.
B. Line 2: “Evil Exists…”:
i. Arc Scene: Grandpa and grandson come across a room of in-security computers, monitors, and recording devices. They realize the full extent of the danger they, and the entire village. Everyone is under watch and control. Evil exists in their neighborhood.
a. New Line Meaning: Evil exists in their neighborhood and is a real threat to everyone. “Evil exists.”
ii. Arc Scene: They find grandpa’s friend, Oscar, in a medical bed, unresponsive, looking strange, hooked to all types of equipment and truly in danger. They realize Oscar is hurt and possibly dying. Evil affected Oscar personally, and possibly them also.
a. New Line Meaning: The Evil powers attack individuals, especially the weak and defenseless. “Evil is personal.”
iii. Arc Scene: They find another of grandpa’s friends, Jack, dead. Walter saw Jack this morning. Double grief is hard to take. Evil is not only personal, but it’s deadly. They realize just how personal evil is. Evil can affect your family, your friends, and you.
a. New Line Meaning: Evil can kill people, friends, family, but evil can also kill the future. It can take away time with family, friends, and you. It can cancel all the fun, memories, events, helping others, building, goals, and meaning of the future. “Evil is deadly.”
iv. Arc Scene: As grandpa and grandson continue, Evil pursues them. Nefarious people come after them. They are in danger and are trying to get away.
a. New Line Meaning: When they think they have seen the worst of evil, it continues to pursue them. Wickedness is evil in the form of a person, and it is deadly, personal actions, and haunts them. They realize evil is not going to stop until they find a way to deal with all the evil they’ve found, physically, mentally, and emotionally. Evil won’t stop. They must stop it. “Evil is persistent.”
v. Arc Scene: Once away from the Nefarious people, safe, and secure from attack again, ever, grandpa and grandson wrestle with an overwhelming emotions and reality. However, they do realize, Wickedness, (evil), has its weaknesses, was exposed, and was conquered today.
a. New Line Meaning: Wicked people can be taken down. Nefarious activities can be stopped. Emotional Evil torture can be ended. Evil needs action to go against it because “Evil is vulnerable.”
C. Line 3: Phones don’t reject information (texts, calls, pictures, and videos):
i. Arc Scene: When discussing the first steps to be taken to find Oscar, grandson askes, “What do you think we need to find Oscar?” Grandpa answers, “Clues and Evidence.” As he hands paper and pen to grandson he says, “Paper doesn’t refuse ink, use these to document for us, OK?” Grandson smiles, reaches into his backpack, saying “Phones don’t reject information.” They smile and laugh together.
a. New Line Meaning: This is a fun scene and a fun line. Grandpa is in his old ways. Grandson is in his old ways that are new to grandpa. He doesn’t correct grandpa’s suggestion, but he builds on it. (Taking things one step at a time.). Grandson then takes on the task of documenting the clues and information they come across, because “Phones don’t refuse information.”
ii. Arc Scene: They have entered a private part of the clinic. Broken the rules. The door closed. They must push forward. Grandson thinks of documenting the doors, and ways they don’t have to remember everything they see. First Room: Picture taken, and their journey, (quest) begins.
a. New Line Meaning: Grandpa sees grandson taking a picture of the first room’s door. The importance of pictures is beginning to become greater. “Take pictures of everything thing, especially the doors. After all phones don’t refuse pictures.”
iii. Arc Scene: Upon entry of the first room, the magnitude of the place is breathtaking. They are frozen from fear of the unknown, quietly reviewing the strange details. Grandson comments about the overwhelming magnitude of the details. He has a great idea.
a. New Line Meaning: He has a great idea. “Phones don’t refuse videos, grandpa. What do you suppose I take some videos too?”
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Bill Southwell’s Height of the Emotion
What I learned from this lesson is: Although I have written a script, this is the first attempt to form an outline. I see the story as a series of emotional scenes. This outline helps me to correlate the scenes which will add deeper meaning to the movie.
Step one: Emotional Moments
a. Learning diagnosis of crippling disease
b. Fluid overload—hospitalized
c. Boy friend rejection
d. Evening walk (romantic)
e. Fall term return!
f. Proposal & Marriage
g. Adoption rejection
h. Adopting Paula
i. Call from Dr.
j. Swan Lake ride home
k. ER Doctor
l. Platetts improve
m. Red Sky scene
n. Peritoneal dialysis
o. Dialysis acceptance
p. Spirit World scene
Step 2. Emotional moment (a). Charis receives the test results and learns she has a crippling disease which possibility means life in a wheelchair. When alone she writes in her journal:
(V.O) “Well here I am, dear book, more depressed I guess than I have ever been.
The doctor was here today and I guess he sort of upset me, and not without cause. He seems to think that I have rheumatoid arthritis. I know that regardless of what the Doctor thinks I have, it won’t make any difference.
But the awful fact is that my elbows are already stiff so that I can’t straighten them all the way out.
I was very brave when he told me and I decided at once to forget my own life and become a nuclear physicist or something and devote my life to my country and my science. At least my brain won’t be crippled.
Now I’m not so brave.
I’m speaking very bitterly but I guess I have to get it off my chest.
I see no reason why it should happen to others and not to me.”
Emotional moment (c ): Boy friend has not asked her to go to the dance after she explained her health situation. Again, she writes in her journal: (V.O.) “Down in my heart, longing and loneliness gnaw at me. Sometimes a wave of sorrow sweeps over me as though it would pull me into the undertow of hell. Somehow, I find something to hang on to until the wave passes on. I’m not sure why I am lonely.
… Somewhere, just beyond tomorrow, lies a field of serene and tranquil happiness. Somewhere, just over the horizon, it lies welcoming all who have made the journey, but narrow is the path and steep, and few there be that find it. Oh, please, God, let me find it, and let me climb the path.”
Emotional moment (e): At the end of the romantic summer school session, Charis returns to her home in California and receives a positive report on her health. The doctor declared her summer away has rejuvenated her and encouraged her to go back to BYU. Her train arrives late at night, Bill sees her dimly as she exits the train car. He runs to her and lifts her in a tight embrace. She whispers, “I’m back.” Beat. “where I belong.” This scene has only that brief dialogue. But it is highly emotional as they feared the doctor would not recommend her return to a place of cold winters. I have added this Dialogue. I will do well to insert corresponding Dialogue to all the Emotional moments mentioned above.
Bill Southwell Builds Meaning with Dialogue
What I learned doing this assignment is that profound dialogue lines can be expanded into scenes that set up the line. I have illustrated this with the following example.
Selection line 1: CHARIS, “Are you saying it takes faith to believe in science?
ARC: previous dialogue between Charis and Bill, who is a physicist, includes a discussion of the origin of man. It is brought out that science has theories that are accepted as fact. As the discussion continues Bill promotes the idea that Science is based on theories that sometimes cannot be proven—yet are readily accepted. Also, Science theories are often supplanted when new information is presented. Modern physics is so mindboggling that it is hard to believe, much less proved—things like Quantum physics, Uncertainty Principle, Dark Matter, Dark Energy, photon entanglement. Charis finally summarizes with the statement “Are you saying it takes faith to believe in science?”
Scene 1. Charis, as a poet, feels science if too cut and dried, no feeling. So the dialogue between Charis and Bill begins with his defending his interest in science—that it is beautiful.
Scene 2. In another scene the topic of discussion includes: Charis states that poetry is more emotional and can include deep religious feelings and that there is a conflict between science and religion. Bill counters with, “There can be no conflict between science and religion because God is the author of both.”
Scene 3. This is the final scene on this discussion described above, wherein Charis says, “Are you saying that it takes faith to believe in science?”
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LESSON 15 – PT 1 ANDREA’S HEIGHT OF EMOTION
1. What I learned doing this assignment?
It is a challenge at this stage to find my character’s voice. It’s still not right. She’s grittier and not so eloquent – but for now this works.
ASSIGNMENT 1
Height of the Emotion.
The 5 most emotional moments, the emotion, meaning and line of dialogue.
· Jill is triggered by being questioned in a pitch meeting, then having to contend with her insensitive, toxic mother. The emotion: shame for not being good enough. Jill has been called out for her characters not having much depth…which she unconsciously blames her mother for, since her mother doesn’t seem to care for who Jill is or what she is experiencing in her life. Jill’s mother goes on about her other child – Jill’s half-brother who the mother really adores.
JILL
You’re a few pills shy of making mother of the year right now.
· Jill is embarrassed by a sincere compliment given to her by a Native American who helps at the bar she works. Emotion: embarrassment. This counter example for Jill’s insecurity makes her feel awkward and exposed. The compliment is a sincere observation from an authentic person.
NIGHTWALKER
Your heart shines with the light of a thousand suns. It just happens to be hiding behind some clouds right now.
JILL
It’s not a cloud, it’s my shadow holding it hostage.
· Jill is alone by a stream devastated by not being able to locate her characters in her digital file or sketchbook. Emotion: Powerless. Terrified. Jill stands to finally make her dreams come true by having her Sc-fi graphic novel published – and now her dream is being snatched away.
JILL
Why do you hate me so much? What have I ever done to deserve this?
· In the hypnotic world, Jill is enraged at being lured and captured by a man who gained her trust with food. Emotion: rage. Jill is under a hypnotic trance and is imaging this scene where she is a teenage orphan, starving and homeless, and a man has taken advantage of this fact to use food to lure into a trap for child traffickers to capture her. The feelings she feels are real, however. Jill is caged in the back of a truck and looking at the man, burning his image in her mind.
JILL
I will remember you. When I see you again, and I will, my face will be the last thing you will ever see.
· Jill is mesmerized by seeing the sky for the first time coming out from within the planet. Emotion: Awe. Jill had been living within a subterranean reality within this icy planet. She had never seen the sky before now. Now she and the other kids are being transported by cargo spacecraft to a mothership….and she can see the sky, as well as the planet below.
JILL
If only I had known this was here, I would have tried harder to find another way out.
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LESSON 15 – PT 2 ANDREA BUILDS MEANING WITH DIALOGUE.
1. What I learned doing this assignment?
A line of dialogue can mean different things depending on when and how it’s delivered, by whom and the stage the protagonist is in at the time. This shows the audience the transformation process.
ASSIGNMENT 2
Build Meaning Over Multiple Experiences.
· THE LINE: They’re just people.
· THE ARC: Jill is easily overwhelmed by large crowds of people because of childhood neglect instance –> to where she is cared for by someone –> to where she becomes solid within herself, and crowds no longer bother her.
· MEANING FOR EACH LINE:
1<sup>st</sup> time provokes a quick flashback to when her mother lost Jill in a large crowd as a child – then later came back and said in an impatient gaslighting huff “They’re just people, Jill – stop being so dramatic!”
2<sup>nd</sup> time – A consoling gesture by Ami, who actually cares about Jill.
3<sup>rd</sup> time: Jill’s possible reply to her mother at the end as a new way of standing up for herself.
· THE LINE: It never fails to amaze me!
· THE ARC: Jill’s neurotic filter sees the world as crazy and disappointing –> Jill is disappointed in herself –> Jill is surprised by how a new perspective can change everything.
· THE MEANING FOR EACH LINE:
1. What you look for is what you get in the game of projecting.
2. When Jill starts to become self-aware.
3. When Jill sees evidence of how a fresh perspective can change her inner reality: insight
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SCREENWRITING U Profound Screenplays
Day 15 Profound Dialogue
Assignment 1: Height of Emotion
Jim Clark’s Height Of Emotion
What I learned from this assignment: In dialogue, “less” is often “more”. Writing multiple versions lends to more creative lines.
Five Emotional Moments
1- Margie watching the car Hx parade pg 2
a. VO Never gets old.
b. VO Loved those scarves
c. VO Walter’s favorite color scheme.
d. VO He loved those cars.
e. ? How was the parade today?
Answer. Never fails.
2- Karen in Margie’s House pgs 10-12
a. Bullycrats love to run roughshod
b. My home isn’t your domain
c. My domain, my rules.
d. Tread lightly
3- Karen in the ER pg 20
a. You must have slipped and come in by accident
b. Be careful what you hope for. Dearie.
c. Welcome isn’t quite the right word.
4- VFW Hall pg 79
a. These Vets brought honor back to Vet status
b. You younger Vets got patriotic welcomes. Thank a Viet Nam Vet for that.
c. You didn’t get spit on. They did.
5- Margie’s house pg 84-85
a. Sure you do. Family is everything.
b. Sure you do. Family.
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SCREENWRITINGU
The Profound Screenplay
Day 15 Profound Dialogue Assignment #2 – Build Meaning Over Multiple Experiences
Jim Clark Builds Meaning with dialogue for three lines.
What I learned from this assignment: I simple phrase can have multiple meanings and it’s own “arc”.
Line 1: I feel you looking at me/Are you looking at me?
a. RUTH
Thanks
Teddy leers as she walks away
Without turning around …
RUTH
Am I feeling your eyeballs, Mr. Collins?
b. TEDDY
You’re in the right place
Ruth hands him a twenty dollar bill and he makes change.
As Ruth walks away, Teddy watches her as he pockets the twenty.
Without turning around…
RUTH
Mr. Collins, we aren’t doing this again are we?
Teddy blushes, turns and goes into the office.
c. As Ruth and Karla walk away, Clifton can’t take his eyes off of Ruth.
Without turning around…
RUTH
I know you’re watching. Feels’ nice.
Mark laughs and pats Clifton on the back.
d. RUTH
Love you more.
Ruth smiles impishly as she backs out the door. Clifton sticks his head ot the door and watches her walk down the hallway.
Ruth doesn’t look back.
RUTH
Yup, you’re watching.
CLIFTON
How do you do that?
RUTH
Oh, it’s a gift.
Line 2: Do you know who I am?
a. MARGIE’S HOUSE – DAU
Karen has intimidated her way into the house.
MARGIE
There will be no conversation. I don’t like you
conducting an inspection of my home.
KAREN
Do you know who I am? What authority I have?
Margie laughs. Karen bristles
b. Karen has been pulled over by a police officer who is writing her a ticket.
KAREN
Do you know who I am?
The officer looks at her license and then at her.
OFFICER
Yup.
KAREN
And?
OFFICER
Don’t care
Karen kicks the tire of her car and hurst her foot.
KAREN
OUCH!
The Officer smiles.
c. Karen is getting fired
KAREN
Do you know what I’ve done for you?
BILL
I’m very aware of what you’ve done to me and the department.
KAREN
But…
BILL
Did you take an ethics class?
Karen just stares at him.
Line 3: I have your back
a. In the ER Margie and Ruth have just finished intimidating Karen out the door.
RUTH
Sometimes you just have to be rude to make and point and have fun.
Margie smiles.
RUTH
Got you’re back, not that you need it.
MARGIE
Comforting , none the less.
b. Karen’s apartment. She’s reading her Bible for the first time in years
KAREN
I don’t…
HOLY SPIRIT
Got your back
Karen weeps.
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